I love it so much! It's really great. The only thing is that maybe you could lengthen it a little -- talk more about the conflict/tension between them about the magic/werewolf idea -- I find it unrealistic there wouldn't have built up tension after he left for Hogwarts, with her wanting to know what's going on, etc., thinking something's strange -- have some more tension between them leading up till then, and just in general, a few more personal scenes as opposed to the way you just sort of floated through with narration paragraphs. I want more of HIM in the story, more of his character, and more real interaction between them. And, a better way to show how much they care. The scene in the forest was very emotional, very intense and I really felt it there, but there should be more of that in the story.

Wow, I sound like an English teacher. Didn't mean to go all Mattesky on you...

<3 Fredhead

Author's Response: Yay! A review! How simply lovely! Hmmm....I wonder who it's from...
I see your point, and now I feel the need to run back to my computer (I guess that would involve running in a circle) and adding a million new words to the story. Unfortunately, there is a surprisingly lengthly essay waiting to be done (darn those English teachers) about our favorite book.
Anyway, I simply love English teacher like reviews, Freddy-May! They are the best kind! I thank you humbly!
--Ruthie