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Review:

slytherinchica08 says:Aw poor Benson! He is completely in love with Lily and she has no idea that she has this hold over him. I thought this first chapter did a great job of setting up your characters and the plot line. I'm interested to see where you take this story. I found one mistake, and its here, "she’s absolutely gorgeous and the most sort after girl in the school" sort should be sought, and then it needs a period after school. Other than that one mistake there was nothing else that took away from the story. I like the idea that there are places around Hogwarts that nobody else really knows about, I mean it is such a huge place so I can't imagine that everyone is going to be all over the place. I look forward to seeing where you take this story and very much enjoyed this chapter! Great Job!

~Slytherinchica08~

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review, it's greatly appreciated and thank you for pointing out mistakes in a nice way as I have had some really quite nasty responses about that. I should warn you that my writing in this is TERRIBlE until aboit Chapter Nine though... Chapter 5 in particular is really bad and I'm going to do a complete re-edit of it soon