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Ooh I loved this opening chapter! Great scene-setting, I really felt like I was there amongst that damaged, futuristic landscape. The eyes concept is so interesting, really want to know more about that and why it's so important. You have some really great ideas here. I think the flow of the writing could be smoother; at times, it was a little difficult to read. Just some more commas here and there to break up longer passages, and a few rearranging of sentences, and this'll read much smoother. Loved how you immersed me in the story. There's a lot of mystery, still, about this dystopian world. Will be very interesting to see where you take this. Great job here, it's a strong start! Liked and shelved :)