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well here we go. got nothing else to do so here we go. sidenote: deciced not to go with a prolouge and instead go straight to chapter one

Spoiler:- Chapter One: Corruption pt.1:

Rukongai, 6pm, June 15

"Which one of us is waking him up?" Kida inquired. The Third Captain was looking down towards Yasushi Hayashi, Captain of the Thirteenth Squad. He was laying passed out in the dirt. His shaggy black hair was flecked with brown spots. The entirety of his body was under his white captain's haori.

Around him stood two other soul reapers. The afformentioned third captain and the ninth division captain, Zameric Hanako. Kida was the the stranger of the two. Well not too much stranger, she just had blue wolf ears protruding from her strawberry blonde hair.

"Rock, paper, scissors?" Zameric suggested, breaking into a wide grin. This was a regular thing. Kida always lost and always got chewed out for waking him up. Somewhere under his black hair Zam always knew it would be that way.

"Damn it. Not again." She yelled. "Here we go." She moved the haori using only her right thumb and index finger. She had no clue what would be under it. The crotch of his shihakusho was wet. "Crap! He ****** his pants again."

Zam threw his head back and started laughing uncontrollebly. Kida extended her canines and chomed on Zam's shoulder. He yelped in pain. The sudden loud sound caused Hayashi to awake and spring upward all in one motion.

"We're not in you're room. You're in the middle of the 55th district of the Rukongai." The third captain answered, releasing Zam's shoulder.

"Well, how'd i get here?"

The other captains began to tell him of the events of the night that had just passed. Though they had no idea what was happening not a mile away.

----------------

Not far from the site where the three captains where having their incident an event was happening that would have a lasting impact on the Soul Society.

In a clearing in the forest. The spirit particles that made up the Soul Society began to part. A dark hole opened. Out of it stepped a young woman. Her wild hair was as white as the tube top and baggy pants she wore and her blue eyes seemed to blaze. There was a number 4 tattooed on her right bicep. And her most distinct features: a hole was in her stomach. It went all the way through to her back. And on her left hip was a thick plate which looked like bone.

She was followed by three men. The first wore no shirt and a shoulder length, short sleeve jacket with an open front. He donned pants identical to his female companion's. From his wrist to his elbow on his left arm was the same thick bone like material. His hole rested in his right hand.

The two that followed were identical in look. Standing hunched over their long black hair concieled the holes in thier shirtless chests. They wore the same pants as their allies.

"Heh heh heh. Boys this is gonna be fun." The female chuckled grinning.

"Whatever." The first man grumbled.

"Damn Leaf. You really are a constant down, aren't you?" She snapped.

"I guess by your standards I am, Raya." Leaf spoke dull and harsh.

"Gah hagh nah ga." One of the beasts gurgled.

"Look's like Claw is on my side." Leaf's voice seemed to show more emotion this time.

"Sah na gasg nee sag." The other beast grumbled.

"Well Fang's on my side." Raya responded. "Now shut up and let's get to work."

----------------

All three captains immeadiatly went silent. Kida's ears began to twitch.

"You felt that too, right?" Kida asked the men in front of her. She was referring to the change in spiritual pressure of the area. The third and fifth captains dropped their haori on the ground. The three exchanged glaces and began flash stepping towards the disturbance.

They appeared in the clearing just in time to see the gate the four strangers had stepped out of close.

"Well what do we have here? A few no good arrancars." Zam said smiling.

"They're not just any arrancars, Zam." Hayashi said, seeming suddenly sobered up. "Look at the girl. The number on her arm. You know what that means."

"Espada." Kida replied in a whisper. "This won't be easy."

The captains drew their swords and took battle stances.

"Leaf, you take the one with the spiked hair. Claw, Fang you get the girl. I want the one with the shaggy hair." Raya commanded.

Just as she said Leaf dashed towards Zam, who dodged into the woods. Claw and Fang dove at Kida who raised her sword to block. Even with the block she was blow back to the woods, going the opposite way as Zameric. That left Raya facing Hayashi.

"My name is Yasushi Hayashi. I am captain of the thirteenth division of the Thirteen Court Guard Squads and I will kill you."

"My name is Raya Erasa. Espada number four of Hayate Zakei's arrancars and you have no chance of beating me." She drew her sword.

They launched at eachother; ready to slash. The sound of metal hitting metal rang as their sword's clashed. The warriors smirked.

"Ya know, now that I get a look at you up close you're actually kinda cute." Yasushi complimented.

"Gracias. But ya know flattery will get you nowhere." She retorted. Both stepped back to opposite sides of the clearing.

"Ignite, Nobaoto." His sword became encased in flame. When the fire disipated a pair of black trench knives were on Hayashi's hands. The top half of his black robes had also burned off.

"Kinda puny for a shikai, don'tcha think." Raya giggled.

"I guess to some but i think it gets the job done fine. Ignite, Hihashira!"

His knuckles erupted in flame and were quickly stabbed into the ground. As quickly as the flames came they disappeared.

Nothing happened for a moment. Then Raya broke the silence,"really that was your big move nothing hap..." Her sentence trailed off when five pillars of fire raised around her.

Hayashi stood up and prepared to walk away when Raya appeared in front of him standing on her hands. She drove her right ankle into the side of his head, and flipped back onto her feet.

The captain picked himself up from the ground only to fell himself wrapped in the embrace of the hollow known as Fang.

The squad four captain, Mizuhashi Akira, entered the room. "Um, guys someone's here to see you."

A man wearing a captain's haori entered the room.

"Golde." Zam and Kida muttered simultaniously. They both knew nothing good would come from this visit.

Wow. Damn that took a while. Well the plot is already in motion. If you can figure it out you win ten cookies from Arc. And to NL and Zam the fights you two took place in weren't covered because they really don't change the plot much. Now all of you i want to know what you think. Positive and negative reviews greatly accepted. And on that note I haven't really thought of a title for the story. Title suggestions also greatly accepted. Corruption is the name of the first two chapters.

Last edited by kusari; 23rd May 2010 at 5:34 AM.

PRETEND THERE IS A SIGNATURE HERE FULL OF WITTY JOKES AND CLAIMS TO FAME AND UNDESERVED BRAVADO AND SELF PROMOTION

Fanfiction frenzy. I suppose I'll skip voting and stick with the ONE vote i got (over PM too -_-)

We should, like, totally start a fanfiction Club lol.

anyone else notice how NL writes her character's relations to the others

Writing Prologue!

Spoiler:- The Super Robot War Prologue (Cliche title ftw!):

(I treat SS and Earth as two dimensions that are separated by a thin barrier which Shinigami can open a door into with ease)
(The first part is Intro to the series. Bleach itself doesn't come in until the middle)
(Sections of War. DC War, EFA vs EOTI/UCC. L5 Campaign, EFA vs Aerogators. NDC War, EFA vs NDC. SM/I War, EFA vs Shadow Mirrors/Investigators)
The Planet Earth in this universe is quite strange. A one-of-a-kind universe where few events are predictable by other dimensions, a parallel universe that branches quite differently from the rest. Twists of fate are common and are usually centric on the Three Noah Ark Class Battle Ships, Kurogane, Hagane, and the Hiryu Kai. The first notable occurences were two Meteors, labelled as one and two, landed on earth in the mid 2000s. The meteors slowed the technology rate heavily, so you might wonder why it is so technologically advanced a mere 200 years later. On the turn to the 22nd century, people began to colonize space and from then on the years were dubbed as S.E., or Space Era. In the mid 100s a third meteor struck Aidoneus Island, labelled Meteor 3. Meteor 3 itself had landed seemingly perfectly and retained a ridiculously large amount of its body-at the time it seemed impossible but when they began to look into it they forgot the meteor itself. Inside of Meteor 3 were technologies and materials that had never been discovered before. A council was made by the Earth Federal Government (EFG) for this technology, dubbed "Extra-over Technology" (EOT)and thus the Council was the Extra Over Technology Investigative Institute (EOTI, not a typo.) The head of the EOTI was Bian Zoldark, who foresaw an alien invasion and joined up with United (Space) Colony Corps Commander Maier Branstein (UCC, try saying the full version 5 times fast, with the commander part O.o) to form the Divine Crusaders (DC)-a broadcasted force to fight the Aliens and an enemy of the EFG/EFA. EFA Commander Laker send the SRX and ATX experimental teams in the Noah Class ships Hagane and Hiryu Kai, in a turn of events, to defeat the DC with a rag-tag group of Once-enemies, a group of teens, and a few professionals to take down the DC and calm the populous to show the EFA/EFG would be victorious. However, Bian and Maier had actually been making a secret plan to help train the Two ships, originally the entire EFA, and sacrificed many lives and worked with many truly wicked people-dying in the end of their efforts before they were able to see the fruits of their labor in Operation SRW (A mission to defeat the original Alien Threat). The alien threat were humans brainwashed and kidnapped by the alien race of Balmarians-this group was dubbed as the "Aerogators" by the EFG. Peace followed for six more monthes before the Hagane and Hiryu would begin to Unite again to fight off many other opponents. The initial was the Neo-Divine Crusaders (NDC) who only knew of Bian's public goals and lived off of them and not off of Bian's true goal. They were brought to power by the Shadow-Mirrors, people from another dimension who believed war was best to advance technology and to avoid corruption-but due to events happening faster in thier world without the power of Meteor 3 they needed to relocate dimensions. They eventually teamed up with Aliens (confusing huh?) called the Investigators. The Investigators weakened and maintained potentially hazardous planets from travelling into deep space and disturbing others. And of course they target Earth-the practical embodiment of civil war. Somehow or another they pull off another miracle as they finally bring peace to their planet once again and destroy the Dimensional Teleporter "The Door of Agueies" (SP, may be spelled oddly in my story cause it’s a hard word >.<) of the System XN. OR did they?

The year is 190 S.E. and 3 years have passed since the last war on and around the planet Earth. The EFG president Brian Midcrid has regained power after begin overthrown by Graien Grusman. Meanwhile in the colonies the new UCC leader is Elzam Branstein and he carefully acts as a leader figure for the colonies altogether-although each colony does have its own figurehead. The EFA has all but faded and thebrnt of their force is located on their 5 Noah Ark class Space/air/submarine Ships; The Drill ship Kurogane, the Tronium (Powerful EOT Metal/power Source) Ship Hagane, The Space Voyager Hiryu Kai, And the carrier ships Shirogane Ver. 2 and Ver. 3-the first lost a year ago in the war. The majority of the members of the Hagane and Hiryu currently pursue outer goals. To the knowledge of the UCC and EFG, no threats have been detected and the Hiryu takes common trips out from Saturn to Pluto to monitor unusual behavior.

However, hidden to the majority of the human race, Commander Laker and the rest of the Izu Base in Japan have kept the System XN and restored it with the help of now “Human” (Personality, decision making, etc) Bioroid Lamia Loveless ended up helping the restoration. Much to one Gilliam Yager’s chagrin they had and are attempting to keep it secret to him-the original user and creator of the device. For the past 3 years they have been monitoring another dimension directly with spies and cloaking to watch this other universe. Originally, they had watched them by sending small probes through to the dimension-it being among the closest to their own. But with the help of the System XN they have made frequent observing trips to discover this dimension also had an Earth that its residents often visited. They found out about the social classes, the small bits of magical kidou, the swordplay of killing hollows and the teleportation effect of Konso. The EFG made Izu their Supernatural government section in 188 S.E. after seeing the results of the System XN. The EFA were still wary of their own space and they began to closely observe the technology and firepower of this world..this world called Soul Society.

Due to the rules about powerful techniques in the Sereitei, and the main use of swordplay when fighting hollows-the EFA was led to believe they had discovered a weak planet with technology much weaker and less widely distributed then their own that was hogged by few-and had a weak government to boot. By the time it was spring Laker and Midcrid were already consulting and planning to colonize the world-aware of the risks but figuring it would be less risky then overpopulating the partially destroyed moon or going deeper into space. By May, the plan was finalized and a small army, including many Hiryu and Hagane members, were prepared for initial invasion. They figured the hundred mechas would be sufficient to completely control the Shinigami and preparations began.

At the same time in Sereitei, Meteors 1 and 2 crashed straight into the 12th division’s main lab-destroying many important technologies and incapacitating the 12th squad captain and a visiting Noble-the two most technologically advanced shinigami ever.

What do you think?

Originally Posted by Northern Lights

I have that effect on most men for some reason. no wonder i've been feeling lesbian lately >.>

Ohhh that looks neat. Wish I could do one, but I can't draw my character. XD

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

Spoiler:- Begining of the Inverted Souls Arc:

“Well, Hello there, Arceus,” she turned to see Arceus the Third leaning against the wooden railing lining the walkway next to Senbonzakura’s office, for he was the currently absent Captain of 8th Division.
. . .
Arceus looked knowingly at her, he may look young, but he was decidedly wise at times, but then again a complete fruit cake at others.

. . .

Rotrum blinked, and then dropped to his hands and knees, banging his hand against the roof tiles howling with laughter.

“Because I’m not stupid enough to give you one, besides you’re young enough as it is, you don’t need one,” she winked and leapt off the roof onto the adjacent one, flash stepping towards Division 12.

The atmosphere around Division 10 got decidedly colder.

That's funny, I just chatted with him. XP

Fruitcake, lol. You're quite right there

Woah. rotrum never laughs, ever since I knew him. Nice to know that he can *runs away from his daggers*

Why was there 2 p from Ilppy?

The final part was funny. XD

Sooo does this mean you're not continuing on your Kuchikukan fanfic? hmmm..
But this one looks good too. Want to see more.

