General feedback on the skip is always appreciated. Although, I would like tips/feedback on the script for the video I wish to include. The video will include the actual machine (in a running state) shown in the image.

For reference, this is a video I made for my institute a while back. The machine is quite visually appealing when running, with sparks and flashes of laser welded metal.

Okay, here we go. This fell to page 4 without any replies, so I’m giving it a quick read. I’ll comment on specifics for the first 10 errors I notice, then move on to a skim-read until I hit the end or I lose interest in continuing. Please note that I do not comment on every single thing that I think needs fixing, unless the piece is exceptionally good. Here are my thoughts:

Currently, SCP-XXXX is stored in Site 15. > should be the first sentence of containment, and Site-15

A 3-phase power outlet has been installed in the containment cell for operating > group similar information together in containment. So stuff about the cell, stuff about the location, stuff about the access policies. It'll make the section less jumbled.

Two (2) security officers > Generally, the number (#) numeration is used for extreme precision measurements that can be fatal if misinterpreted, like drug prescriptions. Alternatively, it's for legal reasons to avoid ambiguity. You don't need to do that here.

SCP-XXXX-1 instances arising from the use of SCP-XXXX are to be given immediate medical treatment for mineral deficiency disorders > why not have a first-aid kit prepped for mineral deficiency installed in the cell? Also, why deficiency disorders and not just the deficiency? Wouldn't the formally diagnosed disorders take more time to manifest?

Blood tests of the SCP-XXX-1 instance should be completed as soon as practical. > transition is a little weird, since blood tests typically are used in diagnosis, not treatment, so it should probably be something smoother like "SCP-XXXX-1 instances are to be given immediate medical treatment for mineral deficiency, and [something about blood work"

SCP-XXXX-2 instances are to be secured and contained immediately > this reads as kind of narmy, since it seems like an unnecessary namedrop of part of the Foundation motto. Just state that they're to be immediately put in corresponding storage or something after a test. Also, the footnote at the end should definitely be put in the primary containment body.

Overall, I feel like it's a solid idea, but the execution really, really needs work. You start off the description with a note about the thing's recovery, which doesn't really mean much to the reader since they don't even know what the object is that early on in the article. Furthermore, there's a lot of time spent describing small details that the audience probably doesn't really care much about compared to the anomaly itself—paragraphs 2-4 of the description could be trimmed down into one paragraph of condensed, succinct information. I ended up getting bored of reading before I made it to the field notes.

I personally don't buy that the Foundation would be dumb enough to just let a D-Class individual have free reign over the object (personally, I feel like test subjects for this thing would be properly screened for stuff like aggression first). The fact that the test ended up with staff hurt and the D-Class terminated just makes the procedure look poorly thought-out and the Foundation incompetent. D-Class are considered dispensable, sure, but they're not unlimited nor necessarily as easy to obtain as, say, lab mice.

I dunno. I feel like the premise for this would make for a good article with some solid test logs, but the current version spends way too much time describing things that either aren't interesting or just make the Foundation look silly. Maybe consider co-authoring this with an experienced author who is also good at writing supplementary material?