I do think this was a really good idea for a fanfic and it had the potential to be pretty awesome. But I just couldn't really enjoy it. Maybe if you had more emotion in the story I could have possibly really loved it. The story was basically shown and not told. And I personally would have liked to see what Alfred was feeling and experiencing during those hard if it's a fanfiction or a original story, stuff like that can make me connect to a character.

Please don't take this the hard way or anything. I don't hate this fic, I just don't feel anything towards it. Sorry. :c

anon chapter 1 . 8/28/2012

wow just wow this is really sad but good at the same time

stormneko chapter 1 . 6/10/2012

um, what?

-stormneko has been mindfucked by weird plot shit- .

Anon chapter 1 . 5/15/2012

Yessssssss! I have been waiting fir someone to do something like this, hooray! Keep it up!