Now this is very amature ..but everyone even A MAD started somewhere. The good thing about this is I can tell what you are drawing and I can look at the pics with no dialoge and tell what is going on..so you have a lot of good elements to this pic. Now the art needs to be a little stronger..just work on shapening up your line work and work on your perportions.

Maybe in the third frame instead of showing a blank terrain you can show a targeting radical from the mech targeting the probe drone? ...anyways that would help to break up those frames...maybe even put the mech out on the edge of the terrain looking out over the vally like a gaurdian....very small on the horizon...in that second frame

You can also add some dynamics to the scene by showing some explosion coming off the probe dron thing...like smoke and fire burning the left over remains...then in the next frame where the mech is holding the gun show smoke coming from the barrel after the mech shoots ..this helps to garner attention to the powerful weapon....little things like that help to create dynamics in your scenes..I used to be an artist on a manga comic....ummm you should pick up books by masumine shirow he is the master of dynamic story telling ,and he is masterful with his detail...good luck

[This message has been edited by TheMilkMan (edited January 14, 2001).]

Here's a little update on the coloring job...
Showing little bits? that's a good idea but I don't think the weapon should be that powerfully shown because the guy who destroyed the Glider is from a team named Travelers (bad guys) they're weak and not so powerful, but their leader knows all about the Mechnoshperes (good guys) so there's a little war going on at first...