Angel In Blood

There she lay before me, So stunning, so still Her skin so soft, so pure Covered in blood.

Her blue eyes wide open, Dried tears ran along her temples, Her dress as white as snow, But covered in blood. Broken chandeliers, Broken glass Her giant, dark wings, Wide open, imprinting The white marble floor All in blood.

She fought her Brothers She fought her Sisters, That beautiful Angel, That divine Angel Ending her Eternal life, She lay before me, She was dressed in blood. Her smooth, golden hair, Covered her alluring face There she lay before me, She died, with her hair dyed In blood.

And there she lay before me, The beautiful Angel, The divine Angel, The Angel in blood

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For an honest review, it was nice; perhaps if you didn't repeat the fact that she was drenched 'in blood' in every stanza . How about "Covered her alluring face
She died, with her hair stained
In blood." but you don't need to make those changes, hoped I helped a little :D

This poem is fantastic!! You have magnificent writing skills and I am so appreciative that you share them with the world. I admire the way you repeat yourself, "covered in blood, died in blood, dressed in blood, etc." it's very intriguing and paints a clear picture in my mind. You use such terrific imagery through this poem! I have to say, when you noted the way her wings looked and left marks of blood I was mystified. How could one line be so beautiful? I love this poem so much, 5/5 stars from ... (more »)