Author Comments

A little while ago my girlfriend and I had a fight, and I was able to appease her through a cute and unique way. A little bit after resolving things with her, I got this idea for an animation and recently I have made it for an introductory flash course.

Thanks and please enjoy!

Reviews

Rated 2 / 5 stars2008-12-04 16:24:30

Suggestions

The Good:
Graphics were decent and looked realistic. Transitions were clean. Animation was decent and convincing, but as the author stated it was for a class learning flash. (Hope you got a good grade)

The Bad:
The art style on the bus seemed rather realistic, but this clashed with the concentric circles emanating from the wireless doohickey. It was difficult to see what he was doing or tell what it was in his hands, which may have been the point of the circles, but a close up of his hands texting the message would do better as it can be clearly seen what he's doing, and reinforce that the two are communicating but not face-to-face.

At the end when she jumps on him the animation seemed cheesy, not that I could do better, but if your looking for somewhere to improve, that's one of them.

The vote:
2 - Nothing I'd suggest to my friends, but worth keeping on newgrounds for the random reviewer, and possibly to host it for you to use in a portfolio.

I see what you mean, the reason the bus was different is becuase I drew the bus from a picture a while ago and was short on time to make a new one. I will certainly like to improve upon this project with that point.

Rated 4 / 5 stars2008-12-04 15:29:21

Haha!

Cute story. :3 I liked the detailed artwork in the beginning, and I thought you'd gotten lazy once the artwork switched to Ascii but I realize it was him sending her text messages to cheer her up. :) Decent animation and sound.