Don't take this the wrong way because I love your writing and your stories, and I know this story is finished, but in the future can you please not use the word preggers, at least as much as you have here? It's just so crass and classless, and doesn't do you the justice as the fantastic author you are.

Feel free to ignore me if you wish, but that's just my opinion. I'll still continue to read your work regardless.

I think this is my first review of any of your stories, but I've been reading Along Came Sirius and As Stupid As Me. I must say... there is a HUGE difference in your writing abilities. You have improved so much!

I really think that this could be a good story, although the fact that it is older writing really shows. It seems kind of... juvenile at times. A lot of times, your characters don't sound their age. Maybe you didn't know how 17 year olds acted when you wrote this initially? Anyhow, maybe sometime you could go back and revise this.

Please keep up the writing on Along Came Sirius! It's really splendid.