another song from this years FAWM. It was part of a Morph challenge, which is, change 51% to the song ahead of you in the Morph chain. So the words of the chorus are mostly taken from the previous song, just rearranged them somehow. And I kept the anti-war theme. HEre's a link to my first version. http://fawm.org/songs/71360/ (sorry for the crappy first chorus, production is awful with this one)

I've already done some editing of it, I highlighted some parts which I don't like so much. Ideas to change the words are highly appreciated. I won't rewrite the whole song, it is not so important for me. But the song is good practice for my performance project that's the reason why I'd like to improve it a bit.

Dm Cmarching drums escort us since the dawn of agesDm Chistory books are crammed with eager generalsG F(maj7)some still believe their stars shine clear and bright Em AmGuess only through the haze of many years gone by

Today they're giving us more noble reasons (actually they always, but scansion did not work in the versions I tried) that we’re waging war against the obvious eviland again we sent out our heroes (this line's rhythm is not really fitting)with the news show the world in ever deeper chaos

Chorus

switch from the news to a movie stationto see the lonely hero’s grand appearance streaming with blood as he saves the worldmakes killing’s look fun and the only way to go

It’s just a movie, it’s just a game and we just love to see our hero’s win but the pattern engraved in our brain’s disturbing glamour conferred to murder

Chorus

Dm - Em (2x)maybe it’s time for other heroes a praise for words and ban for weapons (not so happy with the bridge either)

When I play that myself, the fingerpicking is a lot more basic ... My learning goal with this one is to get the chords, fingerpicking and singing done simultaneously ... Not sure if I'm there yet, although I've been practicing. Did not do fingerpicking on this one at the German FOP, not enough time to practice.

Tom, we should make a Skype session to practice the duet. I probably can't Skype next week and then there're only a couple days to go.

I'm back home so no longer on that infernal tablet, I should have bought a bigger screen.

I have Spanish sessions 20::00 Thursday and 21:00 Friday (Your time) I could make any time tonight, anything other than these times, or maybe better for you during the day Friday? You could be all painted out the next two nights.

If the FOP is cancelled we need to think of what alternatives can be fitted in from the festival and about accommodation. I'm happy for you to stay here throughout or whatever suits you.

I'm withing driving distance of Edinburgh, there are trains from Berwick, or buses from Coldingham, but probably neither of the last two alternatives suit late evening travel.

Dm Cmarching drums escort us since the dawn of agesDm Chistory books are crammed with eager generalsG F(maj7)some still believe their stars shine clear and bright Em AmGuess only through the haze of many years gone by

Always lying to us with more fictitious reasonsHow we’re waging war against the obvious evilTime and again we sent out our heroes While the news shows the world in ever deeper chaos

Chorus

switch from the news to a movie stationto see the lonely hero’s grand appearance streaming with blood as he saves the worldmakes killing’s look fun and the only way to go

It’s just a movie, it’s just a game and we just love to see our hero’s win but the pattern engraved in our brain’s disturbing glamour conferred to murder

Chorus

Dm - Em (2x)Surely it’s time To make other heroes Worthy of praiseand ban for weapons

I listened to the track several times this afternoon and whilst I like the concept, the story and the melody I have the frustrating feeling that it has not quite got it's message through. I think this could take some time, because I don't yet have the answers, so I decided to put up today's thoughts, and if you are still speaking to me, I'll post more later.

The Prequel/ Chorus - I like, it sets the scene well and I would not change anything there.

Verse 1.

I’m not so sure that this hits its target just as well, I like the “dawn of ages” phrase and the story of the verse. I’m thinking along the lines of :-(Not these actual words just the concept)

Marching drums, sounding since the dawn of agesHistory extols the deeds of long dead generalsBut those who can think and see more clearlyRealise that the truth is distorted by the mists of time

thank you for taking the time! Good news that you like the concept and the melody. I also came to think in the last days the message is not getting through, whereas I have (even) more difficulties with the second (i.e. 3+4) verse. Need to think about it myself ...

"Just leave it Tom" now there is a red rag to bull (hope you understand ) You are talking to a stubborn B, but you knew that.

I'm enjoying thinking about this, and before I look at the next couple of verses I wondered whether the song would benefit from a link verse/bridge between the past and the present and a final verse hoping for a better future?

I'm thinking along the lines of (again not actual lyrics)

Bridge verse or final verse depending on V3 and V4

But have things changed (Or things have changed)We know better nowThe problems of the pastCan never happen again