apathy

you packed your bags
And headed for the west
To find a smoky southern comfort
Where they do it best

You were both miles and miles
Casting shadows into smiles
And never mess with Texas
Unless you’re not impressed

You walk
between the cactus
and underneath the stars
and the Joshua tree!

The fearless jackal
The lone prairie wolf-
howling at the moon
Just Like a coyote

You said I’ll wander
To brand new heights and
Simply scattered things
And I don’t even care at all
You said why bother
With a grounded kite
And birds that lost their wings
And I don’t even care at all

We don’t consider rain
We found the coffee stains
Inside survival of the rumors
Whispering campaigns
We all reside
We are the loyal town-folk
casting secret ballots
Registering votes

We left the roses there atop the graves
We watched the black, turn white and achromatic greys
The cemetery is no place to play
When we don’t seem to have much to say

You said I’ll wander
To brand new heights and
Simply scattered things
And I don’t even care at all
You said why bother
With a grounded kite
And birds that lost their wings
And I don’t even care at all

I searched the whole world over
For a commonplace
But what’s the use when we’re
the rats you trap inside this maze
who form alliance
to further science and belief
we’re left in mischief as we vomit
as we grind our teeth

We left the roses there atop the graves
We watched the black, turn white and achromatic greys
The cemetery is no place to play
When we don’t seem to have much to say

apathy
Hi
Good song.
I can't pinpoint anything in particular that's lacking. As Gaylen said maybe a slightly more straightforward production might have befitted a bit more but there's nothing wrong with vision and ambition.
The strummed acoustic guitars sounded a touch bassy and could maybe do with a bit of high end EQ.
The panning of certain drum parts spread things just a bit too far and maybe could be bought just a touch more centre though it is good to have high hats panned just a bit left and ride cymbals to the right.
Just a touch of reverb on vox would add a bit of warmth as they felt just a little bit 'cold'.
I like the lyrics a lot
Good stuff
cheers