If my friend (an awesome girl who scares the fudge out of me sometimes with her creepy way of thinking) watched this anime, this sounds like something she would write.
Except that she would add tragic pasts and more gore.

Oh my god...you killed them. Totally saw this coming, but still...Yumi...he killed them! The story was really scary, had me on the edge of my seat. This is so sad...poor, poor Yumichika. It actually made me cry.

wow. that was rather depressing, in a good way, I mean. Did you read last week's manga? B/c I think if something ever does happen (to Ikkaku or Yumi) the other is going to go insane...maybe not to this degree but hey, you never know. All in all great work.

Are you kidding? I love it! Sure, it's absolutely horrible what happened, and my poor Yumichika is in such terrible mental pain, ugh... But I just LOVE the sense of surreality, and the quest for peace and perfection, and all the twisted love...