Since I'm bad at explaining things through words, I thought it would be more help if I did a paintover
Here it is, if you're interested:

some points inside

*I noticed what looks like a light source from below, so I incorporated that into the lighting.
*Disregard my previous suggestions on the eye; I actually made it darker with no highlight.
*Tried to fix the form of the nose and mouth.
*Made the shading a lot softer including the creases (probably more than I should've).
*Also tried to reduce the use of desaturated darks / shadows (personal preference).

Since I'm bad at explaining things through words, I thought it would be more help if I did a paintover
Here it is, if you're interested:

some points inside

*I noticed what looks like a light source from below, so I incorporated that into the lighting.
*Disregard my previous suggestions on the eye; I actually made it darker with no highlight.
*Tried to fix the form of the nose and mouth.
*Made the shading a lot softer including the creases (probably more than I should've).
*Also tried to reduce the use of desaturated darks / shadows (personal preference).

I dont know If I should CnC you or Ezeth.

-the eyes are still not even
-the detail on the eyebrows doesnt work.
-why a Shining torso if the focus is on the face. Isnt it a portrait?

Since I'm bad at explaining things through words, I thought it would be more help if I did a paintover
Here it is, if you're interested:

some points inside

*I noticed what looks like a light source from below, so I incorporated that into the lighting.
*Disregard my previous suggestions on the eye; I actually made it darker with no highlight.
*Tried to fix the form of the nose and mouth.
*Made the shading a lot softer including the creases (probably more than I should've).
*Also tried to reduce the use of desaturated darks / shadows (personal preference).