This was so awesome! I love Jamie! I actually have an account on here, HermioneGranger657, but I am not logged in at the moment. You should write a sequel, this is far too much of a cliff hanger!

R.E chapter 7 . 5/28/2014

It was amazing. So captivating; I think herself made herself known once or twice! The only part I found confusing was the ending, it seems so much more choppy than the rest of the story.
I may just be picky on endings though...
Jamie was a really likeable character. Really...conectable, ya know?
Not sure if you'll even get this pm since this story's from 2010, but I thought i'd vent my opinon anyway.
-R.E

ShizukaAkanekus chapter 1 . 7/22/2013

This is such a great story! Im only up 2 the 1st chapter-its lonnnggg-took me like 1-2 hours to finish! This story deserves alot alot more reviews! BTW if u want to reply to this mssg-Im Shizuka Mate or Akanekusa on fanfic and fictionpress.

Whew that was long! But I liked it! It kept me really hooked. One thing that bothered me though is that I'm in 7th grade, doing Algebra 1/2 and the majority of our grade runs the mile anywhere between the 6 minute-8 minute mark. And that 20 pound weight, I'm not sure if I misinterpreted what you were saying but we're benching anywhere from 40-100 pounds. I just find them in 10th grade a bit far behind. But other than that I really enjoyed that story, I wasted a bit more time than I should've reading it (I'm supposed to be doing a history project. Boo.)

I really enjoyed reading this. It is such a shame it hasn't got more review, but it certainly deserves it, and as an earlier reviewer said, it shows how good the story is that all the reviews came on the last chapter. To show you how much enjoyed it, I read it all in a few hours in one sitting!

I really enjoyed the characters, the idea and your writing. Your writing style is clean and easy to read. It is perhaps not as description heavy as I would like, but that is a personal preference and there is definitely enough in there to get along. The characters were all well realised and likeable (apart from Harper and Jamie's mum obviously) and gave the reader people to emphasise with and made the story that more readable.

One thing though. The chapters were way, way too long, which I think is one of the things that have put many people off reviewing this. If they were slightly shorter then it would be easier to read. Probably around 30 words per chapter is about right. It can be quite an effort to struggle through the 10-150 word chapters, and it is a change because they are excellent.

An absolute shame about the ending though. Matari is gone! :O I really liked the whole idea anyway and I congratulate you on a well written story.

Very nice work. Very nice work indeed. I think it's telling that every review for this story is in chapter seven; that is to say, everyone wants to read all of it, not just one bit. Every last word.

I'm no exception. Read it all over the last two day's in-between my exams... and looking at what you've done, I'd like to put out a few points which I particularly enjoyed within and about your work.

Firstly, your intermittent bouts of creativity when it comes to the ways the characters speak and act; things like having Mr. Carmichael use the word "Dallygag".

Brilliant work thinking that word up.

The ending... worked although like everyone else I was a little disappointed to see the school go after all that trouble; I know things are the most fun when just discovering them. To have Matari return with the same students in the same way would risk destroying the enigmatic charm of the whole place.

Although this work is brilliant, I think that you've got the potential to move onto bigger and better things in terms of plots.

Good work in finishing this, thanks for one heck of a Ride and I'll be sure to look at the rest of your work sometime soon.

Seriously, when I first saw this story I honestly didn't think it would be as good as it is. With 7 chapters you've captured my attention and left me wanting more. Truly this is one of the best stories I've and I Just wondered if you're going to write a sequel because Jamie hasn't chosen a guy and they are left hanging ;) Ok, so I have purely selfish reasons for wanting a sequel and I'm willing to get down on my knees and beg for one. *gets down on knees and begs* :D PLEASE PLEASE WRITE A SEQUEL!

*Aplause* EXCELLENT! AMAZING! THAT WAS ARGUABLY ONE OF THE BEST STORIES IVE READ, PUBLISHED OR OTHERWISE!

T reall was an excellent story: the charechters were fairly realistic, the plot and setting was idealistic wihout being over the top...you've pulled this off without a hitch! Plus, the whole thing is nice and long. XD. There was onl one thing that I ABSOLUTLY HATED: WHY THE HELL DID IT HAVE TO END? PLEASE say you'll write a sequel?

I liked this story its a shame that no one has reviewed it. Altough it got a little confusing on the middle and its an open end I think that its well done and full of imagination not something you read everywhere :) Now for some sugestion I think it would be better you didnt post very long chapters. Medium lenght if you know what I mean because that way its easier to read or at least I think so... keep with the active mind