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Gabriella Hunter says:Hello!

Hey, there, its Gabbie with your requested review and I'm sorry that its taken me a minute. I've been weirdly busy and blah, blah, blah and so I haven't been reading or reviewing as much. But anyway, here we are! :D
Devlin is one crafty little guy, isn't he? I thought all of his thought processes were really good, I could sense that despite some of his more mature reactions that he was still just a child. He was overreacting at everything and analyzing whatever her could in an effort to escape. For a moment I actually thought that he would but was relieved when he wasn't able to escape the way he would have wanted. Alex is alot smarter at handling him than Harry is and I like the distinction that you've made between the two of them. She's being more cautious but Harry is wearing his heart on his sleeve a little too boldly and I'm not sure whether or not Devlin will hurt him even worse for it. Devlin doesn't want to be there but for just one moment or two I could sense that he was having his doubts. I hope you play around with that later! :D
As for Emma, I really feel for her, everything has to be very confusing. I liked that you didn't have her immediately welcoming Devlin either and actually being afraid of him, it was very realistic. As was her last line, children sort of block things out in their own way and I think this chapter sort of played on that. As for CC's! BUM. I hardly spotted any, save for just one or two grammar things but other than that, it was a great read! :D
Thanks so much!
Much love,
Gabbie

Author's Response: Hey Gabbie! It's alright. I totally understand about life getting in the way - it's happening to me right now and I feel like I am having withdrawal symptoms from reading and writing fan fiction ;)

Devlin is very clever. I'm glad you could see the boy beneath it all.

**For a moment I actually thought that he would but was relieved when he wasn't able to escape the way he would have wanted.** What's funny is that if you tweaked this comment a little bit, it would also be very appropriate for the chapter I am in the middle of writing. ;)

Alex is definitely of the mindset that being overly sensitive toward Devlin will just make things worse and as you can clearly see, Harry is operating under a different belief. I also feel like Alex feels she is compensating for Harry a bit and Harry feels he is compensating for Alex and - as you can see it makes them very distinct in their approaches.

**Devlin doesn't want to be there but for just one moment or two I could sense that he was having his doubts. I hope you play around with that later!** Oh, I definitely do! I tried really hard not to use the words "when they found out what he had done" because that is the cliche reason and I think Devlin is too knowledgeable for it - I think he knows deep down that an act wouldn't make them less interested in him, but he perceives himself to be entirely different from them. It is what I think Voldemort would have drilled into his head as well as the whole Death Eater culture. I wanted it to be an us vs them thing. "They'll hate me because of what I am" not for what he might have done. Also, I want to keep everyone guessing about what exactly Devlin HAS done...because I'm evil like that. ;)

**I liked that you didn't have her immediately welcoming Devlin either and actually being afraid of him, it was very realistic.** Thanks. It was kind of hard to write her that way, because she is such an out going girl later in the story, but I knew she'd be cautious like any child. Glad it came across smoothly! :D I also really liked her last sentence - a complete and abrupt change of subject that only a small child can pull off so well. ;)