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Great chapter. It shows that Tanko isn't that different, as in there teams are always going to have 'that guy' in the group, that can't wait to tell all of the 'top secret' plans to trainers that could easily beat their whole team. Anyway, great to see a evolution already, even before seeing the first gym. I'm looking forward to the next chapter, and what you've done with Brock.

Looking for a battle, any mode. PM me if you want one.

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Okay, time to start. So Team Debug wants to destroy all glitch Pokemon, and Team Error wants to destroy all natural Pokemon. How will Red and Co. handle fightng TWO rival teams. In RSE, you just had to call upon on Pokemon to solve it all. But how could that happen here... Missingno. or Mew (or both?)?

You'll see eventually.

Originally Posted by TheDarkDragons

A Ratatta with Water Gun. That's the Gen 1 TM, right?

That and Will's Tangela knowing Skull Bash.

Originally Posted by TheDarkDragons

What is the downside to Q again? Seems pretty fine to me.

No downside. For now, anyway.

Originally Posted by TheDarkDragons

Also, will any other kind of Glitches appear with 1st Pokemon, such as the Transform glitch with Ditto?

I haven't ruled it out. In that specific instance, it's really just a question of finding the right time, place, and method to implement it.

Originally Posted by President People

Ah, a new chapter at last! The plot thickens… Very interested to see what Team Glitch will be like, and what will be needed to defeat both teams. Can't wait for more glitch Pokémon to be introduced.

It will actually take a while for more Glitch Pokémon to be introduced. Not until after Rewept Gym.

Originally Posted by President People

A little undecided on punctuation here? :P

Ooh, yeah, I probably ought to fix that. Thanks for catching that.

Originally Posted by President People

Keep the great chapters coming! I hope they continue to be released smoothly.

Thanks! I hope so too.

Originally Posted by knightfall

My New Years Resolution still stands, here I am with another review!

Good. Good.

Originally Posted by knightfall

Team Debug, hmmmm, all they want to do is restore Tanko. As they say, the road to hell is paved with good intentions. This is interesting.

I think so.

Originally Posted by knightfall

And now the only Team we haven't met yet is Team Error, let's hope they'll be a little less radical when dealing with the so called "Natural Pokemon".

I wouldn't get my hopes up if I were you.

Originally Posted by knightfall

In other news, 44hy evolved, good for Orange. Can't wait to see who's Pokemon will evolve next, Red or Violet's.

Most likely to be Flutters, though I haven't ruled out Charmander evolving first.

Originally Posted by knightfall

Great chapter, introduced some tension with the Team Debug grunts, and 44hy's evolution.

Cant' wait to see more,

Knightfall signing off...

Thanks!

Originally Posted by Son_of_Shadows

Wouldn't be a MissingnoMaster fic without a Weezing reference or three.

I can't promise they won't try. Whether they succeed is a whole other swarm of Yanma.

Originally Posted by Z-nogyroP

IMO, best chapter so far. I get now why they're called Debug and Error. In other news, yay! 44hy evolved into Q! I was hoping there would be some middle form too, though, something like ????????????. But still, happy for Orange, and I'm rooting for Charmander to evolve next(go Charmeleon!)

No, no middle form. As for the next evolution, its going to be either Charmander or Flutters. Haven't yet decided.

Originally Posted by rangernumber-x

Great chapter. It shows that Tanko isn't that different, as in there teams are always going to have 'that guy' in the group, that can't wait to tell all of the 'top secret' plans to trainers that could easily beat their whole team. Anyway, great to see a evolution already, even before seeing the first gym. I'm looking forward to the next chapter, and what you've done with Brock.

Maybe it's just me, but it looks as though you phrased it to seem like 44Hy's was the first evolution in the series. Not so, as Flutters became a Metapod in the previous chapter. Also, we will be seeing more of Will and Lou as time goes on.

Originally Posted by PerseusRad

Great chapter as always. What will happen with Q's "special" powers? You know what I mean. >:]

Oh, I know what you mean. I've been wondering how I might implement those, or even if I will. I won't say any more at the moment, but I have not ruled it out.

I used to liek mudkipz, then I took an arrow in the knee. However the arrow turned out to be a seaking. It yelled "F*** yeah" so I screamed "FUUUUUUUUUUU!!!!". The seaking's face became that of a troll while mine became forever alone. The situation was super effective.

Okay, I've been watching this fic for a while, but I haven't reviewed yet. Anyway, I just wanted to say that this fic is awesome! I might even like it better than the Adventureness series. Your characters are believable and likable, and I think you might be the only writer on Serebii who could make the gen 1 glitches merge with the games' reality so seamlessly. The plot seems to be developing really well, and I can't wait to see what you have in store.

