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The middle line is short one syllable. Count should be 7. Also Haiku is NOT supposed to rhyme. I understand some of the new age writers are not paying attention to syllable count as once were but I have not read anything about moving toward rhyme. lol Charles

The middle line is short one syllable. Count should be 7. Also Haiku is NOT supposed to rhyme. I understand some of the new age writers are not paying attention to syllable count as once were but I have not read anything about moving toward rhyme. lol Charles

Thanks....Something looked wrong However Haikus are evolving as are the languages that write it. edited by masterartisan on 5/10/2010edited by masterartisan on 5/10/2010

Remember the Haiku debate. Personally, I do not like Haiku/Senryu to rhyme....not because of any rules, just my own weird thing. BUT, this is probably one of my favorite rhyming Haikus that I have read. I like the imagery a lot, and can get a strong personal allegory from it. This is supposed to be a critique section, but I don't really see anything wrong with it. If I wanted to be really anal, and this was my own Haiku, I would drop the capitalization....but since you are trying to write Haiku under the premise of evolving it, you really don't need to even worry about that.