This part made me laugh so much. My brother was looking at me weirdly because of you! haha “Just a few more stops. The barber shop and then I have to- CRAP!” I said. It was 11:15 in the morning. My parents were probably wondering where I was. How the hell did I forget about my parents?

“Errr...Robyn, honey, you don’t have to shout out that you need to crap.” Kim whispered.

I love this part: “Hahahaha…” I laughed uncomfortably. “I get it…you guys are fans of Lord of the rings, right? So what do you want? Original transcript, is that what you came for?” I stood up from the bed and reached out for my cell phone. “If you guys don’t get out of here, I’m calling the police.”

“Police…what is this that she speaks of?” The young man who had said his name was Frodo turned to the old man who said his name was Gandalf.

“Is it some kind of food?” The ‘so-called’ Perrigrin asked, seeming giddy. “I like the sound of that, Po-lice.”

OH AND THIS PART:“She does not believe us.” The ‘so-called Legolas spoke gently.

“Ye be stating the obvious laddie.” Gimli stuck out his head up high in an ‘I-told-you-so’ manner.

Yesss!! i definately loved the whole 'lets go shopping' I love your dialogue (like i said before)And the whole seatbelt thing.. lol, a nice touch ;D. And and.. you didnt forget about the other characters which werent there, like Arwen. Aragon's so sweet.looking forward to the next chapter!!xx chan

Hey Kun!Wow, you've gotten so amazing at writing. Everything flows and is clear, its funny =], and the protaganist is easy to follow and connect to. I love the plot.. its so clever! Especially the little details you can take in woth the family background, and the angst Robyn has about showing her weaknesses.And the way Gimli talks! lol..The characters stay true to the movie (no slashes :D) Your so talented, you should definately keep going!xoxox Chan(ill be the screaming fan that stalks you if you ever decide to become a writer. lol)

Lots of good stuff! Gandalf in a seatbelt, hobbits in sneakers, middle earth men SHOPPING! There was a pleasant mix of humor and seriousness like that fake-Aragorn's rant on Boromir (he got what was coming to him!), Robyn's dad and Aragorn's grave talk about immortality. You describe their new wardrobes so well. Oh my, Aragorn does sound HO-OT... hehe, even better, he's a mind-reader. :)

Hehe. Uruk-hai like prunes. (oo! But don’t let them hear you say that!)

Legolas’ response to Kim’s observation was hil-arious.

At least Kim and Robyn have a temporary solution to their problem. (Yet Kim can't think it's that big a problem...) But can Robyn keep this secret from her parents? And I wonder about these portals that JRR found.

Hey! I LOVE your style! It's clear, friendly, fast. It's like Robyn really is telling her story, and is not just a character on a page. I can really feel what it is like to be Tolkien's great-great granddaughter - all the rapid fans, the expectations to become a second Shakespeare, and the push from her father for her to be strong.

You have so much detail, but it’s so well spaced it is not overwhelming, it just *fits*. I especially like how you say - "But the people from that dream seemed to fit their characters even more…It was as if they WERE the characters that Tolkien had described, that they were the characters that he based his characters upon."

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Hope that helps! I look forward to reading the next chapter. Yup, this is quite a strange situation... ^_^

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