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Well it is for a planned/vaporware/thought fic of Modifying Shugo Chara into AW-spec- with crack of course.

If it's not that Overpowered, I might integrate it into a [Alternate Story].

The epic question surrounding this Avatar is "What happened to this person IRL?!!"

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Originally Posted by MeisterBabylon

Now, how do I throw a nod to SAO in here--

*shotshotshot*

I have already planned something similar with 2 of the 3 Rabbits.

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Originally Posted by Orange Duke

Whoa. How far into the future must this have been for it to reach the 3rd generation Black King when the 1st hasn't even fallen?

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Originally Posted by blitz1/2

it's distant in the future. Like 10 years afterwards. Black Lotus and Haruyuki already reached lvl 10 and "graduated" from the system.

We don't know what L10 actually means, it may mean that Brain Burst may deactivate and uninstall from the masses- but leaving them with memories of it and the ability to use acceleration (Physical Full Burst) and Incarnation in reality.

Arita Haruyuki sighed as he pulled the curtain towards him to cover the area where he is sitting while blankly stared at the teacher who continues his lecture about the Information Age and the Neuro-Sychronization technology. He was about to take notes when a pop-up window intruded his vision.

<<You have received a new mail.>>

‘Seriously, those guys…’ He groaned as he decided to ‘play’ along with them again. Opening the mail, his vision was suddenly flooded by confetti and stuff and his mind was bombarded by loud party-like music. He was able to suppress his surprise. ‘How childish…’

He was the usual target by bullies in Umesato Junior High because he usually doesn’t fight back and he always stays in the shadows and doesn’t go out openly in the sun. The only days where he can be seen out in the open is during cloudy weather. When the teachers asked why he is like that, he usually answers:

“I can’t stand under the sun.”

The teachers, though a bit baffled at his answer, let him slide off since he has above average grades.

He gave a different answer to his childhood friend, Kurashima Chiyuri.

“Something happened in Tokyo during my vacation there.”

No one knew what happened to him in Tokyo, so they just ignored him and went on their own lives.

Haruyuki however, still remember what happened that time, it was three years ago yet it feels like it just happened yesterday. It was the night where his view towards reality has flipped upside-down.

The time where he was stabbed by a katana from the back…

The time where he saw his own reflection through the said katana as he feel his warm blood flowing out of him…

The time where he knew he has dying…

The time where the last thing he saw before he died was the assailant’s katana…

The time where he woke up in a cemetery and meeting them…

The time where he was resurrected and turned into a zombie.

He was snapped out of his reverie when the school bell sounded.

“Oh boy… here we go again.” He muttered to himself as he packed his things and proceeded to a place where no one can trouble him… the library.

“And look at him go.” One of the bullies said while looking at Haruyuki’s retreating form.

“Just ignore him for the meantime Araya,” Another bully said to his companion, “I’m hungry.”

-=0=-

Haruyuki has been wondering for a quite a while why he can still use his Neuro-Linker even though he’s a zombie now. He asked a few people during his stay in Tokyo and their answers were not exactly on the scientific side, aside from one of them.

Haruna told him some unexplainable jargon before concluding it’s a mystery of the universe.

Ariel also sprouted some unessential jargon before saying something about giving him a ‘thorough’ examination. The blush on her face when she said the word ‘examination’ says otherwise.

Chris, who he met along the way, told him that he has a unique mana… and he was almost pulled to the nearest bar just to drink with her.

Eu, on the other hand, wrote something that is more believable. It could be that he may be introduced to the Neuro-Linker during birth and it stayed with him until he was resurrected.

Upon arriving at the library, he quickly went to his usual place. A corner in the room where no one will notice him and directly way from the sunlight that seeps through the windows.

“Direct Link.” He muttered to himself and after a while, he found himself in the Umesato Junior High Virtual Network.

On an avatar that looks like a pig.

It wasn’t his choice since the bullies were able to get his Neuro-Linker and was able to fiddle with it. He doesn’t care about his appearance though.

“Oh, it’s Vice- President!” one of the avatars spoke.

Turning around, he found himself looking at one of the most popular people in Umesato Junior High, both in the virtual world and the real world.

Kuroyukihime.

Every time he looks at her, she reminds him of Seraphim; though Kuroyukihime is much more refined in her actions. Like a classic yamato nadeshiko.

‘Sadly, Kuroyukihime doesn’t have Sera’s large-’ He mentally stopped himself from completing that train of thought. ‘Damnit, did that Orito guy corrupted me?’

The then proceeded towards his destination, completely missing the fact that Kuroyukihime was looking at him.

