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fauxthefox says:Hi! This is fauxthefox, FINALLY getting around to reviewing all the entries! Thank you so much for submitting!

This was a really wonderful submission. There were a few technical things that were strange to me: Wouldn't Wizards have a more elegant device than Muggle-style pregnancy tests? And why was Dominique attracted to a Muggle boy? How did that attraction overpower the obvious differences between them?

There are also some spelling/grammar mistakes here and there (it should be "Floo Powder" instead of "flu powder," for example), but overall you've done a really good job with the format of the story.

The characters are also very good. Even in the first chapter, you got into Dominique's characterization, which was great!

Thanks again for submitting! The results should be up soon!

Faux

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Yeah I thought about the whole pregnancy test thing but in the end I went muggle style because it was probably easier for her to get a muggle test without being noticed.
Oh and thanks about the Floo thing :D