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The Eevee of dreams

There was a long lost scroll in an ancient pokemon forest. Unfortunately two humans found it. It said "A pokemon, greater than dreams will be born. An Eevee with powers to crush worlds. This Eevee will appear normal, but to find her simply provoke her to use her powers. Then hurt a loved one of hers and she will turn gold. And only until she gets revenge will she return back to normal."

I don't want to keep hearing your age. This bullshit needs to stop, no matter how old you are. If you're "only 10", then you should wait until you get older, or actually go to fucking school, to make threads. We don't lower standards because you're younger, we expect you to rise to the challenge. Now, if you're going to pull this crap again, I'm going to ban you.

There was a long lost scroll in an ancient pokemon forest. Unfortunately two humans found it. It said "A pokemon, greater than dreams will be born. An Eevee with powers to crush worlds. This Eevee will appear normal, but to find her simply provoke her to use her powers. Then hurt a loved one of hers and she will turn gold. And only until she gets revenge will she return back to normal."

I'm going to the rest bit by bit

And this is not a story, never will be one. Maybe an intro, but not even worth for one. Your writing style is horrible. Practice it using word, or write it on paper and show it to a teacher to rate it, then it's worth posting on PD.

Fine then, if you hate my work don't bother to look at it. You know, I came to this website with some hope that people would praise me with the slightest good bit and tell me how I should change it. I'm not asking my teacher to review it because in my class people think pokemon is a joke! I'm just asking if you could help me with my changes, that is not too much to ask for, is it?