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UnluckyStar57 says:Hello. I noticed that this story didn't have any reviews yet, and now at the bottom of this page, I'm wondering why that is.

So here I am to give you a review, if my emotions don't get in the way first.

I'd like to start off by saying that I've never experienced depression or felt the urge to self-harm in any way. But this story made me so sad... Ugh, I'm disgusted with myself, because I didn't know that it was remotely possible to feel so much about something that I've never experienced.

Fred Weasley the Second is usually portrayed as a jokester, like his father and late uncle, but in this story, you've painted him with a whole new set of colors. (I think the predominant ones are navy and grey.) The constant metaphor of drowning and the fact that the family is vacationing by the sea--it all adds up to make a beautifully tragic and sad picture of exactly who Fred Weasley II is at this point in his life.

He obviously has not gone the way of the prankster. Instead, he is haunted by the ghost of his uncle--in his name, in his father's smile, the words that nobody says. And it has depressed him. I love the way you wrote this: "Here was the wave, and here it broke: here was where he washed up on the shore with salt on his lips and his pockets full of stones." It's absolutely beautiful, while also being so sad that I just can't even describe how sad it is without repeating myself over and over.

You mentioned that you drafted this about six times (maybe more?). Well, I think that this finished product is absolutely brilliant. You've managed to take a character that people have set a mold for, pushing him into the shape of a class clown, and you broke that mold--shattered it into a million pieces. I will never look at Fred Weasley II the same way again.

Thank you for that. I hope that you write more fanfiction very soon, and that you feel very proud of the way this story turned out.

Happy Holidays!

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Hi! First off, let me apologise for taking so long to respond to your review. Headland was such a difficult piece for me to work on that I left the reviews for a while, and then it sort of snowballed from there and, in a nutshell, I haven'Ât answered any since you left yours in - december 2013!! Yikes!!! So I'Âm very sorry about that - you left me such a kind review and I feel awful that I haven't responded until now.

On a semi-superficial note, I'Âm glad the ~sea~ metaphors came across and the setting worked - I actually wrote this whilst on holiday in Cornwall a stone's throw from the beach, so. I'm glad the setting for that happy holiday translated well to this...er...well, sad might be an understatement...

Anyway, thank you so, so much again for your kind review - I appreciate it very much !!