1. Share out your haiku (see my example below); next, 2. Participation points: Respond to mine, as well as, at least two other classmates; then, 3. While you review others works, respond with what you liked best about the other student's work, then one area they could do differently next time; lastly, 4. Make sure the haiku follows the same theme and is 5 syllables, 7 syllables, and 5 syllables.

Mrs. Weimer's Example:

Bouncing back and forth, As sparks scintillate the scene, Bumper cars blare by.

What is my theme? What are some literary elements (i.e. types of figurative language) that you see included in my haiku? How about yours?

Mrs. Weimers theme is to have fun at a carnival and mine is to live life to the fullest.

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g

4/29/2015 04:52:44 am

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a_8

4/29/2015 04:56:53 am

who is this

A-5

4/29/2015 04:57:29 am

I know you are in here p.s they can track you

A-21

4/29/2015 04:57:52 am

Why did you get rabies.

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D-21

4/30/2015 07:15:37 am

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Mrs. Weimer

4/30/2015 07:30:22 am

Relook at your first line. Does it follow the syllable rules?

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A-4

5/1/2015 05:48:53 am

I like how you made them make a bat cave. There to many syllables in the second line

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A-20

4/28/2015 03:55:52 am

Bursting ugly beast
hairless snagging jaws snarling
chupacabra "Sha!"

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A-5

4/28/2015 03:57:25 am

Your supposed to write three of those not one p.s read mine

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Mrs. Weimer

4/30/2015 07:29:03 am

Love your description; however, what does "chupacabra Sha" mean?

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A-18

4/28/2015 04:01:42 am

Woods, crashing throw the woods
bam, bam an elk was being chased
by a bear that's hungry
the bear was breaking
branches snap , snap as they were
like little toothpicks
the elk trotted away
the elk went to eat grass for
lunch for energy

it is at a carnival, as sparks

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A-5

4/28/2015 04:02:21 am

Nice!

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A-14

4/28/2015 04:49:38 am

Well its good but I cant tell where the stanzas end or what that weird last line means.

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A-4

4/29/2015 04:53:58 am

The theme of yours is the woods. You used onomatopoeia in the 5th line. In mine there is a simile.

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A-21

4/30/2015 03:35:04 am

what does lunch for energy mean

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a-4

5/1/2015 05:44:22 am

I like how you used your onomatopoeia. There are to many syllables in the second line.

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A-20

4/28/2015 04:03:38 am

Rabies is not good
it is dangerous, deadly
like a rhino "Moo."

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A-5

4/28/2015 04:04:57 am

I know. With rabies its hard to type dfteowes.

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A14

4/28/2015 04:04:30 am

DESERT

Sun sets fire to land
As heat surrounds animals
Water is scarce, invisible

Mid day sun sets in
Animals thirst for water, always
Plants are few and small

The night cold is death
It is like knives being driven
Dark like cold hard death

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A-5

4/28/2015 04:07:12 am

Wow knives are mean I hate night now.

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A-18

4/28/2015 04:50:56 am

what is as like cold hard death
animals are thirsty

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A-5

4/28/2015 04:52:50 am

sounds cruel ;D

D-19

4/30/2015 07:24:31 am

Make sure you do 5 syllables at first then 7 then 5. yours was 7 then 6

a 11

4/28/2015 04:08:00 am

wood wood wood wood wood
it's everywhere we need to help it
wood wood its everywere

The rain floods the yard
Dark clouds rumble over skies
Like a mad stampede

The animals hide
Grasses are flattened by winds
As fast as lightning

The clouds disappear
And the sun shines the damp woods
Mops up all the rain

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a3

4/30/2015 03:39:31 am

theme is storm and fl is simle.

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D-7

4/30/2015 07:17:46 am

I think you did good keep it up!!!!!!!!................................

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D-7

4/30/2015 07:28:12 am

F

D-21

4/30/2015 07:26:13 am

I REALLY LIKE THE FIGRATIVE LANGUEDGE
I DO NOT THINK YOU NEED TO WORK ON ENYTHING.

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D2

4/30/2015 07:28:01 am

I like how you said like a stampede because that really helped me picture how the rain flooded the yard and how the clouds rumbled in the sky. Also, I like how you said the sun mops up all the rain. I wish that you would of named your poem or even said quick instead of fast in your simile.

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d13

4/30/2015 12:42:38 pm

It really paints a picture for me. You could maybe write some specific names. For an example, "The antelope's hide.

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D-4

4/29/2015 07:46:00 am

Trees blow in the wind
Trees scared cause they here howling
Howling like a wolf

The owls are nesting
They here creaking in the branch
Ka-boom goes the branch

finish tomarrow

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D-1

4/30/2015 03:41:42 am

I like it!!!!!!!

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D-7

4/30/2015 07:04:10 am

ok thanks for telling us...

