2 Section A – Text response (Reading and responding)Detailed knowledge and understanding of the selected text (The Kite Runner or Stolen), demonstrated appropriately in response to the topic Development in the writing of a coherent and effective discussion in response to the task Controlled use of expressive and effective language appropriate to the task

3 Section B – Writing in Context (Creating and presenting)Understanding and effective exploration of the ideas, and/or arguments relevant to the prompt/stimulus material (Mao’s Last Dancer – Context is CONFLICT) Effective use of detail and ideas drawn from the selected text as appropriate to the task (TEEL – Topic sentence, explain, evidence and link back to topic) Development in the writing of a coherent and effective structure in response to the task, showing an understanding of the relationship between purpose, form, language and audience Controlled use of language appropriate to the purpose, form and audience

4 Section C – Language analysis (Using language to persuade)Understanding of the ideas and points of view presented (CONTENTION on ISSUE) Analysis of ways in which language and visual features are used to present a point of view and to persuade readers (TEE – Technique, Explain, Effect on reader) Controlled and effective use of language appropriate to the task (Metalanguage)

5 The Kite RunnerQuestion or prompt will focus on the BIG IDEAS that the novel presents, such as:Identity can be shaped due to actions that are unforeseen.2) The issue of forgiveness, atonement and redemption.3) The issue of all our unintentional sins. Amir is almost an 'accidental' sinner and it is this that helps develop his character into one which we can relate to.4) The issue of time and how it prohibits us from dealing with past sin – sins of the past.5) Masculinity and relationships between males.

6 Setting of The Kite RunnerAfghanistan in the 70s – Monarchy to Communist revolution through to Taliban (Time and place)Contrasting life/society influenced by conflictHouse is of the wealthy to emphasise the social classes that existed between culturesHazara serves Pashtun - only in this setting?Westernised world contrasts to Middle East

7 Structure of The Kite RunnerThe structure of a text refers to the arrangement of events; the sequencing of events or material.Events can unfold chronologically, through flashback, using the juxtaposition of different viewpoints and different narrative accounts.Effects are gained by the conscious arrangement of events – filling in details, contrasting before and after, emphasising impact of change.

8 Narrator of The Kite RunnerAmir (main character)tells the story, in first person.The author has used the word “I” to give the impression that the character, not the author, is telling the story. Gives eye witness immediacy to the story and controls the point of view.However, the narrator must have witnessed the events being told and this may lead to bias.The Kite Runner is narrated in first person retrospective, creating a dual perspective – the adult and the younger self. So the narrator has the benefit of hindsight and maturity, and can offer insight and judgment on their earlier experiences.

9 Language and StyleRecurring images, symbols and patterns: Symbols add depth to the themes and ideas in a text. The eye, scars, the kite, animals used to represent human qualities or concepts.Similes and metaphors, imagery and other figurative language techniques – usually found in the most memorable quotes.

10 Linking characters and themesCertain events should be a focus because they reveal information about both character and theme:Crisis points and turning points:a. Character: What do we learn about the characters from how they cope with the crisis? How do they change in response to the crisis or the turning point?b. Theme: Why have the crisis points/turning points arisen? Is it in response to society? Are any values reflected by the characters at the time of the change or crisis?2. Reflection points:a. Character: What do the characters look back on later and realize? Why didn’t they realize it at the time of the event? What does their response tell us about the character now?b. Theme: What do we learn about issues or values? Are new values embraced or the need for change highlighted? Are certain values abandoned or re-enforced?3. Relationships:a. Character: What do we learn about the characters as they create or break a relationship? Which relationships break down and why? How do characters reveal themselves?b. Theme: What issues are raised due to the establishment or breakdown of the relationship? What issues arise for the characters, and what values are shown?4. Journeys and questsa. Character: Which characters journey and grown throughout the text? What values are embraced and rejected?b. Theme: What values or ideas does the journey represent? What do you learn?

11 The question/prompt Will enable you to create an essay to discuss:the ideas, characters and themes constructed by the author/director and presented in the selected text (obvious aspects)the way the author/director uses structures, features and conventions to construct meaning (evidence for your ideas)the ways in which authors/directors express or imply a point of view and values (you interpret from text)the ways in which readers’ interpretations of texts differ and why (your opinion/evaluation can be validated)

12 ESSAY Structure 1) IntroductionThe introduction is the Melways map reference to the rest of the text. It is the road map with the directions imprinted in it to show readers the way.Introduction MUST address the prompt and contain a contention. This is based on the prompt. Don’t simply restate the prompt.

13 ESSAY Structure Body paragraphs (TEEL – the E’s are interchangeable)Topic sentence: In your topic sentence state your argument. This will form the basis of the topic you explore in the rest of your paragraphEvidence: State the example from the text that supports the topic sentence or Explain the argument/point furtherExplanation: Explain how the example supports your argument or Evidence to support your idea and more explanation OR Evaluate the quote through more explanationLinking sentence: Link the your argument to your contention; sum up your paragraph

14 Essay Structure ConclusionThe conclusion is not merely a restatement of your contention. It draws your explanatory comments together.The discoveries you have made in the course of your essay are now offered as final proof of the insights you have managed to discover. Thus, the quality of your explanation/discussion will produce a strong conclusion.Final statement of reflection on the universal significance of the text.

