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So there's this thing called The Writer's Voice, which everyone I know seems to be doing. (Deets here if you want to know more.) And lucky me, I got in! So here's my entry for HIDDEN, my YA Contemporary Fantasy novel. Hope you'll like it!

UPDATE: Just wanna say THANKS to all who left me lovely comments! I'm no longer in the running for the contest, so I had to take down my query and first 250 words. Good luck to those who are moving on to the next level! :)

"My mother hasn’t looked me in the eye since we left the grave to trudge back to the car." by itself an easily accepted sentence. But... added to the opening line of the novel, which revelas that is a year and an hour ago, turns it into a tragic plea.Great opening. Good luck.

Hi Cherie,I was all prepared to eulogise after reading the 1st 250 - poor Layla's obsrvation's of the minutiae of grief really tugged at my heart strings. But then in the synopsis, you had to go and have a wicked witch. When will people (apart from Charmed and Wicked) realise that there are way more good witches out than bad ones? Sorry to bang my personal drum in your space, but with all the terrific Wiccan sites out there, I was beginning to think that witches had lost that stigma. One day! Until then, guess I'll just rub some eye-of-newt into my warty, hooked nose and grin and bear it!Apart from that, some cool ideas.Best of luck Cheers Jacky (#130) xxx

@Jacky Gray: Haha! No, the shadow-witch is not a Wiccan witch. She's not even human. I only used the word 'witch' to label the sorcery/dark magick this creature uses--and as it is in Layla's POV, she doesn't know what to call the creature but a witch. :D

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