I LOVE YOUR STORY, it's really good, I'm really enjoying it but one small note, you said that noone has blue eyes in the weasley family but jk rowling has stated on her site that Ron has blue eyes so I suppose his dad did too, I think the weasley's are split up between blue and brown eyes.

This is my second time reading this awesome story. I'm looking forward to seeing you help Harry overcome his demons more fully in the end. I love the concept. Harry's been a warrior all his life, now he gets to live, but doesn't know how. I'm sure there are many real life veterans who would relate.

I'll try to comment on most of the chapters. I jumped in and got through several last night, but I want to commend you on the things I've particularly enjoyed. So you'll be hearing from me a lot in the the coming days. I would have commented my first time through, but I just recently registered after reading here for a couple of months. I'm catching up!

Interesting . . . a bit of darkness in Harry , guess we can't blame after all he's been through. Not good to carry such a grudge though. Good thing Ron was there to help him out .
Now can he finally get on with Ginny

One slight editing nitpick:
Harry cried, and had the satisfaction of two wants fly through the air at him. He muttered an anti-Summoning charm on them and stuffed them into his pocket. Malfoy decided to make a break for it, standing up to run.

I think wands was the word you were looking for?

I'm excited to read this, just read all of Defining Moments. Enjoyable, good story, all around.

Not a bad opening...The only thing I can think to say is that two aurors should have a bigger repetoire of spells to use then just expelliarmus and stupefy...Your magical battle should have been a bit more complex.

GovCampbellFriday 3rd March 2006 20:02

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I suppose you're right. At the time, I guess I should have done more research on the Lexicon.

Ok-I'm ready for a new Harry adventure. The Ron/Harry
interactions were great, they really are the best buddies around.
And finally Malfoy got to pay. I'm not sorry he died, nor am I
sorry he got a little payback before he went. I'm happy Ron
managed to stop Harry, though.

Now what??? Next chapter, that's what!

GovCampbellWednesday 10th August 2005 18:14

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Thanks! I can see you're enjoying the story! I appreciate that you've dropped in for a look. Hope you enjoy the rest!

Good job with this chapter. I havent read Defining Moments, but i think i will like this one even without. Hope you post soon. Keep some of Harry's feirceness in him. I find that most authors put in the action at the beginning and then from there it is all obsession and fluffy. Anyway, please update soon. once again, Good Job!

GovCampbellTuesday 14th June 2005 10:18

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Glad you enjoyed it! Harry's still got some fire left in him, don't worry. Lots of ground to cover!

FANTASTIC chapter. Beautifully written, as always. When Harry was attacking Lucius, I was just thinking "Harry ... what are you doing? Are you a death eater?" I was worrying that he was going to turn into evilkiller!Harry. And then Ron stepped in, and Harry came to his senses, and I was so relieved. Thank you!

My favourite bit was Ginny walking Harry up to Percy's room. Nothing happened, and barely anything was said, but... it was moving.

I have no complaints! I think this is a first. Oh, actually there was something:

God, Hermione…please answer Ron…

When I read this, I thought it meant

Hermione… will you please answer Ron…

rather than

what about Hermione ? …please answer , Ron…

It took me a few reads to understand it correctly, and at first it made me think of Ron phoning Hermione and her not picking up! (if you see what I mean)

But apart from that, there was nothing! And you raised a question that I often wonder about - would Harry be as motivated to be an auror if it weren't for Voldemort and the death eaters? " now what? " Oh Harry, the answer just walked out of your bedroom.

GovCampbellTuesday 14th June 2005 10:16

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Thanks for the review! It's always gratifying to know someone reads a story that closely! I hope you enjoy the coming chapters just as much!

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