5. MisterE (0-1) vs 6. | Origin | (0-0)

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Here to take E off the map since I heard he was sitting on X.
Caught up to him, he wasn't spitting no threats.
Don't know why he hyped those visuals,
Mister E wasn't even cheefin, it was all smoke signals.
Still on principle, I gotta beat him within an inch of death.
With the hands, Imma precision vet. Judo chops hitting face chin and neck,
til pupils get expelled from skull like E cheated on a written test.
I keep traditions fresh, all is not forgiven yet.
We'll see eye to eye when you're back from your vision quest.
Your dame is proof my game spittin is fine, my dick on her mind.
Nothing would get her out of those jeans faster.
No glove in sight, she say "we still fucking right?"
I pulled your favorite team trackshirt out the clean hamper,
and was about to use it as her dream catcher.
Til her old John told me that a poke could haunt us, (pocahontas)
Cus when your chick got to smoking ganja,
she got horny and would take tokes from used broken condoms.
Licked every man from scrotum to hole.
Dirty hoe left lice in sheets, wasn't piped in peace,
She was dug out like ground under a totem pole.
Some things can only be solved with spraying and shootin.
E runs away from all that and prays for improvement,
Only natural a MisterE stays away from solution.
So don't go to him when settling biz,
He'll suck dick if it means letting him live,
E has no heart like the tin man from the Wiz,
Only thing in the MisterE machine is metal N kids.

Your deaths enclosed: switchblade shanking his Memento’s
Take a letter opener to his envelope and empty out his mental notes
Origin hasn’t e-volved yet, so I'm in his sweet doll’s neck
Skanky splattered…she was taking baby batter's like a T Ball set
Gagging while drool falls, the nasty scag clambered from zoo walls
With Amazon mule calls and left my back with more scratches than an amateur pool hall
Fake faggot, watch this lil kid get laced, he’s concealed in dense haze
Your not gangsta, bitch…you thought Jada kiss was a Will Smith sex tape
Dip shit, your sparring armless…so starch ya garments with tar for hardness
You harmless carcass, signing Bizarre’s fan club don’t make you a Marshall Artist
Watch me upgrade Origin’s faggoty dork noise
He‘d love, ’I’m a Hoagie sandwich with pork loin…goin ham on you Poor Boy‘s!’
I’ll learn the little child, paternal with the style
Birthed from my canal, then shoved a hunting blade in his throat and put Gerber in his mouth…faggot

Origin - Nice concepts. Your content was pretty on point. I have to say I liked the way your structure was for this verse. A little hard to read in the beginning until I caught on to how someone would spit this. Decent lines, though. Your close - I don't get it.. Tin man from the Wiz? Or Oz? Anyways, nothing stood out - just decent concepts. Wasn't feelin' that Pocahontus line, either. And that fact you explained it took away from it's impact..

MisterE - That opener was flames..Amateur pool ball setup/punch combo was the line of the match. That shit was fire, man. Consistent flow throughout. Concepts were all fresh though. That closer was a cool way to end it.

Origin: Not a bad verse, no real weak points, but heavy punches were lacking. You had some dope lines though. I liked the "written test" and "solution" punches in particular. The Pocahantas scheme would've been better if it wasn't intertwined within the "fuckin' yo bitch" scheme which ended up being way long drawn out. You can definitely rhyme though so just tighten up the schemes next time around.

MisterE: Pretty much went ham from start to finish. Keep dropping verses like that and you're gonna be a problem dude. But like I said last week, it wouldn't hurt to add a few more personals.

Here to take E off the map since I heard he was sitting on X.
Caught up to him, he wasn't spitting no threats.

I dont understand anything with this set up. way over my head.
catching up with him why? theres no hitter here... i dont get it

Don't know why he hyped those visuals,
Mister E wasn't even cheefin, it was all smoke signals.

i dont think cheefin was the best word to use for this concept,
i believe you could have switched something up here to make it better.

Still on principle, I gotta beat him within an inch of death.
With the hands, Imma precision vet. Judo chops hitting face chin and neck,

filler...

til pupils get expelled from skull like E cheated on a written test.
I keep traditions fresh, all is not forgiven yet.

Filler... i caught your skull/school meaning but its forced and has no impact.

We'll see eye to eye when you're back from your vision quest.
Your dame is proof my game spittin is fine, my dick on her mind.
Nothing would get her out of those jeans faster.
No glove in sight, she say "we still fucking right?"
I pulled your favorite team trackshirt out the clean hamper,
and was about to use it as her dream catcher.

Filler...

Til her old John told me that a poke could haunt us, (pocahontas)
Cus when your chick got to smoking ganja,
she got horny and would take tokes from used broken condoms.

it came off sounding good, rhymed flowed well and such.
but didnt make sense. the pocahontas play was for nothing...
which made me feel lost... and tokes from broken condoms?? over my head

Licked every man from scrotum to hole.
Dirty hoe left lice in sheets, wasn't piped in peace,
She was dug out like ground under a totem pole.
Some things can only be solved with spraying and shootin.
E runs away from all that and prays for improvement,

im starting to get bored... no name flips.. no direct personals..
no nothing...

Only natural a MisterE stays away from solution.
So don't go to him when settling biz,
He'll suck dick if it means letting him live,
E has no heart like the tin man from the Wiz,
Only thing in the MisterE machine is metal N kids.

i dont get what metal N kids means...
hes full of metal and kids... makes no sense...

Mister E:

Your deaths enclosed: switchblade shanking his Memento’s
Take a letter opener to his envelope and empty out his mental notes

i liked the flow, the ryhmes good too... but seemd like filler.
it has nothing to do with your opponent. so i dont like it.

Origin hasn’t e-volved yet, so I'm in his sweet doll’s neck
Skanky splattered…she was taking baby batter's like a T Ball set

i think im missing something... i dont know what baby batters are.
this is over my head.

Gagging while drool falls, the nasty scag clambered from zoo walls
With Amazon mule calls and left my back with more scratches than an amateur pool hall

LOL @ the scratches and pool hall but this is way too many bars in
to still be dissing his girl...