Like I said, the characters you've created are great. They each have distinct personalities, and I really do get a sense of their character when reading them. I especially like how you've shaped their teams to match their personalities. I'd like to be more helpful here, but there's really not much I can say that could make this any better.

The only thing better than your characters is the way you write the glitches. I tried to write a glitch Pokemon once (the story isn't posted here) and it was garbage. It didn't fit in with the rest of the world, but you manage to do it without many problems. The only thing I would suggest changing is the portrayal of tile glitches. You make it fairly obvious that they're there, but they never seem to have a major effect on anything. Maybe having a character fall into a random patch of ocean, or have some Pokemon hiding in a patch of tall grass on somebody's roof, or have the cast chow down on a fresh dinner of home grown twenty nines. You get the idea.

The plot is awesome, too, like I said. I can't wait to read more about Red, Orange, and Violets' journey through Tanko and their fight against Teams Error and Debug.

Oh, and I'm going to guess that Missingno. is a legendary. Horay for fan speculation with no basis in fact!

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EDIT: Oh, I almost forgot. Can I be on the PM list?

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Like I said, it's a possibility that Charmander will be the next to evolve. I haven't actually decided yet.

Originally Posted by treeko's awesomeness

Okay, I've been watching this fic for a while, but I haven't reviewed yet. Anyway, I just wanted to say that this fic is awesome! I might even like it better than the Adventureness series. Your characters are believable and likable, and I think you might be the only writer on Serebii who could make the gen 1 glitches merge with the games' reality so seamlessly. The plot seems to be developing really well, and I can't wait to see what you have in store.

Like I said, the characters you've created are great. They each have distinct personalities, and I really do get a sense of their character when reading them. I especially like how you've shaped their teams to match their personalities. I'd like to be more helpful here, but there's really not much I can say that could make this any better.

The only thing better than your characters is the way you write the glitches. I tried to write a glitch Pokemon once (the story isn't posted here) and it was garbage. It didn't fit in with the rest of the world, but you manage to do it without many problems.

Thanks, you flatter me.

Originally Posted by treeko's awesomeness

The only thing I would suggest changing is the portrayal of tile glitches. You make it fairly obvious that they're there, but they never seem to have a major effect on anything. Maybe having a character fall into a random patch of ocean, or have some Pokemon hiding in a patch of tall grass on somebody's roof, or have the cast chow down on a fresh dinner of home grown twenty nines. You get the idea.

I see what you're saying. I did intend to introduce the notion that the tile glitches would actually have some sort of effect within the next couple of chapters anyway, but I like that last part about chowing down on a fresh dinner of home grown twenty nines. I just might do something with that.

Originally Posted by treeko's awesomeness

Oh, and I'm going to guess that Missingno. is a legendary. Horay for fan speculation with no basis in fact!

There will be at least one Glitch Pokémon that will be considered to be a legendary. Whether or not it is Missingno., I won't say just yet.

Originally Posted by treeko's awesomeness

EDIT: Oh, I almost forgot. Can I be on the PM list?

Sure thing!

I haven't had an opportunity to get going on the next chapter yet. The final levels for Pokémon Tower Defense were completed this weekend, so that took up what little spare time I had. I'll be starting the next chapter soon, which will feature Rewept Gym, its leader, and a good, healthy dose of Pokémon battles! When it will be completed, however, I couldn't tell you at all right now.

I see what you're saying. I did intend to introduce the notion that the tile glitches would actually have some sort of effect within the next couple of chapters anyway, but I like that last part about chowing down on a fresh dinner of home grown twenty nines. I just might do something with that.

Yay! I'm helping!

My fan-fic(Credit to Gelatino95 at Crazy Dragon Graphics for the userbar) Author's profile And here's an awesome RPG. It has dinosaurs!And a sprite comic, because I can't draw!

I used to liek mudkipz, then I took an arrow in the knee. However the arrow turned out to be a seaking. It yelled "F*** yeah" so I screamed "FUUUUUUUUUUU!!!!". The seaking's face became that of a troll while mine became forever alone. The situation was super effective.

Great stuff! The Team Debug and Team Error concepts are brilliant. You would think Team Debug would be considered good guys by the average gamer but nope, bad guys! I love it! Also loved seeing 44Hy kick some butt. Can't wait to see more!

"Tangela la!" Tangela replied as it leaned forward and charged right at Charmander.

"Ember!" Red called out desperately!

If this is the original Red, Green, and Blue, then wouldn't there be NO SAtk and SDef stats. And Attacks wouldn't be classified as Physical and Special too, because that started in FRLG and RSE. And, why is there an exclamation mark in the last sentence of above quote?

