001-03

If you’ve read this part prior to June 2016, you might remember this scene a bit differently. There’s been a major revision with brand new art! I didn’t redraw it just to make the art better, though. The old art was honestly fine. It was the writing that needed help.

The differences are subtle (the outcome of the scene remains the same, after all) yet significant at the same time, I feel. A lot of love, blood and tears went into it, so I hope this makes for a better reading experience.

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Their eyes are so detailed, ahhh! I think the writing in this scene is a bit more grafual and better, so the pacing isn’t to sudden and it doesn’t just drop the creepy bomb. The characters have a more “character” sort of reaction, and not just a basic one. Ethan’s turning shows his character, because some would just walk away and stop when the kid said that personal stuff, some would jump, but Ethan listens and grimances.

Thanks! I think perhaps the biggest improvement here is the hoodie kid’s dialogue. It doesn’t necessarily improve the portrayal of his character, but it does place more importance on Ethan’s. The hoodie kid is interested in Ethan’s personal life this time, instead of making his feelings seem irrelevant.