Carbon Arrow's user's flaw is he lacks faith in others. In his childhood, Taiyou had no friends because doesn't know how others will treat him. He disliked being used, hence why he isolates himself most of the time. Even he has maids and butlers to talk too, he feels that they just paid to interact with him. His parents hardly have time to deal with him and try to find time to for him. He's a douche not because he is an jerk, but because he lacks trust in others. The island changed him and his family's understandings. His father uses the time on the island to get to know his son, while Taiyou tries to open up a bit. His mother used a lot of her money for charities and let go all of the maids and bulters (one wanted to stay with her for her own reasons) which to her selling the estate, her resignation and her husband's company being bought by the Committee. She still needed to find another job to support her daughter who was one-yr old at the time (she enough money, but always thought about further on in life). She manage to get a stable manager's position. She didn't search for them because she had faith that they would come back no matter what the cost (what faithful woman). When her son suddenly appear in front of her doorstep 5 years later, she broke into tears. They made up with each other's feeling and understand their situation. Taiyou before and after the island are pretty different. He uses to be isolated and by himself, now he tries opening up a bit (he has a hard time opening up to burst linkers because of his past experience). He played the AW a lot in the past (got to Level 7), but now doesn't play much unless someone duels him or he's just bored (by this time he got to Level 8). His personality changed as well from an self-centered, isolated jerk to someone more mature (still somewhat less of a jerk) and is little more polite and is responsible. Speaking of responsible, his mother allow him to live on his own as long he contact her time to time. Thanks for the 3 years, living by himself wasn't a big deal to him. Even though he gets good grades, very athletically and own a company, he wants to be a doctor; want to give life instead of taking it. He's good in other fields, but chooses this because it's his choice. Taiyou like Fuuko and is the only burst linker he open more than other burst linkers. However he feeling embarrass telling her that, so hides it from her (even though she knows he likes her). He spends a lot of his free time with her and enjoys talking to her. Kuroyukihime always tease him about his fling with Fuuko. Another thing is he is very protective of both Fuuko and her DA, Sky Raker. Let just say you rather get beat up by Carbon Arrow than Taiyou himself. His "scar" isn't comparable to his physical scars during 5 years. 50% of his body is cover in scar tissue and has fracture or broken nearly everything bone in body except for his spiral cord. He doesn't like to show scars and is always covering it with more less exposed clothes. unless it's medical emergency. Only NN (including Fuuko) know about this, however rather not have known it at all. Taiyou has habit of doing thing himself despite the drawback. He really hates bullying to the point of putting the bully into the hospital.

This is all that I can come up with right now and the info I'm okay with. Carbon Arrow could fight a King, but too lazy to do it.

All you've done is repeat what you said in your last post. Not only that, but you've completely ignored our advice for you a few posts back and on top of that, made him even more OP by saying he is able to fight a king.

If you really want to learn how to write better characters, you need to start to listen to our advice properly and really deconstruct your characters and see what is wrong with them.

btw, it's not JUST something taken out of the box and said, "Hey, let's put Haruyuki in <<SAO>> and see what happens. I'm experimenting about making different stories, different perspectives, but the same <<fanfiction series>>. I wanted it to be 15 chapters only, just so that I can test its efficiency in delivering the needed mystery/suspense.

BTW in that fanfic:

Spoiler for About Kuroyuukihime-sempai:

Her real name is Yuuki Kirigaya. Her father's a game programmer and takes the side job of the "Department of Defense" <<A/VR>> Division's informant.

It was never mentioned specifically who did it, though there is reason to believe it was done by the people running BB. After all, Haru didn't know about Judgement Blow until the Chrome Disaster arc, so it's unlikely that it was done by the Blue King.

Just because he didn't know, doesn't mean that it wasn't used.

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Originally Posted by blitz1/2

Mine is:

Spoiler for OC:

Name: Akiharu Suzutsuki

Age: 8

Avatar name: Hunter

Colour: Silver and white shading.

Ability/weapon: a beam cannon (right hand)
a claw (both arms but right hand is larger, think of a lobster)
- Flight (once reaching lvl 4, as he gets a variable form as a jet)

Appearance wise: Think of Cyan Pile but silver + white.

Personality: Boring, making friends ONLY if being approached but not vice versa.

History:
He has a younger twin sister that goes to a highly known private school named St. Francesca Academy and is actually the student council president there.

Because of his high grades, plus inverted personality, he was either isolated or being picked on due to his academic marks. However, he doesn't care about it much but his inner complex about being weak grows each day (somewhat like haruyuki but not to HIS extreme).

Only got involved with Brain Burst after overhearing several students talking about it and as a joke by the students, installed the program onto Akiharu, hoping that it would fail so he would serve as an additional scapegoat for bullying.

Unfortunately for the bullies, the program was successful and Akiharu started off with his duel avatar. He didn't have a good start at all. He had a 4 loss losing streak before he made the decision to join a small Guild known as the Guardians, who taught the basics and potential strategies to use his own personal strength.

With that in mind, and making new friends, he began to open up more to people and helped new Burst Linkers into the game.

One day, he introduced the idea about Brain Burst to his sister Yuki, she coldly rejected the idea about virtual reality and a small rift between siblings was formed (the reason why is that Yuki was already a Burst Linker, much earlier than Aki, and as the 3rd Gen Black King)

During Akiharu's casual days to earn additional points, he often tries to complete Mercenary contracts (a new addition to the 3rd generation Accelerated world as a creative way to earn more Burst points) and finds it more entertaining to complete quests than killing people.

That is, until he was betrayed on one quest....

So...his DA is a flying lobster?
And beam cannon on the right arm? What about the bigger claw that is also on the right arm?

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Originally Posted by blitz1/2

it's distant in the future. Like 10 years afterwards. Black Lotus and Haruyuki already reached lvl 10 and "graduated" from the system.

Well, seeing that that fic is further into future, it's okay...but we still don't know what happens when a DA reaches Lv10

Arita Haruyuki sighed as he pulled the curtain towards him to cover the area where he is sitting while blankly stared at the teacher who continues his lecture about the Information Age and the Neuro-Sychronization technology. He was about to take notes when a pop-up window intruded his vision.

<<You have received a new mail.>>

‘Seriously, those guys…’ He groaned as he decided to ‘play’ along with them again. Opening the mail, his vision was suddenly flooded by confetti and stuff and his mind was bombarded by loud party-like music. He was able to suppress his surprise. ‘How childish…’

He was the usual target by bullies in Umesato Junior High because he usually doesn’t fight back and he always stays in the shadows and doesn’t go out openly in the sun. The only days where he can be seen out in the open is during cloudy weather. When the teachers asked why he is like that, he usually answers:

“I can’t stand under the sun.”

