Another good sketch but I really like the depth of the first sketch.. having the sleeping character in the foreground and the girl and birds behind gives it motion and a feels more like the begining of a journey. The latest one has a horizontal motion that doesn't show the depth and transition of the journey as good. However, I really prefer the girl on the right of your latest one. Maybe you could work on a combination of both sketches. keep it up! :thumbsup:

Cyberone

03 March 2006, 01:00 PM

mmm...i like the idea of the second one but the composition of the first colourful one is a lot better...

oh and im lov'n the birds..

cant wait to see what you settle on..

CYB

xric7

03 March 2006, 01:07 PM

sawasdee krub.nice to meet you.:) cool journey.i love it.ur drawing is really awesome.can't wait to see how you fix the composition.i have no crit for now.great start.:thumbsup:

zachlost

03 March 2006, 01:14 PM

The coloured sketch captures the focus of the characters better than the split cell sketch.

The half/half image doesn't draw enough focus or attention as it is split between both characters. Perhaps there's a better way of dividing the image with a sense of perspective - as achieved in the coloured sketch?

JTD

03 March 2006, 01:17 PM

I love the second one with the water running over the bedsheet/dress of the two characters. However, the second one doesn’t convey as much as a journey beginning as the first. It's more like a "lost dreams" kind of look. Great compositions though.

Ponlawut

03 March 2006, 03:53 PM

Thank you for every comments and ideas,I hope to find good composition for support my concept and finish before deadline ^_^"

rkeith0275

03 March 2006, 09:16 PM

I like the idea, I would work on the transition between the "real" world and the "dream" world so that it does not look like to separate paintings sitting next to each other. I do understand that in a concept drawing you may not be to that point, but my suggestion is more for as you move along in your process. Anyway, good luck and enjoy.

Welcome to every comments and ideas.^_^,i'm looking forward to hear you

OniricCreative

03 March 2006, 01:58 PM

Good effort. I like the girl sleeping in front and the cat detail. I also like the building and clouds in the background. But I dont really like the girls hand. I prefer the hand to be the way you got it on your second sketch. There it really feels that is sending the 'bird', or spirit or wahtever you may call it, to a journey. :) Plus I think that the path is better to be made by the birds rather than those white shapes you have placed in the sea. Anyway, just my opinion. Good job. Keep up.

I love the characters. There is great symmetry between the grotesque feet and the angle wings. And it's refreshing that not everyone wants to go on a journey, like the little girl. This is one that I'd like to see painted.

Cyberone

03 March 2006, 02:21 PM

i agree....i think this could be the best one...the story is very clear..much clearer than the others...

great idea..

Ponlawut

03 March 2006, 06:30 PM

Thank you for every comments it's better for me to improving my concept.....this s sketch,i turn back to simple style and try to present feeling my characters.....I'm looking forward to hear you comement....

Faras

03 March 2006, 06:58 PM

Very nice characters, I hope you stay with this concept, it looks really good!

( ps: tell them to watch out for the Bird Flu o.O )

bandro

03 March 2006, 08:05 AM

very good characters it will be a nice artwork!!!

MichaelZHsee

03 March 2006, 08:38 AM

the latest piece is indeed the best~interms of the characters as well as the composition,i like the angle use here;)

Zycho

03 March 2006, 08:45 AM

Yes! That last one hits the spot! Really nicely done! Good colors, good concept, good angle, and it's easy to read! Very nice!

Great charactes and sketches. I too really like this concept a lot, and hope you go with it. What if the younger one's arms were a bit more extended, as if she we're pulling away a bit out of stubbornness, or being suported a little by the older one? (mother? big sister?)

One thing that I find a little awkward are the wings on the head: they wouldn't be able to turn their heads much without bumping the head wings on the back wings. Anyhow, the characters are unique and interesting enough already - not sure you need them.

Good luck, looking forward to seeing this taken futher! :)

-mike

umbrellasky

03 March 2006, 03:33 PM

Wow great concepts! I really like your ideas, nice work! :thumbsup:

Ponlawut

03 March 2006, 02:50 AM

Thank you for every comments and ideas
Mike- thank you for your comment it's good point for me..^ ^

Really beautiful characters you have here and I love your concept sketches! I think the last one is probably the best, but there isn't much to suggest it is the beginning of a journey, unless the leaves on the right are some kind of nest? And I can't quite figure what the white thing behind the older character's leg is - is it the tip of her furthest wing? But I love the child's face, wonderful capture of emotion in both of them. Can't wait to see where this goes!

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