I am looking for a review for a logo that is going to be shipped with a project of mine.

I wanted to keep it simple and clean, with a high level of appeal so that no one will really dislike the design of it.

Specifically:

Should I implement more color into the design?

Is the hexagon a suitable drop-back? Should I even have a drop-back?

Are there any design concepts I overlooked and haven't implemented?

Another rendition based off of a suggestion from a friend:

If it is important, the design was based off of a tritium atom, since the project name the logo will be paired with is "Tritium". Here is a picture of part of the website for the project (also a work in progress):

Also keep in mind that I am brand new to graphic design, so please be as harsh as necessary with this.

Update:

Thank you all for your feedback, unfortunately I could only accept one answer! Some of you had really good ideas/concepts, and I will try my best to implement them in my final website design.

@DA01 A tritium atom has a nucleus composed of a proton and two neutrons (the three dots in the centre), which is orbited by a single electron (the dot on the circle). So it's only actually the hexagon that doesn't come straight from the chemistry.
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David RicherbyJul 13 '14 at 21:08

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Using the electron on the circle is not very physical, yet graphical. You could mark one of the nuclei differently since this is not Lithium but Tricium. And you can use orbitals which are realistic and might look better graphically.
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queueoverflowJul 13 '14 at 21:22

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The second hexagon is borderline disorienting - it makes me want to turn my head or screen so it rests on either a side or a point. (I'm too far from your target to offer a full answer, but I'd avoid that one.)
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Jaydles♦Jul 14 '14 at 15:00

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It's interesting, but (I assume) It's really the three dots that is the tie into 'TRItium'. As such, I'd consider dumping both the circle and the hexagon. They seem superfluous to the concept.

They are nice, but (and this is just my opinion) in the world of software, those tend to give off a bit of a video game vibe--which may or may not be your objective.

So, to go back to focusing on the 'tri' I'd strip down and simplify. This example may have gone slightly too far, and you may want to incorporate a bit more into this, but I think it gets the idea across of 'keep it simple'

I also gave the dots different sizes to a) add some dynamism and b) try to prevent it looking like two eyes and a nose. :)

Would you be okay with me using this logo as a part of my final design? I think that it is the best fit for what I am looking for.
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syb0rgJul 14 '14 at 20:30

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How did the hexagon/circle border get that “video game vibe”? I had absolutely the same immediate reaction, but I can’t place where it comes from — what game, or what site, or the like.
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Peter LeFanu LumsdaineJul 15 '14 at 14:51

@PeterLeFanuLumsdaine I...don't know either. But I do seem to see it a lot. I think, in addition to Phil's point that lots of games use hex-grid maps, I seem to recall them to be a common UI element in the future computer UIs and Heads Up Displays a lot of FPSers use.
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DA01Jul 15 '14 at 22:16

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@syb0rg I appreciate you asking. By all means, use it as you see fit!
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DA01Jul 15 '14 at 22:18

I suggest ditching the hexagon, as it adds no value. If anything, it's confusing. In chemistry, the first thought that comes to mind when I see a hexagon is "benzene ring". That's not what you wanted to draw, right?

The alternate version of the hexagon, with oddly aligned edges, is completely disconcerting to me.

Okay others have good points, I would like to add a new one. The logo is size challenged in that the details are a bit too small. This may be a problem if you need to:

work in small scales such as 24 x 24 pixel icons (or even smaller)

Print a business card sized medium, you would now need the ring to be quite big for the dots to be visible.

I think the design of @DA01 addresses this issue but I like the idea of the atom so i would turn everything into 3D and let the size of the atomic orbit to be a bit smaller.

Image 1: Quick and dirty 3D concept sketch. Looking at it you should possibly be rotated differently. But hey its a sketch.

Some other ideas maybe the circle could be concentric waves like many sound icons... Alternatively you could go all negative and let the circle be your dark area, but after i tested this i couldn't make it work maybe somebody else can.

Image2: Edit, same concept different angle and weight. (If you were wondering yeah the image is a 3D vector I can freely manipulate rotations just the weights and colorings are manual since i haven't had the need to implement fills yet)

Your last sample, the website with the type alone, is great. The colors are interesting, the word and its shape as well. The straight lines work, especially if you try for example with the atom in the background -see image below-. I see it and sort of get more both the speech ('soft') and engine ('precise, hard') vibe.

