it's definelty going somewhere, needs to be cleaned up a little though.

Shall I ever find love, or will love ever find me?It?s always in arm?s reach, but it escapes meThese feelings build up in me, locked in their cageBut one day, they?ll escape in pure, primal rage

Me, me, me, stop thinking about yourself! hah, but really, less "me"'s. also, you can't rhyme me and me, try to find another word, possibly a metaphor, or be cool like I've done in a song (in a joke song i've written that my band plays My Pet Rock Died) and use the word "thee". definetly take one out but try taking the second and third one out, as the second must be taking out and the third should be easy to replace. maybe use "inside"? i like the cage metaphor.

Do you know how painful it isTo be rejected and have no success?Do you know how much it burns?Ah, but I digress

You sound like my wrld cultures teacher when you say "i digress", but anyway I think you should take out the "ah". it may work with a certain style of music but i don't know what your shooting for here, so. other than that, it's a good build up for a powerful chorus (work one the chorus hard, it could be the thing that makes the song).

other than that, i like where you're going with this. definetly work on it some more, i wanna read the rest. it's rather respectable (though it could be poked fun at by a deuche) and people can relate to it. keep working... *cough*my songs up*cough*