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As I've heard, six of Celestia's followers have had their stories told of the goings on in Equestria. I suppose I should do the same. Allow me to introduce myself. You may call me Princess Luna. This is my story. ·Jgame

At first glance, Princess Luna's charioteers might appear to be little more than Royal Guards dressed in festive apparel for Nightmare Night. However, there is far more to the story than that - the Night Guards once played a pivotal role in the history of Equestria, and have sacrificed more for their beloved princess than most ponies are even aware of.

Wow. That was brilliant! The dialogue, setting, and characters were written beautifully. The mixture of comedy, drama, and action was seamless. My only qualm is that I can't travel to a future where there are more chapters. It's been a while since I've seen such a incredible opening to a series and I can't wait for more. You have earned all my stars my friend.

I had my doubts coming in, as my Night Guard canon is pretty much informed by Whirly Willow's tumblr. I'm glad to have been proven wrong. Hammer and Anvil work very well together, and I definitely chuckled at some of their exchanges. Give us another chapter and you're good to go on EqD.

*cracks hooves* Alright. I have a history of being a not-too-good reviewer since I just can't seem to pull my thoughts together, but I'll do my best.

I have to admit, your explanation of the origins of the Lunar Guard (or rather the Night Guard in your story, as I should refer to now) is very interesting. The way you've portrayed them and Luna is done in a very heartfelt way, and you've given both Anvil and Hammer a good amount of character and (at least on Anvil's behalf) backstory. Furthermore, your portrayal of Anvil's personal conflict between his allegiance is very moving. His personal thoughts on having to betray one princess and keep from betraying another were done very well. Nightmare Moon still having the aspects that Luna used to have seals the deal,

You've only two chapters of this story down, and yet it's such a fascinating read. I do eagerly await more installments in the future.

'I love your interpretation of Princess and Luna and her rise to Nightmare Moon, i'vea always liked the night guards but your characters are written so well its almost like your fic has a soul. which is a good thing because most mlp fics cant seem to stick to the cannon of the show.

MORE MORE!!! assuming that these 2 guards are the same 2 in " Luna Eclipsed" ill bet that upon Nightmare Moon's defeat and exile, they, motivated by their loyalty to Luna, will ask Princess Celestia to exile them to the same place Luna was sent to. Celestia will then place them in stasis and do so. Or heck after being placed into stasis Celestia may turn them into the very " stars" that will free Luna at the alloted time.

One question, though: Is your intent to have a new perspective on Nightmare Moon? She's supposed to be the villain, but so far she hasn't really done anything, well...evil. Sure, she usurped the throne, but Nightmare Moon is supposed to be a being born of jealousy and anger, and I don't really sense it yet.

Again, if this IS your intent, then disregard. I'm all for new head cannon. I'm just saying if you're NOT trying to put a new spin on the character, you may want to step up the badness. But still, great story. Tracked like a mo-fo!