The changeling hives have always warred with each other to cull the weak. With Twilight Sparkle's announcement still echoing with the other hives, it is time once again to separate the chaff from the wheat.

Twilight saved Chrysalis from a bitter end, thus changing her own fate and that of the Elements of Harmony. As she learns the power of redemption, Twilight gains power never before recorded in history. Equestria itself will never be the same.

The changeling hives have always warred with each other to cull the weak. With Twilight Sparkle's announcement still echoing with the other hives, it is time once again to separate the chaff from the wheat.

In the wake of Chrysalis' failed invasion, a different hive breaks tradition and steps into the light to open relations with Equestria. The ever eager scholar, Twilight Sparkle, uses this truce as the perfect opportunity to learn more about this enigmatic race. Unfortunately, or maybe fortunately, she will learn all there is to know about what it means to be a changeling.

But will Twilight lose herself in the hive, or will she regain what she has lost? Only time will tell.

Oh dear, I think I'm addicted to this story now. Need more! anyway I can't wait to see how Twi gets transformed into a changeling and how she'll fix the issue... hopefully with Queen Cadista helping as well.

Nice, I like the new chapter. I particularly liked the way you did the intro perspective from Twilight.

A couple corrections to consider:

--You missed the [ /i] to close the italics somewhere in the middle, so the whole second half is italicized.--The position of the Hatchery in relation to the rest of the city is somewhat vague. It's hard to tell whether it's outside the city or inside on a lower level.--When you first describe the barrier, it's hard to tell whether it's a physical dome or an energy dome. Once they get to the tower it becomes fairly clear that it's made of energy, but in it's initial description that's hard to tell.--There are a few places where words are missing.

Aside from that, it seems like you're off to a good start with this. Just don't forget to go back and clear up all the timeline issues that are inherent in skipping forward so drastically as you have between chapters one and two when you continue from here on out. I'm sure you will, but the little details that separate a good story from a great one can sometimes get lost in the shuffle if you're not careful. I look forward to seeing what you have in store for this.

gah, I hate missing those [ /i] commands, thanks for the catch, and I cleared up the barrier issue. As for the hatchery, that'll come back in later so I'll explain its location then. I'll try to hunt down those missing words.

As for the timeline, it'll get explained a bit later. Hope you keep enjoying the story!

3253892I don't doubt that the timeline will be solidified later, I just kind of wanted to draw your attention to an often overlooked aspect of it, specifically the attention to detail; especially when it comes to character reactions and thoughts. Doing the skip the way you did is a bold move, and one that could prove to be incredibly effective in a story like this, but if it does somehow get away from you it can cause more harm than good. I've seen far too many stories with a lot of promise fall flat because a small but crucial detail was overlooked.

But you haven't disappointed so far, so I have faith in your abilities.

It just kind of jumped out at me in a bad way, like an obviously and unapologetically made-up word. If it's justified by some kind of linguistical thing beyond my ken, I withdraw the objection, but it stands out oddly amongst the usual pony names. Cadista stands out much less, and also made sense to me when I read it - my thought process was along the lines of "the name 'Cadista' appears related to 'caddisfly', and those are insects like Changelings are, and therefore this is a good name for a Changeling" - but "Cresnox" I did not see coming and didn't see any parallels to anything it could be referencing, and it doesn't follow any of the naming conventions used in the show or introduced in the story yet, so it surprised me.

TL;DR: the name jumped out as made-up and was a bit jarring to my linguistic sensibilities compared to the otherwise good names for the new things. This story's good beyond that, so I'll live

Not necessarily. Shining Armor only said it was anonymous, but he could have said that just to protect Gloss who wanted to remain anonymous. Its possible that even SA didn't know and Gloss went straight to Celestia about it.

Outside of that however, this is just the author capitalizing on the ambiguity of the show's writers. If the show said who gave the warning, then they would have had to invest time into who the messenger was and that would have leached time from the main plot of the episode.

might this be the story inspired by mine you spoke of?If so good on ya, it's already doing better than mineit seems people really don't like humanized lol. shame, really. I'll get to reading this when it has more chapters

3254420 glad i inspired something that turned out so welland I definitely know the feel. There was only one story I've ever written that I ever expected to get more attention to usual and that was the sun and her little sparkle because everybody loves mumlestia.even so, it's always a pleasant shock when something gets featured. alas, it is also a curse. have fun dealing with people shoving every single little tiny mistake in your face, and then having to see it repeated over and over and over again.it's only helpful the first time lol

Very curious as to how Celestia will react to Twilight not recognizing her. Even if she knows beforehand that Twilight's memories have been wiped and trusts Cadista enough to not let on for the time being, I can't imagine it will be easy for her.

I'm not sure what I was expecting when starting this story, but it wasn't this. Very awesome take on changeling culture and why X-pony is a changeling. Chapter 2 was a bit jarring at the beginning but rightfully so once you have a vague idea of whats going on. Very well done. Liked, fav'd, and greedily looking forward to more.

The abrupt shift, works very much in this case. I rather like it. It has a mystery whodunit to the approach of accident or feudal hostage bond. The next chapter should be quite a blast to see which is which, and a rather nasty view when the clear fact is shown.

That was until they started repeating two words. Wake up. The entity was confused. Wake up. A jolt lanced through the mind, and the orange coloration became extremely pronounced. Wake up Twilight Sparkle.