Bad writing habits

I’m making changes to Stars Beyond, based on our editor’s
feedback. A few changes to the first
chapter. Well, let’s be honest, more than a few. (It’s okay, not a total
rewrite, we did leave some words the same at the end of the chapter.)

Sherylyn is following along behind, unmaking half of them.

“But you’ve cut out all his thoughts, his emotions,” I
protest.

“Because he sounds exactly like Alistair. I can’t tell who’s who.”

I never used to be conscious of how similar our characters
sounded. I don’t know if it’s because we’re becoming better writers, and thus noticing
it, or if it’s an unconscious laziness we’ve developed over time.

Either way, we have to change it.

Right now, I’m just happy Sherylyn can at least pick it up,
even if I can’t.