“crumbled white
as teeth” … I love this variation on “white as snow.” But it does make me think of really bad tooth decay.🙂

“fallen leaf
litters” … Oh, I like that you turned “litter” into a verb.

“asphalt Morse code” … This is super cool.

I love that the grates are breathing. Also, this is a command for the reader to breathe. And also, everyone (including the grates) is breathing unpalatable steam. This is never good. But it is very good to breathe floating dreams. But not good to coat your throat in silent scream. Just scream for real and get it over with.😉

I think this is really a very happy and relaxing picture. She may look like her head is down in sadness, but really I think she’s swimming in her clothes and washing her beautiful hair.

I love the way you slowed things down at the end:

“slick
humid
silent
scream”

What a pleasant surprise to see this poem.🙂 Glad to see you catching up. Lovely work, my dear.