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Tinker

Tinker

Barry, This was very interesting. Have you ever been to Tyler Texas? Somehow I just can't picture you there. I think of you more on the craggy cliffs of England. I've been to Texas a couple of times but it's a BIG state and I've never been to Tyler. The most lasting impression I have of Texas was driving across the Pan Handle in the 60s and seeing the same thing ahead as I could see behind me for hours on end, flat, barren land. No mountains, no curves just a straight road with nothing on either side. Dallas on the other hand was a modern, thriving metropolis.

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dcmarti1

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Interests:Poetry of form and/or meter/syllable. Topics: wide open! Interests also include Social Democrat & Green politics, world peace, and Linux, with occasional posts on The Guardian Newspaper. A bit of an Anglophile, but from Alfred to Henry 7. Becoming very interested in Baltic history.

The moon masquerades as a rose spraying the
scent of Tyler over the earth-the moon's Queen.
Dreaming thorns anticipate the night's scheming
yawn, feathered darkness flutters away. Clouds
above a festival are like coins falling in slow motion
to the waters of a wishing well. Tourists surrender
to the smell of festival flowers, ladies in costume
gather in this carnival which is like a flower left on
a river by a man to travel to his lover.

Hi Barry,

Rich, vivid imagery sharing a common flow and cascading motion. Not sure the first four lines are needed!

This reader would like a second round of crafting on the final two lines, comes off just a little awkwardly to my ear.