Wow, you really have taken creepy to a whole new level! In the books Malfoy is one of them characters I kind of love to hate, you know? The story just would not be the same with out him. Yet here in this story he just creeps me out completely! You've built his character up so well from the canon but you've just taken it so much further so really well done!!

Aww, I actually really love Zabini in this chapter. I found him really cute. He really seems to have a thing for Astoria but then so does Malfoy. I liked the way you contrasted Malfoys twisted want for her with Zabini's hero-like protection of her honour. I think that's what made me like him more.

Emily disappointed me in this chapter. I really can't believe what she's doing. I'm on Astoria and Scorpius' side all the way! Which brings me to the lovliness of Scorpius himself. Gah he's definitely my favourite character, you've done an amazing job of him!

I thought the story flowed quite well and you have built the story up fantasticly! The Greengrass family secret... I'm dying to know!!! And you've really sparked my interest with the fathers business - there's no way that's going to be good! All the twists and turns throughout, yeah just great so go you!

I haven't really got any CC on this chapter, I thought you wrote the story so well!

Well done again!
Lauren

Author's Response: Hey!

Thanks for stopping by again with this chapter, it means alot. Bwhahah, I don't really try to make my characters so creepy (Malfoy men in particular) but it just sort of flows that way. And its fun. >:D
Oh, I was never really a fan of Draco until I started reading fanfics. I thought that what I had learned about him from canon based on how I needed this story to be would be oh-too fun to tweak and add onto.
I've tried to keep his haughty arrogance and his ignorance in here as well. But that creepiness.it took me a long time to get that just right. I imagine that Draco is one of the characters that I simply LOVE/Hate. He's sort of addictive! ;)
Ah, Zabini! You'll see much more of him in this story if you had wanted to keep reading on. He is everything that Draco isn't and I think it really showed with his regard for Astoria, whom we know Draco wants for himself.
For whatever reason. :p
Emily disappointed me in this chapter as well but I wanted to play on how she and Astoria are so different. Astoria barely escaped but her sister is alot wilder than she'll ever be adn its sort of off-putting.
Hahaha, Scorpy! Its so hard not to like a big, overprotective big brother that hates purebloods, right? Hehehehe. ;)
Thanks so much for coming back! I really wasn't too sure with this story, I've never felt as confident with it as I have with some of my others. Its just so complicated!
You find out more about the Greengrass family secret and her father's work in the next few chapters. I warn you, its not pleasant. :)
:D Thanks for coming back again, if you want to check this out more, feel free! I'll be happy to hop on over to your page too, just to gush about how awesome you are. ;)
Much love,
Gabbie