I love how embolden the narrator is in this piece; how she is inquisitive about the melon, and the girl. With all of the watermelon mentioning it made me envision the subject of the poem to be very supple, and melonish herself (in a good way, of course). You also did a good job with the comparison between the two.

This poem really fascinates me. It’s more prose, though, I suppose. It’s got a fascinating flare. It makes me want to read it again and again, and I’m sure each time, I’ll find something new. Keep up the good work.