Honestly, I found that they went through far too easily. There should have been more challenge to their rise. The Empire also reeks of perfection and GE-hate, even though in Canon, the Empire was surprisingly well supported (The Rebels were a much smaller number than the supporters.) Lowering Tax was actually a bad idea; repairing the damage after a civil war without taxes? It actually makes sense for these characters since none of them are politicians.

They are also running their Empire without any opposition (I don't count the Sith because he isn't a member of the Empire of Angels, but an exterior threat that would have faced any of them). There should be Civilian and Stormtrooper rebellions, Mandalorian raids, rioting, slums, everything you'd see after a forceful regime change. Do you think the 501st "Vader's Fist" will bow down to Grievous and Ventress? Do you think that planets like Naboo or Ryloth would appreciate the mass usage of the same Droids that occupied their worlds? The answer to both of those questions is No.

It's still a great story, but there are problems. Here's my suggestion if you ever rewrite this: more challenge and proper opposition. Good Luck, and continue writing.

How did you make something with such great potential so extremely boring? This screams feminism, which itself mind you is quite boring, but you had to make it worse by making it as idiotic as possible.

To be honest they should have revived Revan. He was the best general EVER.

Ulrich Alexander chapter 12 . 10/20/2013

Probably not the best time to point this out, but Grievous wouldn't be able to generate force lightning, as his limbs aren't organic. Sorry, it just bugs me, you don't actualy have to DO anything about it. Apart from that, great story, entertaining and the way SW should've been all round.