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navyfail says:I actually never read the poem you mentioned. Now that I have read this though I'll probably check it out. To be honest this is the first fanfiction I have read that concerns Dumbledore and Ariana's death. I know, sad isn't it that I haven't read more of them?

The thing I realized while reading this is that though this is a one-shot it felt like I was reading a poem. A soft, sad, elegant poem. There may not be stanzas or rhyming or anything poem like in this but I actually felt like I was reading a poem. It is probably because of how you phrased yours sentences and how you portrayed the events/memories. Everything flowed so well. And I loved that reference to Icarus. It was a nice touch. Mythology always is.

Adding that paragraph(s) on how Dumbledore wanted a simple sign from Gellert that he cared was sweet. I remember reading an article a long time ago. It said that J.K. Rowling admitted that Dumbledore was in fact gay. It was a shock at first but then I realized it made sense. So those details on Albus's feelings reminded me of that.

"Magic, not tears, fell from her eyes, her every footstep imprinted with wasted power." This is my favorite line. It really stuck out to me.

Beautiful job as always.
~Sama

Author's Response: Oh do read it! It's one of those "important" poems, but it's also really interesting with its Gothic elements. :D

Ariana's death shows up a few times in fanfiction, but it's not hard to miss those stories because they're usually one-shots. Most I've read look more closely at Ariana, though, whereas this story concentrates on Dumbledore's reaction after the fact.

It's wonderful to hear that you thought of this one-shot as a poem! The first lines started out as a poem for me, and somehow along the way it transformed into a fanfic, so I'm glad that it still feels poem-like. A lot of it comes from the rhythm of the lines, the use of shorter sentences, and the brevity of the story - it wouldn't be difficult to rearrange the lines and end up with a free-form poem. I've never been able to do that with a whole one-shot before, so it was a fun new writing experience. :D