Not a bad start, I would say. It is certainly an interesting new twist on Unitology's response to the Red Marker's extraction...or rather, the Ishimura incident. I both like and dislike that the main character is 'anonymous', as main characters are a proxy for the reader and not having one makes the narrative seem more like a report rather than an actual story. Will it be a description of a historical event or a description of the event as it takes place? This distinction is what I most would like defined in the story. Nice cliffhanger at the end there, as it leaves the reader with a taste of inner-conflict in the usually tightly-run Church organization. Looking forward to the next post.