Pico Day 2018 (Acapella)

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Time's running fast, but I managed to write a verse at least for this amazing but accursed feast that's spurred such otherworldly meets. :) A few words from this imperant beast.

Comments always appreciated!

Happy Pico Day!

Lyrics:

It's Pico Day yay!
A Minit passed and now it's the 5th of May hey!
I thought I'd give it a minute and have my say ey!
Stayed up late today watching Runaway! 1984. That was a great age.
Today though I thought I'd have more in my pot!
More like a score than a freestyle - a glorious OST.
It's not cause I forgot - for years I've prepped but in vain!
Whenever the day came it'd always be with a stress and a shame!
2007 I started a Flash that I never finished!
2014 a rash game with everyone in it...
Is it a measure of pressure that keeps these projects in the diminished bin?
Every year I say next year: I'm finishing.
But next year comes... and though I keep plotting a lot.
It never runs! And it's spring cleaning in our communal plot (today).
I say that as if it means things! A seasonal treason!
But in all days since last screening or live stream I've HAD time - and I've been scheming!

The Cyberdevil does he not master his demons?
I guess not! Procrastination is the bane of reason!
But all progress - little or lot - has meaning.
And spontaneous creation is the crane I'm reaching!

I'm a dreamer and at NG: my dreams keep breathin'.

So I'm like: yeah, this might be grim!!!
If there is a live stream blip I might peek in!
No matter who jumps in into the fighting ring!
It'll be fun! Good people have a bite and binge!
To all you peeps: may life be nice and kin rise
And with ice in our glasses as the lighting dims
And thunder rumbles and the lightning blinks
Welcoming us to the Reich of Kings!

Rife with life this site is! Delightening
Exciting times coming as the titan drums
And this year for the day at least I tried something!
So I'ma rise and inspire and not be twice as glum.

It's Pico Day everyone! There's sun! And it's begun!
Surmise the sunrise bestows a dose of revitalizing light!
Have fun, man I'ma run and clean...
I'll be back in some packing some surprise I think...
Have something nice to drink... maybe some ice and mint...
Go buy a pricey pin... review and write again...
Look at what folk put out... surely some dope shit now!
I'm getting stoked and proud! Sun glows so loud but on the Net:
The dopest shows are in the cloud! NG Forever. Always getting better.
Never let it weather. Let this one go a round.

Maybe the most relatable piece I've heard from you yet. "2007... a flash I never finished." Man, I remember I got up two days before clock day, crapped out some unfinished storyboard animation to ColdPlay "Clocks," probably got removed for infringement by now. Those were better days.

I remember being in SESClassics... and having folders full off redundant animations for groups that no longer even exist.

Long story short, I've got mad nostalgia going right now. At times I can't sense exactly where you're pushing your rhyme scheme, but as far as freestyle goes, and I can really sense that vibe with your flow, you're turning into a major monster.

Let's go to the composition itself.

The Cyberdevil does he not master his demons?
I guess not! Procrastination is the bane of reason!
But all progress - little or lot - has meaning.
And spontaneous creation is the crane I'm reaching!

Huge props here. Strong rhyme scheme, good switchup, little wisdom, and this is probably the highest point of your piece. More like this.

It'll be fun! Good people have a bite and binge!
To all you peeps: may life be nice and kin rise
And with ice in our glasses as the lighting dims
And thunder rumbles and the lightning blinks

This, here, though it's visually popping in my head, might need a few synonyms around those last two lines, maybe even a switcharoo -- ice in our glasses, lightning flashes -- with a thunderous sound, and the lights go down, reminding us the Reich of Kings is in town!

Although, you did keep a good flow regardless. Color me impressed. Only thing I could add is that "reich" is usually pronounced with a KH, not a CH.

Just throwing out suggestions here and there.

Rife with life this site is! Delightening

I would probably write this as "This site is rife with life -- delightfully" -- with the same sounds and stresses as "delightening," even though I've never heard that word before. Have to check if it exists later. Otherwise nice, strong phrasing.

Your sound has vastly improved. Good volume level, sounds good on headphones and speakers. Noise sounds a lot cleaner. Only complaint this time around is just what sounds like a little bit of mic clipping on the recording end when you start really feeling yourself toward the end, and thus naturally go just a little bit beyond what your mic can handle. That or it could be mastering compression. Just looking at the waveform, it's a toss up of one or both.

Heeey you really improved on that second quatrain. :D I see what you mean. Yeah. Would need to shorten that to something like ...sound, the lights go down, reminding us the Reich's in town' to fit the flow. Context goes off a bit in the example but should be possible (though I'm not sure I'll make a new take on this one that's great for the future). I wasn't super happy with the final line there but didn't realize tracing the previous rhyme scheme is what has that effect either. Enlightening.

Good note on the pronunciation too. Good knowing. Was wondering if someone would have something against that word choice btw, in which case I'd point out that: it literally means kingdom. Can't let how words have been used steer how or what words we use now! They stole and tarnished the symbol of the sun god too, but we should bring that back as well! But nobody said anything so hmm...

Well Delightening rhymed with reich of kings. :) Though didn't really match that with the following line. I don't think it exists. I often twist words in ways they're not usually twisted just for the rhyme scheme, when the meaning (I hope?) still comes across. Simple way of producing somewhat unique lyrics in a world where everything's done?. :)

Yupp, clipping. Need to learn to bring the mic a bit further away when I go haywire. Glad you find the quality better overall though! Since it's the same mic I must be getting better at this. The reason I really go in at the end there is mainly because I'm finally warmed up, and done, so no need to save on vocal chords. It's just finally: let it out! Wouldn't be able to maintain that voice that long or at a higher tempo.

Thanks for the feedback and appreciation! Some really useful notes too!