My pets essay

. Technically, this essay was fantastic. I know it was hard for you to adjust to the spontaneity of it, but you did very, very well. There’s a plot thread that moves the reader very smoothly from the beginning to the end, and I enjoyed the way you bracketed the whole story with your in-the-moment thoughts about the assignment. I also loved the tense shift at the top of page two (see note) where you moved from “I would” to “I will.” So elegant! I felt as if I were with you in your mind, watching you go from uncertainty to absolute confidence. From “I’m pretty sure I’m a lesbian” to “I just came out…”