I'll review in english.
Your dutch is okay-ish, of course it could use some enhancing, and if you want, I'm willing to do just that.

dutchiegirl chapter 1 . 12/30/2013

I think you did a great job, of course you have mistakes but dutch is of course one of the hardest languages in the world. I could see that you used google translate, but the fact that you tried to do this in dutch is already enough. But maybe you can try to contact someone who speaks dutch, so that person can help you make this even better. I'm not an Anubis fan, but I enjoyed this.
PS. Nina's name is Nienke in dutch. Maybe you should try to watch the orginal show, het huis Anubis, then you know the orginal plotline and you can learn maybe some dutch words too.

I'll review in English for you. It's easier for you I think. Your dutch isn't really good ,indeed ,but neither is my English. I liked the story. Really I did. It's great you posted it in Dutch. Just know... You're great!