I enjoyed reading this; you have an easy style of writing and a good grasp on the characters. I really enjoyed reading from the prospective of your original character. You made me want to know more about her without giving away her entire backstory like most writers do. Excellent job.

Guest chapter 1 . 7/1/2012

i must say i liked the irony that obi-wan and bruck were the two kids that were seen by qui-gon and noley. That was well done.

Very interesting, Qui-Gon could see or sense Obi-Wan's anger and yet not Xanatos. It seems like Qui-Gon cant see it when it's hidden. Or doesn't want to recognise it. He should look deeply into the Force and then he would see what a great knight Obi-Wan will be. I enjoyed this look into the early meeting of Jinn and Kenobi.