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Visual Review

Karaoke.

OP/ED were both unsubbed. Do note, Hadena, that just because you don’t have a TL doesn’t mean you can’t have karaoke. Just ask one of the other groups on the show for permission to use their scripts. It’s only a matter of courtesy, since nothing’s stopping you from doing it without asking, but you may as well take the high road. You know, just so you can look down on people for once.

The bigger groups have too much pride to refuse, and they get put in a really awkward position when they do. So check with those guys first. But really, I wouldn’t worry about it. Most groups will oblige.

That being said, yeah, you’re getting docked for no OP/ED. Accept my humble gomens for the affront.

Typesetting.

Enjoy it, cuz that’s all you’re getting.

Other.

I really, really hate this font.

I guess this is all right, though.

Script Review

Karaoke.

N/A.

Main Script.

have been -> has been

I’d make a joke about has-beens here, but you’ve been doing a lot better recently. And you never really were anything in the first place.

I commend you for attempting to convey character with the dialogue. However, droppin’ g’s and addin’ apostrophes is the laziest way to do it. And when you do it wrong (“ya” doesn’t have an apostrophe, for example), it looks pretty bad.

Yunboro, and

You’re tripping over your words, Hadena. I just hope one of these days you break your neck from it.

Drop the “to” from the second line. It hurts the sentence and my eyes.

This ain’t a potluck she’s talking about. The proper word here is “contributes”, not “brings”. Alternatively, you could use the phrase “brings something to the table” (I wouldn’t mind a potluck right though, om nom).

If you’re forced to an option, it’s not really regarded as an option anymore.

“In order to regain their position as the threatening side, they will be forced to spill more blood.”

You are ruining the lesbian slave sex scene for me. Don’t do that. It’s the only reason I have to watch this shitty Avatar wannabe.

And this is a kilogram of failure.

I don’t know how to break this to you guys, but Ledo isn’t a military.

“With your power, isn’t it possible that you could destroy us, too?”

I sure you English need work.

they

What did I tell you about ruining my fap material, Hadena?

No, that ain’t fucking right. He wants this addressed to the ships directly.

“Have it retreat. All other ships, continue…”

This is the most innovation in fansubs I’ve seen this entire season, but I don’t think you’re moving in the right direction.

Goddammit. This chick is the only good thing about this godforsaken show, and I’m not pleased you’re trying to fuck this up for me.

Why is “repeat” capitalized?

The fuck is “safety of your lives” supposed to mean? I don’t need a headache this early in the morning, Hadena. 7 AM shouldn’t have to be my happy hour.

Somehow I don’t think she’s talking in the third-person. I hope your dicks rot off, because I’m limp now. You ruined this show for me, Hadena. Fuck you.

Results

Watchability: Watchable.

Visual grade: F+

Script grade: D-

Overall grade: D-

Hadena somehow managed to edit the CR script into something worse than it was. It didn’t literally cause me cancer though, so I guess I’ll save ’em from the F-tier ax.

Looks like your best bet for this show is UTW-Vivid, even though I heard they’re forcing Japan to delay TV airings just so they can have a faster fansub release. Bastards.Back to top

The third person thing with the chick with the big boobs, Deadfish uses third person, too. I don’t know any Japanese so I refer to your maniacal wisdom, D_S. Deadfish translates the name as “Rakage”, I think. I think they are trying to say “Wreckage” or something. I hope the next enemy has some big boobs, too.