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MargaretLane says:The idea of a bookcase in a church foyer seems strange to me. That's not a criticism or anything, just a comment. I've known some churches have a rack with a few prayer books or maybe a life of a saint, but definitely not novels or anything. I know churches in places like the UK and the US seem to have more to do there than just attend service though. I just never thought of a bookcase.

Like the way you show the kind of person Miss Goshawk is. I can sort of picture her.

Billy Stubbs? Wasn't he one of the kids in the orphanage with Tom Riddle? I'm guessing it's the same orphanage so. He must be OLD by the next generation. Let's see, if he was born around 1940, he'd probably be 70ish at this stage. Must be nearly time for him to retire.

Oh you misspelled "loser" as "looser".

This is reminding me a bit of Great Expectations, which my dad called me in to see part of today. Never read it, but what I do know of the storyline fits a little with this story.

That was amusing when he's convinced she'll give him some really significant piece of advice and then she just decides to have some biscuits.

And hmm, I'm now wondering if Miss Goshawk is a witch or a Squib or something, just because of all those strange symbols and stuff.

Yeah, she's got to be a witch if she was holding a "stick" (a wand) over him.

Hmm, I wonder what's the significance of the wolf's head. I've a feeling there IS a significance.

"Professor" should have a capital letter when used as a title.

This story has a curiously old-fashioned flavour considering it's presumably set in more or less the current day, to the point that the mention of e-bay sort of jolted me. It's partly the references to the orphanage. I don't think that term is used much any more. And also things like how Miss Goshawk talks about how the most she expected was to marry a moderately rich man. Though of course I don't know how old she is. She could have grown up before World War II, especially if she's a witch.

That could explain why she seems so Victorian actually. Maybe she did grow up in the late 19th/early 20th century. Witches can live to 150.

Author's Response: Thank you for such a helpful review!
For the bookcase, the church my grandma attends (That I drive her too) has one in the lobby/foyer, it's there so people can borrow the donated books and return them whenever, it isn't exactly a common thing, so I might change that.
Yeah I did take Billy Stubbs from the orphanage Voldemort grew up in, I imagined him as an old man that does more talking to the children then actual caretaker-ing, so I don't mind too much about his age, since I don't think I'll ever mention him in more than passing.
I'm glad you found parts amusing too, I don't want it to be too depressing even though it isn't exactly a happy topic (having no parents).
As for Miss Goshawk and the wolf, they come later ;) Although if you do want to look a bit forward into the story, you could always Google her name :p
Thank you so much again for the advice, I'll be making the spelling/grammar changes immediately!
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