I would get rid of the second to last line.. I know why it's there, but I think it makes it a little bit harder for the reader to apply it to their life, plus the line was a little short compared to the rest of the piece..

Anyhow a really great piece..

PS If you're bored today check out the review game's review marathon... there's a link in my profile (I can't remember if I already reviewed you and said this... lol)