Good plot idea; instead of having the gang save her from something and make her all obsessive and Mary Sueish the thing of being on the 'bad guy's' side is quite original.

Hope more come of her and the gang tho ;)

Lera chapter 3 . 5/2/2004

Wow, that's quite a plot change from most AO stories. Or any story really. When I read the summary I totally thought I was going to waste my time by even looking at it, cause I figured Manda would be a total Mary Sue. But she's not. One thing I really appreciate is even though you described what Jesse looked like and made him sound dangerous, you showed Manda's surprise that he was young, not that he was "so hot." Thank YOU!
So this seems to be going in a completely different direction plot wise and I love it. I will definitely check for updates. One thing though, it really wouldn't hurt for you to run this by a couple of beta readers. I don't mean to offend you but grammar and spelling mistakes detract a little bit from the story.

kaxxie-sondra chapter 3 . 4/22/2004

Hey, I'm dieing to find out whats gonna happen next. Then story has everything a story should:happeness, sadness,mystery, suspence,drama,and romance. I really liked the story. so, please continue it.I was a great story about Jessie James.

that little snake, she is going to sqeal on Ze.. I did not like Zee in the movie, but the fact of the matter is that is just wrong. Oh I hope she don't screw everything up. On the other hand this makes great conflict. Update soon.