Winter – a Tanka

I was writing a haiku yesterday, and decided to go the extra mile with it. Traditionally in Japan these poems were sometimes written in the form of tanka, which are essentially poems of five lines rather than three, with a syllable count of 5/7/5/7/7.

They could also be written as linked verse, with one or two poets writing haiku, and others supplying the two remaining lines between each haiku.

I’ve gone down the linked verse route, and also given myself the remit that each verse (of two or three lines) must contain a word or sentiment linking it to those either side – something that was also commonly done.

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33 thoughts on “Winter – a Tanka”

I like it 🙂 especially as most people have never heard of any Japanese poetry styles that are not haiku.

My one critique is don’t get too hung up on the syllable count. The japanese “sounds” that traditionally make up the count are not easily translatable and some such as cutting words etc have no equivalent in english. Sometimes it is better to use fewer words rather than add extra ones to make up the exact count .

Thanks, Sam. I don’t always worry about the count, but I was treating this one as an exercise, so I tried to be strict with myself. I also tend to try and stick with 5/7/5 with haiku, thinking ‘If they could do it, then I should be able to!’ Where the count should be treated with caution, I think, is if you are trying to translate one from (say) Japanese to English. It’s unlikely to work then. But, having said that, some of the ones I’ve written I like most, are more freeform.

I can see why you might do it as an exercise. But the 5,7,5 rarely works in english. it is often the case that people put in fluff words to make up the count rather than capturing the essence of the moment which is what haiku are supposed to do.
The accepted count for haiku tends to be 17 syllables or less arranged in a short, long, short arrangement.

Very nice, Mick. I haven’t written many poems and honestly only one Haiku. I was forced to during an exercise at a writing group meeting. I do read them, however, and it is an area of writing I would like to explore.