15 Quotes‘In the end, I was a Pashtun and he was a Hazara. I was Sunni and he was Shi’a, and nothing was ever going to change that. Nothing. But we were kids, who had learned to crawl together. And no history, ethnicity, society, or religion was going to change that either.’ ‘And that right there was the single greatest moment of my twelve years of life, seeing Baba on that roof, proud of me at last.’ ‘We actually deceived ourselves into thinking that a toy of tissue, paper, glue and bamboo could somehow close the chasm between us.’ ‘Strangely, I was glad that someone knew me for who I really was, I was tired of pretending.’ ‘But I would stand my ground, I decided. I didn’t want to sacrifice for Baba anymore. The last time I had done that, I had damned myself.’ ‘I was afraid that l’d let the waters carry me away from what I had to do. From Hassan. From the past that had come calling. And from this one last chance at redemption.’ ‘You’ve always been a tourist here, you just didn’t know it.’ ‘Somewhere over those mountains in the west slept the city where my hare-lipped brother and I had run kites. Somewhere over there, the blind-folded man from my dream had died a needless death. Once, over those mountains, I had made a choice. And now, a quarter of a century later, that choice had landed me right back on this soil.’ ‘…I wondered if that was how forgiveness budded, not with the fanfare of epiphany, but with pain gathering its things, packing up, and slipping away unannounced in the middle of the night.’

16 Quotes‘Children aren't coloring books. You don't get to fill them with your favourite colours’ ‘With me as the glaring exception, my father molded the world around him to his liking. The problem, of course, was that Baba saw the world in black and white. And he got to decide what was black and what was white. You can't love a person who lives that way without fearing him too. Maybe even hating him a little.’ ‘If America taught me anything, it's that quitting is right up there with pissing in the Girl Scouts' lemonade jar. There is only one sin, only one. And that is theft. Every other sin is a variation of theft....When you kill a man, you steal a life. You steal his wife's right to a husband, rob his children of a father. When you tell a lie, you steal someone's right to the truth. When you cheat, you steal the right to fairness.’ ‘One time, when I was really little, I climbed a tree and ate these green, sour apples. My stomach swelled and became hard like a drum, it hurt a lot. Mother said that if I'd just waited for the apples to ripen, I wouldn't have become sick. So now, whenever I really want something, I try to remember what she said about the apples.’ ‘I wondered if that was how forgiveness budded, not with the fanfare of epiphany, but with pain gathering its things, packing up, and slipping away unannounced in the middle of the night.’ ‘I think that everything he did, feeding the poor, giving money to friends in need, it was all a way of redeeming himself. And that, I believe, is what true redemption is, Amir jan, when guilt leads to good.’

17 Quotes‘That was a long time ago, but it's wrong what they say about the past, I've learned, about how you can bury it. Because the past claws its way out. ‘ ‘But coming close wasn't the same as winning, was it? ... He had won because winners won and everyone else just went home. ‘ ‘It was Homaira and me against the world... In the end, the world always wins. That's just the way of things.’ ‘ War doesn't negate decency. It demands it, even more than in times of peace.’ ‘I stepped back and all I saw was rain through windowpanes that looked like melting silver.’ ‘You're gutless. It's how you were made. And that's not such a bad thing because your saving grace is that you've never lied to yourself about it. Not about that. Nothing wrong with cowardice as long as it comes with prudence. But when a coward stops remembering who he is.. God help him.’ ‘But that's what I'm saying to you... That there are bad people in this world, and sometimes bad people stay bad. Sometimes you have to stand up to them. ‘ ‘Quiet is peace. Tranquility. Quiet is turning down the volume knob on life. Silence is pushing the off button. Shutting it down. All of it.’ ‘How could I of all people, chastise someone for their past? ‘ ‘There is a way to be good again.’ ‘For you, a thousand times over.’

18 Including Quotes 1. Introduce your quotationsAlways introduce your quotes. Any quote that lacks an introduction is called a floating quote. Never use floating quotes in your essay! They are confusing and disorienting. To introduce your quotes, make sure you explain how the quote supports your point.Error – In The Masque of the Red Death, the partygoers are depicted as frivolous and uncaring. “A thousand hale and light-hearted friends from among the knights and dames of his court.”This writer definitely needs to introduce this quote more clearly—setting up its context with in both the work from which she drew it and the argument that she is trying to create— and to more effectively integrate it into the flow of her writing.Example —The partygoers’ lack of social conscience is clear from their description as “a thousand hale and light-hearted friends from among the knights and dames of his court.”

