This must be the first time I've read a poem with the imagery of a dormouse in it. Very unique and fits the message perfectly. The last line tastes a bit bittersweet though.. but that could also just be me :) Great work!

myno chapter 2 . 4/26/2012

What an unexpected take on the situation. I liked the comparison to a dormouse.

Moon-Chaser chapter 2 . 4/26/2012

I love this, an interesting take with the dormouse that I'm sure everyone loves! The ending really made me think, so thank you for it up.

Ivriniel chapter 14 . 4/20/2012

The last line is somehow surprinsing, but beautiful.

403 Forbidden chapter 14 . 4/20/2012

I like the second line, it is real and kind. However, it was just a little clunky.

Getuie chapter 13 . 4/20/2012

Sometimes God is the only One that can be what we so long to be. The prayer made me think of that. Of how we sometimes long for something so strongly to occur... something almost done wih our own hands, but we need to realise that God is the one that'll make things change if we allow Him to.

Rose Dark Thorn chapter 13 . 4/20/2012

You know, you have such a way with words, it can bring people to tears. You've done that to me a lot, you know. Not this particular work, but you have. I can really feel these, though. You say I'm good with feeling, but so are you.