It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.

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2007-02-20, 23:06

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Now that's cool. Good job on that one.

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2007-02-21, 03:47

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Sweet song! Yeah, deffinately put it to music. Well done on the rhyming stuff.

2007-02-21, 14:22

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it's definetly better, but wehn it is so blatant prose stuff, it loses a little bit in all the synonyms for destruction, u know what i mean?

It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.

It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.

2007-02-21, 19:16

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Iron Maiden wouldn't have a breakdown ending the song.

So

I was only talking about the lyrics and nothing else

2007-02-21, 19:36

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What i mean is, if all you have is words in prose, describing the immediate situation the extreme effect of death gets lost in the process of repetition. If there is no base for comparison with other things, the death and destruction gets dumbed down. Don't just say:

Blood pours through the halls, there is skulls and shit!!!!
Some guy impales infested guts with a rusty brutal sword.

Try:

Crimson blanket, surface undisturbed, seeps through the royal battlements
Penetrated, the skin divides, that which is preciously guarded by flesh, cruelly ripped out and remains, vulnerable, on the grimy floor

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2007-02-22, 01:51

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MY diction sucks. That's the problem. I couldn't think of something like that without you or anybody else saying it.

It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.

2007-02-22, 18:14

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Then try practice or else your writeing will all sound really blunt

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2007-02-22, 20:19

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I'll try doing that, but I personally like blunt material. Just up-front stuff. Then again, this could be because of my poor skills of comprehending metaphors, similes, symbolisms, and so on. It's always been about the plot to me, not the subliminal message.

Plus;

Unleash hell
Slaughter the weak
Destroy this Empire
End this realm

I've been trying to cut down on making long stanzas (is that what they're called?). How could I improve something like this without making it too long?

It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.

2007-02-27, 15:11

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having demolition hammer doing this song would be awesome

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anything to point out their hypocrisy.

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He's calling you a faggot piece of shit because you are young and unintelligent, and most of all, you are a boring, stereotyopical, close minded metal head. Please don't pretend to understand anything PST says. Please leave the forum now.

It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.

2007-02-28, 00:17

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Who's Demolition Hammer?

ha ha ha that was funny never heard of dh ha ha ha

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anything to point out their hypocrisy.

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He's calling you a faggot piece of shit because you are young and unintelligent, and most of all, you are a boring, stereotyopical, close minded metal head. Please don't pretend to understand anything PST says. Please leave the forum now.

It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.

It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.

2007-02-28, 14:15

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You know, when I read the title and looked at the first verse my first thought was "å, nu e han igång igen" which roughly translates to " oh, here he goes again" which roughly translates to "when will we see a song about wookies?!"

With the right music it might be quite OK. Though JOAM has a point in that it could benefit from a bit more thought.

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2007-02-28, 19:13

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... I'm serious.

they are a 80's thrash band they sound like slayer

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anything to point out their hypocrisy.

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2007-02-28, 21:41

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"when will we see a song about wookies?!"

That's what I've been saying all along!

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2007-03-01, 01:31

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YOu and your obsession with wookiees! Just go downtown and find a really hairy fat woman!

It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.

2008-04-30, 04:14

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Been a while, but I did some cleaning up on this song. Mostly just rearrangement so it'll fit the music. Not done yet, of course, probably will do some more rearranging.

Verse 1:

Unleash hell
Slaughter the cause
Destroy this Empire
End this realm

(bridge)

Purify the plains
Ravage the foes
Save the pure ones
Ignore their blows

Chorus:

10,000 legions at my command
Here to annihilate the damned
10,000 legions at my authority
Delivering to the world true harmony

Verse 2:

Engulf their armies
Match their lead with steel
Baptize their cities
With an endless inferno

Sever the bloodlines
Leave none standing
The is the purge
To end all fighting

Chorus:

10,000 legions at my command
Here to annihilate the damned
10,000 legions at my authority
Delivering to the world true harmony

Bridge:

Genocide is the only way
We'll end your suffering today
Enjoy an afterlife of tranquility
Or endure an eternal brutality

4 billion years of violence and decay
It must end on this Judgment Day
The cosmos is on the verge of destruction
The legions on the sidelines can no longer stay

Acoustic Break:

Surrender
No need for tears
No need for this war
We desire peace

Look to yourselves
Know the truth
If you implore silence
We will save you (And if you...)

Bridge (back to loudness):

Covet war, carnage, and the urge to maim
You arrogant bastards will see why we came!

(Instrumental Break)

Chorus Breakdown: (2x)

10,000 legions at my command
Here to annihilate the damned
10,000 legions at my authority
Delivering to the world true harmony

Overlap:

Genocide is the only way
We'll end your suffering this day
Enjoy an afterlife of tranquility
Or endure an eternal brutality

4 billion years of violence and decay
It must end on this Judgment Day
The cosmos is on the verge of destruction
The legions on the sidelines WILL NO LONGER STAY!!!

It's really sad, all those people who don't understand why we shouldn't act like our enemies. The real victory is not only killing and imprisoning the terrorists, but also letting civilized manners override the lust for revenge, once the battle is over.