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I do want to go back to completing my fics involving [Ren], despite a lot of fans hating my OC. There's about two more stories that need to be written about her before I can lay that to rest.

I like that spirit.

Say, I'm just writing out a flashback scene for Athena, also the first scene that would be in the story... and this is just half of it:

Spoiler for Flashback:

The town of Tanaka fell into panic, residents seek shelter in their homes and nearby buildings as three mysterious human-sized robotic drones attack indiscriminately.

“Ina-kun! Ina-kun, where are you?!” A young girl shouts from the front yard of a two-story house.

Armed with inbuilt triple-barrel plasma cannons on one arm and a plasma blade emitter on the other, the drones lay waste to just about everything in their path; trees, metal light poles and even concrete structures aren't spared.

“Tsurugi, it's dangerous outside! Get in the house, now!” A deeper, male voice calls out to the young girl, whom is looking around for someone. “I have to find him, father! He's still out there somewhere! He might even get hurt!” she runs for the main gate.

Barely halfway through, a nearby explosion rocks her off her feet. “W-What the...?” She looks around and sees a column of smoke spewing from a distance away.

Terrified beyond words, the girl struggles to pick herself up only to be met with another horrifying sight; the three drones are breaking their way through her house's surrounding walls. “No... No! Please no...!” She slowly steps away while a man, her father, rushes through the main door to her side.

“Let's go, dear! It's not safe here anymore!” He grabs her hand and the two runs back into the house, barely avoiding plasma fire from the drones which melts the main door apart.

Bringing her into the basement where a woman, the girl's mother, awaits. She couldn't help but grow a relieving smile upon seeing her daughter. “Tsurugi! Thank goodness!” She hugs her. “Stay here, okay? Mama and Papa will protect you.”

The girl grows anxious. “What about Inami?! We can't leave him out there by himself!!”

Torn between her safety and the one whom she deeply cares for, the girl gives a nod to her father. “Okay...”

Sounds of shattering glass could be heard from above. It could only mean one thing to the family of three. “They're here...” Sounds of heavy steps echo within the basement along with muffled noises of breaking furniture and glass breaking.

“Are they looking for us?” The woman says as she holds her daughter while her husband holds them both. “I don't know, dear.” The muffled noises grow louder. The man gets up, grabbing a sheathed sword as he does so.

“Kiyo...?” The wife asks. The scabbard appears worn with only the metal trims polished, on which has kanji engravings that reads Katami no Meiyaku, or The Katami Oath. “Dear...” The man looks to his wife and daughter. “If they break in, I want you and Tsurugi to get out of here as fast as you can.”

His wife recoils her head. “What about you?” He simply smiles back. “I'll clear a path.”

She frowns. “You'll get yourself killed...!”

He kneels in front of them, putting a hand on her shoulder. “I won't.” She remains uncertain, looking back to the situation they are in. “Promise me... Promise us that you won't.” He nods. “I promise.”

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"You cannot be bad at watching a movie. You cannot be bad at listening to an album.
...But you can be bad at playing a videogame, and the game will punish you and deny you access to the rest of the videogame."

Stratos, personal opinion--I think you could work on the breakdown and pacing a bit. It feels a bit crowded together.

Thanks! I'll brush it up!

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"You cannot be bad at watching a movie. You cannot be bad at listening to an album.
...But you can be bad at playing a videogame, and the game will punish you and deny you access to the rest of the videogame."

Also, do you think that it's better to gather IS of a country into a seperate battalion instead of mixing with other force, since most of them is going to be death weight anyway!

Let see... Tabane upgraded GN Drives to green generator, then betrayed Celestial Being and making Tau Drives... All for the sake of creating an IS army to clearing out of human except her and Ichika...

I.S. will be operated on a different elements, basically a combination of interdictor/tactical ballistic missile.

I.S. will be used to destroy vital target first and foremost through the defensive line, destroying enemy command structure and logistic trail. Then the rest of military will be sent to mop the distraught and weakened enemy force.

Of course, this is assuming the enemy didn't operate I.S. on their own.

Charlotte's shotgun is loaded with spread shot by default, and 10 meter steel, while sounded pathetic are by no means thin. Even the strongest battleship has barely half a meter armor, and I.S. small arms will do jack shit to their belt armor.