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While enjoying Movie Night out with the girls, Twilight Sparkle discovers what it feels like to snuggle somepony. She then makes the logical next step: attempting to distill cuddles into portable, consumable form. For science, of course. ·shortskirtsandexplosions

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Completely stressed out, Twilight decides to get away from it all by going to visit the world of Canterlot High. When she gets there, she sees... herself? With Rainbow Dash! How did that happen? ·ssjgokillo

What makes a good story? Is it delicate prose and captivating description, as Twilight Sparkle claims, or is it non-stop action and entertainment, as Rainbow Dash has been arguing? With a stalemate between them, they decide there's only one way to settle this once and for all—a write-off!

Well, all I can say is that I loved this. It was fun to read, you kept my interest, and managed to make me giggle. I enjoyed it and I think this is going to go in my top five favorite stories. All though, I do wonder what's going to happen to some of the characters. What happened to Pinkie? Did Rarity ever finish her romance story? What?

Oh well. I still enjoyed this very much. Thanks for giving it such detail and interesting scenarios.

We're all stunned when we're up there. I mean, the feature bar is always set for stun.

I have a feeling though that at some point recently the algorithm for making featured changed. I'm noticing you don't need nearly as many views as you used to (which is a good thing). The way it seems now, with this combined with shorter time on the expanded feature bar, the purpose of the bar will shift to highlighting the five to ten good fics that come and go each week as opposed to showcasing three juggernauts each week. In the end it benefits the readers who are looking for reading more than two fics per week.

I felt like you really nailed the characters quite well and I was laughing throughout the whole story so I'd consider that a success . Although obviously the whole romance thing would not happen in the show I could totally see something similar happening. I did notice one tiny error and I wanted to point it out

It was an attitude that lead to her discovering her love of singing when she turned five, after being assigned a musical assignment by her teacher, Mrs. Silver Shimmer.

That lead should either be led or would lead.

Keep up the great work!

Edit: Also I just noticed you were in the featured box. Congrats, you definitely deserve it!

>>>"Rainbow, imagine if all the backstory of Daring Do was gone," Twilight said. "Imagine if she wasn't an archaeologist, she wasn't trying to find artifacts to put them in a museum for all the world to see. Imagine if on page one, she's suddenly in the temple, and just spends the whole book running from traps. What would the book be like then?">>>

This story was, simply put, awesome. Rainbow Dash and Twilight both are perfectly in character throughout - so much so that it could almost have been an episode save for the sauciness of Dash's story. While I hadn't expected Twilight's story to be quite so awful (you'd think reading so much would gift her with a better understanding of the balance necessary to craft a good story), I could see early on that the answer would be a balance between their two extremes would be the solution/moral at the end. The quality of the writing, however, was such that I really didn't mind being able to predict where it would go and instead was able to enjoy the ride.

That said, there are some questions left unresolved, such as what happens to Pinkie after they leave. I'm assuming the others were able to calm her down and make her realize no one was out to take her place. Also, no one even bats an eye when both Rainbow Dash and Twilight's stories were about two mares. I could see a comedic lack of surprise that Rainbow Dash had written a lesbian story, but it would have been a good opportunity for a laugh or two if Dash expected some kind of reaction or surprise only to learn that everyone already assumed she was a lesbian.

>>A few short hours later, Rainbow Dash and Twilight sat across from one another at Carousel Boutique. They had been waiting for quite a while, just passing the time and occasionally exchanging glares at each other. Finally, the back door to the boutique opened, and Rarity stepped through.>>

A few HOURS later? She read BOTH stories in a few hours?! Holy crap, Rarity is either a ponydroid or a Time Pony! There's no other way she could have read so quickly!

Unless she stole a Time Turner from Hogwarts and read the books for 3 days, then came back in time to only a few hours after she started to prevent the narrative of the story she's in from dragging... but that would mean Rarity knows she's in a story! She's like Pinkie!!

One of most ingenious premises I have seen on this site carried out to its sensible and hilarious conclusion. Characters are brilliantly written and each distinctly retains the voice that makes them who they are. I daresay this is even a step up from Smiling Flowers. That's an accomplishment of which you should be very proud.

One question that is sadly left unanswered is that of Pinkie! Does she defend her title as "best party pony"?

In terms of grammatical & style critiques:

1. "Handmade" is a single word. (Although it should probably be "hoofmade".)

2. "Intelligent or dimensionless?" Both are adjectives, which sound awkward after comparing and contrasting nouns for the last few lines.

3. ". . . I can write a romance story just as good as anypony, and I'll prove it to you!" -Twilight. Good is an adjective, but the adverb "well" should take its place since it is modifying the verb "write". And Twilight would definitely get that right.

>>Celestia looked the two stories over for a moment before picking one up and laying back down on the bed, reading over the cover.

"A Daring Dash… this looks interesting!">>>

The continuation: As Celestia poured over Dash's story, her muzzle began to flush and a fine layer of sweat began to build upon her brow. Her breath became quickened, raspy, and heavy with panting as her heart raced. The Princess' hind legs shifted, first every few minutes, then every few seconds as a low murmur of bliss emanated from her throat. She turned a page. She gasped at what she read. Her front right hoof swept between her legs as she reached a crescendo.

Suddenly, her pastel hued mane flashed to pink as a cry that would be remembered from that day forth in infamy bellowed through the castle halls, "I CAME!!!"

Pinkie Pie jumps in, "And that's how Molestia was made!"

trolololo! (Good lord this story gave me so much to work with! I loved it!)

Thanks for the fixes! As soon as FIMFic stops acting weird i'll go back and make those edits. And although I appreciate the comment, no matter what I write, I will always consider Smiling Flowers to be my opus, if only because it's a story that is very close to my heart, considering I went through something similar a year ago.

Twilight brags that a good story must have good pacing. She takes 25 pages of exposition to set up the setting before even introducing the protagonist.

...I saw that "Twilight's mom is author of Daring Do books" a mile away, at about the second mention of Twilight's mom and her secret. Then I started reading the bit about Rainbow's story. At first I was like and then I was like but then I was like

This. Was. Awesome. Also... Rarity critiques Rainbow's grammar, Twilight's story (the excerpt) has more grammatical mistakes. She uses "it's" as a possessive adjective when the apostrophe makes it a contraction of pronoun and verb. "Its" is the possessive adjective.

"The next train to Canterlot leaves in fifteen minutes. If we're lucky, we can probably get there within an hour. I don't know if Princess Celesita will look at them, but if she does, I know that she's always preferred shorter stories to longer ones…"

Hehehe I kinda expected to be the one to make this story a story (if that makes any sense) (like she would be writing a story about her faithful student writing stories...screw it cue the yo dawg meme)

This is a hilariously funny story. You portrayed the characters perfectly but I thought the scene with pinkie was a bit dark. I have to admit that i would have really enjoyed reading Celestia's reaction to Rainbow Dash's story.

Hilarious story, and a poignant commentary on storytelling in general. We tend to get hung up on one aspect or another when writing or reading stories, but in reality, a story is a cocktail of different elements. A story needs interesting, engaging characters, but it also needs to have interesting things happening to those characters, and while detailed writing is needed to an extent to establish scenes, flooding a story with detail creates a plodding story. Balance in all things.

That was really funny. Rainbow's obsession with Twilight's mom was really weird. If I was Twilight I would have thrown her out of my house. I think I am guilty of some of the crimes Twilight committed. I think I need to go revise my story. Good thing I haven't submitted it yet.