Although you’re very young you have an interesting writing style. Very long one-sentence paragraphs with several different kinds of punctuation so we don’t get lost in the forest of words.

Very raw-looking, those long sentences but you’ve got some talent I think. They remind me of a 19th century writer, maybe Dostoeyevsky? But there’s a bit more purpose here, less rambling and digression… but rambling is a writing style in itself and not necessarily a bad thing.