19 Including Quotes2. Integrate your quotations. There are three main ways to do this:Words or phrases can be quoted without quoting the entire sentence from which they were taken. In this case, the quoted words must fit into the grammar of your own sentence. Pick only the relevant parts. This is the best way to quote the text.Example—Prince Prospero is positioned as the prince only for the rich; a “happy”, “dauntless” and “sagacious” prince who believed that “the external world would take care of itself.”

20 Including Quotes 3. Explain every quoteQuotations are not self-evident! Furthermore, do not simply rephrase a quote. Look behind the words and answer the question, “What ideas or meanings do these words convey?” Explain how this piece of evidence is significant to the text as a whole:• What does it show us about a character/event in this context?• How does the character change?• Is the author trying to comment on a bigger theme?• Can we juxtapose this piece of evidence with another example in the text?• Can we extend this example (it may be a motif; a recurring idea) by commenting on another example in the textExample – The Masque of the Red Death is primarily a commentary on the follies of the wealthy. The Red Death is devastating the country, with thousands dying “by the half hour” but Prince Prospero’s vanity and selfishness in believing that he and his kind can be spared death while the poor suffer is clear in his thought that “the external world could take care of itself. In the meantime it was folly to grieve or to think”. This reveals that it is a luxury of the wealthy to assume that death is not something they need worry about, for they have been blessed.

21 Part B – Context Writing (Conflict)1) Internal conflict (Man versus self) When a person is confronted with a difficult choice to make. It is a mental or emotional struggle that occurs within a character‘s mind.Conflict of conscience: When a person struggles internally either because they have done something they feel is wrong, or are being asked to overcome their conscience and do something that they feel is wrong2) Interpersonal conflict: When two or more people disagree or fightPhysical conflict: When there is a conflict that leads to physical violenceFamilial conflict: When there is conflict between people from the same familyGenerational conflict: When there is conflict between people from different generations (this often overlaps with familial conflict)Class conflict: When there is conflict between people of different social classes3) External/Social/Cultural/Global conflict: When people from different cultural backgrounds disagree, find it difficult to live with one another or even fight because of their inability to understand one another (either literally, in terms of language, or because of different beliefs, traditions and cultural practices)International conflict: Conflict between countriesNational conflict: Conflict within countries, such as different ethnic groupsLocal community or neighbourhood conflict

22 ConflictThink about how conflict arises. What are the causes of a particular conflict, or conflict in general? The causes of conflict may range from ignorance and prejudice, to self interest and fear, to the struggle for power, justice or truth. One might even argue that conflict is an essential or inevitable part of human life. What are the consequences of conflict.? How do individuals, or a society as a whole, respond and react to conflict.? The way an individual or a community responds to conflict reveals a lot about them, especially their strengths and their weaknesses. What are the lasting consequences of conflict for individuals, families and communities? Conflicts rarely end once the war is over, or the fight has been won. There are winners and losers in every conflict, who remain affected long after the conflict is over. The consequences may range from trauma and physical and emotional pain to more positive outcomes, such as change, opportunity and growth. One thing is certain: people are changed by experiences of conflict.

23 Responding to the ‘prompt’1. What general form will I choose? – expository, persuasive or imaginative?a. Think about the style you are most comfortable with.b. What are the challenges of an imaginative piece? Will it be appreciated by everyone?c. Which style will have the most impact?2. What specific form will I choose e.g. short story, editorial, letter, essay?a. Am I aware of the demands of the form I have chosen?b. What are the structural features of that form?3. What is the purpose of the piece?a. How will it address the prompt?b. What is your contention or position in response to the prompt?4. Which ideas from the texts will you draw from?a. Am I confident these are the most appropriate examples?5. Which external references will you draw upon?a. Is there dimension to the ideas I have chosen from real life?6. How will you incorporate the ideas from the text/outside the text into your piece?a. Will you quote from the text?b. Create parallel situations or characters,?c. Interview a character?d. Argue a similar or alternative viewpoint?7. What features of the original text will you incorporate?a. Will you use a similar structure to the text?b. Will you use similar language (colloquial or formal, idioms, figurative language)?c. What aspects of the text will you refer to (e.g. setting, symbols, tone)?

25 Expository WritingIn an expository piece, you are essentially exploring the connection between ideas. Introduction First: Outline what the terms are (place any re-definitions you have here.) Second: State your contention Third: Outline your arguments. Remember, your arguments are NOT based on a text, at all, they are yours, there’s no need to mention a text, or characters, etc here.

26 Expository WritingBody Paragraphs Each body paragraph should deal with a different argument. Some of your arguments will be from the text/s you have studied, others from external sources. The body paragraph is a place to state, and support your argument. The support comes from the examples you wish to use, be that a text, history, current news, a famous person, etc. You cannot use your own life or friends, as this is more reflective. A good way to approach an expository essay is to brainstorm your topic sentences first. What do you want to say about the topic? Write them out as statements. Topic sentence: In your topic sentence state your argument. Remember this is NOT based on a text, so don’t mention any characters or texts – just the idea. The argument must exist separately to the text (even though you spend the majority of the paragraph discussing a particular text or example) – this is important!! E.g. Life is both observation and participation. Evidence: State the example you’re looking at E.g. A student watching another being bullied is implicated in the bullying by the act of observation. Explanation: Explain how the example shows your argument, giving more evidence as you do so. Quotes are not especially important for context essays – you do not have to include them. Linking sentence: Link the your argument to your contention

27 Expository WritingContention Identify the discoveries and insights you have made. These should be clearly evident in your explanation. Use these insights to conclusively state what it is to be a bystander, the specific nature of the difficulties faced and how comparable these outcomes are to the various types of conflicts you have explored.

