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Title: Mahou Shoujo Lyrical Nanoha: GenerationSGenre: Action, Drama, Romance, Original CharacterMain couple: Hayate X OCSummary: It has been a year after the Jail Scaglietti incident. Everybody is already in their separate ways. Here, we follow the continuing story of Hayate and her Knights, as they become involved in a conflict that spans three generations… And in the process, a figure from Hayate’s past returns, and their destinies become intertwined…Rating: PG-13 (rating may get higher if the story turns out to be too violent)Links:Chapter 1a, Chapter 1b

Fanfiction.net profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/746291/DezoPenguinMidnight of the HeartGenre: Angst/RomancePairing: Yuuno/Nanoha/FateSummary: When Fate returns home following three years of deep-space missions, she is forced to confront emotions and relationships she'd thought she'd tried to cut herself off from. Much angst, some Yuunoha, some NanoFate, and Vivio as an allegory?Rating: T

The Road Onward Genre: Adventure/Friendship Summary: Ten-year-old Vivio is given an opportunity to choose a harder path for the future, but one which may lead her to achieving her dreams. Rating: K

Divided Heart Genre: Angst/Romance Pairing: Yuuno/Nanoha/Fate Summary: Sequel to "Midnight of the Heart." Nanoha confronts the cost her inability to choose has exacted on Yuuno and Fate, and is faced with another choice when they present their solution. Rating: T

Shell Game Genre: Adventure/Sci-Fi Summary: Vivio is excited to take on her first field mission, but soon finds that the dangers of real life require her to test the limits of her own abilities or face the consequences. Rating: K

Ignis Fatuus
Genre: Drama/Romance
Main couple: Fate, Nanoha
Summary: If things were not what they seem to be. An illusion. A misleading truth. Is there even a truth? AU fiction. FateNanoha.
Rating:T

Impasse
Genre: Drama/Romance
Main couple: Eventual FateNanoha...maybe
Summary: It was an accidental occurrence. On that day, two paths begun to gravitate towards each other, as if pulled by some kind of magnetic force, one a negative pulse, the other positive. AU, high school fiction. Eventual FateNanoha...maybe?
Rating:T

Stigma
Genre: Angst/Romance
Main couple: FateNanoha
Summary: Because it was her own magic that she had called forth. Her very own hands that had slain. Fate Testarossa Harlaown killed for the first time when she was sixteen. Post MGLN A's. FateNanoha.
Rating: T

Endless Time
Genre: Drama/Romance
Main couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: So when did things change, exactly? When did they start to look at each other differently? Short introspective fiction. FateNanoha. Updated 24.9.07. Betaing complete.
Rating:T

Ode To Darkness
Genre: Drama/Romance
Main couple: FateNanoha
Summary: Before she might have wanted to cry. Despair. Lash out in rage. Now, she only wanted to laugh. AU oneshot. Dark story. FateNanoha.
Rating: T

White Devil
Genre: Drama/Hurt/Comfort
Main couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: The pain came back tenfold, as if electricity flowed through her every vein: crackling, sharp, and burning. Blood splattered to the floor, overlapping dried, dark patches of black liquid. FateNanoha.
Rating:T

And She Smiles
Genre: Romance/Drama
Main Couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: After a day of work, a series of photos stir up the memories of one Enforcer Fate.
Rating: T

My Master
Genre: Romance/Drama
Main Couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: The reflections on one Takamachi Nanoha by a close, and dear friend.
Rating: T
Author's Comments: Sequel to And She Smiles

A Magical Christmas
Genre: General
Main Couple:
Summary: Christmas is nearing and Nanoha wants her daughter Vivio to have a very special first Christmas.
Rating: T

Spoiler for Evil Rick:

TitleVatican KnightsGenre: Horror/ Action/ Gore Summary: The story who reveals the bloody and dark origin of Vivio. The Vatican Hunter Vivio Valentine and her friends must follow a bloody path to stop the demon knowed as "The White Devil" Rating: TLinks:

TitleNanoha/ MARVELGenre: ActionSummary: A cross over between the Nanoha Universe and the MARVEL Superheros Universe. 5 Jewel seed had fallen in hands of Supervillans like Red Skull & Dr. Doom, The TSAB must make an alliance with the Avenguers to stop them.Rating: TLinks:

TitleRise of Techno - UnionGenre: Action/ GoreSummary: A drawn comic of Nanoha & company facing their deadliest enemy. The Techno - Union Imperil attacked the Section 6, Nanoha, Fate, Vita and Signum must travel to this mysterious nation to clean the name of Hayate.Rating: TLinks:

Iron Knight
Genre: General
Summary: Oneshot, Vitacentric. I failed. I couldn't protect them. Hayate, everyone...I'm sorry. A little oneshot on what could've been going through Vita's mind, and if Hayate didn't come in time
Rating: K

Spiritual Garden
Genre: General
Summary: OneShot, FateOOC. Sometimes, it's the little things that are most precious. It is how we make of them that makes them precious, such as a simple outing, in a field of flowers.
Rating: K

Our Bridge
Genre: Romance
Main couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: [Oneshot] In the past 14 years, this bridge has bared witnessed to three of our most treasured moments: Us becoming friends, us becoming a couple, and now, us becoming fiancées as I kneel before you and pop the question. Will you marry me, Nanoha?
Rating: K

