Rated: 6th-7th Years • 514ReviewsSummary: The Hogwarts Express brings mystery and mischief in the Marauders' seventh and final year at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. James, Sirius, Remus, and Peter are facing a year of N.E.W.T.s, romance, intrigue, and, of course, a little mischief-making. There are plot twists galore! James (in the midst of saving the world) continues desperately to try to woo the incorrigible Lily Evans. Sirius deals with family problems while dealing with his incredible popularity and good looks (the horror!). Remus is provided with a backdoor to avoiding the prejudices of the inevitable real world, but at what cost? (dun-dun-dun) And Peter...well, Peter gets himself a girlfriend (but don't worry: it doesn't affect his hero-worshipping of James...or DOES IT?!)

If i had to describe your story in one word it would be this- WOW!
It was simply amazing. IT's clear that it was well thought out and you had a lot of fun writing it. I really wanted to read the whole story but then came exams.
Lovely story anyway. You have a lot of potential and talent.

Author's Response: ug exams are evil, and that's the truth. but on a lighter note THANK YOU..oh my goodness. this is extremely flattering to me and i'm sure i don't deserve it all, but thank you thank you.. One word to describe this review: WOWW!

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 195ReviewsSummary: Draco Malfoy finds something out about Hermione Granger and Harry Potter, that other people must not find out about! But in return for not telling anyone Draco is asking for something...

I have always been a huge fan of Draco/Hermione fics. When I started out on MNFF I was obsessed with James/Lily and gradually the ‘Other Pairing’ category drew me in. It took me quite a while to find D/H.

The thing about Draco and Hermione is that they are involved in such a fire and ice relationship. To write both forces and involve both elements is an extremely difficult task but Kyte, you have done it. I originally thought that their relationship was purely platonic but I must give your fic the credit of pulling it off. I have read a variety of fics, each with their own explanation of how this pairing came about but I loved your idea! It was very original and did not deal with circumstances forcing them together. So kudos to you for that!

One thing that bothered me a bit about this fic was how quickly Draco and Hermione came together. They have been enemies for seven years and can one kiss really change all that? Even if it did, I think both of them would be in denial at first and wouldn’t admit it so openly to each other. Perhaps you should extend your second chapter a bit, concerning this.

Another aspect of this story is the dance. Now, dances are generally considered cliché in the fandom and pulling them off is difficult. For one thing, I do not think that Dumbledore would ever host a dance to raise school spirit. He might allow potential Lockhart’s to have their fun with decorating the halls, but we haven’t even seen one dance other than the Yule Ball in the six years Harry has attended Hogwarts. For one thing, is the dance really needed? Harry and Hermione could still make out with Draco Malfoy coming across them. The dance doesn’t seem that crucial to the plot.

"How does he expect dancing will take away the fear of You-Know-Who simply bursting in on us at any moment?” sighed Hermione. Ron shook his head and Harry simply stared at his dinner plate without saying a word. He seemed to not be talking and staying silent quite a lot lately.

I think that you captured Hermione’s reaction perfectly. She would take a rather logical stance at this. And of course, you captured Ron and Harry perfectly too. Right here, you characterisation is spot-on. Good job! Also, Harry’s reaction wasn’t sudden at the end. When I first read this, I was wondering about it’s relevance but when I went on I realised that he was thinking about Hermione.

"Well then....that was unexpected," said Hermione, and Harry and her both smiled, happy for their friend.

I am a grammar freak unfortunately. The thing is, you really should have elipses in that dialogue instead of four periods.

"Does Weasle know about this? Does Weasle know that his two bestfriends are kissing in the moonlight by the lake", cried Draco.

This is such a typical Draco statement and perfectly shows the rivalry between them. Alright, again my grammar freakiness comes into play. There really should be a space between best and friends. Also, Draco calls Ron ‘Weasel’. Aaaargh! How I hate my nitpickiness.

"Fine. Your friendship will be ruined then." Hermione sighed and, without looking at Harry, said," Fine. But once and only once."

"Deal."

Oh wow. Perfect ending to a lovely chapter. I love the finality with which Hermione says deal but there was one thing in this paragraph that confused me a bit. ‘Hermione sighed’ should really come as its own paragraph to avoid confusion. You should get something like-

“Fine. Your friendship will be ruined then."

Hermione sighed and, without looking at Harry, said," Fine. But once and only once."

"Deal."

Overall, I love the theme of the fic and its lovely characterisation in the beginning! You have an excellent start here. All you have to do is to remember to take things a bit slower. Other than that- lovely job! I look forward to reading more from you.

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 916ReviewsSummary: 7th Yr Sequel to Ancient Magic. It is now known the power of immortality resides inside Harry and Ginny. Will their combined powers be enough to protect them from the Dark Lord?

Overall a good story i must say. You have a fair writing style and your grammer is quite correct but you might want to improve upon the flow of your story. It seems a little rushed. Other than that, Good Job!

