I like the idea behind this shot and the choice to use such a different written language to what I tend to normally see in these sorts of shots (mostly it seems to be wedding vows or some such). However I think two things would have really improved this:

1) focus at the moment is sitting in the empty area between two books - and is highlighting the empty space at the bottom of one of those books. With that creative script I would have tried to get the focus right over a section of text to really show that detail.

2) its rather dark overall - though that might have been the effect you were after, I think a little more light would have really given this shot a lift