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Hi everyone. Like i said earlier about making my own manga and mystery story. I guess here is a little start. Remember, this is only one chapter, so it's short.Please give any suggestions or something that needs to be fixed. I don't really know much about all the investigation, police stuff.

Police and ambulances gather around a house,which was exploded few minutes ago. All witnesses say the same that they weresimply minding their own business until they heard loud ticking and thensuddenly this explosion occurred. During the explosion, only teenager Minori Tsuji was at home. There isstill not decided, either it is an accident from gas leak or old wires or is ita murder.

Policemen start walking around the explodedhome, searching for anything that might give them a clue about what havehappened. But all clues had faded along with explosion.

One of the detectives Nazumi Kinkou startsquestioning Minori’s family and friends. He tried to find out, if the house hadany problems with old wires or anything that might have caused the explosion. ThenNazumi tried asking if Minori had any enemies before or was acting strangebefore. Everyone said that they didn’t notice such thing.

DAY 2

LOCATION 1: VILLAGE

Same event occurred the next day in samevillage. This time the victim was Orito Asari. It was bit less believable, that today’s and yesterday’sevents were just accidents.

Nazumi again questioned people that know the victim.The bigger surprise was when he saw that this victim has same friends that lastone had. And so did Orito with Minori were friends.

LOCATION 2: POLICEOFFICE

Nazumi told everything he knows about the twovictims to other detectives and policemen. Suddenly one of policemen RyouHatamatsa stand up saying that even if it is a purpose murder, they don’t knowwho it is and there is nothing that they can do. Even if they would guard restof the victim friends, there is no way they can do it forever, and the bombercould just wait until they would stop guarding and then strike.

Other policeman Masato suggested watching theirhouses for next 24 hours and see if anything strange would happen. Most ofpolicemen agreed with this, many of them went in disguises around the villageuntil the next day.

DAY 3

LOCATION 1: VILLAGE

None of the policemen in disguises saw anythingstrange happen until the same event occurred like in the past two days. Thistime the victim was a teenage girl - Akemi.

When Nazumi arrivedto the scene, he would only find out that the last friend from the group leftis Shun. Shun desperately asked for help or to get him away.

LOCATION 2: POLICEOFFICE

After gathering what they know, nobody had anyidea how could the bomber get inside victim’s house, if nobody saw anyone enterexcept their family members. Suddenly a detective called Han Shimazaki wouldstand up telling two theories. It’s either one of the family members or thatthe bombs were set up right from the beginning. He also said it is less believablethat a family member would start blowing up his or her house and children. Ryouthen asked why the bomber wouldn’t just explode all houses together. Hananswered that the bomber would just try to warn other friends that their deathis coming near, criminals can think of many crazy things.

Ryou then suggested that they should hide Shunsomewhere. But not just simply take to his hideout, since it is possible thebomber is all this time stalking his next victim. Masato asked how it would bepossible to sneak him outside the house. Ryou answered that he has an idea.

LOCATION 3: VILLAGE

Ryou explained the plan to Shun’s mother andshe followed the plan. While the action is going on, Ryou and the otherpolicemen are at the police office while Ryou explains his idea.

First, Shun’s mother will cover his son withblack blanket big enough to cover whole Shun’s body. They will exit thebuilding and lead Shun to a police office and hide him there, meanwhile policewill give a doll that is same size of Shun. Shun’s mother will cover it withthe black blanket same way she did it before and go back to house. Afterentering house, she will drop the doll on sofa, cover it with the black blanketand close all window curtains. The next day, she will leave the house and seewhat happens tomorrow.

The walk to police office could give the ideato bomber, that it might be simply questioning about if the police have any cluewho is the bomber. And the black blanket might be some dumb idea of Shun’smother thinking it would work.

„That’s all” are Ryou’s words when the scenegoes to

DAY 4

LOCATION 1: POLICEOFFICE

The explosion didn’t happen that day.

Ryou slams his fist on desk shouting that he issure the plan must have worked. He then shouts that he thinks the bomber mustbe watching police office also or that mother is the bomber. Of course! Explodingher house the last and now somehow the plan fails.

Han disagrees with that. He says that theyshould see if his second theory is true. Search the house and see if they canfind the hidden bomb.

LOCATION 2: SHUN’SHOME

Many military walked around and inside Shun’shouse with detection dogs. They all tried to find if it is true, that bombswere placed before explosions happen.

