"Doing his best to pretend that he meant to do trip embarrassingly" My absolute favorite part, i literally loled (which is unusual for a quiet person like myself ;) )
I love this story! It is completely awesome! And i can actually say that without feeling like i'm just flattering you :)
Actually, at the beginning, i was happy to see your permission to critique this story as i see fit.. Because -shamefully- i enjoying really harshly critiquing people's stories.. But i really couldn't find anything wrong with your story.. XD

Your writing style is great, unlike most stories, there wasn't even one place where i felt even a little confused.. Which is especially surprising with an action story..

The sentimental parts didn't seem weird.. Except perhaps the hug part, which is extremely difficult.. I certainly could never pull it off.. I really felt sorry for both Gromov and Snippy, but especially Snippy.. i never really did think about the marks the wasteland left on him..

though you claim to know nothing about story conclusions and handling overly emotional situations, you did it just perfect. the action scenes ware captivating, the descriptions vivid. i was angry together with engie and i hurt together with snippy. you conveyed the emotions so very, very well i nearly cried.

Wow. This is simply amazing. The last thing you need to worry about is OOC-ness, because they were perfectly in character. I'm not just saying this, but I really, REALLY loved this story.

You managed to make both Engie and Snippy sympathetic characters, which I applaud you for. The interaction between the characters was really natural, and I especially liked the little bit with Captain in it. The fact that he's the leader can often be overshadowed by how crazy he is, but you showed it extremely well.

Excellent, excellent work. I really hope you keep writing for this fandom. You did a wonderful job and I look forward to seeing more.

It was incredibly good story. Lot of action and emotions. I enjoyed it very much! It was touching. I felt sorry for Snippy - you portrayed him so well. Engie was also in-character, in my opinion. And that scene in the bathroom creeped me out. Your amazing writing-style made everything so vivid!