Tuesday, 13 January 2009

Martin ReedOutward appearanceBlack suit, open collar, striped sweater wobbling on the line dividing trendy and nerdy. His hair, too short to do anything with, too long to look tidy. He pushes his glasses up (slightly too big), staring intently at a document. His other arm is slung protectively around a backpack resting on his knees.

Inside informationMartin isn't reading the paper on tutoring strategies. He looks through it. All he can think about is the growing feeling that something is now not right in his eight month relationship. Trying – and failing – to identify what is wrong now he has come to a conclusion: he must break up with Emily before they both end up hurt.

What they are thinking or doingIt's not you it's me. No, he tells himself, you can't say that after eight months.

I just feel like our lives are going in different directions; I don't want to hurt you. Well, the last part is true...

The announcer's voice mumbles the next station. Martin wakes from his thoughts and shakes his head. Putting the paper away he thinks about work.

That lasts a second, then he begins to think about Emily. What happened? What am I not getting?

Stepping off the train he clumsily drops his wallet. Picking it up he goes to take his ticket out and instead pulls out the picture of Emily that he keeps there.

9 comments:

253 is a novel by Geoff Ryman from the 90s; it concerns the passengers on a full London Underground train. Each person is presented in the manner above, and aside from the framing words (outward appearance, inside info, etc) each person had their story at that moment told in 253 words. A piece of flash fiction has to be quite a short story, and I was thinking the other day about challenges and constrained writing and so on, and eventually that lead to this.

Check out 253 if you ever get the chance, it's a really good read, and what starts out with you thinking you are reading a collection of very short stories becomes something altogether stranger.

@Latharia: Thanks for the comments! I just had a random little idea, and decided to go with it. Quite happy with how things came out in the end, and made a difference from the usual sci-fi flavoured things that I would try.

Note to anyone else reading this: it occurred to me as I was thinking about the story the other day that the name I gave the character was a little familiar, and I couldn't place it. Eventually it dawned on me that one of the main characters in the webcomic Questionable Content is Marten Reed. He doesn't look like the character in this story though, at least not how I picture him in my head.