Mulligan

This attempt was much better. Of course, the way that he worked meant that he threw everything at the page all at once. He would refine it later. But this was a start. This was closer to how it happened. Once he had the story worked out, he could put in the jokes, work out how it was going to work, make it good. But that was refinement after he was done. And he still had plenty of work to do. But at least this attempt seemed more positive.