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Power of the Earth errata:
Location : Edit
514 I cam make it -> I can make it
1430 added another another feature -> added another feature
5325 doctor’s note that says say -> doctor’s note that says
6436 her sparing partner -> her sparring partner
8823 AG breaking is at -> AG braking is at
9654: bottom of the earth moving -> bottom of the earthmover

1509, 2990 Melaine -> Melanie? (consistency)
1932 others, like, you -> others, like you,
2018 Airlock -> Aristillus
3949 an ‘Burning Man art car’ -> a ‘Burning Man art car’
4127 it is you you who -> it is you who
4236 before desert was served -> before dessert was served
4658 changed two two meters -> changed to two meters
5463 you like like hell -> you look like hell
5570 blame this one me -> blame this on me
6403 a dayoh, ago. -> a day ago.
7044 in the surrounding the tunnels -> in the surrounding tunnels
7174 That tactic that had worked -> That tactic had worked
9442 rescued nearly a million (continuity, inconsistent with other counts)
9506 andwalked -> and walked
9679 T is what-> That is what

Chapter 17: “John titled his head back” -> “John tilted his head back”
Chapter 17: “we don’t even know if we there are any air scrubbers” – “we don’t even know if there are any air scrubbers”

[Also, and this isn’t really a typo, but in that section there is some serious head-jumping going on that is distracting… At one point, we seem to be in Blue’s head “Blue had no idea if this was the first time…”, and then we’re in John’s “John thought for a moment”, and then back to Blue… I guess it’s supposed to be Blue’s perspective, but I’d probably change the “John thought for a moment” to make that more clear. And then “John was patient – more patient than Blue would be”. Very subtle I admit.]

(Will pass over the ones that others caught so far, but apologies if I repeat any)

Team:

* right at the beginning, roughly loc 49 on kindle — “He turned back to John” should be “He turned back to DOUG”.

* right after that, “Sargent” should be “Sergeant”

* Paragraph beginning with “by the time the sound” should have a comma after “later”

For continuity (to avoid retconning and to slim the char cast), would it make sense to replace Samuel with Matt Dewitt?

* roughly loc 187 on kindle, “post docs” should either be one word or hyphenated. (It’s hyphenated later on in at least 2 instances)

* Duncan’s role/tone/demeanor seems much more like that of Rex (especially given that they’re puppies at this point, and should be even more childlike), given a re-read in view of Causes. Similarly, “Cody” might be a better fit for Duncan, and then these interactions with John at least give a basis for why the 4 specific dogs who are traveling with John in Causes are doing so — they’ve had specific interactions with him before.

* Again, for continuity, shouldn’t we see the referred-to “Nick” somewhere in Causes or Powers (he may be in Powers, but I’m not yet through it)

* roughly loc 373 “forced himself to breath” should be “forced himself to breathE”

* “dog[s]/Dog[s]” capitalized inconsistently between this and Causes/Powers

* Doug/Dog is a bit close, spelling-wise, maybe consider renaming the character (as he doesn’t reappear) just to make the clarity a bit better

* roughly loc 388 “That’s gamma” should be capital-G “Gamma”.

* roughly loc 409, after “blood spilling from his mouth” there’s a sentence fragment (“Next to him”) that shouldn’t be there, looks like it was repeated accidentally.

* roughly loc 416 — “an orange flash” — Max is described as red, not orange; by contrast, Blue is described as having some orange markings.

* roughly loc 423, sentence beginning “He was dead where he stood,” given the previous 2 sentences has “his” referring to John, consider replacing that first “He” with “The cop” or “The HomeSec Cop” for clarity for the subsequent pronouns to refer back to. Similar issues (but not as severe) with subsequent paragraph and pronouns referring to both John and the shot cops.

* roughly loc 444 “emplace” seems a bit awkward, instead of “place”.

* roughly loc 451 “John slammed one door, shut, then the other” — first comma should be removed.

* roughly loc 459 “then the crumpled fell off the hood of the truck” — noun missing after “crumpled”

* roughly loc 467 “gun fire” should be one word

* roughly loc 473 “seat-belt” should be one word or two words, not hyphenated (least common).

* roughly loc 502 “the world went dark” should be “The world went dark” (capitalization) to be consistent with the subsequent sentences.

* roughly loc 510 “window sill” should be one word.

Causes:
Chapter 21 — “Bosphoros” should be “BosphorUs” or “Bosporus” depending on the transliteration.

Chapter 54, header (and some others) — capitalization — “bridge of AFS The wookkiee” should have the B and W capitalized, consider making the “T” lowercase.

Chapter 67 — “Las Ang-” Mark snorted. Should be “LOs Ang-”

Chapter 71 — “armorered. And cut a check” — should be “armorED”.

Chapter 74 — “engineering Dogs” should be “engineerED Dogs”.

“Icarcus” in multiple chapter headings already caught.

Chapter 84 — “your second cousin is destined to the throne” — awkward phrasing. Seems like a verb is missing between “to” and “the”.

Chapter 92 — “and Rex. They remembered.” That “Rex” should be “Max”.

Chapter 98 — “bolder, and saw a man on all fours.” That “bolder” should be “boUlder”.

Chapter 102. — “Rex was dead. His friend. His pack-mate. **His younger brother.**” — “younger brother” is not consistent unless it’s speaking purely metaphorically, as Rex is G2 and Max/Blue are G1, and this is not from Duncan’s POV. I’d suggest replacing it with “nephew”.

