wow great chapter, it shows the jealousy joseph has over kels and bry's relationship. he knows he will never reach up to that. i love the way bry and kel communicate, half of it is through normal contact and the rest seems to be telepath. i guess you get like dat after you have knwn some1 for a long. i loved this chapter as it shows wat can happen in real life. good job. my fav character is kelsey.

hm. i really like the idea of the story and the way that you tell it out of order, but i think you can do more showing instead of telling.

for example: "his heart broke at seeing her in such pain." instead of telling us point blank that his heart broke to see her in pain, show us. use more description to tell us how your characters are feeling.

I dont think brys dork just a wimp like every guy is onc in his life but helo tell her already i know he doesnt but still its woths a shot i dont like joseph much dont know what but something about him just doesnt fit

great story so far, i wonder if kelsey wil get married to joseph. lol. bless bryan, he will blossom soon. pple will see, i think he is handsome but noone can see that cz of the way he dresses and the hair aspect. i wonder how he would look like after a cnt wait for the nxt chapter.