All and all, pretty good. There's bound to be awkward lines approaching the modulations, but you're mostly there. If I had to suggest anything, it'd be to try to do some walking basslines over the changes to really solidify where chord tones are located. Regardless, good job!

wanbi84 and smartguyreviews 10x for listening and the critique. regarding the chord tones this going by so fast its hard to nail it all the time, hopefully with some more practice I will nail it every time.

Nice lines, very tasty. I wanna say it kinda felt stagnated after a while, but you at least tried something different every now and then. Still, after a couple of rounds, it seemed like you kept going when you showed just about everything. I'm maybe suggesting building it a bit slower, taking some longer breaks to let it breath and get crazy with it at the end. Otherwise, it sounded like you played the changes pretty nice, I dug it, though I'm a total amateur myself so wouldn't put too much value on my opinion.

Nice lines, very tasty. I wanna say it kinda felt stagnated after a while, but you at least tried something different every now and then. Still, after a couple of rounds, it seemed like you kept going when you showed just about everything. I'm maybe suggesting building it a bit slower, taking some longer breaks to let it breath and get crazy with it at the end. Otherwise, it sounded like you played the changes pretty nice, I dug it, though I'm a total amateur myself so wouldn't put too much value on my opinion.

thanks for your critique and I do put a value on your opinion, you are correct this is the challenge of this tune follow the changes and also make it melodic and interesting. when I improvise this tune I have to 100% focused because the changes are flying by really fast and many times I feel like the changes have the upper hand which lead me to just hit them instead of creating more comprehensive and melodic statements.

Aminor251 thanks for the video, In the beginning when i first tackled the tune. I played with lots of the digital patterns of 1-2-3-5 but it didnt work for me it sounded like an exercise. I think the tough part of the tune is to improvise it melodically. although John coltrane colo over this is genius I prefer his son's version which is much more melodic to me