In the summary or description of your poem you said 'from the heart of a masochist'. And as I was reading the poem the part where you say 'You make me want to kill you' sounded more like a sadist than a masochist.

But the emotion in the poem was more masochistic in a way. Yearning for someone to love you and whatnot. I just had a slight problem with that since I am a masochist.

Overall I loved this poem a lot. The motion you expressed in it was really quite beautiful and believable. Which is hard to do in most poems such as these. I also really loved the repetitive parts after you expressed some type of emotion. I loved it and hope you write more of these types of poems. Since I am in love with angsty emoing shit poems. They're so the best kind.

another good story/poem! you are the Alpha of whatever it is lol lol lol. Onslaught? can't remember off the top of my head, but i don't see why you don't think you're as good a writer as you are...~baby dyke rae~

rhyming in this was a bit awkward, but it had something very innocent and 'disclosed' and true. i really like this line: I scream out your name but never in vain. It doesn't flow very well in some parts but the subject matter is very realistically portrayed. i had my doubts when i read the title, but when i read the poem the speaker seemed totally believeable and real.

wow. this poem is of pure excellence! i love how you brought in love and hate and showed what it can do to someone. this is an amazing poem! i think i'll read the rest of yours, i really like your writing style! keep it up!best wishes,stella

Wow I really loved this poem...the twisting turmoil of love verses hate really shines here...I loved the line "If I can’t feel your love then let me feel your pain." very haunting and powerful...also the repitition of the words "You make me..." are very powerful...how the narrator says that their "lover" forces them to love them but doesn't even return the feelings...great job, it's goin on my favorites :) keep writing!

Lil' Inu-Yahsa chapter 1 . 1/14/2005

This was quite funny. Sorta dark. But good. And I like the whole, you make me want to kill... you. part, hysterical! Hehe, like it, nicely written. ::pats back::

~Inu Kun~ (Im on )

Yuri Fan chapter 1 . 1/14/2005

This was a great, great poem. Good job with the symmetry of the words and everything.

I like you tied being cryptic with actually making sence. With a lot of these poems they dont make ANY sence, and they arent supposed to . But this one does, and thats good.