DeadReligion, you obviously aren't familair with Death Metal, Pornogrind, Goregrind, etc. My lyrics are tame in comparison to many of the bands that produce such a lyrics.

Now Surf, thank you for some critisism. That's what I was looking for. I'm not realy into changing the topic of the song, but I can see what you were going for when you said the nouns and verbs were boring. Next song I write I'll try to be more descriptive and use a bit less-simpleton words.

Death metal is terrible. People that need to sing about cutting girls' eyes out and fucking their empty sockets belong in a mental home. Not on stages as role models for children. They shouldn't be that close to children.

Long time reading, first time asker. I've got a question about multi-sectioned songs(example: Green Day's "Jesus of Suburbia," and "Homecoming") where it's like five songs put together into one larger bit.

I've been working on a few of them, and I'd like to bounce the lyrics to them off of people here, but I didn't want to seem like I was just trying to "get around" rules. It's seriously intended to be one multi-sectioned song, but I don't want to rub people the wrong way and think I'm a jerk.

So what's the thoughts on this? Do I perhaps have to crit one song for at least each section?

So question two; Is this forum strictly for just posting lyrics for critiquing or could a topic possibly consist of a discussion about certain items of interest? Like, concept albums or something. (cough, no I don't have anything specific in mind, what would make you think that?!, cough)