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Sundowner says:Hi. So.. I don't really like writing this sort of reviews, but if it's going to help a fellow writer then I have to force myself.

You need a beta-reader. Go to the forums, and there's a topic where you can put down your request and someone can take you up for it. You need to work on your grammar and your spelling and overall formatting and flow.

Also, you need to work on your charactarisation on canon characters. Harry seems very OOC, and not in a good way. The Harry we all know and love would never purposely ignore his family or be described as 'the most ruthless man'. Just think about it. Maybe revise your chapters, tweak stuff here and there and make them better. It's always good to leave a chapter for a few days after you've written it, so you can do back to it again and make some nice changes.

I don't want you to hate me. I'm not writing this to be mean, but to hopefully help your writing. Anyway, I hope you continue writing and improving.

Bye :)

Author's Response: Hello and thanks for your kind review, I just want you to know I am doing everything step by step and also this is AU only for one reason i.e harry however I have given this story a lot of thought and you will see that later on harry will turn out not to be ruthless as he is now and about the beta reader thing I under going edits so it will be done soon

Also please note just because people like Harry that way does not mean I will change the story because the whole plot will be ruined.