Wednesday, July 19, 2017

IELTS Writing Task 2: two-part question

Here's an example of a two-part question that a student shared recently:

Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?

Notice the two separate questions: Is this...? and What consequences...?

It's very easy to plan your 4-paragraph essay structure for this kind of question: introduction, answer the first question, answer the second question, conclusion. Now you just need to plan some ideas.

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Hi simon, this is my idea.
Introduction
1. Parents spoil their children very much.
2. This will have a negative effect on children education.
First answer
3. This is a negative way to raise children.
4. Firstly: spoiling children can make children selfish
5. Example: they will become aggressive if they can’t get the toy that they want.
6. Secondly: spoiling will make them can’t make friend with other children
7. Finally: children will not obey the rule and tradition.
Second answer
8. spoiled children will easy to commit a crime when they become elder.
9. Explain: there are lots of rules and complex situation in workplace
10. Example: people are easy to be corrupt if they selfish.
11. Result: a bad consequence for spoiled children.
Conclusion
12 Stop to spoil children for their ultimate happiness.

Introduction:
- Parents tend to spoil their children by giving them what they want and do
- I would argue that this attitude is not appropriate to educate their children and cause several negative effects in the future

Paragraph 2:
- This parenting style that allow their children do anything is not the best way to bring up them.

Paragraph 3:
- There are several drawbacks of this educating method for their children in the future

Conclusion:
In conclusion, I strongly believe that this education style is not good way to educate their infants and leads to disadvantage for them when they get older.

here are some ideas for the topic:
Intro
1. It is not the best way to raise children
2. making children more egoist
3. spoiling their education once child know that he/she can control his/her parents by showing mood if he doesn't get the desired toy or item
4. budget wise, it's very destructive to parents, they have to work harder and longer hours to be able to provide money to buy stuff for their children.
5. thus spending even lesser time than before with their children, thus more isolation and poor relationships, no parent-child bonding

6, its effect can be seen in the society, many those types of kids will bring damages to the society too
not obeying general rules, stealing things since they could not get what they wanted and they don't have money to buy them, therefore they will start stealing, shoplifting.

as a result, damage to the person as a whole, damage to society, financial damage.

Indulging children is often a common parenting problem in most of the modern life. I believe that this trend put some adverse impacts on children while they are growing and also results in long-term consequences for them.

There are various reasons why I think over indulgence is bad habit for children. Firstly, it is possible that over caring parents causes delay to the process in which children learn important life skills. These skills vary between different age groups. For example, many parents still spoon-feed their children until they are five to six years old, the development stage in which children should eat by themselves. There is also a common practice that parents assist their pre-adolescent children in taking a bath or shower. Because of these practices, children may fail to acquire basic personal hygiene skills at the right time. Secondly, when parents give everything to their children they become dependent on them. However, this over-dependence causes a great risk in development of these children, because when they don’t get anything that they want then normally they indulge into criminal activities like stealing money etc., and the outcome of this maybe jail or fine imposing by police members.

There are many other risks associated with this indulgence of parents. This over-dependence makes teenagers unable to live independently. For example, when they enter into college life and live in hostel, then it’s really hard for them to manage their personal chores, financial work and many other things, just because their parents don’t put pressure on them to handle these things during their development age. Furthermore, it is a norm that over-indulgent parents are more lenient, and do not give any punishment while they commit some mistakes and during their misbehavior. As a result, children miss the opportunity to learn from mistakes, which may cause their problem-solving skills, which is really appreciated in today’s environment.

In conclusion, its seems to me that over indulgence produce a number of unfavorable effects on children, and due to this children loss many opportunities to learn many life related skills.

Ideas.
q1. It can be both good and bad for children. When children are given whatever they want, it can make children feel listened and loved by their parents, which is essential for building a healthy self-esteem. However, since their wants and needs are always fulfilled, they may miss the time to learn how to deal with unsatisfaction and rejection that are undeniable when they get older.
q2. If parents keep this type of educating for their children, it may have a detrimental impact on both personal and societal level. When children don't know how to cope with the situations that didnn't fulfill their needs, they may feel frustrated, being lowered self-esteem. Also, the consequences can be harmful to community. Some children can be aggressive to achieve what they want and may also take part in crimes such as stealing stuffs.

1/
i. introduction
ii. It's not good for children and cause bad affect when they grow up
2/
i Not good when they in developing characteristic phrase
ii firstly, prevent their ability to join society especially group work
iii eg. they don't wanna share anything and try to get everything instantly
iv they don't have discipline
v they come selfish
3/
i build bad behavior in elder
ii don't try to work hard to get what they want, just want material with any price and follow instant happiness
iii newspaper many cases of violence in adult age caused by mature want to have luxury stuff immediately
iv not god when child grow up and it set up bad behavior follow during their life
4/ conclusion

1)Introduction
It is true that many parents spoil their children in these days. I would argue that it is not a good way to bring up a child, and it may lead to some potential problems.

