this really picks up with the "i apologize" parallels. I am not convinced by the ending - it seems obvious and somehow i just find the idea of the high school boy being awkward in this piece. but the...

some of these images feel forced or incongruent with the rest. the cannabalism image especially. and the mail part. that really made me stumble. overall i think this is OK, i guess i'd like something...

nice imagery but unsure of the ending and how it all comes together. 'pink smirnoff' seems out of place and a bit too un-ambiguous compared to the rest; although the images are concrete they seem to...

also, "but sadly not skirts" seems out of character with the rest of the tone of the piece. perhaps that's because of the verbose direction you've currently taken. i understand what you're going for,...

not sure what i think here. part of me likes the concept of the poem, but the voice gets too casual at times. the first two stanzas are the strongest, they flow well and the images are fresh; by the...

i find myself in a light spring drizzle
in this dark crevice of the city where
the garbage goes. i stand in the rain
for a moment. the city sort of exhales
around me and i become caught in
its rusted...

I find this rather heavy-handed with the large words. It's like some modern academic works that are dripping with theoretical language but behind it, there's not much. This is not to say that i don't...

besides "baba purge would be proud" the focus and intensity of the piece is consistent. I feel like this is the culmination of all you've been writing lately, even though the treatment is more direct...