And that shows what a professional cover designer brings to the table, I guess.

Nobody -- not here, and not anyone I've asked in person -- chose B. Their reasons have differed, but every single one of them chose A.

B was my design. A was designed by my nephew, who's a cover designer for a local publisher and went to school for this for a lot of years. It looks so simple; but clearly he knows something I don't, because his design is more effective in the eyes of the audience.

For further reference, he made a new version. This is the one I went with.

Martin L. Shoemaker wrote:And that shows what a professional cover designer brings to the table, I guess.

Nobody -- not here, and not anyone I've asked in person -- chose B. Their reasons have differed, but every single one of them chose A.

B was my design. A was designed by my nephew, who's a cover designer for a local publisher and went to school for this for a lot of years. It looks so simple; but clearly he knows something I don't, because his design is more effective in the eyes of the audience.

For further reference, he made a new version. This is the one I went with.

Martin L. Shoemaker wrote:And that shows what a professional cover designer brings to the table, I guess.

Nobody -- not here, and not anyone I've asked in person -- chose B. Their reasons have differed, but every single one of them chose A.

B was my design. A was designed by my nephew, who's a cover designer for a local publisher and went to school for this for a lot of years. It looks so simple; but clearly he knows something I don't, because his design is more effective in the eyes of the audience.

For further reference, he made a new version. This is the one I went with.

I've been playing at cover-making. Here is the first serious attempt! The story meant to go inside it isn't very good , it was my first HM, and at only 3200 words it's a bit short. But let me know what you think of the cover, including "A Tragedy from Mercury" which I'm not sure about as a tag line.

E.CaimanSands wrote:I've been playing at cover-making. Here is the first serious attempt! The story meant to go inside it isn't very good , it was my first HM, and at only 3200 words it's a bit short. But let me know what you think of the cover, including "A Tragedy from Mercury" which I'm not sure about as a tag line.

Think the title at the bottom looks really good. But the stars are so dense that it's hard on the eyes to read the byline/tagline.

I agree with Strycher. It's also a little confusing in that the second tag line looks like a title, and then there's another title below. Love the art, and the title and both taglines catch my interest.

Agreed, yes. And this is better than it was. I went and darkened the background a little to try to make it easier to read. But I might be able to darken it some more. And I was thinking that too, Martin, that the tagline is probably too big--it looks like the title. Or maybe the wrong wording (too titleish -- ok that isn't a word I know!)

Thanks, I shall tinker a bit more and see what I come up with. It's quite fun tinkering.

I love the color you've chosen. I'm a huge fan of gold and blues used and just the color alone sparks my interest and catches my eye. The Dimensions of Night and Day stands out the most to me and from a glance I assume it's the title. The outline of the words work, even with the busier background with the starscape it stands out to me. The other topography however could use a tad something to help it stand out. I'm thinking since it is up against black anyway, you can't do a drop shadow, nor do I think you should outline it like you've done the title, but maybe a slight bevel effect? If you did this in power point it is really easy to do (and then take away if you don't like it). I do like the slight fade in color across the words on your name and tales from Mercury part, so don't change that. I think the bevel will also clear up the problem of your name fading into the shiny stars behind it, too.

I see why you want to drop #1 it does seem not needed, but the idea of a series gets me excited (I'm a sucker for series). I know a series can be a huge selling point. For *now* you can leave it off and later (maybe when you have more to the series) go back in and add it in. I just feel it is important for people to know it's part of a series so they can buy them all up.

I love the color you've chosen. I'm a huge fan of gold and blues used and just the color alone sparks my interest and catches my eye. The Dimensions of Night and Day stands out the most to me and from a glance I assume it's the title. The outline of the words work, even with the busier background with the starscape it stands out to me. The other topography however could use a tad something to help it stand out. I'm thinking since it is up against black anyway, you can't do a drop shadow, nor do I think you should outline it like you've done the title, but maybe a slight bevel effect? If you did this in power point it is really easy to do (and then take away if you don't like it). I do like the slight fade in color across the words on your name and tales from Mercury part, so don't change that. I think the bevel will also clear up the problem of your name fading into the shiny stars behind it, too.

I see why you want to drop #1 it does seem not needed, but the idea of a series gets me excited (I'm a sucker for series). I know a series can be a huge selling point. For *now* you can leave it off and later (maybe when you have more to the series) go back in and add it in. I just feel it is important for people to know it's part of a series so they can buy them all up.

Thanks, Tina. I'm using GIMP so I'm not too sure how I'd change the fonts in that. The title font is just how it comes but I'll have another look at it.

I've changed the title now to "Mercury is the Coldest Planet" and scrapped the Tragedy subtitle. Not a very exciting title perhaps but I think it describes the story better.

I really just want to see how this whole self publishing thing works. I'm rather expecting to take the story down eventually, when I have better stories to put up, so I'm not too worried if it's not perfect. So it will be fairly expensive also for such a short story as I don't really want anyone to read this one.

I'd say the cover art is definitely sci-fi or medical (obviously) but then the TITLE would cause me some genre confusion. "Angel" ??? I get that kids are their mothers' little angel, but I'm reading it as a title, which suggests a genre-twist, which says "fantasy" to me (is it Orson Scott Card who writes/warns that in Fantasy, we have to be careful about word-pictures being taken TOO literally ... BECAUSE it's Fantasy and the reader might accept anything etc?)

------> So it's more the TITLE might cause genre-confusion, at least for me, imo.

And it's, y'know ... orange. Cool art though. It's just my personal prejudice against orange, from too many "yer white balance was off, so everything's orange" photo heartbreaks. If I were a sailor with scurvy, I'd luv me some orange! If i were a lover walking down the sunset beach, i'd luv me some orange. If i were a poet desperate to finish my Paradise Lost by finding a rhyme for "orange" ... well, we know how that one ends. Only in heartbreak, only in soul-ache ...

But I'm slightly colour-blind, too, so who really trusts my sense of what's orange or isn't? Not me.

'The only tyrant we accept in this world is the still voice within.' -GandhiIOTF:Winner Q1 vol.27 (3x Finalist); WOTF: HM x2