A Flag Among The Rubble

Below is the poem entitled A Flag Among The Rubble which was written by poet
Donna
Jones. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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Life is indeed a mixed blessing. You make that point here. Thanks for this piece of work. I guess without sorrow, there can be no appreciation for happiness. I do prefer the latter. The former is part of existence. Society seems sometime to make it worse.

I like it Donna. My only suggestion might be to build up to the thought in the first couplet rather than stating it up front. It makes a more powerful poem, I think. If you do this, you might also want to consider changing the title to something more cryptic in order not to give it away before you reveal it at the end.
Cheers, Roy

Donna, what I was referring to before is that a good poem should be somewhat seductive. Just like telling a joke, you don't give away the punch line up front. You want a bit of mystery to tease the reader into reading more. Then hit them with your best shot when you have them roped in. Your imagery is awesome, BTW.

Well thanks for all the suggestions. I had to get a dictionary to look up some of he words, haha. No really I do need to take a writing course or something I guess because all I know to do is write down exactly what I feel just like I talk which gets me in trouble too. I take your help with open arms and will try. Please keep helping.

Well Jack if you say so...I simply feel I am ripping pages out of a diary I have kept locked away, writing in when I feel blue. I so appreciate all the kindness shown here and now realize I'm not alone in my way of things.

Donna...I absolutely love this!...'A flag flying in the rubble'...awesome!... So very thankful and blessed to have discovered your poems via your kind comments... by the way, this poem is called a 'couplet'...and a darn good one too...perfect rhyme throughout...welcome! - Tim