LOCATION 3: OUTSIDESHUN’S HOME

Ryou and Han were standing outside the buildingand waiting for any results. Soon one soldier ran out of the house saying thathe found a camera hidden in Shun’s room. Han then said that probably that’s thereason how bomber knew that real Shun wasn’t at the home at that time and theremight be more cameras around. When Ryou heard that, he told the Soldier to tellothers to search at any location to find hidden cameras and to get a signalreceiver and see if they can get the signal from where the camera is beingwatched. Han interrupted Ryou’s order. He suggested to only take the camerasoldier found and everyone else should avoid seeing other cameras. If theywould find where the signal is coming from, they might catch the bomber inaction where he is watching the cameras.

LOCATION 4: POLICEOFFICE

While the search was going on, Nazumi was inthe police office with Shun. Finally Shun remembered something that might be ahelp. Few years ago, he and his three friends found a man carry dead corpse andthrow it in trash. Later he drove away with a bag. The bag was filled withmoney. Shun and his friends helped find this man and arrest him. Sadly, therewas no proof that the man carried corpse into trash and he killed it. So he wasjust accused of money stealing. Put into prison for few years, he might havebeen freed by now. Shun doesn’t remember the name of man only his crime andappearance.

Nazumi searched through the database this crimeand year of release from prison. They couldn’t find anyone that Shun wouldrecognize.

After bringing the found bomb, they neutralizedit. But as for the signal tracking, it was interrupted and probably shut down,probably because the bomber saw the soldier notice the camera. They couldn’ttrack signal from where it was coming from.

After the camera and bomb were sent to lab,they found finger prints on it. But after they were searched through thedatabase, they couldn’t find who the owner of these fingerprints is. But thefingerprints from bomb and camera are the same. Ryou then said that the bomberthey are looking for has never been in prison.

Nazumi simply felt like telling what Shun toldhim while they were searching for the bomb and so he did. But it was still nohelp, since they didn’t find anything in the database about this suspected man.

They are all back at a dead end.

LOCATION 5: HAN’SAPARTMENT

It was bit over midnight. Han was sitting athis laptop in internet. He had remembered what Nazumi told after they arrivedback at police office. Han was searching trough search engines anything relatedto this. Once he typed: “Four teenagers help in solving a crime” Han found in aweb page that publishes news. Few yearlong article, where was mentioned thefour names – Minori, Orito, Akemi and Shun. Finally he found the man’s name –Takashi Mootori.

Han grabbed his coat and ran out of hisapartment back to police office.

LOCATION 6: POLICEOFFICE

Han ran in the office at computer. Everyone wasconfused why he is here so late.

After Han typed “Takashi Mootori” name in thedatabase, there were no results again. “Can’t be…” Han said seeing that therewere no results. Any prisoner is put into database, but there are no resultsapparently. One policewoman Isa asked Han what’s wrong, but Han simply replied“nothing” and left to take a walk around the village where explosions happened

DAY 5

LOCATION 1: VILLAGE

It was early morning; Han had spent whole nightawake. He took a walk around the village trying to find anything useful. Hedidn’t have any confidence and he didn’t really hope for finding somethinguseful. Just when coming past the houses that exploded, they were all next toeach other. And when turning around, Han noticed cameras at neighbor’s house.One of them could film Minori’s and Akemi’s house, even though it was meantonly to film the entrance of house it’s attached to.

LOCATION 2: TAKASHI’SHIDEOUT

It was almost evening; Takashi is sitting inhis hideout. It used to be abandon storage, until Takashi bought it. When hewas arrested, the storage was again abandoned

Suddenly the metal door of storage was blown upand many SWAT soldiers ran inside the storage. Takashi got up trying to escapefrom back door, until more soldiers ran out of that door. Takashi was trappedinside and surrounded by SWAT soldiers.

Han went inside seeing a computer and manyscreens. And ¼ part of them showed Shun’s room, since all other cameras were blown up.Later checking the computer, he found that this man could access the database.Somehow he managed to hack it and destroy the files of his data. That’s thereason why they couldn’t find his fingerprints or name in the database eventhough he once was in prison.

Takashiyelled at Han and questioned him, how did they find out where he was hiding. “Thismorning I noticed cameras at neighbor’s house, I guess they could afford asecurity system. It could film wide enough to catch Minori’s and Akemi’s housedoor. When I got the tape, I saw you enter their houses. And once you enteredthem both, you disappeared for a while and then came back stopping a cab. Afterwriting down the cab’s number, I went to the station and questioned driver ofthat cab. After showing a picture of you which I got off internet, he said heremembers you and where he took you.” Han explained. “So what? You have noevidence that I am the killer! You can only prove that I have been watchingthem.” Takashi said back to Han “Your right, we don’t have anyevidence about that. But once we compare your fingerprints with the one onbomb, I am sure we will have.” Han said it and the soldiers took Takashi away.

Takashi was later put in prison for life after the fingerprints on camera and bomb matched his.