Originally Posted by VizardBlue

Spoiler:- Prologue: Oh Son of a Bi-:

The 13 year old kid stepped sneakily out the Seireitei, looking around warily. His blue hair reflected off the sun. He was a fairly average 13-year-old, other then the fact that he was a Soul Reaper, his Zanpakutou hanging on a sash across his back due to the size. His pale skin standed out compared to the background.

"CAMERON!! WHERE ARE YOU?!" Cameron winced, recognizing the voice instantly.

He sighed, turning around, looking up at the intimidating figure of his captain- Cameron himself was only 5'5, while his captain was quite a ways taller. He sighed.

"And where do you think you’re going?" With a mix of bloodlust and boredom in his white eyes, Cameron answered:

"Where the hell do I think I’m going? Hueco Mundo." He sighed, an air of recognition hanging around him. Cameron glared at him, "I have to kill SOMETHING, and I can't kill anyone here, or I’ll get sent to the punishment center. Again." Seijuro looked at him bluntly, a bit of annoyance and anger in his tone.

"Get back in the Seretei. Right now. You’re NOT going to Hueco Mundo, again." Cameron's shoulders slouched, and he depressingly dragged himself back into the Seretei.

"Yes," Cameron replied with malice in his voice, "Captain".

As Cameron stumbled lamely through the Seireitei, he pondered on what he could do until nighttime when his captain was asleep. He could visit Ryuu, then, with a grim look on his face, he pondered the pros and cons of that. The pros were that he could possibly have a cool, new, wacky invention to show him. On the other hand, he would probably USE it to experiment on him. Another problem was that, last time, when he was bored, he had crashed through the ceiling. Ryuu had looked up, emotionless as ever, thrown his rubix cube at his face, slashed his neck, and thrown him back out of the ceiling. As his want to go visit Ryuu dropped lower and lower, he realized that he would challenge him to chess. With a pang of fear striking him in the stomach, he recalled the last time that he had lost: Ryuu had given him a 5 hour lecture on how to move your pawns at the beginning of the game. With a grim smile of recognition, he flash-stepped away from the Research and Development center, trying to find something else to do.

He recollected himself, looking around, and with a shock of astonishment on his face, realized that while he had been trying to figure out what to do, he had made it to night-time! With a bark of laughter, he took out a recorder, and started recording the curses and insults of the four gate guardians around the Seireitei. After he had recorded all of them, he started replaying their voices to the other 3, and, floating high above Seiretei, roared with laughter as he watched them beat each other up. His plan had worked to perfection, he had waited for the four guardians to trash talk the others under their breath, then, recording it, he replayed it to the other 3, angering them, making them seek out the other gate guardians in anger. The reason why he did that? He was bored.

With a content sigh, he started shunpo-ing towards the south entrance. Once he reached the top of the wall, he jumped down, carving 'Cameron Was Here' into the side of the wall. As he landed skillfully at the bottom, he turned away from the wall, and looked straight into the face of a Hollow charging a cero from its mouth. His eyes widened, and right before the blast hit, he uttered one thing:

"Oh son of a bi-".

Well... that was short, but I'd like to see more.
That guardian part was funny.

You know, the first thing that comes to mind with the name Cameron is... Camerupt.

Originally Posted by kusari

well here we go. got nothing else to do so here we go. sidenote: deciced not to go with a prolouge and instead go straight to chapter one

Spoiler:- Chapter One: Corruption pt.1:

Rukongai, 6pm, June 15
"Which one of us is waking him up?" Kida inquired.
. . .
The crotch of his shihakusho was wet. "Crap! He ****** his pants again."

Wow. Damn that took a while. Well the plot is already in motion. If you can figure it out you win ten cookies from Arc..

Oh yeah. You hate being woken up. XDD

"Again"? Sounds like you do that.... a lot of times. Hmmm..

I can't figure it out myself, so I'll raise the offer to 15. XP Except maybe... they're torturing you to get some information.. But why the Hollow then? Vizards? With the title corruption, I guess that's it. Amirite?

Originally Posted by rotrum

Fanfiction frenzy. I suppose I'll skip voting and stick with the ONE vote i got (over PM too -_-)

We should, like, totally start a fanfiction Club lol.

anyone else notice how NL writes her character's relations to the others

Writing Prologue!

Spoiler:- The Super Robot War Prologue (Cliche title ftw!):

(I treat SS and Earth as two dimensions that are separated by a thin barrier which Shinigami can open a door into with ease)
(The first part is Intro to the series. Bleach itself doesn't come in until the middle)
(Sections of War. DC War, EFA vs EOTI/UCC. L5 Campaign, EFA vs Aerogators. NDC War, EFA vs NDC. SM/I War, EFA vs Shadow Mirrors/Investigators)
The Planet Earth in this universe is quite strange. A one-of-a-kind universe where few events are predictable by other dimensions, a parallel universe that branches quite differently from the rest. Twists of fate are common and are usually centric on the Three Noah Ark Class Battle Ships, Kurogane, Hagane, and the Hiryu Kai. The first notable occurences were two Meteors, labelled as one and two, landed on earth in the mid 2000s. The meteors slowed the technology rate heavily, so you might wonder why it is so technologically advanced a mere 200 years later. On the turn to the 22nd century, people began to colonize space and from then on the years were dubbed as S.E., or Space Era. In the mid 100s a third meteor struck Aidoneus Island, labelled Meteor 3. Meteor 3 itself had landed seemingly perfectly and retained a ridiculously large amount of its body-at the time it seemed impossible but when they began to look into it they forgot the meteor itself. Inside of Meteor 3 were technologies and materials that had never been discovered before. A council was made by the Earth Federal Government (EFG) for this technology, dubbed "Extra-over Technology" (EOT)and thus the Council was the Extra Over Technology Investigative Institute (EOTI, not a typo.) The head of the EOTI was Bian Zoldark, who foresaw an alien invasion and joined up with United (Space) Colony Corps Commander Maier Branstein (UCC, try saying the full version 5 times fast, with the commander part O.o) to form the Divine Crusaders (DC)-a broadcasted force to fight the Aliens and an enemy of the EFG/EFA. EFA Commander Laker send the SRX and ATX experimental teams in the Noah Class ships Hagane and Hiryu Kai, in a turn of events, to defeat the DC with a rag-tag group of Once-enemies, a group of teens, and a few professionals to take down the DC and calm the populous to show the EFA/EFG would be victorious. However, Bian and Maier had actually been making a secret plan to help train the Two ships, originally the entire EFA, and sacrificed many lives and worked with many truly wicked people-dying in the end of their efforts before they were able to see the fruits of their labor in Operation SRW (A mission to defeat the original Alien Threat). The alien threat were humans brainwashed and kidnapped by the alien race of Balmarians-this group was dubbed as the "Aerogators" by the EFG. Peace followed for six more monthes before the Hagane and Hiryu would begin to Unite again to fight off many other opponents. The initial was the Neo-Divine Crusaders (NDC) who only knew of Bian's public goals and lived off of them and not off of Bian's true goal. They were brought to power by the Shadow-Mirrors, people from another dimension who believed war was best to advance technology and to avoid corruption-but due to events happening faster in thier world without the power of Meteor 3 they needed to relocate dimensions. They eventually teamed up with Aliens (confusing huh?) called the Investigators. The Investigators weakened and maintained potentially hazardous planets from travelling into deep space and disturbing others. And of course they target Earth-the practical embodiment of civil war. Somehow or another they pull off another miracle as they finally bring peace to their planet once again and destroy the Dimensional Teleporter "The Door of Agueies" (SP, may be spelled oddly in my story cause it’s a hard word >.<) of the System XN. OR did they?

The year is 190 S.E. and 3 years have passed since the last war on and around the planet Earth. The EFG president Brian Midcrid has regained power after begin overthrown by Graien Grusman. Meanwhile in the colonies the new UCC leader is Elzam Branstein and he carefully acts as a leader figure for the colonies altogether-although each colony does have its own figurehead. The EFA has all but faded and thebrnt of their force is located on their 5 Noah Ark class Space/air/submarine Ships; The Drill ship Kurogane, the Tronium (Powerful EOT Metal/power Source) Ship Hagane, The Space Voyager Hiryu Kai, And the carrier ships Shirogane Ver. 2 and Ver. 3-the first lost a year ago in the war. The majority of the members of the Hagane and Hiryu currently pursue outer goals. To the knowledge of the UCC and EFG, no threats have been detected and the Hiryu takes common trips out from Saturn to Pluto to monitor unusual behavior.

However, hidden to the majority of the human race, Commander Laker and the rest of the Izu Base in Japan have kept the System XN and restored it with the help of now “Human” (Personality, decision making, etc) Bioroid Lamia Loveless ended up helping the restoration. Much to one Gilliam Yager’s chagrin they had and are attempting to keep it secret to him-the original user and creator of the device. For the past 3 years they have been monitoring another dimension directly with spies and cloaking to watch this other universe. Originally, they had watched them by sending small probes through to the dimension-it being among the closest to their own. But with the help of the System XN they have made frequent observing trips to discover this dimension also had an Earth that its residents often visited. They found out about the social classes, the small bits of magical kidou, the swordplay of killing hollows and the teleportation effect of Konso. The EFG made Izu their Supernatural government section in 188 S.E. after seeing the results of the System XN. The EFA were still wary of their own space and they began to closely observe the technology and firepower of this world..this world called Soul Society.

Due to the rules about powerful techniques in the Sereitei, and the main use of swordplay when fighting hollows-the EFA was led to believe they had discovered a weak planet with technology much weaker and less widely distributed then their own that was hogged by few-and had a weak government to boot. By the time it was spring Laker and Midcrid were already consulting and planning to colonize the world-aware of the risks but figuring it would be less risky then overpopulating the partially destroyed moon or going deeper into space. By May, the plan was finalized and a small army, including many Hiryu and Hagane members, were prepared for initial invasion. They figured the hundred mechas would be sufficient to completely control the Shinigami and preparations began.

At the same time in Sereitei, Meteors 1 and 2 crashed straight into the 12th division’s main lab-destroying many important technologies and incapacitating the 12th squad captain and a visiting Noble-the two most technologically advanced shinigami ever.

Now that's a lot......... And like MC/Dac/NL/you have more than 1 fiction... though they weren't continued...

Okay....

1. Too many acronyms >.<
2. You should try separating the first paragraph into smaller parts. It was too long @.@
3. Hmmm... How to put this... Can you like convert the way you convey all the facts? Straightaway facts are soooo boring which was why I effing hate History so you can like turn them into a dialogue between 2 people, flashback etc...

You know what.... We seem to use NL a lot in our first chapters. I did, and Dac did, and kusari too.... Why are you so famous NL? XD

I was surprised Zam did not comment on last week's episode... Unless I missed his post. He usually does.

I actually came online to post the next chapter to my story, but now I figure, I should probably wait until people have read and digested the new stories popping up =)

By far my favourite is NL's!!!! (we all saw that coming). But I like her writing style, and the fact that I am prominent within it. Also, what I especially like is that the dialogue seems real. Someone says something, the other person reacts. It does not feel scripted in the sense that you cannot predict what a character will say, unless you know the character.

Rotrum; your story has waaaay to many acronyms and is bordering on sci-fi. I guess its just not my flavour, but I am interested to see where it goees and how long you will keep to it

Kusari; I like your writing style, though I must say, you have a few typos. I like the plotline so far and I am looking forward to seeing it develop. The characters seem slightly 2D and the dialogue seemed too... i dunnno how to put it. Too scripted. I could predict what everyone would say before they said it because it seemed like each character had the same personality. But I like it and I cant wait to see what you do with it. I am sure it will develop as it progresses.

VizardBlue; interesting start. cant wait to see where it goes.

MC15; i like how you kept the names hidden so that we would have to guess who is who from the personalities you gave them or assume it was a previous squad. I like how the story line is going and how real things are seeming so far. I cant wait for the next chapter. a suspensful ending ~ classic

you die in the first chapter. lol

so mean!!! lol

... where to start, actually, because it would amuse you too much and i'm having a lazy day marking tests i won't bother even starting

Da.C: i get what you're saying about the scriptedness. before i write the next chapter i'm gonna have one of my freinds, who has always been a good writer and is currently working on his own book, take a look and give me notes. as for the typos i know. when i read back through it i was just to lazy to fix them. next time i'm gonna type it in word and run spell check over it. and when i wrote your place i had just woken up.

Arc: ah hah you caught the all importent part: i like my sleep. the "did it again" part was just for fun. and honestly that's what my uncle does when he gets drunk. i was drunk the night before the chap if you didn't infer that already. and as for the plot i'll call and raise you to twenty for being close with the vaizard thing. i can assure you i will not be interrogated. i have a feeling you'll get where i'm going with it after the next chapter. and if you noticed i already named my villain.

NL and Zam: if you read this i want your input considering you were in the chapter. and if there's anyway i could improve you in the story i'd like to know.

Also i'm looking for volunteers. i need four for what i'm planning and you won't know for what until i write it.

and on my last note i have character descriptions of some of you but not all. these are the ones i have NL, Arc, Zam, ILP, MC and Senny. please any others ASAP.

PRETEND THERE IS A SIGNATURE HERE FULL OF WITTY JOKES AND CLAIMS TO FAME AND UNDESERVED BRAVADO AND SELF PROMOTION

~Even though it is hated, despair manages to be one of the most memorable experiences in life.~

The day before the attack the Soul Society was bussiness as usual. The weather was clear and peaceful. The Squads were running smoothly and there haven't been any attacks or hollows for weeks.

"I"M BORED"! yelled the 7th Squad's Lieutenant. He was average hieght for his age and his blue hair contrasted aginst his pale. He was the newest lieutenant and the loudest.

