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Wednesday, August 3, 2016

#WeWriteBooks, Post 23: Pacing

Jill Williamson is a chocolate loving, daydreaming, creator of kingdoms. She writes weird books in lots of weird genres like fantasy (Blood of Kings and Kinsman Chronicles), science fiction (Replication), and dystopian (The Safe Lands trilogy). She's currently writing a post-apocalyptic book with all of you called THIRST in conjunction with the #WeWriteBooks series.

Welcome to week twenty-three of #WeWriteBooks Wednesdays, where we are writing books together. Somehow I managed to catch up with my weeks, and I posted Chapter 23 of THIRST yesterday over on my author website. Click here to read it.

Recap

Week one was genre (THIRST is post-apocalyptic YA). Week two was premise. Here's my premise:

A waterborne disease has sprung up in every corner of the globe, decimating the human race. Young survivors Eli McShane and his friendsjourney toward Colorado and the rumored location of a safe water source.

A Reminder

We're getting close to the end of the #WeWriteBooks series, which means the CONTEST IS COMING! Eight weeks from now, we will open the contest on Wednesday, September 14. So keep that date in mind.As promised, Stephanie is teaching about writing a synopsis. She did her first post this last Monday and will finish the series next week. Click here if you missed the first post.

A Confession

The ending of THIRST is not coming together the way I had originally planned. This isn’t uncommon for me when I'm writing a first draft. So, I had to take some time to brainstorm through the problems to find out what was broken with the story and how I could fix it. That showed me that I’m going to need to make some significant changes in the rewrite. Specifically, my pacing is messed up.

I was trying to build up to a major climax at the end, but it wasn't working. Right now the book is kind of rambling along, and I don’t like that. Also, my antagonist doesn’t appear in the story until past the halfway point, which is strange. So, I'm writing the climax anyway, and then later I'll go back and fix the middle, adding in events to help build to this climax.

I honestly think I might have two books here instead of one because I spend half the book trying to get my characters to Colorado. And then when they get to Colorado, it's a whole new world with new problems, goals, and even a new antagonist. I have the “discovery of the Pandemic” story. Then I have a separate “arrive in Mount Crested Butte and try to make a life of it” story. Feels like two books to me. We shall see whether or not editors agree later on.

I share all that both to give you an update on my story and to lead into today's topic. Trust your instincts. Most writers love reading enough to have a good sense of when a story isn't working. And if your story isn't working, take a look at the pacing.

Today's Topic: Pacing

Pacing is a literary tool that
controls the progress, speed, and rhythm of how a story unfolds, how much time passes,
and how fast or slow a character moves through the events of the story.

Genre influences pacing. Action,
thrillers, science fiction, and mysteries tend to have a quicker pace than
romance, literary fiction, or coming-of-age stories. No matter what genre
you’re writing, you want to keep the reader engaged. The pacing
needs to be perfectly balanced. Not so fast that the reader is exhausted, but
not so slow that they get bored or frustrated.

Tips for Pacing

Tips for story structure

There is a reason why the three-act
structure is so popular for storytelling. It gives stories a beginning, middle,
and end; keeps them moving along at a good pace; and helps the action rise and
fall at natural places. Act one should include the inciting incident and a
major plot point. Act two should be filled with rising action, including a
midpoint twist to help you avoid the sagging middle, and leading up to a second
major plot point that leaves the main character at their darkest moment. Act
three is all about resolution. The main character makes one final stand to save
the day, which causes the pacing to rise in action until it reaches the climax
of the story. What follows is the falling action, in which all loose ends are
tied up. Outlining your novel can help you anticipate where your pacing might
need tweaking.

Make them wait

Planting good questions in the
reader’s mind is a great way to keep them turning the pages. It builds
suspense, which drives the story continually forward. Oftentimes, the longer
you prolong the outcome, the faster readers will turn the pages.

