Edit/Approval - Therm-a-Rest Trail Lite - Matt Mayfield

OK, Matt, ready for the website! After making the minor changes below, you may upload at http://tinyurl.com/yzmlbmp Please delete the copy in the Tests/OR

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, Oct 20, 2009

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OK, Matt, ready for the website! After making the minor changes below, you may upload at http://tinyurl.com/yzmlbmp
Please delete the copy in the Tests/OR folder. Congratulations on completing your first Owner Review! Cheers, Richard

<Size:Large>
EDIT: Add a space between the colon and "Large"

<Listed weight: 2 lb 11 oz (1220 g)
Weight as delivered: 2 lb 11 oz (1220 g)>
Edit: You might do with this what I suggested (and you changed) with Size: "Weight, listed and measured," on one line.

<, while the Therm-a-Restâ¢ provided me with this prime real estate!>
Edit: We discourage use of the trademark symbol. You probably should delete it.

< Realizing this made me smile as I leaned over and fired up the stove
for a cup of coffee).>
EDIT: Delete the parenthesis at the end of the sentence.

OK, Matt, ready for the website! After making the minor changes below, you may upload at http://tinyurl. com/yzmlbmp
Please delete the copy in the Tests/OR folder. Congratulations on completing your first Owner Review! Cheers, Richard

<Size:Large>
EDIT: Add a space between the colon and "Large"

<Listed weight: 2 lb 11 oz (1220 g)
Weight as delivered: 2 lb 11 oz (1220 g)>
Edit: You might do with this what I suggested (and you changed) with Size: "Weight, listed and measured," on one line.

<, while the Therm-a-Restâ„¢ provided me with this prime real estate!>
Edit: We discourage use of the trademark symbol. You probably should delete it.

< Realizing this made me smile as I leaned over and fired up the stove
for a cup of coffee).>
EDIT: Delete the parenthesis at the end of the sentence.

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