Great start! Good job with the German and evrything. But you made a very minor error, Kurt IS German, so I seriosly think he wouldn't be caut dead useing the word -whatever-. Also Ororo is a really strong woman, not a 13 year-old girl. I don't think she'd be saying "Fine, be that way" like she did. No offence intended, I'm just saying, maby re-wach the X-men movies to get your characters right.

this story is so great! the ending got me a bit disapointed at the lack of love admittance, but otherwise it was great! i just loved the writing style and the characters were perfect. i just didnt like that they left on a best friends note. it was a very cute story and u should definitely write more!

The Lady Shadiait chapter 1 . 12/28/2005

A beautiful and intense story. A wonderful portrail of both characters and their realations to one another. Sweet and charming, dramatic, powerful, yet containing just the right humor in just the right places. In a word, a masterpiece.