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Andrew the Disciple , instead of posting multiple comments in succession, please edit your previous post using the "edit" function under the "options" tab to the lower right of every comment. That prevents spam buildup, and it's in the rules.

Honestly? I have no idea what you're goin for here, bud. I got that the anomaly is a 2 dimensional "w", but beyond that I am absolutely clueless. I can't give you much crit if I don't know what I'm critting.

This sounds a bit like SCP-3930, so I recommend you read that in order to maybe get some tips.

inside a lead room that is ten metres thick from the measures fifteen metres by ten metres, and three metres in height (interior dimensions)

There is no real reason for the extremely specific interior dimensions, and I'd suggest removing them. And even if there is (in-universe), this just clutters up the article since no one is actually interested in the measurements.

multiple rules have been put into place

Yes, that's how containment procedures work. They're essentially just a bunch of rules.

personal

'Personal' is not the same as 'Personnel'.

There must be 24 hour watch on the entrance of the entity, Anyone attempting to shut down the laser is to be killed on sight.

Both of these rules are just a "do not break the rules." Obviously the Foundation is gonna be making sure only authorized personnel enter their permitted sites, and they're not gonna let anyone tamper with the rules without permission, so these two are kinda redundant.

At any other angle, this entity cannot be seen because of its two-dimensional properties.

Why not? The only location that something two-dimensional could not be seen is on either side of it. If you are still sorta infront of it, you should be able to see it. It would be like a really thin piece of paper.

currently contains (full bodies) 12 recorded SCP researchers and 35 unaccounted civilians, with the injury count over 110 people

How the hell did these people get inside of a 2D object? How the hell can the foundation count all the corpses inside? How the fuck are the civilians unaccounted for if you literally counted them?

This casualty count is due to its most significant anomaly, “The Opening Theory”.

A. The foundation doesn't give anomalies names
B. This completely lost the clinical tone the rest of the article managed to hold up

This anomaly has been called ‘The Compression Effect’.”

This both contradicts my earlier point and makes no sense whatsoever

then it’s the people

I have legitimately no clue what you're trying to say here.

with the exception of the people that die from entering it

wait what?!

First recorded by, Dr Rein █████, “

Wait, why is there an addendum inside of the Description?

This entity cannot be touched or destroyed. SCP has found no way to decommission SCP-XXXX so far.

A. The SCP Foundation, not SCP
B. But you just said touching it kills you
C. Why would they be trying to decommission it??

Addendum:

That's… not how Addendums work.

This radiation has been caused by the proposed structure

What radiation? You never mentioned any radiation. Why is this only now being told to us? Why wasn't it in the description??

Dr Rein █████ II, proposed that the 2-D property could be explained by thinking that the reason it exists is not because it has matter, but because it lacks it, and alike to the painted on effect of the victims, he proposed that the atoms that were there before its arrival suddenly were split and frozen in a state of atomic decay. But alike to the victims, this radiation will never cease or decrease in amount because it can’t be removed.

I have read this 3 times and I still have no idea what this means.

But alike to the victims

But alike the victims, no "to".

Update Audio file 1 decryption: Progress started on first minute of static by [DATA EXPUNGED].

I have taken your critercism on board, thank you. I have changed a lot, and I hope I’ve fixed and clarified most of it. If you can take the time, please read it again and hopefully I’ve made it more clear and understandable. (Just in case you don’t read, I’ll just mention that the [DATA EXPUNGED] at the end is there to link to an article that I plan to make in the future).

I'm sorry to be blunt, but this article is still borderline unintelligible. I'm afraid I can't provide any more substantial or specific criticisms than to say that you need to improve your basic writing skills before you tackle writing an article, because as it stands most people will give up in frustration before they work out what it is you're actually describing.