Road of Love
Genre: Romance/Drama
Main couple: Fate Nanoha
Summary: Sometimes one had to fight to keep that relation going, and sometimes, one struggled to accept their own feelings, and the results of admitting those feelings to myself, and person of my feelings. This is my story, and the road I took to find love. [NF]
Rating: T

Spoiler for illidan182:

fanfiction.net profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1240368/Illidan182The Desert's TrapGenre: DramaSummary: Vita, Signum and Agito are deployed to a planet that holds memories for Vita and Nanoha. They are to meet with Fate and Hayate but non of them was told where to meet up, and mysterious criminal is after Fate and Hayate. Fatenum,NanoVita, Character deathRating: T

Starlight RemembranceGenre: Spiritual/Hurt/ComforSummary: One peaceful night, on a hilltop near Mid's central ground forces HQ. Some memories are re-forged for a man lost to time. Zest CentricRating: K+

Spoiler for Junkedcat:

Landscaper!FateGenre: AU, Romance, Drama.Summary: Fate has a life of hard work, raunchy comments, and a lingering past. Nanoha has a sheltered life, few friends, and a list of expectations of her. On the surface they should not even talk to each other. Their isolation, however, can make something deep happen between them.Rating: M

Spoiler for Kagerou:

Title:Maho Shoujo Lyrical Nanoha AlphaGenre: OC, Drama, Action, Angst, Hurt/Comfort- Summary: In the year MC 0083; Lies will be told, truth will be revealed, pain will be felt, comfort will be given, and the few and the proud will stand up against the galaxy's biggest threat. Rating: TLink:Chapter 1a, Chapter 1b, Chapter 2a, Chapter 2b

Title: Legend of Ancient Belka: Fall of an Empire
Genre: Drama/Action
Summary: The Belkan Empire stood for many a century, but as history has shown, no Empire lasts forever. As the last 'king' of the Empire, Vivio must stand between her Empire, and the many threats that wish to destroy it.
Rating: T
Link: Prologue, Chapter 1, Chapter 2

Now or NeverGenre: Romance/Angst Main couple: Shamal, SignumSummary: There had always been something between them but destiny had never allowed this blurry connection to be anything more. Shamal/Signum SHOUJO AI Rating: T

School of Lyrical
Genre: Romance, OC
Summary: AU and OC. Fatecentric : The school lives of Nanoha & friends before the events of StrikerS. Original character in Rune Juril, a Enforcer friend of Fate's.
Rating:T

Ashes unto DustGenre:Adventure/Sci-Fi Summary:A Arc-en-Ciel story. Following the close of the Scagletti case the TSAB soon encounters a new civilization, the Varista Empire. At first things are peaceful but then the gears of war begin to turn and the flames of war are kindled... OC-centric Rating: M

Title: The name of your fanfiction
genre: romance? Action?
Main couple: (can be left blank if not needed)
Summary: (a brief summary of this work, to grab people's attention)
Rating: K,T,M // P,PG,R ?
Link: a link to your fanfiction.net posting of story, or if it's only available on AnimeSuki then the link to your post.

If you have more than one chapter on AS, please provide links to each post. If you have one chapter spread apart multiple post, please gather them together and place them in a single post for the ease of the people reading (the fanfiction thread is a good place to post them!)

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We... We can post right? I just noticed bad things went down last night and... Well er. Moving along.

This was posted in the (I guess old) thread but since it is locked and all. I'll like to remind people of something here: I didn't write this. This is written by my friend that is helping me with my little project here. I'll pass along all comments and such to him though of course.

Spoiler for Arc-en-Ciel:

Beauty on the Pyre
An Arc-en-Ciel teaser

Chapter One
Riding on the Winds of Change

There was something unsettling about this woman. The way she simply sighed and stared; gazing out the great glass window into the starlit sky. Of course, her circumstances were far from enviable…but that didn’t mean she had to be a bitch about it. “More wine?” Erika offered with a cheerful smile – as best as she could manage. She was torn, really, between hating the Erika von Cale she knew for being reduced to mollycoddling their honoured guest and relishing the challenge of finding out what made her tick. Erika bit on her thumb, wide eyed in anticipation of such a simple answer. The pause was insufferably pregnant.

“No…thanks.” She spoke! Erika’s eye twitched ever so slightly. For once, the Inquisitor had met her apparent match. With practiced habit, she brushed her dusty blonde hair out of her eyes and made to relax. It was…well, it was hard. You could almost feel the power coursing from her – backed up by a confidence that simply oozed from every pore in her body. Even here, effectively a prisoner like this woman was, and surrounded by the most impressive security features known to the Emperor she remained undaunted.

To tell the honest truth, Erika did not feel entirely safe. Years of instinct were screaming at her to run or fight or something! Anything but sit here and sip expensive drinks (though, Erika mused, the red was particularly fine). She licked her lips and poured herself another glass, raising it to her mouth. Fate Testarossa…what a unique, talented, arrogant, prideful little minx she was. Erika smiled to herself. She hated her.

I also finished the 2nd chapter of School of Lyrical and will be updating it on Fanfiction.net once I get back from my English class in a few hours.

