I only see five parts here. Unless you mean the 'divided into six sections, including the head, arms, chest, and legs', which would make for only 4 sections, unless each arm and each leg is a different section. Could you clarify whatyou mean?

I'm actually not sure what to think of that. Like, there's literally Foundation personnel stationed in Saipan on the off-chance that anomalous activity happens to a remote island of 40,000 people? I would think it more likely that there's a Foundation operative in the United States federal government whose responsibility is American holdings in the Oceania/Pacific Islands region that's the first responder to stuff like this.

Is what you're implying that there's something inherently anomalous about Saipan and/or its governance?

Nice job - the idea of the 'ambassador to the surface' comes out much more strongly than in the draft. I do agree with MyFatedMethod that the contents of the various body parts could be presented more cleanly - perhaps with a table?

Very neat idea, although it's Octopunch as an SCP. (I cannot get a link at this moment because TFwiki.)

Anyway, I think there are a few things in here that could use smoothing out (the cephalopod, for instance, should probably be -1, since that designation is never used but -2 is), but this mostly just needs a spit-polish to be really good.