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"You cannot be bad at watching a movie. You cannot be bad at listening to an album.
...But you can be bad at playing a videogame, and the game will punish you and deny you access to the rest of the videogame."

Well, I did say I won't read daydreams, but I'll make an exception this time.

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Originally Posted by Eratas123

Side note - Here's what I got so far.

Spoiler:

The sounds of sparring echoed around the small dojo as Ichika and Tatenashi fought together. One look and it was obvious the match was incredibly one-sided. Ichika looked out of breath, his body wobbling left and right as he struggled to stay upright. Tatenashi, on the other hand, seemed be relaxed and showed no signs of any fatigue at all.

“Ara, ara. Giving up so soon, Ichika-kun?” She said, leaning back on the wall and stretching her arms behind her head. Ichika didn’t reply to her taunts and simply shook his head before charging straight at her again, pulling his right arm back to aim for her shoulder to try and disable her.

She dodged to the side casually before grabbing his outstretched arm and pinning it to his back. Ichika struggled to try and free himself, but her grip wouldn’t loosen. “Do you give up yet, Ichika-kun? You’re a thousand years too early to match up to this onee-san.” She proclaimed confidently.

“N-No way!” He yelled in response. He struggled for a few more seconds before he realized it was futile. No matter how he moved, her grip on his arm wouldn’t loosen and he ended up being unable to fight back. Hanging his head in shame, he stopped his movement and surrendered. “Alright, I give up, Senpai.” He muttered softly.

“Huh~ I’m afraid I can’t hear you properly. This Onee-san has a hard time hearing people when they don’t speak up.” She teased him. “Why don’t you speak up?” She leaned forward and placed her face next to his, her mouth so close to his ear that he could feel her every breath tickling him. “There, maybe I can hear you now.” The smile she had on her face made it quite obvious that she had ulterior motives to getting closer to him.

Ichika blushed at their close proximity and turned his face away from hers before muttering again. “I said I give up.” He said, the redness on his face getting worse by the second. Ichika always wondered how she could be so open, but he never really found out why. It honestly astounded him how she could be so carefree considering her position.

He didn’t have time to wonder about it before he suddenly felt two soft, pillow like things pressing hard against his back. He didn’t have to be a genius to figure out exactly what those were and he reacted like any reasonable and chivalrous young man would’ve.

“S-S-SENPAI! YOU’RE WAY TOO CLOSE!” He yelled as he suddenly ran forward, making her lose her grip on his arm.

By panicking. A lot.

Tatenashi pouted cutely, causing Ichika to blush again. “Eh~ I was just leaning in to hear what you said. It’s Ichika-kun’s fault for not being loud enough.” She reasoned to him. Ichika knew her reasoning was complete and utter BS, but he knew arguing with her would only end with him losing and her coming out on top again, so he just kept his mouth shut and walked out the door of the dojo to the cafeteria for an early dinner. Maybe some food would help him calm down.

Any tips for improvement?

So in Tatenashi's daydream Ichika is submissive? I though you said Tatenashi will project Ichika as cool and manly?

Doesn't meant Ichika should win, I mean, even if he lose, he lose gracefully (think a knight that lose a honorable duel), not being a pathetic loser that getting beaten the crap out, and worse if he's submissive while at it.

I originally planned for the fight to continue woth Ichika using the back of his head to smash against hers and break the grip, but I was afraid of it being a major OOC moment. Think it'll be okay if I use that?

@ Senpai - Actually, the sparring was supposed to be a real life segment. This is why I got nervous when I wrote the headbutt scene since it seems OOC for Canon!Ichika. (I got part of that scene from a Shadow Draft for when Irish and Tatenashi sparred and it's more combat based due to the combat pragmatism Irish has).

Side note - Maybe it's because Shenlong is a multi level unit. She uses both shock waves (Which have a lot of recoil) and double sided saber which requires acrobatics. It'd make sense for her to have the smallest unit.

Side note 2 - I'm writing Shadow after finishing this Daydream arc. Can I ask for your help in reading out parts of it? Don't worry, it's not rom-com.

@ Jak - Be careful about using rape in backstories. Many people use it to try and get sympathy points for characters and it's become a bit stale to read. Though admittedly, male rape is rare and mostly unseen.

@ Senpai - Male rape is subverted in Shadow. Ichika looks and acts very uncomfortable when M makes remarks about raping him while he's tied up (she's bullshitting to scare him.) and Irish's segment features very violent reactions to actions of the same reasoning.

Side note - Alright, where do I start first: Irish's or Ichika's? This'll determine the sequence of events.

@ Treme - Just try sticking with one lead already. I'm not sure if I can develop Irish into a good enough character, but that doesn't mean I'm changing whenever I see something I don't like.

@ Senpai - Michael's segment will always be last and you already know it ends. If Ichika goes first, then the rescue attempt will be shown first and his usage of partial deployment. If Irish's, then they'll discuss why Cecilia was taken and Irish will notice the bomb detonator in Sam's pocket.

Side note - By the end of the arc, all of the terrorists - bar Irish, Joshua, and Viktor - should be dead. Ichika only knocks out the mooks in his segment so that'll be a bit of a problem. Do you think it's possible for the building they're in to get rigged with explosives so when Cecilia, Irish, and Ichika leave the building, it collapses and kills anyone else inside?