That was quite hard looking at on youtube. Why not post animated gif's in your post instead?

Are you a golf player, and have you acted it out?

It looks like you have way too little rotation in your hips and spine.

Optima

07 July 2009, 12:36 AM

Hello and welcome here.

That was quite hard looking at on youtube. Why not post animated gif's in your post instead?

Are you a golf player, and have you acted it out?

It looks like you have way too little rotation in your hips and spine.
Sorry I'm not sure how to do that. How would I make the animation an animated gif?
Also nope I'm not a golf player and i haven't acted it out. I have been working from reference videos though. This week I have worked more on the blocking. Working on making the poses more correct. I hope to have something to post tomorrow.
Thanks for the response. ^_^

doffer

08 August 2009, 07:38 PM

Hi there :)

I think, besides what Mikael said, you can push your poses way more.
Go more extreme in the back swing pose, so we really feel he is loading up energy for the big blast, and also, go quiet extreme after the hit, to really emphasize the power he has in the swing.

Take a look at this amazing clip, if you havn't all ready:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XPJtK-DxnV4&feature=related

You can try to sketch down the extremes on paper, just with stick figure characters or other simplified figures, and push it so far, you think you went way over board, cause in motion, you generelly need to push it "too" far, to make it read clearly.

Hope it helped a bit. A golf swing is a great practice, so I'm looking foreward to see more :)

Optima

08 August 2009, 08:30 PM

Thanks doffer for the response it is very helpful. That video you posted is actually one of the videos I'm working from.
Sorry for posting this through youtube but I don't know how to make my animation into an animated gif.
Here's the updated blocking. I have 2 different versions. I think the changes in the two aren't that big but here's the first one.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KzZxaITjvv0
Here's the second one.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9_aWheS58U8

MikaelPersson

08 August 2009, 08:37 PM

Right now I think we could assist you more if you posted still images of your poses.
Another alternative would be to leave a few seconds at the end of your blocking then repeating your blocking several times after one another.
As the next video screen appears right after your video there is hardly any time to look properly.
It still looks like you should push your poses way more.

If you were to post some images we could draw on top of them and give you suggestions that would say more than just push your poses.

doffer

08 August 2009, 10:12 PM

Hi again :)

Yeah, like Mikael says, try post a picture of your initial pose, the extreme anitcipation, the hit and the extreme follow through.
It would be a lot easyer to critiqe 'em like that.

Anyways, I did a little match of your pose with a pose from an instruction video on youtube - I hope it's alright with you :)

http://www.doffer.dk/showoff/golf_swing.jpg

First thing is the arms.
Notice his arms are completely straight back, while yours (your characters :D ) are bend. When straighting them out, you'll get a lot more power and anticipation in them, cause you really feel like he gives it all he's got. On your character, it feel half-hearted :)

Then the shoulders.
It feels like you've rotated them JUST a tad too much. This might not be noticable, and when I think it through, it might actually be quiet allright, so leave that for now (haha, lol... I apologize) ;)

Last but important thing, is the head and eyes. Now, I've never played golf, but looking at the reference, and thinking about how small the damn sphere is, I'm pretty sure I'd keep my eyes on the ball at all time, to make sure I'll hit it.
There is not really any reason to look at the club or his hands, unless he's afraid of hitting someone standing behind him ;)

SO, eyes/head on the ball untill he hits it, and straighten out the arms for more power on the anticipation, and forget all about my orange shoulder line, and I think it'll be better :)

Cheers

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