A GENDA J ANUARY 3 OR 4 Journal Revising Essays Journal: How was your break? What did you do? If you could say you learned one life lesson over the break,

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A GENDA J ANUARY 3 OR 4 Journal Revising Essays Journal: How was your break? What did you do? If you could say you learned one life lesson over the break, what would it be? HW: Revise Essay Due: January 7 th

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R EVISING E SSAYS Common Mistakes Intro excessively long, with too much specific detail Thesis with no so what Topic Sentences not arguments Lack of Analysis Missing Transition Sentences Random Rebuttals Rebuttals with no Evidence Lame Conclusion Follow along as we revise an essay together

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R EVISE Y OUR E SSAY Revision is required unless you received an A, AND a level 5. On your old paper number the comments I made In your new paper Highlight the changes you make and place the number next to the change that corresponds with the comment. Example: Old Draft: Louis XVI loved his wife, Marie Antoinette, very much. (comment: This is not a topic sentence.) #1 New Draft: French national debt conspired to weaken the citizens faith in the governments ability to look out for their interests thus creating a crisis of confidence that turned into revolution # 1