Like the story so far, although there are numerous errors like "Coach pick zombies off," pick should be picked, and other things like that. I'm just being nitpicky though. You did better than most people.

Man, the MLP community produces a lot of quality fanfiction, doesn't it? I'm interested to see where this goes. Track'd.

That said, there were a couple of errors that detracted from the experience: the story never seemed to stay in one tense - it was always switching between present and past, which is awkward to read. Additionally, there were a decent number of minor spelling errors (it's = it is, its = possessive). While not enough to ruin the story, they were prevalent enough to make it wonky to read.

These are fairly minor errors, though - the story itself has a lot of promise, and I really look forward to the next updates of this. I mean, we must have at least "AH LUV HORSES" out of Ellis when he wakes up to find himself in a land of marshmallow ponies.

I don't understand why everyone hates Rochelle so much. The only reasons I ever hear are A) things all the bots have in common, and B) AXE ME A QUESTION, which come on you guys, every group needs someone to make the bad puns.

>>8146681466 I thank you for your feedback. Quite frankly I wasn't aware that "its" is possessive. Just goes to show that the English language is one of the hardest in terms of grammar. As for the tense change, that is probably my biggest flaw in writing right now. I just got done writing a present tense script-fic and even then I kept switching to past every once in a while. I should probably proof-read my stories, anyway... I usually charge through them and then shove them on the internet for everyone to see.

Again, I thank you for your time and feedback and I am glad you enjoy the story.