Hi, I'd like to say that I really enjoyed the story. The way you have written it keeps you hooked till the end (and I love your Edmund torturing mind because I love Edmund _).

However, I have a few constructive criticism:

- At some points the story felt a bit rushed. This is more clear on the first chapter. Don't worry about writing too long, you are a good writer, your readers will follow you along the story even if you take your time setting the scenery and developing the situation.

- The ending to the curse made me feel a bit frustrated because, even though I knew Edmund had to do it himself, I did wish that his brothers and sisters could be more involved. Like maybe all of them, not only Peter finding him at the end, or at least Susan and Lucy talking to him about what he almost did. I really liked most of the choices you made with Susan's character, but I did feel that, since she almost lost her brother, she could be a bit more involved.

Having said that, I think this was a real good fic and I wish I could read more Edmund fics from you :)

This was amazing, and I kept trying to think of a way for Edmund to defeat the White Witch, but I couldn't think of anything and... I can totally see this all happening the way it did. I think the characters were mostly in line, and Christopher was a great addition to the story. Great work!