Great first chapter. I think you do a nice job of conveying Ron's grief, especially through the conversation he has with Hermione about erasing memories. I also liked how Ron turned to Hermione for comfort at first, and then how he responded to her. It all seemed very true to how a person would deal with grief. There are some great quotes in the story too: "the indecently beautiful day", "both with thoughts whirring faster than an agitated sneakoscope", "his ears began turning the familiar shade of red". And the ending seems appropriate as well because it defnitely gives the message that life moves on after great tragedy. Overall, it was very nicely done! Hope you update soon! :)

Author's Response: Thank you, I tried to use personal experience with grief for Ron. I'm glad it came across! I am just waiting for my second chapter to be approved :) Thank you so much!