4)Conclusion
In conclusion, it is not appropriate for parents to accept all of the requirements of their children, and children growing up under the path of ease is more likely to face difficulties in the future.

2)question 1
No, isn't a good way. You shouldn't buy anything they want you can't afford it. Sometimes they don't know what's good for them. If they fight with other kids or broke down the window, we should tell them what can do what can't do

3)question 2
Selfish, no considerable, think everything is easy to get, frustration, hard to live with the group

children are the foundation of our nation burgeoning future and we must bread them well to build a generation that can depend on themselves
children breading is a difficult mission as we must be aware how to build their personalities and how to make them depend on themselves to continue their life

their are a lot of parents that spoon-feed their children. they believe that satisfying their children make them happy though the opposite is happening. children become angry if their demands not done and this generate selfishness in their souls. Another problem arises from spoon-feeding children which is children become more violent as what they ask they need it in any way without caring of any considerations.

breading young is like engraving on the stone we must be aware of our children breading as the consequences will be resounding and can't be solved. one of these consequences is when the child get young he can't take any responsibility on his shoulders, he will become selfish and not caring of others only himself he will fail in his life as he what he had to take his demands easily without learning that he must know how to depend himself for getting what he want. he will be useless for his family, society and his country he will get lazy and make other people get away from him as he always want and never ever thinking of the idea of giving

Body para 1 -
Fulfilling all the demands of the children is not acceptable parenting style As it would bring deterimental effects on character traits of child's personality as well as his future adult life.Children need to follow a routine to establish discipline and responsibility in their daily life.for example,a healthy meal and a bed time routine keeps children fit both physically and mentally .If parents do not set boundaries and monitor their children activities ,it could compromise the safety and essential learning skills in the young age .

Body para 2,
Children who are spoiled at a young age by their parents face difficulties as they grow up .With a controlling and stubborn behaviour , their reputation among their peers is tarnished and they may suffer from relationship problems and isolation .Moreover,their attitude at a workplace ,where teamwork and flexibility is required ,may become hinderance in their successful career ,leading to frustration when their desires are not fulfilled.thus,in order to prepare children for future life parents must not succumb to all the wishes of the child.

Intro
- some parents tend to purchase items or let children join activities in order to children's demand.
- As a result of this adults behaviour could affect some negative impact on children's life.

P1
- There are several reasons why this idea is not acceptable.
- Children become demanding and easy to get tantrum.
- For example, toddlers screams at shopping centre.
- Psychologically young children learn how to control adults.
- Children's demand become financial pressure for parents.

P2
-As a result of the idea, there are some disadvantages.
-Firstly (Mentally)children could be unable to control their mind,
-they are unable to adopt in grope such as school,,,
-Secondly (Physically) children might become aggressive.
-Finally (Financially) children might steal from friends, commit thieve.

Conclusion
-In conclusion, the idea of this parenting is not health behaviour,therefore it would definitely give a negative impact on children's life.

In recent years, it has become increasingly popular that some parents spend their money on all their children’s needs, and let them do whatever they like. In my opinion, it is a negative way to bring up and educate youngsters because this parenting style has a number of harmful effects on children when they grow up.
It is clear that attempting to meet all children’s needs and wants is a wrong parenting method because of various reasons. Parents who prefer this style have to work so hard that they can earn enough money to afford their children expected things. These products and services include even extremely high-cost ones, for example, expensive smartphones, tablets or international tours around the world. Unfortunately, the number of wealthy families in society is still limited. At the same time, those who are willing to let their sons and daughters do whatever they want may sooner or later realize that their decisions eventually lead to a negative impact on their loved children. In particular, youngsters tend to be addicted to video games or even drugs when their parents completely believe in them and ignore their activities.
In my view, if parents raise and educate their sons and daughters in this style, their childrent’s development will be affected in different ways. Youngsters could become lazier and lazier when they grow up because they are always thinking that they are still supported by their parents whether they work or not. These sons and daughters also tend to do risky and silly things because of being raised in the environment in which they are not controlled by their families. Therefore, these people, especially teenagers, could be associated with crimes, which causes social problems. At the same time, a few of them take responsibily for contributing to their society while a vast number of them merely wish to enjoy the social welfare.
In conclusion, it is unwise to raise children in the way that parents always provide their sons and daughters with whatever they ask for, and permit them to do everything they want. This parenting style influences youngsters negatively during their lives.

Planning:
Paragraph 1 : repeat topic- this is not appropriate upbringing and spark bad effect in the future.

