I remember you posted this a while ago, and I can tell it's MUCH better! you enter the phrase on time on the first 3-4 but then on 0:15 I think mis interpreted where the beat is. Make sure you listen to the original and be aware where every beat 1 is, and what note is being played on that beat,

Because all your notes are right, it's just displaced at the end!

And I think the backing track is in Gb, and you are playing in G, so you have to move everything down a fret. If I'm not mistaken