The teachers, though a bit baffled at his answer, let him slide off since he has above average grades.

He gave a different answer to his childhood friend, Kurashima Chiyuri.

“Something happened in Tokyo during my vacation there.”

No one knew what happened to him in Tokyo, so they just ignored him and went on their own lives.

Haruyuki however, still remember what happened that time, it was three years ago yet it feels like it just happened yesterday. It was the night where his view towards reality has flipped upside-down.

The time where he was stabbed by a katana from the back…

The time where he saw his own reflection through the said katana as he feel his warm blood flowing out of him…

The time where he knew he has dying…

The time where the last thing he saw before he died was the assailant’s katana…

The time where he woke up in a cemetery and meeting them…

The time where he was resurrected and turned into a zombie.

He was snapped out of his reverie when the school bell sounded.

“Oh boy… here we go again.” He muttered to himself as he packed his things and proceeded to a place where no one can trouble him… the library.

“And look at him go.” One of the bullies said while looking at Haruyuki’s retreating form.

“Just ignore him for the meantime Araya,” Another bully said to his companion, “I’m hungry.”

-=0=-

Haruyuki has been wondering for a quite a while why he can still use his Neuro-Linker even though he’s a zombie now. He asked a few people during his stay in Tokyo and their answers were not exactly on the scientific side, aside from one of them.

Haruna told him some unexplainable jargon before concluding it’s a mystery of the universe.

Ariel also sprouted some unessential jargon before saying something about giving him a ‘thorough’ examination. The blush on her face when she said the word ‘examination’ says otherwise.

Chris, who he met along the way, told him that he has a unique mana… and he was almost pulled to the nearest bar just to drink with her.

Eu, on the other hand, wrote something that is more believable. It could be that he may be introduced to the Neuro-Linker during birth and it stayed with him until he was resurrected.

Upon arriving at the library, he quickly went to his usual place. A corner in the room where no one will notice him and directly way from the sunlight that seeps through the windows.

“Direct Link.” He muttered to himself and after a while, he found himself in the Umesato Junior High Virtual Network.

On an avatar that looks like a pig.

It wasn’t his choice since the bullies were able to get his Neuro-Linker and was able to fiddle with it. He doesn’t care about his appearance though.

“Oh, it’s Vice- President!” one of the avatars spoke.

Turning around, he found himself looking at one of the most popular people in Umesato Junior High, both in the virtual world and the real world.

Kuroyukihime.

Every time he looks at her, she reminds him of Seraphim; though Kuroyukihime is much more refined in her actions. Like a classic yamato nadeshiko.

‘Sadly, Kuroyukihime doesn’t have Sera’s large-’ He mentally stopped himself from completing that train of thought. ‘Damnit, did that Orito guy corrupted me?’

The then proceeded towards his destination, completely missing the fact that Kuroyukihime was looking at him.

What can you say guys?

If this is what I think it is, then those bullies are on very thin ice.

Assuming that Haru is Eu's current Zombie, and that a certain series of events means that he is on friendly terms with the cast of Kore Wa Zombie (including Nene and Chris)....

Furthermore, there's NOTHING the bullies can do to him physically.

So, I'm very interested to see what direction you plan on taking this with, since we are getting a more self-assured Haru here, it seems.

Is his physique also different? I'd assume that he's no longer the pudgy short midget we know. Short, yes, but not pudgy.

Also, his Avatar... well there are places you can go with this. I'm imagining Silver Crow with 500% Headbutt, 1000% Mystelitian Kick Variant, and a Chainsaw arm. And wearing a Kilt.

Yes, but imagine how the conversation might have went. Haru would've asked whoever he heard it from how the guardian got permabanned, and since Judgement Blow isn't exactly a big secret, whoever it was would've told him.

Yes, but imagine how the conversation might have went. Haru would've asked whoever he heard it from how the guardian got permabanned, and since Judgement Blow isn't exactly a big secret, whoever it was would've told him.

Well, the anime puts it in vague terms, and since the last chapters of the Novel's Vol 1 haven't been translated, I can't confirm it...but in Ch 8 of the manga, Haru reports to Kuroyukihime that Cyan Pile's Parent was executed by the Blue Legion.

Also, his Avatar... well there are places you can go with this. I'm imagining Silver Crow with 500% Headbutt, 1000% Mystelitian Kick Variant, and a Chainsaw arm. And wearing a Kilt.

"FLYING MYSTELTEIN KIIIIICK!!"

"THAT'S NOT A KICK!!"

"NAMES DON'T HAVE TO MAKE SENSE!"

"SOU DAYO NEEEEEE." *smashes into building*

~~~~~~

Here it is! [ACCEL WORLD SS: GOLD CUB]

Spoiler for Prologue 01:

You who lost everything and still desired the world.

Can you push past the invisible boundary?

~~~~~~

That was the faceless voice spoken to him from the darkness of reality.

He didn’t care. He just wanted to kill time, not that he had much left anyway.

But that was before the new program installed, and he was welcomed into a new world.