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If this is the original Red, Green, and Blue, then wouldn't there be NO SAtk and SDef stats. And Attacks wouldn't be classified as Physical and Special too, because that started in FRLG and RSE. And, why is there an exclamation mark in the last sentence of above quote?

There was always the concept of physical and special attacks, only back then, whether they were physical or special went by type. Special Attack and Special Defense were rolled into one stat, called Special. Scratch, as a Normal move, was always physical.

That last exclamation mark, on the other hand, was indeed an error. I'll fix that.

There was always the concept of physical and special attacks, only back then, whether they were physical or special went by type. Special Attack and Special Defense were rolled into one stat, called Special. Scratch, as a Normal move, was always physical.

That last exclamation mark, on the other hand, was indeed an error. I'll fix that.

Oops. I guess I wasn't looking hard enough at my Blue. And I did know that Physical and Special went by type, I just didn't think it had appeared until FRLG (cuz stupid Alakazam uses Calm Mind)

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If you would like a bred or Gen IV-V Event Pokémon in return for these safaris, let me know and I'll see what I can do about your request.

Oh, and I changed my mind. Red's Rattata-Raticate all the way! Or Z4, if it evolves.

Rattata will evolve, it just won't be the next one to do so. And no main characters have a Z4.

Originally Posted by TheDarkDragons

Speaking of which,why do all these glitch Pokemon have 4 in their name?

I have no idea, to be honest.

I know it's been a while since the last chapter. I do intend to get the next chapter out some time this month, but it's highly unlikely to be this week. Once my exams are done, things will likely pick up around here.

Wait, what? Did I misread something? I thought someone captured a Z4. I'm gonna go back to the previous chapter and check.

EDIT: Yup, you were right. I'm not sure why I thought someone would catch one, since Orange is afraid of Bug-types, Red doesn't like glitches(or at least catching them), and Violet already had Flutters.

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This is Bidoof. Many people loathe it with their lives. If you are of the few people who love this little beaver, put this in your sig. Started by Warrior Scolipede

The trio dashed through the forest for a solid half hour before they finally broke free of the natural maze of oddly shaped trees. Barely registering the mass of buildings before them, they continued to run until Orange pointed out the Pokémon Center, distinguishable from the other oddly designed buildings only by the large sign over the entrance which read "Pokémon Center".

"Oh, my!" exclaimed the nurse as she approached Red, Orange, and Violet, who had all collapsed into the seats nearest to them while trying to catch their breath. "What on earth made you run in here like that in the middle of the night?"

"We..." gasped Orange. "Wanted... out of forest... quick as possible... Team Debug..."

"Ah," replied the nurse, a sudden frown on her face. "Say no more. What were they up to now?"

"They stole my Charmander to try and start a forest fire," Red explained, as he wasn't quite as out of breath as Orange. "We got it back, but they escaped."

"This is outrageous!" the nurse half-shouted. "I knew those nutcases wanted to eliminate all sorts of Pokémon, but setting the Ivadirin Forest on fire?! Every Pokémon in that forest would have died!"

She continued on in this vein for some time, pacing in circles and ranting about Team Debug. About three minutes in, Red, Orange, and Violet exchanged glances. Violet then cleared her throat, reminding the nurse of their presence.

"Er... nurse?" said Violet. "Could you maybe heal our Pokémon?"

"Oh- oh! Of course, I'm so sorry, it's just these Team Debug crooks have got me so worked up... of course, of course, right this way..."