28 Imaginative Writing Imaginative WritingImaginative writing asks you to use the ideas from a text or texts to produce your own creative response. The typical features of an imaginative response are that it:1. Concentrates on one or two main characters and has parallels with in the text2. Follows the structure of a narrative: a. introduction, complication, climax, resolution3. Incorporates creative writing conventions: a. description, figurative language, dialogue and internal thought about the character’s feelings4. May be the same tone, style and narrative perspective as the original text5. Is creative in presentation. You might add a scene to the original text, write a short story, journal entry or letters or a script.6. Crafts a consistent voice:a. An old woman sounds different to a small child, who sounds different to a working-class builder and a high-flying businessman7. Keeps the prompt in mind: a. There’s no point writing a brilliant story if it doesn’t relate to the prompt and the ideas presented in the text. It’s a good idea to focus on one text in an imaginative response; more than one and you risk losing control.

29 Persuasive WritingPersuasive Writing A persuasive response is inviting you to respond to the context by presenting a point of view on it. Your answer will be narrower in scope that in an expository essay – whereas the purpose of an expository essay is to explain or expose the main ideas raised by the prompt, using it as a springboard to further explore your ideas, a persuasive essay is asking you to present a biased reading of the context and argue a particular point of view. Persuasive essays may include a rebuttal.

30 Mao’s Last DancerLi began life in a desperately poor village in Qingdao in north-east China, amidst the chaos and turmoil of Mao’s Cultural Revolution. His peasant family toiled in hardship and privation, struggling daily to ward off starvation. One day – a day that would change his life forever – Li’s school was visited by uniformed officials, Madame Mao’scultural delegates. They were searching the country, examining millions of children, looking to select students to mould into representatives of Chairman Mao’s greatvision for China. As the men were about to leave, Li’s teacher pointed at the elevenyear-old boy and said, ‘What about that one?’ And so began Li’s long separation from his family and his rise to excellence in the rarefied world of ballet. During his difficult climb to the top, he endured the punishing rigours of training at the Beijing Academy, and discovered in himself tremendous reserves of determination and self-discipline. The story of his loyalty to his family, his exile in the West, and his pursuit of artistic freedom propelled his autobiography.

32 Mao’s Last DancerChinese ballet dancer whose special talent is only matched by his courage and determination to live in freedom. The film opens in Qingdao province in rural China where Li is raised by a peasant family, living with many brothers and impoverished parents Niang and Dia. At age 11 his life is altered forever when he is selected by a group of visiting inspectors to go to Beijing to train as a ballet dancer at Madame Mao’s Dance Academy. At first passing Li by and walking out of the classroom, the inspectors are brought back by the class teacher who taps the last comrade on the shoulder and points to Li saying, “what about that boy?” In Beijing, the young Li, admirably performed by Wen Bin Huang as a child and Chengwu Guo as a teenager, faces a harsh training routine from 5.30 am to 9 pm, 6 days a week, but is supported by a gentle old teacher Chan (Zhang Su). His determination is so strong that, to build his leg strength, he hops one legged up and down stairs with heavy sandbags tied to his ankles at 5:00 each morning. Conflict soon arises, however, when a stern Madame Mao insists that the dances emphasize politics and guns, and director Chan becomes a casualty of this rigid doctrinaire approach. Though gradually developing his skills, Li does not adapt well emotionally to being away from his family and cries himself to sleep. Eventually, however, he hones his skills and develops enough emotional maturity to be sent to the United States to dance for the Houston Ballet, becoming one of the first two cultural exchange students allowed to go to America to study under Mao’s regime. He learns to appreciate the freedom in America, and falls in love with dancer Elizabeth Mackey (Amanda Schull) The transition to capitalism contrasts with his poor peasant village. Unable to have his stay extended by the Chinese authorities, Li decides to marry Elizabeth and announces his intention to defect to America, causing an incident that takes 21 hours to resolve after Li is held hostage in the Chinese Embassy. Only after negotiations at the highest level are concluded is it determined that Li can stay in America but is forbidden to return to China, or to see his parents.

33 Part C: Language AnalysisYou will be reading and analysing one or more texts and discussing the language techniques they have used to influence the reader/viewer in relation to the contention. There may be different contentions about the same issue in the articles and you may need to compare them and evaluate which one is the more persuasive and why???

