Workshop #308: "I Wanna Be Touched" by Herb Sinus

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Description of the track:

Pop/Rock/Folk from Austrian singer/songwriter Herb Sinus. This track tells you about several possibilities to be calm, controlled, not too emotional - and how not to use them.

I know I could be a dandy
beautiful, seemingly strong
And I know it would be handy
cause all the girls would be coming on

But what could all those girls give me
if I don't fell what's going on?
I guess it's mostly a decision
be only cool or get real strong

'Cause I wanna be touched
I want to feel this life intensly
I wanna be moved
by all the mysteries of the world
I wanna fly
and get the rush from my emotions
I wanna fell it all
even if it sometimes hurts
even if it sometimes hurts

And I could practise magic
to have it all under control
I could make myself believing
the body's mastered by the soul

But what's life without surprises
when you're not astonished by the new
Strength does not mean to prevent yourself
from things that might happen to you

'cause I wanna be touched...

I could be searching for enlightenment
meditating all day long
make myself get calm and calmer
and again I would seem strong

but I wanna be touched...

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