As I said, this story caught my attention at the summary and here I am!

I liked the first chapter. Like I always say, it's difficult writing NextGen because most of the characters are basically OCs and you have to be very careful! But you did this very well.

I liked that we didn't get a diagnosis in the first chapter, because that would just be jumping into it. It builds up the tension and gives the reader time to get attached to the character so that they can really feel for her!

I also liked how you hinted at a possible crush Alice may have on Albus. I just love the idea of Harry and Neville being in-laws (not as funny as Ron and Draco but cute!).

I like your writing style, you balance out the details and the dialogue nicely and everything flows naturally together. There aren't any gaps in the narrative and it's a very good first chapter!

Keep up the good work! Whomping Flobberworms FTW! *hearts*

Author's Response: Hello! ;D

I'm glad it caught your eye! I was hoping you would read this :)

Yeah, it's so difficult writing Next Gen but I think that's why I love it! It's so easy to put everyone where your headcannon wants them ;P I'm glad you liked it!

Oh thanks, that's definitely where I was going with it! I don't think the diagnosis will be for a few chapters so you guys will have a bit to get to know her :) (I'm so evil, muahahah)

Hahaha, omg I know! That would be hilarious :P

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate it! *hearts*