Comments on 'Storm Wrack'

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Nifty story! You seem to have a misplaced pronoun, though:
"When roi classmates found out she was to test and presumably graduate early, they started to harass ru in the library and even at roi home."
Also, I found the italicized pronouns kind of distracting. I'm definitely looking forward to reading more things set in this world, though!