Gah, I'm so lucky that you all keep giving me really good stories to review - it makes it all so much easier. I don't know what I'm going to do if someone gives me something really terrible.

Characterisation: Well, already I love Lysander. Such a cutie, really, being all late for work and forgetting his wand. I can definately emphasis with thoes kind of mishaps and it means that he's very easy to like. I loved how awkward it was when Hugo was like 'like what you see?' with Harry and Ron casually chilling in the background. That really made me smile.

Hugo, too, seems completely believable. I don't think he's like what I'd expect but I like him. With his necklace and his abs - who doesn't like abs?

Harrys just lovely. I can never write Harry write but you seem to have got him perfectly, which is just crazy-good-skills.

It flowed really well, too - not a single awkward sentence I don't think and I'm already very intrigued as to the plot. You've got another mystery set up (you're really very good at making things mysterious) and our potential relationship set up. Now, I'm no slash-expert... but, yup, definately rooting for them.

I know you said not grammar but if I'm honest I didn't notice any grammar stuff anyway. The writing was so well done I just didn't notice, I think.

Lovely first chapter - gripping and wonderful.

Thanks for trusting me with your baby and its been a pleasure to review :)

I may copy and paste the next few chapters and work on reviews for them whilst I'm holiday, got to have something to do. If I don't do that - definately re-request! (and congrats on nearly finishing!)

-AC

Author's Response: Yay! Thank you!

I love Lysander. He's my favorite. Really, he's my boy. :)

Yeah, my Hugo is different from other people's Hugo. He has his reasons for changing... Not just because I liked it. ;)

Mystery is my genre, my type of story. Yeah, I can write other types pretty well, but me and mystery, which goes very well with my love for horror/dark, are, like, best friends. :D

And, yes, they the best couple ever! Everyone should love Hugo/Lysander.

Thank you! I love my baby! Which is now all grown up and complete. I need a new baby - Amidst the Ashes. :)