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Alright, so I was showing my poetry to Jasper and I realized how much I loved this poem. XD Some people that are in the F3 alliance I'm planning wanted to see it, so I figured I show everyone it. Anyways. This is a poem I made for an English Project.. I got a perfect score on it.. which was kinda funny because I never edited it and hated it until I read it to Jasper. XD

Without further ado my poem: True Meaning of Pain

I drifted away unaware of where I was going Vibrant reds, purples, and blues danced around me Everything seemed to lose shape as far as I could see Feeling a sensation in the fiber of my being For I was about to learn the true meaning of pain The true meaning of pain

As the world around me began spinning I felt myself losing shape as well My body began to moan and swell A torrent of rage and anger began swirling For once, the world seemed to go away The world went away

Screaming, I heard screaming The shrill screams crescendo-ed madly I held my head, throbbing sadly The voice grew louder, beaming Was I in Hell? I was sure I was in Hell

I felt a warm liquid run down my skinMy nails had dug through the scalp of my head I wept as I bled Maybe this torture was just about to begin I wept more as my body stung My body stung

Sounds plunged into nothingnessI felt myself cry in pain but could not hearWas I deaf in my ear?I screamed as loud as I could but it was uselessThe pain made me want to give up I want to give up

My body was engulfed in the torrent of rageI felt my body feel as though it was set aflameWill I ever be the same?It cried in its young ageWhy had I not died yet?Did I die yet?

Why was I alive? Was I alive? I opened my eyes A wave of blue fell over me How could this be? My pleasure came in soft sighs

The pain once in my body receded It all receded My mangled body once burned was healing slowlyThe broken bones softly mended I cried for the soothing it lended My tears came down, not of fear, but of glee

Sounds came back to me I smiled as the sounds came back to me Sounds of rippling waves caressed my senses The wave of blue felt tranquil and serene I felt I entered a new world, aquamarine My body cooed lightly as it lay down its defenses

Was I in heaven? I was sure I was in heaven I laughed and giggled in disbelief Pristine light shone over my head My giggling continued, not much to be said Finally I had found some relief

The world slowly took shape in front of me A world was coming to me My body began to take its shape as well All that had happened seemed a far distant memory It had ended almost too abruptly I felt myself in a free fall, starting to accel

I fell to the ground of the new world Vibrant reds, purples, and blues danced in my mind I tried to open my eyes again, but I was blindMy mind tried to focus but was in a whirl For I had learned the true meaning of pain The true meaning of pain

I am open to critiques and comments. . If you feel I need to improve on something from this poem, please let me know. Anyways. I hope you enjoyed.

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