Alright, I have made it through. Jander doesn't need a girlfriend ;) I was disappointed that Leighton is a villain, but such is life.
I am interested in the direction you plan to go with this story. You did leave it on a bit of a cliff hanger.

I forgot to point out in Chapter 3, I thought Jander could not enter a holy place . . . i.e. the temple. (I, personally, think that is silly, because Jander is not really evil of soul. The gods of good should know that. My gripe with the rules of the game :) )
You have a real grammical problem with "there". I had a friend with a simlar problem. A tiny grammar lesson: :)
"Their" is used to mean belonging to them.
"They're" is the contraction of "They are"
"There" has two meaning. It either denotes a place. (here and there) or it is used as a filler word to create a complete sentence . . . there are many, or there is a sound.
You haven't read my work. You'd have grammar field day ;)