hello I'm addicted... got a few questions though who the hell is Shikato because if you mean Shikamaru's dad then that would be Shikaku... yes that would almost be the same spelling to the tailed beast that is contained in Gaara Shukaku also it may be that I'm super duper awesomely spectaularly tired (3 hours sleep in the last 2 days does that to you) but this story is not making sense

I kinda like your spear-weilding psycho oc, but this fanfic is way to fast-paced and leaves much to be desired regarding description, however, if this is a first work you could show promise as a writer in the future.

Well I see that you seem to make a habit of just cutting to the chase too quickly. My guess is that you don't have the time to plot and such so I think that it's understandable if you want to rush it and such. I feel you man. I just applied for a job and Won't be writing soon.

It's a good approach. I feel that you can make it a tad longer and get some character development and what not and you're golden dude...or chick...whatever. (I think I was right the first time. the then again.)