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When I grow up I want to be a animal trainer because I want animals to be smart.I have a dog named Hershey and I try to train him but he doesn't understand.When I trained him I thought of the other trainers,then I went to the zoo and saw how to train sea lions and then I went to the school's library and read about how to train dogs.I read it all day then I wanted to be a trainer for animals.That's why I want to be a trainer for animals.

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Mia M

9/13/2013 06:04:33

It's really cool I didn't even think of that.

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dianad

9/20/2013 09:04:59

that is sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo cute

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anelisa

9/20/2013 13:46:31

you are dum and fat and look like a rat

Mia M

9/13/2013 05:58:35

When I grow up,I want to be a hair stillest and do people's hair.
I want to do that because you can do your own hair. They have a lot of tools. My mom did hair and she said its fun. You learn things you never knew about. You wear your apron to cary things in the pockets. You wash there hair. You get to paint there hair and cut it too, there are a lot of designs to do for hair. It looks fun. I want to do a lot of things to get more money. You get a lot of money and there are a bunch of salons to work at. I could do every ones hair. And my friends could work with me, and tour all over the world. Thats my dream and I want it to come true.

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Daniel.s

9/13/2013 06:03:06

I think your story is great because you win a lot of money

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Edgar R.

9/13/2013 06:13:54

When I grow up I want to be a FBI agents because they fight for the goverment.They fight for the president of the United States.

I want to be a FBI because they help people with addicted to alcohol.Some people are addicted to alcohol so FBI helps the people with alcohol.The FBI helps the people addicted to drugs and teens who are addicted to drugs.

I like a lot FBI because they are like cops but with more rank.They use a lot of guns like revolvers,shotguns, and assault rifles.I like a lot FBI because they have a lot of action on the missions.

I like a lot FBI because they save a lot of people.They save buildings,banks, and houses.

This is my goal because the FBI makes a lot of things,a lot of action, and they save a lot of people

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Mia M

9/13/2013 06:14:53

I like it it's cool

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Isaac.m

9/13/2013 06:14:09

I want to be a wrestler because you get to be a champion and you get a lot of fans and go around the world.

I want to get a lot of money.You get to be famous and you also could have the best time of your life.

I would like the a best wrestler in the world but you get to eat with the superstars sometimes and you get to become a superstar.

I will be a cool wrestler and have fun but you will have a good time and it will be hard.

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luz m.

9/13/2013 06:14:31

When I grow up, I want to be a chef. I want to be a chef because I like cooking and pastry to.I like all the receipes because it says to put eggs or water sometimes.That is one of the reasons why I want to be a chef.

Another reason why I want to be a chef is because of the salary.
On a web page I read that the salary for a chef in one year could be up to $15,000,000.And that is another reason why I want to be a chef.

I want to be a chef because I like pastry to.I like it because I think it is wonderful how you cook and decorate the cakes.I like to put the cake into the oven to.And that is another reason why I want to be a chef when I grow up.

I would also like to have a restaurant named Dimond Place.I wanted to be named like that because I could have shiny chandeliers and maybe I could have lots of shiny plates,spoons,forks, and cups.

I want to have a program to wher I could be cooking big and famous cakes.That program could be named Chef Luz.I could have special guests that can maybe come from far away places like China or Japan.

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