This is something I've been wanting to review for a long time. I simply love this. It's both beautiful and haunting at the same time; you can really feel Maedhros and Maglor's pain. The two finding Elrond and Elros at the end is lovely. :)

Absolutely amazing! Your style makes this piece so effective. One thing was a little strange, though. You seem to have semicolons everywhere. "Two children staggering blindly ; nay, two adults, with old eyes, dead and empty eyes ; lost and haggard ; with faces pale and thin ; distraught with pain ; and blood-stained hands." This happens in a lot of places. I think commas would work much better.