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That certainly was a weird checkerboard. You really delved into some mythology with this one, which I always like of course. Even had to go looke a few up, had no idea what GAOTU was, guess you got me back for my acronym's, now it's like you 1 me 20 haha. Some great word choices and really interesting images they provide too, I found this one could really mean ten different things as I delved through it.

Learned many new words here, always a plus, and enjoyed your discourse on the building blocks of mind and philosophy. I love the titles of each section, the masonic symbols, and the quirky dialectics in the juxtaposed images and language.

Warning: gushing will follow. I've now spent more than an hour with this magnificent poem; scribbled on it; ruminated on the theology, philosophy, and horology; squared the numbers :); cried from the joy and beauty of it (twice over part VI and once on the third re-read of part I); reveled in the eye opening imagery and ideas; had a very personal response to the use of catenary (there used to be wrought iron chain fencing around my favorite tree alongside the cathedral I attended as a young person - I spent many hours balancing on that chain changing it from catenary U to V or sometimes trying to make an almost straight line doing the splits, while waiting for my mother to remember me - it made the balance beam seem like a cakewalk afterwards); learned new things (one of my favorite ways to spend time); and tried to figure out how to respond reasonably to it (I never succeeded at figuring that out :)) but I do hope you'll forgive me. I know you say the reader co-creates meaning so thank you for bringing such rich material to the process. Your poem is a gift to the world, a real work of art, thank you.

Daydreamer- Yes it is a complex piece, it's layered many times, hopefully I didn't tier it so much that I wound up distorting the levels themselves. But then again, being open to interpretation is a key to freemasonry, so I guess that'd be only fitting

Pat, haha no not trying to one up the cat by any means, would be futile at best- forgot I even had an acronym in this piece- pretty weird how that worked out- So we'll keep that shutout intact:) Glad you enjoy the piece, and it's always a good thing to find new words or ideas that you feel inclined enough to research-that's an awesome compliment. Thanks

Jess, aww.. I love the way that sounds, sorcerer of words...hmmm. I feel like merlin now, so cool:) Thanks

Claudia, that's a nice interpretation I like that and small steps never hurt anyone-heck they take you in the same direction as big ones:) Thanks

Hedge, Glad to introduce some new words- thats another compliment for sure. Yep lots of philosophy and a bit of psychology-you got the symbols, that's awesome- I'm really into symbolism-never this blatant, but all my poems are rich in symbolism- I try to give the reader their money's worth lol and try when possible to have subtext in addition to thematic context. Really glad you enjoyed it.

Anna, very pleased you enjoyed the piece. Would've been disappointed if you didn't:) Really appreciate you sharing your childhood memory, so glad the poem linked to it, I find that to be one of the richest things, reading someone's poetry or other writings and finding just a word or phrase that strikes in such a way. Really a wonderful experience indeed. Yes, poetry is open to interpretation, and that is my mantra for certain-the poet is simply the conduit, the meaning is found through the reader. Again, really glad you enjoyed the piece:)

Thank you for not fussing at me for gushing, really you can claim to be Merlin this evening (an inspired conduit for sure). I just found my grandfather's Freemason card in the family memory box earlier in the year so there's that personal connection too.

Fred...for me, this will take some time! heavy language, and I can't skip the words, I must know them! You've given me homework for OpenLinkNight! I will return to impress you all with my grasp of this piece...kidding! not about the homework though!

You have to understand that I tend to little dogs and elephants! As a result, some of this was hard for me. That said, I found certain images and juxtapositions very striking: the perfection of angularity--the poem from heart to hypothalmus--the perplexities of the individualistic mindset.

You images of the checkerboard are very vivid and so well expressed. You step by step walk across the board to the brides chair... my English is not that adverse in your word usage and I am happy to read this it forced me to look up some of these words to understand your meaning. Well done and happy to read this wonderful amazing word filled piece of poetry so well donehttp://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/25/the-groom-of-the-dead-bride/

It is a checkerboard alright! There are new words being given life to garner support for the familiar ones. Lots of deep meanings in outright forms. You led us through most delicately but I got stuck many places. Beautiful write!

Thanks everyone, I really appreciate all the feedback, really enjoyed reading everyone's comments. Glad you all seemed to enjoy the piece. Some had a bit of trouble with it, I'm glad to hear those who took the time to look some up-very big compliment there. Again, thanks again, was a wonderful OLN:)

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