Reviews

Please do not be nervous, you have nothing to be it for. this is puuurrrrrreefect.
Write as you wish, I'm sure you will still have a sea of fans xD
Anyway. interesting as always. I like it and I like it a lot.

Author's response

Aw thank you so much for your encouragement!! =)
Big Thank You for the feedback. Ecstatic to know it held your interest.

For the voting pool:
You already gave the answer to yourself, don’t you think?
Let me quote: …to the thin line of yellow ochre peering between the alleys of the concrete jungle jim…. All that’s left for you to do is change the spelling here.
I suppose this is the one of the original pictures you already painted out for yourself while doing the sketches for this story.
So stay with it! Don’t get insecure about misspelling, misreading or misinterpreting.
Your story, your choice, your joy in writing!

Enough for today, maybe more tomorrow.

Author's response

Thank you for responding to my pool and catching that typo. I probably should recheck this chapter overall. :3 I'll leave the title as is for now, but I'm thinking I'm going to pull some more elements of Jungle Jim in at least in the setting descriptions. :)

Looking forward to hearing more feedback from you tomorrow or whenever you have time =)

“It is tomorrow.”
I couldn’t resist, so sorry again, for today.
You never cease to surprise me. You came up with something entirely else than expected.
So here I am, stunned again.
Completely different take on than I imagined.
Your introducement (hey, hick speech) of the characters is rather rash. Rash and rushed - like in a VIDEO clip. And just for this I could kiss you. The way you are playing with these (for some well known – for others not so) pictures. Using these scenes for your scenery. And plotting…as well. So watch me, brought down to my knees , pleading for more.
So don’t be nervous – I think you are a natural .

Author's response

Hahaha! I seriously cracked up laughing when I read your first line. Priceless :)

I am so relieved and excited you enjoyed this! I had a feeling this fic would go in a different direction than people thought. Not sure where they thought it would go, but yeah.

Again thank you so much! More will come. I just have to make sure to proofread a bit more ;)

I like it. Like in really like it.
I like the way you write and I like the way you are creating the outline for this story.
There is one thing about it made me go hmmmm...
Why don't they recognice each other?

Author's response

It makes me smile to know you like it and especially the way I write =) Thank You!

Short answer it's the drugs. Longer, better answer will be explored in the next chapters. They will eventually recognize each other though ;)