"I"M TRYING TO SLEEP! GO PESTER YOUR OWN CAPTAIN!" the 13th Squad's Captain yelled out in irratation. Oddly, he was the newest Capatin and joinned around the same time as the 7th Lieutenant, he used a simple kido spell to blast the lieutenant away.

'WEE!" The Lietenant yelled as he soared across the Seireitei, landing in Squad 6's court yard. The court yard was void of any other Shinigami, other then the one that crashed in.

"I wonder where everyone is?" he asked himself.

"Their jobs, like you should be..." said the 6th Squad Captain. A few inches taller then the lieutenant, he stood their with an air of noblility.

"...but thats so boring...hey, I have an idea! LETS FIGHT!" Exclaimed the now hyperactive Lietenant, he placed his hand on his Zanpaktou...only to be pinned down and having three swords pointed toward his heck, neck and hand.

"What the...what the hell just happenned!?!" The Lieutenant demanded to know.

" My own personal guards...they tend to do that when you try to attack me. " The Squad 6 Captain said in an bored tone.

There were three of them, two males and one female, though it was nearly impossible to tell due to their unifoms covering their entire body, aside from the eyes. The blood red coloring of the uniform brought attention to their eyes, blue, green and brown.

"Shall I terminate him?" the blue eyed one asked in a serious tone.

"No, he is harmless, let him go." He said staring at the sky.

"HARMLESS!?!" The lieutenant shouted outraged and offended.

"You may want to leave, my lieutenant will be here an second now, you don't wnat a repeat of that incident now do you?"

"I'm still paying off the damages too, fine." The lieutenant left in flash, shunpoing back to his own division.
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Squad 12 was busy with experiments and anaylazing results from many projects, a normal day for them. Their Captain was littery plugged into his computer, cords were seen being on the back of his neck, his hands were basicly seen as blurrs as he typed on multiple keyboards for several computers, oddly he was soaking his feet as well.

"Well someone seems busy..." said the 9th Squad Captain. He was around the same size as the 12th Squad Captain, but wore a hat that made him seem taller.

"I'm bored, its been so freking quiet around here, I actually can hear myself think...thats never good." The 12th Captain said in a bored tone, not bothering to look at his fellow Captain.

"Well you go date someone , Ant." THe 9th Captain said in a mocking tone.

"That has as much of a chance as you not wearing that hat." Ant retorted.

"Aww, whats wrong, haven't become intrested in girls yet have we?" he said in a playful voice.

"One, just cause I don't chase anything in a skirt, doesn't mean I'm not intrested, not like thats any of your bussiness. Two, don't call me Ant, that nickname is insulting and three, instead of pestering why don't you go do smothing useful, unless you want me to turn you into a test subject!"

"Well, damn, I mean it like that..."

"I honestly don't care how you meant it, now unless you leave right now, I have a robot shove a prob right up your-"
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"Its almost time...Anon will rise again." A slender man said holding a staff.

An army of soldiers stood behind him, ready to battle.

-

Hellbutterfies flew over the Seireitei, eaching finding a Captain

"Heh, looks like we get to have a little fun." The 7th Squad Captain said, shunpoing to the 1st Division.

All of these fanfics... All the spelling mistakes... I was half willing to write a (non-bleach) fanfic, but now... No way.

Right, better start reviewing.

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

^that's because Division 12 IS the science and research division - it's expected that any abnormalities would originate from there.

Well, that's true. And I'm on good terms with.... Pretty much everyone in the club, it seems.

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

Spoiler:- Begining of the Inverted Souls Arc:

Seireitei was filled with the ever lasting buzzing and bustling of it’s busy inhabitants, never did a day go by when the place was ever truly silent; prospective shinigami students studied and practiced in the academy grounds, seated and unseated officers a like trained and refined techniques and attacks in their Division training grounds, and the captains, well the captains … if they were around that is … were bored stiff.

One Captain was busy observing soul society goings-on as she flash stepped her way over to 8th Division. She wasn’t in any particular rush; she just liked visiting, even if it had been empty for some time now, it’s Captain had taken a few select students and left for the edges of Rukongai several weeks ago. He still had not returned. She missed him.

She stopped at his office door, sliding opening the divider to see the usual homely clutter he loved to leave around; it was quite a comforting site, until she remembered that it’s usual occupier wasn’t around to share the odd in-joke or marvel at the increasing stupidity of some academy students, as they attempted, and failed, to perform techniques way beyond their academic level. She sighed. She had been doing that a lot lately.

One of her lupine blue ears twitched as she heard someone approaching, but she didn’t reach for her Zanpaktou, she knew who it was.

“Well, Hello there, Arceus,” she turned to see Arceus the Third leaning against the wooden railing lining the walkway next to Senbonzakura’s office, for he was the currently absent Captain of 8th Division.

“Nice to see you too, Kida, your reiatsu seemed slightly strained, you’re not becoming ill or anything are you?”, he inquired, that’s Arceus, as Captain of 4th it was his duty to make sure fellow Shinigami were a picture of health, however, this seemed to come naturally to him.

“Hmm? No, no not at all, but thanks for asking,” she fell silent again, and for the infinite time, she sighed.

Arceus looked knowingly at her, he may look young, but he was decidedly wise at times, but then again a complete fruit cake at others.

“He’ll come back you know”

Kida jumped, completely off in her own little world, returning to Soul Society with a grumble.

“How is it that every time I sigh, someone goes, ‘he’ll come back’?” Kida asked exasperated.

“You two just seemed like such good buddies, is all, it’s obvious you miss him, as normal people do when a friend goes away for such a long time, have faith in him, although…”

Arceus had that look in his eyes which Kida associated with an impending awkward conversation, for everyone involved.

“You two did seem rather close, very close actually…”

She held her breath and braced herself for the inevitable comment about to hurtle her way.

“Was there anything going on between you tw-“

“No.”

“I only meant that you seem far more depr-“

“NO!”

“Alright, alright, but if I didn’t ask, others would.”

Arceus became his serene and collected self once again, while Kida tried to erase that particular conversation out of her brain, as another in-joke between herself and Senny, her nickname for him, began replaying in her mind. Arceus then started grinning, alarm bells went off inside Kida’s head.

“Ok, so if not him, how about that Royal guy, Narcisse Dauc, you hang around him so much you practically live at his place.”

“I’m leaving now, Arceus,” Kida said smirking as she briskly started walking away.

“What? Not even going to deny it either?” he shouted after her, Kida responded by shoving her hands over her ears.

“Well, I’d go visit him if I were you, he seems bored.”

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Why? Why does everyone have to do that? Admittedly I am very close to both of them, but I am not THAT close. Or am I? Maybe I should back off a little.

It was at this point she found herself standing right outside Dauc’s door.

“Huh?” Kida looked around, she had seemingly walked subconsciously over to Dauc’s province automatically. She inwardly scowled, staring down at her feet, “traitors.”

“Ya’ know, talking to yourself isn’t a good sign,” said a voice above her.

She looked up into that arrogant face of Narcisse Dauc, current head of a very old noble family, situated to the East of Seireitei, and Ex-Captain of 12th Division.

“Really? The amount you do I’m surprised your mirror hasn’t died of boredom,” she retorted.

“Oooh, someone’s in a bad mood,” Dauc said holding his hands out in front of him as a sign of peace.

Kida sighed. Again.

“Sorry, I’ve not been feeling all that great today.”

“Really? Hadn’t noticed, I just thought you were always this cranky.”

She deadpanned his chest, it was at her eyelevel and therefore the easiest part of him to try and glare a hole through.

“Come on, Bluey, inside you can sit down and chat,” he tugged on one of her ears, a dangerous move for anyone who didn’t know her, but he always got away with it, “so, why the doom and gloom, oh don’t tell me, Cap’n Senny still isn’t back, right?”

Kida’s shoulders slumped dejectedly.

Point to me, Dauc thought, smiling, he made his way to his favourite chair, sinking back into it, “Come on Kida, you know him, he’ll come back, he’s a strong captain, what could possibly be so dangerous out there anyway,” he crossed his legs and made a vague hand gesture towards the window, which showed his private gardens and the scenery of Soul Society beyond.

“Famous last words, and I don’t know, It’s just … promise you won’t tell anyone?” she asked quietly, this was serious.

“I sincerely Promise,” holding three fingers up to oath, smile still plastered on his face

“I think he’s dead.”

Dauc’s smile remained for a few seconds while he registered this new information.

“WHA?!” his jaw nearly hit the floor as he gaped at her, “oi, that’s a serious thing to say.”

“I know, that’s why I wanted you to promise not to tell anyone. Every time I wake up I just get this cold dread, and when I sit down and attempt to locate him, try as I might I can’t find his reiatsu anywhere, he wouldn’t have ventured that far out for me not to sense him, would he?” she sounded genuinely worried, so Dauc took this seriously.

“Kida, he’s a captain, he can take care of himself, and I hate to sound like a git here, but if he has been killed, then whatever did it is probably our next biggest threat, we don’t have time to worry about a missing Captain.”

“So you admit that he’s now considered missing?” Kida pointed out.

He heaved a huge sigh, “Granted, he’s been away longer than the higher ups expected, even the Sotaicho is getting a bit antsy, but he’s just concerned when he’ll come back, he’s not worried for his safety at all, he can take care of himself,” he pronounced the last six words slowly.

“Thanks Dauc, guess I just needed to talk to someone, Arceus has a funny way of telling you things,” she grinned, then she pulled a face as if she just remembered something important, “hey, as we’re a Captain short, why don’t you re-join the 13 Division Guards, you’re Captain Level, we could do with some extra skill around.”

“There isn’t a Captain vacancy,” Dauc said, chin in palm, elbow resting on knee as he leaned forward in his chair.

“There’s a Lieutenant space in my Division,” she said quietly.

Dauc smirked, “surely not, was that an invitation?”

The smugness in his voice made Kida start as she realised what she had just said, “forget it,” she amended quickly, making her way over to the door, opening it to step outside and leave.

Dauc smug grin widened as he dashed over to the door and grabbed her arm, leaning over her shoulder.

“No, seriously, can you not survive without me that much?”

Dauc’s four letter expletive of pain could be heard on the other side of Seireitei as Kida’s fist made contact with his nose.

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Silently fuming on 10th Division barracks roof, Kida stared out over the terracotta rooftops wondering what it was like to be rain. She felt a sudden increase in reiatsu behind her and turned round.

Rotrum was standing there, looking bored, like every other Captain.

“I felt a rather oppressive reiatsu above my office and thought I should check it out, should of known it was the only currently present female Captain around, Nancy still driving you crazy?” he asked a picture of innocence, ‘Nancy’ being Kida’s nickname for Dauc when she was angry, “only I feel some of the more innocent Division member’s ears will be burning for some time.”

“I punched him in the face,” she replied simply.

Rotrum blinked, and then dropped to his hands and knees, banging his hand against the roof tiles howling with laughter. Kida raised an eyebrow, what was wrong with everyone today? Or maybe they were always like this and she was just different? Philosophy was never her forte.

“Oh dear, give him my deepest condolences next time you see him won’t you?” Rotrum said, straightening up again.

“Don’t hurt yourself, I know you hate him”

“Speaking of hate, or a lack of there of, in your case, 12th Division current Captain,” Kida snorted, “acquires your presence,” Rotrum made quotation marks with his hands.

“Really? Hmm, wonder what Captain Ilppy wants,” another affectionate nickname for another unfortunate Captain, her ears wiggled as she thought for a moment, “thanks for the notice Rotrum,” she stood up, dusted off her uniform and shook some loose strands of strawberry blonde hair out of her eyes.

“Just one thing before you go,” Rotrum said quickly, before she leapt off the roof.

“Hmm?”

“How come you never call me nicknames, you call the other Captains by their nicknames, why not me?”

Kida smiled.

“Because I’m not stupid enough to give you one, besides you’re young enough as it is, you don’t need one,” she winked and leapt off the roof onto the adjacent one, flash stepping towards Division 12.

The atmosphere around Division 10 got decidedly colder.

One thing to note is that I read this yesterday and I feel it'd be somewhat redundant to read it again just before reviewing (since I can remember most, which skim-reading will help with). But overall, I really like the dialouge and everyone's reactions. I don't really have much else to say, except that I'm wondering how Senny will be involved with the evil villain.

Blue, I've already gave a review for your chapter when I helped out with spelling and stuff.

Originally Posted by kusari

Spoiler:- Chapter One: Corruption pt.1:

Rukongai, 6pm, June 15

"Which one of us is waking him up?" Kida inquired. The Third Captain was looking down towards Yasushi Hayashi, Captain of the Thirteenth Squad. He was laying passed out in the dirt. His shaggy black hair was flecked with brown spots. The entirety of his body was under his white captain's haori.

Around him stood two other soul reapers. The afformentioned third captain and the ninth division captain, Zameric Hanako. Kida was the the stranger of the two. Well not too much stranger, she just had blue wolf ears protruding from her strawberry blonde hair.

"Rock, paper, scissors?" Zameric suggested, breaking into a wide grin. This was a regular thing. Kida always lost and always got chewed out for waking him up. Somewhere under his black hair Zam always knew it would be that way.

"Damn it. Not again." She yelled. "Here we go." She moved the haori using only her right thumb and index finger. She had no clue what would be under it. The crotch of his shihakusho was wet. "Crap! He ****** his pants again."

Zam threw his head back and started laughing uncontrollebly. Kida extended her canines and chomed on Zam's shoulder. He yelped in pain. The sudden loud sound caused Hayashi to awake and spring upward all in one motion.

"We're not in you're room. You're in the middle of the 55th district of the Rukongai." The third captain answered, releasing Zam's shoulder.

"Well, how'd i get here?"

