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Wednesday, August 20, 2014

The goose, the gander, and the eggs.

It was a warm Saturday afternoon, she watched as a gander stood strong and idle on the small island in the center of a pond located at the Trianon apartment complex in Topeka, Kan.

She noticed that the gander was unwavering in his stance on the east edge of the island as he watched for signs of approaching danger. Although most of his body remained still and motionless, he turned his neck at the slightest of sounds. The sounds of a cracking of a tree branch, the splashing of a fish and the honking of another goose all kept him alert and focused on the task of protecting his family. She noticed that the mother goose sat quietly several feet away and tended to their nest of unborn goslings.

At the north end of the pond, she noticed four mallards swimming and playing in the water. As the mallards began to make their way to the island, she noticed the gander quickly moved and stood directly in their path. Ignoring his warning, the mallards continued to approach the island. She noticed that when they were just inches away, the gander suddenly stood erect, spread his wings and began to hiss menacingly at them. Alarmed, the mallards formed a side-by-side line in front of him and quacked simultaneously.

As she watched for several minutes she noticed that the gander’s perseverance paid off. The mallards surrendered the fight, they left the pond and waddled over to join a group of mallards gathered under a tree.

Confident the threat had subsided, the gander walked over to his nest to ensure that the eggs and mother goose were unharmed.

She then watched as the gander went back to his initial spot on the edge of the island. As the sun began to set behind the trees she noticed that peace had returned to the pond once again.

14 comments:

Thank you for not completely tearing this apart! Haha. I like how you changed the perspective as if someone was actually watching the events unfold. I also like your new headline, very catchy! Good work, teammate!

Great job on the edits, Johanna! You added some necessary words (like including Kan. in the first paragraph), but you also kept the descriptive words that Emily wrote, which made the story clear and interesting!

Can we just take a moment to really appreciate the new headline, so cute and clever! Johanna I think you did a fine editing the story. Although I prefer the perspective of the original, I think you did a good job in maintaining its integrity and still wrote a great story.