Thank you so much for the review! I've been starving for at least one this past week.

I love how, in this piece, your statements are very matter of fact. They avoid being overly descriptive while still giving enough adjectives for the reader to be enticed and enveloped in your words. You've found a very happy medium between being over descript and having an adjective drought.

Also, the anticipation you build by the use of 3, 2, 1, and thier position as individual stanzas builds a lovely anticipation, allowing the reader to be fully punched by the sharpness of your last statement.

The rythm and word choice of said statement: magnificent. I love that you found a combination of words that simply and inherently works togethor, portraying the immense anguish felt, while at the same time being immensely fun (maybe fun isn't the right word...) to say.

Having said that, I think there are a few phrases where you might cinche the words you use to aid in the rythm and clear impact of the words. Though, I haven't heard you read it. And more often than not, when a poet reads thier work, it's wonderful.

i can't believe i haven't seen this earlier, but this is breathtaking in the most bittersweet way. you had me holding my breath until the very end, and those last two lines are so beautifully raw, they cut you in just the right way. goodness. fav!

so many lush images: "you made me melt, shiny black boots and that cherry cigar smoke on your breath" and that "i'd undress you, shiver and moan" gave me chills. plus this ending! good stuff. you do not see it coming, and that's always something to be proud of it. there's a slight typo (wednesday), but that's it, it really doesn't diminish things at all.

I love the cycle of Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday, Thursday, Friday, Saturday and Sunday and then repeating back to Monday like it's never ending, that's my favorite part of the poem. I love Tuesday and the "rose-colored glasses".