ATTALIKA(POEM)

This is the story of a princess whose eyes sparkled as the light of the sunshine. Silence speaks her verse, sitting at the highest tower of her palace, serene in glory…she just dreams… Her life bubbles vibrant with vigour. She sets free her fantasies and travels high through the invisible ocean of skies, gallops through the clouds and her infectious happiness makes her shine like a star, her tenderness touches all the souls…Her mystical charm and her believe that world is as beautiful as her imagination, plays hide and seek…

My poem ATTALIKA is the world seen through the eyes of this princess……

There is thin line dividing the situation in this saga of a lost princess whose eyes sparkled even more than her tiara…. whether if she is missing someone to convince that he isn’t a liar or its her delusion about all to distinguish them chivalrous. … verse aptly describes that her divine aura always indicated her presence….the halo and gleam in her eyes as told seems to be cosmic and divine, …. I feel so carried away now that if some princess like this exists, then I should carry a rummage….. I also pray if she keeps on dreaming her reverie then that should transpire…… it is obvious that she has to have misgivings but could have been penned further without leaving readers to speculation. ..so that it is affirmed that she discovers the truth.. because her prince charming is there to cuddle and pamper more than ever.. to tell he isn’t a liar……. then doggerel could have given a space for her prince charming…..

THE POETIC STRUCTURE HAS BEEN REFURBED AND IS INNOVATIVE IT SEEMS…WHERE IN NORMALLY THE PUNCHLINES ARE DEPLOYED IN THE END OF EVERY STANZA. BUT HERE THEY ARE USED BEFORE THE ENDS OF EACH STANZA. I THINK IT’S THE ONLY KIND OF ODE IN THE WORLD EVER WRITTEN ….
coming back to few suggestions if these lines could have been so, emphasising the subtle changes in the princess conviction … it could have been then instrumental how she felt due to her misgivings in context to her perceptive illusions… which would finally be ordained surging delight, since someone could represent all of her opinions come true…they are as follows. ..
और हस पडती है भोली सी मासूम वो राजकुमारी…..की सदाये।
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और कुछ हस पडती है भोली सी मासूम वो राजकुमारी…..की सदाये।
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और बेबस हस पडती है भोली सी मासूम वो राजकुमारी…..की सदाये।
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दरअसल अब हस पडती है भोली सी मासूम वो राजकुमारी…..की सदाये ।