I was glancing over some of your other works and I have to say you are a really good writer. The flow and rhythm here was really solid. I also really liked the "Breath, Hush, Please" stanza and the last two stanzas about sewing. Great imagery right there. However, in the second stanza, the "Now is the time to feel distraught line" just didn't sound right. Also in the second stanza I would drop the "I'm not the only one" . That phrase just throws off the flow. Anyways, nice job, man.

now.. i really like reading this one.. it put me back in to a place from my memories.. whether it's the same place you wrote it from or not.. I'll never need to know... there's nothing i can say about this poem/song that hasn't already been said.. well done.. keep it up and thanks for writing