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Wednesday, August 26, 2015

E'steem: No Good Deed Comic Script

Today’s blog features my first comic
script, an adaptation of the short story E'steem: No Good Deed This is my
first draft of the script and I’m still learning how to tell stories in the
comic panel format. It’s a major challenge getting the images and dialogue in
my head to fit into one solitary image for every panel, but I think I’ll get
the hang of it eventually. Enjoy!

Copyright (c) 2015 Shawn James

PAGE ONE

SPLASH

The close space of a fitting room inside one of Madison
Avenue’s designer boutiques. E’steem, a sexy sista with a fit, hourglass figure
wearing a red bra and bikini panties stands and stares at her reflection in the
full-length mirror. Her red wrap dress and designer heels lie on the fitting
room bench in the background. There’s an annoyed look on her face as she ponders-

E’steem: (thought bubble) How long does it take to find a
dress?

Title: NO GOOD DEED

PAGE TWO

PANEL ONE

Closeup on E’steem grimaces as she looks at her watch.

E’steem: (thought
bubble) The saleswoman said she’d be
right back. It’s been five minutes and she still hasn’t returned with the size
four she said was just supposed to be just on the rack-

PANEL TWO:

Medium shot, ¾
wide panel. Outside on the sales floor of a Madison Avenue designer boutique. Slow
day. One of the salesladies is working the counter and another is fishing
through dresses for E’steem’s size on a rack when-

A pair of obese hood
rats with brightly colored hair weaves, tight jeans, tight T-shirts and gaudy
multicolored sneakers kick the door in. One holds a nine, another holds a
shotgun. One woman points her pistol at the sales clerk at the register
the other aims her shotgun at the ceiling and lets off a round.

SFX (Door) BAM!

SFX (Shotgun
pointed at ceiling) BOOM!

HOODRAT: EVERYBODY GET YOUR HANDS UP! THIS IS A STICK UP!

PANEL THREE

In the fitting room a curious E’steem cocks an ear after
hearing the commotion and the store clerk’s scream.

SFX: (saleslady) AIEEGGGH!

PANEL FOUR

There’s a pissed
off look on E’steem’s face when she realizes what’s going on.

E’steem: (thought
bubble) Great. Out of all the
stores on Madison Avenue they had to rob it had to be one I was shopping in.
I’m not in the mood to be a hostage today.

PANELFIVE

Double wide panel wide shot, outside on the sales floor. One
hoodrat has her pistol trained on the salesclerk at the counter while she’s stuffing
money from the register in a bag. While the other points her shotgun at the
saleslady near the dresses-

Hoodrat with pistol: Is there anyone else in the store?

Saleslady: N-No…

Hoodrat with shotgun: I’ma go check the back.

PAGE THREE

PANEL ONE

Double wide panel. The Hoodrat kicks in the door of the
stall of the fitting room. There’s a gradient effect while E’steem starts to
fade from sight holding her iPhone as she starts to activate her cloak.

SFX (door kicked in) BOOM!

Hoodrat #1 Is there anyone back there?”

Hoodrat: Ain’t nobody in here!

Saleswoman: There has to be someone in there! She was our
only customer!

PANEL TWO

E’steem stands in the corner of the stall on the bench with
a piqued look on her face.

E’steem: (thought bubble)
There’s some customer service for you. Rat out the only person who isn’t a
hostage.

PANEL THREE

The hoodrat with the shotgun looks around and sees nothing
unaware of the invisible E’steem in the background.

Hoodrat: WELL
SHE MUSTA LEFT! AIN’T NOTHING IN HERE BUT CLOTHES!

PANEL FOUR

The hoodrat bolts out of the fitting room unaware of the
invisible E’steem standing in the corner.

PANEL FIVE

Closeup as E’steem becomes visible again as her reflection
can be seen in the mirror. She coyly smiles as peers down at her iPhone thinking-

E’steem (Thought bubble): I
could call the police. Or I could take the law into my own hands…

PANEL SIX

E’steem gestures.
A flash of light envelops her silhouette and…

SFX: FZASH!

E’steem: RAIMENTUS CHANGEUS!

Caption: A spell is chanted. And in the place of the
attractive shopper stands-

PAGE FOUR

Splash

Caption: E’steem, The Devilish Diva! Once one of the most
feared she-demons in All Hell, She now fights on the side of the Angels.

E’steem, stands posed in front of the mirror The sultry she-demon
has long black horns jutting out of the top of her head, yellow reptile eyes,
black cloven finger and toe claws. She wears a tattered red dress and a smile
on her face.

E’steem: Time to scare some kids straight.

PAGE FIVE

PANEL ONE

Double wide panel. In the background E’steem in demon form rushes
out to the sales floor. The smiling Hoodrats are snatching a bag of money from
the saleswoman behind the counter and heading for the exit.

HOODRAT: Nice doing business with you.

PANEL TWO

The hoodrats are terrified when-

SFX FZASH!

E’steem stands in front of the door arms akimbo with a smile
on her face. A flash of light behind her to signify her teleporting.

E’steem: Excuse me,
I’m with loss prevention. Can I see your receipt for that cash in your bag?

Hoodrat: OH MY
GOD! IT’S A MONSTER!

Caption: Demon
I’m a demon. Don’t they ever see the horns?

PANEL THREE

One of the terrified
Hoodrats fires her pistol at E’steem. Bullets bounce off her chest as the
charging E’steem who smiles and reaches for her gun and-

Hoodrat with
shotgun: SHOOT IT! SHOOT IT!

E’steem: Just
like a human kill what you don’t understand.

PANEL FOUR

Closeup on E’steem’s hands. She crumples the gun like paper.

SFX: CRUMP!

Panel FIVE

Side view of both women as they look at each other. The
taller E’steem smiles as she looks down at the terrified Hodrat and asks-

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Hi, I'm Shawn James and I'm a man with a lot on my mind. This blog is a place where I'll write essays, promote my self-published, books and display my art.
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