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Before her fall, Luna lived entire lifetimes as a mortal pony. She now wishes to do so again, and elects to spend some time with Twilight Sparkle and her friends. She never expected to fall madly in love. ·archonix

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A devastating blaze sweeps through Ponyville, leaving desolation in its wake. Now the citizens of Ponyville are left to pick up the pieces of their shattered lives and find a way to move forward. ·DemonBrightSpirit

When a magical experiment backfires, Applejack finds herself in the midst of a dystopian nightmare that pits pony against pony amidst the omnipresent threat of war with the neighbouring griffon empire. With only her wits, and a ragtag band of earth pony resistance fighters to aid her, Applejack must confront both her former friend, and the reality that she may never get back to the world she knows ever again...

Thanks for the compliments, everyone. This is pretty much my first time writing any fiction for years, and the first thing I've ever let anyone else read, so apologies if I make mistakes. I'm not sure how long I'm planning on making this, but I know it won't be short.

I don't want to give anything away, but I'm not a huge fan of OC/mane 6 romance either. I only think it works when the OCs are really engaging, and the mane 6 are perfectly in character. Needless to say, I doubt there will be any in this story.

Ok this is interesting enough that I'm going to favorite it. But there's sort of not a whole lot for me to review at this stage. Still, let's just see how much I have to say before I go apologizing about how little that is.

One: the cover image is a little deceptive. Sure it got my attention, but this ain't a western. Maybe it's the best image you could find, but I felt that it deserved mentioning.

Two: Was the time travel thing supposed to be a big twist? I sort of guessed it during the first chapter when Twilight mentions that it's a spell to speed up time. It thought it was pretty obvious that it wasn't an alternative universe.

Three: and this is my last complaint but perhaps it's barely worth mentioning, but umm... Damnit man! I had evil Twilight Alicorn first! Ok just kidding, but still I feel a little bummed to see another story using a similar idea even if we did have the ideas independently. Ah well, forget I mentioned anything.

Four: Stop ending chapters on cliffhangers. It's not a good idea. It doesn't help your story. It was the worst thing about anthropology. A cliff hanger is fine, but so far you've had three chapters, and all of them have ended after a big reveal. One or two cliffhangers occasionally is fine, but having them constantly is a bad bad bad idea.

Now the other things I want to mention are my expectations for this story. First things first, you have romance tagged. I don't know who the romance will be between but I'm suspecting AJ and somepony else. If that somepony is one of the characters you've already introduced then I sort of have to say that I have not picked up any romance between any of them. So, if it is one of the already introduced characters, just letting you know that your being real subtle with it. And I like that. Romance that builds slowly is the best I think.

Also I'm expecting a strong character arc in this. I want to see AJ develop plenty. I freaking love a good character arcs, and I absolutely love the idea of AJ developing into a badass heroe of the resistance. Your cover image only helps encourage that idea. I hope that's where you intend to go with this.

Oh and I'm very curious to see how Twilight changed into what she did. I know that's the obvious mystery set up, but I am interested.

One: Yeah, I know. I spent ages trying to find a relevant image, and this is the closest I could find. I'll probably be commissioning a friend to draw me a new one, after she's read it, but until then I didn't want a complete lack of image.

Two: It wasn't really. I mean, it was to Applejack, and she's the pony the story's being told from, so it was written like it was. But, seeing as the title and description hint at it, not to mention the hundreds of obvious clues I set up, it wasn't meant to be for the readers.

Three: Heh. Sorry about that. I honestly thought the idea of an alicorn Twilight had been done hundreds of times before. And anyway. Whoever said my one is evil?

Four: This won't be how all the chapters end. I've always preferred a cliffhanger, or something that inspires me to read more, at the end of chapters when reading myself, rather than a regular ending. But yeah, this won't always happen. I realise three in a row was a bit much, but I always imagined this section as one chapter. I just split it up after realising how huge it was going to be.

Thanks for the interest in my story. I really appreciate the feedback.

But I sincerely hope the romance tag isn't Rarijack (Or Appledash, Celestia help me). Or any mane 6 x AJ for that matter. What can I say, I'm just not that into to shipping the mane 6 with one another.

Anyway, this looks intriguing, and I'll give you my thoughts when I get around to reading it

You see this shit? Keep it up. This is exactly the sorta thing I love. I mean, HOLY SHIT. Applejack is 300 years in the future, fighting against Twilight's totalitarian Equestria? THIS IS WHAT I FUCKING LIVE FOR. YES. OH GOD YES. I CAME.

I must say this story grows on me more and more. I was gonna give it a shot and, really you didn't have me in the net until the note, not revealing who The Specialist is! But there you got me! Now I just gotta read on and see who it is! So I'm really looking forward to new chapters!

As my suspicions go, I guess we've already met a fair lot of the Mane 6's great great whatever grandchildren! I'm guessing Applebloom is Idared's great great really really great great grandmother and Aspen is a descendant to Rarity. Tera, not liking action and stuff could be related to Fluttershy and i'm also guessing the pegasus guard and The Specialist might be Scootaloo and Sweetie Bot...eh...belle.

Ah anyways... I don't mean to preach to the choir, it's just fun to speculate. ;)

So...I know quality is not to be hurried, but please please please, bring us mooooaar!!

I actually love comments like this. Where any readers give me feedback of what they liked about the chapters. Also speculation is really fun for me to read, and won't really negatively affect how I write the rest, seeing as I've already got the majority planned out.

I'll be getting content out as quickly as studies and Guild Wars 2 will let me. Thank you all so much for reading my silly little story.

Tyrantlight? Twirant? Twipressor? Whatever you call her, I really can't wait to see where this goes, this is an amazing premise with huge potential. I can't wait to find out how Twilight became an evil dictator, what happened to Luna, Celestia, and the Elements, and what Twilight does when she finally meets Applejack face to face. Liked, fav'd, and followed.

The Phoenix... I'm thinking that it's PeeWee so that means Spike had got to be around somewhere I mean he's a dragon they live a long life, and I don't think he'd like Twilight doing this. But I could be wrong with the phoenix thing it could be Philomena

Still this story is good like to see where this is going and I hope it has an ending

You have a great story going on here, Crimson. The plot twist and challenges that you present are original and your ability to connect Nova Equestria to Equestria is astounding. The politics are believable and the story engaging. It is also light. I have to say, when writing a story that is dark, many authors will be bogged down by their own depressing thoughts and forget to use humor and light pony interation to cheer up the story.

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AJ got sent forward in time, not to an alternate world. It was a time spell. Overloaded Twi, making her an Alicorn *shudder*, goes mad with grief, kills Princesses, changes the world, so on and so forth)