No. This one was close for me, but my initial reaction to reading it was: "Aren't we all born mooning the world?" I mean, we're all born naked. If you're going for a mental picture of a breached birth, then this just didn't do it for me for some reason.

No. Agreed that since we're all born naked, this doesn't exactly set the MC apart for me. But maybe we're meant to be intrigued by the fact that the MC chooses *this* part of being born to focus on. Which I kind of like. But not really enough.

This one was close for me because it does set up a humorous side of your narrator, but we're all born mooning the world. And if you're trying to utilize the image of a breech birth, then I'm not sure humor should be the right way to go.

Yes. I agree that technically it doesn't quite bring up the image, but that's not really the point, I don't think. It says quite a bit about the character. Someone who describes their birth like that seems to me to be a very "Tom Sawyer" sort of attitude, a scoundrel.

Yes. While we're all born naked, we're not all born "mooning the world." There's an attitude, a voice, that comes across in the choice of words. Don't know, though, if this is a prankster character or a character who sees the mooning as a sort of "flipping off" to the world. I'd read on to find out!

No. It's close, but just not there. Anything that starts with "I was born" reminds me of David Copperfield (and then Catcher in the Rye), so it then has set itself apart immediately, and this just didn't do it for me. It's funny, but not quite funny enough for me to really care.

It was close, though, and I'm giving it the benefit of the doubt. Technically, we're all born mooning the world, but I do like the attitude and irreverance that comes across with the observation.

But this is entirely a sentence that I'm prepared to take on faith that it relates immediately to what's going on in the current scene.

If this sentence is followed by a bunch of exposition about how much of an irreverant attitude the narrator has, then you've lost me. If the sentence is followed by immediate action/consequences where the MC is doing something similar, showing that he hasn't really changed all that much, then I'll find it homorous. (Except mooning strikes me as YA... I might be wrong though)

If, however, this turns into a werewolf story, I will heavily roll my eyes at the over-the-top moon reference on line one.

No. My first thought was also, aren't we all? Then, I realized oh, no we aren't, but I wonder if a teen is going to pick up on that subtlety. After all, I've even given birth twice and i had to pause a minute. I don't think you want that on your first line. But, (no pun intneded) I do like the idea/humor- can you rephrase it slightly?

No. I was born butt-first and I sure wouldn't want to read a book about me. It is funny, and maybe with some context it might work, but as a stand-alone first line it didn't really make me want to read what was next. Sorry.

Many of you are saying we're all born naked, which is true, but "mooning" is a deliberate juvenile act. (and yes, some of my friends and I went "mooning" one night in high school). So, to me, I see a rebel in the first sentence. It's like he flipped off the world as soon as he arrived and has been flipping it off ever since. I sense the posibility of redemption in this story.