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Time for another entry in Friday Fictioneers challenge, courtesy of Rochelle Wissof-Fields. If you want to give it a try, check the info on her blog. 100 words more or less, inspired by a photo, here we go….

Copyright – Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Frozen in mid-step, I am lost in the crowd. Is this love? anxious thoughts overwhelm my already feeble mind.
“You are free to choose.” he said to me.
I know he will hurt me. But without his touch I will disappear.
“Do you fear the pain?”
“Not the physical one.”
My whipped back still tingles from our last encounter, marked by his deceptively gentle hands. Is it wrong to crave this pain that makes me feel alive?
“I want to break you.”Oh, my love, you already have, I think to myself as I take my next step.

Some will react to this story as they think others will think they ought to. Others will hide their true thoughts, because they are too close to your story in more ways than one. Me? I think it is spot on and very well written. Kudos for putting it out there and for doing it so well.

I know a good therapist. 😦 There’s certainly more than physical pain in the world and when one or more of those pains are welded with physical pain, it must be a heavy burden, one many are unwilling to share a/o sometimes even give up.

I must say that this is far removed from my nature. There is not one submisive bone in my body and the thought that someone would willingly allow another to use and abuse their body and mind is almost unexceptable. That is why I wanted to write about it, to see how far can I explore it in just few words. Hence the questions: Is this love? Is it wrong? And the vagueness of the story – is she/he leaving or returning? How woud a reader react if those last words were “as I take a step back”?

Thank you so much. As I said it before, it is very rewarding when your story push people to think and state their opinions, even if it makes them a little bit uncomfortable. It was never my intention, but somehow this 100 words journey turned into a study of human characters and emotions, with events and actions serving as a frame. Strange things happen when you cast away the shackles of conventional thinking.

Well, I don’t think there will be much happiness in this relationship. The question is how long it will take them to move on. And I couldn’t agree more, we all deserve it. But too often we don’t recognize what that really means. Thank you for reading and commenting.

Thank you, Robyn, that is a lovely thing to say. As for the story, I was wondering what would I do in a situation like that. But I just can’t imagine it, it is very hard to try walking in other people’s shoes. Very challenging. It is an excercise of understanding vs. judging.

I like your title. It shows her neediness and confusion. I like how you’ve shown her dependency on the continuation of pain – it seems to have been so much a part of her life that it’s become part of her self-image. Perhaps without it she wouldn’t know who she was. Very evocative story-telling.

Thank you, Margaret. I think most of us tend to bound ourselves to people and things, imprisoning ourselves, forgeting we should not be so dependant. It is a long journey of soulsearching with no destination in sight.