I dunno why, but still sound's for me alike NaruSasu or NSN than a SasuNaru at all, just saying. Otherwise I will be waitng for a rewrite if that make's you feel better. I think giving an end to something that has take a big effort for you it's a big deal, yet us equal, but any way is enden and the are together now, how in the world could be possibly that bad? I already read this in spanish but finally decide to read it in the original lenguage: is quite fantastic and such a great story. Thank you, thank you very much for that. I'm still hopign to read another story of yours so you have now a new fan of yours!

Wow, nearly had a heart attack at you professing to own Trumpkin's soul. Had to check the last time you updated (2010 in case you wondered), since he's running for pres. Also, noticed something about you not liking this story, and having tons of bad reviews, so just wanna put this out there: I really like your story. It has a bittersweet poignancy to it that I come back for every year or two. Even if its 'teen angst yaoi fandom' like you say, I don't really agree. I think its charming and sweet and I like to reread it, which shows it has worth, right?

Nekosongbird chapter 8 . 5/5/2016

I'm too tired to do a real review, but like my last comment: I frickin' love you. Life sucks for me right now, but this story is great, seriously. Too bad you'll never read this (but I always have doujinshi mu ha ha!). Thanks, seriously thank you.

Nekosongbird chapter 2 . 5/4/2016

So, I wasn't planning on reviewing (as you won't be reading this sinse it's been SIX YEARS! and you've (probably) got a life outside of fabrics and anime ships) but then you talked about Donald Drumf (true name) from SIX YEARS AGO and I did a double take bc you know currently the ass-butt (CASTIEL reference (I don't EVER swear, but I think I can make an exception for Mr. Donald)) and its weird seeing the name in fanfiction. Anyway, love it do far, thank you for excising and writing fanfiction for creepy horny Internet girls such as myself. Yes, I bet that make you feel better. Love ya (please, don't take that the wrong way, I'm not THAT creepy to crush on someone at least ten years older than me (though not at the time you were writing this))!

Oh. My. God...I WAS FANGIRLING SO HARD I ALMOST THREW UP! THAT WAS THE BEST STORY IN THE HISTORY OF FANFICTION . Net! Oooooommmmmgggggggg **

Guest chapter 8 . 7/20/2014

I can see why you wanted to rewrite this ending. It wasn't bad, it just didn't flow as nicely as the other chapters. This chapter felt "forced," like you wanted a bunch of plot twists and shoved them into the story instead of just writing what felt natural and right.

What parts did I think were forced? Just to mention a few:

Sasuke writing Naruto that business-like letter just to "throw [him] off." What? Why would he do that? They were about to have a very serious conversation that would change the course of their lives... and Sasuke decides to play games? For what possible reason? Naruto was freaking out because he thought he was going to be rejected. I can understand if Sasuke's reason for writing the letter in that way was because he wanted to reveal his feelings in person instead of a letter, but no, he did it to throw Naruto off.

Sasuke getting Naruto totally drunk. A few drinks to relax them both is perfectly understandable, but he got Naruto so drunk that Naruto basically forgot their entire evening together. EPIC FAIL. That was a really stupid idea on Sasuke's part and it seems obvious to me, at least, that the only reason he did it was so the story could force in the scene with Naruto being all confused in the morning. Like no romcom is complete without few stupid misunderstandings! Blah. I, personally, didn't like the fact that the story went for weird misunderstandings instead of letting them clear the air as the ADULTS they are supposed to be. It was disappointing for a couple of reasons. Firstly, because there were a lot of loose threads that never got tied up, like Sasuke explaining about Sakura. And secondly, because Sasuke and Naruto never had a real conversation even once in the entire story. It was just one-sided conversations (essentially), with Naruto pouring out his feelings and Sasuke reacting to the letters. This was the fic's one and only chance to show how they would be as a couple, how they would interact, show them pouring out their feelings to one another for real, in person ...and they got drunk instead.

The conversation about who would be uke or seme. That sounds like something a yaoi fangirl would imagine them talking about versus what they would actually talk about. Besides, Sasuke kept asking to sleep. That wasn't the time for them to start arguing about sexual positions. Especially since they hadn't even made it past first base!

And finally, the biggest one of all for me: the fact that the SasuNaru hookup was engineered by Iruka, Kakashi, and freaking SAKURA, of all people! How completely awkward! So who approached who? Did Iruka and Kakashi dare presume to ask her if she'd be fine with having them hook up the guy she's been in love with since she was 9? 10? years old (more than 20 years at this point if they are in their 30s!) with another guy? Or did she go to them to ask if they wouldn't mind helping her unload her unwanted fiance onto Naruto? So freaking awkward. And besides all that, it just looks incredibly contrived when other characters, no matter who they are, have to play cupid to force the main couple together. Like if Naruto and Sasuke really deserved one another, they wouldn't need the help of THREE puppet masters to make it happen.

Well, it seems the idea of a rewrite has been abandoned, but if you ever get back to it, I would just edit this last chapter (and maybe the one before it as a proper buildup to the last chapter).