Not five minutes later, the trio's teams were fully healed. As the nurse got the Rewept Police on the phone to inform them of Team Debug's arson attempt, the group made their way to the rooms in the back that the nurse allowed them to use for the night, flopped down on the beds, and fell asleep within seconds.
~~~~~~~~
When Red opened his eyes at 7:00 the next morning, his first thought was that an angry mob was attacking the center with chainsaws. Then he realized that the hideous, grating noises he was hearing were coming out of Orange's mouth; Orange was snoring extraordinarily loudly.

"Ugh... what the hell?" Red muttered, clearly at a loss as to how such noises could come out of one mouth. He then looked at Violet's bed; she was sound asleep. At that moment, however, Violet stirred, sat up, stretched, and pulled two small objects out of her ears. She then walked over to Orange's bed and nonchalantly slammed a pillow onto his head.

"Zzzz-hmm?! What?! Huh?!" exclaimed Orange as he woke up abruptly.

"You wear earplugs?" Red asked.

"Everyone in Talpel Town wears earplugs at night," Violet explained. "I'm guessing you figured out why."

"My snoring is not that loud," said Orange defensively.

"It sounded like about fifty chainsaws all going at once," Red said.

Choosing not to comment on this, Orange instead said, "We should probably get some breakfast, and then it's off to the Rewept Gym."

"I could eat, I guess," conceded Violet. With that, the trio walked out of the room and made their way to the Pokémon Center's cafeteria.

"What the...?" muttered Red as they all sat at a table and began to examine the menus. "Even number salad? Fried nine? What?"

"Oh, get the fried nine," Orange stated. "My mom makes that for breakfast sometimes and it is amazing."

"Well, numbers make up most of what we eat in Tanko," Violet explained. "Each digit has its own sort of distinct flavor. Why don't you order the even number salad? That way you could try a nice variety of numbers, see what you like best?"

"Yeah, and I'll let you try my fried nines," added Orange.

"Thanks," Red smiled.

Just then, the three were approached by a large, pink, egg-shaped Pokémon with a real, white egg in a pouch on its stomach. It held a pad of paper and a pen in its short, stubby arms. Instinctively, Violet took out her Pokédex.

"Chansey, the Egg Pokémon," said the Pokédex. "Very rare and elusive. It will share its nutritious eggs with any injured Pokémon it meets."

"Chansey," the Chansey said, looking expectantly at the trio.

"Are you here to take our orders?" asked Red. Chansey nodded.

"OK, I'll have an order of fried nines with a glass of the fresh-squeezed four juice," Orange said.

"I'll have whole wheat zero toast with six jelly," Violet said.

"I'll have the even number salad," Red said.

"Chansey, Chansey!" exclaimed Chansey as she scribbled something down on the pad of paper she was holding, then walked away.

"So how are we gonna do this, anyway, challenging the Gym Leader?" asked Red. "I don't suppose they'd let us all battle the Gym Leader at the same time?"

At this, Orange burst out into laughter. Violet shot him a nasty glare, which went unnoticed by Orange for several minutes. Once Orange saw Violet glaring at him, he quieted down somewhat.

"Heh... And what, the Gym Leader would use three Pokémon at once, and each of us would only use one?" he chuckled.

Red shrugged. "Just an idea."

"It's against Pokémon League regulations for a trainer to use more than one Pokémon simultaneously in an official battle," Violet said. "I doubt any Gym Leader would go against that. We'll probably have our matches one right after the other. My mom told me that Gym Leaders have instant healing machines like Pokémon Centers do, so they can take on large amounts of challengers in a short period of time."

"Q and I are ready to rock!" added Orange, now grinning widely. "According to my Pokédex, Q's learned Water Gun since it evolved!"

Red, however, looked thoroughly downcast.

"What's up?" asked Violet.

"I thought you were supposed to be the smart one?" Orange said. "It's obvious Red's realized his team doesn't stand a chance against Rock-types. Rattata and Charmander, that's not exactly-" At that point, however, Orange fell silent as Violet gave him yet another glare; Orange's words had very clearly done nothing to improve Red's mood.

"It's not hopeless, Red," Violet said patiently. "Remember one of those Debug Grunts had a Rattata that could use Water Gun? Maybe if you teach your Rattata the move, you'll have an easier time in the gym."

"How would I do that, though?" asked Red.

"Easiest way would be to use a TM," said Violet. "You know what TMs are?"

"Yeah," said Red. "Technical Machines. They're little disc-like things that can teach new moves to Pokémon. There's one for Water Gun?"

"I think so."

"Where are we gonna get one, though?" Orange asked. "TMs are kinda rare."

"Damn," sighed Red.

"There's another way," said Violet. "Red, you could have Rattata train with Q a little bit. If a Pokémon watches a move it can learn being used by another Pokémon, it can learn the move that way."

