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tonyv

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First, re the title (the funny). I saw a commercial for a television show, and it went like this: "He's six-foot-three, and she's three-foot-six. Some people might say their relationship is taboo!" They're a married couple, and it shows him carrying her in like a toddler and placing her, seated, on the bar. That's the first thought that entered my head when I saw the title. But on a more serious note, there's a loveliness to the title I can't quite express.

Now, as for the poem, it's a lyrical masterpiece, a lovely read. Don't change a word.

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dcmarti1

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Interests:Poetry of form and/or meter/syllable. Topics: wide open! Interests also include Social Democrat & Green politics, world peace, and Linux, with occasional posts on The Guardian Newspaper. A bit of an Anglophile, but from Alfred to Henry 7. Becoming very interested in Baltic history.

Badge, I really enjoy the way the title plays like a whimsical grace note on the poem's narrative. Delightful! I confess to getting tripped up by "back" at the end of stanza 1 - I know there is an implied antecedent, but I can't come up with a plausible guess. It does not damage my enjoyment of this poem's vivid simplicity.