Nice it was good....where was it exactly on Halo? and u didnt metion any of the peoples names to that was a little confusing. I might sound sort of hypocritical but u had some mistakes...so i gave it a 7.4 out of a 10. Keep up the good work!

It was pretty good. There were some formatting errors though, particularly a few instances where a new line began before the other was finished. You used the Code, but only on the first paragraph. Try to add indents throughout your entire story.

You also had some grammatical errors, such as:
[quote=Grammatical Run-On]The roars scared the smaller grunts, but not the Wraiths, who, with the loud noises of our snipers, fired at their position, and soon, the rest of the marines and I, were the last line of defense, a grim thought, but true non the less.[/quote]

You could separate that into two or three sentences. Commas can be tricky, so make sure you don't get swamped by them (I'm sure it wasn't intentional ).

The story used a few good terms, such as 'blindsided,' but you were straying pretty close to Super Marine-dom. I doubt a single Marine could take out all of those baddies, though I suppose it is possible if he is skilled enough. Destroying the Wraith was going a bit too far, though.

You didn't have very much character development there, and I'm not sure if you meant that, but it didn't seem to hurt anything._________________Eighty percent of human wisdom is the desire to not butt into other peoples' business, and the other twenty percent doesn't matter.