The other captains began to tell him of the events of the night that had just passed. Though they had no idea what was happening not a mile away.

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Not far from the site where the three captains where having their incident an event was happening that would have a lasting impact on the Soul Society.

In a clearing in the forest. The spirit particles that made up the Soul Society began to part. A dark hole opened. Out of it stepped a young woman. Her wild hair was as white as the tube top and baggy pants she wore and her blue eyes seemed to blaze. There was a number 4 tattooed on her right bicep. And her most distinct features: a hole was in her stomach. It went all the way through to her back. And on her left hip was a thick plate which looked like bone.

She was followed by three men. The first wore no shirt and a shoulder length, short sleeve jacket with an open front. He donned pants identical to his female companion's. From his wrist to his elbow on his left arm was the same thick bone like material. His hole rested in his right hand.

The two that followed were identical in look. Standing hunched over their long black hair concieled the holes in thier shirtless chests. They wore the same pants as their allies.

"Heh heh heh. Boys this is gonna be fun." The female chuckled grinning.

"Whatever." The first man grumbled.

"Damn Leaf. You really are a constant down, aren't you?" She snapped.

"I guess by your standards I am, Raya." Leaf spoke dull and harsh.

"Gah hagh nah ga." One of the beasts gurgled.

"Look's like Claw is on my side." Leaf's voice seemed to show more emotion this time.

"Sah na gasg nee sag." The other beast grumbled.

"Well Fang's on my side." Raya responded. "Now shut up and let's get to work."

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All three captains immeadiatly went silent. Kida's ears began to twitch.

"You felt that too, right?" Kida asked the men in front of her. She was referring to the change in spiritual pressure of the area. The third and fifth captains dropped their haori on the ground. The three exchanged glaces and began flash stepping towards the disturbance.

They appeared in the clearing just in time to see the gate the four strangers had stepped out of close.

"Well what do we have here? A few no good arrancars." Zam said smiling.

"They're not just any arrancars, Zam." Hayashi said, seeming suddenly sobered up. "Look at the girl. The number on her arm. You know what that means."

"Espada." Kida replied in a whisper. "This won't be easy."

The captains drew their swords and took battle stances.

"Leaf, you take the one with the spiked hair. Claw, Fang you get the girl. I want the one with the shaggy hair." Raya commanded.

Just as she said Leaf dashed towards Zam, who dodged into the woods. Claw and Fang dove at Kida who raised her sword to block. Even with the block she was blow back to the woods, going the opposite way as Zameric. That left Raya facing Hayashi.

"My name is Yasushi Hayashi. I am captain of the thirteenth division of the Thirteen Court Guard Squads and I will kill you."

"My name is Raya Erasa. Espada number four of Hayate Zakei's arrancars and you have no chance of beating me." She drew her sword.

They launched at eachother; ready to slash. The sound of metal hitting metal rang as their sword's clashed. The warriors smirked.

"Ya know, now that I get a look at you up close you're actually kinda cute." Yasushi complimented.

"Gracias. But ya know flattery will get you nowhere." She retorted. Both stepped back to opposite sides of the clearing.

"Ignite, Nobaoto." His sword became encased in flame. When the fire disipated a pair of black trench knives were on Hayashi's hands. The top half of his black robes had also burned off.

"Kinda puny for a shikai, don'tcha think." Raya giggled.

"I guess to some but i think it gets the job done fine. Ignite, Hihashira!"

His knuckles erupted in flame and were quickly stabbed into the ground. As quickly as the flames came they disappeared.

Nothing happened for a moment. Then Raya broke the silence,"really that was your big move nothing hap..." Her sentence trailed off when five pillars of fire raised around her.

Hayashi stood up and prepared to walk away when Raya appeared in front of him standing on her hands. She drove her right ankle into the side of his head, and flipped back onto her feet.

The captain picked himself up from the ground only to fell himself wrapped in the embrace of the hollow known as Fang.

The squad four captain, Mizuhashi Akira, entered the room. "Um, guys someone's here to see you."

A man wearing a captain's haori entered the room.

"Golde." Zam and Kida muttered simultaniously. They both knew nothing good would come from this visit.

I quite liked that first chapter. It's interesting to see a new take on the Espadas/Arrancars (with the "hollow mask" being more of a piece of armour). Though I'd like to see how these Arrancar are made, and why Zam and NL knew about them.
I think that Yasushi Hayashi and Hayate Zakei are the same people 8O.

Originally Posted by rotrum

Spoiler:- The Super Robot War Prologue (Cliche title ftw!):

(I treat SS and Earth as two dimensions that are separated by a thin barrier which Shinigami can open a door into with ease)
(The first part is Intro to the series. Bleach itself doesn't come in until the middle)
(Sections of War. DC War, EFA vs EOTI/UCC. L5 Campaign, EFA vs Aerogators. NDC War, EFA vs NDC. SM/I War, EFA vs Shadow Mirrors/Investigators)
The Planet Earth in this universe is quite strange. A one-of-a-kind universe where few events are predictable by other dimensions, a parallel universe that branches quite differently from the rest. Twists of fate are common and are usually centric on the Three Noah Ark Class Battle Ships, Kurogane, Hagane, and the Hiryu Kai. The first notable occurences were two Meteors, labelled as one and two, landed on earth in the mid 2000s. The meteors slowed the technology rate heavily, so you might wonder why it is so technologically advanced a mere 200 years later. On the turn to the 22nd century, people began to colonize space and from then on the years were dubbed as S.E., or Space Era. In the mid 100s a third meteor struck Aidoneus Island, labelled Meteor 3. Meteor 3 itself had landed seemingly perfectly and retained a ridiculously large amount of its body-at the time it seemed impossible but when they began to look into it they forgot the meteor itself. Inside of Meteor 3 were technologies and materials that had never been discovered before. A council was made by the Earth Federal Government (EFG) for this technology, dubbed "Extra-over Technology" (EOT)and thus the Council was the Extra Over Technology Investigative Institute (EOTI, not a typo.) The head of the EOTI was Bian Zoldark, who foresaw an alien invasion and joined up with United (Space) Colony Corps Commander Maier Branstein (UCC, try saying the full version 5 times fast, with the commander part O.o) to form the Divine Crusaders (DC)-a broadcasted force to fight the Aliens and an enemy of the EFG/EFA. EFA Commander Laker send the SRX and ATX experimental teams in the Noah Class ships Hagane and Hiryu Kai, in a turn of events, to defeat the DC with a rag-tag group of Once-enemies, a group of teens, and a few professionals to take down the DC and calm the populous to show the EFA/EFG would be victorious. However, Bian and Maier had actually been making a secret plan to help train the Two ships, originally the entire EFA, and sacrificed many lives and worked with many truly wicked people-dying in the end of their efforts before they were able to see the fruits of their labor in Operation SRW (A mission to defeat the original Alien Threat). The alien threat were humans brainwashed and kidnapped by the alien race of Balmarians-this group was dubbed as the "Aerogators" by the EFG. Peace followed for six more monthes before the Hagane and Hiryu would begin to Unite again to fight off many other opponents. The initial was the Neo-Divine Crusaders (NDC) who only knew of Bian's public goals and lived off of them and not off of Bian's true goal. They were brought to power by the Shadow-Mirrors, people from another dimension who believed war was best to advance technology and to avoid corruption-but due to events happening faster in thier world without the power of Meteor 3 they needed to relocate dimensions. They eventually teamed up with Aliens (confusing huh?) called the Investigators. The Investigators weakened and maintained potentially hazardous planets from travelling into deep space and disturbing others. And of course they target Earth-the practical embodiment of civil war. Somehow or another they pull off another miracle as they finally bring peace to their planet once again and destroy the Dimensional Teleporter "The Door of Agueies" (SP, may be spelled oddly in my story cause it’s a hard word >.<) of the System XN. OR did they?

The year is 190 S.E. and 3 years have passed since the last war on and around the planet Earth. The EFG president Brian Midcrid has regained power after begin overthrown by Graien Grusman. Meanwhile in the colonies the new UCC leader is Elzam Branstein and he carefully acts as a leader figure for the colonies altogether-although each colony does have its own figurehead. The EFA has all but faded and thebrnt of their force is located on their 5 Noah Ark class Space/air/submarine Ships; The Drill ship Kurogane, the Tronium (Powerful EOT Metal/power Source) Ship Hagane, The Space Voyager Hiryu Kai, And the carrier ships Shirogane Ver. 2 and Ver. 3-the first lost a year ago in the war. The majority of the members of the Hagane and Hiryu currently pursue outer goals. To the knowledge of the UCC and EFG, no threats have been detected and the Hiryu takes common trips out from Saturn to Pluto to monitor unusual behavior.

However, hidden to the majority of the human race, Commander Laker and the rest of the Izu Base in Japan have kept the System XN and restored it with the help of now “Human” (Personality, decision making, etc) Bioroid Lamia Loveless ended up helping the restoration. Much to one Gilliam Yager’s chagrin they had and are attempting to keep it secret to him-the original user and creator of the device. For the past 3 years they have been monitoring another dimension directly with spies and cloaking to watch this other universe. Originally, they had watched them by sending small probes through to the dimension-it being among the closest to their own. But with the help of the System XN they have made frequent observing trips to discover this dimension also had an Earth that its residents often visited. They found out about the social classes, the small bits of magical kidou, the swordplay of killing hollows and the teleportation effect of Konso. The EFG made Izu their Supernatural government section in 188 S.E. after seeing the results of the System XN. The EFA were still wary of their own space and they began to closely observe the technology and firepower of this world..this world called Soul Society.

Due to the rules about powerful techniques in the Sereitei, and the main use of swordplay when fighting hollows-the EFA was led to believe they had discovered a weak planet with technology much weaker and less widely distributed then their own that was hogged by few-and had a weak government to boot. By the time it was spring Laker and Midcrid were already consulting and planning to colonize the world-aware of the risks but figuring it would be less risky then overpopulating the partially destroyed moon or going deeper into space. By May, the plan was finalized and a small army, including many Hiryu and Hagane members, were prepared for initial invasion. They figured the hundred mechas would be sufficient to completely control the Shinigami and preparations began.

At the same time in Sereitei, Meteors 1 and 2 crashed straight into the 12th division’s main lab-destroying many important technologies and incapacitating the 12th squad captain and a visiting Noble-the two most technologically advanced shinigami ever.

Okay, the first chapter was a HUGE giant wall of text. I barely got through half way before I got really tired. I think you really need to fix that up first. I think maybe after a bit, I'll read it again, and then give a proper review on the plot.

Originally Posted by arceus03

Why was there 2 p from Ilppy?

Oh yeah, I forgot to mention that. Why ARE there 2 Ps in Ilppy?

Originally Posted by arceus03

You know, the first thing that comes to mind with the name Cameron is... Camerupt.

3. Hmmm... How to put this... Can you like convert the way you convey all the facts? Straightaway facts are soooo boring which was why I effing hate History so you can like turn them into a dialogue between 2 people, flashback etc...

I like the idea of rewriting that first first into pieces of dialouge, or flashbacks. It definitely would make it more digestable.

Originally Posted by arceus03

You know what.... We seem to use NL a lot in our first chapters. I did, and Dac did, and kusari too.... Why are you so famous NL? XD

As well as me, quite a lot. Though I guess as the Token Girl (TM) and the Mad Scientist (TM) it's to be expected.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Spoiler:- Chapter 1: Revenge and Rebirth, part 2:

~Even though it is hated, despair manages to be one of the most memorable experiences in life.~

The day before the attack the Soul Society was bussiness as usual. The weather was clear and peaceful. The Squads were running smoothly and there haven't been any attacks or hollows for weeks.

"I"M BORED"! yelled the 7th Squad's Lieutenant. He was average hieght for his age and his blue hair contrasted aginst his pale. He was the newest lieutenant and the loudest.

"I"M TRYING TO SLEEP! GO PESTER YOUR OWN CAPTAIN!" the 13th Squad's Captain yelled out in irratation. Oddly, he was the newest Capatin and joinned around the same time as the 7th Lieutenant, he used a simple kido spell to blast the lieutenant away.

'WEE!" The Lietenant yelled as he soared across the Seireitei, landing in Squad 6's court yard. The court yard was void of any other Shinigami, other then the one that crashed in.

"I wonder where everyone is?" he asked himself.

"Their jobs, like you should be..." said the 6th Squad Captain. A few inches taller then the lieutenant, he stood their with an air of noblility.

"...but thats so boring...hey, I have an idea! LETS FIGHT!" Exclaimed the now hyperactive Lietenant, he placed his hand on his Zanpaktou...only to be pinned down and having three swords pointed toward his heck, neck and hand.

"What the...what the hell just happenned!?!" The Lieutenant demanded to know.

" My own personal guards...they tend to do that when you try to attack me. " The Squad 6 Captain said in an bored tone.

There were three of them, two males and one female, though it was nearly impossible to tell due to their unifoms covering their entire body, aside from the eyes. The blood red coloring of the uniform brought attention to their eyes, blue, green and brown.

"Shall I terminate him?" the blue eyed one asked in a serious tone.

"No, he is harmless, let him go." He said staring at the sky.

"HARMLESS!?!" The lieutenant shouted outraged and offended.

"You may want to leave, my lieutenant will be here an second now, you don't wnat a repeat of that incident now do you?"

"I'm still paying off the damages too, fine." The lieutenant left in flash, shunpoing back to his own division.
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Squad 12 was busy with experiments and anaylazing results from many projects, a normal day for them. Their Captain was littery plugged into his computer, cords were seen being on the back of his neck, his hands were basicly seen as blurrs as he typed on multiple keyboards for several computers, oddly he was soaking his feet as well.

"Well someone seems busy..." said the 9th Squad Captain. He was around the same size as the 12th Squad Captain, but wore a hat that made him seem taller.

"I'm bored, its been so freking quiet around here, I actually can hear myself think...thats never good." The 12th Captain said in a bored tone, not bothering to look at his fellow Captain.

"Well you go date someone , Ant." THe 9th Captain said in a mocking tone.

"That has as much of a chance as you not wearing that hat." Ant retorted.

"Aww, whats wrong, haven't become intrested in girls yet have we?" he said in a playful voice.

"One, just cause I don't chase anything in a skirt, doesn't mean I'm not intrested, not like thats any of your bussiness. Two, don't call me Ant, that nickname is insulting and three, instead of pestering why don't you go do smothing useful, unless you want me to turn you into a test subject!"

"Well, damn, I mean it like that..."

"I honestly don't care how you meant it, now unless you leave right now, I have a robot shove a prob right up your-"
-

"Its almost time...Anon will rise again." A slender man said holding a staff.

An army of soldiers stood behind him, ready to battle.

-

Hellbutterfies flew over the Seireitei, eaching finding a Captain

"Heh, looks like we get to have a little fun." The 7th Squad Captain said, shunpoing to the 1st Division.

I think you definitely portrayed Blue right, energetic, wanting to fight... Then again, we've been hanging out with him a lot recently XD.
As for you having those bodyguards... I'm assuming that they'll be important to the story? And have you posted their designs in the club? So that everyone knows what they look like...

"Oddly, he was soaking his feet as well," you really don't know how much I lol'd at that. Which reminds me, I probably should, too.

Hearing myself think is never a good thing... My thoughts aren't the most pleasant thing in the world.

"That has as much of a chance as you not wearing that hat."
Definitely the way I'd react to that. Yes, yes.

I don't actually mind being called Ant, since I guess I'm used to it And Ed officially gave me that.

I think the last 2 scenes seemed quite... Bare. They were only, what, 2 lines long? I think some description, especially with the second-last part, would be really good.

YOU JUST LOST THE GAME!
Click HERE to be rickrolled... c'mon, you know you want to. Spoiler:- I HAVE DEFIED ALL MATHS AND LOGIC!:

first off thank you to everyone who mentioned my tiredness and you can understand why by looking at the times of my last few posts. anyway time for the real reason i'm posting:

Ant: good inquiry about Hayashi and Zakei being the same person. there is just one fatal flaw Yasushi Hayashi is the name i use for myself in fanfics and i was kidnapped and force fed hollows by Zakei's underlings. and the whole mask armor thing is caused by the particular means of arrancar creation i chose. and trust me in the next chapter NL and Zam's knowledge of the arrancars and Espada is revealed. its a wierd thing you know and who explains all weird things? as for my volunteers i'd like you to be one of them.

MC: what was interesting about it?

Last edited by kusari; 23rd May 2010 at 11:42 AM.

PRETEND THERE IS A SIGNATURE HERE FULL OF WITTY JOKES AND CLAIMS TO FAME AND UNDESERVED BRAVADO AND SELF PROMOTION

Thanks for the comments guys, i've got the plot lined up already, so it's just whether my brain and the plot bunnies can kick my motivation into gear. Oh, just as an added thing, my Spell Checker is set to English [UK], so words may be spelt differently from American ones.

Originally Posted by Arceus

Why was there 2 p from Ilppy?

Because spelling the same sound it creates like 'Ilpy' doesn't look right, so it's 'Ilp' 'py'

Originally Posted by Arceus

You know what.... We seem to use NL a lot in our first chapters. I did, and Dac did, and kusari too.... Why are you so famous NL? XD

I noticed that too - i'm flattered =]

Originally Posted by Arceus

Sooo does this mean you're not continuing on your Kuchikukan fanfic? hmmm..

I forget which one that was, but i think this story is pretty much just a heavily edited version, with a few tweaks in the plot

EDIT; Ah, i remember now - yes, this is just a heavily edited re-write, the Kuchikukan would have had the same outcome as this story, it's just the means to which we arrive at that situation have changed

Kuchikukan, Destroyer = Sakasama Tamashii, Inverted Soul [逆さま神]

Originally Posted by ILP

except that I'm wondering how Senny will be involved with the evil villain.

You'll just have to see.

Vizard; your's was a bit hard to follow and grasp in the first instance, you should usually include and opening line, just to set the scene first, then get into the nitty gritty.

Kusari; XD you got me so well, i bite Zameric, actually i do that in real life, i bite people when they annoy me, then again so does my best mate soo.... rock, paper, scissors, i would totally do that, and lose.

Rotrum; same as what other have said, HUGE block of text, try breaking it up a little, it makes it easier on the eyes =]

~Even though it is hated, despair manages to be one of the most memorable experiences in life.~

The day before the attack the Soul Society was bussiness as usual. The weather was clear and peaceful. The Squads were running smoothly and there haven't been any attacks or hollows for weeks.

"I"M BORED"! yelled the 7th Squad's Lieutenant. He was average hieght for his age and his blue hair contrasted against his pale. He was the newest lieutenant and the loudest.

"I"M TRYING TO SLEEP! GO PESTER YOUR OWN CAPTAIN!" the 13th Squad's Captain yelled out in irritation. Oddly, he was the newest Captain and joined around the same time as the 7th Lieutenant, he used a simple kido spell to blast the lieutenant away.

'WEE!" The Lietenant yelled as he soared across the Seireitei, landing in Squad 6's court yard. The court yard was void of any other Shinigami, other then the one that crashed in.

"I wonder where everyone is?" he asked himself.

"Their jobs, like you should be..." said the 6th Squad Captain. A few inches taller then the lieutenant, he stood their with an air of noblility.

"...but thats so boring...hey, I have an idea! LETS FIGHT!" Exclaimed the now hyperactive Lietenant, he placed his hand on his Zanpaktou...only to be pinned down and having three swords pointed toward his heck, neck and hand.

"What the...what the hell just happenned!?!" The Lieutenant demanded to know.

" My own personal guards...they tend to do that when you try to attack me. " The Squad 6 Captain said in an bored tone.

There were three of them, two males and one female, though it was nearly impossible to tell due to their unifoms covering their entire body, aside from the eyes. The blood red coloring of the uniform brought attention to their eyes, blue, green and brown.

"Shall I terminate him?" the blue eyed one asked in a serious tone.

"No, he is harmless, let him go." He said staring at the sky.
"HARMLESS!?!" The lieutenant shouted outraged and offended.

"You may want to leave, my lieutenant will be here an second now, you don't wnat a repeat of that incident now do you?"

"I'm still paying off the damages too, fine." The lieutenant left in flash, shunpoing back to his own division.
-

[/SPOILER]

First of all, in the bold quotes, that is TOTTALY, how i would react. you know me well, MC. Infact, other then the fact i would say Woohoo instead of wee, those would be my EXACT reactions to those different things! woo! And Ant hearing himself think? Dear god man, are you trying to send us into pandemonium?! And Nyah! you PROMISED you wouldn't use the body guards on me! T_T

Ant: good inquiry about Hayashi and Zakei being the same person. there is just one fatal flaw Yasushi Hayashi is the name i use for myself in fanfics and i was kidnapped and force fed hollows by Zakei's underlings.

We know that these Arrancars are different to the Bleach Arrancars (due to your ones having their "masks" as armour) which means that they would have had to have become an Arrancar in a different way to Bleach's way (so not using the Hougyoku, or having their masks broken off traditionally, as we know that it would produce a similar result, we know this from Grand Fisher). This new Arrancarisation could be from a "Hougyoku 2" which Captain Hayashi, who you can make to be as sneaky or villainous as possible, could have used (who knows, we could be partners in crime).

If Captain Hayashi DID have a "Hougyoku 2" then it's possible that he could've used it on himself. This would mean that the force-feeding Hollows could be the equivalent of stuffing a banana in your mouth: it won't do you any harm, and you'd rather stay away from it altogether/eat it normally.

And anyway, if I were a secret mastermind, what better person to have "taken hostage" than myself? As Aizen probably knew, it would almost entirely take him out of the equation of being the bad guy. It would be the perfect way to make Soul Society weaker and more vulnerable for attacking.

Originally Posted by Kusari

and the whole mask armor thing is caused by the particular means of arrancar creation i chose. and trust me in the next chapter NL and Zam's knowledge of the arrancars and Espada is revealed. its a wierd thing you know and who explains all weird things?

8D screentime woo

Originally Posted by Kusari

as for my volunteers i'd like you to be one of them.

volunteers for what? *Feels like I should already know this*

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

Thanks for the comments guys, i've got the plot lined up already, so it's just whether my brain and the plot bunnies can kick my motivation into gear. Oh, just as an added thing, my Spell Checker is set to English [UK], so words may be spelt differently from American ones.

UK spelling > US Spelling *Hides from Zam*

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

Because spelling the same sound it creates like 'Ilpy' doesn't look right, so it's 'Ilp' 'py'.

Eh, fair enough.

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

You'll just have to see.

It feels like everyone thinks I'm trying to find out what happens in all of these stories before it does... I'm just making predictions, that's all...

Originally Posted by VizardBlue

And Ant hearing himself think? Dear god man, are you trying to send us into pandemonium?!

Yes, it seems like it. I must never be allowed to hear myself think, or worse, tell my thoughts to someone 8O It'd make their heads explode!
Wait... That can be my new attack! HeadSPLOSION *boom*

YOU JUST LOST THE GAME!
Click HERE to be rickrolled... c'mon, you know you want to. Spoiler:- I HAVE DEFIED ALL MATHS AND LOGIC!:

Apparently I went from not worth commenting to overcomplication, is that a good or bad thing?

Love how the former R&D leader is not a fan of Sci-fi. Totally makes sense

Although usually explaining a series is gonna be long anyways -_-

Idea 2.

Gonna be boring, but if the idea is more appealing then the first to you all, then it’ll get more exciting next.

And no, I don't like having actual Story in my prologues

Spoiler:- KHR-Bleach:

(The beginning, other than the first paragraph is introduction to terms and stuff. Fewer terms than SRW but more than just acronyms.

The planet Earth can often be quite surprising if you take a trip past the dimensions. A lot of them might tell you the Big Bang, or the like, created the universe, or perhaps gods. Often times they are correct about what they say if their universe at the very least. There is one Dimension that is solely alone-with not a single other Earth like it. Originally, it had hundreds of these worlds at the least. But by the year 2020 A.D. all of them were destroyed because of that creating factor that set them apart. This world was created by a powerful force known as Trinisette.

Trinisette had more power than needed to destroy or rule the world. The force was so powerful that it was sealed into the 7^3 policy. The 7^3 policy represented the balance of the 7 elements, which in this world also happened to be different than traditional elements. The elements are Sky (Orange), Sun (Yellow), Rain (Blue), Storm (Red), Cloud (Violet), Mist (Indigo), and Thunder (Green); each one has their own powers and abilities. The 7^3 policy is 7x3 in number, rather than 7 cubed oddly enough. The 7^3 policy is three groups of seven elemental and 7^3 guardians. The first group is called the Arcobaleno (Ital. Rainbow) who are people shrunken down to the body of a baby; yet are at the same time known as the “Strongest Seven.” These infants each carry a powerful pacifier in the color of their element. The Sky Arcobaleno is the Boss of the Arcobaleno and the only one who is not immortal. Oddly enough, the other two groups of the Trinisette are held in 14 elemental rings, divided into two families of the Italian Mafia. The bosses of the two Famiglia, the Vongola and Giglio Nero, hold the sky rings while their closest 6 are their guardians and hold the other rings.

The rings themselves are a large deal due to the power of Dying Will Flames. Dying Will Flames are a visible form of resolve that takes on a color and an element, different for every person. The flames, so called for the way most of them move, can boost the physical traits of a person when used correctly with enough resolve-shown by the size of the flame. Other Rings, and also weapons to channel dying will have been created of course, and are an important part of the Mafia’s fighting. A ring does not fit to a person-a person fits to a ring due to everyone being born with a different flame.

Dying Will Flames are quite powerful; but each of the elements is very different. The Storm flame represents Disintegration and Fire as well. Storm is the offensive flame that never ceases to strike; Concentrated Storm flames disintegrate whatever they can touch but the level of concentration can barely be humanly reached. Rain represents Tranquility and Water as well. Rain is the Requiem that washes all. Concentrated rain flames can paralyze or slow down whatever they come into contact with, slowing down is barely humanly possible. Cloud represents propagation (Size increase/Multiply). Oddly enough, Cloud represents the lone drifting cloud-impossible to capture even as it uses propagation. Concentrated cloud flames can multiply/grow non-animals. Sun represents growth (Healing/speed). Sun is the fighter who guards the family with their own body. Concentrated Sun flames can heal injuries. Mist is Construction (creation) and Illusion. Mist is the one that works in the shadows to hide the true motives of the Family (Few can actually create). Mist Flames create illusions. Thunder represents Solidity, due to its flame being the closest to its actual element, and lightning. Thunder represents the lightning Rod that directs everything to itself. Concentrated Thunder flames act like real electricity. Thunder Flames are the only non-flame shaped Flames (Ironic, no?) The main way that most people gain the power to use these abilities are called Boxes. Boxes are small boxes that are used for storage, combat, or transportation. Most of the combat ones take the form of animals, as well as the transportation ones. Only specific flames can open boxes and the boxes use the flames to create and power the animal. Sky can open all boxes but they cannot use the box’s full potential unless it is a sky box. Boxes are opened with rings and the power of the box depends on the rank of the ring (F-S)

As you can see, the power of the Trinisette and the forces it inspired were truly a force to be reckoned with. At this time, Year 2010, the tenth heir to the Vongola Ring Set had recently been found in an unlikely place. This place being Japan in a middle-schooler. Due to the unwanted efforts of the Sun Arcobaleno, Reborn, he assembled a family and fought, trained, and went through a general series of challenges. One of which he had gone into the future for. In this future they would have all been killed if not for two mechanics that had helped them-betraying their own side in preparation to defeat the boss of the Millefiore family. One of these turned out to be the one who pulled them into the future in the first place. But when he supposedly wants them and some of their future friends to train in the past; where they would have more time. Due to the uncertainty of the situation and the upcoming battles-mixed with their past losses-they accepted. At the last moment they sent them to another dimension in which they would supposedly be surely killed. They observed other worlds to use as jails before and this one definitely seemed to be strong enough to eliminate the Vongola. If they didn’t, they’d make way for their own invasion, a Win-Win. He send them directly in the sewers of Sereitei-where a small base made up the one-way link between the worlds. A note was written to convince them that the inhabitants of this world were also the allies of the Millefiore and would eliminate them when the message would get through.

