I like the idea. The whole eachothers addiction conclusion is so cute! Gawd I love this couple (they're my fav )

The way they spoke seemed believable, however, I think the actual dialogue was a bit rushed. I have a feeling that Mello might take some more convincing to give up his beloved chocolate. And, oh yes, I mean CONVINCING. ;) Also, I think it may have been more powerful as a scene rather than a summary of the on going issues. You could have incorperated bits from the past in their diaologue. Keep up the good work! I like the way you think, so I'll be looking for more of you ;)