me2 jeff.. the pose is a bit ambitious... i think where it first goes wrong is the rib cage is a touch small...hence he tries to make it up with extending the obliques the far side should maybe be compressed a bit more??? ( its hard to imagine the pelvic crests?) also the form of the nearest glute seems unfinished.. ive actually tried to draw the pose myself... there also seems to be a bit of apprehension with the nose and mouth... i'd actually like to see a little less trying to define everything - like the arms and a bit more style or simplistic approach so she doesnt look so generic...

He definitely has talent not a bad sketch otherwise..

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I think the arms are weak, will revisit that aspect of the drawing, but as for 'going wrong' I think that is overstating it a bit. The pose is very ambitious, but I should have pushed it even more....I just might try again.... her glute is flat, but her expression, I would say, is different, not typical, not pouty, but still playful, the face is too small for anything more than a suggestion of an expression....

I like the first version better too - the arms looked more natural for someone flying in the air. The one thing that seems a bit off to me is the mouth - it's showing too much teeth to be a smile, and the lips aren't wide enough to be a proper grin. She might look better with a smile that's not showing teeth:

Maybe close the lips too just a little bit?

I'm not an artist though and neither do I know that much about drawing, so this is purely the opinion of a layperson who appreciates art (and women with muscles). Could be I'm wrong and feel free to tell me to buzz of if that's the case.

kidding.....but do you really think what you did is more appealing than what I did? I feel there's something natural and playful about how I did her mouth, caught her in a moment rather than posed her....and it really isnt the focus of the drawing....

Tasker - the position of the arms the first time does have a more...floaty feeling....but the execution was weak I felt. I might not be done with this drawing after all, I think your draw over would enhance the piece....appreciate you taking the time.

I didn't "do" anything there (just clone-stamped the teeth lines out as a reference to convey the point), it wasn't meant to be some kind of definitive improvement and I wouldn't make an assumption like that. I couldn't ever draw a face if someone held a gun to my head.

Anyway I like your version better, it actually does look like a candid moment where you caught her on camera midair. I still prefer the first floaty-arms but still, some sky in the BG, some inks and colors, and that could be a cover.

I actually like different things about the differing versions. There are always things to nitpick, very few perfect drawings out there! It's why I have to eventually stop tinkering even when I am not 100% sure I've done what I meant to do.

As for commentary. I always tell people the same thing I do myself... which is:

When someone gives you advice, ALWAYS listen to it. When five people give you five different bits of advice, ALWAYS listen to it... THEN, do whatever you want. It's up to you to learn and grow IF you want to do something different. If you want to be better, and someone offers advice that nudges that, then DO IT... but don't feel like you have to make everyone happy. That's a losing battle. There will always be something that someone will think you ought to have done different.

I remind myself of this all the time. I have to weigh my own self-critique against input from others. Sometimes I'm too harsh on myself. Other times I try to incorporate suggestions from others that really don't suit my style. We all have to find our own way, and pick up bits of good advice along the way whenever someone offers something that fits what we want to do.