Visual Review

Karaoke.

You can’t just throw a generic cursivey font on the ED and call it a day. This looks horrible.

Rating: Bad.

Typesetting.

Is it so hard to copy and paste the previous screen’s typesetting over here? I didn’t even know it was possible to be that fucking lazy.

I know I focus much more on quantity than quality when it comes to typesetting, but goddamn are these signs bad.

Other.

Placement could be better managed and the subs should have a secondary text here.

Script Review

Karaoke.

Nothing to bitch about here.

Main Script.

This is completely wrong. It’s “Gunvarrel”, like it is everywhere else in the main script. And it’s also something the creators of the show wrote in English in multiple scenes.

Yes, it’s pretty clear. Get it together.

Well, it’s not confirming voice recognition. The system is trying to confirm this guy is who he is THROUGH voice recognition. “Initiating voice recognition sequence.” would be a better line to use, although it may need a TLC to check considering the voice is referring to the sentence written on the tablet.

Oh no. “IRUO.” is the name of the system? My mind is imagining all sorts of possible lines with fucked-up grammar. Dammit, Japan. Why do this to me?

Thank you for not translating “pinchi” as “in a pinch”. I fucking hate that.

Why the fuck is italicizing so foreign a concept these days? The lines should reflect natural speech with natural stresses. Show the stress with italics.

“Hell, this is really well done.” That’s how it would be pronounced were someone to say it.

This whole section needs a rephrase.

“I’m one of the best, so it’s not like I haven’t heard it all before, but I didn’t expect the creator to act like that.” {I’d drop “like that” for something like “so jealous” but this guy’s too apathetic to come out and say something like that directly.}

This a damn good way to reflect intentionally stunted phrasing.

“Somehow” needs to be cut from fansubbers’ vocabularies. As a generitranslation for “nanka” (or whatever that word is), it’s fucking terrible. Just drop it and replace it with something else.

“You know, it kind of feels like time left this place behind.”

Love that top line. “Yay, Skal!” just wouldn’t have the same ring to it.

Don’t be afraid to inject flavor here. This fits his character better.

Results

Watchability: Watchable.

Visual grade: C-

Script grade: B+

Overall grade: B

If you like your subs to be pretty, WhyNot isn’t the group for you. But a functionally sound script, along with some of the clever phrasing you’ve come to expect from Vale’s translations, ensures you probably won’t do too bad by picking up their release.

When there’s a true simulcast (which happens for many anime nowadays, most/all of the fansubs are just edits of that. Meaning that unless the group does something horribly, horribly wrong they’ll be of higher quality than the official release.
This in turn means that reviewing official releases usually is a waste of time unless you like poking fun at horribad TS and timing.

I humbly request a re-review. First episodes of animes are never perfectly subbed and I believe fansub groups need a bit of time to figure out all the proper nouns specific to the show. The kara has also been changed.

Considering he only docked you for messing up Gunvarrel, I don’t see why a re-review is warranted on the basis of having fixed show-specific names. Having non-shitty kara might bump your overall grade up to a B+, but I doubt D_S will bother.