Wednesday, August 24, 2016

Logline Critique Round #7

TITLE: Angels in PlayGENRE: Adult Literary Fiction

When first grader Niklas Larkin’s best friend dies in an accidental shooting, he is afraid more kids will die, maybe himself. God influences the boy to unite opposing forces to storm social media. The movement inspires many, but not the minds of politicians or the NRA until unexpected help arrives.

I'm not sure I understand who your protagonist is here. Also, is God actually a character? Is He helping this child tweet and facebook and the whole thing? Finally, why would "storming social media" save this boy's life? It sounds like he has an actual goal you haven't mentioned (ie, getting laws changed). We need to know what that is.