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ShadowRose says:Hi Jami! You know, I've actually been planning on reading and reviewing this when I got the time, so it really worked out well that I get to review this. :)

I really like how you've portrayed Oliver in this. He's older than he usually is in FF, and it really shows in his personality. He still has a grasp on his Quidditch-obsession, but it's a bit toned-down, and mixed with the memories of his past. You do a really great job of combining both his previous personality and how he was affected by the Second Wizarding War, which is pretty difficult, and something a lot of authors can struggle with.

Oh gosh, Aidan. The funny thing is that one of the kids I worked with in a summer camp last week was named Aidan, and the two are so, so similar. They're both really bubbly and really into their sport of choice (for your Aidan, that would be Quidditch, and for mine, gymnastics, haha).

Mia's character is interesting too, even though we really don't know all that much about her next. She's obviously got quite a backstory, considering that she has a son and no husband, and the mention of her husband closes her off. I'm really interested to see how you develop her storyline in the future.

I really liked how you mentioned Fred's death in here. To be honest, I'd never really thought about how it would affect Oliver, but now that I think about it, the two would have known each other for quite a few years thanks to Quidditch. Oh gosh, and when you mentioned him carrying Colin's body after the battle - that was a really excellently placed detail that really added to the effects that the war had on him.

Overall, this is a really great start, and I'm excited to read the next chapter!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)

Author's Response: Hi Taylor! Writing more of an adult story was what I had set in mind when starting this, and Oliver fit the bill perfectly! I didn't want to veer into next gen, but really didn't want to use any of the main characters. I'm so excited that you like how i've portrayed him so far!!

I didn't want the first chapter to go buy without the hint of how much he's gone through to be okay, and I'm happy you felt like it I combined his past and present well! I sort of went on a tangent with the section of his war related thoughts :P

Aidan was my first idea for this story. I spend so much time with kids, that I guess they were bound to leak through into a FF eventually :P. And that's adorable that the little one you worked with was into gymnastics!

Thank you so much for this sweet review. This story is still on sort of shaky waters for me... I'm used to threading tragedy into any sort of fluff, so this is new territory!