AAAWWW!!!!! that`s so sweet! i luv the ending and the middle, and come to think of it, i luv the beginning too! GREAT FANFIC!!! it kept me interested all the way through, and it made sense.there weren`t things missing, like in other fanfics that i`ve read, so ALLELUIA! thank u for a gr8 fanfic!!!!!!!!!!!!=)

I found this while searching for good Harry/Ginny stories, and I was not disappointed! Many times I find that romance fics suffer from bad characterization, because let's face it, Harry's certainly not the most romantic guy in the world. But here, his feelings came through in a very real way (muddled, angry, confused) but still show how much he cares about Ginny. It's the un-smoothness of it all that makes his words ring so true.

Ginny is my favorite part of this, though. It may be sacrilege, but I really dislike JKR's Ginny, and your version makes her fiery nature seem real and admirable, not irritating. It's a great mix of "Damn it, I love him, but why is he being such an idiot?" Like Harry, Ginny's not particularly romantic, so what is essentially her grand gesture to win Harry back comes across as frustrated, unsure (of him, not herself), and wonderfully real.

I really couldn't find much to concrit, except for the flow in this one part: Her gaze drifted upward. His forehead was pressed forlornly into his hands. His lackadaisical hair peeped between his fingers. His aura pulsated with repressed grief. The four short sentences in a row interrupted the flow for me, but I'm not sure if you intended to do that for effect. In any case, that's not much to criticize, and this is a great view of Harry and Ginny's oh-so-unrestful relationship.

It was pretty good. You have caught my disease, I'm afraid, as you use a lot more dialogue than narrative, just like me. But it's not a bad thing, but I'd love to see more description... Just a suggestion. But good job! =) --RP