34 Contention1. Contention(s) Definition: A statement communicating the author’s main point of view: what the writer or writers want you to agree with. The contention is the broadest possible argument, and should be present throughout the whole of the text. All of the arguments presented in the text will support the overall contention. Be aware: If there is more than one article there might be more than one main contention. This allows you to establish a contrast. Look to determine if the contention in a single article is consistent. Establish if the supporting graphics or headlines support or compete with the contention being put forward.

35 Supporting Arguments2. Supporting arguments Definition: Supporting arguments are the two or three main reasons used to justify the overall contention. These supporting points do not permeate the entire text, but are the main reasons given for the overall argument. Example: If the article is about allowing girls to play in the local football team, supporting arguments might be: The girls (how they are depicted; brave or reckless and irresponsible) The parents of the teenagers (how they are depicted - supportive) The football club (how they are depicted – out of date or forward thinking) Be aware: The friction between the points of view will generate the possibility of establishing who has the better argument and where it is most effective.

36 Writer’s Position3) Writer’s Position Definition: You need to identify who the writer or writers are and how this influences their views in the debate. This involves their job and political orientation. It may also involve their race, gender, religion, sexuality etc, although you should be careful to refer to these characteristics only if the author makes it clear it has had an influence on the argument. Example: Devout Catholics would oppose legalizing abortion. Their faith is influencing their views. By way of contrast, a feminist might be expected to support a woman’s right to choose. The orientation of these individuals is influencing the stance taken. Be aware: Your task is not to say if the writer’s point of view is correct or incorrect. You are there to establish how effectively the writer has communicated a point of view. Have the techniques employed been effective and appropriate given the topic and nature of the discussion.

37 Tone4. ToneDefinition: Tone refers to the voice or attitude of the writer. When determining tone, look not at what is stated, but how it is stated. To identify the tone of a piece, think about how the piece made you feel as a reader and what impressions are generated about the author.Be aware: Establishing the tone provides the general umbrella under which ideas can be grouped. It’s a way of structuring your response. A single writer may transition between several tones or we can contrast the different tones of multiple writers.

39 Audience5. AudienceDefinition: The intended audience of a text is the people the author is targeting. Think about who the author is trying to reach with their message. To identify the audience, think about:Whether anyone is being directly targeted:For instance, is the text written or presented to a particular person or persons? Does the text appear in a publication for a specific group of people (such as retirees, movie goers, or fashion devotees)?The content:Who is influenced by the content of the article? Whose interests are represented, or whose opinion does the author seek to challenge?The tone and techniques used:Who would react to the tone? Are the techniques markers of a particular group – “gnarly dude”? What sort of people would respond to them? Who would be alienated?Be aware: The audience may well determine the approach and style taken by the writer/speaker. A large public audience will require different techniques and approaches to an individual reading a paper over a morning cup of coffee.

40 Persuasive TechniquesThe next step is to think about the persuasive techniques that the authors have used to support their contentions. There are three broad types of persuasive techniques that you should be aware of; logos, pathos, ethos. Be aware: Do not fall into the trap of focusing only on techniques you can name. If something feels persuasive to you, this is because it is persuasive, whether it has a “name” or not.

41 Logos – ‘Logic or Reason’Definition: Logos (Greek for “word‟) is an appeal based on logic or reason. It refers to the internal consistency of a message the clarity of the claim, the logic of its reasons and the effectiveness of its supporting evidence.

42 “Logos” techniquesExpert opinion Expert opinion is when highly-regarded academics or organizations considered experts on an issue give their opinion on it. Eg: According to Professor John Stapleton of Melville University, drivers who speed are more likely to be killed. Research Eg: According to the Transport Board, people were caught speeding last year, 3576 more than in the previous year. Therefore, despite the operation of speed cameras, speeding is increasing Eg: A recent study conducted by the University of Shacksville has confirmed that people who drink too much alcohol have a higher risk of developing liver disease. Anecdotes A short, personal story told by an everyday person. Anecdotal evidence connects with people’s experiences and feelings and can be more interesting to readers, capturing their attention and leaving them receptive to the authors„ arguments. Personalized, first-hand experience can also have a strong emotional impact on readers, arousing their sympathy. Eg: Two large, long-haired dogs were allowed to roam the streets on Friday afternoon. They came into our yard and killed our pet rabbits. This is why dog owners should obey their local council’s rules. Reputable sources If statistics are given, are the sources cited? The Australian Bureau of Statistics, for instance, is reputable because it is independent and has a reputation for gathering statistics in a reliable way. If, however, a survey is conducted by a pharmaceutical company suggests that a particular drug should be marketed Australia wide as a cure for a particular disease, we can question the validity of this source and raise the possibility of it being biased Appeals to common sense and rationality: Does what the author is saying make sense? Is it a sensible solution to a complex or emotive problem? Cause and effect statements and logical conclusions: Does the author show a clear link between the cause of a problem and the solution he or she is proposing? Recognition of opposing viewpoints Does the author acknowledge alternative views and their merits? These alternatives can be dismissed, but this shouldn’t be done off-hand or for no reason – the author should present clear, cogent arguments to rebut any opposing viewpoints.

