A few poems

Chalkstar

Here are a few sort of lil' poems I have written. I would like any constructive cristism please.

[Writer's Note: If you see any poems that seem to resemble real life poems, please state. They must have had a lasting effect on me when I'm writing and I would like to know which poems they are. I'm not sure but a few parts seem to connect with me more then others]

QUOTE

Tired of being accusedDon't want to be abusedI've had enoughTimes are too tough

I know what to doI must start newStop my previous lifeForget all this strife

Not time to hideTime to decideI sit at home alone, bleedingThis is the life I am leading

gta phil gta

The first one was going pretty good, but kinda stops flowing at some points. Different word choice would also improve the flow.

The second one, I can see what you're trying to accomplish with it. If it were looked at by someone into the whole poem thing, who knows how it may come across, but to the joe public, it has little meaning. No rhymez, yo. Just kidding, of course.

@ xxnofear617xx: Yes, but if that's all you have to contribute, don't post please. It may be a forum that is rarely active, but it doesn't require spam, thank you. Your post contributed to nothing, and wasn't on topic. Yes, the forum is inactive, quit beating a dead horse and stay on topic.