Was it just me or was that a little sudden at the end? Oh, whatever, but its just seemed somewhat unexpected. Anyway, A+ for the writing, I liked it, not too repetitive and pretty entertaining. Keep writing!

Author's Response: Thank you! I will try to continue writing, I've just been so busy with school work and exams. After my exams I'll be back on track!

Okay, slow down a bit. I think you were trying to go for a sudden burst of passion, stemming from a love/hate relationship, but you were far too rushed, and I think the scene you were trying to have come off as romantic came off a bit sloppy and too sudden. The fact that Ginny had sex with Malfoy, and had him "explore a region that no boy had explored," could be romantic, or passionate, but not if they met suddenly, and as she's walking away, the air feels cold, and suddent they're necking like rabbits against the nearest wall. Even passion can't be that rushed. Try it again, slow it down a bit, and PLEASE add a bit more detail, it seems like your story was a rough plot outline instead of an actualy story. Come on, I know you can do it!

Author's Response: Thank you for that critique. I'll try harder next time! I'm just writing a story at the moment,I hope you review it! I'll put ALL the details in. Thank you! x

wow lol that was....strange. it was very passionate but in a totally different way, and funny at the same time...and the part where he gets all cheeky, its funny as hell! “You wouldn’t. I could see the fear in your eyes when you hit me the first time. I have to admit, it did sting a bit but if I was about to rape you, I wouldn’t back down after that.” that was bloody hillarious! then she just cursed him out:))) anywayz hott one-shot! ~Karla~