Despite the negative responses received, some showing the concern for her patient, others the pressure for a public hospital system that was collapsing and finally some showing genuine disinterest in helping him, Tim made the decision to go again directly to the man who attended at the front desk of the hospital.

Is it correct to use "Despite the negative responses received, some showing the concern for her patient"

Is it correct to use "others the pressure for a public hospital system that was collapsing and finally some showing genuine disinterest in helping him"

Is it correct to use "Tim made the decision to go again directly to the man who attended at the front desk of the hospital."

Despite the negative responses received, some showing the concern for her patient, others the pressure for a public hospital system that was collapsing and finally some showing genuine disinterest in helping him, Tim made the decision to go again directly to the man who attended at the front desk of the hospital.

Is it correct to use "Despite the negative responses received, some showing the concern for her patient"We would normally leave out "the" in a sentence such as this one.

Is it correct to use "others the pressure for a public hospital system that was collapsing and finally some showing genuine disinterest in helping him"Same here. It isn't that it is wrong, exactly, but just we way we speak. The idea is "some showing concern, others (showing) pressure..."

Is it correct to use "Tim made the decision to go again directly to the man who attended at the front desk of the hospital."You could say this, but a native might shorten it a bit by saying, "Tim made the decision to go directly to the attendant at the front desk".

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Despite the negative responses he received, some showing the concern for the patient, others the pressure from a tottering public-hospital system, and finally some showing genuine indifference to his plight, Tim decided to go directly back to the front-lobby receptionist, the severe-looking man who presided over the equally severe-looking desk. It reminded Tim of a wall, but he told himself to be brave.

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