Tips for word choice

The words you choose can greatly affect the pacing of a scene. As you rewrite, take care
to look at the words in each scene. Words evoke emotion, so make sure to choose
words that create the desired pacing. Fast-paced action words like: slam, break,
sprint, and knock create a different type of momentum compared to words like: saunter,
whisper, float, and cradle. Also consider word length. Short words pack a
punch, while long words create a more leisurely pace. The sound of words can
also affect pacing.

Tips for sentence structure

The same rules that apply to
word choice apply to sentence structure. Length, whether short or long, affects
the momentum of a scene. Short sentences are simple. Sometimes fragmented. They
convey intensity and speed. Long and flowing sentences, on the other hand, give
the reader a sense of pause, forcing them to pay closer attention to something
the author doesn’t want them to forget. If you’re writing a scary scene or an intense fight, take a look at your sentence lengths. It might help to shorten some and
use more fragments.

Arrive Late and Leave Early

Writers often start a scene way
too early, long before the action begins. Stories that jump the gun risk boring
the reader early on. The same can be true of where you end a scene or chapter.
Look for the perfect place to stop that entices your reader to turn the page or
move on to read just one more scene.

Alternate

Great novels have great pacing.
This means balance. When you edit your book, look at your scenes to find a careful
balance of exposition, action, dialogue, emotion, and description. Some scenes
should race along in a rapid succession of action and dialogue, others should
be introspective and meander. Alternating in some form helps keep your reader
engaged. Too many fast scenes in a row can exhaust readers, while too many slow
scene can bore them. Good pacing is all about variety and that you never remain
on one extreme for too long.

Want to slow things down?

Add details

Details slow down
the action. They are like a flag to the reader that says, “Pay attention!” If
you want to slow your pace, find something in particular to focus on. This
might be a clue, a subplot, a new character, a revelation, entering a new
location, or having a disaster that forces your characters to stop and grieve.

Add description

Description
slows down a story because it is static and doesn’t move. You can describe in
motion, but if you are looking to slow down your pacing, stopping to have your
character describe something in full will get the job done.

Show instead of tell

Working
hard to show through an entire scene will add a lot of words and lengthen the scene. This happens
sometimes in dialogue when a character is sharing something deep and personal
that takes up a lot of space. It also could take the form of a character
learning some new skill in painstaking detail. Just be careful to keep things
interesting.

Flashbacks and backstory

Both
are typically no nos in fiction, but used carefully, they can slow down the
pacing of a scene.

Switch points of view

Any
time you switch point of view, you slow the story for the reader, who needs to
pause to adjust to the new character.

Want to speed things up?

Add dialogue

Dialogue can
move scenes along. When it's short and snappy, it gives the reader lots of white space so they
can flip through pages faster. It’s interesting and creates conflict when it
ping pongs back and forth. If you’re not careful, it can also be slow, so make
sure to take into account what is being said, why, and how. Snappy dialogue can make
the pages fly. I’ve often been so tickled by great dialogue that I instantly
went back and read it again. I realize doing that takes me out of the story,
but in a good way.

Tell instead of show

If you
need to get somewhere fast, tell. I do this often in epic fantasy. My characters
have to travel the equivalent of a three-month sea voyage? I’m going to
summarize that in a few sentences to save my readers from boredom. Reserve your
scenes for all the cool and interesting stuff, and put the boring bits in
narrative.

Skip description and details

Just as adding long descriptions and extra details slow down a scene, leaving them out
can speed things up. If you’re trying to keep the action swift, keep any
description or details short and sweet.

Omit character thoughts

Don’t
let your point of view character ruminate about what’s going on in life if
you’re trying to keep things fast-paced. Save these introspective thoughts for
the slow-paced section.

