EOWG-Editors:
Here are my comments on the third page of the Training Suite. Again,
these are for editor's discretion.
Jennifer
[Draft] Web Accessibility Presentation Outlines
http://www.w3.org/WAI/training/presentation-outlines.html
1. Check the link word references to the "at a glance" page. They're
not consistent throughout this page i.e. one time:
[link] Web Accessibility QuickTips - WCAG 2 at a Glance
Another time:
[link] WCAG 2 at a Glance
Maybe the link words need to be the same, assuming the links refer to
the same place.
2. Appreciate some of the externalities of web accessibility such as
improved mobile
web access, SEO, etc
Maybe there's a better word than "externalities." What about
"additional benefits?"
3.See changes in brackets. The word "link" in brackets is used only
for orientation:
Give a
brief policy overview
if relevant for the organization's locale or markets, mentioning the
[JS make this into a link? UN
Convention on the Rights of Persons with Disabilities]
-- OR --
Introduce [JS: change to introducing or make "mentioning" mention] some of the
[link] social factors
that an organization might consider and mention web accessibility as an
[link] aspect of corporate social responsibility
JS: Generally, this sentence is very long. Maybe worth breaking into
two bullet points. Not sure if there are other multi-sentence
bullets, but if so, maybe this could become one.
4. Change the link word to "videos," below:
show some short video - external page
5. In this document, but also in others for the Training suite, when
documents are mentioned as draft, such as this one:
[link] Better Web Browsing: Tips for Configuring Your Computer [Draft],
hopefully, there will be an easy way to locate these and update the
link words when the draft is moved to the next stage.
And this one, as another example:
[link] Before and After Demonstration [Draft]
6. Maybe a better way to word this:
with adaptive strategies and talk about the differences 'after'
makes, highlighting
some of the features an accessible website should have
Something like:
with adaptive strategies[,] and talk about the differences that the
'after' version makes, highlighting
some of the features an accessible website should have
7Talk about content being
POUR.
Maybe write out the four words and put "POUR" in parens. Add a comma
after the (POUR) since the "and discuss," etc. could stand alone as a sentence.