In the spirit of Valentine's Day, I've chosen this week's theme to be hearts. That way we aren't totally limited to the holiday being what the poem's about. You're welcome to interpret the theme how you wish, and set it to the mood of your choosing. However, if I see anyone write something obscenely hateful, I will throw my big ol' foot at their guts. :3 So yeah, keep that in mind.

As well, I've selected a poetry style for us to use. That style is called a Cinquain. This is made up of five lines, none of which rhyme with each other. The structure is as follows:

A Few Posts A Day, One Post a Day, A Few Posts a Week, One Post a Week, Slow As Molasses

Writing Levels:

Intermediate, Adept, Adaptable

Genders You Prefer Playing:

No Preferences

Playing Style- Passive or Aggressive:

I lean towards passive. I'm willing to try and be more aggressive, but since I'm pretty nervous about such things and have little experience, it's probably not best to entirely rely on me. I prefer to at the very least work together with my partner to figure out how the story will move along.

Favorite Genres:

Horror, Apocalyptic, Modern Fantasy, Fantasy, Pretty much anything

Genre You DON'T Like:

Furry/animal (I'm not great at playing non-humanoid characters), romance (Romance in roleplays is fine with me, but if that's all that really happens, or it's forced... nah, not my scene.)

Winter

The light
Never found you,
And you felt so alone.
We tried to thaw your heart; You were
So cold.

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(Hmm, well that was a bit cliche, as well as not really about love and such things.
Let's try this again.)
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Platonic

True love
It is not harsh,
But something between friends,
Who'll give up their lives - to prevent
an end.

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(And.... I still don't like it. I GIVE UP, THESE CINQUAINS ARE TOO HARD.)

Aggressive. If I have an idea for a fantasy 1x1, I will design it to the fullest extent I can and then share it with my partner to see what they think, as I am a fan of expanding the various areas of lore and nature within a sandbox universe, such as a bestiary of typical creatures to be found in said universe, a dictionary of gods and godly artifacts, and even maps to the realms of said gods. In other people's roleplays however, I prefer to be passive if it is a group setting, or if it is not a group sandbox.

In the spirit of Valentine's Day, I've chosen this week's theme to be hearts. That way we aren't totally limited to the holiday being what the poem's about. You're welcome to interpret the theme how you wish, and set it to the mood of your choosing. However, if I see anyone write something obscenely hateful, I will throw my big ol' foot at their guts. :3 So yeah, keep that in mind.

As well, I've selected a poetry style for us to use. That style is called a Cinquain. This is made up of five lines, none of which rhyme with each other. The structure is as follows:

Last year,
I gave my heart
shaped box of chocolates
to the boy with eyes—almond brown—
of lies.

Note: I am glad you decided to do structured poetry this week. I have been reading some articles about the death of structured poetry in America, since free-verse has become so dominant, and I believe that these sorts of things help! In response, I have decided I really want to start writing more structured poetry.

I really like the gentility that you used here when crafting the poem. It reminds me of Sara Teasdale or Emily Dickinson, except they probably wouldn't have used such a word like cartwheels, which suggests a lot of movement and action. Their writing was much more soft than that. So, in a way, you have a volta within a cinquain. Lines 1-3 are very action-oriented, as if you yourself are doing cartwheels in front of your beloved. Lines 4-5 are the reprieve; when you suddenly stop, breathe in, and whisper, "Please excuse my clumsiness. I love you." This is how I interpreted it, and I found it to be a lovely effect.

Well now,
here we now lay
glistening bodies tied.
Who was it that said romance died?
They lied.

I realize after a few minutes I didn't use the theme of the challenge. Ahem. >.>

But I like it is the way it is.

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I like this one a lot as well, but there are a few more issues with it. I liked the theme of the poem, even if I only have a vague idea as to its meaning. To me, the poem paints a scene of a couple being buried together in an act of undying romance. However, I had to dig for that meaning. I'm the sort of writer and reader who likes crisp, clear, and to-the-point writing.

Technically, this piece isn't a cinquain, since lines 3-5 all rhyme. The use of the word "now" seems a bit redundant. Especially in smaller poems like these, repeated words in such close proximity simply break up the flow. Line 2 seems a bit choppy, but you probably fix that by changing it to, "here now we lay." If not, most people will certainly read it that way anyways. Other than that, I really liked it. :)

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