Ok guys,
I'm having a go at writing erotic stories, and I've been told that guys want different stuff from them than women (and yeah I know guys would rather have photos than words before you even say it!!!)..... but any advice?

Just lesbians going at it hammer and tongs from the second paragraph until the last page. That will suit most blokes fine, Oh, you may need a pause in one of the chapters for a fag break and an ale.
Look forward to reading to it and I wont claim any gratuities.

"The tempo increases, you thrust harder and faster, my head
goes down even further on your cock. My fingers tease your
ass. My tongue is a swirling tornado devouring your cock
as you wildly fuck my mouth. Your moaning tells me you
cannot take too much more. The skin that encloses your
balls puckers up and tightens. I feel a pulsing through
your vein as your hot cum rushes toward freedom. Your legs
tighten and you swell even more in my mouth. You are
pushing my head into your groin; I feel your huge cock way
in the back of my throat. With a loud groan, you begin pumping spurt after spurt of your sweet cum into my mouth. I keep swallowing and
swallowing until at last your orgasm subsides....."

"The tempo increases, you thrust harder and faster, my head
goes down even further on your c***. My fingers tease your
ass. My tongue is a swirling tornado devouring your c***
as you wildly * my mouth. Your moaning tells me you
cannot take too much more. The skin that encloses your
balls puckers up and tightens. I feel a pulsing through
your vein as your hot cum rushes toward freedom. Your legs
tighten and you swell even more in my mouth. You are
pushing my head into your groin; I feel your huge c*** way
in the back of my throat. With a loud groan, you begin pumping spurt after spurt of your sweet cum into my mouth. I keep swallowing and
swallowing until at last your orgasm subsides....."