Personally, I prefer movement in a piece. Superlatives, adjectives and descriptions are a lot of times senseless if they don’t hold purpose toward the direction or destination. I thought this was good writing. 🙂 Glad you shared.

I totally agree Jacob! Sometimes when I write, I’m not sure where It’s headed, but it generally have purpose and a meaning behind it. It’s always fun to discover! Just checked out your site. Your poetry is incredible!