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TenthWeasley says:I saw this being advertised about on the forums and decided to pop by and give it a read. I liked the subject you chose for your story -- it's definitely unique, and a story about the pitch just stands out.

I think you've captured the sentiments of it nicely, and I can sort of tell where you drew your inspiration -- I've got a very vivid image in my head from the final movie of one of the stands crashing to the ground, set aflame. I love being able to see that, too, because the story takes on another meaning for me in that respect. :)

One thing I noticed throughout is that you seem to have capitalization in odd places, but what's more, what you've chosen to capitalize isn't consistent throughout. Nouns like 'pitch' and 'blood' and 'trophy' and 'students' don't need to be capitalized as you have them. And the semi-colons were a bit off, as well -- where you've used them they generally don't make sense. Semi-colons should be used sparingly and only to join two like sentences where there would otherwise be a period. You do not capitalize the first letter of the word after the semi-colon, either.

A sweet and rather poignant little piece. Congratulations on your first one shot!

Author's Response: Hello ^_^ I was glad when I saw your name here and I was like Oh, un-requested review here loving it ^_^

My Grammar is horrible :/ but I am about to run it through a processor again ^_^ So thank you so much for pointing out those things :D It means alot.

I did try really hard with this considering it was my first one-shot ever, so It was hard to write and grasp as far as emotions and stuff went but I did try ^_^ lol