Still not there yet. All things considered, the SCP is simply a compulsion to recreate and distribute itself – essentially a meme or chain letter, but made more boring since the desire to do so is scrubbed aside in the name of the compulsion. There is no need to care about motivation or people, only a compulsion solves all those.

The article is still extremely myopic with its conception of apathy. Surely apathy is more than vandalism. Why Change has extrapolated a lot on what apathy can do to civilisation. Compared to that, yours is barely scratching the tip of the iceberg. This renders your article quite a caricature of the concept you're aiming at.