*Cracks knuckles* Right, new thread, new start. Since I can't whip up a new fic in a few minutes, I'll start of with a repost. It's been months since I last worked on this story, so a little review of what happened might be a good idea.

Now, this story is intended to dive into Ancient Belka, which -being a non canonical setting- means that there will be OC's apearing next to the main cast. They will be introduced, though, and I'll make effort to keep them limited.

Legend of Ancient Belka: Fall of an Empire.

Spoiler for Prologue:

Carim sat down behind her desk with a sigh. Today had been a busy day; a group of Scrya’s had made an archeological discovery that had the potential to reveal much of the still hidden information on the history of Ancient Belka. She took a deep breath, and commed Schach.

“Can I help you, Knight Carim?”

“Yes, I was wondering if you could bring me some tea?”

“Ahh, long report to write?” Schach answered, half-guessing where this was going.

“Yes.”

“I’ll be there right away.”

Carim smiled as the screen closed. She could always count on Schach in these things. She shifted in her seat slightly as a new screen popped up, and after marking the date, she began to type.

Scryan archeologists have made an astonishing discovery today. In the ruins of a faraway enclave, a small group of Scrya’s had discovered a library of sorts. Quick investigations pointed out that it used to be Belkan in origin. Though most of it was empty, and what was left was almost destroyed in decay, a few precious documents had been found reasonably intact. Among these was mention of something that has the potential to shake our known history of the Ancient Belka to the core.

The documents spoke of many legendary figures, but also a word that we have, to this record, rarely encountered. The document spoke of the Primarch.

The Primarch are figures shrouded in the veil of history to this day. Legends and stories about them are abundant, but we are not sure which to believe. If this document is true, it could a key to unraveling the mystery behind the Primarchs.

Among one particular file of the documents we found a picture of a young woman.

The picture is in remarkable condition, despite being damaged by the sands of time. It is to this point unsure what she has to do with the Primarchs, but from what little has been translated so far, it seems that she was of importance enough to be heavily weaved throughout the document. Some of our most talented linguists are working day and night to reveal the information that this young woman holds.

While we cannot be sure of anything, I am confident that this discovery will open the door to whole new realms of knowledge of the Ancient Belka.

Spoiler for Part 1 A burning vessel:

Part 1: A burning vessel.

Hot.

It was so incredibly hot.

Fires were burning all around her, flames tearing away at the controls of what was once the greatest weapon of the Belkan Empire, burning the bodies of the fallen that lay scattered throughout the room. Flames that dried her tears as fast as they flowed from her eyes.

And yet, the heat of the flames barely registered even in the back of her mind, her thoughts focused on the girl she held in her arms.

So much blood. She had never really paid attention to it before, but was it really possible for a human being to lose this much blood?

No, she already knew the answer. It was possible for a human being to lose this much blood, but it was not possible to survive losing it.

Even for one such as her.

“Why?”

The girl tilted her head upwards, meeting her eyes. The very motion seemed to strain her to the extreme as her entire body seemed to shudder while making the attempt. Blue eyes met her own pair of mismatched ones, one green, one red, as the blood covered girl curved her mouth in a small smile.

“Because I had to.”

The words were like a dagger to her heart. Renewed tears fell from her eyes as her grip on the girl tightened.

“Why? Why did you have to? Because of your duty!? Because of your oath!?”

“Heh.” The girl’s body shuddered as the small chuckle escaped her lips. “When did I ever do things I did not want to do myself?”

“But why?” She repeated again. She wanted an answer. No, she needed an answer. She would not be able to live with herself if she never found out why.

“You always do. No matter how you try to hide it behind your harsh attitude, you always blame yourself. What happened here was my choice and mine alone.” The girl smiled. “I am a selfish girl after all.”

“If only you hadn’t been assigned this duty.” She lowered her head in sadness and shame. This was her fault. It was for her that this had happened. For her that she had sacrificed herself.

A shudder coming from the girl’s body startled her out of the path her thoughts were taking as her worried eyes resettled on the girl in her arms. Another shudder, and the girl’s eyes closed in a wince as she suppressed another chuckle.

“Nor do I. But if I know you will live, I am all right with it.” The girl’s blue eyes traveled upwards again, seeking her mismatched ones. “Will you live?”

At that moment, she wanted nothing more then to lie. To deny that she could make it out alive easily. Anything to prevent what she feared.

But the words came, even though she did not want to.

“Yes, I will live.”

The girl’s face softened, as if a great burden had been lifted. “Then, this is goodbye.”

Her eyes widened.

“Goodbye… Vivio…”

The girl’s eyes closed, and her body went limp in her arms. A lock of red hair slowly fell in front of the now closed eyes. Saint king Vivio Sakurazaki’s eyes slowly widened as realized what had just happened.

“…Alistina?”

She shook the body in her hands, refusing to accept the truth.

“Alistina? ALISTINA!”

But the blue eyes never opened. The saint king collapsed on the body in tears, not believing that the one person who had been at her side forever was now gone.

How had it come to this?

Spoiler for Chapter 2: Playing with politics::

Chapter 02: Playing with politics

The Royal Palace, center of the Belkan Empire, its towers pointed high towards the sky. And at the moment, a field of battle.

