I absolutely love this. extremely powerful with a soft and sad rythm. amazing:) i love and truly appriciate the honesty your words portray, and the raw and in depth feelings behind them. great job. you are a great writer.

i'd love it if you (or anyone else reading this) viewed some of my work and told me what you thought. especially my poem 'Torturer of a King'. it would be greatly appriciated:)

Very well sculpted, did not over exagerate at all. Simplicity is key. You took a very intense topic and hit all the points without rambling on. You did a beautiful job and chose your words carefully; the entire passage flowed. Every word connected with the sentence and thus the entire piece meshed very well. GREAT WORK...looking forward to your next piece.

hey, that was amazing. you have really got sum talent. the ending is the powerful bit and i think it is great. the emotion that was put into this and then described just rite was really great.
keep writing!!
if ou have any free time, could u check out my stuff and if you can critisize, be my guest!!
Kiersten

I really love this! It reminds me so much of...well, something i know is happening right now with one of my friends and something I'm afraid is going to happen with me. It's something I would write about- but never would have wrote it this way... I love your style!!! And the way it's all fit in.. an amazing picture.

It's funny how one can easily have to rely on their last line to deliver an impact. That happens to me a lot, and this poem almost does that. Still, although it is yet another poem focusing too much on regret of a deprivation of love, I am well impacted and impressed. Good job. Not one of those universally speaking poems, but its good.