Well, it got slightly confusing at times, but I was ablt to stay with you. You need to impliment the code, for dure, it was hard to read without indentation because you didn't space the paragraphs. Detail too, you need to add detail. You had some good bits in there, where you described-to an extent-what was happening and the environment, but I couldn't get a clear picture to base the story in my mind around. You need to work on that. Other than those thing, just keep an eye out for selling and grammar mistakes. and you should improve._________________-MCC