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What strikes me about the piece is that it feels like the narrator has suddenly become aware of children in his world. Perhaps he has just learned his wife is pregnant and now all the children in the world have come out of the woodwork as it were.

Could I suggest 'has opened' rather than 'opens' and also have a think about 'set' rather than 'lit'. It all depends on what you want convey but I think that scans better. I just think that with 'lit' 'on fire' becomes redundant'.