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Closed as vague and unanswerable. If you intend for this to be a critique question, please see out critique guidelines. Edit this into a proper critique question and we'd consider reopening. If you want to ask about the meaning of the word "sparkle", then this shouldn't have been migrated here. Could you please clarify?
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Neil Fein♦Feb 22 '12 at 16:34

Consider the following: What are you trying to achieve? What effect do you want the word use to have? Can you provide more context?
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Neil Fein♦Feb 22 '12 at 17:33

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Below is a link to a similar question. I don't agree that this question is vague or unanswerable. It's a simple yes or no type question with a request for other options. I don't think it is so much about a critiques as it is about proper word usage. writers.stackexchange.com/q/2280/2343
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Steven DrennonFeb 22 '12 at 20:12

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@StevenDrennon: You can vote to reopen the question.
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John SmithersFeb 23 '12 at 11:57

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I don't understand this central line of your edit: "I want to transform the unpleasant and stressful thoughts that become in mind of the reader." You want to change the unpleasant thoughts? Into what? Or do you mean you want to portray the unpleasant thoughts? I do not understand if you are deliberately using this word in an unusual, nonintuitive way (for a dissonant effect), or if you want to use the word "simply" and with "normal connotation."
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Standback♦Feb 24 '12 at 6:33

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Sparkling is a bit odd in this context. Sparkling means a light (or many small lights) flashing quickly. It has a connotation of being decorative, or pretty, or expensive (like diamonds, for example). If what you mean to say is that these various ideas were occuring quickly and then being replaced by the next idea, then "flashing through" might be a more appropriate choice than "sparkling in".

I agree that "sparkle" is odd, but "flashing" is a bit of a cliche. Better than sparkle, but maybe not the best...
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Kate SherwoodFeb 22 '12 at 11:36

@KateSherwood - I agree it's cliche. In fairness, when I answered this question it was on English.SE so style was not my concern, but rather clarity of meaning.
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Joel BrownFeb 22 '12 at 12:11

I'm trying to say that all this painful, stressful, disastrous thoughts were becoming into his mind. After each question it fade into new one. I think "flashing through" stil is unable to transform the meaning that I want to say.
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DaneFeb 24 '12 at 0:34

@Mani - If you want to give the sense that the thoughts are negative, sparkle is definitely the wrong word to use because it has a positive connotation. If "flashing" isn't working for you, you might consider "pulsing", "coursing", "racing" or "marching". These don't have the connotation of fading, per se, but they get across the notion that each idea is replacing the one before it.
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Joel BrownFeb 24 '12 at 12:27

Just some ideas - maybe crashing through, whirling, spinning, might work?
Or "all the horrible scenarios played themselves out in my head".
I agree with J.R.'s post - Sparkle usually has a positive connotation and so doesn't sound right when used in the setting you described.