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Posted 1 Week Ago

This is solemn and profound and the emotion really resonates. The only aspect on which it's a bit off is the musicality......I might be guessing wrong with the notion that this is actually a poem when it could more be a song, so the musicality might still be there if the music breathes life into it. But reading it on the page, because we don't hear that tune (if this actually IS a song), the musicality has trouble really breathing life into this poem because of where the beats now fall. If this actually is a song, then I leave you to do you since the music would carry the words through, but if such is intended to be a poem, despite the awesome imagery, and the occasional juicy line, the musicality gets wonky with too wordy lines or not wordy enough. Great start, though. This indeed has a good vibe to it.

Posted 7 Months Ago

The line "sometimes I try to make sense of it all but I'd rather put up all these walls" is straight out of my life. The world around me is frustrating and I just close out a lot. This flowed really well. Nice write.

Posted 1 Year Ago

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1 Year Ago

Love, relationships, life together with another is always a delicate balance, a sensitive theme — with no guarantees.
Gosh, Carly!
Rhyming Couplets is among my favorite forms, and you've certainly composed an exemplary rendering in sheer emotion, longing, almost a plea of sorts, and surely with a depth of thought and feeling few are capable of so honestly and openly expressing with the vibrant skill you have.

A most brilliant effort, Carly … most grateful hugs to you for the heartfelt moments shared! ⁓ Richard

Posted 1 Year Ago

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1 Year Ago

Thank you Richard for your kind review, much appreciated!! :)

1 Year Ago

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