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manno_malfoy says:I loved it; every little bit of this one-shot was lovable. Not only have you portrayed Luna so accurately and beautifully, but you have also portrayed her and Ollivander's surroundings with words so captivating that I saw it all in my head.

My favourite description of Luna was, "She was a strange silhouette of light against the darkness."

For a silhouette is usually black, I was really amused by the sensible anomaly you've created here.

As for Ollivander, perhaps there were two consecutive sentences that I grinned at while reading; they would be, "Her tales of dirigible plums and fanciful beasts painted bright images over the resident grey scale in his mind. Mr Ollivander enjoyed her stories – his rich chuckle and rare smile brought a flicker of warmth to the chill of the prison."

As for the dialogue itself, the core of the discussion that you've chosen was rather interesting and and full of wit. And every sentence said by either of the characters seemed to be so in character that I was able to hear Luna, and even Ollivander, speak in my head through your words. And trust me, that doesn't happen with me often.

I suppose, that in my eyes, the plot of this story is built on the rich and unique imagery and the brilliant transitions between one scene and the next. Though each conversation between the two characters is far apart, time-wise, from the one following it, the flow of the story did not seem to be rushed through. On the contrary, everything seemed to be going at a gentle pace. And, I especially liked the linking lines between the conversations in the cellar; they were quite witty.

I really love the angle you have taken. It is, indeed, very creative and well-written. This was one of the most refreshing things I've read in a while, tone-wise, style-wise, structure-wise, and idea-wise. I absolutely loved it.

(Whoops! Sorry about the essay I've written here!)

Author's Response: Essay reviews = win.

I literally am a bit speechless right now. I was nervous approaching this one shot since I also have a luna WIP and didn't want to recreate that version of luna here. I'm very glad she worked. Ollivander on the other hand basically wrote himself. Their relationship is this one shot was very much inspired by my own relationship with my grandpa, and so this one shot has a very special place in my mind and heart.

I'm very glad you enjoyed it and want to thank you yet again for leaving this review.