Enter at Your Own Risk – Friday Fictioneers

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His sister’s house drapes over velvet sand felt between your toes, a hammock for a rest to feel the air flow light and breezy.

His brother owns a palatial tower, but you must make appointments for a view, and you’re lucky if he can squeeze you in.

Harvey’s place teeters on collapse, built into the crevice of a mountain. Enter at your own risk. His genius compartmentalizes treatments, payments, disappointment and regret in haphazard corners. He treats his guests to dinner on cracked dishes on a table with candles. A partial roof over their heads offers refuge from the rain.

I think the strength of the metaphors is great.. somehow if you make friend with some people they are like houses.. the image of those where you enter at your own risk are often the most valuable of connections I think

Thanks, Bjorn. I just had to experiment with this idea. I think you’re right. Those who offer the most risk are often the most worthwhile friends, maybe because you share so much and there is more give and take.

Michelle, I think Harvey’s is risky, no doubt about that. But, like you said, he’s just more honest. At least you’ll know when you are in trouble. This may not be true for the others. Great observation.

Great, Alistair. I’m glad you went that direction and extended it to their personality. That could be another layer. Their mental house may or may not reflect their personality. Oh, the human condition. Thanks!

Those actually are fascinating characters, considering their mentality. It has the beginnings of a really pretty good-sounding story. I’d suggest you develop it. Seems like it has potential. Nice work, Amy!

My mental house shifts and changes on a regular basis, and often doesn’t include kids (as you know, from my post), but I like where YOU went with this, Amy. Very the abstraction and beauty here. Nice job!

I’m not sure what my mental house would look like, Dawn, but like yours, I think it would shift a lot, or maybe it collapses and must be rebuilt all the time! I think I’m too close to see my own. Thank you so much!

Amy, I think the different types make for an interesting world. It would be pretty boring if we were all the same. Very interesting and well-written story. I think I like Harvey best also as a friend, but it would be kind of rough being married to him. Interesting and well-written story. 🙂 —Susan

Very true, Susan. How boring it would be if all of our houses looked and felt the same. What would be the fun in visiting anyone else’s house? Harvey seems like a complex guy and probably not easy to have a relationship with. Thanks so much! 🙂

Amy,
I like the Who Knows genre. Some great work in that one. 🙂 I like this and how well you conveyed the three personalities through architecture. I’m not sure which one I am, but probably closer to the last one. How about you?

I loved the images in this as soon as I read the first version, but this edit is better – that opening line is even more beautiful. I wonder if the compartmentalising helps Harvey keep it together. It can’t be easy having his siblings. Love the genre – think we’ll be seeing a lot more of that. 🙂

Oh, I’m not sure what you read first. I actually didn’t edit it. Hmm. Thanks so much for the kind words, Sarah. I have a feeling compartmentalizing is what Harvey does best to cope. Could be….who knows?! 🙂

Hmm, curious. The version that came into my email inbox was different.
I’m with Harvey on the compartmentalising – have too many email accounts, but if I only had one I’d never find anything (or get anything done).