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Okay, this is going to take awhile.
First of all, i wouldn't recommend saying SCP-4987-1 and 2 in the item number. you are only meant to say , Item #: SCP-4987 as a whole.
Secondly, when writing an SCP article, you are supposed to speak in a very clinical, descriptive tone. For example, you say "Its scales have a muddy brown color, with the feathers having a dark red color." I would instead state something like, "SCP-4987 has been observed to have a layer of scales under its coat of feathers. Observers report the scales have flecks of brown over an overall mossy color. Over top these scales is a coat of red feathers, identical to how estimates of prehistoric raptors were built."
You also have broken up the paragraphs into a very strange format, so i would simply put the individual sentences into one,(or multiple if necessary) paragraph.
I would also recommend you would remove flowery add-on's such as "SCP-4987-A's Lip quivers" And replace them with broader statements such as "SCP-4987 shows visable signs of distress.
I definitely think this could go somewhere if you fix some of the underlying issues.

Observers report the scales have flecks of brown over an overall mossy color. Over top these scales is a coat of red feathers, identical to how estimates of prehistoric raptors were built

This actually isn't really clinical tone; rather, it uses way too many words and introduces extra information that isn't really necessary to get across the basic information that the audience needed to receive. What the author had originally is actually better than what has been suggested. Clinical tone does not mean using fifty words to describe something when fifteen will suffice.