Rewrite sentences that start
with –ing words

Sentences that begin with a continuing action verb not only
have the tendency to create physical impossibilities, they sound silly and slow
when the author usually means for them to show fast, simultaneous action. Take
this one, for example: “Throwing the ball to the Mike, I ran through the key, darted
out onto the base line, and caught Mike’s pass to shoot a jump shot and win the
game.” This character cannot do all those things simultaneously, and this
sentence is so wordy it’s confusing. Better to write something like: I passed
the ball to Mike and ran through the key. I faked left, then popped out the
base line. Mike was ready. A quick bounce pass behind the defense, and I hit a
nice jumper. We won the game.

Use cliffhangers

Nothing makes a reader turn a page faster than
a good cliffhanger. We’ve all been there. We’re reading a good book. We’re
tired. We glance at the clock. Man! It’s past midnight already? We’ve got to go to sleep. Got work tomorrow. We flip through the pages top see how close we are to a good stopping point. Only two more pages? I can make that. Then I’ll
stop. But when we get to the end of the chapter . . . Gah! Who was at the door?
We turn the page to read the next few lines and before we know it, it’s past
one a.m. So when you go back to edit those scene and chapter endings, make sure
you have plenty of scene interruptions, mysterious surprises, unfinished
actions, near revelations, challenges, threats, or unfinished conversations.
Readers will love it.

Skip the boring parts

In film
or television, a jump cut is an abrupt transition from one scene to another.
You can do this in fiction too. The team just found a hint of where the treasure
is buried, but they need to drive across town? Jump cut! End your scene, skip over the drive, and
start the next scene with the team arriving where X marks the spot. These types of things will keep the action moving along.

Write short chapters and scenes

Books with short chapters and short scenes just seem to be faster to read, even
if they’re over five hundred pages long. Such short portions of text are easy
to digest. Something important happens in every one, so the reader blazes
through them, learns what they need to know, then flips to the next. Click here
to read my post on how to divide your book into chapters.

Lengthen the calendar

How
much time passes in the course of your book? Books that cover months or years
tend to seem like time is passing more quickly than a three hundred-page book
that takes place in a single day. Play around with your timeline to see if changing some things might help your pacing.

13 comments:

I have a feeling this post is going to be very useful in my editing... I DEFINITELY need to quicken my pace in some places, and generally shorten many of my points. The second draft for my first book ended up with a little under 300k words, which is WAY too long (especially if it's going to be book one of four). I think the beginning of a story is the easiest place to have the pace too slow, because the characters are still coming together and starting their journey. Thanks so much for this!

That's true, Charlotte. Especially in the fantasy genre where there is so much to set up. Maybe look for a scene that involves your hero and at least one other main character doing something that reveals both an important aspect of the storyworld and gives you a chance to strongly characterize your hero. A scene like that can be a great way to draw readers in.

It can be, though many things can be the mark of a beginning author. *grin* Bad pacing can also be the mark of a first draft that needs to be rewritten. The more time an author puts into a book, the better it usually is. Too many books get rushed to print these days.

Thanks for this post, I think that the slowing things up and making things faster is what makes the pacing work for me. I also think that the more I write, the better and more naturally the pacing comes. For the first book I wrote everything went by waaaay too quickly and now on my third novel, everything seems just about right. 'Course I haven't finished it yet so we'll see how that works. Thanks for the post! I'll definitely be using the tips in here more consciously :)

This is a fabulous point, Emma. The more you write, the better you get at it. So many authors beat themselves up because they aren't producing a perfect novel on their first, second, or even third try. That just isn't a fair or realistic expectation. If I decided to start piano lessons, should I be upset I'm unable to play Mozart yet? Nope. Because proficiency takes time and effort. So the fact that you're on your third novel and things are shaping up nicely is a well-earned fact. Your hard work is paying off! So proud of you, Emma. Keep it up! :-)

Wonderful post! I just discovered a pacing mistake I made while writing my synopsis before my second draft (that being said, the thing wrong with my original synopsis was pacing). So glad I caught it. I was able to combine three or four singular events and string them together. It makes more sense now, and my WIP will be much better for it.