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shadowycorner says:Well, i think this was a pretty remarkable sotry. If I were to tell you my opinion briefly, I would say that I liked it and thought it very interesting. But since I like to go into more depth, this will be no exception. i think the way you didn't let us know who was this story about was good. I first thought it was Harry, then Ginny...slowly but surely I realized it was Neville and only then it stroked me of how great he would fit into a story like this. They way of your writing and the style overall was very good, especially the range of words, but I found some punctuation mistakes here and then. But I wouldn't worry too much about that, because I'm an antitalent when it comes to punctuation and grammar, so maybe I was wrong. The only thing that confused me (and this might be only my fault since I have a headache and should sleep now) but I didn't really get the whole Frank is gone, neville is going to play him. I don't know, I'm sure it's explained in those words, in some symbols, but stupid little me can't find it. I guess I'll just read the end again to grasp the meaning. Also, time-traveling fics are so hard to write, therefore you have my respect for writing such a decent time-travel fic, but you have the general flaw of all time-traveling fics. Since Neville came from the future, he knows what will happen and how will it happen. He knows that Snape is a traitor, and so is Pettigrew. That is the reason people who use time-turners can't be seen or interact with anyone from a different time, because if the past is changed, so is the future, and that could sometimes have bad consequences. Everytihng that happens has a meaning, or so i think. Oh! And how could I almost forget...I loved James. It was a nice refreshment to the whole story. So...I'd say great work. I didn't have to froce myself to read through this story, which is a good thing. I wanted to finish reading. Happy writing of whatever you write next. You're a good writer.

Author's Response: Thank you for the long and thoughtfull review! The thing about timetravel (in my fic anyway) is that you can't travel back to your own time, it hasn't really been written... It is as Dumbledore explained to Neville, the future is not yet written, Neville can't know what is going to happen exactly therefor he can't go blabbing about traitors and stuff! If the story did proceed as planed who would really believe him? Dumbledore doesn't even think that he knows the future!! It is a very complex concept... As for the whole Frank thing, well I will wait for you to figure it out! If you cant then say the word and I will explain it... but for now I would like to wait! Once again thank you for the long review and all of the complements it holds!