Less is more. You don't need to reinforce the name, the three dots seems almost redundant with the Tri prefix. The word and the dots would fight for attention, and the three concept would be too reinforced. Which might led to me wondering about why three is so important and not actually reading what the project is about.

Not sure that the Hexagon in the BG is of much help and it might be just ruining the effort that u have put in.

How about removing the BG Hexagon and just the three circles that can now be increased in size and used in the center of the circle. That would look way better. I am just attaching an image that is more close to what I am saying and that way it can go better with the BG that u have too.

Something like this.

This way, the icon will look more cleaner and would also maintain the concept that u had... I have re-arranged the three circles in a way to form a Right Arrow, which tells more about taking the clients ahead and also achieving better profit.

Much better... The main issue with the other graphics is that they don't scale. You should think about how this graphic is going to look on a business card. I think the electron is going to be lost if the logo is further reduced, but I think losing the electron would be fine. The simpler the better.
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MickJul 16 '14 at 3:42

agree to that thought too... the best way to have the electron would be to have an overlay.
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10MAYJul 17 '14 at 5:02

I like it too, but then what would I use for the site favicon?
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syb0rgJul 14 '14 at 22:37

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Favicon's? You mean that 16x16 px icon in the browser-bar? Play with the word a little use «TT» as an acronym. Try to set the letters in a square format, try to cut it in Half: «Tri-Tium», «Trit-Ium» and so on and so son. Don't think, try. Don't be affraid to test bad ideas (Like the word cutting).
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KasparJul 15 '14 at 6:57

I agree with 200_success about ditching the hexagon because it adds no value...and am also unsure how Tritium relates to a speech-synthesis engine as Scott points out.

However, I like the atom graphic (which I think is clean & simple but interesting, particularly with the bit of incongruity that the electron adds); and I will assume for the moment that you can clarify the Tritium connection (which your site will certainly need to do).

With this then, the primary thing I would address is Scott's other point - conveying the "goal, function, or theory behind the software".

Replacing the hexagon with a comic bubble comes to mind as a way to possibly do this. My first reaction was imagining the atom in a comic bubble emanating from a small set of (Matrix-like) bits in the lower left corner, the comic bubble having a drop shadow to give it a bit of perspective, and the atom being in Serif quotes.

Maybe a small set of bits in a gear in a small head as simple & clean as the atom would work without getting too busy.

Here's my supporting thinking:

The comic bubble (and head) bring to mind speech.

The quotes around the atom reinforce that the atom is as if "Tritium" is being spoken.

The small set of bits bring to mind or at least speak to speech synthesis.

The gear brings to mind or hints at this being a speech-synthesis engine.

As it plays out in my mind, all this could come together in a reworked logo that graphically says "Tritium Speech-Synthesis Engine". There may be too many ideas here to entirely find their way into a graphic that remains clean & simple; but these are the ideas that come to my mind to (better) convey "the goal, function, or theory behind the software".

I get the comic bubble and the quotes, but I'm having a harder time visualizing your third and fourth points. Is there a quick mockup that you could make to show me what you are thinking?
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syb0rgJul 13 '14 at 16:30

The logo should communicate something about the product, not the product's name (I am giggling at the thought of a Microsoft logo of an itty bitty pillow).

The product is a speech synthesis program.

I get that tritium is a chemistry based word and I like the sound of it, but speech synthesis has nothing to do with chemistry.People who need a speech synthesis program are more likley to be in communications rather than the hard sciences.

In my opinion you should ditch the hexagon, the atomic symbol, the "decaying" font or anything suggestive of physics or chemistry .

The best one proposed is Dad1's three unequal circles arranged so they do not suggest a face.

Keep it simple, don't try to incorporate all the concepts that come to your mind in one logo. Focus on one idea. The less elements, the better (as a bonus your logo will be more easily recognizable and better reproduced at smaller sizes) .

Also I don't think trying to please everyone will work; do what is the best for the logo design, you can't win everybody's hearts with a logo (I'm pretty sure a lot of people hate a lot of good logos).