Paragraph 2: 1-some amenities are not appropriate for their age, example: mobile phones
2- children become used to get a lot of pocket money, without observation
3- extra financial pressure on families, reduce the money spent on educational purposes.

Paragraph 3: 1- can't be independent in future
2-wont appreciate what they have
3- won't understand value of money.

Paragraph 4: repeat introduction.

Essay:

Nowadays, some parents have a tendency to purchase everything their children want. This is absolutely not an appropriate way of upbringing and could cause bad effects on children's future.

Spending a large amount of money on accommodating children's latest wish list is not a stable way of upbringing due to several reasons. Firstly, some products that children ask to have are not appropriate for their age and can spark harmful effects on their health. Mobile phones are a great example of this that parents are asked to buy even by preschoolers. Secondly, children become accustomed to get a lot of pocket money from their parents who want their children to fit in with their peers at school and are unaware to observe the way the money is spent. Finally, it puts extra financial pressure on families, so they have to reduce the amount of money which should be spent on more important aspects of their children's life.

This style of upbringing could have serious implications for children's future. One important result of this is the fact that they cannot be autonomous in the future because of their past parental extra support and consumerism culture. In addition to that, children would not appreciate what they have and always want something new. Moreover, the value of money and the way it should be spent would never be understood and when they grow up they are unable to manage their financial situation.

In conclusion, buying everything children want is not a good parenting way and children's future would be negatively impacted by long lasting consequence of it.

Is it OK to answer the first question in introduction? Then use two main paragraph to answer question two. At last, the conclusion.
For example:

Some parents give their children whatever they want to have, and allow them to do whatever they want to do. I don't think it's a sensible way to raise children.
Main paragraph one: the negative results of giving children whatever they want to have...
Main paragraph two: the negative results of letting them do whatever they want to do...
Conclusion: In conclusion, there are many adverse effects of raising children like this. Parents should not ....

4 paragraph essay structure
yes, it is bad way on parenting
intro:
it is true that some parents are giving too much and didn't discipline appropriate on nurturing so that it is shape child with bad character in future.
1st para :

Inappropriate parenting style causing defect character on child’s mindset\
e.g. bad temped /easily angry/ using tricky let the parents buying the things
Psychological prospects:
Culturing the greedy heart / wasting things
spoil / disobedience- the more parents giving the more the kids wants
Consequences lose the parents’ discipline for children at right time.
Also make a bad example for getting old kids.
2nd para
it will be causing child lose some ability on right altitude on everything or right lifestyle in the future
e.g. independence - too depend on the parents support money for living in the foresee future
lose some society skill l- don’t liking to normal work or hard working
conclusion :
Even though, parents style is not always right in raising the children consequence make the child lose basic society skill and unhealthy psychological in the future.

P.S. trying to give up the own way, following the Simon’s 4 paragraphs although this plan make me spent half and one hours. (Signed)
Still worried which vocabulary is the command word??

This is my essay. Could you grade my essay, please? I am taking the IELTS test on 29 July and I am too worried about that. I hope you can give me some advice. Thank you very much indeed!

In recent years, it has become increasingly popular that some parents spend their money on all their children’s needs, and let them do whatever they like. In my opinion, it is a negative way to bring up and educate youngsters because this parenting style has a number of harmful effects on children when they grow up.
It is clear that attempting to meet all children’s needs and wants is a wrong parenting method because of various reasons. Parents who prefer this style have to work so hard that they can earn enough money to afford their children expected things. These products and services include even extremely high-cost ones, for example, expensive smartphones, tablets or international tours around the world. Unfortunately, the number of wealthy families in society is still limited. At the same time, those who are willing to let their sons and daughters do whatever they want may sooner or later realize that their decisions eventually lead to a negative impact on their loved children. In particular, youngsters tend to be addicted to video games or even drugs when their parents completely believe in them and ignore their activities.
In my view, if parents raise and educate their sons and daughters in this style, their childrent’s development will be affected in different ways. Youngsters could become lazier and lazier when they grow up because they are always thinking that they are still supported by their parents whether they work or not. These sons and daughters also tend to do risky and silly things because of being raised in the environment in which they are not controlled by their families. Therefore, these people, especially teenagers, could be associated with crimes, which causes social problems. At the same time, a few of them take responsibily for contributing to their society while a vast number of them merely wish to enjoy the social welfare.
In conclusion, it is unwise to raise children in the way that parents always provide their sons and daughters with whatever they ask for, and permit them to do everything they want. This parenting styles influence youngsters negatively during their lives.

Some parents tend to purchase items or let their children participate activities in order to children’s demand. As a result of these parenting method could affect some negative impact on children’s life.