43 Pathos – ‘Emotion’Definition: Pathos (Greek for “suffering” or “experience”) is an appeal based on emotion (often found in advertisements, for example.) Language choice affects the audience’s emotional (as opposed to “logical” or “reason-based”) response. An appeal to pathos causes an audience not just to respond emotionally but to identify with the writer’s point of view.

44 Pathos - 1. ConnotationsDefinition: A connotation is the emotional meaning associated with the word. Connotations can be historical, biblical or current social references. For example:If a man is killed we imagine that he has died.If a man is ‘slaughtered’, we understand that he was violently and brutally killed.If a man is ‘euthanised ’, then we understand his life has been compassionately andgently ended. Thus the connotations or ‘suggestions ’ behind each word differ.Effect: Connotations have the effect of positioning the reader to feel a certain way about a topic. Readers usually respond to them on an emotional level because of the images they tap into when they hear a particular word or phrase.Attacks/praise is also a very common technique – where the writer:• Denigrates or humiliates another• Discredits opponents• Attacks a person or their credibility, rather than an idea• Discredits another idea

45 Pathos - 2. The sound of languagea) Alliteration: Alliteration is the repetition of a sound, often at thebeginning of a word, that plays on the same constant or syllable. For alliteration to occur, a sound must be repeated several times in a short space e.g. “Dirty deeds done dirt cheap!” Be aware of alliteration.Only make note of alliteration that has a purpose i.e. supports an argument.b) Repetition : Repetition is the repeating of words and phrases throughout a text. Repetition doesn’t necessarily make a statement true but it makes sure that a reader remembers the statement.c) Colloquial language and idioms: Colloquial language, or slang, is language that is used in every day conversation. It is persuasive because it is friendly and invites the audience to see the writer as being “one of us”, someone who is on the same wavelength. There appears to be no pretension about someone who uses such language, making their message more palatable to readers, e.g. “G’day mate!”d) Clichés: Clichés are overused expressions, e.g. “There’s a time and a place for everything. ”Clichés can be used because they often carry an array of connotations. They can also help readers to feel familiar with the material presented and thus attract their attention. On the other hand, however, the overuse of clichés in intellectual writing can detract from the quality of the writing

46 Pathos - 3. GeneralizationsDefinition:A generalization is a phrase that is said to be true for all because it is true for some. Generalizations are also known as stereotypes e.g. “All teenagers are fat and lazy. ” Effect: They can be persuasive because they appeal to our general sense of what seems true and they also appeal to social stereotypes and racial prejudices which are familiar. This familiarity can lull the reader into accepting the claim.

47 Pathos – 4) Hyperbole/ExaggerationDefinition: Hyperbole is the use of language to denigrate an opposition to make them appear ridiculous, e.g. “Those who support this ridiculous idea would have us believe that it will dramatically improve the quality of modern living. Of course it will! And it will probably cure cancer, eradicate pollution, improve traffic flow and make the kids go to bed when we tell them!” They may also emphasize the author’s point e.g. if someone were to describe the damage caused by a storm as “pretty bad”, the reader won’t be likely to think much of it. However, if they were to describe the aftermath as a storm as being “like a warzone” the effect is to emphasize the severity of the situation (even if the only damage was a few broken windows).

48 Pathos – 5) Inclusive LanguageDefinition: Inclusive language refers to the use of pronouns such as “you and me”, “we” and “our”. Through these words, the writer seeks to identify with the readers. Effect: The writer is identifying as one of us, implying that we are equally affected by the issue and that he or she speaks for our concerns. For instance, “people like you and me don’t want to see this happen. We know how socially destructive it will be, and we don’t want our kids growing up in that sort of society.”

49 Pathos – 6) Rhetorical QuestionsDefinition:A rhetorical question is a question posed for persuasive effect without the expectation of a reply, e.g. “How much longer must we suffer in silence?” Effect: The effect of a rhetorical question is to encourage the reader to think about what the (often obvious) answer to the question must be. Make sure you are very specific with your explanation of the effect, however what is the obvious answer? What does the author want you to think and how does the question he or she posed lead to that conclusion?

50 Pathos – 7) Appeals to emotion and valuesDefinition: Writers often appeal to values that they think that the reader will hold.Here is a list of appeals to values:a) Family values: Appeals to family values evoke ideas of belonging, security, caring/nurturing, togetherness, safety, love and comfort.b) Justice/fairness: An appeal to a sense of justice or fairness is often used when the rights of two opposing sides come into conflict, especially when one side appears to be being treated unfairlyc) Modernity: Advertisers tend to use this type of appeal most often they urge consumers to buy the latest in technology or fashion, and do so by hinting that those who do not consume the latest products are old-fashioned and outdated.d) Generosity: An appeal to generosity makes the reader feel like they would be acting greedily or selfishly in their own interests, rather than the greater good, if they do not agree with a certain proposition.e) Humanitarianism: Appeals to humanitarianism play on people’s desire to promote general human welfare it evokes notions of kindness, sympathy and benevolence.f) Hip pocket nerve (money) and self interest: Appeals to self interest are designed to make the reader feel that something they personally value is being threatened, or that they will be better off as a result of a particular proposal.

