I'm enjoying the interaction between the characters so far, although Cory seems a bit spoiled and confused, but I'd say it's in keeping with his upbringing given that his parents have or had money. I like the story and will read more if you choose to write more.

Wow, just wow. This is so intesting, correctly portraying human nature. I love it. Is it going to be Cory/Lor? I know that's horribly cliche, but cliche works in small doses ... Eh, what ever. It's your story and I'll love whatever you decide. Update soon!

Oh my god, what a terrible place to end! Is Cory going to get together with Michael, or is he going to be murdered by Raven? Is Cory's friends going to get intimate with the head hunter? Gosh your plot is so intoresting. Is Cory going to shape up and realize that being married might not be so bad, and is Michael ever going to get any? Great Fiction. Thank-you.

you know what's the greatest crime on fictionpress?
getting people hooked on a story and not updating or finishing it.
please i'm going through withdrawal here. i'll give my brother for the next update...

Ooh, I really liked the final paragraph of this chapter! Gives a nice foreshadowing for the rest of the story. This was an excellent first chapter-really caught my attention. I'm definitely going to keep reading. *pets Lor and Cory*
Cinaed