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o.o 3 poems up today woot! Loved this one too :) hehe is this cause I asked for another christmas poem? :D

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Sat, December 12th, 2009 11:54am

well after you asked I decided to search a random Christmas picture and write a poem about it xD hope you like it :D

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Sat, December 12th, 2009 11:45am

I like your longer poems, they tell a story that I can see as I read it. Good job with this one and Merry Christmas.

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Sat, December 12th, 2009 11:55am

lol one comment today liked them short, another liked them long xD Everyone's a little different. I figured a story was the best way to make this poem a little more unique. Merry Christmas to you too :)

This is absolutely beautiful, and makes a wonderful and strong point. You convey very well the exact message you want to share, which you just about always do, but this is just so clear, I envy you. xD The rhythm is excellent as well. I love how well it suits the picture, too.

*Too* used to hate and pain.
*its* halls are filled with food.
The Food Drive box holds 4* small cans 4 should be written out, "four"

Merry Christmas! ~Pockets

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Sun, December 13th, 2009 5:35am

I agree with all but the 4 cause I didn't want the line looking to long :P thanks as always :D

Thanx I am :) Hope you don't get sick during this chilly time. The clouds have been gray and its been raining all week, I love it, chances are it'll clear up, but since my dad still doesn't have a job and we are low on money we can't use the heater anymore and I'm getting really cold. Right now all of my street is gray and the clouds are pure indigo, yet the sun is popping out a little shining some dull light onto my home, its really beautiful :)

Yes, yes, YES! CHRISTMAS is here!! I loved the message of this story, especially the part about how some people have full pockets, while others are starving and stuff... perfect representation of Christmas :D xo

Wow, this one was so beautiful... the ending was my favorite. Everyone around the world should read it cause it has one of the most important messages! ...Um...btw, in the second line of the second stanza, I think the first "to" is supposed to be "too". Sorry, haha, I'm such a grammar and spelling freak xD But I really liked this one.

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Tue, January 5th, 2010 1:58pm

dang I thought I fixed that, probably got caught up in other comments and commenting back and forgot it (will fix it now) thank you Carina :)