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Review:

celticbard says:Hi Shiloh!
I'm back for chapter two. This was a nice follow-up to the previous installment. We got to see more of Lorcan, along with Lucy and some of the other Next-Gen clan. I liked the fact that James has his father's sense of nonchalant humor. Although he was a bit oblivious, I didn't find him at all obnoxious, but rather good-natured. Molly was also cute, very sweet, understanding and intuitive.

As for Lorcan, I have to say, his perceptions are very feminine. Not that that's a bad thing, mind you, I just think it makes him very gentle and sensitive. He's not robust like James and I do feel as though he's almost aloof, which is a really fabulous trait when done right. And you, my dear, have done it perfectly. ^_^

There were a few minor errors in this chapter. At the end, you switched POVs briefly from Lorcan to Molly. And the fact that Lorcan reiterates his job description to Molly seemed somewhat repetitive to me, although I understand you wanted to allow Molly to introduce the fact that Lucy works for the same department. Otherwise, this was a very enjoyable chapter. Onto the next!

Best,
celticbard

Author's Response: Haha, Lorcan is a bit feminine in how he sees things.
James was probably my favorite part to write. I'm rather fond of him and I just love to make him silly, but so kind at heart.

I did go back and edit a few things you mentioned. I appreciate you taking the time to point them out!