Aww, it was cute! It was really sweet! Some of your sentences seemed a bit. . odd. I don't mean this in a bad way, I'm just saying that, for example, your last sentence could use some commas, instead of just using "and" all the time. But of course it's your writing, your fic, your style! Do whatever you want! Oh, and I read your other review. . .just to let you know, you can do multi-chaptered fics here (I actually have two).