General Writing and Grammar Help/Please correct this for me

QuestionDear Dr Johnson, Hope you are doing good. Last time you were a great help and would much appreciate if you could correct this letter for me.

Pls see

I Came… I Saw… I Waited… And I Waited….And I Waited…Even Julias Cesare, would have had to re quote himself did he wish to immigrate to USA in the present age.

Dear Mr President,

Let me begin by congratulating you on your re election. This election and the previous one, I did not miss a single debate hoping that somewhere, somehow you will mention me!

Me/I as in hundred and thousand of legal skilled workers present here on H1’s. I, who has been in the US from India on H1 for almost 4 years and almost 6 years before, work hard and long hours, pay my taxes religiously every month, contribute towards social security, abide by the rules and regulations to the r’s and the t’s, contribute to the well being of the society in the best of capacity and capability.

Still, why? I am ignored everytime there is a talk of immigration reforms, Why do I have to wait for years to receive permanent residency? Back home and on every international platform I had been hearing about the greatness of this country. I have only heard that in America you make your own destiny then why do I have to be dependent on my employer, relatives or even my kids (US born citizens) to allow me to work and live independently.

Sir, next time you sit discussing US immigration system please take a few moments to think about the numbers of pending permanent residency applications from India and China

Mr President, Please help me realize MY AMERICAN DREAM!!!

AnswerHello Shilpa - and thanks for your question.

Here is my edited version, with one or two minor changes.

Dear Mr President

Let me begin by congratulating you on your re-election. During this election and the previous one I did not miss a single debate, hoping that somewhere, somehow, you would mention me.

Like hundreds and thousands of legal skilled workers present here on H1’s. I have been in the US from India for almost four years and almost six years before that. I work hard and long hours, pay my taxes religiously every month, contribute towards social security, abide by the rules and regulations, and contribute to the well being of the society in the best of capacity and capability.

Why am I ignored every time there is a talk of immigration reforms? Why do I have to wait for years to receive permanent residency? Back home and on every international platform I had been hearing about the greatness of this country. I have only heard that in America you make your own destiny: then why do I have to be dependent on my employer, relatives, or even my kids (US born citizens) to allow me to work and live independently?

Sir, next time you sit discussing US immigration system please take a few moments to think about the numbers of pending permanent residency applications from India and China.

Expertise

I can answer questions on English language, grammar, writing skills, and study skills. I am particularly experienced in the writing skills required for academic essays, term papers, reports, dissertations, and post-graduate theses.

Experience

I have forty years experience as a tutor and as the author of books on writing and study skills. For thirty years I was a tutor for the Workers' Educational Association, which specialises in courses for adult students and preparing mature students for university. I was also a tutor for the Open University between 1975 and 2010. During that time I have also written a number of books on writing and study skills. In the last ten years or more I have specialised in creating computer-aided learning materials and online learning courses.

Education/CredentialsMy first degree was in mechanical engineering (HNC). I then switched to literary studies and philosophy. My second degree was a BA in English and American Literature (from Manchester University - UK). I also have an MA in Comparative Literary Studies, and my doctoral thesis (PhD) was in the relationship between literature and politics.

Past/Present ClientsAmber TV
Anglia Polytechnic University
Bath Spa University College
The Beattie Partnership
Blackpool & the Fylde College
Bolton, Salford, & Trafford NHS
Cedar Health
Central Manchester Health Trust
City College Manchester
Coventry University
David Rigby Associates
East Lancs NHS
Food Standards Agency
Graduate Research Institute
Granada Studios
Higher Education Funding Council
Hyde Clarendon College
Kellogg’s UK
Kingsmill Health Trust
Knowsley Metropolitan Borough
Liverpool University
Manchester Airport
Manchester City Council
Manchester Metropolitan University
MANCAT
Manchester PCT (NHS)
Manchester TEC
North East Lancs PCT
NorthWest Learning Grid
Oldham Business School
Open University
Parrs Wood College
Runshaw College
Salford Mental Health Trust
Save the Children Fund
South Manchester Health Trust
St John Rigby College
St Mary’s Catholic High School
SwimTime
University of Bolton
University of Central Lancs
University College Chester
University of Huddersfield
University of Hull
University of Manchester
University of Salford
West London Health Trust
Winstanley College
Manchester NHS
Xaverian College