The concept for this is so foreign, and yet so powerful!! I want it to be a novel!! :D

I'm actually serious. The story was fairly humorous, yes, but you turned a whole social hierarchy on its head! Just imagine what it would be like if that were actually the REAL order of things, with discrimination against purebloods instead of Muggleborns. It could be really cool to look at that in detail, to see Hermione acting the way Draco acted, but worse. I would totally read that if you turned it into a novel.

The beginning of the story sets the stage for all of the tension and violence that will occur later on. I love the imagery of the dripping ink, the way you paint it in all of its inky blackness.

Hermione is pure evil! At first I thought she was Bellatrix, it's that bad! D: It's funny what power can do to people, and obviously this Hermione has been given a lot of power. So poor Draco can't even keep up. It was hilarious and painful to watch him flounder around like that.

So, if you find the time, could you turn this into a novel? Or at least a short story? :)

May the Muse never desert you!

~UnluckyStar57

For the Huffleclaw-Ravenpuff Eggstravaganza.

Author's Response: Someone gets it! Someone actually gets it! I posted this before and all the comments I had gotten were just how unrealistic it was. But, I wanted it to be that way.

I may be able to turn this into a short story, or do a spin off from it. I'm currently working on some other stuff, but I'll see what I can do :)

When I was halfway through the story, I had to scroll up and see if there was something I missed because everyone was so OOC. But when I did get to the end, I was like...Oh! Good one!

I loved the idea of the story and the last part where Goyle is rude to Draco. Hey, he did wake him up in the middle of the night!

If you don't mind me saying, there are a few things I noticed:

1. You mentioned that someone loved Hermione. Who was it? Snape? Draco? Because it wasn't clear...

2.'She looked at the boy with complete disgust. "Typical Gryffindor, thinking that a simple 'I'm sorry' will get you out of a bind.' Later in the story, we find out the boy is Draco Malfoy and he's definitely not from Gryffindor, unless it is that way in the story.

3. There are many 'he' and'she' in the story and in some places, it's not really clear who's speaking. So, if you could include their names a few more times...

4. How does Draco hear the conversation of the Trio in the dream when he's put up in the air and the Trio have already moved out of the class?

I meant no offence by anything I said. If they're all explained in the story and I didn't notice it, tell me so and ignore me because I just mentioned the things I noticed...

Keep writing!

Kinnu

Author's Response: Hey thanks for the review. No offense taken. This isn't exactly the best story written because it was just something to work off some writer's block, but I kinda liked it. So I do get how some points could be confusing.

Everyone is OOC! It's just the opposite of most things. Though a few things are the same or similar.

1. Ron! Though I see how that bit is confusing. His family are considered blood traitors so that's the hint I used for it being him. "He was a blood traitor, not something of her grander taste" and later "our little traitor Ron".
2. Dream Draco is a Gryffindor :p Because seriously that's probably his biggest fear haha. Hence why he was happy to see green when he woke up.
3. I tried to make it sort of confusing, I didn't want to give away names right away. You kinda just need to pick up on clues to figure out things.
4. It's a dream. So real Draco just heard it, not dream Draco.