Series!!!

super hot

I loved it. Your characters are brilliant. The way you've kept the tension up the entire story was magnificent and I would love to read more. Maybe we'll get lucky and you'll decide to make it into a series. Thank you for one of the most erotic reads so far.

Wow

Very good.

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Anonymous07/07/11

You are a Wordsmith!! ....... keep going with this!!

Excellent story...many try but few succeed...everything was superb...story line, hesitancy, passion, forbidden pleasure...great pace and WONDERFUL climax!!
Where to from here?? The sky is the limit....right??
Thanks!!

Real or Fiction?

Are you sure this is a story of fiction? It just seems too real -- as if you are relaying a personal experience that was so vivid, so luscious the words came gushing out.

Oh wait -- that's what good writers do and you are indeed a good writer. Loved the way you use the weather outside to define the buildup taking place inside. Great use of descriptive phrases that shed light onto the brother-sister relationship such as “the air is as thick as a wet sponge” and “the rain that everyone begged for still had not come” brings a literary sense to human relations.

Totally satisfying piece of literature.

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Anonymous07/07/11

so-so

you never say how old they are so we don't know if they are in high school, college or out of college. we would have a better understanding of them if you told us thier ages. if he was just out of high school or in a local college then we could see why he would stay even with the tension. if he was out of college then the way you wrote it it would have made more sense for him to move out so he could get away from her and the temptation

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Anonymous07/07/11

then

what happens next mom finds out then they stay together or?

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Anonymous07/07/11

omg...

i can't read anything else here. that is excellent writing, truly. i could go on with detail, as you did, but you already know. just excellent.

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Anonymous07/07/11

wow

I wish I had a sister to fuck like that, Great story, just drained my balls

Great stuff

Even with the title being misleading...

I liked the story. Did he "fall" for Jennifer? I don't think so. Did he finally admit to his feelings for her and she admit to her feelings for him? I think so. "Falling" implies an accident. Not one of their actions was "by accident." Jenn left the bathroom door open. It wasn't an accident. Even with that semantic discord I found the story HOT and well written. Thanks.

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Anonymous07/07/11

wow!

The first seven paragraphs were one of the most effective intros to any story I have ever read. Thank You.

One More Thing . . .

I wrote earlier to express my enjoyment for your story. Then it downed on me. Why did the story end with the fuck? I mean, is that really the end of the story? You seem to care so much for your characters throughout the build up then give up on them after sex. What were they thinking? How did this change their lives? How long did this sexual relationship last? Did either one of them have a boy or girl friend? Did mom find out? And where was dad or is there a dad? Way to many unanswered questions to make this a truly fulfilling story. Now . . . if this was just part one, that’s a different story. So was this part one or, like sex for some people, once the climax is over your done?

Again, after thinking more about the story I realized that this brother-sister tale might have ended with a climax but their story certainly does not.

AWESOME

Great hot story in a category I try to avoid...

...since my morals are fractured enough. I would have called it "Drawn into my Sister" in re Scorpio's complaint. I've always found it fairly hypocritical that this category is okay but Lit won't let great authors like Stang Star even refer to a possibility of underage sex. Any way, you are a very good writer, maybe stretch your horizon's a bit in a new category?

Perfect story

Such an elegant job of writing!

There's a paragraph in the middle of page 2 that starts 'Even though I couldn't touch her intimately...' that is a beautiful expression of the awakening of love. I cite that passage, but actually the entire story is very well crafted. A very masterful job!

Absotively Posolutely Fantabuluosly Splendiforus !!!

5-star story

What I missed.

Love your work, it really sang to me. Wish my three sisters had come across like that, but then I was a wimp and did not let my true feeling out, thanks to the traditional aspect of sibling relationships in my day.

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Anonymous08/01/11

Too Late for me....

What a magnificent story...well crafted...dynamic tempo and a simply elegant tale on a troublesome topic. I'm now in my late 70s and supremely regret that I never considered my late sister as a potential sexual liaison. If only we could relive certain aspects of our lives. But your written offering will serve to bring me vicarious pleasure of an event that never happened to me. I think that for me it is less of the sex and more of the intense intimacy that would have propelled me into action.

Exquisite

A most delicious tale.

Fine writing indeed. Thank you.

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Anonymous09/10/11

Jennifer

Wow!one of the most erotic romantic stories ever
Ok,that was fuckin awesome!Eyes the color of doves wings...Hope to hell I can use that line sometime in my life.
Hope you've got a lot more stories out there cuz I'm damn sure gonna be lookin...
Thank's!