Snippet Sunday – Hard-Boiled/Noir WIP – September 20, 2015

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We’re picking up pretty much where we left off last week– Jake has encountered the law after leaving Marisa’s empty house. The sheriff speaks first…

“Got a call from one of the neighbors about a suspicious individual skulking about near the house.”

I scanned the cul-de-sac. A single light in the front room of the house across the street showed through the blinds in the window.

“You told my deputy you weren’t on the job,” he said.

“I’m still not, Sheriff. Not yet.”

He folded his arms in front of his chest.

“Care to tell me what you are doing out here then?”

A bit of night wind came through, sending the few leaves that had fallen early skittering across the blacktop.

“I’m looking for a friend.”

“You’re not going to find her in there, Mr. Tunner. I could’ve told you that and saved you a bunch of time and bother.”

“You should take a look in there, Sheriff. Front room’s the most interesting.”

“What could possibly be of interest in an empty house? No one’s lived here in months.”

“When was the last time you were in that house?” I asked him.

He eyeballed me as if the depth of my trustworthiness would be revealed if he stared hard enough.

“Too long ago, apparently.”

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I always LOVE your descriptions! The touch of the leaves skittering across the black top. Perfect. That last line though… Too long ago? Too long ago for WHAT?! Was he the one that left the muddy footprints then? Ahhh! So mysterious and so curious now! Can’t wait for more. Great snippet!