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I like this a lot. Even in a small time frame you've created a love story that we seem to know the history of more than is actually said and explained. I kept thinking Jake was going to do a better job of apologizing, since I mean, it's a pretty understandable thing to spend time with a family member, unless he had some reason that this one date was so important, like, he'd spent weeks planning it or something.

This love story is a glimpse into what we all kind of want. A best friend to be our significant other, and so fourth. Your descriptions were really great, though, you did have a few typos here and there. Easily fixed.

I'd like it if you cleaned this up and maybe even expanded on it just a little bit. :)
-Ez