Not a normal field of battle, oh no, many of the palace’s occupants knew how to handle a normal battle. This was a battle of a different kind, a battle where it does not matter how skilled you are with the sword, or how many enemies you have slain.

“This situation is unacceptable!”

This was a battle of words.

“According to your words, Lord Beckert.”

The council hall, possibly the biggest room in the palace itself. Surprisingly exotically decorated, and filled with one huge central table. Filling the table were politicians. Lords, ladies, senators, whichever ruled their respective territories. All were here in the council room to appeal their words the senate, and the king of Belka.

True, the Belkan Empire was an Empire, and as such the final say was made by the ruling person, but one person can only govern so much. The Belkan Empire stretched several worlds, which made the need for a bureaucracy apparent, though not any more liked.

“Do you not see?” A brown haired man with a short beard almost shouted through the great room. “We have finally taken the border country out of the hands of those wretched rebels. Many of our own have suffered severe financial difficulty thanks to that rebellious scum. The country should immediately start compensating us for our troubles.”

“But they had no choice; they were occupied by the enemy force. According to the reports their financial status is even worse then ours.” Another councilmember protested.

“They should be thankful that we even bothered to drive the rebels from their lands. I still say that we simply should have brought out the Cradle and-”

“That would be enough, Lord Beckert.”

All heads turned into the direction of the king, or rather the person next to the king. Long red hair flowing behind her, blue eyes piercing the lord in question.

“This talk on what could have been done is pointless. What has happened has happened, we have reclaimed a country that was taken away from us, that is all. To demand gratitude of them would be beyond stupidity.”

A different council member, a young long haired blonde man, decided to voice his opinion on the matter. “But lady Alistina, surely you agree that we cannot simply excuse them? From what I heard, they offered only little resistance against the rebel forces.”

“Would you do any different, councilor Torië, if your family was threatened to be killed on the spot? Regardless, to the people in that country, all that has happened is that they changed rule yet again. We must be sure to keep their loyalty, so that we have to station less forces to keep the place under control.”

Lord Beckert snorted. “If they have realized that their rule has changed, they should know that their laws have changed. That is all.”

“That would be like inviting the rebel forces back into the country. We need to gain their loyalty, Lord Beckert, not lose it.”

“And requesting compensation for rescuing them would do so?”

Lady Alistina shook her head. “Tell a conquered man he has a new master, and he'll shrug. Tell him his new master demands a fifth of his annual income, and he'll go and find his pitchfork.”

For a moment it seemed as if Lord Beckert would continue the argument, but to many of the room’s occupant’s surprise, he sat back down. Lord Beckert’s features changed little as he sat back down, save for a nigh undetectable twitch in his right eye.

A twitch that did not escape the king.

“Very well Lady Alistina, you have made your point. We shall give this country a while to catch its breath, and for us to gain their trust.”

The king’s decision was made, the debate was over. As it always went, the occupants in the room had been arguing back and forth for quite a while before the king finally made her decision.

Her decision.

One would expect a king to be a man, a proud man who would lead his people through the light and dark days that their lands faced. Who would take up the sword and smash any evil that opposed him and his subjects.

Perhaps that is why she was called a king.

The Belkan Empire was lead by a king, as it had always been. The Saint King of Belka. The royal blood of the empire. The current king had all the qualities of her predecessors, and also had a beautiful face. And until recently the Empire had flourished under her rule as it had always.

