Wonderful scene creation you develop in the beginning. The sentiment and execution of this are so realistic that you can almost feel the snow and see the boy pondering the new realization of what was just told to him. Very well written and developed. Excellent work.

I liked the line "the father stared at me as if he had just lost his little boy." That captures the essence of this story, innocence and naivety being broken by reality, in a touching way. I think you could have driven that point a bit harder, personally, but as far as giving the reader a mental image, this was very well-done. Thanks for reviewing my story! And keep writing!

monkey chapter 1 . 1/9/2006

that's so sweet... i definately had tears in my eyes at the end of that.