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Friday, September 23, 2011

Spider-Island - Longing - Danial Carroll

PANEL ONE, WIDE
Close up on the lower half of a pretty woman’s face. She is talking into a cellphone.

WOMAN: Hey, it’s, umm…
WOMAN: It’s me.
WOMAN: I…
WOMAN: ->sigh<-

PANEL TWO, WIDE
From behind, we see that the woman--a blonde--is sitting on a sofa in a large living room. Over her shoulder, a large-screen TV displays a News Anchor. In the upper corner of the screen is an image of Spider-Man with the label “Spider-Island” clearly visible. In the lower corner of the screen it says "Mute".

WOMAN: Have you heard about Manhattan?
WOMAN: They’re calling it “Spider-Island”.
WOMAN: They could probably use your help.

WOMAN: If you do come up, I’d…

PANEL THREE
Close on a white-gloved hand holding a cellphone. Upon its screen reads “Voicemail” and below that, it says “Speaker: On”.

PHONE/WOMAN: I’d like to see you.

PANEL FOUR
Marc Spector is crouched upon a rooftop. He is wearing his Moon Knight gear, but has the hood pulled back so we can see his face. He is holding a cellphone in his hand. He looks sad, almost teary.

PHONE/WOMAN: I miss you, Marc.

I know if I was writing this for an artist I'd put "Marlene" instead of "Woman", but I'm not, so I didn't. Deal with it :)

7 comments:

Chillingly good page. Great natural dialogue and a really solid final panel. I like how you admitted that your writing style changes based on the audience whether it be us here at Thoughtballoons are for an artist. I think that is something we have all had to think about.