hey read this story for like 3rd time now. I know ur rewriting but please write more chapters...would love more deatheater scenes maybe kidnap holly?(cliché I know but I think it needs a cliché...) another dance/kiss/snuggle scene is A MUST
keep onwritingQ!
SOON
xx

Author's Response: Thanks! I've been busier than ever this past year and feel like I'm neglecting a child when I do not update. Not to mention the readers.
I have many things planned but wanted to make sure I fixed my errors from before.
Yes, more deatheater scenes are coming, hard to avoid them when theres a war going on! ;)

Just wanted to let you know that this is an amazing story and I can't wait for the next chapter! I've read your whole story in just a few hours, that's how brilliant it is. I love how you write Remus, and Holly is a great character. Keep up the good work!

- PB

Author's Response: Thank you!
I realize that I'm responding to chapters worth of your reviews all at once, and I'm so thankful that you are enjoying and reviewing! It keeps me going! (even when I take a few months off because I'm working too many hours)

Oooh this was such a brilliant chapter! I love how you take time to build up the relations between your characters, it makes everything a lot more realistic. And now things are starting to get moving, I can't wait to read what happens next! Also, I think that your writing improved a lot over the chapters, so great work!

- PB

Author's Response: Thanks, PB!
I'm fixing a few errors and adding the missing details that I forgot to get out of my head and onto the page. It will not change the story though, so a reread is not necessary, but my goodness I've taken so many months to update that I had to reread!

Wow. Can I just say, you've got me totally hooked on sexy lumberjack Remus. I mean, how come no one has ever thought of that before? You're a genius! It really fits with his personality too. Seriously, your writing is amazing! On to the next chapter!

- PB

Author's Response: Haha, thank you. I imagine that Remus' parents' worried that he would need a trade in lieu of a typical job, so what better than some carpentry?

so has james "proporly" proposed? Will Remus take Holly to a town dance and one of her old friends from school? I think that she and Remus should leave in a hurry becuase they dont want to draw attention, though they were the eyes of the dance floor. remus should have to "obliviate" the memory of the old school friend of hollys and then something else interesting happens. And why did you take so long to update? This is one of my favorites! Please do not make me wait as long for the next update:) I checked every week hoping for a new chapter. But yeah, good, and I like that Holly's wolf form is more natural than Remus'. Why is that? I like what you are doing, keep it up!

Author's Response: The proposal? Nope (wait just a little, please!)
The reason it took me so long to update was because I kept writing and then deleting, I had done about 5 different plot lines. It included everything from Holly going home, getting a job, joining them on stakeouts but it just didn't work and I didn't want to just do a several months later bit. I like your idea, I had toyed with that before so maybe I'll bring that back and work it in.
Are you referring to when James said Holly was a 'natural born huntress'? James was having a go at Remus and messing with Holly a bit as wel. Don't take that as she's a 'better' werewolf. ((yet.)) ;)
I have about half of ch 21 edited and ready to go...
Thanks for reading!!

Screaming in frustration and happiness -- frustration because the chapter ended, happiness for how it ended. Ugh Lily is being bitchy but also not being bitchy and just being herself which is good. And just Remus and Holly are so great together and it's frustrating that Remus has to leave so much for the Order and that everyone is such a (excuse my lack of a better term) cockblock for Remus and Holly. Was so happy to see this update!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! Glad that you are enjoying it.
And its tough when everyone drops in on Holly constantly- but they almost view her as a pet to take care of and check in on. Remus is going to have to get better locks on his door if they want to move further in their relationship, huh?

I know that in all the legends its sort of a given, you get bitten by one, you are one, stands to reason.

But she's just been told magic is real (still no real reaction other than; I see it, so it must be), and that she's been bitten by a werewolf (and I'm still lacking in some reaction over the other three turning into animals as well)

So why would she just jump to the conclusion that everything she knew as a story would also be true, it stands to reason that if magic turns out to be real, surely you ought to question everything else you've been holding as folk-loric-legend/true.

I mean, from what I see and how she internalises everything I like Holly a lot, but there's not really a lot to like. I need character development; so far all I've got is a shockingly clear head, no shockingly incapacitating amounts of pain after a werewolf attack and a tendency to flare up at the slightest antagonism. The last I'll accept could just be a reaction to the current situation she's in, but compared to her lack of reaction at most of the other, slightly more pressing situations, I'm not really sure.

Still, I'm not quitting on it, this has a lot of potential.

8/10

Bryarly :)

Author's Response: Holly saw the animal, got bit by the animal, found out it was a werewolf along with the existence of magic. It was quite the load to be dumped upon her, but it fits with the legends and such.
She never did see the other three turning to their animagus forms so that question never occurred.
Holly's questions are mostly answered as she works her way through Remus' bookshelves.
You seem a great philosopher Bryarly. I like the thought of more skepticism on Holly's behalf.
Thanks!!

Your grammar and spelling are near on perfect, and your vocabulary is really quite impressive, which I like.

I don't think I'd've reacted in quite the same way though, I mean, surely it would be a lot more painful, and I'm fairly sure numbing charms and healing spells wouldn't take all the pain away, and if they did, really I don't think she'd be quite lucid enough to hold that sort of conversation and not go absolutely mental.

Also, she took it so calmly, I mean, I'm a very logical thinker, so I'd take a lot more convincing, but Holly doesn't strike me as a stupid person, or particularly easy to placate about anything, but to just accept it?

I mean, you'd've thought about strings and pullies, or alternative methods of everything, because evidently its that or just disappear. And anyway, what about her family? She'll disappear and obviously be fine, but what about when they start looking...?

I just need to quit ranting really.

Overall I think I'm going to like this a whole lot, it's just that when I like something this much I really want it to be perfect, so my criticisms are meant to be really constructive, and not quite as nit-picky as they seem.

9/10

Bryarly :)

Author's Response: Good point about her accepting so easily. You'll see that Holly was in a total rut at home and going nowhere. Her imagination is just wild enough that this would be probable.
I'm getting to family soon!
Keep up the criticisms! It makes me realize plot holes or things I need to elaborate upon.
Thank you!

I don't think I feel particularly. I mean, that wasn't supposed to be a whole sentence but I don't know what to think.

Its fairly obvious who the dog, wolf, stag and rat are, that's fine, and I like the assessment by your main character, the first person point of view is generally my favourite; I visualise better when there's that, and I can identify with that sort of ineternal monologue, so that's great.

And then the wolf bit her.

Now. I get that to have my questions answered, I need to read more, so I'm gonna go do that.

Still... I mean, it's a prologue, it grabbed my attention... That's what they're for I suppose.

I love this story! I'm hooked and Holly's character is a breath of fresh air (sometimes i find the lead girl characters in these stories a bit whiny) Really hope you update soon. Love Bear

Author's Response: Thanks!
I try not to let her get whiny, sometimes I'm afraid she is ... but given the situation, I'll let her complain every so often.
I'll try to update soon, having major computer issues now which is driving me bonkers!

Ah - just binged on the last twelve chapters of your story. I love the idea of Holly being a Muggle. It makes it much more interesting. All the tension and what-not. The characterisations are very realistic, and I hope there will be many many many more chapters posted! You should be very proud. :)

you must write more! please, please, please!
It's so good! the failed kiss scene was funny, just so you know. I don't like cliff-hangers so please write more!

Author's Response: I will! Promise, promise, promise!
Glad you found it funny! I think this is something that has happened to many of us... but you can either laugh about it, take offense to it, or be mortified by it... right?