Aw, this story is awesome so far! I love McKiah, she's amazing, and her interaction with Alex is really sweet. For a second, I thought Alex had switched bodies with Eliza Thornberry! Annie's nervous about meeting Mcaih? Who knew...haha! Uh-oh, Vincent Carter returns...Alexandra Louise Mack, beware!

Two things. One, remember what I said about grouping sentences into paragraphs? Work on that. You pretty much kill the immersion by breaking every single action into a sentence.

Second, if this is after the series finale, then Vince should already know that Alex was the kid. There's no logical way he wouldn't find out after the mayhem surrounding Alex and Atron, not after all the trouble he went through for them both.