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well since you are asking about grammatical errors, the only one i found was instead of attacking you said attaching
i liked it though nice short story :3
i was thinking of writing one about scizor and heracross

Actually, Joltik's Species Type is the Attaching Pokemon. I forgot to add the part when Dawn scans Joltik & Dwebble much earlier on in the chapter. Also, it's an excerpt from my fiction, not a short story. Anyways, I'm glad that you enjoyed it.

On your Scizor and Heracross short story, is it Scizor VS Heracross or Scizor + Heracross vs xxx or is it just a non-battling story.

Actually, Joltik's Species Type is the Attaching Pokemon. I forgot to add the part when Dawn scans Joltik & Dwebble much earlier on in the chapter. Also, it's an excerpt from my fiction, not a short story. Anyways, I'm glad that you enjoyed it.

On your Scizor and Heracross short story, is it Scizor VS Heracross or Scizor + Heracross vs xxx or is it just a non-battling story.

Btw, did you like the strategy used?

i loved that strategy :3
when you used shell smash i thought for sure you were gunna have a white herb or something and then stone edge him
and in my story it is going to be heracross and scizor vs. darkrai

I've only finished one chapter of it
Right now heracross just got kidnapped

Ooo cant wait to read :P

Originally Posted by OceanicLanturn

I just wrote a battle of two bugs (Dwebble and Joltik) fighting against a monk trainer. It's Nando vs monk actually. Yeah, Nando = the same guy in DP.

*place in le spoiler*

Spoiler:- Text:

“Dwebble, Joltik, please come out.” Nando calmly called out his Dwebble and Joltik, who jumped out with eagerness.

“Pah! You’re challenging me with baby Pokemon?” The monk asked as he felt offended. “Well, I’ll send you home! Victreebel, Noctowl, get ready!” The old monk sent out the final evolution stage of the Bellsprout family, as well as a Noctowl, which Bianca had seen in Drake’s battle against Falkner.

“Battle… Begin!” There was a different music this time, with more drumbeats and excitement. When it died down, Nando and the old monk both smiled.

“Dwebble, please use Shell Smash, and Joltik, please protect your ally.” Dwebble dumped its shell on the ground and it was surrounded by a red aura. During this process, Joltik stood bravely in front of Dwebble, protecting its teammate with Protect as Noctowl and Victreebel both attacked.

“Now, please use Smack Down at Noctowl. Meanwhile, Joltik, please use Electroweb.” Nando commanded as he struck his harp.

“Blow that child away with Gust, Noctowl. Victreebel, use Leaf Storm to counter!”

Dwebble moved at alarmingly fast rate, but Noctowl was faster. Noctowl sent a wild gust that blew Dwebble away before it could launch its attack. As Dwebble now lost his shell, Dwebble became more susceptible to attacks and took greater damage. Meanwhile, Joltik’s Electroweb was countered by Leaf Tornado, which cut through the Electroweb with no effort and sent the Attaching Pokemon flying back, crashing by the side of Dwebble.

The monk laughed loudly. “Now it is time! Finish them up!” Despite Nando’s seemingly disadvantaged situation, he remained calm and composed. With a gesture of his hand, Joltik went back into shape while Dwebble returned to his shell.

“Please, both of you, Bug Bite.” Nando commanded calmly. Both bug Pokemon advanced, their fangs growing long and light green. However, Noctowl sent both of them tumbling back again with Gust. Nando once again commanded them to use Bug Bite, but to no avail, the same results repeated.

“What do you want to do, really?” The old monk laughed. “Well, desperate, I see. Finish ‘em off, Gust and Leaf Tornado!”

Nando smiled. With another flick of his hand, Joltik let loose a wild frenzy of spider web which caught Noctowl’s wings, preventing it from flapping, as well as Victreebel, preventing it from attacking.

“You may consume the berry now.” Nando said calmly. Bianca and Dawn looked at each other from the sidelines, confused. Dwebble nodded and withdrew into its shell, and came out, holding a berry. It finished it in one big gulp, and immediately its body grew red.

“What is that?!” The monk cried, surprised, as his Pokemon were still stuck in the webs.

