Poetry, for me, is about using words rhythmic nature to create a mind set. It is about playing with structure to breakthrough language's limits. Like life, you got to use reality's tools to imagine anything beyond it.
Here are some of my poems.

3 comments:

Okay, lemme do the comment here. Firstly, I love your title. It's meaningful, allusive, and just poetically pretty enough to avoid coming off as pretentious. I also love many of the lines, but I think the poem in general is too wordy.

I would delete these lines:

even with my minimal vocabulary skill.

Or maybe I can just do one sacrifice.I wonder how many pantheons I can call my place,As my thoughts and visions grow to proportionsI've yet to learn to embrace.(The Greek allusions are overdone.)

The stanza I loved best is the one that starts with "If you would slow down..." I also LOVE the last line and the *eclipsed sun* image. And I really like the music in the words from "planned explosion... juggling brain," although I don't really understand what you're trying to say there.

Very good piece. I do wonder about the title. It gives away a lot and takes away some of the mystery and ambiguity. If you revise, consider changing the title and refer to Hypatia somewhere toward the end.