9. If I may suggest one

alteration...I would trade the phrase "white race", whenever possible, for "white culture." Many people of different races can adopt white culture....including all its inherent prejudices and failures. And a white person can adopt and be accepted into other cultures. Phrasing it this way takes the racial determinism out of the equation and avoids the hazard of being pegged as singling out people based exclusively on their genetic make up.