For one of my school assignments, I chose to do a trial run of a couple pages of DFS to get a feel for where I’m at, comic-making wise. And I’m not exactly doing backflips over it, but I do know where to go from here. I promised myself I wouldn’t point all these awful flaws (apropos of absolutely nothing, perspective is really hard when you’ve been bullshitting it your whole career). So hey, let’s play critique bingo! Maybe you see something I don’t.

This is the actual script so far. These would be… pages 8-11 of the first chapter, approx. It’s the first time we meet Glenn, and a pretty calm scene considering the two incredibly violent ones it’s stuck between. AND WOWEE BEE, LOOK AT THAT EXPOSITION.

I can't seem to offer critique because this page is PERFECTION. The heavy shadows prolonging Glenn's reveal are so so beautiful and I can never get enough of Alan's expressions. I love that smug mug o' his. Your lines and colors and composition are all so marvelous and now I'm freaking out a little over how excited I am to see this project take off into real comic pages.

eeeeeeee thanks for sharing! Even these test pages are a feast for the eyes. Cannot wait to get into the actual meat of the story.

Man, I gotta say I am always psyched to see you put out a couple comic pages, I really dig your sense of pacing and style of writing, it feels super lively and natural. Also, Glenn, I can always appreciate some more Glenn. (I feel like it's probably predictable that my favorite is Glenn EH HEHHH um. . .)

OOOOOHHHhh fuck I got excited to see this in my messagesNothing is exactly glaring; the composition and layout is real nice. The only thing I'd have to ask iiiisss: where is Alan coming from in the very first panel? You'd think he'd be headed from the front where he'd been driving. Unless I missed something.