I love the way you used short lines to write your poem. I think it would work well if you seperated the line, "The answer is no" from the rest of the verse (it helps to sort out the events). My, it is wonderful. You certainly have talent Pinksage33. Nicely done!

Hey, nice poem. I like the flow of it a lot, the words flow so naturally. One suggestion, in the last stanza the word "round" seemed a little bit out of place compared to the formal tone of the rest of the poem. So maybe it cold be changed to "around." This is of course your decision entirely. Good job and keep writing!