thats probably the most powerful ending of a poem i've read in years. absolutly beautiful if i do say so. the italics give it such a resounding BANG at the end... i see so much of myself in your writing, but this isnt a place to get into that haha this is very song like. did you have a tune or something in mind when you wrote it? cause i almost heard one while i read. anyways, fantastic as always!

You know, it was good on paper, but I wasn't a huge fan of it then. I think part of the reason why might have been that your word layout didn't let the words flow as they should have. But, it reads much better this way. Well done.