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I don't really have any incentive to die, but
I don't have a reason to try to live, either
I'm sure that won't change even from now on
In that case, if we're living this moment,
What should we cling to?

Our naked hearts are called words
Exposed to the driving rain
My breath and my pulse have become faint
Please, softly, warm them up
Warm them up with both of your hands

[1] I know verb + 事 is usually nominalizing the verb and if it were "the things that were wished for" etc. it would probably be 物 or something instead, but translating these lines as "having been wished for and having been chosen" doesn't quite... make sense to me? So I went with an interpretation that seemed slightly more logical meaning-wise if less so grammatically, but if I'm missing something here, please do explain it to me.

[2] 酸鼻を極め explanation: https://kotobank.jp/word/%E9%85%B8%E...3%82%8B-278368. I am deeply unsure about the grammar of these last two lines. Is 残された未来の腐臭 the subject? It doesn't seem quite right, but then who/what is, and what is 残された未来の腐臭's relation to the rest of the phrase?

[3] Okay to take this out of passive voice, do you think? I appreciate the purpose that the passive construction is serving in this & the previous similar stanza, but I think it sounds much weirder in English.

[4] Not entirely sure my understanding of the grammar here is correct, especially when it comes to "その教科書だとか図鑑とやらは".

Re: Kagamine Rin & Len - Sennou

有り触れた未来 I would agree with damesukekun, "ordinary future". "Trite" refers to something that's repeated so often that it has lost it's freshness and effectiveness, which I would not think is applicable to "future".

[1] I think it refers to what is wished from the narrator, and either that the narrator has been chosen for something or what is being chosen for them. I'm think 事 can refer to both the act of doing something as well as to an intangible thing, so, either the fact of being chosen, or the act/role/etc. one has been chosen for.

命は張り裂けた damesukekun has "my life is torn apart" which sounds like more natural english to me.

[2] 残された 未来の腐臭も could mean either "the stench of what's left of the future", or "the stench that's left by the future". The space before mirai might suggest to me that nokosareta refers to the stench rather than to the future, but obviously pick what makes best sense to you.

明日ごと燃やした It makes sense to me if this is referring to what happens to the smell: "The stench that's left by the future is horrific and is burned up along with tomorrow itself." damesukekun seems to have a similar translation.

[3] I would take 信じられなくて as potential rather than passive: "I still can't believe that I would be forgiven". If it were passive, then probably it would mean something like "They still don't believe me that I/we/they would be forgiven".

[4] Not really sure myself either, but EDICT has for やら: "such things as A and B; A and B and the like". damesukekun translates, "How can such things as textbooks and picture dictionaries / Explain the hole / In my heart?" which seems to fit the Japanese.

Re: Kagamine Rin & Len - Sennou

Sorry it took me so long to get back to you! I saw you had replied and was like "oh, cool, I'll have to get to that later," and then I got distracted and a week+ went by. But I do appreciate the feedback nonetheless!

Originally Posted by Raichu

有り触れた未来 I would agree with damesukekun, "ordinary future". "Trite" refers to something that's repeated so often that it has lost it's freshness and effectiveness, which I would not think is applicable to "future".

Yeah, fair enough.

Originally Posted by Raichu

[1] I think it refers to what is wished from the narrator, and either that the narrator has been chosen for something or what is being chosen for them. I'm think 事 can refer to both the act of doing something as well as to an intangible thing, so, either the fact of being chosen, or the act/role/etc. one has been chosen for.

Makes sense, thanks.

Originally Posted by Raichu

命は張り裂けた damesukekun has "my life is torn apart" which sounds like more natural english to me.

I didn't like the wording of that line but couldn't think how else to phrase it, so of course there was a common English phrase that could've been used that I just completely forgot about for some reason. Good job, me!

Originally Posted by Raichu

[2] 残された 未来の腐臭も could mean either "the stench of what's left of the future", or "the stench that's left by the future". The space before mirai might suggest to me that nokosareta refers to the stench rather than to the future, but obviously pick what makes best sense to you.

I always have such a hard time with adjectives (or verbs operating adjectivally) that could be modifying an entire noun phrase or just one noun in it, but I think you're right about the space implying that 残された isn't modifying 未来 itself here.

Originally Posted by Raichu

明日ごと燃やした It makes sense to me if this is referring to what happens to the smell: "The stench that's left by the future is horrific and is burned up along with tomorrow itself." damesukekun seems to have a similar translation.

Ahh, yes, that would make sense.

Originally Posted by Raichu

[3] I would take 信じられなくて as potential rather than passive: "I still can't believe that I would be forgiven". If it were passive, then probably it would mean something like "They still don't believe me that I/we/they would be forgiven".

So I was on the right track for the wrong reasons, I guess. :P

Originally Posted by Raichu

[4] Not really sure myself either, but EDICT has for やら: "such things as A and B; A and B and the like". damesukekun translates, "How can such things as textbooks and picture dictionaries / Explain the hole / In my heart?" which seems to fit the Japanese.