As good as the others

Mom's Red Bikini Ch. 03

For a story to have any chance of being good, it must be more thorough, more details and descriptions, and certainly more than fucking for the sake of fucking: In, out, and done!!! Just like that. This story is more like fucking an ugly whore where he just wants to get his jollies, and move to his next chore of the day.

good story

hot fucking, good sex scenes, nice characters thanks

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Anonymous10/19/13

Good concept poorly executed

Title says it all. The concept of this story is really hot, it's a classic for a reason, but you need to work on your level of detail, and your dialogue. The sister at one point just saying "I want your cock in my pussy" is unacceptable. Where's the passion where's the lust?