51 Pathos – 8) Appeals to emotion and valuesg) Belonging: An appeal to belonging makes the reader feel as though they will be excluded if they do not agree with a certain proposition. h) Patriotism: The term “un-Australian” is an example of an appeal to patriotism. References to the national interest, Australia’s interest in the world and its economic well being, international reputation, and safety, and the respect that other nations feel for it are examples of appeals to patriotism i) Tradition: An appeal to tradition suggests that because “we’ve always done it like this ‟ or “our ancestors fought for this”, an idea is inherently good. Going against it would mean going against everything we (as a culture, a nation etc) stand for.

52 Pathos – 9) Appeals to emotion and valuesHere is a short list of appeals to emotion: a) Nostalgia: Nostalgia is the feeling one gets when they look back on the past fondly. Often, appeals to nostalgia are used to justify a return to older, simpler times. b) Guilt: Guilt is a powerful emotion and writers who make their audience feel guilty about an issue (and, in particular, about not acting upon an issue) can be very persuasive c) Sympathy/empathy: Encouraging people to feel sympathy for someone (sorry for them) or empathy (put themselves in another’s shoes) d) Fear: Appeals to fear may rely on fear of physical violence or death; of loss of security, family, stability, money, safety; of change; of a specified negative event. e) Compassion: A description of the plight of the underprivileged is designed to appeal to the reader’s sense of compassion it aims to make them feel outraged, sorry, or upset. Whatever the emotion elicited, the aim is to cause the reader to feel like they want to take some action in response to the situation

53 Pathos -effectOnce you have identified the emotional appeal, you should be able to identify its effect, as the author is trying to position you to feel a particular way about their topic.

54 Ethos – ‘Anecdotal/Expert Opinion’Definition: Ethos (Greek for “character”) or an ethical appeal means convincing based on the character of the author. We tend to believe those people we respect not only those who are an authority on the subject, but also those who are likeable and worthy of our respect.

55 “Ethos” techniquesEthical appeals are used to establish the writer as fair, open- minded, honest, and knowledgeable about the subject matter. The writer creates a sense of him or herself as trustworthy and credible. When used correctly, the writer is seen as...Well-informed about the topicConfident in his or her positionSincere, honest, respectable and trustworthyUnderstanding of the reader's concerns and possible objectionsOn the reader’s sideReasonable and rationalHumane and considerate

56 VisualsPictures How does this image support the author’s contention? Cartoons are sometimes difficult to analyse, as they present a contention just as an editorial or opinion piece would. Other images, such as pictures or graphics accompanying an opinion piece, are easier to analyse as they do not have a contention per-se rather, they merely support the contention of the author. You can still refer to the same things as you do for a cartoon. However, not all of these things will be relevant, and your analysis will be much shorter.

57 EFFECTOnce you have identified any persuasive techniques used, you should think about the effect of the techniques – how do they persuade the reader? NOTE: Explaining the effect should be the bulk of your analysis.

58 1. Language (WHAT)Throughout your body paragraphs, you will need language sentences to introduce the quote that you will be examining. These sentences will:Include a quote that you think is persuasive from the text (e.g. “stringed puppets”) Use a verb such as: describes, depicts, purports, debunks, illustrates, suggests, labelsUse a tone word before the verb to add more detail to your analysis (e.g. comically)Example: Columnist Phillip Craig comically labels the politicians as “stringed puppets.”

59 2. Intended Effect (WHY AND HOW)Throughout your body paragraphs, you will need an intended effect sentence/s AFTER your language sentence. These sentences will:Include consideration of both the wider and narrow intended effects:-Narrow: How does this quote make the reader feel about the thing being described?Wider: How does this quote position the reader to feel about the issue generally?Be specific! Do not say, “this technique makes the reader think about whether they agree with the author or not”, or, “this technique persuades the reader to agree with the author.”

60 3. Using QuotationsGenerally keep quotations short and focus on key words that capture the point. Eliminate unnecessary sections or words by replacing them with ellipsis dots. Example: About her performance, a critic once said, “her Medea was without feeling and form.”