Red didn't answer for a moment, apparently considering this. At that moment, however, Chansey approached their table, carrying three large platters and placing them in front of the trio. Orange's plate contained what appeared to be large, dark brown number nines, looking as though they had been carved out of thick pieces of wood, along with a tall glass full of a bright orange liquid. Violet's plate contained what appeared to be a bagel sliced in half, though with a larger hole, each half coated in an odd blue jelly. Red was given a bowl containing multicolored twos, fours, sixes, and eights. He took small bites of each number, and found that Violet was right- each one had its own unique flavor. The twos tasted like carrots, the fours tasted like oranges, the sixes tasted like blueberries, and the eights tasted like ketchup.

"Hey, the sixes and eights aren't bad!" Red observed. "I'm not that fond of the twos or the fours, though."

"Mmmm," sighed Orange as he took a large bite out of a nine. "Red, you gotta try these."

Red speared a nine on his fork and took a bite of it. His eyes widened as the delicious taste of bacon filled his mouth. "Holy crap, this is good!" Red exclaimed.

"Huh? Huh? What did I tell you?" grinned Orange.

Once everybody had finished eating (many of the twos and fours of Red's salad remained untouched), Chansey came back over with a large scanner-esque device. She held the device over their Pokédexes, and then walked away.

"What was that about?" asked Red.

"Chansey was verifying that we're Pokémon trainers," explained Violet. "All Pokémon Centers allow trainers to use their services for free, didn't you know?"

"Oh, yeah," murmured Red as they got up out of their seats and walked towards the exit. "I think Professor Oak mentioned something like that, now that I think of it..."

Once they were out of the center, Orange took out a Poké Ball and enlarged it. Taking the cue, Red did the same. They both then tossed the spheres into the air simultaneously, and let Q and Rattata out into the open.

"Rattata?" replied Rattata questioningly. In answer, Q unleashed a stream of water from the center of one of the sides of its body, reducing a nearby boulder to gravel. Having observed this, Rattata took a deep breath, opened its mouth wide... and nothing.

The two repeated these motions for a whole hour. Red got excited at one point, claiming to have seen something fly from Rattata's mouth after one attempt; it turned out, however, to be spit. Once Rattata started to show signs of tiring, however, Red reluctantly called off the training session.

"Well, here we are," said Violet as the trio approached a massive structure that appeared to have been built out of tree limbs (complete with leaves), walls of solid rock, sixes, fours, and ice cubes. "Rewept City Pokémon Gym."

"Let's do this!" Orange exclaimed as he ran up to the large hedges which turned out to be double doors, shoved them open, and dashed inside. Violet and Red hastened to follow.

The inside of the gym was dark as dark can be. There was absolutely no telling how big it was. This was quickly rectified, however, as many spotlights on the ceiling turned on simultaneously, revealing the interior to be positively massive- the room was very long and wide, with a high ceiling. A large, rectangular area in the center of the room was marked off, obviously to serve as the battlefield. On the opposite side, a teenage girl with long, dark brown hair sat, clad in a pair of blue jeans and a light brown t-shirt.

"Welcome to the Rewept City Pokémon Gym," the girl said in a voice that echoed all around the cavernous structure. "My name is Minerva, and I'm this city's Gym Leader. And who are you?"

"I'm Orange McPixel from Talpel Town," announced Orange.

"Violet Scramble, also from Talpel Town," added Violet.

"Red Vershunn, from Pal- er, Talpel Town," said Red. Violet and Orange blinked, but otherwise showed no surprise at Red's lie about his hometown.

"We've all come to challenge this gym," Violet explained.

"Very well," Minerva answered. "But I cannot take you all on at once, it would go against Pokémon League regulations. I'll battle you in the order in which you introduced yourselves. Orange, was it? You first."

"Fine by me," grinned Orange as he stepped into a small, painted rectangle just outside the battlefield boundaries- obviously the spot in which the trainer was to stand.

"Here are the rules," stated Minerva. "We are each allowed two Pokémon, and the match is over when all Pokémon on one side are unable to continue. I'm not allowed to switch my Pokémon unless one faints, but you can switch at your leisure. Understand?"

Orange nodded.

"Then we begin," grinned Minerva as she produced a Poké Ball and threw it. "Geodude, go!"

The ball split open, and in a flash of light, what appeared to be a large, levitating boulder with eyes, a mouth, and thick, rocky arms materialized. "Geodude," it grunted.

"A Geodude," remarked Orange as he took his Pokédex out and pointed it at this airborne adversary.

"Geodude, the Rock Pokémon," said the Pokédex. "Geodude are a common sight in fields and mountains. When at rest, they are easily mistaken for ordinary rocks, and subsequently tripped over or stepped on."

"Let's do this!" Orange exclaimed, heaving a Poké Ball into the arena. ".4, I choose you!"

In a flash of light, Orange's .4 appeared, squealing happily in a high pitched voice and zooming around in circles, eager to fight.

"Geodude! Tackle!" Minerva ordered.

