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Well the story, the message, the portrayal of the thoughts are good.
I am not keen on the way it is fragmented.
That is to say, I like each line to be something of itself and not flow over to be part of the next. e.g.
These fragmented off bits:
* song
* goal
being carried over to these lines:
* Songs, in spite of you
* Goal, and find what
instead of the next lines being:
* In spite of you
* And find what
Thank you for sharing your poem