I'm really sorry but that was terrible. As a huge fan of hp I can't help but feel hurt because Ron and her line were SOULMATES and you just ripped that up. Besides, it's so unlike hermoine to express her feelings openly like that towards harry and so unlike harry to just ask her like that. He's akward and well, he's Harry Potter! You were very wrong to write this I'm sorry. It was pretty well written and I hope you continue to write books as long as they have good back bones!

Um, wow, that was not that great yet not that bad. You could go back through it and write more or continue also you need to cut out the song versus, it makes it hard to read. Have fun and don't write one chapter with no continuation.

....um...OUCH!....it's like....rip out my heart and stomp on it why don't you!!!......i've had that kind of expiriance.....now i just keep thinking....why bother with it anymore....it will just hurt worse every time......i'm smart too but i still don't get WHY exactly people want to go through all that crap.....i have friends and family who love me...i don't need a guy to feel special.......but i have FELT exactly like she felt.......we should start a club....yeah, we could get t-shirts and everything....it'd be SUPER FUN!!!!!

aahhhh, sad! poor hermione! thats really tight, harry doing that in front of her and asking her in front of every1. i mean, what if shed said yes? what the hell would he, or cho (stupid dumb crybaby) have done then? congrats on a brillo story!