I love the idea! I think she sounds like a great character. Plus the love interest element you are playing with sounds so cute! But, there were a few grammar/spelling mistakes and the length could be longer in future chapters. But definitely keep writing! You have a good thing going here!

AHHH, okay..ughhhhhhh i've been waiting FOREVER for you to update this.. i think it's awesome. Even though she's mute--I think it adds more to the story. PUH-LEASE update for the sake of my sanity.
<3 haha

Author's Response: I'm sorry she bores you . but here's the thing: if you're mute.... you can NOT talk! it's not going to be one of those things where she makes a potion, drinks it and can suddenly talk again. usually, if you're mute, that's how you stay. So, sorry if it bores you, but this is the way it's going to stay..... thanks for your review! ^_^