oh I so like magickarps they can be strong if given weights and learn moves like bite, jump, scary face, iron tail, bubbles, frisbee, boomerang if they turn their bodys in a twist sideways with iron covering their body would cut threw rock! :D so going to read all of your chapters and so am adding this to my fav's and following it!

While your story wasn't too bad you were right in having something missing from it. What's missing is a goal for your main character, an ambition or task he has to achieve. Right now his only goal was to get away from his parents an prove his worth, but prove his worth doing what? Does he seek to become a famous trainer, a winner of championships? If so, he's going about it quite lacklusterly. Personally I would like to see more of a focus on Kari his magicarp, the pokemon that sort of symbolically portrays himself. I'd like to see more of it battling and overcoming the odds and proving that true strength comes from hard work and dedication not inborn traits. And as Kari grows, so should Kelvin with him.

I feel the same. Oh how I feel the same. I always called my magicarp HoneySweet because I wanted it to know that I cared for it. And it made me happy when it evolved, because it felt like it evolved just for me. Sigh... .Magicarp.

AW! This was actually one of the few pokemon fics that I really like! It was really original (I mean, what trainer normally starts off with a magicarp and still manages to make themselves seem cool?) I'll be looking for your newest version though. I hope you are more happy with the next one. ')

-takes out a hammer and holds it in a threatening manner- Update! I've been following this story for the past few years now! I can unerstand if you're busy with school and the such, DFW-chan, but please don't be like some of the other authors on here and simply abandon your stories or worse...your account. I really like the idea of Kari and Kelvin, and I too feel that Magikarp is a great Pokemon. All POkemon are unique and special in their own way, strong or weak. :D So, please update soon, ok? -throws away my hamer

Awesome story! I hope to read more! I have a story where my OC starts with a magikarpo too! The magikarp's name is Azul. All the other pokemon have special meaning behind their names! I love doing that! I hope you can update soon! :)