Home Alone

The sky was pitch black, the house was creaking, and I still had four hours until my parents got home. Locked in my parents’ room, I turned on the TV full blast so I wouldn’t hear the creaking house.

I barely heard the phone ring. I picked it up and said, “Hello … hello …?” but there was no response. I knew someone was on the other end. Finally, I hung up. A minute later, the phone rang again; still no one was there. I became more frightened as time passed; the same ­person called five more times.

At this point I didn’t bother picking up, but the ringing continued. To get my mind off this prank caller, I called my friend. She told me not to worry and to turn the phone off. As we talked, I heard someone pull into the driveway. When I peeked out the window, I saw an unfamiliar car.

Thirty minutes passed and the car was still in my driveway. It drove up and down the drive as if aware I was watching. My friend told me to call the cops, but I refused.

Soon the phone calls started again. I heard noises in the background, but I couldn’t tell what they were. I really didn’t want that person to get out of the car and start toward the house. If they did, I didn’t know what I’d do. None of the doors were locked, and I would have no way of protecting myself. The only thing I could do was hide, which wasn’t a very good plan.

At this point I was considering calling the cops, but my friend offered to drive by. “Maybe if they see me pull in, they will leave,” she suggested. By the time she arrived, the car had left. The phone rang again and I picked up, thinking it might be my friend. Someone on the other end said “Bye-bye.”

At that point I wasn’t as scared as curious. Since then I have not stayed home alone and I probably never will.

Creepy... but lacking. Some grammatical errors here and there, and overall- too leading. The plot wasn’t captivating and as it should have been and the character was shallow- more description please! The conclusion wasn’t necessary- best if ended the piece with the "bye bye" line. Consider utilizing more periodic sentences and visual imagery next time

Just yesterday some 60-70 year old woman was at the door. I didn't look who it was right away, but I did 2 minutes later when she was there still. She was there for another 5 minutes and then she finally left (it's like -30 celsius outside so it was weird that she was there for ten minutes).

Wow, I loved this story. I was home alone when I read it, and I was looking out the window constantly! :) What I loved so much about this was it was almost like a story starter. The ending is open, so you can kind of just paste yourself into the story and what you would do in this 'situation'.

I loved this story but right now i very scared. you should tell your parents immedialty if you didnt and always be sure when your home alone to have a cell phone or something to call someone in case of a danger and to lock all the doors and windows and to have something to protect your self or a plan. but the best way to be safe is too NEVER be home alone especially at night. was this story true??

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Oh man! This was blood-chillingly amazing! This really happened?!?! I probably would have done what you did too...You did a good job capturing your fear/curiousity in this! (: You gave me goose-bumps! ><