Accel World.

~~~~~~

Back when he could see, he was a gamer. Even now, he could still perceive through his collar, the only escape from the prison cell that was his body. So when he awoke for the second time today, he could perceive the colors around him. Demonic City would be drab for any other person, but to him, it was a burst of realism that he could vaguely remember from his last encounter with it. The first few steps out of bed and around the ruined floor of a desolate hospital were jittery, but they quickly picked up pace.

Soon he was bounding up elevator shafts like a time-removed assassin. With a flip and a tremendous crash, the newly-minted Duel Avatar smashed through rusted car doors and into the burnt Demonic City air, landing ferally with one knee on the ground. His body was telling him a lot of things, and he was dizzy with excitement. He was glad to see that amid the newfound strength and coordination, that his instincts had not decayed one bit. That brought a smirk to his face.

A smirk. It was another new old experience, one that he could feel and touch, that his body told him that he was smirking without having to look into a mirror he couldn’t see.

The boy touched his face, and winched a little as he met cold solid metal. Had there been anyone watching, they’d be curious as to why was a shining avatar of pure gold examining himself like a veteran sculptor does his ultimate creation. The boy didn’t care for a moment as he kept looking. His body gleamed from head to toe, as polished as it was from the moment he spawned. He was humanoid enough, even if somewhat short. And a mechanical tail ending in fine gold bristles. He wasn’t sure if that tail had a real function, or was one of those fetish things one found on the dark corners of the internet, but just the sensation of it moving lazily in his hand, and being able to feel it move was enough to hold his attention for a few more seconds.

Now he was wondering if he could find a mirror, when he mentally smacked himself in the face.

“Character profile... Character profile... Every game has a character profile...”

The golden avatar read and tabbed through various keys and commands, covering his view with a gamut of dialogue boxes that he spawned and cleared after a few glances. And finally he was greeted with a holographic view of his visage, framed with vacant slots all around for his armor -- “Enhanced Gear”, as it was called in this game. Right at the top was his name:

“Gold Cub.”

And as the name suggested, his avatar was a smallish creature, with child-like limbs and maneless face that was topped off by round ears -- a humanoid lion’s cub. Gold Cub was satisfied; most of his previous avatars were leonine plushies. Most people didn't get it, and why would they? The inspiration for those avatars predated the turn of the century.

Gold would’ve explored the ingame system some more had the words HERE COMES A NEW CHALLENGER not completely obscure his view. With a sound of a gong, his entire GUI was swiped away as a dropdown timer and HP gauges took over the top of his “screen” and a pointer began compassing towards an incoming opponent.

His blood boiled with gay, his heart pounded away on a rampage, and the boy retracted into combat stance.

“No tutorial? At least I won't be bored...”

Pardon my terrible English. I didn't want to reveal much of Gold Cub's real world identity, but I needed to show his origins. So I got the balance here... I think.

“So, let me get this straight,” Burgundy Broadside guffawed, rattling the grenades dangling from his belt as he did.

Burgundy. Red. Shooter. Gold Cub noted as he continued to overhear the conversation from behind screens of newbie help threads some avatar pages were hosting. He was reading up on colors and their significance on one screen, and user reports about the attributes of the many battle stages. The scenery around them had changed to, to a much more lush rainforest with trees the size of mountains: the Emerald Glade zone. Cub reminded himself that this was an Unlimited Accel World stage, the uninstanced part of Accel World shared with other players, then kept on speed reading.

“You, the great Maya Butcher, challenged a random scrub, and died 2s in because he threw a rock at your face?!”

The hulking avatar scoffed at a diminutive blue female sulking on top of a wrecked tree stump.

Maya. Blue. Close-combat. Overconfident.

“He just got lucky!!” Maya raged at him, gunsword raised.

“I wanted to give the destructible environment a try,” Gold replied.

"Grrr."

“Ara, what have we here?”

Cub felt himself being lifted off the ground and swaddled in warm soft arms. Like a tamed pet, he let himself go limp. It was a learned trick; he used to hate getting picked up and glomped randomly, but that was the price of being a plushie. Might as well lean back and enjoy the ride, so to speak.

“Yes, THAT!” Maya flailed. “Of all people you have to lose to after defeating me!!”

Broadside laughed some more.

“...and the deal is...?” Cub asked.

“Ah, mou! I’m not talking to you again, ever!” Maya plonked back down, facing the other direction.

“Maya and Broadside have a little rivalry going,” Cub’s cuddler giggled. “That’s how their friendship works.”

“Who’s friends with that big oaf?!” Maya sulked back.

Gold Cub was tending to agree.

“I have to give you some credit, Goldy.” Broadside said. “You run pretty damn well. 30s of evading missile and M61 fire is no mean feat.”

Cub mentally noted that was something he wasn’t looking forward to dealing with in the near future.

The massive avatar gave a thumbs up.

“You’re gonna grow up to be one mean killing machine.”

“Ah...”

“Oh by the way, Winter Sky, have you noticed something about that soft toy?”

Cub could hear him grinning in his voice, and wondered why. Sky promptly turned him around, and puzzledly poured over his features. Meanwhile, Gold got an eye-full of white avatar that was somehow wearing a sundress of some sorts. Was it some kind of enhanced gear?

“He’s a lion cub!”

“Who’s a lion cub?” Said another voice as Cub heard the whoosh of an avatar zoning in behind.

“My Dearie~” Wintry said as she whirled round and thrust out her prize. “We’re talking about this little one, of course.”

