They where okay but very confusing to read. but i have an idea for your plot what if this is how this is thier last year in school and bella get a dance offer while edward gets a football offer and how they try to mange.(all the wrong moves) is the tittle right? so they both deside to to stay together but pursue there career so they have a long distance you can have them have drama like edward get mad and jelous of bella's new dance partner and bella has a hard time being apart from edward and visits him on one oh his football tournament by this point the both are really famous it's been 2 year already and they are still togther but hardly see eachother so she goes and sees him it gets a little rated m when they meet cu thier so happy to see each other cuz bella is going to stay with him for a whole month cuz she has a little break and you can write cute moment with them and emmett and jasper are also famous and are in the same football team with edward alice is a famous designer and rose idk? lol well when the meet you know they have sex and they have it constintaly throught the month and mid month she start throwing up showing pregancy sign but she brushes it up and thinks shes sick untill one day edward takes her to the doctors and she finds out shes pregant she happy but really shocked and tells her parents drama drama drama etc.. for more help please ask me that's if youdecide to go with this story if not it's okay but i think it will be great! and they can have twins girl(renesmee carlie cullen) and boy(masen anthony cullen)