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Review:

orderofthephoenix says:Hey! I'm here with your review :) This is the second Slytherin one-shot I've reviewed today! You Snakes are everywhere! :P

I was surprised to see Tracey called up for this in front of the whole class. I'd have thought Professor McGonagall would have asked her to remain behind at the end of class, as she ended up doing anyway. But apart from that, the plot was very good. An unusual way to be noticed, but sometimes it's the best.

Tracey's character was spot on! You described her loneliness and her emotions perfectly. Well done! :)

I recognise misspelled words easily, especially Britishisms. You don't have to change them but if you wish to, I'd suggest changing 'candy' to 'sweets' and 'recognizing' to 'recognising'. :)

Well done! This was realistic :)

-Sophia x

Author's Response: aww thanks i'm glad you thought it was realistic. I will deffinately consider changing those words if i ever decide to edit this oneshot! Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my oneshot. I'm glad you thought that Tracey was spot on! Thank you so much!