Aw, this one is cute too, but the other one is more fleshed out, like this is the baby version of that one, even if its more of a prequel, if they're related at all. XP So, is that it for your Leverage fics? Some mushy, touching, team!fic Eliot torturing? XD

JustLurking chapter 1 . 10/23/2012

Again, brilliant. Love the flashbacks and back story, and malaria is nicely original and delightfully appropriate.

RainyDayz chapter 1 . 10/19/2012

I love your Leverage fics. Mostly because they're about sick Eliot. Yours are honest to bob the first well written Leverage fics I've finally gotten a hold of. You should write more so I have something decent to read from time to time. Awesome work.

This was awesome. Really visceral and immediate (I LOVE present tense so much) and full of all the good stuff. You have definitely demonstrated that you are talented AND prolific, no matter what fandom. Every time you post something I'm reminded again of why I'm glad I have you on my alerts list. So thanks for this, really!

Also, is there any possible chance of you expanding on Eliot's time in Cambodia? Because that? Would be amazing. Not to mention epic. I'm giving myself heart flutters just thinking about it.

First off, I love that you put it in present tense. It somehow makes the story more powerful. It doesn't ALWAYS work, but it can, and here it does.

Second, I really love your wording choices: 'collective pathological inability to respect personal boundaries', 'shattering and spilling like glass marbles on a polished floor'. Few words, but they hammer home the images. That and that you are not afraid to use unusual and less often used words like succinctly, pontificate, problematic, sluices, etc. I once had a creative writing teacher come down on me for use of the word 'skirl', saying that people don't really talk this way! Yes, well, it makes me glad to see that in the real world, people do, and you use them correctly and well (amazing to me that a lot of people can't).

That aside, I LOVE THE H/C OWIES! Lol, I'm an Eliot whumper/lover, and this one is on the top of the favorites for me. Great job, and I really hope you hurt him...er, write, more!