Omg it was good, I like your story, and I saw your review on my last chapter on 'the power of love' And I just had to see if you had any stories, and you did, so I read it and really liked it. Well done x Jesi x

Author's Response: thanks! your story isn't all that bad ither! no its really good! thanks for checkin me out....uhhhh... you know.

Ok,ok if I must say that it's good a guess I wil.. no lol it is good..I suppose..lol...but I still must temporarily hate you for killing Ron *sob*...don't worry I'll get over it ...eventually... I can't see your other story though, but I did look...anyway...I will be looking for the next chapter..and your "Jily"

i really like this story but i dont think u really ended it. you sorta need to just expand a little for the last chap like maybe explain why draco was abit upset and why ron killed himself and maybe the aftermath of that. i think u could do one more chap but thats just me

i like this story, but i'm a bit confused as to why ron died, anyway i think three chapters are fine for this story. Also when draco + Hermione were together, and the door opened, was it harry/ron under the invisibility cloak? i wondered about that. anyway great story :D

Author's Response: yeah it was ron and harry under the cloak, and ron loves hermione so he comitted suicide. its sad but i needed to end this story, for my next fan fic which i'm typing up now as a matter of fact

this really had no content to it i find. it could have had more of a story to it. it was a good idea though. and u know, i should be saying anything to bad, because my story Second Chances is pretty crappy so far. i only have one chapter! plz read it!

Author's Response: thas allright, i know this one isn't my best work but its my first fan fic and i can't expect everyone to like it.

I really like this story! it's interesting and i just LOVE Draco + Hermione! Keep writing your doing great. And yes, i agree the last line is corny! but corny is cool! it just makes thing's more funny! anyway, keep up the good work.
Cheers
oh! and i give you 10/10. great story.

Author's Response: i'm so glad you like it! next chapter is in validation!

Well, tis chapter was a little better. When you are writing a note, make it noticable. You sort a jumped to it and make don't go too fast. Your characters seem a bit OOC as well, except Ron of course. Good job hun!

Hm.hey I told you I would come sooner or later so here I am. Not bad for your first try. There were some problems and I will be happy to point them out. Whenever your character has thoughts trying putting them in italics or quotation marks. I am not going to down your idea either. For me, it would be un-Malfoy-like to ask Hermione out and have Hermione say 'yes' without putting up a fight. It's your story, so what the hey.

Anyway, it was a bit confusing towards the middle, you switched from third-person to first-person in Hermione's case. The dialogue was good. Use more descriptions and make sure everything flows well, so it doesn't seem choppy. Good first try hun! 8/10

Liadan Lightflower

Author's Response: yeah, i kinda rush things to finish a chapter so people won't have to wait long. but it sure seems a lot longer when your writing it! thanks, i'll be carefull next time.