Talk:Breakdowns

Well, I'm hoping for this to be the first novel to be Featured - and the material is there, I just think it could use some re-phrasing and editing; I'd also like to hear what others think it could use. I'd like to see the last two summaries shortened a little (to remove what isn't as important) and to clear up the wording. (ie: I tend to use more commas then nessesary, and it makes some sentences sound weird even to me.) - AJ Halliwell 23:28, 2 August 2006 (UTC)