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so,we got are orders to start clearing the hanger. Antin is new to the game so sentra had to teach him a thing about the buzz droids i wonder what the Kaminoins are teaching them. Verd was ready to lock and load with his chain gun,but Ensowan wanted a good sniping place but you really can not do that in a crusier with white armor. we got down there and saw two bomb troopers dead one impaled with his gun the other with a stun stick. one droid was new but not a good droid he had very low armored. a good droid would be a dead one.

Quoting Ben The Lego Builder
This is a good start to comic MOCs, but I have several suggestions. Firstly, you really need to improve the vig with more detail, colour matching and walls. Just adding some figures to some plates doesn't make a MOC. Secondly, you need to have some explanation as to what is happening in the pictures- this MOC doesn't really make sense. Shortening this MOC and having some clearer pictures would also help. Good luck, and keep on MOCing!

This is a good start to comic MOCs, but I have several suggestions. Firstly, you really need to improve the vig with more detail, colour matching and walls. Just adding some figures to some plates doesn't make a MOC. Secondly, you need to have some explanation as to what is happening in the pictures- this MOC doesn't really make sense. Shortening this MOC and having some clearer pictures would also help. Good luck, and keep on MOCing!

not too bad, i dant think over 100 pics are needed though, and next time try some walls. they can add a lot of personality to a moc. and could you please look at my 225th squad: http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/314728