Hi, this is a script for the opening 15mins of a Green Lantern movie. Hope you enjoy. Please say what you think (In a nice way) in the comments.

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Sorry about that. Yeah, I forgot to mention the embed. Typing on my mobile. Anyway, on to your script: You definitely know how to write a screenplay (which is nice to see in a fan fiction). I really like that line about Sinestro still being the "master" because he didn't teach Hal everything. So far, everything is solid (except few grammar errors here and there). Your opening hooks the audience. I'm interested in reading the whole thing, I'm interesting in what you'll do with the Hal and Sinestro conflict. Oh, and neat Superman reference.

I really, really like it! Your dialogue is (mostly) spot on. The Superman reference felt a little weird for me, but the coolness of it wiped that out. A few grammar errors, but I can get over that. I also really like how it's in the middle of a war between the Green Lanterns and Sinestro Corps. I look forwards to the full story!

Thanks, glad you managed to take the time to read it. Yeah need to check some of the grammar have a habit of getting the idea and then rushing it on to paper. haha

Well I wanted to touch on the wider DC universe, without actually showing them, and it was to illustrate that not even Hal himself had managed to get back to Earth to see this 'Superman' due to his commitments during the war.

Thanks again for taking the time out to read though, think only way these pieces will improve is if we can read each others and make good and bad constructive opinions.