"The darkness in the west sinks, as must be;Moon bids the waking earth her soft adieu." I loved those lines, and this again, like your other poems really captured, at least in my opinion what you wished to show-each word adds to the picture prefectly.

A complex and subtle piece. While it is beautifully structured and written, I do have a small complaint about this one, being that the end is so... not. I don't know if it was the language or the rhythm, but this one just doesn't seem finished to me and it would be great if you expanded on it a little.

Lady Laiered chapter 1 . 3/27/2005

If a picture can be worth a thousand words, than this poem is worth at least a hundred pictures. Somehow your words convey the colors and sensations better than many pictures I have seen of the same event.

I thought dawn was a cliched and over-used poetry subject. Your poem is anything but cliched or boring, though future poems on this subject by others may now seem to having read this.