Nando withdrew something from his pocket. It was a small fruit, green in colour. “The Salac Berry, raises a Pokemon’s speed with low health.” Nando informed. “Please use Flail now, Dwebble.”

Dwebble’s body turned white and it tackled the two other Pokemon. Within a single hit, they were launched backwards to the trainer, unable to battle.

“WHAT?!” The old monk yelled. “Noctowl, Victreebel, no!” Nando struck his harp and sang a hymn as Bianca and Dawn joined him. All activities ceased when the room was encased in a white light. It turned out that Dwebble and Joltik were both evolving, into a new form, a new Pokemon…

What do you think of the battle? I think I personally wrote it as a bit too one-sided, but it was a literal reverse-the-tide kind of stuff which actually relies on strategy rather than DEM. So comments? Reviews? Grammatical Errors? Rate and subscribe?

Hehe i liked this alot man, my favorite part was the part with the berry, i did not see it coming
very good and i cant wait to read more of your fic it was a awsome battle!

Originally Posted by Quimagma

Username quimagma
Favorite thing about bugs: they can come in many different and unique types

Welcome to the club quimagma , bugs most certainly are quite unique.

It appears everyones writting down great stories of bugs ay, keep it up guys i can t wait to keep reading.

Thank you, and may I add there should be more bug legends, because venesection is powerful and awesome

I have to agree you you here ay, bugs need more legendaryness lol.
Be careful with what you post bro, because your post is technically a "one liner post" please read the rules section of the clubs asap.
What do you mean by venesection though man lol? Cause i have no idea hehe.
But it would be hard even in the future to integrate a legandary bug into the pokemons. They had a marvelous concept as for genesect, so its no surprise as
to how its legendary. But i cant imagine another concept such as the one currently, that could be used to for-fill a bug legendary status.
After all , all legendary pokemon have arcane concepts behind them, mewtwo with genetic manipulation, mew the first pokemon, celebi time travel, the list could go on and on.

just letting you know i am not the best writer
but i love it so far :3
the story line is so far that heracross got kidnapped when scyther and him were kids and they never find him
later when scyther is older he gets kidnapped as well
he finds out the people they were kidnapped by was an agency led by volcarona and they are recruiting people with the potential to take down their ancient enemy darkrai
heracross becomes his partner in the agency
during his training he finds a shiny piece of metal and keeps it with him during training that reminds him of something from his past (you would have too read the first chapter to understand)
during his fight with darkrai he starts to lose then suddenly the metal starts to glow then it becomes warm and engulfs him and he evolves into scizor

I have to agree you you here ay, bugs need more legendaryness lol.
Be careful with what you post bro, because your post is technically a "one liner post" please read the rules section of the clubs asap.
What do you mean by venesection though man lol? Cause i have no idea hehe.
But it would be hard even in the future to integrate a legandary bug into the pokemons. They had a marvelous concept as for genesect, so its no surprise as
to how its legendary. But i cant imagine another concept such as the one currently, that could be used to for-fill a bug legendary status.
After all , all legendary pokemon have arcane concepts behind them, mewtwo with genetic manipulation, mew the first pokemon, celebi time travel, the list could go on and on.

Again be careful of the one liner posts. You were warned so please follow the rules.
And as for Genesect I consider it a sudo-legendary. The new trailer has multiple of them and I think to be a real Legend there can only be one *Cue the highlander*
So I personally think there should be a nice bug legendary and who knows! Maybe they could go off the titans?
Lastly I found a Bug type shirt on a website called RedBubble, It's a totally safe site that sells artists shirts so I'll just leave the link here for you all to pleasure over!

haha autocorrect is a $&%*@ ain't it
i think there should be more bug legends
maybe the sprite in this next region will be bug/psychic
base stats of 100/100/100/100/100/100
Total: 600

Originally Posted by ShoesThief

Again be careful of the one liner posts. You were warned so please follow the rules.
And as for Genesect I consider it a sudo-legendary. The new trailer has multiple of them and I think to be a real Legend there can only be one *Cue the highlander*
So I personally think there should be a nice bug legendary and who knows! Maybe they could go off the titans?
Lastly I found a Bug type shirt on a website called RedBubble, It's a totally safe site that sells artists shirts so I'll just leave the link here for you all to pleasure over!

