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Well pick up your arms and hold your fist in the airStart writing your names with sticks in the sandStart casting your votes for the men in the coatsYou know the ones with all the blood on their hands

You know Obama's the same, he ain't no symbol for changeThe only difference is the pigment in his lying skinHe said he'll stop the war and send the troops back to fortBut that's until he got his foot in the door

Well now I hear about nuclear war to kill off all the poorAnd get the homeless people off the streetsIn the meantime we got death in Darfur knocking at our doorBut we'll just tuck it in the floorboards

Now they take away our civil rights and draft us off to fightInstead of educating all the kidsThey say it's freedom that we're fighting for, well I couldn't agree morethat's why we're ripping down the White House doors

Well if its a war you want then it's a war you've gotBut it's not gonna be in Iraq'Cause theres a million kids who don't support what you didand they're not about to drop the bombsSo maybe you should get your asses upPretend you give a f*ckAnd actually do the s*it you say you'll doIf not then maybe we will take a standAnd write 'em out by hand, some draft cards we can send to your doorCause maybe when it's you who's overseas for what you don't believeYou'll see that theres no ratio of blood to oilthat makes the war alright, I hope you sleep at nightWith a gun underneath your headAnd a nightmare inside your mind

As a lyrical piece this is quite average in every sense of the word. I remember back my junior year i wrote a lot of political savy pieces and the #1 thing to make them work or be gems is that you need to have a new thought or idea coming through the piece as your theme. Sadly, this piece does not really have anything of that nature. Also, I would say that the topic beats around the bush a lot without actually attacking.

As a genre piece, aka anti-flag, this piece will fit your audience perfectly. There is nothing nobody can say against that, because we all know that type of audience will go banannas for this type of lyrical content.

overall, sir you're in a bit of a pickle because if you want to be known as a great lyric writer you must make massive revamps to this piece. But if you are in a band that could be routined with Anti-Flag or even Sum 41 than you're fine and don't take these crits. to heart.