It's really simple and sparse, which usually bugs me, but this works. It feels like you're holding back from the reader, and I like that. Like there's so much you could say, but don't want to because it's just for you. I dunno, I could be completely wrong, but that's what it seems like to me. Really liked the line "You pierced my poor peasant heart with your silver-tongued promise of my salvation." Went through that earlier this year. Can really relate to that feeling. Well done :)