Again be careful of the one liner posts. You were warned so please follow the rules.
And as for Genesect I consider it a sudo-legendary. The new trailer has multiple of them and I think to be a real Legend there can only be one *Cue the highlander*
So I personally think there should be a nice bug legendary and who knows! Maybe they could go off the titans?
Lastly I found a Bug type shirt on a website called RedBubble, It's a totally safe site that sells artists shirts so I'll just leave the link here for you all to pleasure over!

*facepalm*
i messaged you about it
in other words it can't be just one line
it has to have some thought put into it as well
here is the link to the one liner sticky
i think everyone should read itOne-liners are not allowed

Anyone have any suggestions on Bugsy's team for my fan fiction? Currently, I'm writing about Falkner's gym battle so the next one will be Bugsy. Does anyone have any good suggestions for Bugsy's Buggy team? I'm thinking about maybe Scizor & Heracross core. Unfortunately, for the sake of plot, they have to lose :P

Anyone have any suggestions on Bugsy's team for my fan fiction? Currently, I'm writing about Falkner's gym battle so the next one will be Bugsy. Does anyone have any good suggestions for Bugsy's Buggy team? I'm thinking about maybe Scizor & Heracross core. Unfortunately, for the sake of plot, they have to lose :P

Hey Quimagma i know you literary just joined the club and i briefly suggested
you read the rules. AND after also what appears to be a convo with another
club member about this, i have to give you an infraction for One liner posts.
PLease read this -----> yo

I apologize ya no considering you literally just joined but i warned you about this and was tolerant of it because you literally did just join. But this must be done. If we don't obey the club rules the club in its entirety suffers.
Please read the rules bro.

That was a one-liner? Ups.. sorry, lad.
Well, something about shedinja just reminds me of Bugsy. Same goes with Vespiquen. And he already have a Scyther, so that would just be a good fit for his team.
Other than that, he might use Yanmega. That awesome, lovely monster.. Bugsy isn't worthy

Username: Princess RaspberylFavorite thing about Bug-types? Hmm...how some are adorable, some are badass, some are adorable and badass, and how they can make me somewhat feel better about spiders (Love Spinarak and Ariados) even those I have a fear of spiders. =P My top 3 favorite bug types are Butterfree, Scizor, and Ariados. =P But I love Volcorona, Beedrill, and Venipede too. =P

That was a one-liner? Ups.. sorry, lad.
Well, something about shedinja just reminds me of Bugsy. Same goes with Vespiquen. And he already have a Scyther, so that would just be a good fit for his team.
Other than that, he might use Yanmega. That awesome, lovely monster.. Bugsy isn't worthy

yeah and bugsy uses scizor in many other teams as well
like in the fighting dojo and PWT scizor is always with him

Username: Princess RaspberylFavorite thing about Bug-types? Hmm...how some are adorable, some are badass, some are adorable and badass, and how they can make me somewhat feel better about spiders (Love Spinarak and Ariados) even those I have a fear of spiders. =P My top 3 favorite bug types are Butterfree, Scizor, and Ariados. =P But I love Volcorona, Beedrill, and Venipede too. =P

WEll well well, if it isnt Miss Raspberyl.. Look who got herself stuck in the web called the bug thread :P

EDIT:

lol welcome to the club princess, i must admit though spiders are kinda creepy lol

Username: Princess RaspberylFavorite thing about Bug-types? Hmm...how some are adorable, some are badass, some are adorable and badass, and how they can make me somewhat feel better about spiders (Love Spinarak and Ariados) even those I have a fear of spiders. =P My top 3 favorite bug types are Butterfree, Scizor, and Ariados. =P But I love Volcorona, Beedrill, and Venipede too. =P

Glad to see you joined the club! And welcome!
Spinarak does make me feel good about spiders and how they don't make me shiver anymore!
And i'm glad you love Butterfree too!

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