Therefore no one questioned the king’s gender.

~~~

Later that evening, the king and Lady Alistina were waking through the corridors of the grand palace.

“You played a dangerous game today, Alistina.”

Alistina sighed. “These are politics, Vivio. Every word you speak is a dangerous game.”

The king sighed. “How often must I tell you that I do not wish to be called by that name?”

“Why not? I’ve been calling you that since forever. Besides, it’s your name, isn’t it? Saint king Vivio Sakura Zaki, king of the Belkan Empire.” Alistina said dramatically.

“It is a child’s name, at least call me Sakura.”

“Never.” Alistina replied with a grin.

‘Vivio’ surpressed a frustrated cry, and decided to shift the subject. “Back to the matter of the council, you were taunting them the entire time, what will you do if Lord Beckert decides to retaliate?”

“You’re worried about Beckert? He’s the least of our worries. He’s a warrior through and through, strong and opposing, and he obviously knew when to back down, but he lacks the skill with words. He can do little more then bark in the council hall. No, I’m far more worried about Torië.”

“Councilor Torië? I do not see why you are worried about him; he has been quite helpful these last few weeks.”

Alistina shook her head. “Vivio, you are a great knights, and a great leader, but you are just as bad as Beckert when it comes to politics.”

“What do you mean?” Vivio asked, slightly upset at her skills being put down like that.

“Not counting me, Torië is one of the youngest members of the council. He holds no prestigious lineage, and he has no title to speak off. For someone like him to have reached a post as important like this at such an age means that he knows every trick, every flaw, and every exploit in the world of politics. Someone like him would literally go over corpses to gain more power.” Alistina explained.

“Alistina, you do realize that that is a very serious accusation?” Vivio queried.

“But a very accurate one.” Alistina responded. “You noticed what he said in the council hall today? It sounded very polite, but it was actually him probing how far he could push things around in a serious situation.”

“I see…” Vivio responded thoughtfully. “So how do you suggest we handle him?”

“Dump a potato sack over his head, tie him up and kick him into the deepest hole we can find.”

Vivio jerked to a halt and turned to observe the red haired girl’s face with incredulous eyes. To her credit, Alistina actually managed to keep her face straight for a few seconds before she broke down in a laughing fit.

“Oh this is great. You should have seen the incredulous look on your face.”

Vivio’s eyes settled in a glare as she placed her hands on her hips. “This is a serious matter Alistina, it is not something to joke around with.”

“Duty, duty, duty. Relax, we’re not in the council hall anymore. Besides, there is nothing we can do about him at the moment.”

Vivio tried to keep the glare on her face, but soon she sighed and let her hands slump to her side. “At times like I find it very hard to believe we actually share the same genes.”

Alistina grinned. “Genes don’t make the person. Now come on, let’s go get some rest. My brothers should be returning tomorrow, and I doubt they will be the bringers of good news.”

Next chapter, Meetings and brothers.
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Quote:

Originally Posted by krisslanza

We... We can post right? I just noticed bad things went down last night and... Well er. Moving along.

This was posted in the (I guess old) thread but since it is locked and all. I'll like to remind people of something here: I didn't write this. This is written by my friend that is helping me with my little project here. I'll pass along all comments and such to him though of course.

Spoiler for Arc-en-Ciel:

Beauty on the Pyre
An Arc-en-Ciel teaser

Chapter One
Riding on the Winds of Change

There was something unsettling about this woman. The way she simply sighed and stared; gazing out the great glass window into the starlit sky. Of course, her circumstances were far from enviable…but that didn’t mean she had to be a bitch about it. “More wine?” Erika offered with a cheerful smile – as best as she could manage. She was torn, really, between hating the Erika von Cale she knew for being reduced to mollycoddling their honoured guest and relishing the challenge of finding out what made her tick. Erika bit on her thumb, wide eyed in anticipation of such a simple answer. The pause was insufferably pregnant.

“No…thanks.” She spoke! Erika’s eye twitched ever so slightly. For once, the Inquisitor had met her apparent match. With practiced habit, she brushed her dusty blonde hair out of her eyes and made to relax. It was…well, it was hard. You could almost feel the power coursing from her – backed up by a confidence that simply oozed from every pore in her body. Even here, effectively a prisoner like this woman was, and surrounded by the most impressive security features known to the Emperor she remained undaunted.

To tell the honest truth, Erika did not feel entirely safe. Years of instinct were screaming at her to run or fight or something! Anything but sit here and sip expensive drinks (though, Erika mused, the red was particularly fine). She licked her lips and poured herself another glass, raising it to her mouth. Fate Testarossa…what a unique, talented, arrogant, prideful little minx she was. Erika smiled to herself. She hated her.

I also finished the 2nd chapter of School of Lyrical and will be updating it on Fanfiction.net once I get back from my English class in a few hours.

And err... If we weren't meant to post like this. Sorry. *Flee*

Fate imprissoned? Empreror? Questions are raised, none are answered. As a hint, it would be handy to make sure the next chapter caries a more detailed introduction on Erika, perhaps only the basics (apearance) but maybe more detailed (apearance, short past, personallity). That way we get a better feel of the character.

Well to be fair Keroko it was meant to be a teaser... So it was meant to be short enough to grasp your attention and get that exact reaction you just went through. So it worked. Bwhahahahahahah. And I'm sure in the full chapter you'd know Erika's full looks

But I'll pass along those comments when he signs back in. Working on uploading School of Lyrical 2 (Which means typing it) then I'll take a peek at what you posted.

How do i killed thread?