Doing this from memory, but at about the 30% mark, when the government is in conflict with the moonfolk and have a confrontation over the AG ships, and shoot them every 30 seconds, it is described that the remaining crew take their one dead comrade with them, but two comrades were actually shot.

Ch. 61 — “just a petit bourgeoisie version of the police state” — spelling-wise, it should be “petitE bourgeoisie” but bourgeoisie is a noun, so grammatically it should be “petit bourgeois”. Also, French is a stupid fucking language for stupid people.

Ch. 72 — “Ashoke hoped . . . ” –> “ASHOK hoped”

Ch. 84 — “three minutes out. Breath. Three minutes was more than enough time . . .” — I think “Breath” should be “Breathe” here, just the noun sounds odd and jarring.

Ch. 92 — “indicating all or Aristillus” –> “indicating all OF Aristillus”

Ch. 112 — “reached the jersey barriers in seconds.” — Capital-J “Jersey” to be consistent with how you use it in The Team and later in this chapter (or make them all lower case, but don’t vary it)

Ch. 155, final sentence is just “How much worse can it?” — you need a verb (i.e., “GET”)

Chs. 156, 165 — chapter headers, “feedlot” is the first non-numerical word, should be capitalized to Feedlot

Ch. 165 — “Lemons followed the major and his scouts” –> “LeMMons”

Chapter 176 — your paleontology timeline is WAY off. “Animals evolved. Life reached a height, of sorts, as ninety- ton brachiosauruses walked across land that would later be North America and Africa. . . . Thus was the crater Aristillus born, ***1.3 billion years before humanity came into existence*** . . . “a billion years passed, dinosaurs died off and mammals rose.” No. Just no. Brachiosaurus lives in the late Jurassic, about 154 MYA, so you’re off by an order of magnitude in implying that brachiosaurii were walking around when the crater was made. Even after that billion years passed, brachiosaurus 300 MYA, brachiosaurus still wasn’t going to appear for another 150 MYA or or so — about as long as it’s now been extinct.

By contrast, 1.3 BYA was the Ectasian period of the mesoproterozoic era. We didn’t have dinosaurs, but we had just gotten multi-cellular organisms who had just figured out sexual reproduction in the form of some red algae. — https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ectasian

— Also, should be no space between “ninety-” and “ton”

Ch. 185 – “Yes. It’s barbaric. *T* is what I was looking for.” –> “T” should be “That”
— Father Alex shrugged, as if to say, “the words are coming” –> capitalization “**The** words are coming”

Causes of Seperation
Chapter 58 page 233: the proper procedure to bust open a door is not to ram your shoulder into it like usually depicted on tv but to kick as close to the lock with your foot as possible. eg: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3Qu8iHkBHGg

Chapter 32: sneak in a government a government by the back door
Repeated words: “a government”

Chapter 40: even get a callback from our state rep
Wrong word: “callback” should be “call back” (unless the reps are
programs and a callback is a lambda which a constituent can enqueue —
which would be amazing)
Chapter 48: imply an eight to ninety percent drop
Wrong word: “eight” should be “eighty”

1) at 32% mark on my Kindle (32 percent through the novel), in either the 46th or 47th chapter, at “location 2490″ on my Kindle (whatever that means), I spotted this:
The tunnel on this this side of the …. was laid out in the…”

2) in 48th chapter, location 2571 on Kindle, at 33 percent through novel, I wrote down something garbled (i.e. I can’t read my own writing), but it’s a sentence that says something like “Albert got used at all age wall screen” – NOT SURE what I spotted that was wrong – but just checked it in the print book of chapter 48, and confirmed it’s a sentence about Albert Lai, but it may be significant that I cannot find the same typo in the print version of chapter 48.

3) in chapter 51, at the start of chapter
“Mike gunned the throttle and raced the surface transporter through the along the paths course by the Wookkiee.”

The problem here: You can write either “through the” or “along the paths” of the Wookkiee – but not both.

4) location 3017 at 39 percent through the Kindle book
“He ignored it and spun the wheel a dozen times nd then pushed against the inner door.
Problem: typo, you meant “and” but it says “nd.”

5) Chapter 55, location 3063, at 39 percent thru Kindle:
Bert j egged the controls and the view swung two miles left, nsthen one meta forward.”
(Again, I can’t quite read everything I wrote down, but there was a problem at the “nsthen” or whatever that was in that sentence.

6) Chapter 57, location 3280, 42 percent through Kindle

“Bert saw the the Earth governments had the AG drive…”
The problem: a duplicate “the the”
(My own problem is I can’t read my scrawled notes, so I am not sure what Bert “saw” or what that word was, but that word was OK.)

7) an example of the lack of italics but the use of /italics/ instead came in chapter 57 at 42percent, location 3280 on kindle:
/Of course/ they’d reverse engineered the…

8) at 42 percent into kindle, at location 3292
And if even if that was ww…? from his ??re??
The problem: if even if
The solution: probably, delete the first if

9) 42nd percent, location 3304 , probably around the 57th chapter
And him and Darcy dead, or in separate underground jail cells for their rest of their lives…
the problem: two theirs, when you need a “the” before rest, not “their.”

10) location 3506, 45 percent thru Kindle
“You’re an introvert who only deals with people as much as you have to to get your projects done.”
Problem: duplicate “to to.” Delete one.