Gold Cub was introduced to another massive hulk, this one more muscular (if that could be described of a mechanical humanoid) and goldenish-yellow rather than deep red. He was also tall and broad-chested like the alpha male stereotype this beefcake was. The avatar was topped off with a fanged visage ringed by darker plated mane -- this, was a leonine avatar, too.

“Golden Cub...?” Gold read off the newcomer’s nameplate.

“Gold Cub...?” Said Golden simultaneously.

There was an awkward silence, then:

“EEEH?!”

“Dearie~” Wintry cooed again. “Don’t you have some explaining to do~~?”

Gold felt a chill run up his spine as the arms around him seem to tighten. And rightly so, for Golden Cub’s color was draining out rapidly. Gold wondered if he really should look at Winter right now...

“Eh-heh?”

“This is not somebody else’s child, right~~?”

“W-Wait a minute!!” Golden Cub waved frantically as he finally got it. “T-This is not what it looks like!!”

“Oh-ho~?”

Both Cubs heard Burgundy snicker.

“You bastard!” Golden roared. “What are you up to this time?!”

“Oh yeah, Boss,” Broadside replied.

If Cub were him, he’d be wearing a Trollface emote right now.

“You told me to pick him up as a surprise, right?”

“Uuh...”

“Right?”

“Uh, yes, right! Ah yes! This was surprise, you know, er, we heard of a tiny lion avatar appearing so we went hunting for it.”

“Weren’t you supposed to be raiding bosses now, Dearie~?”

Golden seemed to be getting more desperate.

“It was a surprise, you know... But hey, even if its ruined, got to do it properly...”

Golden took Gold out of Winter’s hands and presented the duelist to Winter.

So...his DA is a flying lobster?
And beam cannon on the right arm? What about the bigger claw that is also on the right arm?

Well, seeing that that fic is further into future, it's okay...but we still don't know what happens when a DA reaches Lv10

Of course I don;t know what level 10 truly encompasses, hence why they "graduate", disappearing from the traditional brain bursts. Although, most of my plot lines draw most with the Matrix and that I might have "graduated" people become "moderators" of the system while in real life, have access to nearly unlimited Burst points as a reward.

@Flamespark: xD. Not really a flying lobster, but having the claw anatomy of a lobster.

btw, it's not JUST something taken out of the box and said, "Hey, let's put Haruyuki in <<SAO>> and see what happens. I'm experimenting about making different stories, different perspectives, but the same <<fanfiction series>>. I wanted it to be 15 chapters only, just so that I can test its efficiency in delivering the needed mystery/suspense.

BTW in that fanfic:

Spoiler for About Kuroyuukihime-sempai:

Her real name is Yuuki Kirigaya. Her father's a game programmer and takes the side job of the "Department of Defense" <<A/VR>> Division's informant.

After reading this, I think I should go back and add <<>> to my fic.

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Originally Posted by KeithKurogane

Yeah... though I'm thinking that Haru is Eu's second Zombie since I plan to add Ayumu as his senior (in terms of being a zombie).

And think of this... Silver Crow on a Masou Shoujo transformation...

Or even Unlimited Physical Full Burst because his body just won't burn out...

“So, let me get this straight,” Burgundy Broadside guffawed, rattling the grenades dangling from his belt as he did.

Burgundy. Red. Shooter. Gold Cub noted as he continued to overhear the conversation from behind screens of newbie help threads some avatar pages were hosting. He was reading up on colors and their significance on one screen, and user reports about the attributes of the many battle stages. The scenery around them had changed to, to a much more lush rainforest with trees the size of mountains: the Emerald Glade zone. Cub reminded himself that this was an Unlimited Accel World stage, the uninstanced part of Accel World shared with other players, then kept on speed reading.

“You, the great Maya Butcher, challenged a random scrub, and died 2s in because he threw a rock at your face?!”

The hulking avatar scoffed at a diminutive blue female sulking on top of a wrecked tree stump.

Maya. Blue. Close-combat. Overconfident.

“He just got lucky!!” Maya raged at him, gunsword raised.

“I wanted to give the destructible environment a try,” Gold replied.

"Grrr."

“Ara, what have we here?”

Cub felt himself being lifted off the ground and swaddled in warm soft arms. Like a tamed pet, he let himself go limp. It was a learned trick; he used to hate getting picked up and glomped randomly, but that was the price of being a plushie. Might as well lean back and enjoy the ride, so to speak.

“Yes, THAT!” Maya flailed. “Of all people you have to lose to after defeating me!!”

Broadside laughed some more.

“...and the deal is...?” Cub asked.

“Ah, mou! I’m not talking to you again, ever!” Maya plonked back down, facing the other direction.

“Maya and Broadside have a little rivalry going,” Cub’s cuddler giggled. “That’s how their friendship works.”

“Who’s friends with that big oaf?!” Maya sulked back.

Gold Cub was tending to agree.

“I have to give you some credit, Goldy.” Broadside said. “You run pretty damn well. 30s of evading missile and M61 fire is no mean feat.”

Cub mentally noted that was something he wasn’t looking forward to dealing with in the near future.

The massive avatar gave a thumbs up.

“You’re gonna grow up to be one mean killing machine.”

“Ah...”

“Oh by the way, Winter Sky, have you noticed something about that soft toy?”

Cub could hear him grinning in his voice, and wondered why. Sky promptly turned him around, and puzzledly poured over his features. Meanwhile, Gold got an eye-full of white avatar that was somehow wearing a sundress of some sorts. Was it some kind of enhanced gear?

“He’s a lion cub!”

“Who’s a lion cub?” Said another voice as Cub heard the whoosh of an avatar zoning in behind.

“My Dearie~” Wintry said as she whirled round and thrust out her prize. “We’re talking about this little one, of course.”

Gold Cub was introduced to another massive hulk, this one more muscular (if that could be described of a mechanical humanoid) and goldenish-yellow rather than deep red. He was also tall and broad-chested like the alpha male stereotype this beefcake was. The avatar was topped off with a fanged visage ringed by darker plated mane -- this, was a leonine avatar, too.

