Day one: The day it started was cold,wind blowing,almost too desolate to think.You didn't smile like usual.I didn't ask why.I cried that night,I didn't know why.

Day two:You smiled when you saw me;it was warmer that day,enough to make us shed our sweatshirtsand run lapsaround the garden.I hoped you felt better...that was something that hadn't happendto me in a long time.

I smiled more that daythan I had in four months.

Day Three:I watched you the whole day,in a sort of trance.You didn't seem to notice...or you didand didn't want to admit that my eyeswere too much to push away.

You made me happierthan ever before.Thank you.

Day four:I liked the way you held my hand.You sent an eletrical shockall the way down to my toes.

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ShanRippWriting

Feb 12, 2018

I really love the narration in this poem. I think breaking it up into days alludes to so much happening that we don't know about and I'm really captivated by the story. The details included give it an emotional and personal touch to see into the relationship of these two people. Great job, Shannon :)