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I've been away from the computer for a few days and missed the discussion on this one. I agree with LCK on leaving the words as they are in the first version you posted. As a listener, I prefer the more open, abstract meaning that leaves me some options as to how I interpret it. However, I do think the song could use another verse. I have no ideas on the direction it should take, but right now the song just seems incomplete with that long instrumental section following the one verse.

One other minor nit - The rapid-fire delivery of the "right around the corner" line felt too harsh for me. I'm wondering if there is a way to slow that down and soften it up a bit. I don't think there is anything wrong with the words themselves, just the way they are delivered.