Sounds alright, a bit like an intro at the minute. The break alone sounds a little weak, I guess you'll be adding more underneath.
Like T-leaf, need to hear a bit more to see where you're heading with it.

yer im always kinda second guessing myself cos im not quite there yet to in having the confidence to say like "this sounds good" if u get what i mean? so i just thought id put my idea on a plate and let people pick at it