Thanks for the comments. Glad it gave you a chuckle, sybarite. :D — unknown

i wish this had a little rhythm to it. it's almost poetic, with it's tone of voice and interesting words. you could embroider this on linen and frame it on the wall, it's so beautiful. i like the compression in this, the force wording in several places. and, sometimes, there's a happy glowing spot which surprises me in its blitheness. it's not often that a varied vocabulary shows up here, unless it's some hack working the dictionary, so i think this one is just peachy.

no matter what you think or don't think about what's talked about in this, the line-length is natural and that makes the words sit in their place and talk to the reader. there could, once again, be more edge to this -- more reflection of expression, rather than contemplation in ironic detachment, but it may be that the author hadn't reached more than a point in his life where he could stop and look at the people who bother him, and at least point out their clothing for us. later, he'll maybe write about how they walk, and, much later, how he's one of them. — bmikebauer

What a shitty poem. Just kidding! Very well constructed, yet unpretentious and fun. I love this one! — unknown

pure genius! i feel 100 times smarter now that i have experienced the wisdom oozing out of this fine piece of poetic gold. — unknown

You're so full of shit! LOL! (Just kidding. It seemed fitting here!) I like your poem. It's cute and I can relate. LOL @ "buttnuggets!" :-) — starr

this would kiss ass if it didn't rhyme. i mean, really, this would soar along my starfish if the lines ended with the good words like diarrhea (prettiest girl name ever) and dingleberries. 'they just sort of dandle there like dingleberries' what a great ending.

@starr: Glad you enjoyed it! And I can't argue with you, I am full of crap! ;)

@s_riose: Not sure how this could be construed as romantic in any sense of the word, but thanks! lol

@jenakajoffer: I know a lot of people hate poetry that rhymes. The next poem I post will refrain from rhyme, I promise! Hopefully then it will kick rather than kiss ass. But if it kisses ass, I hope the ass is clean and free of dingleberries. :) — mtharp

Ha ha! Thanks, Mandolyn. I think I was feeling a bit crappy the day I wrote this poem! :D — mtharp

i really love rhyming poems, don't get me wrong, but felt this would be a nice free-flow poem if it didn't suffer from the barriers (derrières) of rhyme in this particular instance. it's still fun though. :) — jenakajoffer

Gotcha, Jena! Maybe you're right.... the more I think about it, the more I think the 4th line would be better if it simply ended with diarrhea and the 13th with dingleberries. Perhaps I'll rework this one at some point. Thanks! — mtharp

No worries, Callisto. I have a fairly thick skin... and I don't take myself (or my poetry) too seriously. I'm definitely not a poet. I just toy with poetry as a way to s t r e t c h this narrow, shallow mind of mine. :) — mtharp