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Curiosity is not a sin says:Hello Marina! Sorry for the massive delay! I've managed to get round to reviewing at last!

I'll start with the story title which is incredible. I love the different ways that it can be interpreted because it could be understood as though it's a challenge, or something as a significant flaw with something beautiful or it being a fact of the matter.

The banner is also very beautiful and fitting - stunning creation there by Colokiller ^_^ Your summary was also lovely. I think by adding a little more to it, you could definitely make it stand out more. Just a critique because it doesn't seem to do justice to your fantastic piece here.

Your characterisations were wonderful. In a one-shot, the way you managed to build up Marlene's and Sirius' personality was something stunning, and I'm so very honoured you asked me to review because I've learnt a fair amount from reading this story along ^_^ So thank you!

Plot building was also fantastic! I found the way that you wrote the sequence of events very impressive. One thing which irritates me slightly is when authors choose to write 'flashback' when they have a flashback scene. The way you put it in was amazing because I, as the reader, instantly knew what it was about. You really brought the angst genre in with such tremendous pace and I can honestly say I had goosebumps reading it :)

I also enjoyed reading a lot of the phrases you used such as "I would be the one to lay flowers on her grave and I would be the one to grieve for her." Absolutely stunning. I really have no words to describe this piece.

You grammar/spelling was perfect, the style of writing was incredible, the plot, the characters, the description - it was all so brilliant.

The beginning was enough to capture the reader and make them stick to the story, and you released them at the end without them feeling as though there would be more to it. A complete finish and it was so very incredible.

I thank you for the review request, because I probably would not have ever had the chance to read it, so thank you ^_^ Hope this helped - even if only a tiny bit! Keep up the incredible work!

Author's Response: :O Sonny! thank you so so so so so so SO much! I really dont mind about the delay, I'm so over the moon!

I didnt come up with the title, I found it in the Titled Inspiration thread ^.^ and it half inspired the story... the banner, too, inspired me. It was quite a mixture of things :P But I think you're the first to mention the title. I love it :P I wish I'd thought of it myself, but unfortunately I can't take the credit.

I'll have another look at my summary, I'm not that great at summaries :P but thanks for pointing it out, I'll work on it.

just thank you so much :D I'm so honoured you reviewed for me, I'm so grateful! I can't think of the words... just thanks :D