Great descriptions, I love the conversation between Eol and Maeglin in the first chapter. Its really powerful!

Sweet amethyest chapter 3 . 11/1/2003

Don't be so hard on yourself, this is really good, it's so annoying when characters start doing things their way, isn't it? Oh well they usualy know what their doing, and they probably bossed Tolkien around too!

But...but... where's the rest? Surely, you can't just leave it there? Puulleeasse continue this! It's very well done. Of course, I'm biased towards anything with Maeglin in... but this one, I think, is exceptional. A job well done!

I don't know why you were worried about this chapter - it reads beautifully. Poor Maeglin - how horrible to discover that the very thing you've longed to experience your entire life is in reality overwhelmingly painful to you. And it makes such a lovely metaphor for his entire life - his longing for light ultimately is what destroys him. Had he been content with the twilight, he would never have come to grief. Why does Tolkien so often show characters destroyed by their own striving towards greatness? I pity Maeglin - he seems to deserve a better fate than he got.

This is beautiful! The description at the end is quite powerful and evocative. 'For the fire that burns inside me is not of the sun' - what a terrible thing to realize. You show the descent into madness wonderfully.

Please don't turn Maeglin into a child! The Silmarillion text clearly shows he was not, and the scene in Gondolin works best when he's an adult (unless you want to make him a kind of Dante who falls in love with a much older Beatrice...). Timelines made by third parties are not necessarily trustworthy.

Wonderful! You keep me interested in a part of his life that didn't really intrigue me before. Maeglin's silent promises to his mother are beautiful. Well-written, with an ending that leaves me wanting more...

Lovely. Poor aredhel. she is one of my favorite,(No i dont like Luthien like most of ppl). so strong, crossing the grinding ice, but fell into that darn Eol's trap and then killed by him. sigh... oh I DO hate Eol

An Avarin Eol... I'm not sure, though the idea holds some appeal to me. Perhaps he was of mixed descent? (Ah! Another story...) Well-wrought, dark portrait of father and son. I particularly loved the line 'Your mother has no kin.'

Oh yay! A Silmarillion fic! And about Maeglin! I loved Maeglin from the first time I read his description, he's so cool. I felt bad for him. Of course, it's a little weird how he falls in love with his cousin later but uh... Anyways, poor Maeglin all the same. And poor Aredhil too. I can't wait to see more chaptes added to this one!