Yeah, Type Moon could use a good editor. They don't use one word when they can use twelve, and then add dashes and ellipses, and then repeat it all four times over.

"This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair!"

Or forty-four times over, as the case may be. Don't get me wrong, I love F/SN and Tsukihime, but the writing desperately needed some cuts.

Also, wooo! Shizune's done! Yes!

Fans destroy things by loving them too much. This is one of the fundamental laws of the universe.

Yeah, Type Moon could use a good editor. They don't use one word when they can use twelve, and then add dashes and ellipses, and then repeat it all four times over.

"This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair. This chair!"

Or forty-four times over, as the case may be. Don't get me wrong, I love F/SN and Tsukihime, but the writing desperately needed some cuts.

Also, wooo! Shizune's done! Yes!

Completely agree. I love reading and wordiness usually doesn't even scare me (Lord of the Rings, El Quijote, ...) but in a F/SN a breakfast could take half an hour reading... I still recommend it but wow if they could have used editing.

Shizune=Akira > Lilly > Emi > Hanako > Rin (but all of them have a place in my heart and some other more interesting locations XP).