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The Boy

Great first submission!

I'd like to see more in the story about how the woman feels as she takes control of her man. The emotions, the lusts, the fears, and the pleasures, she might have. I'd like to see it for the man as well, though I know getting a strong empathetic character of the opposite sex is hard to do. It is for me, at least! I am just now feeling comfortable with writing from the woman's perspective, and I'm still not certain if my female characters are believable to other women!

Well done!

Switch can work

I did enjoy reading this story. A switch story well told and the right length whatever others may say. You have a story of a few hundred words but better to leave it with the readers wanting more and the story sets itself up for either a sequel or even a prequel.