I have to say this wasn't a bad story, this was actually quite good! I think the length was just fine and the smut was great. The only problem I have is that the characters seemed to shift/change slightly. They're first time together both Edward and Emmett felt very nervous and almost anxious. This time Emmett was much more in command and pushy, almost bordering bossy. He even rushed things when it came to the anal which most certainly was not like the first time. Just what I gathered from the story, take it or leave it...all in all very good job though!

good story but you really need to work on your word choice. plus try defining which characters are saying what because i got a little confused in the third chapter, but i eventually figured it out. But you want to make your writing more clear so that the reader knows exactly who is say what exspecially in a hot story like this.