".4, use TM05!" Orange called.

Both Geodude and .4 zoomed forward, headed for each other at high speeds. At the last second, however, .4 pulled up and turned invisible.

"Geo?!" Geodude exclaimed, looking around frantically, trying to see where its opponent had gone.

"Use TM28 now!" commanded Orange.

The air behind Geodude exploded, sending it tumbling to the ground. .4 reappeared and gave a shrill giggle.

"Dude..." growled Geodude as it rose back into the air.

"Geodude, use your Rock Throw attack!" commanded Minerva.

".4, Agility!" Orange shouted.

.4 flew in circles around Geodude with increasing rapidity. Rocks formed out of thin air in Geodude's hands, and though it threw them in every direction, it failed to strike .4. Then. .4 rose high into the air and caught fire!

"What the hell?!" exclaimed Orange. His Pokédex, however, spoke up.

"TM09, an attack of the IIIItoto-type. An immensely powerful technique that no Pokémon type is resistant to."

"Awesome!" Orange exclaimed as .4's flaming form slammed hard into Geodude, causing a catastrophic and fiery explosion, kicking up dirt and dust. Once the dust settled, however, both Geodude and .4 were laying on the ground, not moving at all.

"What?!" Orange exclaimed as both he and Minerva withdrew their Pokémon.

"While TM09 is powerful, it causes the user to faint," continued the Pokédex.

"I really could have used that information sooner!" snapped Orange as both he and Minerva threw new Poké Balls. "Q, let's go!"

"I choose you, Rhyhorn!" exclaimed Minerva.

The thrown balls split open, and each one poured out bright white light. Before Orange materialized the cube-shaped form of Q. Before Minerva stood a creature that looked to be made entirely of gray rock, standing on four stumpy legs.

"Rhyhorn, the Spikes Pokémon," said Orange's Pokédex. "Rhyhorn's bones are a thousand times harder than those of humans. Though not very bright, it is incredibly strong, and can demolish whole buildings just by charging into them."

"Alright, Q, Water Gun now!" Orange called.

"Use Horn Attack!" Minerva commanded.

Q unleashed a stream of water as Rhyhorn gave a loud roar and charged forward, its pointed horn aimed right at Q. Though it managed to muscle its way through the stream of water initially, the overwhelming type disadvantage became too much, and Rhyhorn collapsed to the floor. Down, but not out; it still attempted to climb back to its feet.

"Q, use your Confusion attack!" ordered Orange.

"Rhyhorn, Bide!" shouted Minerva.

Q launched a ray of blue light, while Rhyhorn's body took on a bright yellow glow. The Confusion met its mark, but Rhyhorn continued to glow. Then, Rhyhorn roared loudly, and launched a massive beam of yellow light right at Q, striking the Deep Sea Pokémon hard.

"Q!" exclaimed Orange. Fortunately, Q was still conscious; it floated in midair, albeit while wobbling dangerously.

"Never seen that attack before, have you?" smirked Minerva. "Bide allows a Pokémon to store energy from attacks it is hit with, and then it hits the opponent for twice that amount of damage. It's won me many battles against trainers who didn't see it coming."

"I got an idea," muttered Orange. "Q, use Disable!"

"What- no!" exclaimed Minerva. as Q's body took on a pink aura. The aura then spread to Rhyhorn's body.

"Not so confident now, are you?" sneered Orange. "It takes a little while for Disable to wear off, by which time this match will be over! Finish it, Q! Water Gun attack!"

Q gave its soft cry as it shot off another blast of water, striking Rhyhorn head on and causing it to collapse on its side. This time, Rhyhorn made no effort to move.

"Rhyhorn, return," sighed Minerva, holding out its Poké Ball as Orange did likewise with Q. Minerva then walked across the battlefield and approached Orange. "A fine battle, Orange. You've definitely earned this." And she held out her hand to Orange. In it was a small, gray object, which looked like a small cluster of gray circles. "It's the official Pokémon League Gravel Badge."

"Sweet!" Orange exclaimed as he swiped the badge from Minerva's hand, held it up, and gazed at it. Minerva then handed him what appeared to be a light gray CD. "What's this?" asked Orange.

Minerva walked back over to her side of the battlefield, and placed her two Poké Balls in a small tray that protruded from the wall. She pressed a red button above the tray, and the Poké Balls quivered slightly. She then took them back off and reattached them to her belt.

"OK, now that my Pokémon are healed, let's get this started!" declared Minerva.

In a flash of light, Flutters the Metapod materialized. Minerva blinked in surprise. "A Metapod?" she asked dubiously. "Well, OK..." She then produced, enlarged, and tossed a Poké Ball of her own. "Let's go, Geodude!"

Minerva's Geodude re-emerged in a brilliant blast of white light. It floated in midair, staring down its mainly immobile opponent.

"Geodude, Rock Throw!" commanded Minerva.

"Flutters, Harden attack!" ordered Violet.

"Metapod," replied Flutters as its body took on a green glow. Geodude threw a pair of stones at Flutters, but they bounced off its body with loud clanging noises.

"Flutters, String Shot, go!" Violet shouted.

