You've got some great lines going for you! I have one critique to add to the critique given, and a helpful tip for beginers. One, the bangs are way too uniform. I can understand if they're bowl cut bangs, but even those will have variation in shading if a straight line and more parts than three chunks in equal size. And my tip to you is this: For starters I recommend you use a hair pallet from a dollmaker doll head. Once you get more attuned to drawing hair regularly I promise your pallet choice will come naturally having seen it over and over again up close and personal. I started out with a pallet, and evolved without realizing I wasn't using one anymore.