that was so SAD :( I freaking cried SO HARD...especially during the funeral. aw. see you are such an amazing writer to actually bring tears to my eyes, it's not that easy. i kinda got confuzzled during the ending and the whole limbo thing although i am SUPER happy that draco gets to come back, which is basically all i understood...which is fine by me :D IT WAS AMAZING !!! and your poem in chapter seven was funny :P hahaha. made me smile. im sorry i didnt review until now, i usually dont review until the last chapter unless ive been following the story since the beginning. anyways, it was AMAZING. and i cant wait until the sequel to get draco back because *sniff* i miss him :/

Lol! No it isn't rubbish. I like it so far... it's just hard to break the "mood" by having to type something, then try and get back in the moment. Like reading a book, then at a good part realizing you have to pee. Don't take it too much to heart.

this is the second time i'm reading this story, it's THAT good, the plot is very clever and very realistic and as a million other reviewers said, you're rue to the characters.

BUT in order to be fair i must say your writing in itself has room for improvement. your sentences are too long and informal, so it makes it seem a bit childish and like i'scribbled down quickly. Revise your punctuation and don't feel like you have to make speech EXTREMELY realistic. a reader's mind will fill in the blanks when a character is supposed to be stammering or speaking nervously (or whaatever effect ur trying to go for). If you refer to rowling's writing you'll see she very very rarely uses elipses in speech, but you could always imagine the exact tone and manner in which characters spoke.

Je suis l'inspecteur et je reexamine le pub de Barrique. Soigneriez-vous pour me dire que vous pensez au pub s'il vous plait ?
It was the closest translation I could think of. It means: I am the inspector and I am reviewing the Hogshead pub. Would you care to tell me what you think of the pub please?
Barrique means hogshead anyways lol but you could probably just say de le Hogshead.

I can now stop crying in sadnesss that Draco is dead, and now I'm crying from laughter that my crush just fell for the oldest trick in the book! A whoopie cushion! lol He fell for it! Whoo hooo!!! ROTFL literally!

Alex, this is so sad! Yet so good! I bet if someone gave you the worst book on earth and you changed ti up, I think, no, I know that It would become the best book in the whole space of time! And I'm NOT joking! I'm being very serius. lol Well now I'm gonna be goofy and prank call my crush again. lol I've done it a million times before, yet he still doesn't know it's me, and he has my cell number, that's the only phone I call him on, anmd he still doesn't know it's me! lol -Rachael M. Camtrell

Author's Response: LMAO!!! Oh this made me laugh soooo much! I havent been on this site in a while unfortunately 'cos my internets been down =/ But i just read yur reviews and wow! Thank you sooo much ^_^ its made me want to write again so much but im in the middle of my A Level exams so...that wouldnt be a very good idea i suppose =/ OMG, prank phone calling yur crush? That is hysterical especially if he hasnt realised its yu yet! Whenever i do that they figure it out =/

Alex, It's me again! I just thought you might want to know something that I found funny, it has nothing to do with the story, but oh well! I've been writing my book for 3 years, and I started writing it before I even heard of Harry Potter. When I did read the books, I couldn't help but laugh when Draco came in. See in my book the name of my main character is Seraphim, and the guy she falls for is named Drako Malkier! I was wondering if you had any ideas for my book, I've run out of ideas for romance, and mystery in my book. Thanks, Alex! -Rachael M. Cantrell