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Roots in Water says:Hello again! I'm here for another installment in the wonderful and shaky relationship between Charlie and Tonks!

Gah- I loved this chapter so much! I think that your writing style is absolutely fantastic for this story and you've managed to capture Charlie beautifully in this chapter. You could really sense his love for dragons in this chapter and I kind of fell in love with them as well. I hope that there will be more moments that we get to witness between him and the dragons.

However, I definitely do not want there to be another incident similar to this one. How awful! How fortunate that Charlie was sent there and was able to stop him from following through on his plan! But no matter how awful the situation was, I think that you did a great job writing it. There was plenty of tension and I liked how you didn't slow down the pace by describing exactly what Brackle was doing. The conversation later worked out a lot better to fully describe the situation because it allowed you to explain it from the perspective of someone who knew exactly what Brackle had tried to do without repeating any details from Charlie's description.

I also really enjoyed your description of the Reserve. Everything seems so natural there and your division between the possible jobs made sense. I suppose that one good thing about the incident is that Charlie is now on a Handler's radar.

I also liked the changes in the relationship between Tonks and Charlie. They're making mistakes but they're also learning. It was nice to see such a good moment in their relationship- here, I can believe that their relationship will last forever.

As I was reading the chapter I noticed a few mistakes that I'll quickly point out. To begin, with the phrase "have chocked on it" I believe you meant "choked". As well, with "a Liondragon. An older girl" I think that you should make it into one sentence by removing the period because the "an older girl" sentence is more of a fragment than a sentence in and of itself, since you used "who". As well, I think that the sentence "Then the second" would flow better if you took out the "then" and added a "dragon" after "second".

All in all, I think that you're continuing to do a great job with this story. If you have trouble with first person, it doesn't show in this chapter! I look forward to reading the next chapter. Great work!

Author's Response: Hi darling!! Haha I love the way you address them, shaky and wonderful feels just right!

I'm so happy you liked this chapter! It's funny, I'm having a lot I mixed reactions from readers. Mainly because there isn't much Tonks Charlie. But it was/is super important to me to show just how much Charlie loves his dragons.

I absolutely plan on writing more about the Reservation! This was by far one if my favorite things to write. For the house cup challenge, my challenge piece is very similar to this and I think I just may have a bit of an obsession with writing about these things ;)

Yay I'm really pleased that it worked out with how Jones explain what the man was doing as opposed to slowing down during the Charlie Brackle scene. I tried to get it all out there at the beginning but it just didn't feel right. And it always surprised me what a perceptive reader you are. The fact that you even noticed I had two ways to go about that, and agreed with the way I did, just makes me so happy because most people don't pick up on things like that.

Thank you taking the time to point out the mistakes! I'll go through and fix those right now. You've absolutely made my day, darling! Well, numerous days. The one where I first read this, and now when I'm replying to it :P. It seems harder and harder lately to get honest feedback, and I hope you know how much I appreciate your reviews ♥

And! Yes! All 25! I finished it one night when I was laying in bed, and then keep up with the new ones. And I never review on my phone because it's so hard to get auto correct to play nice, which is why I was a meany and didn't review them at the time. I will absolutely back track and review all of them, but if you ever have any chapter that you're particularly worried about you can always PM me and tell me which one, then I can review that one out of order. Otherwise, you'll just get random surprise reviews, mwahaha. But yeah, that's why I'm not using that story for swapping. It would absolutely feel like cheating! Haha