Thursday, November 24, 2016

Noirvember - Paint the Town - Page 4

1 - The serious looking gentleman stands over the body of the now dead man, blocking most of him from the reader's view (although not all). A tire rolls into frame from the bottom of the panel. One of the figures on the periphery points towards the door. The serious looking gentleman turns (as do others) to look in the same direction.

FIGURE: What was that?

2 - On the entrance / corner where Alyssa had been spying on them. She's gone, leaving a knocked over pile of tires as evidence of her presence.

FIGURE (off-panel): Someone's here!

3 - On Alyssa, running in the alley between buildings towards the back of the lot. Maybe frame from above, with the buildings as part of the gutter (or an addition to).

NO COPY

4 - Alyssa is up and climbing over a chain-link fence.

NO COPY

5 - Close on a hand grabbing Alyssa's ankle. Maybe don't have any background to emphasize this moment.

NO COPY

6 - Alyssa kicks the person grabbing her ankle in the face, causing them to let go.

NO COPY

7 - Alyssa runs off. Frame so the fence is between the reader and her, leaving the chain-link pattern covering the whole panel.