Script Review

Main Script.

You could technically argue that “at once” is correct here, but it’s a wishy-washy translation. Try “Unless we stop all three at the same time,” else it will sound like “at once” is to mean “immediately”.

Those aren’t bullets.

“Does it have an unlimited supply of those spikes?”

He’s not agreeing with himself; he’s telling Joe and RedTsun to also avoid being reckless.

“Same goes for you.” is actually what he’s saying.

Jungo talks in the third person in Japanese because he’s half-retarded, but that quirk didn’t come across in these subs. I’m not sure why Commie put staff who didn’t play the game on this series, but it shows in the dull language.

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is

and make your choice,

This isn’t that hard.

“The life” is not a “they”.

I wish you never have existed. ;_;

“We life”…

I gotta hand it to you, Commie. Your innovations in stupidity are hard to match.

Than doesn’t seem possible.

Results

Watchability: Watchable.

Visual grade: C

Script grade: C-

Overall grade: C-

Every release for this show sucks. May as well just watch the Crunchyroll version and suffer through it. No reason to delay the pain you’re guaranteed either way.

With Engrish, you don’t need to perfectly transcribe it. Best to fudge it slightly to make it work. So those lines would be

I have not thought about living until yesterday -> I had not thought about living until yesterday
It just a seemed like one scene of a film -> It all just seems like one scene in a film
I need lore -> Probably not what he says. Anime-Koi guessed “I am burned”. You could throw anything in here.

It’s impossible to get perfection with Engrish, but you can come close to competency.

I disagree with the Plan B line. Even though it sounds horrendous in my own diction, it’s a valid way of saying that particular phrase that I’ve heard many Americans say in plenty of films. Usually followed by “AMERICA! FUCK YEAH!” or whatever.

You sure you parsed this correctly? Not that the lines are amazing as is, but “they” is probably a reference to the content of prior lines, not the next one. I mean, it contains the “erased” from the prior line and isn’t {\i1} like the next.
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Civilization, history, the world…
The fact that humans ever existed here,
the very idea of humanity itself, will be utterly erased.
They’ll all be erased.
{\i1}The life, the feelings that were there, all of it.
{\i1}It’ll be like none of that have existed.

It’s still problematic with that parsing. You’d want it to be “Everything will be erased.” because “they” doesn’t match up with civilization/history/the world/the fact that humanity ever existed here/the very idea of humanity itself.