Aw, cute. I don't know, it feels like something should happen, even at the end. Like this whole thing is leading up to something and it's all going to crumble. But I'm glad it ended happily. And after all, maybe something happening is the new cliche. And it made me laugh, what Alex said about cliches being cliche and that being messed up. I agree. One criticism though, the way you wrote it made it hard to determine things. I guess it's because you put thoughts from both guys in the same paragraph, and that causes some confusion as to who's thinking now. But other than that, I love it. It's cute and sweet. Great job.

I don't normally read or like slash, but I'm really glad I gave this one a chance. The title caught my eye [by the way, it's really poetic-sounding], and I started reading, and the first sentence was amazing, so I kept ON reading. There are so many great lines in this, and this is a really, really good short story.