An excellent chapter and i am glad to see this tory has beem getting along so well with such a positive response from all it's reviewers. Now to get down to business. What i liked was that you have a very good voice in your writing style, your grammer is quite good. I also enjoyed your descriptions and the emotions potrayed and the fact that the story began with Mr tibble's point of view. Maybe it was unwise to start the first half of the story that way because by the way it was described i thought it was Ginny not Molly. Anyway it was a nice, entertaining story! Keep up the good work!

Luna finally turned her gaze to Hermione's, her huge silver eyes twinkling. She said nothing, apparently content to stare at the older girl while sublimely sucking on her sugar quill.

Ginny giggled. "I have to agree with Hermione on this one, Luna," she said mirthfully, leaning forward so she could see past Hermione. "Germans might be renowned for lots of things, but I wouldn't say romance is one of them."

Luna continued to stare at both girls, her face devoid of expression as she rotated the slowly melting wand in her mouth.

Hermione raised a quizzical eyebrow as she turned to Ginny. The latter, for her part, was having trouble keeping a straight face, choosing to conceal her bubbling amusement behing her cotton candy. Hermione rolled her eyes and turned her attention back to the Ravenclaw.

"Luna, are you listening?" she asked, her lollipop now quite forgotten. "The answer's most definitely French. There's just no way it's German."

"You're a Germanophobe," proclaimed Luna matter-of-factly in between sucks of her licorice.

Hermione gaped at her. "I am not!" she blurted indignantly as Ginny fell back against the bench in a fit of laughter. "Luna Lovegood, you take that back! I am most certainly NOT a Germano — "

She paused, thinking.

" — phobe," completed Luna helpfully.

Now that is originality! I really loved the germanophobe part. One would expect things like that wih Luna. It was very in-character. (on Luna's part at least)

Alos I am quite sure that the spelling should be behind the cotton candy and not behing.

I found Hermione a bit OOC in the beginning but towards the later part she became in-character. And the last part was definitely the best but so was the middle and the beginning. *is undecided*

"The national symbol of the United States is the Bald Eagle!" exclaimed Hermione in exasperation. "NOT the Orangutan!"

Ok, this lead me to believe that this was a muggle crossword. But Luna is a pureblood, so how would she get her hands on it?

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 156ReviewsSummary: 6-year-old Sirius Black just wouldn’t listen; he snuck into the family cellar despite being forbiddened to do so... A broken artifact brought about a chain of events that’ll bring us to a different world. Although most of the events stayed the same, his absence brought about some minor changes - now Sirius is in Harry’s time.

This is a story that will reveal what will happen if the most mischievous of the Marauders joins forces with the ever-creative Weasley Twins. This is an epic tale that will reveal the mysterious myths and history of the Most Noble and Ancient House of Blacks. Be mystified, and roll over with laughter, as Sirius bumbled his way through his 1st year at Hogwarts in this alternate tale of the HP tradition.

An excellent story. Wow! I really liked it but peter pettigrew and umbridge? *shudders*. They are suited for each other though. I really should have used this in the rare- pair scavenger hunt. Oh well! What i like was your characterization, your ideas, your imagination, your humour and your creativity. They were all excellent and i thoroughly enjoyed your story. You migbht want to add a little bit of action to prevent your story from becoming too much of a drag but overall an excellent effort

Author's Response: *lol* I don't think it was even in the option *L* - No one is probably sick enough to actually write a romance about those two. *snicker* I do have a sick sense of humour.

Thanks for the advice.

Reviewer: wendelin the wierdSignedDate: 03/09/06
Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3 - The Most Noble and Ancient House of Black

A very good effort on your part i must say! I was just browsing stories for the scavenger hunt and i came across this. A particularly good story. What i like most about this story is that it is very entertaining and this is one of the most important ingredients of any story because that is what the reader want to see. I am a bit confused though- Black with Malfoy? Did i miss something over here? And also as harriet says about neville- he does seem confident. Good job with this story!

Author's Response: *Sigh* I know ... I've tried to tone him down a bit .. but to no avail. Guess I'm not good with Neville. Good thing this is tagged as an AU... else I don't think I could had gotten away with that...

As always with you Miel, good work! I have now read almost every single story of yours and i must say i thoroughly enjoyed every one of them.
Ok, i like this chapter a lot but it needs to have a wee bit more flow and that is pretty much the only mistake you made. Otherwise everything is perfect. Your writing style is good and your characterisation excellent. An extremely delightful read!

Author's Response: *lol* This is actually my first fic so it is a bit choppy. I've been trying to slowly fix it by adding a short scene here and there ... correcting the tenses... although not much recently.

Three words for your story- it was amazing. I was really amazed at the brilliance. I mean i had to review with some constructive criticism and then i realised there was simply nothing to criticise. The mystery is good, with lots of suspense and the humour is excellent.
This is the first fic ever that i have rated 10.

Author's Response: Thanks you... that's a pretty big compliment. Glad I was able to convey the mystery despite all those comedic sub-plots (I can't help it - this is a long fic - and I'm originally a humour writer) ^_^

A rather interesting story written from a whole new angle.I can't beleive i did not notice it before.Ok i have to go out so i will leave a short review-
what i liked was the way you took the story, its angle, its gist, i realy liked it.Your construction grammer and general writing style are excellent as well.Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thanks :) AU does give us a chance to twist everything up nicely :)

need i repeat myself?It was amazing.Nothing to criticise (darn!).But what i am really amazed at is how you manage to put comedy without deffering from the general plotline.Your story is extremely good with regards to your wrting style, grammer and word usage .Keep up the good work!

