Page 8, MechWarrior George McPhearson:"Attached to House Davion’s Capellan March Militia, ... McPhearson is respected and well-known throughout the Free Worlds League for his fighting skill in the small ‘Mech."

The following passage references a section that does not exist in this TRO:[EDITOR’S NOTE: though this design technically belongs in the Star League section of this briefing, its modern association with the Dragoons warrants its inclusion here.]

Fix: Remove the entire editor's note.

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Good news is the lab boys say the symptoms of asbestos poisoning show an immediate latency of 44.6 years. So if you're thirty or over you're laughing. Worst case scenario you miss out on a few rounds of canasta, plus you've forwarded the cause of science by three centuries. I punch those numbers into my calculator, it makes a happy face.

Issue: The following two sentences are contradictory at least at face value:"Barners is considered the ace Awesome MechWarrior of House Kurita with seventy-one confirmed ’Mech kills. Barners’ lance of black-painted Awesomes formed the backbone and fist of Brion’s Legion’s Wernke Battalion."

The rest of the graf treats Barners as a member of Brion's Legion, which is assumedly his unit. But that sentence could be confusing, unless the reader knows that Brion's Legion was employed by the Combine during the last years of the Third Succession War.

Suggested Fix: Either:

1. Remove the reference to House Kurita2. Amend the paragraph to make Barners' relationship with House Kurita clearer.

Issue: Paragraph begins with the following sentence: "On Al Na’ir, a level II consisting of a trio of Lancelots was credited with disposing of a lance of Atlases that had so far successfully defended the system’s major production facility."

"Consisting" implies that the Level II is exclusively composed of the three Lancelots. Later sentences in the paragraph reveal that the Level II is close to or at the full strength of six 'mechs.

Issue: The Icarus II is missing from the Table of ContentsSolution: This is a bit tricky as there isn't technically space to add it (shrink the font?). I'll leave that up to the person making the big bucks in layout.

* VERSION: July 2017 PDF* LOCATION: p. 4, para 5* THE ERROR: "Understanding the future of the League, of course, requires studying the past to prevent errors and tragedies from being repeating."* THE CORRECTION: "Understanding the future of the League, of course, requires studying the past to prevent errors and tragedies from being repeated."

LOCATION: p.6, Overview sectionTHE ERROR: "Numerous variants followed, including the short-lived, extremely-fast 15-ton FLE-14, relegated it to the scrapheap of history due to its paper thin armor."THE CORRECTION: "Numerous variants followed, including the short-lived, extremely fast 15-ton FLE-14, relegated to the scrapheap of history due to its paper thin armor."