“How sad for you. Like any competitive sport, there is a stake, even if it isn’t saving the wold from an all powerful world ending evil.”This was in response to me saying it’s wrong to kill people to win a tournament.

I was expecting you to review one of my stories. If you don’t mind, I’d like to say a few things. First of all, I’m glad you take the time to do very critical reviews of stories and try to improve upon those. But if you allow me the time to explain myself, I just want to let you know that I really don’t try to make these stories professional. I only write for fun. So when it comes to grammar mistakes, I know people can get annoyed by them and I try to fix as much as I can. But to me personally, as long as a person can read it, it’s fine by me. As for the Pokemon names, I’m going to have to politely disagree. I’ve seen many stories and other forms of media that do capitalize the names. It’s what I grew up with and it’s going to stay like that. As for the OOC, it was requested by the person who asked me to do the small story. He wanted me to basically have Lyle (Lillie) be like how she is in the anime, as for the first season of Sun and Moon she was terrified of Pokemon. I hope I didn’t come off as ignorant or stupid in this and I really do like how you gave the time to review this story. Have a good day

secs ago[But to me personally, as long as a person can read it, it’s fine by me.]

That works for regular communication, but it does not work for stories. Stories rely on immersion and suspension of disbelief, and any grammar mistake will shatter that instantly. Even if people can deduce what you meant to say, the mistake will negatively affect their enjoyment. I remind you that your readers are also reading for fun. If you’re posting your work for public consumption, you do have to hold yourself to a slightly higher standard.

[He wanted me to basically have Lyle (Lillie) be like how she is in the anime, as for the first season of Sun and Moon she was terrified of Pokemon.]

Okay, that makes sense. It might have made more sense to tag the fic under the anime world, however; Moon is a blank-slate character who can be slotted into anime canon with little issue, but anime!Lillie is a distinct character from game!Lillie, and it’s helpful to readers to know which one the story is about.

I appreciate your criticisms. It looks like I did miss a few commas and the like. I consistently have that problem and really need to work on making sure that I check for them better.I disagree with your assessment of my capitalization of pokemon names. As no in game nicknames are given, Phoebes dusklops really is a proper noun. At least in my mind. So I will continue to do that as I see fit. Otherwise you are correct.

You are right really. The stakes are absurdly high. but have you ever felt that tension when playing the game? It really does feel like its high stakes. I’m not too worried as I was composing for a very specific prompt, and felt confident enough with the story to place it here. Thanks for taking the time to read my work though, and I hope that despite my weaknesses, you were able to enjoy it.

secs ago[As no in game nicknames are given, Phoebes dusklops really is a proper noun.]

Alright, but you capitalize the general term here: “Each member of the Elite Four had taken a Pokemon from her team.”

[but have you ever felt that tension when playing the game?]

Uh… no? Pokemon has always, consistently, felt much more “safe” and low-tension than fantasy RPGs where the world is at stake or whatever.

5m agoHow sad for you. Like any competitive sport, there is a stake, even if it isn’t saving the wold from an all powerful world ending evil.

Thanks for your review, I’ve tweaked it as much as it needs tweaked in my opinion. Have a great day.

secs agoUh, I didn’t say there wasn’t any stake, just that it wasn’t as important as saving the world.

Let me try to explain this in a different way. The crucial element here is that the stakes for the trainer are on a completely different scale than the stakes for the pokemon. The pokemon are fighting for their lives, but the trainer is fighting for petty fame. Do you really think it’s moral to ask people to risk their lives just so you can win a tournament?