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Beautifully done! I think we have a winner here. To carry the story through the shifts and changes of the characters' decisions while keeping to the meter and the rhyming pattern is a wonderful feat. On top of being a well-written piece, it also reaches deep into the hearts of all of us who too easily yearn for a seemingly "better" place in life. Bravo!!

I agree with everyone else about how wonderful this poem is, so I'll just say one tiny thin g about quotation marks: you don't need so many of them, and your poem will look better if you edit some away. For example:

One spring day (or was it fall?),
The tree began to ponder,
"Should I remain upon this hill,
Or pull up roots and wander?

For all the good I might have done,
And deeds I might do still,
Might never happen if I stay,
Alone upon this hill."

You only need those two, to begin and end the tree's words. It'd be similar for other stanzas.

When I quote my favorite poet Joyce Kilmer - "Poems are made by fools like me, but only God can make a tree"; I will now have to put a footnote ***with the exception of .."Blank Blank", (who will remain nameless until 12/19/05) AND who is definitely no fool! This poet knows whereof he or she speaks and writes!
A fantabulous work of artistry! Bravo and Kudos!

This was an outstanding poetic piece. The gentleness and veracity of the dove, coupled with the contrast of the raven's evil trickery made for delightful reading. I thought of the passage of scripture that teaches us that our struggle is not with flesh and blood, but with a supernatural host, good and evil. Congratulations! A job well done!