“Golden Cub...?” Gold read off the newcomer’s nameplate.

“Gold Cub...?” Said Golden simultaneously.

There was an awkward silence, then:

“EEEH?!”

“Dearie~” Wintry cooed again. “Don’t you have some explaining to do~~?”

Gold felt a chill run up his spine as the arms around him seem to tighten. And rightly so, for Golden Cub’s color was draining out rapidly. Gold wondered if he really should look at Winter right now...

“Eh-heh?”

“This is not somebody else’s child, right~~?”

“W-Wait a minute!!” Golden Cub waved frantically as he finally got it. “T-This is not what it looks like!!”

“Oh-ho~?”

Both Cubs heard Burgundy snicker.

“You bastard!” Golden roared. “What are you up to this time?!”

“Oh yeah, Boss,” Broadside replied.

If Cub were him, he’d be wearing a Trollface emote right now.

“You told me to pick him up as a surprise, right?”

“Uuh...”

“Right?”

“Uh, yes, right! Ah yes! This was surprise, you know, er, we heard of a tiny lion avatar appearing so we went hunting for it.”

“Weren’t you supposed to be raiding bosses now, Dearie~?”

Golden seemed to be getting more desperate.

“It was a surprise, you know... But hey, even if its ruined, got to do it properly...”

Golden took Gold out of Winter’s hands and presented the duelist to Winter.

Starts off simple, but for some reason, the second part had a little too much dialogue that it was hard to grasp the actions, maybe a bit more description surrounding the dialogue would help.

Maybe like this?

Spoiler for Prologue 02:

“So, let me get this straight,” Burgundy Broadside guffawed, rattling the grenades dangling from his belt as he did.

Burgundy. Red. Shooter. Gold Cub noted as he continued to overhear the conversation from behind screens of newbie help threads some avatar pages were hosting. He was reading up on colors and their significance on one screen, and user reports about the attributes of the many battle stages. The scenery around them had changed to, to a much more lush rainforest with trees the size of mountains: the Emerald Glade zone. Cub reminded himself that this was a viewing gallery, the instanced part of Accel World shared with other players when lingering within a local area network, then kept on speed reading.

“You, the great Maya Butcher,” the speaker of broad maroon girth continued. “Challenged a random scrub, then died 2s in because he threw a rock at your face?!”

The hulking avatar scoffed at a diminutive blue female sulking on top of a wrecked tree stump.
Maya. Blue. Close-combat. Overconfident.

“He just got lucky!!” Maya raged at him, gunsword raised. “I can’t fly, and he was on a damn roof! I had to jump up there!”

“And then... You fell.”

Burgundy's reply was loaded with as many stings as his cannons were.

“Why don’t you try maneuvering mid-air if I shoved you off a cliff, Burgy!!”

Yes, why didn’t you do something about that? That was a thought that crossed Cub’s mind after he tossed a brick into Maya and knocked her trajectory away from the wall. He had merely wanted to give the destructible interactive environment a try when he did that. In another game, there would’ve been an invisible second jump, teleport, or a misuse of the Charge mechanic common to close-combat characters, that would’ve made his attack moot. Maya did neither except tumble all the way into the ground, and losing a full gauge bar of health that resulted in his first fight being an awkward victory. As it turned out from his reading, the rules in Accel World have leaned towards the <<realistic>>, such as one’s base attributes being modified by the chemical element of birth only, and apart from special gauge moves activated by taking damage and enhanced gear one can create or obtain by other means, everything else follows as closely to the Laws of Physics as possible.

A restraint placed on players, Cub thought grimly. Much like the real world...

“Ara, what have we here?”

Cub felt himself being lifted off the ground and swaddled in warm soft arms. Like a tamed pet, he let himself go limp. It was a learned trick; he used to hate getting picked up and glomped randomly, but that was the price of being a plushie. Might as well lean back and enjoy the ride, so to speak.

“And you then dueled and one-shotted me,” Cub continued, hoping that it would end the conversation sooner. Loud voices weren’t his thing.

“Yes, THAT!” Maya flailed. “Of all people you have to lose to after defeating me!!”

Broadside laughed some more.

“...and the deal is...?” Cub asked.

“Ah, mou! I’m not talking to you again, ever!”

Maya plonked back down, facing the other direction. The six swords hanging off her waist splayed out like an open flower bud as she did so.

“Maya and Broadside have a little rivalry going,” Cub’s cuddler giggled. “That’s how their friendship works.”

“Who’s friends with that big oaf?!” Maya sulked back.

Gold Cub was tending to agree at this point.

Winter Sky just giggled some more.

“I have to give you some credit, Goldy.” Broadside pipped up. “You run pretty damn well. 30s of evading missile and M61 fire is no mean feat.”

That’s an understatement, Cub mused. The moment he had defeated Maya, another challenger was announced, and the next moment the entire bulk of atmosphere around him had burst into flame! He made a mad dash off the hospital as the entire structure gave way under heavy bombardment. His speed and small size ensured that he cleared the empty street and tumbled lightly through the next windowless perch. But Gold Cub didn’t have a break; his ears sensitized by chronic silence picked up the rush of rockets, and he got up and sprinted again. Warheads slammed into the spots mere footsteps behind, so close he could still feel the heat radiating from each aftershock. The concrete too plinked and cracked from the attacker spraying metal slugs at Gold Cub. From the rate of fire and relentlessness, Cub decided his opponent was using some sort of chaingun. Going back to the rules of Accel World, it meant that Burgundy would be rather weighed down, so as long as he could close the distance, he’d have the advantage in melee. With that in mind, the boy ducked and weaved between power tower and water tower, trying to reduce the massive radius he had been cornered into by the ranged character. He had noticed another city building where LoS to Burgundy was blocked. Gold Cub had turned and leapt across the street, only to see smart missiles cobra upwards from below.

