You're right, your grammar does suck. In fact it's absolutely terrible, even without your mother's letter. I can let a few mistakes here and there go, but this is just horrendous! While your plot is decent enough, you either need to clean up your grammar BIG TIME or find someone to help you out, because honestly, I'd expect this from an 8-year old, which I certainly hope you're not if your talking about sex-gods.