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D12

4/29/2015 07:56:35 am

The wind blows swiftly
Through the woods the animals
Cutting the grass like
A columbine cutting wheat the wind flow grew stronger
The animals ran like lightning striking
The trees hit each other as the wind not finished

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D-5

4/30/2015 07:18:42 am

why is the animals run like lighting strike

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ANIMALS

4/30/2015 03:38:52 am

some are beautiful
some are not so beautiful
there all different

some are really nice
some think your very tasty
you taste like cake HA

some of them have black strips
some are close to extingtion
some of them we kill

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A-1

4/30/2015 03:51:28 am

ANIMALS is mine mrs.weimer

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D3

4/30/2015 07:23:36 am

It is very interesting. But I think you should put your name

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fazbaer fright

4/30/2015 07:53:46 am

I liked how you told that the different animals

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D-4

5/1/2015 03:44:48 am

I like your simile A sugjestion would be not so violent.

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a-13

4/30/2015 03:39:38 am

in the darkest night

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A9

4/30/2015 03:46:06 am

Winter
In the cold beware
The frozen heart of the cold
Winter crystals form

As it starts to form
Its beauty will try to hide it
go to safety now

The cold does not stop
at any cost it will, go after you
with strength of a 100 men .

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A-12

4/30/2015 03:49:58 am

I howl in the night
A million times I hunt
racing rapidly

Mother Nature sleeps
like a big lazy lion
when the night passes

The morning bell rings
we learn for seven hours
Though we're all tired

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D-15

4/30/2015 07:21:44 am

I like that you said I howl at night

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A-1

4/30/2015 03:50:09 am

the theme is the carnival. one literacy thing you used is the first line. One thing I used is on the second stanza the third line.

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D-14

4/30/2015 07:08:01 am

the sky is grayish
now the sky is filled with clouds
now it is a sky

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D12

4/30/2015 07:08:08 am

The wind blows swiftly
Through the woods the animals
Cutting the grass like

A columbine cutting wheat the wind flow grew stronger
The animals ran

like lightning striking
The trees hit each other as
The wind tried to pull

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D-9

4/30/2015 07:25:23 am

Something you can work on is using the 5,7,5 rule. Something you did good on is your choice of vocabulary.

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D-17

4/30/2015 07:31:28 am

I like the lightning striking was exciting. I think you could finish your sentence in your paragraph.

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D-21

4/30/2015 07:09:34 am

Mrs weimer I really like your hiku I think your hiku is ABOUT 4 OF JULY AT A CARNEVAL

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D-17

4/30/2015 07:11:22 am

The cloudy sky flew
over the land of the free
looking at the trees

The fog flew threw
the sky flying like a fly
trying to fly high

The wind flew in the air
going around and around
soaring over the ground

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D16

4/30/2015 07:19:36 am

I like how you put rhyme in it
maybe put more of other figurative language

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D12

4/30/2015 07:25:46 am

I liked that you stayed on topic about the sky. Maybe next time you could use more detail

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D-4

5/1/2015 03:49:07 am

I liked that you were disrupted Some of it didn't make sence.

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D2

4/30/2015 07:11:33 am

Mrs. Weimer, I think the theme of your poem is to tell us that we should enjoy life or make the best of it. That is because bumper cars blare by tells us some things we should enjoy.

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D-7

4/30/2015 07:12:15 am

The mountain was boss
the mountain glissand In the sun
I thought its was nice.

The stampeed was mad
all the people went crazy
they broke everything!!!

The forest was loud
all the animals yeld loud.

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D-19

4/30/2015 07:13:30 am

He was so hungry
he thought he could eat a horse
tried with all his might

I thought your theme was a carnival. I think your figurative language is alliteration. I think mine is hyperbole.

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D18

4/30/2015 07:13:38 am

The river rushes
the river was black as coal
the fish splashed around

The creek was cold as ice
the bear feed on his fresh kill
yum yum all full now.

running all day long
the cugar was warm as toast
now its time to rest.

The theme is a fair with bumper cars. Some figurative language is bumper cars blare by. Figurative language in mine is the river is as black as coal.

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D-17

4/30/2015 07:27:50 am

I like how ecxicting it is. I think you could maybe stay with the one main idea.

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D-9

4/30/2015 07:13:38 am

Mrs.Weimer, I think the theme of your haiku is the carnival. I think you used alliteration in your poem.

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D12

4/30/2015 07:15:07 am

Mrs. Weimer I think your theme is at a carnival in a bumper car booth. The figurative language you used is alliteration

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D-5

4/30/2015 07:15:13 am

The rain poured coolly after the wind roared crazy when the road runner fell pretty flowers grew out of nowhere.

Pretty birds flew around the sky '' boom'' the birds flew crazy in the

sky, flowers died ,the sky turned black ,
everything is ruined

I thought that your theme was alliteration and to just have fun and don't get so stressed.

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D-6

4/30/2015 08:16:46 am

You need to work on the 5,7,5 rule. I liked how you talked about nature.