It hasn’t been easy. I searched long and hard, leaving no stone unturned, in my effort to find her. Now, having succeeded, I am bewitched, she is beautiful. Breathless, because she's so near, I long to reach out and touch her but I resist the urge.

So, I watch her, busy with housekeeping duties; she appears to have the lightest touch. Moving gracefully, the yearning to possess her, builds within me; I am held captive by her charms.

I suppose you’d call her ingénue, petite, perhaps even delicate, but she is strong there is no doubting that, she is strong and dangerous; the danger excites me. I consider her body, long slender limbs, dark and exotic contrasting with a rounded comeliness, it makes a perfect combination. She dresses in flashy red. As I draw a little closer, enjoying the details, perspiration beads on my brow; I breathe carefully, her obsidian eyes seem to hold mine.

I begin to tremble with a terrible fascination my wife fails to understand. Yet, if I can, I will take this beauty, then, of course she must die. It saddens me but it must be done, just like all the others I have killed. She will die for the sake of my family, for the sake of my marriage. There is a movement behind me and for a moment I am distracted. When I glance back the object of my affection has disappeared.

I hear my wife’s voice nearby, “well, did you find it?’”
I emerge from the shed.
“I did see something…”
“You let it go didn’t you?”
She begins another lecture and I am burdened with guilty dread. I escape to the hardware store for the spider killing spray; for the sake of my family.

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ROFL! You totally had me! I was thinking, "wow, this is sort of provacative..." HA!
I'm with your wife on this one. I see absolutely nothing beautiful about any spider - except when it's smushed between a tissue. I know it's brutal but...it's a woman thing. (shudder)

I was initially horrified that someone would submit a story like this for a Christian review. That is, until I got to the end. Very clever. And yes, I love that you added the informational paragraph at the end. Great way to bring it all back together.
A side note: My family (husband and five children) and I were forced to surrender our home to an infestation of brown recluse spiders last year. My husband had a similar experience...he captured 26 of them in a coffee can. We endured some hefty financial losses, but have realized that God wanted us to be where we are now. Even the seemingly bad things have a way of turning out right when God puts His hand to it.

Very intriguing. I wondered at first if it was a snake although you probably wouldn't describe a snake as dressed in red (even a red-belly black). Very well done. And the shortness of the piece worked in its favour (any longer and your readers might have started getting upset with your 'fatal obsession' LOL).

"A typical man", I thought to myself. Well, you fooled me - and I'm so glad that you went to the store to purchase the spray! Very well written!
AND such a sneaky way to invite us into your web...by portraying the typical masculine line..."My Wife Doesn't Understand". Nicely done.

I was intrigued by his captivation with "her". It's almost as if the husband is putting himself in an Indiana Jones-like adventure movie, and then his wife breaks the spell.
Typical woman, rather than kill it (and she obviously doesn't like it) she wants her husband to catch and release. I've been the woman in that story, only my biggest dread is mice!
A couple of technical things: use of commas and semi-colons as opposed to breaking a longer sentence into two smaller ones.
Example: "I suppose you’d call her ingénue, petite, perhaps even delicate, but she is strong there is no doubting that, she is strong and dangerous; the danger excites me." I would put a period after "but she is strong"(or maybe even combining the two times you mention she is strong and say "she is strong and dangerous"), make the next phrase "there is no doubting that" a stand alone sentence, then a semi-colon and "the danger excites me".
Just want you to know, I was not offended in the least since I wrote "The Sweet Fragrance of Evil" for another Challenge and that was definitely not for sensitive Christian ears!

I wasn't offended, either - but I was very curious to see where this "Christian" story was going! Even with all the other surprise endings this week, you still managed to keep me hooked right to the end. Great job! I would suggest a few touch-ups on your sentence structure, but other than that, this was a great story!