Kawai how cute i loved it . although i thought they got a little out of character towards the end, (and i would have been so much better and realistic if the whole family just popped out of no where when they opened the door) but hey it's only my opinion, anyway it was the best thing I've read in a long long time well done D

There are a few grammatical errors, and inconsistencies but I'm sure those will be fixed over time with the more stories you write. Overall it's a good and sweet story. Made me give an aw at the end of it lol. Was definitely warm and sweet I hope you continue to write you've got a good start on being able to create wonderful stories.