that'll teach me to listen to the mods and not get involved in random snowballs rolling downhill...

anyway, @keroko: is it just a coincidence that Alistinas picture bears a huge resemblance to your own avatar?
also, primarchs, the moment i read that i got the mental image of big burly men from WH40k, then the picture you attached came along for a mental image clash of the century, causing me to lock down for several seconds ... but i got better, really wish there was more though as the premise is interesting. well, as long as no emperors come around anyway...

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Sayings and quotes hold wisdom in them. Either the wisdom is found in the correctness of the quote, or in the lesson learned from the error.
Hard part is figuring out who's making the errors...

Lyrical Days update will be on hold for a day while I situate myself. Next chapter of Saved by the bell should be started on tonight

Also, if post here and have your Nanoha stories on FF.N, let me know so I can add you to my list. If you post stories here and don't have them on FF.N.... I'm trying to work out a system that could work

Broken link there. Any FF links with the word secure and live preview is accessible to the author alone. Click on your FF bio (and hope you did not click before adding the chapter) to find the right link.

And Satashi-san works fast. I hadn't even sent in a pm yet.

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Originally Posted by Satashi

Also, if post here and have your Nanoha stories on FF.N, let me know so I can add you to my list. If you post stories here and don't have them on FF.N.... I'm trying to work out a system that could work

I think post count links at the top right corner of that certain specific post works?

But as a random suggestion to make it neater...cut out the author's comments line? Unless if it's specifically requested, I don't think there's a real need for it. But that's just me. I don't have any specific comments to make, since I'm used to rambling in fics itself.

Spoiler for And several other trimmings for neat look..:

Ignis Fatuus
Genre: Drama/Romance
Main couple: Fate, Nanoha
Summary: If things were not what they seem to be. An illusion. A misleading truth. Is there even a truth? AU fiction. FateNanoha.
Rating:T

I did suggest bolding and italizing too, but then that did be too much work. Point in fact, I think it is already too much work... *gives e-cookie to Satashi*

anyway, @keroko: is it just a coincidence that Alistinas picture bears a huge resemblance to your own avatar?

Well... yes and no. It's a bit complicated. You see, the girl in my avatar is my main OC, Keroko, so they are not the same girls. Storywise, however, Alistina is a sort of 'link' between Vivio and Keroko, as Keroko reminds Vivio of Alistina. But that's OC-thread stuff and doesnt really have much to do with this story.

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Originally Posted by SpaceBrotha

also, primarchs, the moment i read that i got the mental image of big burly men from WH40k, then the picture you attached came along for a mental image clash of the century, causing me to lock down for several seconds ... but i got better, really wish there was more though as the premise is interesting. well, as long as no emperors come around anyway...

Funny thing is, the Primarchs in Fall of an Empire were inspired by the 40K Primarchs. :3

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Originally Posted by Satashi

@Keroko: What's the name of that story?

Whoops, I forgot.

The full title is 'Legend of Ancient Belka: Fall of an Empire', mostly shortened to 'Fall of an Empire.'

Wow the Nanoha section is either heavily frequented or my works are actually getting a name for themselves considering I've broken the 200 hit mark faster then ever before. I used to be able to refresh every few minutes and see the hits going up!

All the comments make me very happy. Makes my time of writing it all out very much worth it.
Chapter 3 won't be up until at least Monday. I think I'll drop by college to use their webz tomorrow, but I won't be done with it by then (I haven't even started it yet). Again this is not set in stone; at EARLIEST Monday. But it could be a longer wait. But I am aiming for a Monday release, failing that Tuesday... And so on.

Once School of Lyrical is done I'll begin work on my... I guess you can call it masterpiece project A big word I know, but I don't think I've written anything of the scale I am imagining it to be. The overall thing me and my partner in crime dubbed 'Arc-en-Ciel', and you saw a snippet of the 'series' from the Varista point of view (From Erika von Cale's eyes). Mine would be seeing the stuff from the TSAB's view through Rune's eyes.

I hope it'll be epic But it is a ways off. A lot of work to do... If you want, I can ask my partner if he wants to have chapter 1 done as a teaser or something

archive post updated, please check if there are any mistakes in your section. If you are not added yet, please PM me with the information.

(Keroko please let me know what to add on yours)

On that note, I'm going to start writing on my fics now ^^;

Fast Lyrical Days. Sorry it's not too long but I want to start on SbTB as well tonight.

Spoiler for Lyrical Days:

I was never really one to shop for girls but Nanoha's comment this morning was still bothering me. I knew she was just teasing but there was still something in the way she said it, some faint hint of sadness, that I couldn't help but pick up on. This thought ran over in my mind again and again as I looked at what was before me. Nothing caught my eye right away and I almost gave up on the store before finding something that looked promising. The glass jewelry cases in the middle of the store grabbed my attention, or rather a bracelet inside of it did. A medium sized linked silver bracelet was sparkling in the light almost as if calling out to me. On it was one matching silver charm in the shape of a heart.

'A charm bracelet,' I realized, looking at the several types of charms that could be added to it. 'Simple, pretty, shiny, and it just screams Nanoha.' I stood up straight and met the clerk's eye to call them over to me and ten minutes later I was back out in the cold, now fifty dollars lighter. Although the blow to my wallet stung, I was rather pleased with my purchase. Nanoha was always there for me, it was about time I showed my appreciation.

“I'm home!” I called out as always when I opened the door to the house I now shared with two girls.

