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KiwiOliver says:KiwiOliver here with your RR:
Aww what a lovely chapter, an amazing perspective from a time that is not commonly looked at! We usually see Vic and Ted when they're moody teenagers and falling in love, I must say I really like this refreshing view on their childhood.
I think that Victoire thinks and acts (along with all of the characters) perfectly for her (their) age(s).
You've created (or at least adapted) amazingly realistic characters and put them in a plot that isn't over the top action adventure, but does have it's moments of worry. (You put that across brilliantly I might add.)
I particularly liked the bit where Teddy mentions the Discovery channel, then gets shot down :p It made me chuckle!
The flow was fine, it had a nice pace that kept it interesting all the time :) You didn't overdo it with details or underdo it with too much action, you created a perfect balance. :)
I liked the plot, it was a simple one 'A fun day out' but you managed to get me worried for Dom/Louis and by doing that, you managed to make me (or any reader) have a mix of feelings. I laughed at the bit with Teddy, I was happy when hearing about their day out, I was scared when they nearly drowned and I was proud for Vic at the end. :)
Overall a brilliant chapter, and I can't wait to read the other stories in this collection!
Feel free to re-request or request some of your other work, I really like your writing style so I'll probably be reading them anyway!
KO

Author's Response: What a lovely review! Thank you so much for an awesome review and getting back to me so quickly!

Thank you! I love writing things in childrens POV because they have such a refreshing and interesting view on things! Thanks so much, I did try really hard to keep them speaking and acting like real children, and keep them believable.

Yay the plot is good! I was worried the pace was too slow in some places, and then faster in others, so I'm so pleased it was alright and you liked the style of it! That was what I was trying to achieve!

Awww thank you so much for such a kind review!! You were so nice, and i'm really happy you liked it! :)