I really like this opening chapter. I thought you did a great job with the characterization of Harry, Draco, and Hermione.

The conflict you have building for these characters in Draco's game is really nice to see. You are keeping them well to themselves. I like that. I also thought that the details and descriptions you gave were wonderful and very appealing to the mind. Especially since it makes it that much easier to picture in the mind while reading.

I really think that you have a great start to a wonderful story! I will be back to review more in the future!

Good chapter, but one thing you may want to work on is having a little more dialogue and less description of Hermione's thoughts. Another little problem I'm noticing is that you seem to switch between tenses a lot. You're telling most of the story in past tense, such as the second to last line:

"Slowly, almost as if someone had brought time itself to a slower pace, she turned her head to look down the hall and found Ron standing there, his arms folded across his chest, a look of both confusion and anger across his face, skin almost red enough to rival the hair on his head."

But then you have most of the paragraph before that written in present tense. Getting a beta would definitely help you iron out those little issues and improve your story to perfection.

That said, I really enjoy your plot, though as I said in my first review, I'd love to hear a bit more reasoning behind why Hermione took the challenge in the first place, besides just trying to show Malfoy up.

Oh, and I loved this line: "Its dirty and scandalous and oh so wrong but at the same time it sends this delicious thrill through her and she realizes the forbidden fruit can often be just as sweet if not more so than any other kind." Great allusion to christianity.

Loved it! Hermione's very very good; I loved the fact that she didn't completely give in and attacked him instead, it made this a lot more believable.
I also really liked the way you described their little encounter on the bed. Your description was good, realistic, and unique. I swear, if I have to read one more cheesy description of "Malfoy's tongue slippd into her mouth, smooth as butter as he gazed into Hermione's chocolate eyes," I may cry. Yours was really good though. Great job!

I really enjoyed that chapter; it's an excellent beginning to what seems like it's going to be a good story! I was just a little confused as to why they're all going to be wasting their time on this game when Malfoy didn't even mention some kind of reward or anything. It seems a little farfetched that they'd all waste their time on it just out of a desire to beat Malfoy, especially 3 years after Hogwarts; you'd think they would have grown up a little. Anyway, just a suggestion =)
Nice chapter! I'm going to move on to the next chapter now :)

wow.this is indeed interesting.a different plot with my favourite characters.draco the usual cunning slytherin n hermione.the ever daring gryffindor.thnkx for keeping thr attitude as true to the book with the sensual twist...witing for more..do hurry up wid ur update:)

good chapter, a better title for it would have been stories and games. Looking forward to the next one. Also, line 13 would read better if it was written as "I very much doubt that." As opposed to "I doubt that very much."