only 2 flaws in here
1. Colette would surely be dead already if Genis is breathing Carbon MONOxide into her lungs.
2. The background setting for the chosen is not allowed to perform lust before sacrificing to Martel, Unless assuming there was no such law, Colette already offered her kiss to llyold and CPR-ed XD
Btw The story is great!

correction chapter 2 . 10/5/2010

When Genis is explaining how CPR works, you say "carbon monoxide" instead of "carbon dioxide."

I loved Lloyd, you know I love him the most, second only to father dearest of course lol, and I love how you write him. You make him so adorable and clueless but still heroic with that essence of...well Lloyd. Yeah...I have no idea what I just said lol, but I do really love how you write Lloyd.

And Colette getting them all in trouble with her innocent navieness -let's just pretend that's a word, okay?- so funny and adorable and something Colette would totally do.

I also love the mental image of Raine forcefully dragging Lloyd back to the village by the scruff of his neck. Very L.O.L.

I really like this story so far, it's nice to see a fic set before a game. You've written the characters very well, in-character, and have made it easy to imagine the events happening to them. I look forward to reading more should you add another chapter. :)

That would be the swimsuits side-quest, where Colette said that Genis and Lloyd would go out of Iselia and play in the river in Iselia Forest, or something like that ; I'm glad to find a fic like this becaus it seems like everyone hates Colette D: who I find awesome, mostly because I'm a kutz like her and she always tries to help people at her own risk. It a very nice to see a good Colloyd fic :D Bravo et merci beaucoup!

Uhm...anyway, after I got over my surprise at finding this, I actually clicked on the title and decided to read it. Why? I have no idea. The summary is a little odd, but it was a ToS fic by a writer who normally writes Pokemon (and is good at it), so my immediate thought was "LYKE NO WAI!" and I started reading.

Silvie-chan? This wouldn't happen to be the same Silvie that I used to know from the ToS section, would it? The authoress of "We Will Become Silhouettes"? I swear it's a conspiracy. I used to talk with Angel White, who wrote a great ToS fic that never got finished. I got to know a few other ToS writers through LiveJournal (and Angel White). And then a writer that I didn't even know had ever even heard of ToS is writing for it, and knows some of these people too!

Crap. I mean, WOW. How weird.

Anyway, this was really cute, especially the part about the wooden sword-wielding Lloyd who wants to protect little Colette. How adorable is that?

I'm interested in seeing where this is headed, though I'm MORE interested in "The Strangest Kind of Love". Grats on posting your first Colloyd/ToS fic, by the way!