>>2451229I don't think it's grammatically accurate unless you work in a comma. (ie. "I wonder, what's Yunocchi doing?" or "What's Yunocchi doing, I wonder?") Either way I probably wouldn't worry too much about font shui if it's something you have to compromise dialogue fluidity to achieve.

>>2451244So while on topic of dialogue fluidity, how does "at that place" sound? Because to me that kind of wording makes Yuno seem like she's trying to distance herself from something repulsive.

What about a simple "there"? I wanted to do it this way:>You can do what you want to do there, right, Miya-chan?or maybe even>There you can do what you want to do, right, Miya-chan?to preserve the original sentence structure and stress the "there", but decided to stick with the version in your script for the first iteration.

>>2451300>>2451229The standard English version of that sentence is definitely "I wonder what [name] is doing?"Considering all those other crazy nonstandard variants should be pretty weird to a native English speaker, as they all sound somewhat off and unnatural at best.

But then again, translating does put you in a weird sort of inter-language mental space where it's easy to lose track of that feeling.(Almost like what happens when you repeat a word so much it becomes meaningless)

Judging from, like, all translations of anything ever, Japanese->English seems to be extra bad when it comes to this.

>>2452004 First page:>Um..>Sensei...>What is it Seki-san?>Um.. I... I like sensei.>?>Recently sensei did say it doesn't matter what gender the person you fall for is..>What is it? I'll listen?>I've already started getting my period, so I understand that stuff, I mean...>(small text) Here..>A letter?>Eh. Seki-san!?Letter: I like sensei.

>>2452004>>2452052 2nd page:>Seki-san's sooooo cute>Tooo cute>*parents* What's up with her? Who knows...>I'm so happy... I'm so happy...>but ->*The next day*>Seki-san, got a minute?>I'm going to tell you my reply for yesterday so>Listen carefully...>I also>love you>Thanks for the letter>I was really happy>*for now*>*we'll stop here*Note at the bottom: 'I have a pure heart so I couldn't draw anything bad with a primary schooler!! Defeat!!'

When I read this on twitter a while back I was like, melting inside. Tamamushi always cheer me up.

>>2452726Can you change the last panel to a slight rewording:>No! That's not— I only said that to hide that I actually wanted to hold your hand and also that I can't believe how lucky I am right now, so quit having the wrong idea!

>>2452731Because the tsundere is being forced to act outside its natural behavior. It's the cliche 'don't the wrong idea!' line transformed into the gerund. This is what happens when this trope is pushed to respond outside its limited area. So while the line is cliche because it's heard countless times in one form, it's not even recognized as normal in another. That's the humor.

>>2452735In the Japanese she simply repeats the exact same "don't get the wrong idea" line from the first bubble. It's funny because she actually gets mad about being taken literally and has to explain to her not to get the wrong idea when she says don't get the wrong idea.