Aye. Okay. How do I say this without scaring the bejeezus out of you? I mean, I really don't want to resort to threats that I (in all sincerity) won't carry out but then the whole schmoozing of chocolate bunnies and loving bunches of flowers don't come naturally to me either.

Um, how about this.

Yes.

Please.

Continue.

On the pain of somebody's spleen possibly bursting. A somebody you will never meet and never know and never read about in medical journals but who will have been assaulted by their desperate spleen 'cos a REALLY cool first chapter wasn't updated on Twilightnet.

Wow... need I say more?... If your still reading your just fishing for compliments... okay, fine, it was AWESOME... I want more!, really, I want that monkey bar bit in Edward POV and Chris POV... coolnessness! UPDATE-ness

This is a great beginning! I think you should definitely continue with it, I'd love to read more. I LOVE that Edward was there to catch Chris. And him calling him "spider monkey" and the affect hearing that had on Bella, was great.

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