So GM was never playing a game with her? Or is it just that we all assumed he was going to be playing another game, and we were terribly mistaken? I never would've expected Vance to be the 2nd GM. I really thought it was the guy from that party. I'm totally confused, but I don't mind, because it was awesome! I never saw it coming. I'm excited for the rewrite! You're extremely talented, and you keep me pulled in. There was never a moment that i was bored with this story, or ever remotely close to being bored! Keep up the good work! By the way, I'd really buy the books if you got them published! _-

Hm. I'm happy that GM not only didn't kill Val but saved her and in a way they ended up together. I'm sorry that there aren't more chapters left, it's always such a sad feeling. Don't worry about the ending, I don't think it's sappy though I was surprised by GM's "explanation". Greatly.

Maybe it's time I started rereading the first piece of the series and I'm looking forward to read the new version of this one. You have no reason to be not satisfied but it's a good thing if you aren't. Nice, huh? :) I mean, this way you are willing to improve and become even better but provide us new chapters and scenes at the same time. It's a win-win situation.

Congrats!

Kelly chapter 19 . 8/4/2008

This story is really good, only it doesn't make sense as to HOW Val fell for GM, and this story REALLY needs an epilogue; you can't expect us to be happily imagining a happily-ever-after after all that GM has put her through. Plus, the fact that we as an audience don't know his real name, or at least one that GM prefers Val to call him (that's not GM, since you've made it out to be threatening and impersonal), makes the fact that Val and GM are a couple all the more intangible to us.

Like wise, it doesn't make sense that Val would sleep with GM at all, even if by then she had subconsciously fallen for him. At the very least, she would put up a fight.

Therese chapter 19 . 8/3/2008

That was quite an ingenious ending. Sorry for not having been a diligent reviewer X). Your story ended well, though I can't really understand the depths of their romance. Black Roses seem to me, something of a stereotypical nature yeah? Ah, well :P.

I KNEW IT! *jumps around giddily* I was really waiting when he was gonna 'put the moves' on her, 'cuz like geez, their hate would build and build and build - that's gotta be some palpable hardcore romance there. Haw haw.

So she finds out she loves him, he still maintains his dangerous aura, I'm guessing..that they don't complete the Blindfold Chess game? Hmm, lots of unclosed cases. Yeah, your earlier story seemed somewhat more developed than this one with the ending, but the two main characters, Gavin and Valerian developed the most. SO GLAD :D heh, even though he is..after all a murderer.

(WHO CARES! He's hawt, tha's all that practically matters.)

perhaps..*pulls away from his addicting..self?*

Gah, good job anyways! Poor Valerian, she has a man who cares about her in some sick, devoted way.

But geez it makes for such good romance. Very deep I think. Way seductive ;).

So thanks for the updates again! And Kudoz on completing this story :B

Its over? what am i gonna read now? lol. Hmm how does she feel about him in the end? Finally give in to everything that is GM i mean really whats not to love...haha.

layne chapter 19 . 8/3/2008

that was... abrupt. it seemed like you spent the entire story building up to something, and then you rushed through the conclusion in the last chapter. there was no complication, the entire theme, climax of the story ended with no bang, but a muted thud. too simplistic. and the ending, it didn't quite make sense either. there are too many loose threads. mary, first of all. second of all, i think you were going for the deliberately ambiguous, Gone With the Wind-esque ending, but even for those sorts of endings to work there needs to be some closure. there was too much left unsaid, too much left unresolved. obviously, everyone likes a happy ending, but hello, GM is a mentally unstable murderer. there was no miraculous catharsis here. it's like you just got bored and wanted to be done with it. anyway, just a few things to consider in the re-write.

ally chapter 19 . 8/3/2008

No no no aad ending please... this is REALLY REALLY REALLY good.. i liked the ending.. but i do support your want to rewrite & improve.. :))

The ending was kind of sudden. Wow. I expected it to be a little more drawn out, but it was still good. Very sappy. More romantic than horror. I can't be mad at all. God damn me and my romantic at heart issues. I loved the story. I'm glad you wrote it. :]