The intent section was written a bit oddly because I couldn't quite figure out how to write "expected audience reactions" in a first person perspective.

The abstract section is a bit of a text wall, but that might just be my ADHD talking.

Due to Catherine being poor and myself fairly well-off, I want to make sure that I got her views accurate and didn't make the article patronizing.

Did I make the true intent clear enough? The true intent being performance art concerning actively defying implied authority to help others.

As always, thanks in advance.

I moved your thread summary content to the first post and trimmed it above, OP, since it was taking up a lot of space on the forum listing. Try to keep thread descriptions under 7 lines so you don't visually crowd out other people's threads. ~Zyn

First of all, very sorry about how long this took for us to see this. In the future, if a draft has gone unreviewed for more than 3 days feel free to shoot me, Zyn, or another member of the forum crit team a message about it.

First sentence of abstract should be two sentences.

I admit I'm not too familiar with AWCY goi formats, but I think you're fine on concerns 2 and 4.

There is an issue with your use of voice in the intent though. Catherine is talking like she's an outsider looking on poverty the whole time, and you don't get the sense that she's speaking from personal experience. Given that's where you the author is coming from, the tonal divergence is understandable. Nonetheless, you need to really get away from yourself and lose yourself in the character.

Instead of viewing it as an objective justice, channel inner rage at unfairness and societal injustice. Write as though you didn't see people get screwed, but as if you were the one who's been screwed by the system your whole life. Let it infect the writing until the voice is distinct. Do that, and you'll have an excellent piece on your hands.

Seconding with what Modern about the voice I. Intent: I didn’t get she was poor until reading thing. It sounded like she was not in the social hierarchy (I.e. “I've seen is the rich, the poor, and the middle class alike avoid us.”).

I also feel this is a little too harmless for AWCY. Don’t get me wrong I love the imagery, but AWCY has always been portrayed as a tad radical, so a completely harmless piece doesn’t really make sense for them. Take that as you will though, I do like the concept as is, to be honest.