tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1839572857333032782.post4193995745910015911..comments2017-01-15T06:25:28.819-05:00Comments on Magician's Integration: Chapter 1: Movement and StrifeXenophon Hendrixhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13993059147024069203noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1839572857333032782.post-11927795549898822182009-12-11T00:35:23.788-05:002009-12-11T00:35:23.788-05:00great star to a new book, including some recap and...great star to a new book, including some recap and a good intro. and while i know you have stopped updating i will post on a few things<br /><br />the main thing that drives a story forward is conflict, currently there is the conflict of personalities in the one body, and conflict between Aurthur and his momjtg05jnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1839572857333032782.post-67044765778321308722009-09-14T14:47:24.048-04:002009-09-14T14:47:24.048-04:00I found your website from http://forums.sennadar.c...I found your website from http://forums.sennadar.com/<br /><br />Thanks for continuing to share your wonderful gift with us.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1839572857333032782.post-88368272065756222222009-02-15T04:51:00.000-05:002009-02-15T04:51:00.000-05:00I've read that police departments are all rife wit...I've read that police departments are all rife with leaks, but I could be wrong about that. Also, the way I imagined it in my head, the teen girl had talked to the press herself. Again, strictly from reading, I've heard that the press can be right on top of this stuff from their contacts with the police and hospitals and stuff.Xenophon Hendrixhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13993059147024069203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1839572857333032782.post-52847122660568415112009-02-13T15:29:00.000-05:002009-02-13T15:29:00.000-05:00One thing I've thought about is that I cannot see ...One thing I've thought about is that I cannot see how the Police would allow the information from the girl about Demons to leak to the press. She's been completely destroyed as a credible witness in any prosecution. Even Arthur's Mum thinks she's on drugs (but then again she thinks everyone's on drugs).Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1839572857333032782.post-77182085103982376042009-02-10T14:41:00.000-05:002009-02-10T14:41:00.000-05:00I can see how Auther would have a problem. Taking...I can see how Auther would have a problem. Taking a life would be quite a trama to put on a person so young, even if it was to help another out and save your family.daymonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1839572857333032782.post-13611808465824621922009-02-08T19:55:00.000-05:002009-02-08T19:55:00.000-05:00Christmas falls on the solstice on Arthur's node, ...Christmas falls on the solstice on Arthur's node, so Boxing Day was on the twenty-second.Xenophon Hendrixhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13993059147024069203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1839572857333032782.post-22757123643089562202009-02-08T16:33:00.000-05:002009-02-08T16:33:00.000-05:00Intriguing.NB: Would the day after boxing day be t...Intriguing.<BR/><BR/>NB: Would the day after boxing day be the 27th, or is the calendar different in that universe?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1839572857333032782.post-36623697880600658532009-02-08T10:58:00.000-05:002009-02-08T10:58:00.000-05:00excellent start, I have waited for this story for ...excellent start, I have waited for this story for a while, and I would love to see a lot more<BR/><BR/>I have to agree on the newspaper article though, but as far as reactions to the event, I think you have them spot on, in theory (Arthur upset, Ursus self-defense and "I" in the middle)excelerentnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1839572857333032782.post-8011386695982389592009-02-07T02:15:00.000-05:002009-02-07T02:15:00.000-05:00I rewrote the sentence, GroovyJ, thanks.As for the...I rewrote the sentence, GroovyJ, thanks.<BR/><BR/>As for the objections about the newspaper story, I was considering that the witness wasn't very credible. She was a teenager talking about demons as if they actually existed.<BR/><BR/>I was also considering the fact that Ursus finished off a guy that was down and out. That's still illegal, even if the fight started out as self-defense.<BR/><BR/>Demons, sorcerers, someone pummeled to death, human sacrifice--my guess was that the press would play up the lurid details, but I admit that I could be wrong.Xenophon Hendrixhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13993059147024069203noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1839572857333032782.post-67218473527413047612009-02-06T21:28:00.000-05:002009-02-06T21:28:00.000-05:00One very minor criticism - I think "After lunch, I...One very minor criticism - I think "After lunch, I put a small table to use as a nightstand beside my bed" is pretty awkwardly phrased. "After lunch, I put a small table beside my bed to use as a nightstand" feels far cleaner.<BR/><BR/>I also have to agree with Mark about the Newspaper story - it seems very implausible that it would be framed that way. Satanic paraphernalia and a rescued damsel should be more than enough to turn assailant to hero in the newspaper, even if not in the minds of the police.GroovyJhttp://members.shaw.ca/groovyjnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1839572857333032782.post-72554226259877478682009-02-05T14:22:00.000-05:002009-02-05T14:22:00.000-05:00Glad to see the sequel is started!I am surprised b...Glad to see the sequel is started!<BR/><BR/>I am surprised by the slant in the newspaper article. I would have slanted it more like "Unknown Knight Saves Doomed Damsel", and played up the part about her captor saying that he was going to killer her as part of a demonic ritual, and that he was armed, and that he had apparently already murdered two other people. The term assailant would have never been in my article. Any reference would refer to rescuer or equivalent. Not only is it more factual, but it would sell more papers. You see murders all the time, but you don't see heroic rescues every day.<BR/><BR/>Also, in Texas, intervening to defend an innocent victim is considered self defense, even if your own life was not in danger before intervening, and is a solid defense. I think this is true of most states and countries.<BR/><BR/>Finally, the other personalities should play up the heroism. An innocent girl is alive because of his actions, and he should feel proud, not guilty.Mark Mayhughnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1839572857333032782.post-35457910303753682672009-02-05T09:33:00.000-05:002009-02-05T09:33:00.000-05:00great that you've started m8please do go onthanksh...great that you've started m8<BR/>please do go on<BR/>thanks<BR/><BR/>hamhamsolohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16739425743318888570noreply@blogger.com