There are several reasons why the idea of this parenting is not acceptable in terms of raising children among the majority of people in societies. If adults accept all requests from their children, they could become demanding person and easy to get tantrum in any situations. Sometime we face on a situation that some toddler scream and force their parents to buy favourite things in front of toy section or snack shelves in shopping centre. While young children challenge themselves to satisfy their demand, psychologically they gain the way of control their carers. Furthermore, once they become teenager, parents might be unable to afford the requests of valuable items from their children.

As a result of the way of this relationship, there are some disadvantages on children’s lives in future.
Firstly, children could be unable to control their mind, they might experience to have psychological issues. Such as children have difficulty with a group, they might reluctant to stay in a classroom and become truants. Secondly, They might become aggressive and cause domestic violence because of unsatisfied feelings from their demands is not acceptable. Finally, once their demands reach at valuable items such as a smart phone, computers and motor vehicles, financially they would have problems to purchase them. Therefore some children could steal items from friends or shops and the worst case, they would commit crime in future.

In conclusion, the idea of this parenting style is unhealthy and it would definitely give a negative impact on children’s future.

@Thang Tran
1) Consider leaving a blank line between paragraphs; it is not obvious if your first paragraph ends at "grow up."
2) If you have time in the exam, check for simple grammar mistakes like: "This parenting styles"
3) Don't worry too much about your score: just focus on staying calm, confident, and organized during the exam - to get the best score you can.
4) A lot of students on this website are struggling to get from 6.5 up to 7.0 in their writing; one thing that helps is to leave enough time to deal with both tasks effectively, and not be rushing to finish in the last few minutes.
5) learn the difference between "popular" and "common" !

I have a question about writing task 2 requirements. I've read on your posts that if the question is "Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?", the suitable plan is discussion - opinion. I agree that it is logical. However, is there any wrong if I treats it as an opinion essay and plan the essay like this: Body: Para 2: it is true that there are advantages ..., Para 3: However, I believe that ....(about disadvantages), Para 4: Moreover, ..... (about disadvantages). Great thanks in advance.

@Lee25
Dear lee
Thank you very much for your help. I haven't worked with Google ngram. It seems a great tools.
But it becomes really hard for me to write since I should be careful about the words I use together.
If ngrams don't find a combination of words, it's surely incorrect?

Hi Simon,
here is my ideas for this essay, firstly I think 2 body paragraphs include one for the first question and the second paragraph for the second question, but after that, it is easy to write combine two questions in one passage and each passage I will give one idea for it.

Not surprisingly, education of children has become an area of a focus to general public in recent years. Although some advocate fondness treatment for highly sheltered care to children, it has disadvantages which should be taken into consideration. In my opinion, parents should not apply this style of teaching and the impacts to their children when they grow up will be discussed in detail below.
Firstly, albeit invisible, the satisfaction to all children requirements leads to dependent tendency to their parents. It is common result to the kids who have accepted the satisfying treatment of their parents is unable to do anything they want by themselves when they get older because of insufficient experience in facing difficulties of life.
Secondly, allowing all actions which the children do causing the loss of developing individual adequate behavior. The first matter as to whether they are adolescents or adults is lacking of social skills, the second issue needs to mention is causing wrongly and illegal, evil activities in their later lives.
In conclusion, the way of teaching in which satisfies all desires of children not only causes the reliant trend among them, but also trigger them inadequate behavior. The consequences of this way are profoundly serious impacts when they are mature in coming time as mention above.

It is true with no doubt that we love and value our children enormously. As a result, some people tend to be more flexible in their parenting way. While I believe that those parents need to adopt more balanced style because of the harm this unhealthy-flexible parenting could cause to their children, not only at present, but also in the future.
In my opinion, being flexible in the upbringing of children is against the norms and the healthy ways of raising children for many reasons. Parents should make their children more motivated to get the things they love. If parents buy their children all the things they love and allow them to do the things they enjoy without expecting them to do something positive in return, for example, performing well at school, or may be better behavior at home and in public places, children are unlikely to find the urge to improve themselves. Certainly, the most effective tools that parent have access to in raising their children are punishment and reward. If parents do not make a better use of them, it may be hard to imagine children develop in anyway.
Inadequate-flexible parenting style has many detrimental effects on children and therefore on society as a whole. For example, children may lose interest in learning essential life skills or exploring the world around them to prepare themselves for future challenges and responsibilities. These children are unlikely to progress in a healthy way and they will probably become non-productive members in their societies. As a result, these children may become a burden on their families and probably dependent on government support. Also, these children may become criminals because they are used to getting things in an easy way.
To conclude, it is extremely important for parent to be more careful in their parenting ways to protect their children, to help them grow, to enable them to be productive so they can contribute to success of their societies.