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When I was 15 years old, I had three very lovely kittens in my house; they were like my only friends. I always spent my free time to look after them attentively. Since they was born until they were 4 months, there was not a day that went by that I didnít saw their faces or heard their voices, and I loved them so much. One day, I woke up from a nightmare in the middle of the night. My heart was beating as though it was going to explode and my body was full of sweat. In that Saturdayís morning, I had to go to study Chinese language with an impartial emotion. While I was on the way, the nightmare popped up on my mind again, and then followed by thinking of my kittens. I cannot concentrate on the class because I was unreasonably concerned about my kittens. When I came back home, everyone in my house was standing at the door and my mom said ďView, your little kittens had dead already. It is an accident, while they were playing at the carís wheels, Miss.Kaew came to her car and drove the car. When the car was moving, the kittens didnít run away from those wheels because they didnít know why their toys moved like that and still stayed at the top of the wheels. At last, they were dead by those wheels.Ē After she had finished speaking, I was crying immediately. Although many years have passed, I still always think of them, my kittens. And here is my worst day of my life; itís the day I lost my three dear friends.

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When I was 15 years old, I had three very lovely kittens in my house. They were like my only friends. I spent all of my free time looking after them attentively. Since they were born until they were 4 months old, not a day went by without seeing their faces or hearing their voices, and I loved them so much.

I'm not a teacher, nor a native English speaker. I'm just trying to help....Any other comments are welcome!

When I was 15 years old, I had three very lovely kittens in my house; they were like my only friends.

I always spent all [of] my free time to looking after them attentively.

Since they was bornFrom birth until they werethe age of 4 months, there was not a day that went by that I didn’t sawsee their faces or heardhear their voices, and I loved them so much.

One dayOnce, I woke up from a nightmare in the middle of the night. (You can't say that it happened "one day" and "in the middle of the night" when referring to the same event.)

My heart was beating as though it was going to explode and my body was full ofI was drenched in sweat.

InOn that Saturday’sSaturday morning, I had to go to study Chinese language with an impartial emotion.feeling calm and unemotional.

While I wasOn the way to my class, the nightmare popped up oninto my mind again, and then followed byand then I started thinking of my kittens.

I cannotcould not concentrate on the class because I was unreasonablyso concerned about my kittens.

When I camegot back home, everyone in my house was standing at the door and my mom said “View, your little kittens had dead alreadyare dead. It iswas an accident. While they were playing atnear the car’s wheels, Miss (no full stop here) Kaew cametogot into her car and drove the carmoved off. When the car wasstarted moving, the kittens didn’t run away from thosethe wheels because they didn’t knowunderstand why their toys movedwere moving like that and stillso they stayed at theon top of the wheels and they were crushed to death."At last, they were dead by those wheels.”

After she had finished speaking, I immediately wasstarted crying.immediately Although many years have passed, I still always think of them, my kittens. AndhereisSo that was mythe worst day of my life -it’s the day I lost my three dear friends.

Please see my corrections above to your very sad story.

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