Do you have a comic or other project you want to promote? Feel free to post about it here, but don't just post and run. Sticking around and joining in other discussions is the best way to get Outhousers interested in your work. These topics will also show up in The News Stand and The Asylum, for maximum exposure.

(here's some constructive criticism) who are the people in the first page?

That's not the first page. These blogs are tricky you have to read them upside down.

"not coming" is two words and a file belonging to Private Rogers would be "Rogers' file"

one is probably a type 'O'. So it's just a correction not criticism.

what does that second paragraph have to do with anything? it would be helpful if it was sooner than her third panel before we are told that the woman is Sharon Carter for someone who only knows what she read in a file, she sure does get close to Steve real quick. Is Sharon a slut?

Whoa, slow down. Slut? Obviously these are questions out of the ignorance of the characters history. I'm not going to complain.( Go to wikipedia and look it up. They have it-Stan!)

Army" ? Is the U.S greater than the Army? what does the page before this have to do with anything? Who would start a conversation like that? Of the two people talking you made the Irish looking redhead the Jew? There's avoiding stereotypes and then there is absurdity

GHERU wrote:I understand the Sharon Cap relationship in the "real" comics, but as this is set in a different continuity and that it took three pages for her name to be used there is nothing in this comic to show that they have the same relationship as they do in the comics. Especially since you comic does nothing to set up that relationship. If she had been seen in part 1, I would understand not identifying her right off, but if you are using her as Captain America's girl friend then that needs to be clear much earlier than it is. Their dialogue is not how lovers, even spy lovers, would speak to each other. After such formal talk, her allowing Steve to grab her is very abrupt and disrupts the flow of your story.

The redheaded comment was meant to be a joke, but as you took it seriously: Woody Allen and Harpo Marx are dark redheads, not the Irish redhead in your comic and I have no idea what James Kahn looks like since Wikkepeida says he is an author and has no picture. I've seen many a dark redheaded Jew at my synagogue, but bright orange red, I'm sure they exist but, c'mon. I still think there was no need for him to be that unique looking, and its even more jarring considering the look of the guy he is talking to.

I understood your comic, in fact I had to explain it to quite a few people who are also comic book readers. That being said, you're not Hickman, if I don't understand something it is not because you have a complex script, its because the communication and meaning are lost along the way. That could be not identifying the characters soon enough or it could be poor choice of font color against sand. As it is, you, I guess (and I could be wrong) are trying to gain a following, gain readers, gain attention, and the best way to do that is make your comic new reader friendly with every new posting. Don't ask your readers to go to wick, look at pervious parts, or imply that they are stupid. Tell them what you think they should know:

"I was waiting in the train station, having just finished drinks with Dugan, and I saw my handler and sometimes lover Agent Sharon Carter walking over to me…"

There, you have introduced a new character, set up her relationship, and made it so none of the following dialogue / narration has to be changed. Also, you don't have to get snippy with your readers with "look it up on wikki" remarks that might make them not want to keep reading your work.

I do not think this blog format does you any favors with the fact that the reader has to keep going back and opening a new tab. Maybe if there was an arrow opine ("next page -->) or even if changing the url address's page number would work but as it stands it is way too much work for your readers to get the full effect of your comic. Internet users are notoriously lazy, and there were a number of people at the outhouse that stated the reason they stopped reading was that it was too much effort to get to the next page.

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some one else thought I was being unfair with the "racist imagey" comment

Racist Imagery? How deep does one have to look to find race in a patriotic car friggin toon? Some one has a huge stick up their ass, sideways!

my reply

GHERU wrote:"Racist Imagery?" yes, the bucktooth Japanese man is a standard in anti-Japanese racist imagery. It was very popular with the propaganda machine the US used during and after WWII. OF all the art in this comic, I thought that page was the best and captured the posters of the era almost perfectly.

Don't feel bad. I think it's clear that he doesn't like what any real person has to say. He seems to prefer the comments posted by his imaginary aliases who say things like:

Marine1 wrote:This is great stuff, when we goona see this in the stores?

or

31c4ce76-c2a2-11e0-acf0-000f20980440 wrote: Better than the movie! The art is beautiful and the story is more in sync with the origins of Cap. Not like the hollywood futureistic crap that we just saw. Hats off to the creator.

Are you fucking kidding? There's no way that these are real comments from real people.

"Dude, I bow down to you, you are the worlds greatest ballbuster." -Jude Terror"Sorry, nate! I think you automatically lose all arguments from now on, simply due to the fact that the only person willing to back you up is batshit insane!" - Dragavon"Everything I know I learned from reading your posts." - Nietoperz

"Dude, I bow down to you, you are the worlds greatest ballbuster." -Jude Terror"Sorry, nate! I think you automatically lose all arguments from now on, simply due to the fact that the only person willing to back you up is batshit insane!" - Dragavon"Everything I know I learned from reading your posts." - Nietoperz

Fan Fiction continues to make me think that there are circles of hell. One of them is for fan fiction writers like Cappoop... Capoop... whatever.

"Why are you pointing your screwdrivers like that? They're scientific instruments, not water pistols.""Oh, the pointing again! They're screwdrivers! What are you going to do? Assemble a cabinet at them?""Are you capable of speaking without flapping your hands about?"""Timey" what? "Timey wimey"?"

IvCNuB4 wrote:The Old Doctor is Cat-Scratch ?Well that explains a lot :lol: