My face throughout the whole story: O.O then O/O then o.O. I liked it a lot! It screamed psychological horror(?) Your grammar could be a tad better, maybe you could use spell check or have a beta read over it.

Well, it's not that I don't like this story because I do. I enjoy your smut. I actually loved your pyramid head story a lot. It was very good, however with your HP stories I feel like their sloppily done. I feel like you had typed it up without regards to basic grammar. The name for example, you really capitalize Harry's name and other peoples' names The first letter in every sentence, that to should be capitalize. Also, you forget the apostrophe in some words too. There are other things too, I would suggest to just go back and fix the basic things or get a beta.