Hay man no matter what you do I still love your story's. You got just what people will like to see in each character. For example I always saw Falco as a ponder and wondering the meaning of his life. He always coming and going from the team so you would thing he always second guessing his life. All in all your storys are good and if you do as well as your first Star Fox story you will be good with this one. ;D

Unexpected twist! I was genuinely hoping for a chapter about one of them meeting the other's parents. I think that you had Fox act relatively well, like he had accepted and mostly gotten over the death of his family, at the end it sort of ended on a crazier note, mostly because of how abruptly it ended. It would have been awesome to watch Fox and Krystal talk a bit about his past and family, maybe even have Krystal open up to him a little? Sadly though, there seems to be a trend brewing where it all just... ends before it can get really good.