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EverDiggory says:Wow! This left my brain a wonderfully scrambled mess, so if I ramble, its on you;D

I really liked this. I love the quote, and I think you did a wonderful job. This was very unique, I've never read anything like this before, which definitely leaves a lasting impression.

Why in the world were you seeming so worried about writing angst? I think you did a really, really good job! I was very thoroughly impressed, even since you said it was your first angsty piece!

I'm also lost as to why you were worried about there being no dialogue. Honestly, if there had been dialogue it would have thrown it all off. Again, you impressed me by not having dialogue.

The flow is tricky. I was definitely concerned when I saw the numbers, I was sure this was going to be very, very jumpy. Yes, there were jumps. Thats a given, you have them listed for Pete's sake! But, they weren't unmanageable and didn't butcher this lovely one-shot!

Good job and good luck in the challenge! Feel free to request again for some of your other work!

xx

Ever

Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you so much for stopping by! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it!

I was so worried about the angst! I'm so used to writing fluff and humor and romance that this was way out of my comfort zone - but I really loved writing it! And it makes me so happy that you think I pulled it off - really, thank you.

And the no dialogue made me really worried because I was afraid people would get bored, not read it all the way through, etc. I was afraid that it was a turnoff, you know? But I'm so glad that you think it doesn't need it; I'm starting to feel much better about this piece :)

And I'm glad that the jumps didn't make it too disjointed! Thank you!

Thank you so much for reading this over! I'm crossing my fingers for the challenge, haha. I'll probably request something again soon, thank you :)