Not sure if English is your first language or not...but well, the grammar and punctuation in this needs major work.

For instance, grammar:

'...Garrett responded swirled her around to face him.' should be '...Garrett responded, swirling (Actually, *twirling* would be a more accurate word, but to each his own) her around to face him.'

Punctuation:

That can also be helped by the up-top example.

If you need more help or clarification, please feel free to ask. Sorry if I sound mean up at the top, but this is just meant to be concrit. And besides that, I just had to put my dog down today at the vet's, so I'm more irritable than normal because it's been a bad day...