sweet story. Wasn't at all boring, though some points where they were talking i was hard to understand where people entered and who was talking, but that might not have been your fault, if so, ignore me! i loved your story, it was sweet and fluffy P and made me tear up a bit too.

Great story. if i could change one thing though, it would be to put something in between the sceene changes. it is some times hard to tell where one place starts and the other ends. thanks for posting your story!

your story is beautifully written and i was most encaptivated by it. The only problem is that it's a little confusing between the change of scenes as there is nothing dividing the two paragraphs. change it and it shall be perfect.