Want some ideas on how to touch it up before I shift it into mainspace. - UnIdiot | Talk?|Theme - 01:24, Jan 29

Moved to mainspace, still would like a review. - UnIdiot | Talk?|Theme - 02:14, Jan 31

Humour:

5.5

Two main problems:

Over-reliance on "FUUUUUUUCCCKKKKK YOOOOOOOOUUUU!"

Instead of starting with the guy already mildly addicted to Chex Mix, start the story with him as a completely innocent, picturesque clean-cut All-American football star who would never take drugs. It will make his slippery slope into addiction all the more hilarious.

Also no "ROFLMFAO" moments, but that's never necessary.

Concept:

7

There is something inherently funny about a harrowing addiction to a rather benign substance.

Prose and formatting:

7

An intro would be nice.

Images:

5

The images are adequate. Not amazing, not particularly original, but they work as illustration.