This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:

LovlyRita says:I can totally see why this story beat mine in the Dobby's this year for best Action Adventure :P

The concept of this is out of this world amazing. Seriously. I absolutely adore it. It grabs you and pulls you in. I really like the way it starts off with Cedric, the way he is looking forward to people dying, which is a bit bizarre, admittedly, but understandable. And I loved the mention of Gideon and Fabian, they are two of my favorite minor characters, so that was really cool :)

I also really like the intake guy. He is very interesting, I like his nonchalant attitude. It must be so annoying dealing with people who have no idea what is going on every single day, but on this day in particular it must be exhausting. I honestly wonder what will happen when Bellatrix Lestrange DOES come through?! I mean, she be crazy, how o earth are they going to get her to where she is supposed to go?

And poor Fred, during this time, having just died without any idea. And still being mistaken for George, even after death! One thing I found interesting was how very quickly he seemed to forget what he was doing right before he died.

I honestly cannot wait to see what this world will unfurl and the things you have planned. I really haven't been this excited to read a story in a long time.

Your writing style is pristine, with specific attention to detail. I just adored the whole thing. Great job :)

Author's Response: From what I hear, your story was excellent competition! I still can't believe that I won. I'm so happy to hear that you liked this first chapter! Starting off with Cedric was my way of introducing the island without having to explain it in too much detail - as seen through the eyes of a newcomer.

The depot attendant is one of my favorite minor characters in this story. He changes form according to whoever's looking at him. He looks different to everyone.

Bellatrix probably had to be magically restrained or something. I would hate to be the person who had to tell her what to do.