Interesting...I like the idea behind the story, and the descriptions you used when showing Rhilian's reactions to the modern time period, with cars and roads and police and all. There were a few errors, but nothing a good proofread wouldn't fix. If you ever feel like editing, I'd suggest slowing down the story a bit, as in expanding some of your descriptions or actions. Besides that, it sounds cool! Apocalypse, eh? I can tell this is going to be a pretty big project! I'll definitely be revisiting to read what happens next.