Ok, I have a question for anyone who's reading this: how do you suggest honing my narrative-writing skills? I don't have any issue writing dialogue, but as you can see by comparing my fiction to others, the non-dialogue portions are severely lacking. I just have trouble envisioning how to write it in my head.

You'll notice there's a significant chunk of story missing near the end. That's intentional. I already had the scene between Boswell and Trevak written ahead of time for various reasons. I'm in the process of writing the bits that lead to that scene. Enjoy.