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Review:

marinahill says:Oh, Melissa, your writing is such a joy to read! Honestly, I don't know if there's anything you could write that wouldnt be beautifully written.

Your descriptions are so lovely, you've improved so much since I first started reading your work - you've got a knack for choosing just the right words in the right quantity and in the right order - it all fits together naturally and each word pulls me on to the next, so I find myself easily drawn in. I think the concept of blue was so perfect, you seemed to weave it into the narrative without me noticing and for some reason, when I was visualising the scene in my head (which was easy to do), I found it was all blue :P I don't know whether you intended to do that, but it was so effective and I don't think anyone's given such a different spin on imagery before. Oh, and the almost repitition of the first paragraph was ... I had to go back and see if it was repeated, but I was so sure it wasn't - the mood changed, the tone was different but it was so close that for the casual eye, it was a repitition. But that worked for me because it made me go "that was so clever!". Fabulous work.

This is an interesting pairing and a unique twist on a traditional love triangle. Your characters were fleshed out just enough to satisfy me, yet you didnt overload me with too much description of them. It's a one-shot and you don't need too much detail. Again, this is where you proved that you've got a knack for finding that balance.

Superb :)

Marina

Author's Response: Marina.

This review made my jaw drop. I have a on and off again relationship with liking this fic, and you just gave my confidence a much needed boost. I have noticed an improvement in my writing, but still know I have ways to go. I feel that one shots are my strongest forte.

YAY! YES. The blue was intentional, though you are the only reviewer to pick up on it. :P Even though they are in a courtyard and what not, I pictured a swirly blue paradise the entire time I was writing it. Originally, the last paragraph was a repitition, but I realised that it was wrong. The mood was different and Lysander would not have had the same muse for his poetry/writing as he had in the beginning.