The boy mentally noted that Burgy was someone he wasn’t looking forward to dealing with in the near future.

The massive avatar finished his review with a thumbs up.

“You’re gonna grow up to be one mean killing machine.”

“Ah...” Gold Cub nodded slowly.

“Oh by the way, Winter Sky, have you noticed something about that soft toy?”

Cub could hear Burgundy grinning in his voice, and wondered why. Sky promptly turned Cub around, and puzzledly poured over his features. Meanwhile, Gold got an eye-full of white avatar that was somehow wearing a sundress of some sorts. Was it some kind of enhanced gear?

“He’s a lion cub!”

Yes, and the significance of that is...? Gold wondered.

“Who’s a lion cub?” Said another voice as Cub heard the whoosh of an avatar zoning in behind.

“My Dearie~” Wintry said as she whirled round and thrust out her prize. “We’re talking about this little one, of course.”

Gold Cub was introduced to another massive hulk, this one more muscular <<if that could be described of a mechanical humanoid>> and goldenish-yellow rather than deep red of Burgy’s. He was also tall and broad-chested like the alpha male stereotype this beefcake was, towering a good head or two over Winter Sky. Beside him, Gold Cub looked more like an infant. The avatar was topped off with a menacing fanged visage ringed by a mane of darker plate masking his small rounded ears -- Golden Cub was a leonine avatar, too.

“Golden Cub...?” Gold read off the newcomer’s nameplate.

“Gold Cub...?” Said Golden simultaneously.

There was an awkward silence, then:

“EEEH?!”

While it wasn’t uncommon to share names with a complete stranger, it always was a bit unnerving when they are <<almost>> exactly the same. Add to that two people with almost nothing to do with each other turning up with a taste for felinoid body shapes when the game has minimal player involvement in avatar customization? Absolute astonishment.

“Dearie~” Wintry cooed again. “Don’t you have some explaining to do~~?”

The tone of her speech had Gold feel a chill run up his spine. The arms around him also seem to tighten. And rightly so, for Golden Cub’s color was draining out rapidly. Gold wondered if he really should look at Winter's face right now...

“Er, what is it, Dear?”

“This is not somebody else’s child, right~~?”

“W-Wait a minute!!” Golden Cub waved frantically as he finally got it. “T-This is not what it looks like!!”

“Oh-ho~?”

Both Cubs heard Burgundy snicker.

“You bastard!” Golden roared as he caught on to the plot. “What are you up to this time?!”

“Oh yeah, Boss,” Broadside replied between chortles. If Cub were in Burgy’s shoes, he’d be wearing a Trollface emote right now.

“You told me to pick him up as a surprise, right?”

“Uuh...” Golden was confused once more.

“Right?” Burgundy stressed again.

Golden made another late realization as he fumbled for words and exclaimed, “Uh, yes, right! Ah yes! This was surprise, you know, er, we heard of a tiny lion avatar appearing so we went hunting for it.”

“Weren’t you supposed to be raiding bosses now, Dearie~?”

Winter pressed on with that icy tone, inching closer to Golden. Suddenly, the bigger lion didn’t seem so ferocious.

Indeed, Golden seemed to be getting more desperate.

“It was a surprise, you know... But hey, even if its ruined, got to do it properly...”

With a flash of insight, Golden took Gold out of Winter’s hands and presented the newbie duelist to Winter.

aaaaah no comment on my fic huh... I guess I could wait until I get the whole thing working by Oct. 10 TT.TT

*patpat*

You'd probably need to bump it once or twice before someone notices

I didn't really haven't got much comments beyond that I enjoyed it and would look forward to what you've got.

Just for info, the time I'm setting my fic in is waaay at the beginning of Accel World, when there were many many legions, even more Burst Linkers being born and recruited by mysterious packages every day, open PVP and PVE everywhere, and Level 8 was the old Level 9. The Great Golden Brigade (Dai Kinpaku Dan) with 2 Cubs is the primordial form of the current Yellow Legion. What happened between then and now is the main theme to be explored. Hopefully I stop making canon mistakes and I'll finish this story in time.

“So, let me get this straight,” Burgundy Broadside guffawed, rattling the grenades dangling from his belt as he did.

Burgundy. Red. Shooter. Gold Cub noted as he continued to overhear the conversation from behind screens of newbie help threads some avatar pages were hosting. He was reading up on colors and their significance on one screen, and user reports about the attributes of the many battle stages. The scenery around them had changed to, to a much more lush rainforest with trees the size of mountains: the Emerald Glade zone. Cub reminded himself that this was a viewing gallery, the instanced part of Accel World shared with other players when lingering within a local area network, then kept on speed reading.

“You, the great Maya Butcher,” the speaker of broad maroon girth continued. “Challenged a random scrub, then died 2s in because he threw a rock at your face?!”

The hulking avatar scoffed at a diminutive blue female sulking on top of a wrecked tree stump.
Maya. Blue. Close-combat. Overconfident.

“He just got lucky!!” Maya raged at him, gunsword raised. “I can’t fly, and he was on a damn roof! I had to jump up there!”

“And then... You fell.”

Burgundy's reply was loaded with as many stings as his cannons were.

“Why don’t you try maneuvering mid-air if I shoved you off a cliff, Burgy!!”

Yes, why didn’t you do something about that? That was a thought that crossed Cub’s mind after he tossed a brick into Maya and knocked her trajectory away from the wall. He had merely wanted to give the destructible interactive environment a try when he did that. In another game, there would’ve been an invisible second jump, teleport, or a misuse of the Charge mechanic common to close-combat characters, that would’ve made his attack moot. Maya did neither except tumble all the way into the ground, and losing a full gauge bar of health that resulted in his first fight being an awkward victory. As it turned out from his reading, the rules in Accel World have leaned towards the <<realistic>>, such as one’s base attributes being modified by the chemical element of birth only, and apart from special gauge moves activated by taking damage and enhanced gear one can create or obtain by other means, everything else follows as closely to the Laws of Physics as possible.

