It was alright but Naomi was such a piss off through most of it. For awhile I was like I hope Emily gets married n shoves it in Naomi's face just so she would know what she lost and I'm a big naomily fan! Through it all though I knew that they would make it back to each other. They always do in the end. The only thing that kinda bugged me was how they finally hooked up when Naomi was ready. It kinda felt unfair to Em in a way. After years of chasing, n Naomi hurting her, leading her on, being a jerk they finally get together when Naomi realizes "ya, maybe I do want her" I just think there should have been more begging and suffering for Naomi, like Emily begged and suffered for her. Other than that pretty entertaining story. You're a beautiful writer, keep it up :)

Read this whole story yesterday and it is really well written. Thank you for writing this.

Guest chapter 12 . 1/6/2014

oh my god i think this is the greatest chapter i've read in any fic yet i'm tearing up in a very good way. wow that was moving and incredible and a great reward for the build up to it and wow round of applause to you

great story, couldn't stop reading, chapter after chapter I was so captivated by it, you made me gasp and smile, te game conversation just I don't know just perfect "be brave and want me back" perfect :) hope to read you again :)

I love you for writing this. It was so good even though Naomi in part 1 made me cringe and want to kill her. I like how you made their gradual maturity seem so real. The game scene where Emily walked towards Naomi was perfection. Again, amazing job. I look forward to reading more of your work.

you have very long chapters but they're great.. finally finished reading this :) yay! its been a beautiful story! no kidding it took them forever to get together but in the end we all know there's a happy ending. thanks for finishing this, it rashly says a lot about you..you're an amazing person with huge potential

Wow. Fucking wow. Normally i wait to review until the end but i had to say that part one has me terribly broken up. Youre a very skilled writer and have captured naomi and emilys voices well. I must say a lot of naomis behavior with micah seemed different from the original character but everything with emily felt very real. I am so excited to see how this concludes, excellent work!