"Metapod, Metapod," droned Flutters as it fired a blast of sticky white silk from the pointy topmost point of its body. Geodude made to dive out of the way, but moved too soon- the attack had hit, and Geodude was covered in gooey string.

"Now, Flutters, return!" Violet called, as she held out the Poké Ball. Once the Metapod had been withdrawn, Violet threw the other ball. "Chompy, let's go!"

In a flash of light, Chompy the Bellsprout materialized. It stared at its close to immobile opponent and chuckled.

"Geodude, Tackle attack!" Minerva ordered.

"Chompy, dodge it and use Growth!" Violet exclaimed.

Geodude dove down at Chompy, but moved so slowly that the Bellsprout was able to sidestep the move with ease. As Geodude attempted to extricate itself from the ground, Chompy's body took on a green aura and doubled in size.

"Now, Vine Whip!" commanded Violet.

"Sproooout!" exclaimed Chompy as it produced a pair of thick green vines from behind its leaves and slammed them into Geodude, who subsequently abandoned its attempt to get back into the air and ceased all movement.

"I see, now," Red nodded. "She had Flutters slow Geodude down to give Chompy more time to set up Growth."

"Cool," remarked Orange.

"Geodude, return!" said Minerva as she held Geodude's Poké Ball in one hand and threw her other one with the other hand. "Rhyhorn, you're up!"

Rhyhorn reappeared in a flash of light and glared at the oversized Bellsprout, who glared right back.

"Chompy, let's win this! Vine Whip attack!" Violet ordered.

"Rhyhorn, Bide now!" Minerva shouted.

As Rhyhorn took on a yellow glow, Chompy dashed forward and slammed its vines into Rhyhorn's body repeatedly. Though the move was clearly taking its toll, Rhyhorn was still standing, holding its ground defiantly. Then came the massive beam of yellow light. Chompy was plowed backwards by the force of the close-range attack, and as it came to rest half-buried at Violet's feet, it shrank back down to its regular size.

"No! Chompy, NO!" exclaimed Violet, though her frantic shouts did nothing to change the fact that her Bellsprout- her best hope against a Rock-type- was unconscious.

"It's up to you, now," sighed Violet, addressing the Poké Ball now in her right hand. "I know it's not the best matchup, but the battle's not over until it's over. Flutters, go!"

Violet heaved the Poké Ball, from which re-emerged the solid and nearly immobile form of Flutters the Metapod. Rhyhorn gave a derisive snort upon spotting its opponent.

"Rhyhorn, Horn Attack!" ordered Minerva.

"Flutters, Harden!" called Violet.

"Metapod," replied the Metapod as its body took on a green glow. Rhyhorn's lowered its head as it charged, and plowed into Flutters, sending it flying into the air and out of the arena. Violet scrambled backwards and caught Flutters in her arms.

"Flutters, if you don't want to do this anymore, it's OK," Violet said quietly. "It's my fault, I didn't even think that Chompy wouldn't have been able to take out Rhyhorn."

"Pod..." Flutters said quietly before its body took on a brilliant white glow.

"Wha-Flutters?!" Violet exclaimed, holding her now-blinding Bug-type out at arm's length. Through the bright light, Red could vaguely make out Flutters changing shape. The evolving Metapod rose into the air, and a moment later, the glow stopped. Flutters was no longer a Metapod. What hovered before them now had a purple body with two small blue hands, a pair of large red eyes, and a pair of large, white wings with thin black lines forming simple designs.

"Freeeh, freeeh!" exclaimed the newly evolved Butterfree as it rose higher in the air, flying around in circles.

"Woah!" exclaimed Orange, who no longer seemed frightened of Flutters. "A Butterfree!" Red, equally in awe, held his Pokédex out.

"Butterfree, the Butterfly Pokémon, and the evolved form of Metapod," droned the Pokédex. "A water-repellant dust coats its wings, allowing it to fly even in the rain. Butterfree are capable of using such techniques as Confusion and Sleep Powder."

"Freeeh, freeeh!" Flutters exclaimed as it flapped its wings and flew directly above Rhyhorn, scattering a fine blue dust. Rhyhorn growled as its body crackled with electricity, but this quickly gave way to rumbling snores to rival Orange's as it slumped to the ground.

"Finish it! Confusion attack!" Violet commanded.

"Wake up, Rhyhorn!" Minerva was screaming, but no use; Flutters unleashed twin beams of blue light from its eyes, striking Rhyhorn hard. The Spikes Pokémon rolled over three times and came to rest at Minerva's feet- though the Confusion had jolted it awake, it had knocked it out almost immediately afterwards.

"Well done," sighed Minerva as she withdrew Rhyhorn and approached Violet. Once Minerva reached the challenger's side of the arena, she handed another Gravel Badge and TM34 to Violet.

"...I guess," sighed Red. In truth, he didn't feel ready at all, given that none of his Pokémon had any sort of move that could be effective on a Rock-type.

"You know, you don't have to do this now, Red," Violet said kindly. "We can help you train-"

"Thanks, Violet, but... I want to at least give it a shot," said Red, giving a brave attempt at a smile. "I'm not always going to be at an advantage, so I might as well get some practice trying to win in spite of a disadvantage."

"Wow," Violet said as Minerva crossed back over to her side of the battlefield. "Well, good luck, Red!"

