This is all very interesting. I was kinda confused with the whole Jeremy thing however. Maybe I'm just not reading it carefully enough. Jeremy is Jareth, and jareth wasn't king until Sarah beleived him to be? That's what I got from the desciption, but like I said, maybe I'm reading it wrong.

The story has peaked my interest. It seems like a new idea and I can't wait to see what you do with it. :)