"my only diary" that simple phrase wonderfully described Kaisha and Ada's bond. The description of the way ada looks was really inventive. Disturbing but it really makes me invested in her emotional state. How does this make her feel? Did she always look like this or slowly over a series of test did she become to look like this? What? Why did you say that in your Author's notes? This story is not horrible! I admire the way you're jumping right into the story.