Rated: Professors • 394ReviewsSummary:There was something about him that made him irresistible to her. Siobhan Murphy will go to any lengths to ascertain her deepest desires - but when the object of those desires is a married man twice her age with secrets darker than she can imagine, she will find herself caught in a scandalous liaison that she can't walk away from. Not Canon-Compliant.

An excellent chapter. Well written. Good plotline. And a real good choice of characters. You certainly know your grammer. This chapter is really well thought out and makes a reader thirsty for more. Good job! 8 is the highest i give anywhere.

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 82ReviewsSummary: A Shakespearean Parody written in a style akin to the original (well almost) featuring Fred and George Weasley
This crazy author was bored ^_^ This is my laughable attempts to massacre some the famous play-wright's most notable lines. ^_^

Another example of your twisted sense of humour Miel. I absolutely loved it! Ok, very little criticism to be given here so I will speed things up a bit.

The humour in this fic is wonderful and it is a witty parody. Now, the pranks described leave the effects to the reader's imagination, I really liked that Also, the part about Fred and George working with two blind house elves is hilarious as well. You potray them very well, bright and funny not to mention the little (forgive me a huge) mischevious streak. The prose is excellent and quite pleasant for some light reading. Descriptions of reactions is well done and also I like the way Percy emerges from the shadows. That is such an overused method of eaves dropping in dark, sinister fics that it is quite refreshing to read them here.

Now just some minor stuff.

Some lines seem to be a little abrupt as if you are deliberately restrictig yourself from expressing the story better in order to make it rhyme. This disturbs the flow of the poem a little bit. However, there are very few areas in which this has occured. So overall, it's good.

Miel, I totally love your writing. You are an amazing auhor. Keep up the good work!

PS- I hope you stay in Gryffindor.

Author's Response: Thanks thorn. Yes, I\'m already back in Gryffindor. Where are you? We\'re starting things up all over again :)

Ok my previous review had a lot of mistakes so I am correcting it here-

Another example of your twisted sense of humour Miel. I absolutely loved it! Ok, very little criticism to be given here so I will speed things up a bit.

The humour in this fic is wonderful and it is a witty parody. Now, the pranks described leave the effects to the reader's imagination, I really liked that. Also, the part about Fred and George working with two blind house elves is hilariousl. You potray them very well, bright and funny not to mention the little (forgive me a huge) mischevious streak. The prose is excellent and quite pleasant for some light reading. Descriptions of reactions is well done and also I like the way Percy emerges from the shadows. That is such an overused method of eavesdropping in dark, sinister fics that it is quite refreshing to read them here.

Now just some minor stuff.

Some lines seem to be a little abrupt as if you are deliberately restrictig yourself from expressing the story better in order to make it rhyme. This disturbs the flow of the poem a little bit. However, there are very few areas in which this has occured. So overall, it's good.

Miel, I totally love your writing. You are an amazing author. Keep up the good work!

PS- I too am staying in Gryffindor.

Author's Response: Glad to hear that. At least things won\'t be so quiet anymore :) ... I don\'t hang there as often as I used to. ^_^

*lol* this is one of those stories where I can get away with just throwing things in; use age old cliches, it\'s actually not really a poem nor a story. It\'s a parody-play or sort - the idiotic force-rhyming is part of the comedic tactic. :) I want the rhyming to sound force sometimes to emphasise the idiocy of it all. *L*

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • 47ReviewsSummary: Malfoy finds a piece of parchment that belongs to Hermione and wants to talk with her. After this incident, Hermione starts acting weird. Harry and Ron want to know what's going on..

A good read! yeah, i actually kind of enjoyed it ok i will review in two parts.see below
what i liked- the actual story. Your grammer was good and your writing style was excellent too
what i did not like- your story is too slow. You could improve upon thisby putting a lot more action. There is always room for improvement
Good job!

First of all i musts say that the title is extremely suitable. There are a lot of authors out there who write beautiful stories but cannot think of an interesting title hence their stories do not get read. Your summary also compels a reader to read the story which you have written. You have a very good writing style and your grammer and all the other technical aspects of the story are lovely and so is this unusual pairing but you need to improve upon the flow of your story. Keep up the good work!

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • 354ReviewsSummary:What happens when Fred and George Weasley, Hogwarts' reknowned kings of pranks, decide to spike a shipment of pumpkin juice bound for Hogwarts with truth potion? A day filled with true confessions of Hogwarts students!!!!!

It is a really good fic! Well as i see most Draco/ Hermione fics are ste after the fifth year but this is really cool and i from a whole new perspective. Also you have somehow managed to keep everyone in character and developed an interesting plotline. The teenage angst shown is pretty realistic. Overall i would say a good story but i cannot give it a full rating because i really like extreme stories (that's just me though! most people will like your story) and this one is a little fluffy in parts despite the angst.

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