This was a fantastic first chapter. Like you said, it was a little lengthy, but it went with the feel of the story- 'Lucy's remarkable unremarkable-ness. (uh..)'

Anyway, I adore the way you characterised Lucy. Most people go out of their way to make their main character different. You, however, just bluntly showed how average she was. I loved reading her point of view- she's what I always imagine a normal teenager to be like- attention span of zero and lazy. :P Aren't we all like that?

Lysander is so cute! He just loves to speak, doesn't he? Doesn't even care about people's reaction; so like Luna! I luurrvee your Lysander! It's fresh and adorable characterisation! :)

Ouch. Dragons? :P I can't wait to see how this progresses! I adore next-gens but they tend to get a bit redundant after a while. However, seeing this fairly new ship, I really want to continue! I'm saving it my favs! :D

Author's Response: If I ever get around to editing this, I probably would chop a few parts off ^-^ (but then again, who knows when I'll get around to editing it? :P)

Lucy is the definition of normal, and she's very lazy. And definitely inspired by the teenagers I know (and all right, a bit of me too). :)

heh, I'm glad you like Lysander! He's actually such fun to write... he definitely does like to speak. (Sort of convenient: he likes to talk even when I hadn't planned for him to. Oh well!)

Thank you! Hopefully I can avoid redundancy. :) Thank you for the review!