Oooh, that is haunting. It's shilling to think/know that the girls' family members were the preceding nights and it makes me wonder if the ones before them were their parents or something similar. I do wish there had been a moment with Umi, Hikaru, and Fuu together, like if they met up at the game or something because that would prove beyond a doubt that Kuu, Ren, and Satoru were right.

This was an amazing premise. I would have liked a little more insight to what these three went through, but the closure felt a little more worth it. It's always nice to see a story where Hikaru doesn't suffer (i.e. any of mine...).

Okay, it took me about… ten paragraphs to notice the relationships between adults and newer Knights. I think you should continue. Maybe have Hikaru, Umi, and Fuu arrange to go to Tokyo Tower and the older Knights… follow or be invited. Then have them transport to Cephiro and explain everything. I like stories that have past Knights in them. Of course, I'm writing one, so that might be part of it.

Kuu wants to go back. Let her.

I didn't know Hikaru's dad walked out on them. Where'd you hear that? You're a girl aren't you? That comment about "after all, at a very young age young men typically had perverted their minds in sexual jokes and toilet humor." I like that. It's true! Stupid perverted boys…