I hate to say it, but I think this is probly the worst grammar that's come out of me while writing this story. I could not figure out which verbs or grammatic phrases I should be using in a number of areas.

The thing I had a problem with twice is the concept of taking something out of a container. I used the verb 取る and I'm not quite sure that's right. I was also confused about using 集める in the sense of obtaining money. I'm also curious if the phrase "even though her lips weren't moving" means the same thing in Japanese as English. I'll probly have a number of corrections to make on this one. Thanks for any advice again.