A restraint placed on players, Cub thought grimly. Much like the real world...

“Ara, what have we here?”

Cub felt himself being lifted off the ground and swaddled in warm soft arms. Like a tamed pet, he let himself go limp. It was a learned trick; he used to hate getting picked up and glomped randomly, but that was the price of being a plushie. Might as well lean back and enjoy the ride, so to speak.

“And you then dueled and one-shotted me,” Cub continued, hoping that it would end the conversation sooner. Loud voices weren’t his thing.

“Yes, THAT!” Maya flailed. “Of all people you have to lose to after defeating me!!”

Broadside laughed some more.

“...and the deal is...?” Cub asked.

“Ah, mou! I’m not talking to you again, ever!”

Maya plonked back down, facing the other direction. The six swords hanging off her waist splayed out like an open flower bud as she did so.

“Maya and Broadside have a little rivalry going,” Cub’s cuddler giggled. “That’s how their friendship works.”

“Who’s friends with that big oaf?!” Maya sulked back.

Gold Cub was tending to agree at this point.

Winter Sky just giggled some more.

“I have to give you some credit, Goldy.” Broadside pipped up. “You run pretty damn well. 30s of evading missile and M61 fire is no mean feat.”

That’s an understatement, Cub mused. The moment he had defeated Maya, another challenger was announced, and the next moment the entire bulk of atmosphere around him had burst into flame! He made a mad dash off the hospital as the entire structure gave way under heavy bombardment. His speed and small size ensured that he cleared the empty street and tumbled lightly through the next windowless perch. But Gold Cub didn’t have a break; his ears sensitized by chronic silence picked up the rush of rockets, and he got up and sprinted again. Warheads slammed into the spots mere footsteps behind, so close he could still feel the heat radiating from each aftershock. The concrete too plinked and cracked from the attacker spraying metal slugs at Gold Cub. From the rate of fire and relentlessness, Cub decided his opponent was using some sort of chaingun. Going back to the rules of Accel World, it meant that Burgundy would be rather weighed down, so as long as he could close the distance, he’d have the advantage in melee. With that in mind, the boy ducked and weaved between power tower and water tower, trying to reduce the massive radius he had been cornered into by the ranged character. He had noticed another city building where LoS to Burgundy was blocked. Gold Cub had turned and leapt across the street, only to see smart missiles cobra upwards from below.

The boy mentally noted that Burgy was someone he wasn’t looking forward to dealing with in the near future.

The massive avatar finished his review with a thumbs up.

“You’re gonna grow up to be one mean killing machine.”

“Ah...” Gold Cub nodded slowly.

“Oh by the way, Winter Sky, have you noticed something about that soft toy?”

Cub could hear Burgundy grinning in his voice, and wondered why. Sky promptly turned Cub around, and puzzledly poured over his features. Meanwhile, Gold got an eye-full of white avatar that was somehow wearing a sundress of some sorts. Was it some kind of enhanced gear?

“He’s a lion cub!”

Yes, and the significance of that is...? Gold wondered.

“Who’s a lion cub?” Said another voice as Cub heard the whoosh of an avatar zoning in behind.

“My Dearie~” Wintry said as she whirled round and thrust out her prize. “We’re talking about this little one, of course.”

Gold Cub was introduced to another massive hulk, this one more muscular <<if that could be described of a mechanical humanoid>> and goldenish-yellow rather than deep red of Burgy’s. He was also tall and broad-chested like the alpha male stereotype this beefcake was, towering a good head or two over Winter Sky. Beside him, Gold Cub looked more like an infant. The avatar was topped off with a menacing fanged visage ringed by a mane of darker plate masking his small rounded ears -- Golden Cub was a leonine avatar, too.

“Golden Cub...?” Gold read off the newcomer’s nameplate.

“Gold Cub...?” Said Golden simultaneously.

There was an awkward silence, then:

“EEEH?!”

While it wasn’t uncommon to share names with a complete stranger, it always was a bit unnerving when they are <<almost>> exactly the same. Add to that two people with almost nothing to do with each other turning up with a taste for felinoid body shapes when the game has minimal player involvement in avatar customization? Absolute astonishment.

“Dearie~” Wintry cooed again. “Don’t you have some explaining to do~~?”

The tone of her speech had Gold feel a chill run up his spine. The arms around him also seem to tighten. And rightly so, for Golden Cub’s color was draining out rapidly. Gold wondered if he really should look at Winter's face right now...

“Er, what is it, Dear?”

“This is not somebody else’s child, right~~?”

“W-Wait a minute!!” Golden Cub waved frantically as he finally got it. “T-This is not what it looks like!!”

“Oh-ho~?”

Both Cubs heard Burgundy snicker.

“You bastard!” Golden roared as he caught on to the plot. “What are you up to this time?!”

“Oh yeah, Boss,” Broadside replied between chortles. If Cub were in Burgy’s shoes, he’d be wearing a Trollface emote right now.

“You told me to pick him up as a surprise, right?”

“Uuh...” Golden was confused once more.

“Right?” Burgundy stressed again.

Golden made another late realization as he fumbled for words and exclaimed, “Uh, yes, right! Ah yes! This was surprise, you know, er, we heard of a tiny lion avatar appearing so we went hunting for it.”

“Weren’t you supposed to be raiding bosses now, Dearie~?”

Winter pressed on with that icy tone, inching closer to Golden. Suddenly, the bigger lion didn’t seem so ferocious.

Indeed, Golden seemed to be getting more desperate.

“It was a surprise, you know... But hey, even if its ruined, got to do it properly...”

With a flash of insight, Golden took Gold out of Winter’s hands and presented the newbie duelist to Winter.