I noticed some of your sentences don't make sense, but I enjoyed reading it nonetheless. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: i'm really sorry if i created some confusion by it.. i hope it won't affect the story's plot. but i promise i will double up my editing process. well it's kinda hard cuz i'm not an english native speaker and i don't have a beta but i'll try my best to improve it.
thanks for the review! your feedback is always welcomed.

awww! poor merry. poor lauriel too, i mean she has to endure boring sessions with the king! eww.
iggybaby

Author's Response: yeah, especially because she didn't really interested in polictical issues, but she's doesn't really mind it anyway cuz she had already used to it.. after all, she has been in her parent's court for about 500 years..
thanks for your review!

Author's Response: yep, i want to make sort of brother-sister relationship between lauriel and haldir, so it would be too painful for her to lose haldir this sonn and i don't see i would kill haldir. he's too lovely to be killed!
thanks for your review! :)

I like it that your character brings up the book (quite funny). I've reread your bio information and I am !impressed! that you are writing this well in a second language. Nice job, Anariel. Oh, and what languages are the most common in Indonesia?

Author's Response: Everyone speak Bahasa Indonesia here! English was also spoken but usually not in everyday life. We have a completely our own language and we pronounce everything completly different from English. Well, it's quite similar to Malaysia's Bahasa Malaysia.
Thanks for your compliment and review!

Lol... that's funny... heh I like how you mixed her sense of fanfiction into where she is... lol i've never read another that does that. though your sentence structure could be improved, i really love the humor in this. wonderful writing and please update soon!

Author's Response: thanks for your review! it keeps me motivated to work on the next chapter though i'm still figuring out where the start point for next chapter.
well, i expect next chapter will finish at least next week.

There's two or three paragraphs in the middle of the story where you change from first person into third person. If you fix that and a few spelling mistakes here and there, It's a great chapter!
iggybaby

Author's Response: yes, i also just noticed it. thanks for telling me that. i hope you enjoyed it. there'll be next chapter soon.
thanks for reviewing!

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