Meanwhile, some ways off and above, the 12th division got a strange reading from their computers as it became widely apparent that sabotage was involved. In just the next couple hours, enough stuff was wrecked that the Captain Commander set up a restoration committee to keep track of it all. Meanwhile, a certain Bioroid tried to recover the last signal the computers had left off…

Originally Posted by Northern Lights

I have that effect on most men for some reason. no wonder i've been feeling lesbian lately >.>

We know that these Arrancars are different to the Bleach Arrancars (due to your ones having their "masks" as armour) which means that they would have had to have become an Arrancar in a different way to Bleach's way (so not using the Hougyoku, or having their masks broken off traditionally, as we know that it would produce a similar result, we know this from Grand Fisher). This new Arrancarisation could be from a "Hougyoku 2" which Captain Hayashi, who you can make to be as sneaky or villainous as possible, could have used (who knows, we could be partners in crime).

If Captain Hayashi DID have a "Hougyoku 2" then it's possible that he could've used it on himself. This would mean that the force-feeding Hollows could be the equivalent of stuffing a banana in your mouth: it won't do you any harm, and you'd rather stay away from it altogether/eat it normally.

i guess you could call it a hogyouku of sorts except it's not really a sphere. we couldn't be partners unless you knew about the kidnapping beforehand which you didn't. i've never stuffed a banana in my mouth. i have never been exposed to the "hogyoku" before the fight. trust swallowing 527 hollows does hurt.

I And anyway, if I were a secret mastermind, what better person to have "taken hostage" than myself? As Aizen probably knew, it would almost entirely take him out of the equation of being the bad guy. It would be the perfect way to make Soul Society weaker and more vulnerable for attacking.

i am making this clear for the final time Hayashi and Zakei are two completly different people.

8D [s]screentime woo

volunteers for what? *Feels like I should already know this*

in my last post i asked for volunteers but not even they would know what's going to happen.

Yes, it seems like it. I must never be allowed to hear myself think, or worse, tell my thoughts to someone 8O It'd make their heads explode!
Wait... That can be my new attack! HeadSPLOSION *boom*

i can work that in if you want

my quote button didn't work the first three times i tried so i bolded ILP's original words

Last edited by kusari; 23rd May 2010 at 3:20 PM.

PRETEND THERE IS A SIGNATURE HERE FULL OF WITTY JOKES AND CLAIMS TO FAME AND UNDESERVED BRAVADO AND SELF PROMOTION

~Even though it is hated, despair manages to be one of the most memorable experiences in life.~

The day before the attack the Soul Society was bussiness as usual. The weather was clear and peaceful. The Squads were running smoothly and there haven't been any attacks or hollows for weeks.

"I"M BORED"! yelled the 7th Squad's Lieutenant. He was average hieght for his age and his blue hair contrasted aginst his pale. He was the newest lieutenant and the loudest.

"I"M TRYING TO SLEEP! GO PESTER YOUR OWN CAPTAIN!" the 13th Squad's Captain yelled out in irratation. Oddly, he was the newest Capatin and joinned around the same time as the 7th Lieutenant, he used a simple kido spell to blast the lieutenant away.

'WEE!" The Lietenant yelled as he soared across the Seireitei, landing in Squad 6's court yard. The court yard was void of any other Shinigami, other then the one that crashed in.

"I wonder where everyone is?" he asked himself.

"Their jobs, like you should be..." said the 6th Squad Captain. A few inches taller then the lieutenant, he stood their with an air of noblility.

"...but thats so boring...hey, I have an idea! LETS FIGHT!" Exclaimed the now hyperactive Lietenant, he placed his hand on his Zanpaktou...only to be pinned down and having three swords pointed toward his heck, neck and hand.

"What the...what the hell just happenned!?!" The Lieutenant demanded to know.

" My own personal guards...they tend to do that when you try to attack me. " The Squad 6 Captain said in an bored tone.

There were three of them, two males and one female, though it was nearly impossible to tell due to their unifoms covering their entire body, aside from the eyes. The blood red coloring of the uniform brought attention to their eyes, blue, green and brown.

"Shall I terminate him?" the blue eyed one asked in a serious tone.

"No, he is harmless, let him go." He said staring at the sky.

"HARMLESS!?!" The lieutenant shouted outraged and offended.

"You may want to leave, my lieutenant will be here an second now, you don't wnat a repeat of that incident now do you?"

"I'm still paying off the damages too, fine." The lieutenant left in flash, shunpoing back to his own division.
-
Squad 12 was busy with experiments and anaylazing results from many projects, a normal day for them. Their Captain was littery plugged into his computer, cords were seen being on the back of his neck, his hands were basicly seen as blurrs as he typed on multiple keyboards for several computers, oddly he was soaking his feet as well.

"Well someone seems busy..." said the 9th Squad Captain. He was around the same size as the 12th Squad Captain, but wore a hat that made him seem taller.

"I'm bored, its been so freking quiet around here, I actually can hear myself think...thats never good." The 12th Captain said in a bored tone, not bothering to look at his fellow Captain.

"Well you go date someone , Ant." THe 9th Captain said in a mocking tone.

"That has as much of a chance as you not wearing that hat." Ant retorted.

"Aww, whats wrong, haven't become intrested in girls yet have we?" he said in a playful voice.

"One, just cause I don't chase anything in a skirt, doesn't mean I'm not intrested, not like thats any of your bussiness. Two, don't call me Ant, that nickname is insulting and three, instead of pestering why don't you go do smothing useful, unless you want me to turn you into a test subject!"

"Well, damn, I mean it like that..."

"I honestly don't care how you meant it, now unless you leave right now, I have a robot shove a prob right up your-"
-

"Its almost time...Anon will rise again." A slender man said holding a staff.

An army of soldiers stood behind him, ready to battle.

-

Hellbutterfies flew over the Seireitei, eaching finding a Captain

"Heh, looks like we get to have a little fun." The 7th Squad Captain said, shunpoing to the 1st Division.

where is my thank-you -_-

Apparently I went from not worth commenting to overcomplication, is that a good or bad thing?

Love how the former R&D leader is not a fan of Sci-fi. Totally makes sense

Its a bad thing :P

and you should see peoples faces when I tell them I can't stand star wars and they are like "But you are a science major!" and so I reply by asking if they like star wars.
If they say yes, i am like "yeah, you look ugly enough to like it,"
If they say no, I am like "Really? But you are ugly enough to be a star wars fan,"

To everyone who likes star wars in this club; I mean no insult =) I just have a sharp tongue when someone makes a dumb assumption.

Kida decided to take the long route to 12th Division, still wondering what ILP had in store for her, after all, the day was turning out to be promising in the weather department.

At this point it is necessary to give some background information, or lack of, on the current 12th Captain. Narcisse Dauc, being the previous Captain found that, as the Head of his household, he had too many responsibilities to the provinces he governed to be both Captain and Nobleman, even if he missed his captaincy; the only reason Arceus the Third got away with it was because a), his father’s brother recently adopted a son who had no chance of ever being part of the 13 Division Guard, so he was ideal to take over instead, and b), Arceus hated politics and the double standards it produced, much to his father’s disappointment, one must add. So, there was a vacancy in Division 12, and by a strange coincidence a Division 2 member, only known by the code name ILP, had achieved bankai and had previously shown a lot of interest into the research division. After sailing through the aptitude test, he was initiated as one of the 13 Division Guard Captains.

The speculations as to what the Code might stand for, or even what is real name was, had gone on for years, many placing bets on how it took for ILP to crack under the constant interrogations this lead to.

Kida scoffed, if there was one person who was least likely to crack under mental strain, it was Ilppy.

She laughed as she remembered her first encounter with him; doubtless he had read her profile, including her history with Division 12, and he had been trying to avoid her if at all possible, that is until she had cornered him after a Captains meeting and assured him she wasn’t going to be after his blood. In fact, she was now pretty much their guinea pig test subject for any new advancement they made in the area of reiatsu, for hers was extremely versatile.

“Captain Ookami!”

Kida skidded to a halt, stopping at the edge of 13th Division’s roof. She looked around her, then looked down and over the ledge. Captain Kusari was sitting outside his office with a cup of tea in one hand and an ink brush in the other, said ink brush was hovering over some paperwork which obviously needed handed in. She decided not to mention it was a bit late to be doing paper work, instead giving him a salute.

“How’s things? Captaincy working well for you?” she asked, jumping down onto the railing directly below her.

Kusari had been her Third Seat, but it had been obvious he had far surpassed his position and that of a lieutenant. Sure enough, he requested a transfer, she approved it, and next thing you know, he’s residing in Division 13 wearing a Captains haori.

“Being a captain sure beats living as a third seat, I don’t feel like I have to hide my strength anymore I can be open and honest about it,” he spread open his arms, as if to emphasise the point.

“Oh good, I knew you’d do fine, now if you don’t mind I have to be off to Division 12,” Kida said, showing her canines as she grinned.

“That’s a pity I was hoping we could both do our paperwork together, it a nice day out, old times much?” Kusari said, waving his ink brush around, miraculously not getting any splodges over his finished pile of work.

Kida’s grin disappeared as she sweat-dropped, “eh, umm, you do know that the paperwork is in for the end of today right?”

Kusari’s hand froze over the next piece of paper in the ‘to do’ pile.

She didn’t wait for his reaction.

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Arriving at 12th Division a little later that she expected, that’s detouring for you, she avoided the health hazard zone of their grounds, which had seemingly been attacked by a giant rogue mole. She entered the main Research lab, crossing the large room filled with chemical bearing shelves and gods-only-knows-what containing file cabinets. On one side of the room was a huge water tank, filled with nothing it seemed, Invisible Fish, and behind that, further into the room was a wall, well actually it was a screen, but it may as well have been a wall for its sheer size.

“Ah, here she is, glad you got the message, it was lucky I ran into him actually, or rather people ran into me,” a cough sounded from a far corner of the room, between the tank and the screen, “I see you’re reiatsu is rather turbulent.”

Kida narrowed her eyes as she inclined her head to the voice, leaning around the ‘Invisible Fish’ tank, to see who was speaking.

His sentence trailed off into oblivion, like with most of his sentences, they turned into an internal conversation for several seconds, only to come back to the present situation as if no time had elapsed. Someone had yet to tell him that he couldn’t stop time.

“I’ll have to thank Rotrum for delivering the message,” he said, nodding his head, as he came back to reality.

“That reminds me, what was he doing here anyway, and why the sudden desire to turn your grounds into an obstacle course of doom?” Kida asked, jerking her thumb over her shoulder at the lab door.

ILP scowled, crossing the room to stand next to her and the tank.

“Vizard and Emcee, they couldn’t contain their fight in their own ground, apparently getting ‘Carried Away’, as they crashed into mine. Poor Eon, I don’t think he was quite expecting such an exuberant Lieutenant as Vizard. Well, Rotrum came over to enjoy the show, until Vizard started trying to pick a fight with him; I don’t think Vizard will look at an ice cream the same way again,” ILP chuckled, “Eon took him to 4th Division, by force I should add, saying that if he was lucky he could get some sleeping pills, I can only guess which one of the two they were for.”

“Ok, so what needs doing?” Kida asked, looking back into the water tank, referring to the reason her presence had been requested.

“Actually, I need you to get in the tank.”

Kida’s head swivelled back to face him, she blinked.

“There’s something I need to check and your reiatsu is the best chance of giving any significant results. I can only do this however with you in a deep state of sleep, that tank is full of a reiatsu absorbing liquid with a sleeping draft in it for good measure, oh don’t worry,” he said quickly at Kida’s absolutely horrified expression, “it’s not permanent and the liquid acts as a sort of safe keeping, if you will, for your reiatsu, as soon as the sleeper wears off and you regain consciousness, your reiatsu will flow back to you.”

He smiled as if this was a completely normal thing to ask a fellow captain to do.

“Fine, but what about these,” she pulled at the edges of her Shinigami clothes, “won’t they get wet.

“Well, you could always take them off if you wanted.”

Kida gave him a withering expression. Either he was a really good actor, or he was just socially awkward, then again, Division 12, it was probably the latter.

“What?”

“Never mind, I’ll keep them on, I can dry them later.”

“There we go,” he said, turning away, humming to himself and making a bee line for his computer.

She jumped up to the tank edge, and then slowly lowered herself. It was like submerging yourself in runny jelly, not as viscous as water, but she could defiantly feel herself being supported by it. She sank to the bottom of the tank, coming to rest on her back, completely unconscious.

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Kida opened her eyes to a bright blue cloudless sky.

“Ah, her not-quite-so-whole one awakes.”

She knew that voice, above her she saw a grin of sharp white teeth materialise in front of her, hovering in mid air.

