Overall, a very nice story. However, the time between scenes needs to be longer. In other words, the passage of time in the story is too disjointed. An example is when Tom is eating dinner, there are no indications that Belanna is close to giving birth...then two seconds later (or so it seems) out pops the baby. Rather than trying to cram a whole story in a single chapter, take your time to fully develop the scenes and characters.