"Thanks," Red smiled as he turned to face Minerva.

"Yeah, we're behind you all the way, Red!" added Orange. He then leaned over and muttered to Violet, "He's screwed, isn't he?"

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This was great. I like your nod to your A of A.
Watch Red's Carmander evolve mid-fight, learn metal claw, and ace it.

They say if you press cntrl and W you get to see the programming of a website after making a signature with 3 ws and 8qs
Fanfics I like that are still in production: Author's Run, Pokémon emerald the better version

EEEEEEEEEVIIIIIIIIIIIIIIILLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This was great. I like your nod to your A of A.
Watch Red's Carmander evolve mid-fight, learn metal claw, and ace it.

This fic's mechanics are based on Generation I. Special stat, Wrap is actually worth using, Magnemite is pure Electric, et cetera. Metal Claw didn't exist until Generation II, and Charmander didn't become able to learn it until the middle of Generation III.

When an unknown infection spreads throughout Hoenn, it's up to three elite Trainers to defeat its source: Deoxys.

Currently up to Chapter 2 of the sequel.

Credit to Atari!

Originally Posted by Kamina

Do you know why people have eyes at the front? It's to see the vast landscape, and to move forward. If we had eyes in the back, we'd only see ourselves leaving our birthplace. That way, people could never move forward. Our eyes are at the front, so that when we walk, the distant landscape draws closer. That's why people can move forward.

Anyway, I love it. The gym battle was great, as was the evolution. I just have two suggestions.

First, get out of your habit of describing a Pokemon coming out of a Pokeball as a "flash of light". Unless, of course, that was an intentional shout out to AOA. There are plenty of other ways to describe it, and you don't even have to describe it at all.

Second, it's not a bad thing to say "said". "He grunted", "she commanded", "he exclaimed", etc., are awkward to read. "Said" flows right into the story naturally, and keeps the pace fast. And never, ever, EVER use something like "he grinned" to follow dialogue. If you can grin a sentence, I'd be happy to see/hear it, but until then, you say words. Not grin them.

My fan-fic(Credit to Gelatino95 at Crazy Dragon Graphics for the userbar) Author's profile And here's an awesome RPG. It has dinosaurs!And a sprite comic, because I can't draw!

Here I am at last. Had a bit of schoolwork to finish, but it's done now. So, let's get started.

Originally Posted by Missingno. Master

"Heh... And what, the Gym Leader would use three Pokémon at once, and each of us would only use one?" he chuckled.

Yeah, who would do that I wonder?

Minevra, creative name. She appears to be a good battler, wonder if Red can pull off a victroy at his type disadvantage.
If a certain orange fire lizard evolved in the middle of the battle into a certain crimson fire lizard I happen to like, than that might be favorable to a certain trainer named after a primary color.

I honestly can't wait to see Red's battle next chapter, it should be interesting.

Knightfall signing off...

P.S: I got my name changed. It's now Knightfall with a capital "K". I don't know if that matters too much, but you did say to tell you if we got a name change....

First, get out of your habit of describing a Pokemon coming out of a Pokeball as a "flash of light". Unless, of course, that was an intentional shout out to AOA. There are plenty of other ways to describe it, and you don't even have to describe it at all.

Second, it's not a bad thing to say "said". "He grunted", "she commanded", "he exclaimed", etc., are awkward to read. "Said" flows right into the story naturally, and keeps the pace fast. And never, ever, EVER use something like "he grinned" to follow dialogue. If you can grin a sentence, I'd be happy to see/hear it, but until then, you say words. Not grin them.

Both of those are things I've been trying to work on, though obviously not with much success. As for not following dialogue with "he grinned" and such, that's actually a good point, I'll remember that.

Originally Posted by Knightfall

Minevra, creative name. She appears to be a good battler, wonder if Red can pull off a victroy at his type disadvantage.
If a certain orange fire lizard evolved in the middle of the battle into a certain crimson fire lizard I happen to like, than that might be favorable to a certain trainer named after a primary color.

I honestly can't wait to see Red's battle next chapter, it should be interesting.

Knightfall signing off...

P.S: I got my name changed. It's now Knightfall with a capital "K". I don't know if that matters too much, but you did say to tell you if we got a name change....

I'm gonna take a wild shot in the dark of a guess and suppose that you just might possibly want Red's Charmander to evolve in the next chapter. I'll be honest, it's a possibility I'm considering. I have several ideas for Red's battle. I know how you feel, too- there was a time when Charmeleon was my favorite Pokémon, years and years ago. Red's Charmander will evolve, definitely, and soon. That's all I can say at the moment.

Next chapter won't be for some time, possibly not until after I get out the next special chapter of The Adventure of Adventureness.