I really like the idea of this story. I found it when I went looking for long SG1 stories to start reading. I gotta say though that I am struggling through reading this for one reason...you do an awful job distinguishing who is talking. ("True. Oh tomorrow, I have a surprise for you." Sam smiled.) Only Sam wasn't the one talking ! You are constantly doing that, putting the other person's reaction after the quote. I know it can be annoying constantly writing "he said, she said, etc..." but you really have to do it. I dare you to go out and find a real book where they never use the word said. Looking back over this chapter I don't think you ever used a word like: said,exclaimed, questioned, asked, etc...I know this story is over and done with but if you do any writing in the future please do not make the same mistake.