thanx for your views
you know using caps saves a bit of time so i was using but now that you adviced i surely will have to use small letters now.
and whats wrong with sinisters
i wrote a poem based on my experience & if you were in my place you would have mentioned something else even more disasterous

*Throws the torch aside and walks away, grumbling about how it wasn't bad at all and how Aki did good writing as an adult and how the world is going to end and how she really needed that torch to survive. Runs back, grabs the torch, starts walking away again, grumbling about how she honestly wanted to flame something and about how Aki never lets her flame anything. Runs out after catching the corner of the page on fire while twirling the torch like a baton*

hey aki, kudos on your first 'adult' write! i'm extremely scatter-brained right now so i'm having a seriously hard time making sense of this piece. ... but maybe that's what you want? i really like the last stanza, the whole heaven and hell thing, but i'm kinda partial to that...

*looks up* okay, i realize that this comment made absolutely no sense, but well, i... love... you?