It was end of all sources

It was begin very slowly. Oil and gold vanish. Coil and gas vanish. There was few nuclear explotions in nuclear plants /,. People start moving but mostly nature was toxicated by chemicals. What they through the centuries put into water ,air and into animals. There was place few places . Where was not harm done . It was mostly in nature reservations. But people look into starts and they build another civilization on mars. Just poor people who cannot afford to buy ticket must stay. But they die in slowly painful death from toxic vaste. But there was few wise man . Who knew this will be new begin of they age. Now when they comeback to they original lands . But mostly there was big towns and lot of toxic poison. So they decide where was is less. In nature reservations. There is still wild spirit and air. There is still wild animals and healthy fresh herbs . There is river and streams with fishes and other water animals. Apache tribe went to Yellow stone park. In valley where was 300 years go slaughtered over thousands bison. They build camp. Place was

beautiful protected from wind in winter. And protected from sun in summer. Ideal place to live. They established some corn and grain fields. Make ritual place in deep cave. They draw pictures of animals and start on the walls there. When they settle down. They make great ritual party bellow hot summer sky. Drums and flute dance in circles. They start again to dance ghost dance. For celebration this land again just belong to them. There is no more greed minds and hearts. That night they erected 5 totems each one for powerful animal. Protection from evil forces of earth and black sky. They dance until they fall down . In they minds were create pictures of visions of they future and presence. They stay there until morning. Is was most beautiful morning what they saw. Red sun slowly raise up over golden clouds. That was very symbolic. They are wellcomed here from great spirit and whole nature. Trees start moving with wind forward to east. They know there is lot of wild animals hide there. They know they will not kill like they want. But how is really need. Number of animals are very limited. They make ritual washing bodies in cold water fall. Dry them self in dry sand. Women went for the fields with children. Man went to explore another part of this park. Is start getting hot . They were happy when get into woods. Shadows were calm you can hear birds. Falling trees

maybe from bear hands . There was little stream . All together sound very harmonic . They climb on highest mountain to see how big is this area. Climbing was really hard . Soil was wet almost like mud. Few stones rolling from top on them. Sweating and breathing became heavy. Some man start bleeding from nose . Air was really thiny there. And they saw it in between peaks laying beautiful silver lake. Surface was calm and around the edges great yellow stones. Few sekvoi trees and blueberry bushies. Looks just like real paradise . From top they see rocky mountains without end. Beautiful blue sky , beautiful golden sun. This the land where they spirit came from. They know they are home now. In they very own home.

My Review

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Its a decent description, lots of typos and choppy sentences, but I am a fan of the mars take on things, (not very original but I just like the idea of mars being a secondary planet) I'm pretty sure in real life, a nuclear holocaust would kill pretty much everything on the planet though, still I guess fall out and mad max have their worlds populated with people so why not.

Posted 4 Months Ago

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4 Months Ago

Hi thank you for your review. I like your honesty sorry is not too much fit to your contest. Actuall.. read moreHi thank you for your review. I like your honesty sorry is not too much fit to your contest. Actually point of my story was after nuclear holocaust only who survive will be indian tribes and they can come back to they original lands. Don't too much worry about originality anyway is not too much here or anywhere else.

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Its a decent description, lots of typos and choppy sentences, but I am a fan of the mars take on things, (not very original but I just like the idea of mars being a secondary planet) I'm pretty sure in real life, a nuclear holocaust would kill pretty much everything on the planet though, still I guess fall out and mad max have their worlds populated with people so why not.

Posted 4 Months Ago

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

4 Months Ago

Hi thank you for your review. I like your honesty sorry is not too much fit to your contest. Actuall.. read moreHi thank you for your review. I like your honesty sorry is not too much fit to your contest. Actually point of my story was after nuclear holocaust only who survive will be indian tribes and they can come back to they original lands. Don't too much worry about originality anyway is not too much here or anywhere else.

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Posted 7 Months Ago

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7 Months Ago

Thank you very much that best response what I can get. Yes sharing can make connection and put peopl.. read moreThank you very much that best response what I can get. Yes sharing can make connection and put people more together. So thank you very much.