This story seems to have a really neat plot and I like the characterization, but I noticed one thing that was inaccurate and one that could use improving.

-Your use of "you're"/"your." "Your" is possessive, saying that something is someone's: "This is YOUR bicycle?" "You're" is the contraction of "you are": "You're Hannah, right?" Note how "You're" works here because the question is "you are Hannah?" If the question said "your name is Hannah, right?" it'd be "your," not "you're," because the name belongs to Hannah, Hannah possesses the name. #grammarnazi

-Neither Rocky nor Freckle have an Irish brogue. Tracy confirmed this on her forum and Tumblr. While Nina is Irish, the boys are American-born and have mostly American accents. Freckle, however, after years of living in his mother's house, has Irish speech patterns creep into his words every now and then (as Tracy put it, "having the word at the end rise in pitch, making it sound like a question.") Anyone with a normal speech pattern can easily develop an accent if subjected to it over time- I learned to talk in Ohio, but have lived in the South for ten years, causing me to start talking with a country accent every now and then. ;)