I think you're making some great progress on this. Don't worry about the lack of replies. People usually look and leave untill they get more familiar with your art.

Here's my 2 cents. I like the idea and the character, but I feel that first of all the composition needs a little work. With him centered in the piece it doesn't flow like it should. Look at some of the CGTalk award pics in the gallery and notice that most images are always off centered with the main character. It should draw your eye to him rather than having him perfectly centered.

Maybe you can extend the canvas to the right or left and add some more elements to the scene. Also, it seems a bit off that he's just standing there by himself. Maybe you can add another character that is reacting to him in some way. Create a story you know?

Do you plan on adding color to it? I hope so. I'd definitely think this piece has potential. Keep working it out and get gritty with the details. Cracks in the rocks, imperfections in his skin. But first check that composition! I'll be checking in to see how it comes out. :thumbsup:

Stalk-Von-Dark

08-21-2005, 01:13 AM

Thanks vikkie for the comments..I agree the hand looks a little too long and flat..I'll fix that before I'm done.

Thanks GrantMan..The lack of replys is very bothersome..Its hard to make improvments and changes when youre not finding out what should be fixed until youre almost done with the piece..I mean I could understand if it wasnt even being looked at but when you have 50 to 100 views and no replys thats bothersome..as for the composition my intention was to focus only on the character..guess I shouldnt have done so much work on the environment..but now I agree there should be some change to the composition..and I do intend to color this piece.

Thanks for the help and comments..:D

Stalk-Von-Dark

08-22-2005, 07:25 PM

Update:
Blended in the outline around Pan and added some more texture to the rocks..
Fixed the left hand some as well..
Still thinking about adding more to the composition..

http://mysite.verizon.net/stalk_von_dark/pan-Shaded-04.png

All C&C welcomed..

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