Is this a good start to a review of "The Rocking-Horse Winner," or am I off track?

Like a teenager’s selfish desire to obtain status through possessions, Paul’s mother demonstrates the same immature importance of material objects. Paul’s mother is an example of extreme materialism that modern day teenagers could learn from in D.H Lawrence’s short story “The Rocking-Horse Winner.” This wonderful depiction of the destructive nature of materialism…