A man wakes up in a hospital with amnesia. The hospital is run by ponies, and he apparently arrived carrying their Princess on his back. He died soon after, or so they thought. The strangest thing of all? He's less worried than they are.

---Chapter one---"like I usualy do". It took me a really long time (about 6 seconds) to figure out what was wrong here. Usually has two 'l's."the pad that acted as the mouse". Just say the mouse pad #>_<I think by 'notifications' and 'my page' you meant this person runs a MLP page on Facebook? Some wouldn't know that. I barely got the reference.Err, wait, how did the alarm go on his phone if it was turned off?Checking batteries scene. "and they were still in them", hang on, what? The batteries were inside the batteries? ((Yo Dawg, I heard you like batteries))I notice that sometimes when you said TV, either one or both of the letters were lowercase. TV always has both uppercase."My little pony" being the name of a show should have capitals on the start of every word longer than 3 letters.When they decide to head to school, whoever it is grabs their bag twice. "grabbed my school bag. "Might as well head to school.." I thought as I grabbed my bag"He shouts "Where is my house!. Err, it's right behind you, mate. Maybe have him say "Where am I?"OH LAWD, THAT WAS ONLY CHAPTER ONE.Yeah, I'm not a huge fan of human crossovers. I'm not going to read further than this.I can only hope that English isn't your first language. Sorry to be so negative, but... yeah...