Alright first off: I love you. You can spell, you know what punctuation and grammar are, you can follow your own plotline and you are capable of keeping the characters IN CHARACTER. Congratulations - you have become one of the few reasons why I'm willing to check out the Pit every once in a while. :)

Second: I love your story! It's a nice peek into what might be going on inside of Vinnie's head if he isn't busy blowing up stuff or beating up goons and takes a moment to reflect his relationship with Charley and what he hopes and or wishes to get from it. I like how you have him thoughtful and contemplative at the start, moving on to awkward and then to pretending like everything's okay (although both know it isn't). I do hope to read more from you, particularly in this fandom because it honestly needs the support. :)