Tuesday, 18 June 2013

WALT choose words that describe a moment (in an exciting way) for the reader

YOUR SIGNS OF SUCCESS

begins in the action

present tense (I am, not I was)

short, sharp sentences

strong verbs

uses the senses (look, feel, hear, taste, smell)

language features (simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia, metaphor)

show personality (sounds like you, humour, feelings, exaggeration)

Caving

We are all now heading to the rope cave. As we walk thru the smelly old wet cave I start to smell the damp smell of the cave including the insects that are in it like wetas and glow worms on the roof of the cave.

I go down the rope scared as anything & having Ms Hill directing me down. “oh” I feel a rock so I stand on it and I look down and its the bottom of the whole. “Yahh” its the bottom of the whole so we keep moving. And as I look up to see a weta my foot gets cold instantly and so I look down to see why “eww” my foot is in the wet soggy mud and it starts to sink down. I try to pull it up but no luck yet so I try harder and it comes out all covered in gooey mud. “Oh”!!!!! we have reached the end of the Smelly cave and now we have to go back to camp :-(. “Woah” it’s pitch black now and we can't see anything out here but luckily we have torches so now we can see:-). Are we going the right way I wonder because we all can't see the vans yet. “Woah look at the vans I say to Richard behind me the lights on the vans are glowing in the dark and it looks like a monster shape. We start to hop into our vans in the pitch black cold night we finally start to drive off heading back to camp. We get to camp before you know it and all go have toasty warm showers. After our showers we have free play until tea is ready. After tea we go to bed.

Friday, 14 June 2013

WALT choose words that describe a moment (in an exciting way) for the reader

YOUR SIGNS OF SUCCESS

begins in the action

present tense (I am, not I was)

short, sharp sentences

strong verbs

uses the senses (look, feel, hear, taste, smell)

language features (simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia, metaphor)

show personality (sounds like you, humor, feelings, exaggeration)

Night Detectives

Day one.

Tonight is our first night at Camp Kaitawa and we are going to do a night detective challenge.

Yay!!!!!! we finally arrive at the night detective challenge we all get out of our vans and head to the bush scared as anything. We start to go into the bush near Michael's grave.The first word we see is the word Michael...... and so we keep going and then it says Noonan welcomes you to Camp Kaitawa I may return.... and as soon as Crighton saw the word return he ran back towards me and said “nah I’m getting out of here and so I pushed him forward so he kept going. After that we saw another word and it said on a full moon night...... Have fun. And now its over we have to walk back to camp on the side of the road ‘Wow that was fun” Crighton said to our whole team.