I agree with all posters and their comments about this write my sister friend. Your pen flows deep, how do you come up with all this, your range is exceptional, hitting on all fronts, so to speak. Here is my favorite part:

And now that I quit
Don't you even dare
come a knocking
For I am not even
looking to be found​

This reflection of daring causes the person reading the piece to really become involved with the realilty that its over, quitting for real, very deep.