Hey! I am really glad you entered my challenge, and I was very excited to see what you did with this song and pairing since I love both. I love the way you reused the same few lines from "Dear Diary" throughout, it kept your story cohesive and interesting. Very well thought out on the plot.
I feel your grammar could use some work. It wasn't overly difficult to read, but there were a handful of glaringly obvious mistakes which I feel need to be caught. Maybe try a beta reader next time, or just a few extra reads.
I liked how this spanned all Hogwarts years. It made it interesting and flowing, yet each section could have used some more detail and just additions.
Overall, good job. I enjoyed the idea and loved how you used the song. It really fit! I hope you enjoyed the challenge and hope you will read the other submissions when they come in!
:) BaletGir

Author's Response: Thanks!
I love Rose/Scorpius too so I'm glad you liked it.
I'll make sure and read through it closer next time.
I'm glad you liked the way I used the song. I wasn't sure if it work.
Thanks for the review and I'll make sure to read the other submissions. It was a good challenge.