Crack Your Memory

Memory has a behind angle—
Tis somewhat like a facade,—
It has the view of a castle,
'Tis the long faces and turrets
For refuge, a mouse!
Besides the darkest cellar;—
That any the mason ever made,—
Search unto its depthless summons;
To thineself, be it ever in pursuit;
To thy artist, be it ever drawn…
Ne’er in the line of the decay;
In pursual, be ye memories—
All happy in its used-up estate.

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I was rolling on the floor laughing at the first line, and crying at the last. It works, though had I written it I would have used some stronger metaphor. ( The D & D veteran in me says: You put in a castle but no dragon? What were you thinking? Conversely such could strike as a conventionalism treading on the heels on cliche. It's a split decision. )

Something in me needs a bit more from it, but well done.

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thanks! i guess you think it's short? i think the images are the metaphor for something so short... no? thanks for reading. i like your comment.

Probably I am stating my own preference for poetry with more action in it. I have poems like this in that they are a snapshot or still life that speak to a single thought or emotion. I also have a small number of unfinished works because my muse saw the poetry in something but could not latch onto a story to go with it. Upon reflection perhaps at my age of fifty seven, the subtleties of life are fading in significance.

The ephemeral nature of memory is perhaps worth a longer more illustrative work?

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@the goblin, i didn't see ya there!!!!! a mouse because of layers of the consciousness and you don't know what's lurking at the bottom... did i capture it right for you to understand? i thought it sounded pleasing. oh and i love mice.

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Sure enjoyed reading both poem and comments. Personally I liked the mouse, though it did stop me for a moment. Also I like Grace's poetical comment on thee and t'were. I would agree, though this is a poem about a castle, so seems to fit.

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