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Review:

MargaretLane says:I think you could remove the "at Hogwarts" from the end of the second sentence. "Hogwarts closed for the summer on the seventh successful year in a row at Hogwarts" sounds a little repetitive.

Oh, I was wondering why you chose a non-canon Headmistress. I assumed it was just because you wanted the four to be equals. I didn't realise there would be something more significant to it. I'm guessing this is going to set the quarrel in motion.

I like the way Helga is the only one who doesn't seem obsessed with replacing her. That is characteristic.

And I like the mention Rowena makes of her daughter. It kind of foreshadows the way her daughter will look for greater power also and creates a possibility that Rowena may be partly to blame for that, if she, even unintentionally, encouraged her daughter to believe she was likely to someday be headmistress.

I like the way Godric and Rowena stick up for Helga and the way she remains calm and doesn't overreact like the others do, but she makes her point all the same. I really like her character.

And yes, I think she should have yelled at him. He was asking for it.

Good story. I do think the last paragraph seems to rush in a little, but I'm not sure how you could change that.