you know what? reading the ending without knowing it was very refreshing, and i really did enjoy this. (and the punctuation was divine - just like i knew you could D)

i liked the little twist at the ending with sirius, that small touch of humour was perfect, and it offset the romance of emma and lupin, which was gorgeous. actually, and i am being truly honest, in terms of plot developments especially, this chapter is one of my favourites: the characters are beginning to blossom and its lovely since i've watched them grow!

minor beta criticism: while 'common' might be the phonetic sound, 'come on' is correct english and preferential over regional colloquialisms. minor detail!

anyway, i eagerly await your next chapter in the mail, and just so you know, my "school" is 3 days a week (although i do have one b*h of an essay due tomorrow) so not so pressing as it seems!

well i've read this like 15 times now... lol. o well. i figure reviews are awesome, and besides, i never give you my opinion of the plot, i just fiddle with the writing, SO, here it is - a review:

i like your character development very much. the fact that james doesn't want lily to be forced to date him is clear evidence that he has grown up, because really, the old james would probably have taken advantage of the situation! so thats great, a subtle little reference to his growing maturity, even while Remus is telling him he *hasn't* matured lol.

Danielle and Kyle is a cute little subplot, and i cant wait to see how you keep it going! i really liked that Kyle knew Aurora, it was a very nice idea of yours that provided them with some common ground!

as for sirius and lily - their dynamic makes me laugh. i enjoy sirius' character deeply, because he's honest, and absolutely what-you-see-is-what-you-get. he isnt ashamed of admiring lily's beauty, even though he knows james might mind: essentially, he's just really very supportive of his friend, right? lol. and Lily's interesting in that she is very open with Sirius but not with James even though they are rather similar: it just illustrates further the issues that James' inability to relax with her cause!

Well, first of all, I'd like to congratulate you, you are writtng a very well developed story, though overrated, and over exploded at the moment, but still, that's what keeps this thing going.

I've been a fervient reader since the first chapter, and even of your previous work, you have improve, and mature, your characters show the extention of it, although I love your storie, I'm a great classics lover, I like to read stories from the original authors, or people who emulate them, although some will critize this, by adding that, that's a lack of creativity, but if you're using the creation of somebody else and adding your creation to something in existence, that also show a lack of creativity, well, the last part had nothing to do with the review.

I like your storie, but the times are still confusing, and the characters similarities to the originals seems to fade a little, which I see as an improvement of your writting as you are developing your own personalities