wow. actually, i had an idea that it would have a fluffy ending, but i didn't realize that it would be THAT fluffy. I liked it, the angst in the first part driven by doubts and fears was very good, and the part about the OC was very convenient. It is not everyday that I will be able to read a story about Shuichi meeting another gay kid whom he will comfort. It would've always been Hiro who will do that part and not him. It was a refreshing change, actually.

Although, Yuki's part was slightly unhesitant enough in his actions/words. But I guess that's what makes your piece more original than the others. In my head, I kept on thinking how Yuki would say 'idiot' to Shuichi first before explaining. Heals the hurt more, in my opinion. Anyway, this is already a nice story and I wouldn't want to change anything about it.

*wipes a tear from her eye* That was so sweet and incredibly awesome! I love good fics where Eiri acts nice and sweet and all that sugary stuff. It's just a nice change from his usual cold self. *sighs*

that was excellent! I think that the characters weren't exactly... shu and yu a lot. Yuki seemed too nice and Yuki too... I dunno, normal? lol. But the story itself was brilliant - you made me cry! Goin' on my faves, so thanks!

Cute. Some issues with the layout though. When you have two people speaking, and the secon person talks, you're suppose to space it and then start the other person's sentence. Difficult to explain... lettime get a peice of you're writing and show you;

The boy said nothing at first. Shuichi assumed the boy was around sixteen years old and he was smaller than he was when he was around that age. “My parents threw me out,” the boy said, not looking at Shuichi. “They were always arguing with each other, and paid no attention to me at all. When they found out about something that I’m not ready to tell them, they… they threw me out.” Shuichi frowned. “Why would your parents throw you out of the house? What could you possibly have done?” No parents had the right to claim no responsibility over their own children!

okay, and it's supposed to be;

The boy said nothing at first. Shuichi assumed the boy was around sixteen years old and he was smaller than he was when he was around that age. “My parents threw me out,” the boy said, not looking at Shuichi. “They were always arguing with each other, and paid no attention to me at all. When they found out about something that I’m not ready to tell them, they… they threw me out.” Shuichi frowned.

“Why would your parents throw you out of the house? What could you possibly have done?” No parents had the right to claim no responsibility over their own children!

So yeah. That was the only problem. I really liked it otherwise. x3

hokage chapter 1 . 12/17/2005

oh! yuki ooc! but it's still nice! i like it, some dialogues are heart - crushing! write more!