I'm so impressed that you've constructed a gripping and sensational plot. The characterization is brilliant. I couldn't stop reading, I was so interested to see what would happen to the amazing fantasy plotline and well-constructed characters!

PS Ahem. Yup. As you may have noticed, I have been perfecting sarcasm since the age of three.

PPS Ignore all of the above.

PS Look at the site name. It is called fictionpress. FICTIONPRESS, I SAY. And why do you think that is? BECAUSE IT'S BLOODY FICTION.

PS Look, I'm sorry. I really am. I'm not an unkind person by nature, but I think you really do need to learn what the word fiction means...and the word fantasy...which means magic, and made up, and not general knowledge coupled with grammar lectures.

PS I don't flame very often. Seriously.

PS Post a proper story, and I'll tell you what I think. Until then, ciao and work on the OCD.