bad passage?

Does this sentence read ok? I'm having a problem accepting it, but it is stating what I want it to. It is a quoted thought of the MC so it doesn't have to have perfect grammar.

context: Atheist/agnostic pondering how they sold their soul when they don't believe in religion:

passage: “Red said he didn’t believe either. Maybe the lack of belief made us easy targets. It sure would be easy to take something from someone that they didn’t even know they had in the first place.”

“Red said he didn’t believe either. Maybe the lack of belief made us easy targets. It sure would be easy to take something from someone that they didn’t even know they had in the first place.”

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"Red said he didn't believe either, that maybe our lack of belief made us easy targets... I'll tell you what though, it sure would be easy to take something from someone that they didn’t even know they had in the first place!"