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I don't know how other people feel about this, but i liked the rhythm and the rhyme. A little nitpicky, but I figured I'd say ... "an" impending doom seems to me to overgeneralize and unstick what is personal from the poem. Could "an" be changed to "my" to have the same effect without the depersonalization of the 'article'?

And I question about the use of "feel"; the net has brought us "feels". But still would not 'feeling' be more appropriate?

These 2 were just things that stood out to me. And of course, there is always tomorrow. Unless of course you die. In which case much poetry has been written on that, too.

So, when will 'what' begin? That's a good question! Kudos-- thanks for sharing, Ghostwriter.

'and death begins to sing' almost a biblical feel to this, Ghostwriter. It made me think of the scene in the movie 'The Ten Commandments" with Charlton Heston and Yul Brynner where the fog comes for the first-born Egyptian children.

Hello Ghostwriter, The cold, cold song of the Grim reaper moans eerily through this one. Awaiting death in fine poetry, no better way to wait it. I like this poem, very much so, I must say. Well done. Fond regards, Tony.