Nanoha, as always, came to me with a smile. “Welcome home. You hungry?”

“Pizza,” The girl informed me while rocking on her heels while waiting on me to finish taking off my shoes. “How was Hayate-chan?”

“A lot better.” Walking in, I held up the bag so she could see it. “I have something for you.”

“Oh?” Her face lit with curiosity. “What is it?”

“It's a box.” I took out the long slender jewelry case and held back a chuckle at Nanoha's reaction to cover her mouth in surprise. “Sure are happy about a box.”

“What's in it?” She reached for it and pouted when I moved it away. Trying again, she stood on her tip toes and reached for the case when I held it up. “Stop teasing me!”

“But it's fun.” I let her try once again before bringing it down and handing it to her. “Here, I hope you like.”

“I will,” She assured me before happily clicking open the case and fawning over the simple gift. “Awwwww, it's so kyute!”

“...Did you just say 'kyute'?”

“What on Earth made you buy me a gift?” She sounded happier than I've heard her in the past month or so. “Aw, I love it. A little heart and everything.” The bracelet was put on and looked at again now that it was on her wrist. “Thank you!” I got a tight hug, which I returned.

“I just thought I'd get it for you. No reason really.”

“You're the best.” To my surprise Nanoha got on her tiptoes and pecked my cheek. “Thanks a lot.”

“Welcome.” I touched the spot I was kissed and felt my lips turn up lightly to a smile. “You haven't kissed me in ages.”

“Well, if you would do things to warrant it, I'd kiss you more often.” She had a faint tint of blush on her cheeks, keeping her eyes on the sparking bracelet still. She stared at it for a moment longer before suddenly gasping out. “The pizza!” Quickly she ran to the kitchen and pulled the oven door open, quickly taking out the food. “Oh thank goodness, it's just a little brown on top.” Sliding it onto a cutting board, she went to dust her peel with corn starch before slipping the next one onto it. “Yuuno-kun, this one is yours. It'll take about six minutes so get comfortable and I'll bring it to you when it's done okay?”

“She ate dinner and conked out. Said she had a hard day.” The girl closed the oven door and walked over to me. Turning around, she faced the same way I was and leaned back against me, pulling my arms to wrap around her front. “It's a little chilly in here.”

“Put on clothes.” I teased. The girl was in her pajamas, which consisted of nothing more than a large shirt that went to her knees.

“But this is comfortable.” She protested while playing with my hands, eyes still darting to the gift she was wearing. “And you're warm.”

“Keep moving my hands like that and I'll end up feeling you up.”

“I don't mind,” She replied airily. “Go for it.”

“...I really will if you say that.”

“Then do it.”

“...I'm not in the mood.”

“Sure,” She giggled to herself and I couldn't help but chuckle. “Ne, question?”

“Yes?”

Nanoha looked over her shoulder at me. “Am I feminine?”

“What do you mean?” I blinked. “Such a sudden question.”

“Hm. Well,” She thought about it. “I kind of get love letters every now and then, but they are normally from people I don't even know. I have a fanclub you know?”

“I know.” I hated those guys. A group of about fifteen that basically worshiped the ground Nanoha walked on.

“But besides those, I don't really get any attention. Am I not feminine enough? Am I attractive?” I pondered it, allowing her to turn around in my arms and look at me. “Even you don't ever look at me when you have the chance.”

“I look at you all the time.”

“Not when I'm naked.”

I blinked. “You want me to look at you naked?”

“No!” She shook her head. “I mean when the situation comes up, when I walk across the hall in only a towel or something. Your eyes never once dropped to look. Am I not feminine?”

Acting on impulse, I reached forward and popped the top snap-buttons on Nanoha's shirt open, revealing her breast fully. “Hmmm.... I give you about an eight.”

Her face slowly turned scarlet but stood there a full five seconds before letting out a 'kya!' and turning around to button them. “Pervert!”

“Yup. I get that way around very feminine women.”

Nanoha slowed down her buttoning and looked back over at me, smiling. “I'll forgive you this time.”

“Thank you,” I teased back.

“But next time,” She winked. “I might just slap you.”

“You want a next time?”

“Maybe, nyaha!” With that she went over to the oven and checked my food. I didn't understand girls sometimes, but right now I could tell Nanoha was happy. She really wanted attention and a little encouragement that she was pretty. I had given her both tonight and her smile was really cute right now. It was this simple moment that made me glad we shared a house together.

~**~

Sunday again; a day off with nothing to do. From the burning smell of death coming from my door I could tell Fate was trying to make breakfast. After a glance out my window I saw Nanoha outside playing in the snow. I knew already that Hayate was going to be shopping today so she could get out of the house. As for me...

A.) Nanoha was so happy last night, I really should treat her to something today to make sure she knows that I appreciate her.
B.) I did say I would take Fate out sometime... but since I bought a gift, it will be a cheap date, would she even like that?
C.) I can probably meet up with Hayate for lunch, if I don't die from Fate's breakfast. A good meal sounds good.

I was never really one to shop for girls but Nanoha's comment this morning was still bothering me. I knew she was just teasing but there was still something in the way she said it, some faint hint of sadness, that I couldn't help but pick up on. This thought ran over in my mind again and again as I looked at what was before me. Nothing caught my eye right away and I almost gave up on the store before finding something that looked promising. The glass jewelry cases in the middle of the store grabbed my attention, or rather a bracelet inside of it did. A medium sized linked silver bracelet was sparkling in the light almost as if calling out to me. On it was one matching silver charm in the shape of a heart.

'A charm bracelet,' I realized, looking at the several types of charms that could be added to it. 'Simple, pretty, shiny, and it just screams Nanoha.' I stood up straight and met the clerk's eye to call them over to me and ten minutes later I was back out in the cold, now fifty dollars lighter. Although the blow to my wallet stung, I was rather pleased with my purchase. Nanoha was always there for me, it was about time I showed my appreciation.

