Author Comments

This is the first chapter of my first original animation work. Needed a month to submit it because my computer and I were separated by... a health conflict. (I need to sleep, guys!) I really hope you like the flash... and if you don't... well, what can I do?

I will update my info everytime I can... and please, If you see that I have troubles with english grammar (and I have, I know), please, please tell me... heh.. I can't be the same ignoramus for whole life, or not?

Bye...

PS: I recommend you to watch the flash till the end, 'cause I added a little extra short... n_n

Reviews

Rated 4 / 5 stars2012-06-08 19:53:29

Very fun! Obviously the art is alittle scruffy (why does the foreground have thin outlines and the background thick outlines?) but it has charm and the facial expressions and their animation gave the characters some infectious personality. It's not in english so i can't really judge the voice acting properly, but in terms of emotinal delivery etc. i thought it was nice! The sound quality is a little low, perhaps investing in a better mic or trying to use it better might be a good idea.
The script was nice but i felt a little lost at first. What exactly is the competition? You never really explained what the setting was and how the characters had ended up in the scenario. The jokes were funny and the animation really made me smile. There are a few issues with frame borders, there's the occasional bit of white space and i don't think you should draw a box around the frame (it doesn't add anything and is a little distracting).
Overall i thought it was good! The english subtitles seemed pretty accurate to me so good job on that and good luck with future episodes!

Thank you very much..! Actually, I think this episode is just a little introduction for the story... and yeah, I really need to improve my audio quality... my mic is a disaster... >=( .. Anyway, thank you for the review, I like you liked my flash =)