Wow. So I'm pretty sure I might be in awe right now. First off, this rhymed (duh) but you managed to rhyme without it becoming forced or cliche. And secondly, this rhymed and was actually quite a "deep" poem. Awesome job.

great peice, i'm not sure i agree with the idea that no one cares when a person dies, i think a lot of times people don't realise how much a person means to them until that person is gone, and then it's too late, and you wish you could go back in time and fix it, at least tha'ts how i see this piece, but i have a tendency of getting things wrong, wonderful work all the same, thank you once again for sharing