are you fucking kidding me. he has to steal. thats the only crime that fits the situation.

the title will be "Touch Down and Lock Down"

11-09-2007, 04:58 PM

God

this was a really good thread

11-09-2007, 05:09 PM

Hicky

why no stealing what the fucking flying fuck

guys im actually writing this. ive had a hiatus but im on page 44 and im filling it up with progression and prisoner specifics. its going well, i intend to write about 300 pages

11-09-2007, 05:10 PM

Nanaki

Have the prisoner story in three perspectives, the prisoner, the officer who just had an emotional slap in the face as his wife died of a terminal illness, and the trial going on trying to convict him.

11-09-2007, 05:18 PM

Hicky

ive already started writing, nanaki, and it isnt in 1st person.

11-09-2007, 05:23 PM

Nanaki

Have it start with an emotional long cheesy prelude told from the prisoner about how life is so bad for him. Then have the next part be about him in prison and starting to formulate a way out. Then have it randomly jump to a court case as a new chapter after some epic cliff hanger. Have the beginning of his court battle start, as he talks about his childhood and how he got into prison. Then go into the perspective of the cop before the trial, and what's going on with him. Go back to him escaping for a bit, and everytime an event inside the prison happens, have the next bit the equivelant of the court case. Finally, the last chapters should be something like... One of them be his epic escape, a long 50+ page just straightforward EPIC chapter. Have the next chapter be the court case ending, and the whole "Yes, sir...?" "Give them hell on that field" "Yes *dramatic pause* dad". The final chapter would be the game, and an epic game it would be, all leading to the death via cancer.

Yes?

11-09-2007, 05:24 PM

Nanaki

Oh, that sucks, you already started, nevermind then.
It wouldn't have to be first person, it could be an omnicient third point of view.

11-09-2007, 05:25 PM

God

what the HELL nanaki. the parole officer will NOT be his father, that idea was squashed ages ago. also hes already in jail, why would he be awaiting trial when he is soon to get paroled, it infers his trial was a good deal before. does no one know how to formulate a plot but me around here.

you better not screw this up hicky

11-09-2007, 05:27 PM

Nanaki

The random jumps aren't happening at the same time. The court parts would be after the escape.

11-09-2007, 05:28 PM

God

THERE IS NO ESCAPE

11-09-2007, 05:32 PM

Hicky

have i ever screwed anything up in my life, god
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i introduce the complicated stories of a negro prisoner and a jew prisoner whos love for his devout father influences the main prisoner which contribute to the overall backbone of the novel

11-09-2007, 06:13 PM

Nocturne

I'm going to write an erotic novel to beat your prison novel hicky

11-09-2007, 07:10 PM

Mex

you will do no such thing

11-09-2007, 07:40 PM

Nocturne

shut up woman

11-09-2007, 07:40 PM

Nidogod

Here's an idea. A pedophile commits suicide over guilt so his brother builds a machine that can alter a person's sexual preferences. But the investors who paid for it just use it to turn gays straight and go around fucking kids.

11-09-2007, 07:45 PM

Mex

Quote:

Originally Posted by Nocturne

shut up woman

you best be thankful I don't strangle you with my labia

11-09-2007, 07:46 PM

Nocturne

oh go clean my house

11-09-2007, 07:48 PM

Mex

I'll clean it with your face

11-09-2007, 07:52 PM

Nocturne

Am I going to have to rape you

11-23-2007, 01:55 PM

God

Fullmetal said I need to archive more threads. perhaps I have been too discriminatory. I will now archive threads that I feel have not gotten their just due due to my overly harsh standards. And this is one of them.