“I'm home!” I called out as always when I opened the door to the house I now shared with two girls.

Nanoha, as always, came to me with a smile. “Welcome home. You hungry?”

“Pizza,” The girl informed me while rocking on her heels while waiting on me to finish taking off my shoes. “How was Hayate-chan?”

“A lot better.” Walking in, I held up the bag so she could see it. “I have something for you.”

“Oh?” Her face lit with curiosity. “What is it?”

“It's a box.” I took out the long slender jewelry case and held back a chuckle at Nanoha's reaction to cover her mouth in surprise. “Sure are happy about a box.”

“What's in it?” She reached for it and pouted when I moved it away. Trying again, she stood on her tip toes and reached for the case when I held it up. “Stop teasing me!”

“But it's fun.” I let her try once again before bringing it down and handing it to her. “Here, I hope you like.”

“I will,” She assured me before happily clicking open the case and fawning over the simple gift. “Awwwww, it's so kyute!”

“...Did you just say 'kyute'?”

“What on Earth made you buy me a gift?” She sounded happier than I've heard her in the past month or so. “Aw, I love it. A little heart and everything.” The bracelet was put on and looked at again now that it was on her wrist. “Thank you!” I got a tight hug, which I returned.

“I just thought I'd get it for you. No reason really.”

“You're the best.” To my surprise Nanoha got on her tiptoes and pecked my cheek. “Thanks a lot.”

“Welcome.” I touched the spot I was kissed and felt my lips turn up lightly to a smile. “You haven't kissed me in ages.”

“Well, if you would do things to warrant it, I'd kiss you more often.” She had a faint tint of blush on her cheeks, keeping her eyes on the sparking bracelet still. She stared at it for a moment longer before suddenly gasping out. “The pizza!” Quickly she ran to the kitchen and pulled the oven door open, quickly taking out the food. “Oh thank goodness, it's just a little brown on top.” Sliding it onto a cutting board, she went to dust her peel with corn starch before slipping the next one onto it. “Yuuno-kun, this one is yours. It'll take about six minutes so get comfortable and I'll bring it to you when it's done okay?”

“She ate dinner and conked out. Said she had a hard day.” The girl closed the oven door and walked over to me. Turning around, she faced the same way I was and leaned back against me, pulling my arms to wrap around her front. “It's a little chilly in here.”

“Put on clothes.” I teased. The girl was in her pajamas, which consisted of nothing more than a large shirt that went to her knees.

“But this is comfortable.” She protested while playing with my hands, eyes still darting to the gift she was wearing. “And you're warm.”

“Keep moving my hands like that and I'll end up feeling you up.”

“I don't mind,” She replied airily. “Go for it.”

“...I really will if you say that.”

“Then do it.”

“...I'm not in the mood.”

“Sure,” She giggled to herself and I couldn't help but chuckle. “Ne, question?”

“Yes?”

Nanoha looked over her shoulder at me. “Am I feminine?”

“What do you mean?” I blinked. “Such a sudden question.”

“Hm. Well,” She thought about it. “I kind of get love letters every now and then, but they are normally from people I don't even know. I have a fanclub you know?”

“I know.” I hated those guys. A group of about fifteen that basically worshiped the ground Nanoha walked on.

“But besides those, I don't really get any attention. Am I not feminine enough? Am I attractive?” I pondered it, allowing her to turn around in my arms and look at me. “Even you don't ever look at me when you have the chance.”

“I look at you all the time.”

“Not when I'm naked.”

I blinked. “You want me to look at you naked?”

“No!” She shook her head. “I mean when the situation comes up, when I walk across the hall in only a towel or something. Your eyes never once dropped to look. Am I not feminine?”

Acting on impulse, I reached forward and popped the top snap-buttons on Nanoha's shirt open, revealing her breast fully. “Hmmm.... I give you about an eight.”

Her face slowly turned scarlet but stood there a full five seconds before letting out a 'kya!' and turning around to button them. “Pervert!”

“Yup. I get that way around very feminine women.”

Nanoha slowed down her buttoning and looked back over at me, smiling. “I'll forgive you this time.”

“Thank you,” I teased back.

“But next time,” She winked. “I might just slap you.”

“You want a next time?”

“Maybe, nyaha!” With that she went over to the oven and checked my food. I didn't understand girls sometimes, but right now I could tell Nanoha was happy. She really wanted attention and a little encouragement that she was pretty. I had given her both tonight and her smile was really cute right now. It was this simple moment that made me glad we shared a house together.

~**~

Sunday again; a day off with nothing to do. From the burning smell of death coming from my door I could tell Fate was trying to make breakfast. After a glance out my window I saw Nanoha outside playing in the snow. I knew already that Hayate was going to be shopping today so she could get out of the house. As for me...

A.) Nanoha was so happy last night, I really should treat her to something today to make sure she knows that I appreciate her.
B.) I did say I would take Fate out sometime... but since I bought a gift, it will be a cheap date, would she even like that?
C.) I can probably meet up with Hayate for lunch, if I don't die from Fate's breakfast. A good meal sounds good.

Well that present worked out just fine . Yuuno has an interesting way of reassuring a girl of her femininity. A good result overall for that area. Poor Fate her cooking referred to as "the burning smell of death."

Glad that Nanoha is looking a little better. Leaving her alone too much could have taken things to a bad place. As always quite the relationship going on with Yuuno there.

Now for the next course of action. Has been a while since doing something with Fate. Just ignoring her isn't going to help things all that much. Have done plenty with Hayate so can spend a turn doing what we can elsewhere. Somehow don't think Fate would care that much how much money was spent on the date. So will go B this time. Though I'm not sure when I picked the winning one last...hmm Maybe I'm out of touch.