I liked the way you tied the end into the Half-Blood Prince, especially this- 'Harry was hurtling after Snape and Draco as though they had killed someone.' :P The breaks between the scenes weren't too disjointed and your description is pretty awesome.

My only CC is that sometimes your spelling is a bit off, and you change tense I think without meaning too, but on the whole I thought this was an excellent story, well done! :D

-Jenny

Author's Response: Yeah I think the tense thing is something I do subconciously. I really need to work on it and fix up all my old ones. Might give this a once over soon, new coat of paint. Fix up all those errors and see if I can make it a little clearer.

Thank you for the review though, I appreciate it. Love getting any reviews, good, bad or CC.

Hey there!
I just thought I'd tell you how much I am loving this story and that you should soo totally continue and don't keep us waiting for too long fro the next chapter. Also, please can you take a look at one of my stories and tell me what you think. Thanks. Sera -x-

Author's Response: sure which story did you want me to look at? im really glad you are enjoying it. unfortunately ive been stuck doing a lot of overtime lately so my writings taken a backseat for a bit but i plan to put up some new chapters soon.

Well, It was well written, but it honestly wasn't my favorite. Yes, it was good, and practice makes perfect. So keep writing them if you want. You can only go up from here (and for a first, it's pretty good).

Author's Response: thank you for the honest review. i love receiving these. they always help me. I hope to develop this story further however at the moment I have hit somewhat of a block. i would be very happy if you would read and review my other stories as well. thank you again.

Author's Response: my apoligies to all as i have had considerable computing problems of late i have been unable to update any of my stories but i promise that once my computer is running again all three shall be updated for you all.

HI. For your first romace fic, I thought it was amazing. Keep writing please. Hannah xx

Author's Response: thanks. trust me your first chapter wasn't boring at all. i cant wait for some more. had soem computer arguments latley however the new chapters will be posted soon i promise. (you can beat me with large burning sticks if i dont) bye

No offense, but I can kind of tell this was sort of a random spur-of-the-moment thing. I like it still, but I just don't think romance is exactly your strongest point. But besides that, this was pretty good!

And I love the banner Lubi made you. :) It was Lubi, right? *is unsure*

~stranger~

Author's Response: yeah i no. i really need to work on ym romance which is why i really ove reviews on these stories that way i can get the romance perfect in the Timeline series.

Some aspects of this fic I liked and others weren't as good. I liked how you went with the sixth book very well. But I think the thing with Draco was way too rushed. Hermione wouldn't trust Draco just because he kissed her. Draco would have to show her that he had changed. Also this chapter was very rushed, try to add more detail.

Author's Response: thank you for this honest review. I am now in the process of lengthening this story and chapter 2 will be up soon and i will try to fix many of these problems.

I found this story very good there were parts that I didn't get like " as my world crashed down around my ears" it's supposed to be 'before my eyes' Also the fact that as they were fighting she still didn't know what was going on was very OCC because being so smart Hermione would have figured it out. Then Harry talked to Ginny in your story but it was really Ron and Hermione in the book. Then the flashbacks and real time kind of melt together, but that is a style of writting if you were going for that. All out all I'd give it a 6/10 it was well written though.
dracolover4ever
here's the reveiw I told you I'd give!

Author's Response: thank you for the review. i actually never really thought much about it. it was like 2am and the idea just popped in there while i was bored so i wrote it. I really appreciate these reviews the help me correct my mistakes and improve as a writer so thank you so much. i will work on these problems when i expand the story.

Author's Response: i am going to continue Lost Without You into at least a short story of a relationship between Draco and Hermione during the final stages of the war. Kind of a Romeo Juliet thing. i hope that you all like it and will keep reviewing.