I am so terribly glad you decided to make this more than a one-shot because it's such a great fic and you write so well. Brendon was utterly amusing in this chapter and now, well I'm really looking forward to reading more. Write soon.

i think...you write the best, powerful lines ever! 'i write the songs!' 'i write the sins'...wow. who would've ever thought of...?
i'm still shocked at how great you're writing this! usually people write things off like this completely whory but i really love this...
again, onto the next chapter. :D

This is really good.
I mean, really.
You write so beautifully, it just kind of draws me in
And so far, it's kinda hot without being smutty, which is a difficult thing to do.
And the recurrence of 'disheveled' is very clever. Indeed.