you have a point there but… isn’t haiku about “show don’t tell”? and a reader can (and should) be allowed to create their own images and interpretations… there’s nothing exact in haiku as i see it (but of course i may be wrong as i often am) so what if someone would take “linen” metaphorically… it’s a lovely haiku and it works as it is although i would omit “indoors”
but you are the author and the final say is yours ;)

(i hope my flow of thought – as that’s what it basically is – isn’t too incoherent. after all, english is my second language)

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