Wow! I did not expect this from Viva Pinata!. First about the chapter itself, this is wonderfully written and vividly imaginative chapter :) There is a lot of drama at the start, and as soon as Cueraça took Ameena through the portal, it sounded like a beautiful place. You must have done a bit of research for bits like cosmos etc :) Not forgetting the emotional feeling from Cueraça as he saw Ameena take off her mask :) Very nice chapter, i really enjoyed reading it :)

Just INCREDIBLE! Man, you said you were unsure about some parts, but I'm REALLY not seeing it! This flows so well, it's INTENSE, I was on the edge of my seat the whole time...AMAZING!

Seedos and Dastardos had the best scenes, I think. Seedos actually FIGHTING and talking to the plant was GREAT, and Dass saving Ameena was just too sweet! I bet Patch is going to FLIP once he hears about all this; I guess it's a good thing he didn't know, he would have worried himself SICK about Ameena!

I love how you integrated magic into the Island's culture as well since it's pretty much canon that some people can conjure/summon items out of thin air. Great work!

Intense, amazing, and SUPER COOL, this chapter is an A for sure! AHHH, looking forward to the rest of this story! I'm sure you'll wrap it up PERFECTLY!

Man, the gods STILL are super interesting! Neat that Ameena's related to one of the Dark Gods as well! Oh man, I wonder what will happen now that Cueraça is heading out...nothing good, I imagine! I wonder if he'll attempt a conflict with Dastardos...I hope not, for the reaper's sake! Nothing good came out of last time Dastardos tangled with the Dark Gods!

This was BRILLIANT! A super long chapter starring my favorite VP character? What a treat!

Poor little sweetie, though. It makes me sad to see him so scared and vulnerable. I'm glad Ameena was kind to him and I hope his Shellybeans will be okay :(

Seedos not being willing to talk about his feelings is PERFECT. Really shows that the poor kid has some serious trust issues and that he's been affected by Dass getting injured. :( I wonder if he'll ever be able to forgive Patch...

Man, Jardiniero freaking out was PERFECT, too! I liked how Leafos jumped to Seedos' defense. That's sweet of her.

I like how you mentioned that Mother was...quite flirtatious! Even having Jardiniero doubting Seedos' parentage, oh man, glad you have similar ideas to me in that department! :D

Jardy not knowing Seedos' age, though...heartbreaking. He really is an awful father.

Seedos being super suspicious about Patch and Dastardos...oh man, super perfect. It's hard to get over someone stabbing your brother and then trying to revive him, to boot, I imagine!

This whole chapter was FANTASTIC. I'm looking forward to the rest, as always! ;w;

-Were they too enthiusiast to pick up any sound at all?- Enthusiastic.

Chapter 3:

-''A long, long time ago, back when ordinairy people built temples for the extra-ordinairy Gods they worshipped, there lived a Priestress called Platia.- Ordinary and extra-ordinary.

-What in the world was you going to do with a Jameleon?- Were, not was.

-if anyone ever catched her in the Sanctuary of Data, she would not only lose her postion as a Priestress, she would also be executed before the dusk of dawn...- Caught, not catched.

-What controlled her more than her fears and nerves, were the surprisement and dissappointment in the contents of the rolls...- Disappointment, and typo. And 'surprisement' isn't exactly a word. Maybe you could move the sentence around, say Platia was surprised at how disappointing the contents of the scrolls were?

-What if woever, whatever this thing was had done something horrible to the Barkbark?- Whoever.

-He'd even held a little speach, which Ameena'd found touching, in a way.- Speech.

-'I've know Daisy from when she was a young, young seed!- Known.

Chapter 5:

-Were it the masks?- Was.

Chapter 7:

-The stem was made of the most wheaterworn wood, and those windows had that eerie feel to them...- Weatherworn.

-you was two years old, Jardineiro teached his children the arts of gardening from a very young age – Taught. And it should be 'you were'.

-You can not take down demons or even a Goddess on your own.- It's always cannot, one word.

-Oh, Seedos, please, they can look after theirselves, especially since it's just for a short while!- Themselves.

Chapter 15:

-He's sworen an oath that he'd slaughter every Young 'God', and every last follower they still have left.- Sworn.

-It is impossible for her toeven beanything like Dastardos.- To even, be anything. Typos?

-cutting of the limps of either guilty or innocent prisoners...- Limbs.

-We can't let another overthrow happen like that; in fact, I think that we should ruin the human civilazation before it is too late! Let's not take dangerous ever risks again... - Civilization. In the last sentence, your word order is wrong.

Chapter 16:

-The yellow light that was shining through the closed curtains just looked so inviting, and... save.- Typo.

-I never realized how much cooking actually can be before, but when the wheater's gloomy like this, it's definately a nice way to pass the time!- I think you're missing a 'fun' in that sentence, weather, and definitely.

In general, you used the word 'Priestress' a few times. I'm sure I'm missing something... probably some sort of pinata pun. Perhaps it was intentional. If it was, apologies; carry on. But the correct spelling is 'priestess'.

Okay, now that that's done. XD Ha! Looks like this was already published. I didn't even notice when I first looked at your profile. XD

My state is just like Pinata Island right now. Seriously, rain and darkness in MAY? I think Mother Nature woke up a little late! xD *ahem* Anyway, story's awesome, as usual. The plot is incredibly detailed and I can see you thought this all out pretty thoroughly. I'll be waiting for more, but no promises I won't procrastinate on reading it. :P