I like this one too.
I don't think I've ever had that sort of feeling, though. I believe my brain has some sort of weird chronic disease where it oozes this brownish grey junk. Kinda hard to think through.
Oh, wait, that is my brain.
Well, school can do that to you.
Write more poems. I'm not sure that I would use the same phrasing as you, but they're really good.