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Gandelf The White says:I've been meaning to leave reviews for your stories for a while now, i just never got around to it. Anyway, better late than never i say! I've read both stories already and i dont think i can truly express how impressive they both are. I absolutely envy your talent for description. The way you effortlessly manage to describe even the most unique surroundings in a couple of sentences is just amazing. On a number of occasions i have found myself re-reading paragraphs in awe of your ability. I also like the way that you make your characters convey so many different thoughts and emmotions in a single facial expression. As for the actual story... You seem to have alot of interesting ideas and i can tell that your plots have been fully thought through. The whole aspect thing was really intriguing and original. I do however have a few critisms. Firstly the thing that really frustrates me about this story is the lack of trepidation between the characters. I know you could argue that the majority of your characters are Gryffindors and are therefore brave. However, i do not think that simply being a gryffindor can account for the misplaced humour found throughout both stories. Fair enough, i understand that laughter is sometimes used as a defence mechanism but there just seems to be no fear factor in your characters at all. For example when Harry was discussing that he may know where Ginny was being held. I found it a little strange that the weasley's seemed to find that an appropriate time to start jesting. And also when Ginny went to rescue her brothers they seemed a little bit too comfortable with the situation than i would have liked. These are deatheaters we are dealing with here. They are supposed to be the most feared people within the wizarding world, yet if i hadn't known any better, judgung by your characters reactions i would have thought that they were simply a large gang of petty criminals. Improve on that, and this will probably be the best romance fanfic i've ever read. Sorry if any of the critisism offended you. I trust you will take it in your stride. Gandelf

Author's Response: i am truly sorry i have not responded to your review until now. truthfully, i found it hard to figure out what to say, not because i dont agree with your critisms, but because i do. your review really made me think, and i have made many many notes to change things when i finally go back to reedit things, and for future parts in this story. I wanted to thank you though for the most honest and helpful review i have ever received. I just want you to know that im not a disgrunted author or anthing, i do truly appreciate the review and the feedback, both postive and negative. I really hope that if you have contiuned reading to leave me more of your thoughts on my story. I would love to hear from you and thanks again.