61 Structure of Language AnalysisIn the exam, students will be required to analyze the use of language in unseen persuasive text/s. Make sure you ANNOTATE and then follow the TEE(L) structure… T – Explain the technique E – Outline the effect on the /viewer E - Evaluation and explanation (L) – Link back to the overall contention

62 Obvious language techniquesThings to look for in Editorials/ArticlesThings to look for in CartoonsWords that indicate TONE EMOTIVE LANGUAGE (adjectives) Words that indicate a POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE CONNOTATION APPEALS what are being used? LOADED WORDS or PHRASES that position the reader EXPERT OPINIONS that give credibility to article ATTACK OR PRAISE depending on contention INCLUSIVE OR EXCLUSIVE language EXAGGERATION or HYPERBOLE ANECDOTAL STORIES or ANALOGIES of other cases or situations used for comparison GENERALISATIONS or creating STEREOTYPES from a few examples CHARTS, TABLES and GRAPHS SOLUTION offered to helpSTEREOTYPES –caricatures that represent someone or a social group(s)EMOTION CONVEYED through an expressive faceSYMBOLISM what symbols can be identified in the imageDIALOGUE and what is it suggesting or questioningTONE how is it being conveyed (through image or combined with words)BACKGROUND is there anything that represents something more to this issuePOSITIONING of the figures or props in the imageEXAGGERATION of any details to emphasise somethingSATIRE or IRONY is the creator ridiculing something or someone to make a statementCONNOTATION and TONE of image – is it positive or negative? What aspects highlight this?

63 IntroductionThe introduction introduces the persuasive piece you are analyzing and gives a brief overview on what you will be focusing on in your essay.Introduce the issue: What is the issue? How was it sparked? What has happened? Be specific as to who, what, where and when in regards to the issue (1-2 sentences)A speaker Chris Lee at the 2010 international Biodiversity Conference speaks with conviction to his audience, attendees involved in the area of nature conservation, contending that action must be taken to safeguard the variety of life, or, biodiversity. At times an accusatory and disapproving tone is adopted, however alternates with an alarmist tone, the two complementing each other and utilised to successfully persuade the speaker’s powerful and influential audience to take action to preserve biodiversity. The use of a visual aid in the form of a slide presentation assists the speaker, presenting the argument through a different medium.Introduce the text’s title and author. Chris Lee/speakerIdentify the publication, date and text type Biodiversity Conference/2010Restate the author’s contention in your own words. Action must be takenIdentify the writer’s tone. Disapproving, alarmist, accusatoryList the themes (body paragraph headings) you will be exploring.Form speech/visual aidsBody

64 Body paragraphsEach body paragraph should deal with a different IDEA or GROUP that you identified. Completely deal with one text, then use a connective word (in contrast, similarly etc) and deal with the second text. The body paragraphs should be structured according to TEEL. Topic sentence: Re-introduce the author, tone word and the first argument you will be examining. Rephrase the sentence that you used in your introduction Lee begins by introducing his contention, an issue of ‘vital significance.’ Evidence and explanation: State what the language used was using a language sentence, then explain the narrow and broad effect using an intended effect sentence. Repeat this pattern until you have analysed all the relevant language. This alarmist tone is further continued, Lee speaking of what has been lost in the past tense, implying that the problem is already here, and the effects are evident. ‘Sadly’, hundreds of species are ‘already extinct’ the speaker taking on a more nostalgic tone full of longing for what has been lost. Linking sentence: Your final sentence should sum up the overall effect. How is the reader left feeling about the idea or group presented? The short, blunt statement, ‘It is too late for them,’ the extinct species, once again raises alarm in the audience members, An appeal to social responsibility adds to Lee’s persuasive power.

65 ConclusionYour conclusion should include an assessment of the relative merits of the piece/s. The effectiveness of the text/s be they written or visual. You could make a comparison between the visual and written or comment on the appropriateness of the progression of the piece. End with an overall statement that sums up the contrast between the authors in terms of their style and contention. Have they been effective?

66 SAMPLE IntroA speaker Chris Lee at the 2010 international Biodiversity Conference speaks with conviction to his audience, attendees involved in the area of nature conservation, contending that action must be taken to safeguard the variety of life, or, biodiversity. At times an accusatory and disapproving tone is adopted, however alternates with an alarmist tone, the two complementing each other and utilised to successfully persuade the speaker’s powerful and influential audience to take action to preserve biodiversity. The use of a visual aid in the form of a slide presentation assists the speaker, presenting the argument through a different medium.

67 Sample ConclusionThe speech uses a range of different tones to appeal to the different emotions of the conference audience. The addition of visuals allows the audience to ‘see’ the argument Lee is presenting, and each slide complements his words. In doing so, the audience is able to be persuaded of Lee’s conviction that the safeguarding of biodiversity is vital, and also convinces the conference attendees to take action.

68 Analyse the influenceAnalyse how tone is created and how techniques are used to position and influence the reader… DO NOT just list the techniques… Use the TEE(L) structure… For the novel analysis…use TEEL

69 Sample Body ParagraphThe tone of the writer is given in the first few words of their speech. By introducing the speech with ‘ladies and gentlemen’. This gives a serious and professional tone to readers. This serious and professional tone is used consistently throughout the speech, which confirms and reassures readers of the seriousness of the topic, ‘vital significance to our world’. By using the words ‘vital significance’ tells readers that this speech is important. Giving facts and figures also tells readers the seriousness of the matter as when given facts, they can really believe what is being said is true, instead of just listening to and opinion, ‘38% are today threatened and 804 already extinct’. By finishing this figure with ‘it is too late for them’ tells readers that something should have been done before now, but because nothing was done, and the species could not help themselves, it is too late.’