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Review:

Pookha says:Sorry for how long it took me to get to this review. Real life has been quite hectic lately.

Firstly, it's an extremely well-edited chapter with no typos, misspellings or glaring grammatical errors that I could spot. It's nice to read something that the author obviously cares enough about to ensure readability.

I found James and Aidan to be very likeable and interesting characters. James is obviously more brave than Aidan, but Aidan is a Gryffindor as well, so I think we'll see more from him later. I like the way you started the story with Aidan trying to get James out of bed. It immediately established their friendship and the quality of their friendship.

I found it slightly strange that no one from the attackers had checked the Gryffindor dormitories, but it didn't bother me much as they couldn't have possibly checked everywhere.

The scene with the professor being 'gunned down' on the base of the stairs was especially well done, IMHO. It showed the DEs would brook no opposition and that they were there for a specific purpose.

I must admit that when I started, I was confused because I missed that it was Next-Gen and thought it was Harry's dad. I quickly realised my error when I saw how old the DEs were; I really should learn to read the summaries better first, lol.

This looks like the great beginning to an interesting action/adventure type story. Very nicely done.

Author's Response: Wow, I am SO sorry that I took so long to get to this! Geez, it's been months.

I'm a bit of a spelling and grammar nut, so I hope all of that looks good! Otherwise it would bug me quite a bit to know that I made a mistake. My reasoning behind not checking the dormitories was, firstly, I assumed they couldn't even get in them. A few chapters later and I realized that the only thing standing between them and the Gryffindors is a portrait, so that was rather poor logic but... whatever. XD Anyway, the Death Eaters weren't concerned about getting everyone in the castle. That was the main reasoning behind it. Yeah. Thank you for the compliments, thanks for reviewing, and I'm glad you liked it! Again, sorry it took so long for me to get to replying!