Maybe it's just that I'm in college to that I really liked this - but I did. You had really strong verses and ideas like "unmapped is the gamut of lovers!" I love that line but you also had some strange and bland lines. Like I didn't understand or like how you ended it, it felt weak - kind of cut off - I think you wanted to continue with more of this thought but you might have gotten stuck. It's good though; still needs work but I really like where your going with this. Keep up the good work.