Sunday, October 21, 2012

Giant step to the point of no return

It is time for my monthly contribution to this months blog chain prompt over at Absolute Write.

This month's prompt: Otherworldly

Ghouls, ghost and things that go bump in the night. Old Hallows Eve, Dia
de los Muertos and Halloween. October is the month where the veil
between our world and the Other thins. So this month is about those
things beyond our world, be they scary, funny or anything in between.
Write wherever the prompt inspires you, fiction or non-fiction, prose or poetry. Do try and keep things at a PG-13 level, though.

My brain has a hard time multitasking when it comes to my writing. It isn't letting much out except my novel because I've been fooling around with it too long. So my post is another excerpt from the novel that has taken over my brain.Please don't forget my fellow bloggers below. Have a look at what they came up with this month.

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“Are we able to speak freely
Stephen?”

“Yes, I told them to give us
some time to access our new patient. James, how did you arrange this?”

James watched Stephen run
his hand through his hair and then stopped to grab onto a fist full, his face
clouded over with uncertainty. His other hand slapped his chest and he
unconsciously gathered his shirt into his fist. He was starting to panic.

“Stephen you wanted this
knowledge. I can show you so much. Things you would never believe. This man
laying here is a drifter, no family and an aneurism in his brain ready to
burst. He would have been dead in less than a month, he’s perfect for our plan
to proceed.”

Dr. James Matsuo and Dr.
Stephen Ellis had been friends and colleagues for almost ten years. Immersing themselves
in the world of molecular and human genetics, developmental biology and neuroscience who became know as top in their fields. They were the government’s
first and immediate choice for what was quickly becoming a global crisis.

Stephen knew he had already taken
several small steps towards never turning back. This man on the exam table in a
drug induced coma represented his giant step to the point of no return. Science
and its discoveries are intriguing and exciting. Unraveling what others could
not was an indescribable high. That is how this project started and then
Stephen went a little further, stretching his standards thinner than he had
planned. He dropped some of his principles along the way and ended up right
where they were now, about to deceive his country. Because when you bend the
rules of morality eventually they break and there is no going back.

James knew how Stephen
struggled but he pushed a little more,

“I just need an hour without
any interference. Can you manage that my friend?”

Time stood still for
Stephen, beads of sweat formed on his forehead, he nervously wiped his clammy
palms on his white lab coat. He made eye contact with James. He and James had
come so far in their field and now with the promise of further advancement he
took the giant step,

“Yes. You can do this in an
hour?”

“I promise you I can. I
haven’t misled you in any way so far. You still trust me right?”

“I have no doubt James.”

James smiled at his long
time friend and put his hand on his shoulder, gave him a reassuring squeeze,

“Then you go, brief them on
the findings we discussed earlier. And by the time you get back they will think
he’s the Alien and never suspect that I am the one they have been looking for these
past ten years.”

Fun story. I like the feeling of your dangling something in front of me. One sentence didn't read quite right to me: "Immersing themselves in the world of molecular and human genetics, developmental biology and neuroscience who became know as top in their fields."

I'm thinking "they became known" but am not certain it's what you wanted.

The twist at the end is fun. I like this a lot and think you should expand it a little and sub.