2nd strophe leads us innocently into the details
of domesticity, we are happy up to now.

And then the heart of the poem shows, I think two brilliant lines

Grief is a monotone song
consuming my patience.

Prefer you blend the two lines after this
as they go together in my op.

I liked the next quote, but agree it doesn't fit the poem
not in a meaningful way, but brilliant lines.

Grease is a film
on the kitchen wall clock.
Time is uncertain.

And time used with clock leads us to think
it is running out for us all.

The next quote speaks about dishes
and then refers to memorial stones
which I think is very clever.
Maybe change to:
Dishes stacked in the sink,
memorial stones (of a meal enjoyed)
soak in a flood of warm suds.

Dishes are stacked in the sink,
a memorial of stones
in a flood of warm suds.

I did battle with the word death, opting at first to go against my gut and for the sake of the reader include it, but after Michaels push deciding to cut it.

The goose down coat for me is a symbol of time passed. In the 1980’s I owned such a coat, so having still hanging around seemed important to the story, it hides the scarf a symbol for death.

You may be correct about the. Clock, I’ll consider bringing it. Back.

The dishes as a memorial of stones for me refers to when the Israelites crossed the Jordan river and Joshua then built an alter of stones. Of course crossing the Jordan often used as a description of passage.