Saturday, March 23, 2013

Minju Yeo/ Tue 12/ Holiday

<Chunjie>

"BOOM!" Big sound echoed through in a city in China. I was frightened and thought there's going to be a war or something. In fact, it was sound of firework during 'Chunjie' in China. 'Chunjie' is one of the biggest holidays in China, and Chinese people celebrate it very magnificently.

Chunjie is a holiday celebrating the lunar New Year, and wish everyone happy. Its origin was from China, as an agrarian country, people pray for a year of good crops. Today, China has vacation for a week during the 'Chunjie', and it's an important time for family reunion and delicious foods.

On lunar December 30th, the whole family gathers around and eats 'nianyefan' which means 'the final meal before the New Year.' People also prepare spoons and chopsticks for the people who weren't able to make it home, so they can express their family's harmony. After they eat dinner, they make 'jiaozi', dumplings until the sunrise. They also play games or watch TV together and wait until the New Year's sun to rise.

When the sun rises, the firework begins. The firework is for kicking out the vicious evils. It also inspires a cheerful atmosphere for 'Chunjie'. However, these days, firework is banned in some big cities like Beijing, because it causes so much air pollution and fire accidents. After the firework, family greets each other bowing. The elders often give children money in red envelopes. It means giving them full luck, since 'red' means good luck in China.

Every year, billion people in all around China move to visit their home and meet their family. It is the most important holiday for Chinese people. Although celebrating 'Chunjie' is becoming more simple and short, but it's still a good chance for Chinese people to meet their family and eat delicious foods together.

3 comments:

1. Does the essay have a thesis statement that identifies the process? I'm not sure if the second paragraph contains the thesis statement about what the writer is going to talk about. I don't see any process thesis in the first paragraph.

2. Does the writer include background information? Yes. The writer explains what 'Chunjie' is, when it is and its origin.

3. Does each paragraph present a different part of the process? Since the writer did not use conjunctions often, it doesn't clearly show the process but some paragraphs talk about what people do the night before the 'Chunjie' and after having the meal.

4. Are the parts of the process organized in a logical sequence? The author tried to organize the main ideas according to chronological order and it seems well organized.

5. Do the body paragraphs have any facts, definitions, or details? The writer used definitions when making use of Chinese terms. She also mentioned the facts-e.g.firework.

6. Does the writer include an evaluation, recommendation, or warning in the conclusion? The writer included an insight about how important 'Chunjie' is for the Chinese people.

1. Does the essay have a thesis statement that identifies the process? (In fact, it was sound of firework during 'Chunjie' in China. 'Chunjie' is one of the biggest holidays in China, and Chinese people celebrate it very magnificently.)-->I think the writer wants to write about 'Chunjie', but the thesis statement is too general. So I wish the write has more specificl thesis statement that is relatived to her own experiences.

2. Does the writer include background information? YES. The writing has lots of explainations about what 'Chunjie' is, So when we read it, we can figure out all about 'Chunjie'.

3. Does each paragraph present a different part of the process? YES. Each paragraph present a differnet part of the process about 'Chunjie'. it has a well structured process.

4. Are the parts of the process organized in a logical sequence? Just like the first comment,the main topic is well organized according to chronological order.

5. Do the body paragraphs have any facts, definitions, or details? ('Chunjie' is one of the biggest holidays in China, and Chinese people celebrate it very magnificently.) -->it is about the details and backgrouds about 'Chunjie' because I don't know 'Chunjie' at all when I saw the essay, So it is very useful to understand this essay.

6. Does the writer include an evaluation, recommendation, or warning in the conclusion? The write includes an evaluation about 'Chunjie' very well. but if you write with your story and you finish the essay with your evaluation about 'Chunjie', the essay is more better i think.

"BOOM!" Big sound echoed through in a city in China. I was frightened and thought there's going to be a war or something. In fact, it was sound of firework during 'Chunjie' in China. 'Chunjie' is one of the biggest holidays in China, and Chinese people celebrate it very magnificently.

Chunjie is a holiday celebrating the lunar New Year, and wish everyone happy. Its origin was from China, as an agrarian country, people pray for a year of good crops. Today, China has vacation for a week during the 'Chunjie', and it's an important time for family reunion and delicious foods.

On lunar December 30th, the whole family gathers around and eats 'nianyefan' which means 'the final meal before the New Year.' People also prepare spoons and chopsticks for the people who weren't able to make it home, so they can express their family's harmony. After they eat dinner, they make 'jiaozi', dumplings until the sunrise. They also play games or watch TV together and wait until the New Year's sun to rise.

When the sun rises, the firework begins. The firework is for kicking out the vicious evils. It also inspires a cheerful atmosphere for 'Chunjie'. However, these days, firework is banned in some big cities like Beijing, because it causes so much air pollution and fire accidents. After the firework, family greets each other bowing. The elders often give children money in red envelopes. It means giving them full luck, since 'red' means good luck in China.

Every year, billion people in all around China move to visit their home and meet their family. It is the most important holiday for Chinese people. Although celebrating 'Chunjie' is becoming more simple and short, but it's still a good chance for Chinese people to meet their family and eat delicious foods together.