Author's Note

Damn, I was so far into the writing zone, that I spent FIVE hours writing this in one sitting! Anyway, this piece is for my parents, to reassure them that I'm ready to finally move out and face the real world alone (which is what I'll be doing in less that half a year). Writing this piece was the most fun I've had writing any piece in over half a year! Anyway, as always, tell me what you think!

Oh, and it might be a while before I write anything again, as I start back at college on Monday. Until next time! :)

My Review

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The repetition of your second stanza gives it the feel of a song lyric, more than a poetic piece, however, i suppose that was your intention; to reinforce the message to your parents.....that you will take your step into independence alone but with their blessing and guidance and all will be just fine.

This is a very relatable theme; we all do eventually take those same first steps into the big, bad world. It can be daunting but also exhilarating at the same time. It's a true rite of passage. No doubt armed with a cool head and the wisdom of your parents ringing in your ears, you will make this step a successful one for yourself.

A very nice write, Dan. Some great word choices used and generous in its self less execution.

Posted 6 Months Ago

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6 Months Ago

Thank you. I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed this. You're right with thinking that the repetition.. read moreThank you. I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed this. You're right with thinking that the repetition was intentional. This is meant to be more like an actual song than just poetry. Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts. :)

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I liked the energy and the drive of the poetry.
"I must do this on my own
Don't be afraid to let go
I will do this on my own"
I agree with the above lines. Sometimes, we must stop and re-set our journey. Thank you Dan for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Months Ago

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3 Months Ago

Very true. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and share your thoughts on this, Coyote... read moreVery true. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and share your thoughts on this, Coyote. :)

3 Months Ago

Dude this would be the coolest thing ever if you put music to it lol. The word choice is so good, and I love the feeling I get from this!! For real though, this is so good. Keep writing, you'll go far!!

Posted 5 Months Ago

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5 Months Ago

Haha, thanks! I'll try to keep on writing! I'm very happy to hear that you enjoyed reading this!! .. read moreHaha, thanks! I'll try to keep on writing! I'm very happy to hear that you enjoyed reading this!! :)

5 Months Ago

Forgot something; I wish I could add music to this! Unfortunately, my skill lies in just the poeti.. read moreForgot something; I wish I could add music to this! Unfortunately, my skill lies in just the poetic portion of this process, not in the musical. Maybe someday, though. That would be a major dream come true for me :)

This was a cute little letter to your parents. I like that you seem confident in your foray into the ever-frightening 'real world'. The only thing that threw me off was your font choice/color choice. It made everything seem more juvenile and not so serious.

Posted 5 Months Ago

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5 Months Ago

I can understand why you think that. I mainly put different colors into this because it's more fun.. read moreI can understand why you think that. I mainly put different colors into this because it's more fun for me than the boring, regular font. I'm forced to be mature enough in every other aspect of life, so I let myself have a wee bit of childish fun from time to time when it comes to font colors on this site XD That, and it's supposed to add a bit more visual appeal to the poetry itself. I used to go over the top with this, but these days, I use it sparingly. Anyway, thanks for reading and sharing your opinion on my writing. My annoyingly consistence lack of confidence in my writing ability appreciates it. :)

The repetition of your second stanza gives it the feel of a song lyric, more than a poetic piece, however, i suppose that was your intention; to reinforce the message to your parents.....that you will take your step into independence alone but with their blessing and guidance and all will be just fine.

This is a very relatable theme; we all do eventually take those same first steps into the big, bad world. It can be daunting but also exhilarating at the same time. It's a true rite of passage. No doubt armed with a cool head and the wisdom of your parents ringing in your ears, you will make this step a successful one for yourself.

A very nice write, Dan. Some great word choices used and generous in its self less execution.

Posted 6 Months Ago

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

6 Months Ago

Thank you. I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed this. You're right with thinking that the repetition.. read moreThank you. I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed this. You're right with thinking that the repetition was intentional. This is meant to be more like an actual song than just poetry. Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts. :)

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College Burnout, DE

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I'm a twenty one year old young man who enjoys writing poetry, songs, stories, paintball and other things. My favorite things to do are parkour, video games, listening to music, and making people hap.. more..