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momotwins says:I'm really enjoying this story so far. I loved George finding out about the bear, that was a great scene. Really well-written! I like your characterizations of the Weasleys too, I think they're very good.

Small note: shine becomes shining, not shinning. That goes with shin. I just taught my kids this rule: the double consonant that a one-syllable short-vowel-sound word takes when forming an -ed or -ing ending is there to keep the short vowel sound. In this case, we want to keep the long vowel sound so we drop the silent e and add -ing. ;)

Aside from that - and it jumped out at me because I just taught it to my kids last week - I didn't notice any grammatical errors, so excellent job! The pace is great on this story. I can't wait for the next chapter :)

Author's Response: I'm glad you came back to read. It took me awhile to update.

Thanks for the tip, I'll try and remember.

Wonderful! This chapter didn't do too much for plot, but the next chapter should make up for it.