This is brilliant, its so sweet and so sad. I really did love it. I am in awe at how you are able to tell what seems like a whole story in so few words. You feel like you know all the charecters so well and can empathise with each one, something most proffesinal writers manage to do by about half way through a novel.

Very good! All i can recomend is to make it flow a little bit more, and try and make it a little bit less confusing, and try to make it sound like she is from the 18th century a little bit more, but great start off, and can't wait to read more, good job!

the first chapter almost brought me to tears...It kind of has that memoir feeling when the Character reflects back upon they're life through the years. Its really amazing and although its short I'm really interested and captivated by every single word on this page. I really can't wait to see what happens next for Mary