“Enough of the Cheshire cat impression, Ryookami,” she smirked, poking a spot just above the grin that she knew to be her Zanpaktou’s nose.

The rest of the Wolf Dragon hybrid fizzled into existence, yellow eyes crossed, looking at the finger still connected to her small black nose.

Kida looked around at her inner world fondly. Large expanse of lime green grassy field, clear blue skies, lit by the light of day from the sun, its rays falling onto a tall cherry blossom tree, situated in the middle of a still water lake. She stood up and walked over to the lake, the wind rustled the leaves and flowers of the tree, some falling into the lake causing ripples to mar its surface. A surface which reflected the scene above it, only it was in the light of a full moon with a starry sky.

“This place never ceases to calm me,” Kida said, extending a hand absentmindedly to scratch one of Ryookami’s ears as she floated along side her.

“Hmm, but you really shouldn’t be calm at a time like this,” she said, not sounding to concerned but still with that tantalising air that she knew more than she was letting on.

“What do you mean by that, Ryookami?” removing her hand and letting it fall to her side.

“I mean you still haven’t noticed.”

“Noticed what?” This place always made her feel so sleepy, the wind whistling past her ears and the grass shifted in waves of green shades.

“The tree’s reflection is dead.”

The calm illusion of her inner world shattered. Eyes flying wide open, she dropped to her hands and knees, staring into the lake. The reflection of the cherry blossom, which should have been beautiful and in full bloom, was charred black and wilting.

“This place, I don’t why, but its being split apart, and according to the other Zanpaktou I have come into proximity with today, they’ve noticed the same thing, and their respectful masters aren’t any the wiser.”

Kida stared up at Ryookami, silently asking her to continue.

“Haven’t you noticed how people have been acting slightly more exaggerated lately, or perhaps shown certain sides of their personality which we never see? Not to mention your own reiatsu, which, to put it into simple terms, is unravelling.”

Kida stared back into the water, not quite sure what to make of this, Unravelling reiatsu?

“Hmmm, indeed, I am probably better suited to that, but listen, I wouldn’t stare too closely into that lake if I were you, soon we’ll all be mad here.”

Kida eyed the flat surface of the lake, watching her reflection suddenly materialise onto the surface of the water, it looked like her. Then the reflections eyes turned black and her face broke out into a murderous grin as a hand shot out around Kida’s throat, pulling her down into the now turbulent waters.

Dun dun da. We all accumilate in the next chapter and Zameric becomes a hero, well sort of.

We know that these Arrancars are different to the Bleach Arrancars (due to your ones having their "masks" as armour) which means that they would have had to have become an Arrancar in a different way to Bleach's way (so not using the Hougyoku, or having their masks broken off traditionally, as we know that it would produce a similar result, we know this from Grand Fisher). This new Arrancarisation could be from a "Hougyoku 2" which Captain Hayashi, who you can make to be as sneaky or villainous as possible, could have used (who knows, we could be partners in crime).

If Captain Hayashi DID have a "Hougyoku 2" then it's possible that he could've used it on himself. This would mean that the force-feeding Hollows could be the equivalent of stuffing a banana in your mouth: it won't do you any harm, and you'd rather stay away from it altogether/eat it normally.

i guess you could call it a hogyouku of sorts except it's not really a sphere. we couldn't be partners unless you knew about the kidnapping beforehand which you didn't. i've never stuffed a banana in my mouth. i have never been exposed to the "hogyoku" before the fight. trust swallowing 527 hollows does hurt.

Ah, but your character and mine good be really good actors

Originally Posted by kusari

I And anyway, if I were a secret mastermind, what better person to have "taken hostage" than myself? As Aizen probably knew, it would almost entirely take him out of the equation of being the bad guy. It would be the perfect way to make Soul Society weaker and more vulnerable for attacking.

i am making this clear for the final time Hayashi and Zakei are two completly different people.

Okay, okay, I'm just saying, it could've been possible...

Originally Posted by kusari

8D [s]screentime woo

volunteers for what? *Feels like I should already know this*

in my last post i asked for volunteers but not even they would know what's going to happen.

I suppose I'll volunteer, then.

Originally Posted by kusari

Yes, it seems like it. I must never be allowed to hear myself think, or worse, tell my thoughts to someone 8O It'd make their heads explode!
Wait... That can be my new attack! HeadSPLOSION *boom*

i can work that in if you want

8D Spoiler:- Chapter 2:

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

Kida decided to take the long route to 12th Division, still wondering what ILP had in store for her, after all, the day was turning out to be promising in the weather department.

Well, today has been quite good...

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

So, there was a vacancy in Division 12, and by a strange coincidence a Division 2 member, only known by the code name ILP, had achieved bankai and had previously shown a lot of interest into the research division. After sailing through the aptitude test, he was initiated as one of the 13 Division Guard Captains.

Huh, interesting to know that in your fic, I was part of the 2nd Squad. i wonder if that might have to do with something later in the plot...

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

The speculations as to what the Code might stand for, or even what is real name was, had gone on for years, many placing bets on how it took for ILP to crack under the constant interrogations this lead to.

Kida scoffed, if there was one person who was least likely to crack under mental strain, it was Ilppy.

8D

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

Kida’s grin disappeared as she sweat-dropped, “eh, umm, you do know that the paperwork is in for the end of today right?”

Kusari’s hand froze over the next piece of paper in the ‘to do’ pile.

She didn’t wait for his reaction.

Ah, poor Kusari. Yeah, I think even homework isn't as bad as paperwork.

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

She entered the main Research lab, crossing the large room filled with chemical bearing shelves and gods-only-knows-what containing file cabinets. On one side of the room was a huge water tank, filled with nothing it seemed, Invisible Fish, and behind that, further into the room was a wall, well actually it was a screen, but it may as well have been a wall for its sheer size.

Invisible fish would be awesome.

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

His sentence trailed off into oblivion, like with most of his sentences, they turned into an internal conversation for several seconds, only to come back to the present situation as if no time had elapsed. Someone had yet to tell him that he couldn’t stop time.

I actually tend to do that quite a lot, in "online talk" and in real life talk. And what do you mean I can't stop time?!

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

"Vizard and Emcee, they couldn’t contain their fight in their own ground, apparently getting ‘Carried Away’, as they crashed into mine. Poor Eon, I don’t think he was quite expecting such an exuberant Lieutenant as Vizard. Well, Rotrum came over to enjoy the show, until Vizard started trying to pick a fight with him; I don’t think Vizard will look at an ice cream the same way again,” ILP chuckled, “Eon took him to 4th Division, by force I should add, saying that if he was lucky he could get some sleeping pills, I can only guess which one of the two they were for.”

Ah, yes, I can totally imagine them (okay, well, Blue) destroying my lab in a fight. And then Rotrum joining in.

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

“Well, you could always take them off if you wanted.”

Kida gave him a withering expression. Either he was a really good actor, or he was just socially awkward, then again, Division 12, it was probably the latter.

Ah, yes, you definitely have that one right.

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

“The tree’s reflection is dead.”

The calm illusion of her inner world shattered. Eyes flying wide open, she dropped to her hands and knees, staring into the lake. The reflection of the cherry blossom, which should have been beautiful and in full bloom, was charred black and wilting.

“Haven’t you noticed how people have been acting slightly more exaggerated lately, or perhaps shown certain sides of their personality which we never see? Not to mention your own reiatsu, which, to put it into simple terms, is unravelling.”

That's interesting to notice. Perhaps also the reason why I called you.

Chapter 4 =)I promise everyone is going to have a fight scene, I just find it easier to do chapters on people that have really obvious personalities

He and Seijuro took in the whole lair. Kida was scanning different methods of exits. They were in a large underground tavern. They saw different pathways surrounding them, it was as if they were in a giant block of Swiss cheese with holes everywhere. Their captors looked pretty proud of themselves as one of them went to what Seijuro assumed was the front of the tavern and made a very strange sound; it sounded like a mix between a choke and a singing cat.

“What-” a booming voice echoed throughout the tavern. Seijuro scanned around the room looking for the source. He simply stared straight forward looking deep in thought. Kida started playing with the ropes that bound her.

“is-” Each word seemed to come haltingly, echoing around. Their captors started shifting uncomfortably. Seijuro could feel a foreign spiritual energy, it did not belong to any soul reaper. It felt different, like the difference between coke and pepsi. It was subtle yet there. He remained impassive. Kida decided to try a spell to burn the rope.

“it?” The final word echoed. The spiritual energy increased as whatever the creature was got closer. A giant pair of golden eyes peeped though one of the holes form above. Seijuro looked up, trying to asses what type of creature it was. Kida had finally gotten through the ropes, though she held her hands together to keep up appearances. He did not move.

A glint of teeth was seen.

“I see, three captain-level soul reapers. Well done. You will be rewarded in due time,” the creature echoed. Its sentences seem to have become more coherent. There was less of a pause between words. Seijuro could sense his spiritual energy lessening slowly and then it clicked. Unfortunately the men had taken away his and Kida's zanpaktous. Seijuro was unsure was to whether He even had a zanpaktou.

Great, so I am officially useless? she thought to herself. Her zanpaktou was a kido-type. Her strength lay in kido. She looked towards Him. She knew His policy on releasing his zanpaktou. The last time it was ever seen released was over a hundred years ago, and even then, everyone who witnessed it died. Kida was the only person in Serebii who knew what His released form was capable of. It was Seijuro was constantly trying to find out about His release, whether by digging into archives or asking around, yet He had covered his tracks well. However this situation was not an easy one to get out of.

Kida did not know what Seijuro's release looked like, or if he had even achieved shikai. He rose to captain-ship the same way He did it, by killing the previous captain, that way he did not have to show his released form to all the other captains as was standard procedure.

Seijuro cursed. His zanpaktou was a kido-type. He had no idea what to do.

He sighed and looked at Seijuro. He refused to be the one to release his zanpaktou, but it seemed like everything depended on that.

He sliced himself out of his ropes, as they had tied his long sleeves without knowledge that he held a zanpaktou in there. He then flash stepped next to Seijuro and cut the ropes that bound him. He knew Kida had burned through hers. The men who captured them seemed relaxed however. This worried Him because it indicated that the creature, whatever it was, was going to attack head on.

It roared, and the roar echoed throughout the cavern, but the roar did not fool the captains. It was tinged with magic, a sort of confusing spell.

“Bakudō number seventy three!” Kida yelled. In seconds, she surrounded all three of them with a blue triangle that protected them from the confusing magic.

“We only have a few minutes before it absorbs the energy I used to make this thing. You have got to release your zanpaktou!” Kida insisted.

“No,” He replied.

“But Kida and I don't even have our zanpaktou on us,” Seijuro commented

“Oh well,” He replied.

“YOU ARE SO STUBBORN!” Kida yelled.

“I know,” He replied, “but watch. Three,” He started a count down. When he said “Three” nothing seemed to happen.

“Two” The two captains looked around frantically, trying to see what would happen.

“One” he ended.

“Silence the eternal pain Mugen Utsuro,” It was barely audible, yet the effects of those words were clearly visible. The cavern seemed to blur, like a bad television signal. He knew how ILP's release worked. The zanpaktou that he hung around his neck elongated and curved, effectively forming a miniature scythe shape. He pulled it off with both hands and the scythe seemed to blur, and when you were able to focus on it once more, he was actually holding two miniature scythes of different colours. One being ebony and the other being ivory.

“How did he-?” Seijuro started but decided he would ask later. It was time to win a battle.

As Kida's spell faded, ILP threw what looked like a sugar cube at her, Him and Seijuro.

“It rebukes his spiritual pressure absorbing ability?” He looked at His son. ILP nodded in response. The captains (and Him) sprung into action. Kida was behind the man holding her zanpaktou and whispered in his ear “Hadō number four,”. A purple light shot out from her palms, incinerating the man. She grabbed her zanpaktou before it hit the ground and unsheathed it.

Seijuro did not move. Instead he looked at the man holding his zanpaktou and held out his hand. The zanpaktou started to vibrate. The guy holding it panicked and dropped it. In seconds Seijuro grabbed it before it hit the floor and stabbed the guy. It was now two down, three more to go, and a creature no one could understand.

ILP and Him decided to go for the creature.

“Hadō number ninety,” He called out. He held out His hand and watched as a black box formed around the creature, forcing it out of the whole. Just before the box closed, it looked like a black dragon. The black shadow spears hit the box and a roar echoed throughout the cavern, shaking walls and causing an army of men to come out from different passages.

“This is huge...” ILP observed. Kida smiled. She was going to go all out.

“Hunt Ryookami,” she commanded. Her zanpaktou started to transform. As the transformation was occurring, a wolf howl could be heard in the background and Kida's spiritual energy took the form of a wolf-dragon. As soon as the transformation was finished, she formed a series of swirls that took the overall shape of a flame and her hair suddenly turned a deep shade of red.

“Burn you pieces of ****,” she snarled. Fire erupted all around the cavern, burning the weaker soul reapers. Seijuro took her queue and released his zanpaktou.

“Ravage Garou,” He mouthed the words, not wanting his command to be heard by others. His zanpaktou shorted and got heavier. A hungry growl could be heard in the background and claw marks appeared on the wall opposite. He absorbed some of the fire released by Kida.

“Hekihoukou,” he uttered. A powerful widespread blast of spiritual energy short around the cavern.

As soon as the giant black box disappeared, ILP jumped to attack, thrusting this ebony dagger into the dragon, and the creature shrunk to the size of a chihuahua.

“Trap it son,” He commanded. He then turned to view the scene of carnage. Rotting bodies, fires everywhere, burning corpses, spiritual balls of energy floating around, killing all it came in contact into. He sighed heavily, this was getting to messy.

