What do you say?That it was a mistake?A one-time occurrence,One in a million chance?That you're sorryLike an apologyIs enough to subside their sorrowEnough to make them forgetThat it was your fault?That someone elseShould be standing at their door.Do you sayIt should have been youThat you wishYou had gone in their place?But so do theyThey wish it moreThan anything in the world.What do you sayWhen you look at their disbeliefWatching as the words spillingFrom your tongue wash away their smiles?what do you sayWhen you see their loveCrash and crumble into griefAlong with their hearts?What do you sayWhen you see the anger in their eyesThe pure hatred in themWhen they realize that their love is goneAnd that you took them away?What do you sayTo the tearsA steady flood of painWashing down their face?What do you sayWhen they finally ask"How could this have happened?Why did you let this happen?"What do you say?What can you say?

Yepppppp kinda slow in my weekly submit this week. I didn't have any inspiration till a couple hours ago sighhhh when you vow never to do a topic twice you begin to run out of emotional topics T.T Hope everyone enjoys

Hi, this is the cofounder of #PowerfulWriting here to do a critique, as you have submitted to our gallery!

This is a powerful piece. It is clear that emotional impact is the main point of it, and there is certainly a very strong emotional impact.

For me, the main thing that conveys this is the repetition. The repeated use of the words "What do you say" helps to add a kind of weight, making the poem feel heavy and sad as the reader gets through it.

The change to "what can you say" at the end makes this even more powerful, emphasizing the importance of the word can and the lack of words or expressions in a situation like the one outlined in this piece.

One thing that could help make the piece more impactful is the added use of imagery. Poetry that is heavy in imagery has a tendency to leave the reader feeling very emotionally vulnerable, leaving you with the opportunity to make them feel what you want them to feel. I'm sure you've heard the cliche "show, don't tell." I feel that although your poem is beautiful and highly emotional, there is a lot of telling.

Overall, it is a very strong piece, but with some added work it could be even more magnificent.