This is amazing! Really well done! The one problem was that to "loose" someone or something is actually spelt "lose" and you did this quite a bit :)
But other than that, I really think this is one of my favorite stories so well done you! I've only favorited 9 stories in 2 years so count yourself lucky!
Excellent writing!
E.E.

This story is pretty well written. I particularily like the fact that the ocs (Astrid and Marcus) are believable (big plus, a lot of ocs are not believable or even realistic). As well as the way that you have the characters relatively in character.

This story is so absolutely stunning! The characters personalities never go ooc and the amount of adventure and romance is balanced well.

The grammar is impeccable and everything is easy to read and crystal clear. When I first started reading this I wasn't sure what to expect, I've only seen final fantasy advent children and only watched people play the game. You explained everything so well that even someone who only knew who a handful of characters were could read this without difficulty. That is something I applaud you on. I've now recently become interested in playing the game for myself after reading this.

For a while there I had the idea in my mind that Astrid would end up with Vincent or even Reno. I felt that nothing was rushed on the romance side of things.

So thank you very much for writing such an inspiring story, have a wonderful day and keep up the astounding work!~

This story is very good and amusing. Only two things bothered me, though. For one, you kept spelling Centra when it's supposed to be Cetra and the fact that you changed Dark Nation's species. It's a Guard Hound, not a hellcat. Sorry if that seemed a bit jerky but I didn't mean any offense. I'm a bit of a stickler when it comes to this sort of thing.

Wow. This has to be one of the best ff7 stories that I have read on this site to date. Your sentence structure and grammar was excellent; you succeeded in keeping characters more or less in character and, unlike a great many stories that I have seen, your story actually has a plot. On top of all of those good points your story was very enjoyable. I am looking forward to reading the sequel.

um...just finished chapter 19, and i can't stop laughing. really, poor Vincent, he's been reduced to Larry the Cable Guy. loving the humor through out this, and the whole "little brother is evil" bit keeps it interesting.