Weekend Writing Warriors-Tangled Redemption Snippet 15

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I’d planned to move on to new project, but then I realised that Tangled Redemption, book 4 in the Celestial Surrender series, releases in a week and a half and decided to continue sharing for a couple more weeks;).

Nasir has handed Sydney over to Miguel and Jayden as a pet, making it very clear that if she does not fall in line her fate would be considerably worse. In last week’s snippet Sydney struggled with her response to the two men. She cannot believe she could be attracted to what she presumes are monsters, especially after the disaster with her late husban. Creative punctuation has been used.

“After what felt like an age but probably was no longer than fifteen minutes they arrived outside a door; Calatrave entered a code and then leaned forward for an iris scan. He then put his hand into another scanner; it took her a moment to identify it as an aura scanner. “Jade, talk about paranoia,” she muttered angry that she’d been so busy with berating herself she hadn’t paid any attention to where they had been going or what they’d walked past.

She was completely useless at this operative business.

But that was about to change.

Sydney was at the center of ring, at the very core of where things were decided and planned. She would do everything in her power to gather intel and send it to Duncan and Tanasha. The Vampires underestimated her-she could use that.

And if it killed her at least she’d tried.”

I am excited to share the cover of Tangled Redemption with you.

Here is the blurb:

Sydney Radnall is no man’s toy, despite fate’s attempt to make her just that. A kidnapping puts her at the mercy of a sadistic Feral commander. Being held prisoner is bad enough, but her Naema blood is powerful. In her current Vampiric company her presence is like ringing a dinner bell.

In an attempt to break the commander makes her the pet of two of his lieutenants. Miguel is one of the most dangerous men she has ever met, but she can’t stop the attraction blazing between them. Then there is Jayden, a Vampire who is as surprising as he is sexy. Two Vampires she should not be attracted to, should not want to surrender to, should not trust.

But things aren’t always what they seem. Secrets and lies shadow their connections, making it impossible to see clearly. What are the chances of her finding lifemates while surrounded by enemies? And making the wrong decision could not just shatter her heart. It could cost her life.

It’s Thanksgiving in Canada, so Happy Thanksgiving to everyone who’s celebrating. I’m spending the day at my brothers, so it’ll be an interesting day. Family…

Congrats on the soon to be release date, that’s always exciting. I like how she’s sort of berating herself, we all do that sometimes and it makes it easy to relate to her. On a moderator note, try to use the creative punctuation sparingly…too much of it is distracting, and doesn’t showcase your writing skills, but detracts from them. It’s hard to stick to eight sentences, I know, but many times, less is more.

I like the cover, can’t wait for the release date! I admire your character’s attempts to take control of herself in this dire situation but as Alexis says, distraction is probably coming soon LOL. Great snippet!