Spewing equality with hairy pits in a magiced-up pretty dress? This is FAR more of an accurate picture of Gen Y’s imaginations of themselves that most would guess! So neat of you to tackle this concept in a sonnet. And you certainly were wise in your choice of inspirational song. Very Gaelic–love it! As far as helping you with rhythms go, the only way I ever come close to my own aspirations for a rhythmical poem is getting up, stomping around the room to beat out the words just written. I think you are well on you way. The most important thing, you have just done: you STARTED! You WROTE it down and shared it! Way to go. Hope you will also give me feedback at http://granbee.wordpress.com!