This piece is so heart breaking. I actually love Sirius in fanfiction so just to see him just dismissed and tossed aside by a girl who he actually liked was just awh.

I like how you make him lie to the marauders but because he was so nervous he did it so blatantly so I wonder how they're going to react to him rushing off and whether they attempted to follow him or not.

Kristi is actually horrible :( I liked her a lot at the beginning but now I just think that she was just callous and it's interesting that you're such a good writer to make us like Kristi at the beginning but then by the end you've completely made us change our opinion of her. It's also sad that she was Sirius' first because he will have to remember her for the rest of his life and that is just so sad.

The last paragraph is very emotive and written very well to make us understand why Sirius never really dated. I love your writing style :)

Author's Response: so this is my first attempt at a oneshot and I am super excited about the positive response it was given! I'm glad that you liked kristi at first as you were supposed to and then as the story continues on you dislike her that makes me very happy as I wanted people to not like her! Ah you like my writing style? thanks so much that means a lot to me! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!