I am a year 5 at Hornby Primary School ~ Te Pōtaka o te Mātauranga. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.

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Wednesday, May 24, 2017

Titanium slow writing

WALT use a techique ot carefully craft our writing

Titanium

If I had hidden under the table, if I had stayed at home, if I was cooler then I wouldn't have these controlling powers. Scared, bullied, terrified, I was a depressed loner without a friend. I am crouched down in a damaged corridor with papers flying around me . Anxiously walking down the hall wondering what was going to happen, I nervously looked at the terrified teacher in the damaged classroom. I am a mess. Chomping on my dirty nails; heart pounding 100miles per hour; I crunch my fists angrily. I am so alone…...

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