“FINISH IT UP YOU TWO!” He yelled above the screams of death echoing around the room.

Kida increased the intensity of the flames. Smoke started to fill the cavern, choking those who were not burning. The fire seemed to form wolf shapes as they burned and bit people, and as the last person died, a howl echoed.

She sheathed her zanpaktou, Seijuro followed suit.

“We have a lot to explain to Golde,”

Back in the tenth squad barracks, Rotrum sat down cursing. He killed potential informants, he had a lot of paper work to do....

The next chapter, I need zanpaktou personality info from NL, Kusari and anyone else who has a fire based zanpaktou or one that has fire abilities.

I guarentee chapter 1 will be up by tommorow. hopefully[/s]im lieing[/s][/s]noseriously[/s][/s]probablyonfriday[/s]. yeeep. Tommorow.

If you could have a pokemon as a zanpaktou spirit, which one would you choose?
Absol. Nuff said. I would quote all your stuff.. but im too lazy, don't wana figure out how, and if i do i'll wake kusari from his sleep. keh keh.

i volunteered for kusari. what happens now? *gets thrown into a pit and expiremented on. .

Spoiler:- Chapter 2 NL:

Lol NL, I love that paragraph about how i was fighting MC and rotrum and..wait..*looks back* wait wait a MINUTE. how the crap did i lose to ROTRUM AND MC?! I should of won that battle! and sleeping pills?! pfft, like something so menial could knock out me. *licks icecream* i demand a fight with rotrum now! *takes out zanpaktou and starts killing everyboyd in sight out of bordom* *slices rotrum's daggers and starts walking torwards him* Bulldozer my ***. Im the deathstar without that really bad flaw. And it's interesting how your talking about a physcological difference in everyone, and how their inner worlds are dissipating. I can't wait to read more. more screentime for me! please.did i mention im part TRAIN on my mother's side, she comes from a long line of kaboose..kabooses..kaboobi....PLURAL FORM OF KABOOSE. if anyone gets where that joke is from, they get a cookie. xD

So, there was a vacancy in Division 12, and by a strange coincidence a Division 2 member, only known by the code name ILP, had achieved bankai and had previously shown a lot of interest into the research division. After sailing through the aptitude test, he was initiated as one of the 13 Division Guard Captains.

A very well veiled comparison to Kisuke Urahara. Nicely done.

Kida scoffed, if there was one person who was least likely to crack under mental strain, it was Ilppy.

Because he's a living computer :P

Kida’s grin disappeared as she sweat-dropped, “eh, umm, you do know that the paperwork is in for the end of today right?”

Kusari’s hand froze over the next piece of paper in the ‘to do’ pile.

She didn’t wait for his reaction.

I'm betting that the next person who woke him up ended up as an entree at the next Seireitei Barbeque XD

Arriving at 12th Division a little later that she expected, that’s detouring for you, she avoided the health hazard zone of their grounds, which had seemingly been attacked by a giant rogue mole.

Ahh, the wacky atmosphere of 12th Division. Never ceases to be hilarious.

On one side of the room was a huge water tank, filled with nothing it seemed, Invisible Fish, and behind that, further into the room was a wall, well actually it was a screen, but it may as well have been a wall for its sheer size.

[/overstated]
Really, too many people have said it to be any degree of effective. Also, you're should be your. [/grammar nazi]

Someone had yet to tell him that he couldn’t stop time.

Hah, irony. Useful little writing tool, isn't it?

“That reminds me, what was he doing here anyway, and why the sudden desire to turn your grounds into an obstacle course of doom?” Kida asked, jerking her thumb over her shoulder at the lab door.

Loved this quote, I have no idea why. Probably because it reminds me of my friend Miranda, she has almost the same personality as you, only not quite as sarcastic.

“Vizard and Emcee, they couldn’t contain their fight in their own ground, apparently getting ‘Carried Away’, as they crashed into mine.

*sigh* And to think, I used to do that all the time. That pretty much ended when I became a Captain, thank god.

"Poor Eon, I don’t think he was quite expecting such an exuberant Lieutenant as Vizard."

*hands ILP a trophy engraved with the words 'Understatement of the Year Award'* No freaking kidding.

"I don’t think Vizard will look at an ice cream the same way again,”

Don't scare him any more, he's already afraid of bunny rabbits from when I set a sugar-crazed Rukia on him XD

“Eon took him to 4th Division, by force I should add, saying that if he was lucky he could get some sleeping pills, I can only guess which one of the two they were for.”

They were for Blue, seeing as I'm an insomniac and sleeping pills do absolute sh*t for me.

“Well, you could always take them off if you wanted.”

Kida gave him a withering expression. Either he was a really good actor, or he was just socially awkward, then again, Division 12, it was probably the latter.

XDD
I could see it being either seeing as Ant is a perv in MC's fic.

The calm illusion of her inner world shattered. Eyes flying wide open, she dropped to her hands and knees, staring into the lake. The reflection of the cherry blossom, which should have been beautiful and in full bloom, was charred black and wilting.

That is NOT a good sign. Epic foreshadowing, yes. That's not going to be easy for you to overcome personally in this fic, hopefully nothing permanent has happened to Senny as a result. Our collective sake buddy needs to live!

Haven’t you noticed how people have been acting slightly more exaggerated lately, or perhaps shown certain sides of their personality which we never see?

Wondering how that affects me. I'd probably become really hateful and cold, seeing as that's how I get when I'm depressed or extremely worried.

Kida eyed the flat surface of the lake, watching her reflection suddenly materialise onto the surface of the water, it looked like her. Then the reflections eyes turned black and her face broke out into a murderous grin as a hand shot out around Kida’s throat, pulling her down into the now turbulent waters.

0_o Eep. I'm guessing that's your more "feral" side, seeing as the wolf attributes probably created some sort of alternate personality.
Zam, time for you to play lifeguard...

Overall I quite enjoyed this chapter, and I like the direction this fic is taking. Definitely a more emotionally oriented piece than mine or Golde's, which center more around our growth as Shinigami. Congrats for having my favorite club fanfic thus far.

@Dau.C: I'll get to yours tomorrow, I swear. Just sometime when I'm not making typos with every fourth keystroke. I can't type today at all, it's taking me twice as long...

My fic will hopefully have its first chapter up by tomorrow, I was stuck with figuring out how to defeat my opponent in a reasonable manner, but I've managed it. Cheers all.

-Eon Out

"I'm fighting because there's a battle to be fought, Archer. I'm fighting to win. That's all."

"Hm. Alright, Rin. You are indeed my ideal Master. There is no one else I could hope to serve."

"I"M BORED"! yelled the 7th Squad's Lieutenant. He was average hieght for his age and his blue hair contrasted aginst his pale. He was the newest lieutenant and the loudest.

XD

...only to be pinned down and having three swords pointed toward his heck, neck and hand.

Towards his... heck?

" My own personal guards...they tend to do that when you try to attack me. " The Squad 6 Captain said in an bored tone.

An bored. 8D

"That has as much of a chance as you not wearing that hat." Ant retorted.

That last one made me lol.

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

EDIT; Ah, i remember now - yes, this is just a heavily edited re-write, the Kuchikukan would have had the same outcome as this story, it's just the means to which we arrive at that situation have changed

Kuchikukan, Destroyer = Sakasama Tamashii, Inverted Soul [逆さま神]

Ooooh. Yay =D
I loved that one, even if it's only just 2 chapters~

Originally Posted by rotrum

Idea 2.

Gonna be boring, but if the idea is more appealing then the first to you all, then it’ll get more exciting next.

And no, I don't like having actual Story in my prologues

Hmmmm.... So you're not continuing that last one?

That's too bad. As I said, I effing hate dislike outright facts... Might try to digest this new one later.

Originally Posted by ~.:Northern Lights:.~

Spoiler:- Chapter 2:

b), Arceus hated politics and the double standards it produced,

How amazingly accurate 8D
Ethics never agree with me anyway.

“Captain Ookami!”

I lol'd. It's like calling Komamura "Captain Inu!" XD Except that Ookami is part of your name.

(Yeah, I know Komamura is not really a dog. But Yachiru/Inoue called him so. XD)

“Well, you could always take them off if you wanted.”

Woah, ILPy. :P

Uhh, again, bold in comments.

Originally Posted by Da14u.C

Chapter 4 =)

“Ravage Garou,” He mouthed the words, not wanting his command to be heard by others. His zanpaktou shorted and got heavier. A hungry growl could be heard in the background and claw marks appeared on the wall opposite. He absorbed some of the fire released by Kida.

The next chapter, I need zanpaktou personality info from NL, Kusari and anyone else who has a fire based zanpaktou or one that has fire abilities.

Oh. So Seijuro was Eon. I originally thought it was kusari.

Emcee has a fire based zanpakto. So does Flash Step, but I haven't seen him for quite some pages now.

I just noticed. You still refer to Golde as a woman. Why is that, I wonder? (From Chapter 3)

And woo, I have a long title :P

Originally Posted by VizardBlue

I guarentee chapter 1 will be up by tommorow. hopefully[/s]im lieing[/s][/s]noseriously[/s][/s]probablyonfriday[/s]. yeeep. Tommorow.

Tagfail

Spoiler:- Chapter 2 NL:

Lol NL, I love that paragraph about how i was fighting MC and rotrum and..wait..*looks back* wait wait a MINUTE. how the crap did i lose to ROTRUM AND MC?!

Because you're fighting over 2 CAPTAINS.

I trust I don't need to bold, italicize and underline the word Captain?

If you could have a pokemon as a zanpaktou spirit, which one would you choose?Mantine, cos it resembles Minazuki Hmmm... Something watery huh. I'd say Manaphy/Tentacruel. Gee. idk.

Hurm.... I read like 3 chapters today. ^~^
I feel like posting a one-shot.... Maybe soon.

I think someone needs to inform Golde that he had kusari both on Squad 3 and 13.... on the front page. Hmmmm..

If you could have a pokemon as a zanpaktou spirit, which one would you choose?

Absol or Ninetales - come on, both are based off ambiguous canine creatures of the spirit world, Absol = Barghest and Ninetales = Kitsune

OH, guys, if it isn't too much trouble i need you guys to give me a description of what your inner worlds look like. I'll pick a few to use in coming up chapters, but i can't progress far until i have them =]

*.*

If you could have a pokemon as a zanpaktou spirit, which one would you choose?

Charizard.

Firey Dragon...win.

If not my favorite than, Salamence...

Spoiler:- Chapter 1: Revenge and Rebirth: Part 3:

~Darkness consumes the soul, leaving nothing but a numb and bitter shell in the end.~

Hate

It was midnight, it was a full moon and wind blew with a chilling gentle softness. A man covered by a robe, holding a long staff with spikes, wiated near the eastern gate to the Seiretei. He tapped his left foot in impatientence, kicking up dirt on ground he looked around, becoming irrated and grinding his teeth at every minute that passed.

"Lord Sora..." said a soft voice.

"Its about time you got here you slacker"!

A girl, looking to be around 16, appeared next to Sora, her long golden hair flowing in the wind.

"I had to hide from Shinigami, some who thought they were Ninja. NINJA LORD SORA"! she said upset and struggling to catch her breathe.

"SILENCE! I don't care about your pathetic excuses! Did you find the four keys"? Sora asked angerily, shaking his Staff at the girl.

"I spent the last three days running, hiding and raiding the Seiretei and only found blackmail material"! she shouted out in outrage.

"Hikari, Gendo and Anon blessed you with the power to make you dream come true, yet you seem to be ungreatful, is your incompentence spit in their faces"? Sora asked Hikari with a hateful glare.

"No..." Hikari manged to say in a weak voice.

The midnight wind blew almost quietly aginst the pitchblack robes Hikari and Sora were wearing, the two glanced at the gate once more before spliting up into different directions, Hikari moving north while Sora moved west.
-

Thirteen powerful figures stood by each other in a meeting room. The air was full of tension, each person stare could burn a hole in steel. Each of their Captain's Haoris were covered in blood. The Captain Commander sat between the the two rows of Capatins, the 2nd, 4th, 6th, 8th , 10th and 12th Captains standing to his right, the 3rd, 5th, 7th, 9th, 11th and 13th Captains to his left.

"It seems that our battle on Sokyoku Hill went on noticed." The Captain Commander said with a sadistic look of enjoyment.

"Well we did use teamwork and all..." The Squad Eight Captain said in a bored tone.

"We hit them with all our Bankai's combined! They couldn't have possibly surived that onslaught. Even if by some miracle they did, they can't possible come back here." The Squad Three Captain said excitedly.

"Well you seem hyper active." said the Squad Five Captain, amused.

"Its a full moon tonight, I expected as much..." The Squad Twelve Captain, in a passive tone.

"Soon Anon will attack, you all know what to do, correct"? The Captain Commander asked.

" Yes." All the Captains replied in unision.
-

Four bodies were bleeding to death on top of Sokyoku Hill, most of their bodies were covered by a Captain's Haori.

"OH NO! Someone get Squad Four here A soon as possible"! yelled an unfamilar voice.

The bodies tried moving, but only managed to get cold and rocky dirt in their wounds, they each passed out with the last thing they saw, dirt.
-

Five bodies were bleeding in a park, they layed there, unable to even speak. With their vison slowly fading away into the darkness, they only saw person, after person after person walk past them, as if they couldn't even see them.
As the last of them blacked out, they saw the oddest thing, orange spikes, but before they could even process what it was, they saw nothing but black.

-

Five bodies bleed to near death in a dessert at night. The sand made their wounds burn ans sting while the coldness made their bodys that were in shock, be even more numb than they were before. They saw nothing but sand, darkness and a castle like buliding in the distance...