Good work, Jake. I'm enjoying Hocus as a character more than I ever did in the third game. And I liked the ODST, Adrian, making an appearance. Nice inter-story continuity there, coming from another big self-referencer.

The meeting between the Chief and Cortana almost seemed a little too short, but it still worked well. I liked Stacker picking up on his change.

Good work, Jake. I'm enjoying Hocus as a character more than I ever did in the third game. And I liked the ODST, Adrian, making an appearance. Nice inter-story continuity there, coming from another big self-referencer. Razz

Well, that's not saying much, she wasn't much of a character in Halo 3.

And, yeah, I did think it was time for Adrian to return, seeing as how I replayed Half-Life Opposing Force last weekend.

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Sorry for the brief review, but I'm a bit pressed for time.

It's all good Kabu, so long as you post a decent-sized on eventually. _________________Sir Isaac Newton is the DEADLIEST SON OF A BITCH IN SPACE!

Well, that's not saying much, she wasn't much of a character in Halo 3.

True, Jake, but that's where your talents lie: taking side characters from the games and giving them personality that fits with the game but at the same time makes them your own characters. I know I've told you that before, but that's one of the things I like most about this series._________________

To be honest, there isn't all that much to say. Your chapters are tight, with great flow and entertaining characters and are WAY TOO SHORT. Yes, it was a bit longer than last time, but come on now. You're killing me with these cliffhangers!

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I think you made a really good choice with presenting the Chief from someone else's POV. I think we can actually get a better look at his character through how other soldiers react to him, and the changes they noticed. kr mentioned Stacker picking up on the Chief's emotions, stuff like that.

Also, almost none of your characters are just names. Everyone has a face behind them.