Very short, but really good too. I like it. I love how excited James is, how cute! And I love the way Lily realized she loved him too! This is such a cute story!!! 10/10 ^_^ ( now turn the edges of the mouth up a little and there's what my face looked like when I read this . . . really it did!)

So so so cute! I LOVED IT! just a bit of constructive critisism: 1) spelling; some of the words are missing letters 2) It was just a bit rushed, : ) I absolutely loved the whole thing though! Bloody brilliant idea! 10/10

Author's Response: omg

thanks. I know about the spelling and stuff but i was kind of rushed so i had an alibi. ha.

It is a little short. The first paragraph could have been longer. Maybe explaining how Lily felt about the noises, what the noises sounded like, et cetera. And what is a hudgr? It was very nice how you described the stag (should I say James) and Lily. You also could have described going up to her dorm more. The last paragraph was really nice though. Good work.

Author's Response: um..... thank you?

hudgr is my way of proving i dont have spell chack at the minute and what happens when i type really fast. its huge but usually spell it with a d for some reason.