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Review:

Alopex says:I found this to be a well-developed story. The Helena/Baron murder-suicide issue is a difficult one to comprehend and explain, I think. Of all the entries I've read so far, you have come up with the most detailed and comprehensive explanation. I did think the Baron's death was a little abrupt. I would have liked some more insight into why he stabbed himself.

I liked the way you set up the reader at the beginning to possibly think that Edmund was the Baron. At least, that's what I thought, despite your author's note at the top. I guess what I'm trying to say is that I liked the way you gradually increased the intensity of the story. The scene when Helena is sneaking into her mother's chambers and then running through Hogwarts had me on the edge of my seat.

I might have noticed a couple of minor typos, and you appear to have left a note from your beta in the paragraph when you describe the cottage.