This was surely an interesting chapter. I liked Ben's thoughts in the beginning - they give a very good insight into his personality and I love that.

I think you wrote the interaction between Victoire, Dominique and Teddy very well. All of their characterisations shined through brilliantly, and we got a glimpse into their relationship nicely. Teddy's conflicted emotions were very realistic, and Victoire's fear was also justified. I liked Dominique too, and felt sorry for her for what she's going through.

James was absolutely adorable and I enjoyed his brief appearance in the chapter. His personality looks awesome and I hope we see more of him. I also liked the brotherly relationship Teddy and he share. The idea of the invisibility cloak was a genius and I was very intrigued as to how things turned out.

Ben's reaction to seeing Teddy shocked me a little and now I am wondering if Teddy was right in thinking that this entire ordeal is going to actually "turn" Ben into a person he is not, into a murderer. It's very interesting and a little scary at the same time. I am just so curious to know what happens next anyway xP

All in all, this was a well-written chapter with good dialogue, smooth flow, and brilliant descriptions. There were no grammar errors either. I don't have any CC to offer you so great job! Keep writing!

10/10
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Author's Response: Hi! It's great to see you back :D This reminds me that I haven't read/reviewed the last chapter of 'The Worst' yet. I'll definitely get to that soon! :)

I'm glad you liked Ben's thoughts. I have a lot of fun writing them :)

It's also really nice to hear that you liked the characterizations of Victoire, Dom and Teddy. There are so many emotions and conflicts and it's so nice to hear that they seem to have come across like I intended them to.

James was probably my favourite character to write in this story so far, and we will definitely see him again! :) I'm really glad that you liked that part as well.

Ben is definitely not acting like the person Teddy knows and loves, so we'll see how things go, right? ;) The thing that has changed him a little bit is (you may remember this from a couple of chapters back) that O'Hagan and Barrett have told him that Dominique is scared of him, that she doesn't want to see him and that she believes that he'll kill her. So he's sort of obsessing about that in his solitude, which I think would be enough to send most people over the edge.

I am so, so happy to hear that you liked the chapter. Thank you so much for your kind words and for sticking with this story, you're amazing!! :D