Sounds alright, although not very memorable to my ears on my first listen-through.
Reminded me a bit of Death too and the Riff 1 gave me some Gorod-vibes (I'm not sure why).
I thought the solo part flowed in particularly well.

īSounds like awesome. I liked first verse riff very much. Also good basslines. I still think some drums should use reworking. Riff 4 was too odd for my death-metal taste, but I think it fits anyway. Riff 5 was somehow generic but also brutal.
Solo reminded me of death. Bass fill sounded good on 106. Riff 6 drums didn't fit to the riff. I suggest to change ending somehow. It was too solid, I suggest doing some sort of blast.
This crit was related to my own taste, but overall the song was good as it is.
What should I say.. 7-8/10

Sounds alright, although not very memorable to my ears on my first listen-through. Reminded me a bit of Death too and the Riff 1 gave me some Gorod-vibes (I'm not sure why).
I thought the solo part flowed in particularly well.

Good stuff.

Thanks man!

Not a surprise though, because those 2 bands are my influences and i often listening to them.

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īSounds like awesome. I liked first verse riff very much. Also good basslines. I still think some drums should use reworking. Riff 4 was too odd for my death-metal taste, but I think it fits anyway. Riff 5 was somehow generic but also brutal.
Solo reminded me of death. Bass fill sounded good on 106. Riff 6 drums didn't fit to the riff. I suggest to change ending somehow. It was too solid, I suggest doing some sort of blast.
This crit was related to my own taste, but overall the song was good as it is.
What should I say.. 7-8/10

Thanks, what a detailed critics!

I'll check out the drum part later, i'm not very good at making drumbeat in guitar pro

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Great stuff!

Very interesting riffs and grooves. I really like what you did with riff 4, the drums give it a fusiony vibe instead doing a blastbeat like in some of the other riffs.
The verse also makes me head bang alot.

The only complaint i have is the solo, it doesn't really have any melody in it, imo you should re-write it. Try to sing a melody, it draws the listener more than just shredding.

Very interesting riffs and grooves. I really like what you did with riff 4, the drums give it a fusiony vibe instead doing a blastbeat like in some of the other riffs.
The verse also makes me head bang alot.

The only complaint i have is the solo, it doesn't really have any melody in it, imo you should re-write it. Try to sing a melody, it draws the listener more than just shredding.

i think the first riff could be played once to be a good segue into the next part so it's like
smack you in face a bunch of times then the like bar 3, 5 shit then ending in pinch harmonic so like howling into the sky then descent into chaotic fast part

verse is awesome

the tremolo picked part slightly detracts from riff 2 by not really saying as much as the rest of the riff seems to a small extent like a place holder

riff 5 is pretty cool

hmmm solo is not bad put the little like 2(16th)1(8th) then 2(quarter) parts kind of seem like place holders for ideas you haven't had yet
also imagine something after the pinch harmonic ending similar to end of chucks solo's in lack of comprehension or vacant planets would fit nicely unless u want the abrupt change back into the song

I thought it overall was really sick. That dance-y fusion-y beat in riff 4 made me hard. I love stuff like that for some reason. The whole song was really nice. It balance melody perfectly with wank and brutality which is some that can't be said for much modern death metal. Easily could have been on Sound of Perseverance, or on the album Atheist would have written had they not taken a million-year break between Elements and Jupiter. not saying it's unoriginal. The influence is obvious. That's all.

I thought it overall was really sick. That dance-y fusion-y beat in riff 4 made me hard. I love stuff like that for some reason. The whole song was really nice. It balance melody perfectly with wank and brutality which is some that can't be said for much modern death metal. Easily could have been on Sound of Perseverance, or on the album Atheist would have written had they not taken a million-year break between Elements and Jupiter. not saying it's unoriginal. The influence is obvious. That's all.

I'm not really a fan of death metal but I thought this was extremely competent and I like the way that the dynamics change a lot- and riff 4 is great because it's so unexpected and different. The solo is also perfect for the song, it's fast but it's not completely amelodic either, and the bass goes well with it.

First of all thanks for the crit and I took a look over your song. I enjoyed it, it sounds really good & I wouldn't mind hearing a recording of a finished product!

The riffs were really good, I just found riff #3 a bit bland and repetitive. A few people had mentioned the solo being a bit generic or whatever and I just added some stuff and made some minor changes to it.