i want to die.
why did you lie?
you led me on.
now i am gone.
i want life back.
you're what i lack.
i loved you much.
i loved your touch.
i dream of you.
my dreams came true.
this nightmare's real.
i now hate you.
why do i cry?
you said good bye.
use and abuse.
you're who i choose.
i am now lost.
my soul's the cost.
i long to scream.
i hate this dream
awaken me.
i long to see.
the truth is dead.
its me you led.
good bye to life.
i lived in strife.

"I want to die. why did you lie? you led me on. now i am gone. i want life back. you're what i lack. i loved you much."

Those lines just completely hit me hard..i could relate to this piece a lot..and it hurts to know that someone leads you on and then doesn't care about you..but you still loved them..its happened to me plenty of times..loved it..keep up the great work! -Lucy-

Wow this was awesome, lots of emotion and you did a really good job of saying what you needed to say. short, sweet and to the point. I don't have anything bad to say about the write itself, except I hated the format and I think it slowed down the flow of the write but it wasn't the hugest deal I guess, the write itself is good but I think that personally it's annoying when you can 'love' someone for so long and then the first time they hurt you, you suddenly hate them, I hate that b/c I've been in situations where I wanted to hate the guy afterwards but I couldn't and it's annoying to me how quickly a peron's feelings for someone can change that drastically, no offense with that though I'm just saying, I thought it was a pretty good write peace, ~jess

this piece was GOOOD. Simple and to the point. Hate is a strong word, and your poem expressed it really well. While only using simple words and rhymes. It was probably the order of the words that i liked.