old headstones
with mossy shoulders
leaning against
one another's curves
we take comfort here

wishing seeds
cartwheel through warm air
how quiet
this fleeting moment
this belief in miracles

Second Honorable Mention2015 Fleeting Words Tanka ContestComments from the Judge:
Second Honorable Mention goes to Debbie Strange from Canada for this fine tanka. Her choice of words "wishing seeds" and "cartwheel" allow readers wonderful visuals. Once again as in Anne's tanka, the poetic device of repeating a phrase firstly in nature and again in reference to human life, proves to be quite effective.

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I write Japanese short form poetry in English (tanka, haiku, senryu) and tanshi (small poems). I also create haiga (haiku with art) and tanka/tanshi art. You are welcome to visit me on Twitter @Debbie_Strange