minos
this reminded me a lot of thomas otten (close to silence). i think he's a classically trained counter tenor. AND>.....wait for it.....AH-HA! there....i said it....and why not...Ah-ha turned out some fantabulous tunes. this is great man. i'm a fan. your voice is a bit wobbly from time to time...but i think that's because you're trying to control it so much. you're young...it can improve vastly.

Great sketch here
I think this is excellent, but is only a sketch here... you have a great voice, great lyrics, and a super idea for melody and progression from faster verse to slowed chorus, love that... but it feels a little rough. I think with only minor tweaks and re-recording the singing and mix, this would be STUNNING. I would encourage you to work on this.

Reworking ideas
Well... let me listen again and see... I would suggest:
-Practice the singing so you can nail the main melody line confidently
-Mix the main singing voice slightly louder
-Work on the strings that sound synthy, maybe double them an octave down in places to give warmth
-The whole mix sounds slightly muffled, I'd go track-by-track and dip some frequencies so different tracks are more distinct. Also boost the low & high end a bit on the master.
-I love the choices of instruments and the build, maybe even hold back a little more at the beginning and bring MORE tracks in near the end to give more punch.

Mimos
forget what everybody else said - this is fabulous! lol - actually you should probably listen, it might get even BETTER - i LOVE how this is put together, and especially like the instrumentation here. Great work!

Minos
Wow Ruji this is a fabulous song - truly. I think perhaps I would prefer the vocals to be a little more blended into the mix and quieter. You have some really great accompaniment here but it was hard to hear in some parts.

I agree with drakonis that the entire piece sounds a little muffled. I think you could fix that pretty easily with some work on the EQ and maybe less compression, if you used any. I think the vocals could maybe use a little bit of reverb.

Thanks!
Thank you for your supportive criticism. It really does help, and it is always great to have people share their knowledge to help others improve. Thank you very much, and I'm glad you liked my song.

minos
just downloaded the macjam radio thing....and the first thing that came on was this....and i was blown away. so i tracked you down and realised i'd come here before and listened. second listen; and it all sounds perfect. sorry for saying your voice was wobbly....i must have been having a bad day. this is a fantastic track.