I definitely loved this story. I'm a sucker for a good founder's era, and I definitely found it in this story. I think you provided a fresh idea and an interesting take on some of the events that happened.

I particularly like Helga's character, and think you did a good job with her. Her loyalty really shows through most of the time, but I'm having a little trouble understanding why she cheated on Arius? And if I had to guess, it definitely wouldn't have been with Salazar, but hey, you never know, right? The rest of the founders are spot on as well. I'm assuming maybe Rowena hadn't given birth to Helena yet, because I imagine that could be the more common ground between her and Helga as opposed to books, especially in this situation.

I did notice a few spelling and grammar errors, and think you could bring this story from great to amazing with a good beta, which I always recommend regardless. A few of the phrases seemed forced and awkward, but other than that I simply loved everything. This might be my favorite story of yours so far! The dialogue is really good to, I know from experience how hard it can be to try show how they would talk back then.

...why haven't I reviewed this before? LAME. Anyway, super lovely! I love the twist with the name Malfoy at the end. That was really quite clever. I was still confused as to who the father was, though. I think you do a very good job with the Founder's era dialogue (although "guy" is kind of a stretch), so kudos to you! Thanks for such a nice story! I'm honored to have its dedication :)

Author's Response: The father was Slytherin. This proved to have some irony since Malfoy hated Gryffindor and they ended up in the house of Slytherin. Thanks love. It was all your stories that gave me inspiration.