I don't see why you need to add another chapter unless you decided to have Toshiro confess or something. Oh wait, how about he tries but either fails or something happens so he couldn't say anything or at the last minute decides not to confess his feelings? That could work right?

Or Toshiro has a preminition (spelling)about the furure or dream about his 'love'. A really cute dream that has him out of it for a while.

I'm just rambling here but if you have questions or something then drop a pm.

Well, I read both chapter 4 and 5. I love how you kept Toshiro in character. Him realizing that he loved Tsubaki Abarai was so him and so sweet and cute. Then having him envious of Gin was a plus. I can't blame him though because of Gin is but it was a nice touch though.

Thank you for getting this chapter out. And your right this was the perfect way to start off the new year. Another great chapter to another wonderful story it keeps getting better with the more you write and shed light on the characters. Happy New Years and I hope you continue to write.

Sorry for spacing out here! I don't recall you updating or me getting the update. I'm very sorry about that!

Awesome as always! I love how you protrayed Toshiro so well. I love Toshiro very much and loved how he stayed in character.

The tiny bits of information about your own character makes her more whole for each time you add something. You are makeing her more round and it's rare to see people write ocs like that. Congrates for not making her not a Mary Sue.

The connection between her and Toshiro is coming together greatly and it doesn't seemed rushed or anything of the sort.

I love how you take the time to make your story flow and to have no flaws, at least not in my eyes. It feels like I reading a book by a famous author. It's great and keep up the good work.

Its good to see that your continuing to write this so I guess you got over your writers block. It was a good idea to keep it in Toshiro's POV that and just the way your writing the story make it all the more interesting. Well I hope that you continue writing and that you get the next chapter out soon.

It's pretty insightful. It show's a bit about the past and everything. Pretty good. The only problem I seen is that you have two sayings in one paragraph when it's a common rule to paragraph each saying that each characters says.

Story in itself is really nice and well writen but the fact that the whole text seemed to be all scrounched up made me lose my place a couple of times while I was reading it. Personaly, I think it should be spaced out like your conversation with Ikakku.

Other wise, it's pretty nice. I like it. I have a rough time figuring out who the first person was but his (I assume it's a guy so correct me if I'm wrong.) point of view was but I think it's Toshiro and it's really well writen. I see so few stories that are so well writen. It's sad.

Who's Tsubaki? Maybe you should do a back story/flashback in the next chapter because I have a strange feeling that she's a oc. And I'm kinda confused.