Trouble logging in?If you can't remember your password or are having trouble logging in, you will have to reset your password. If you have trouble resetting your password (for example, if you lost access to the original email address), please do not start posting with a new account, as this is against the forum rules. If you create a temporary account, please contact us right away via Forum Support, and send us any information you can about your original account, such as the account name and any email address that may have been associated with it.

Well, i definitely saw that one coming
atleast the part that's in my quote

anyway, fun chapter (a troubled fate is fine too) which also gives us general info about yuuno...
...now then, i wonder how we'll continue from here, seems like the premise is set, and something dramatic and/or important can happen now...
Anyway, i'm looking forward to the next installment of Nanoha ~ the collectible card game.

Edit: Woo! Page claim!

__________________

"Life is the only game in which the object of the game is to learn the rules." Unknown
"The truth of the matter is that you always know the right thing to do. The hard part is doing it." Norman Schwarzkopf
"Whoever stands by a just cause cannot possibly be called a terrorist." Yassar Arafat
Sayings and quotes hold wisdom in them. Either the wisdom is found in the correctness of the quote, or in the lesson learned from the error.
Hard part is figuring out who's making the errors...

Well, i definitely saw that one coming
atleast the part that's in my quote

anyway, fun chapter (a troubled fate is fine too) which also gives us general info about yuuno...
...now then, i wonder how we'll continue from here, seems like the premise is set, and something dramatic and/or important can happen now...
Anyway, i'm looking forward to the next installment of Nanoha ~ the collectible card game.

Edit: Woo! Page claim!

Yeah, I was a little " *flailing!*" when I saw people totally predicting that, but I couldn't change it ><

And yes, Nanoha is a little confused already, so it's set for more confusion and doubt XD so now you get the "come on get togehter already!" that I'm going to abuse and abuse lol

Yeah, I was a little " *flailing!*" when I saw people totally predicting that, but I couldn't change it ><

And yes, Nanoha is a little confused already, so it's set for more confusion and doubt XD so now you get the "come on get togehter already!" that I'm going to abuse and abuse lol

Sorry about that, just saw a potential for hilarious actions and proclaimed it out loud before thinking it through

And yes, the most frustrating part about a forming relationship like that is the "i think/i do like her, but i'm afraid to confess" usually drives everyone around them up the wall in frustration

I do remember seeing something alike that IRL, though it was a boy and girl... after two months of dodginess i got fed up with it, sat them together and explained it to them, sorta like kickstarting their relationship...

Nearly got my face relocated to the back of my head in the process... people tend to be rather aggressive when someone starts blurting out secrets like that.

I suppose it's arika's job to be the frustrated one when fate and nanoha start getting dodgy about their feelings...

__________________

"Life is the only game in which the object of the game is to learn the rules." Unknown
"The truth of the matter is that you always know the right thing to do. The hard part is doing it." Norman Schwarzkopf
"Whoever stands by a just cause cannot possibly be called a terrorist." Yassar Arafat
Sayings and quotes hold wisdom in them. Either the wisdom is found in the correctness of the quote, or in the lesson learned from the error.
Hard part is figuring out who's making the errors...

Stupid typos. If only Fanfiction.net was easier to alter stories after being posted >< I've had problems with "replacing" chapters with typo-free ones and ended up losing all reviews for that chapter and other random errors in it -.-

Currently I'm debating continuing from them waking up in the morning or if I want to skip about another week. I need time to pass by >< but I can't skip too much at once. They've known each other for about a month now. Fate's been crushing since day two, Nanoha is just now starting to get confused but hasn't realized anything yet.

Spoiler for thoughts on starting chapter VI, spoilers:

Continuing from the wake up will give more fluffy moments, and a funny moment where Nanoha finds something rather embarrassing for Fate in the dresser and ends up with a compromising position and Precia walking in on them. Mainly for laughs and putting Fate in a very embarrassing situation

Continuing new chapter from a few days down the line gives more time for feelings to settle and generally lets me get into the plot sooner instead of using 1k words on something that won't progress the storyline. Enter Nanoha's modeling tryouts and stuff.

Stupid typos. If only Fanfiction.net was easier to alter stories after being posted >< I've had problems with "replacing" chapters with typo-free ones and ended up losing all reviews for that chapter and other random errors in it -.-

Currently I'm debating continuing from them waking up in the morning or if I want to skip about another week. I need time to pass by >< but I can't skip too much at once. They've known each other for about a month now. Fate's been crushing since day two, Nanoha is just now starting to get confused but hasn't realized anything yet.

Spoiler for thoughts on starting chapter VI, spoilers:

Continuing from the wake up will give more fluffy moments, and a funny moment where Nanoha finds something rather embarrassing for Fate in the dresser and ends up with a compromising position and Precia walking in on them. Mainly for laughs and putting Fate in a very embarrassing situation

Continuing new chapter from a few days down the line gives more time for feelings to settle and generally lets me get into the plot sooner instead of using 1k words on something that won't progress the storyline. Enter Nanoha's modeling tryouts and stuff.

Not sure...because it really depends on what you want to happen. Personally I'd incorporate both. Set aside around 1k of just fluff, and add that onto the progression.

What I mean is that you just write the few days later part, where Nanoha's building up the courage to model and such, throwing in some cute and fluff moments while you're at it

Once you're satisfied with that, you can go back and write the fluffy and embarrassing moment and blend it in with what you've already written so that it can transition from morning, to a few days later.

I do that a lot, but that's part of my writing style so I usually transition as I write

That's just what I'd do since I'd like to build up more on the romance more than anything, since that's part of the main focus of the story, unless there are other plot elements I want to exploit that helps build up in the relation, like in this case, Fate helping Nanoha build up her courage, which I might add, WAS WAY TOO CUTE!!! XD

Anyways that's my two-cents on that.

And on an off-note, I can't seem to sit down long enough to get my brain going long enough to come up with anything to write for Road of Love XD

Stupid typos. If only Fanfiction.net was easier to alter stories after being posted >< I've had problems with "replacing" chapters with typo-free ones and ended up losing all reviews for that chapter and other random errors in it -.-

Currently I'm debating continuing from them waking up in the morning or if I want to skip about another week. I need time to pass by >< but I can't skip too much at once. They've known each other for about a month now. Fate's been crushing since day two, Nanoha is just now starting to get confused but hasn't realized anything yet.

Spoiler for thoughts on starting chapter VI, spoilers:

Continuing from the wake up will give more fluffy moments, and a funny moment where Nanoha finds something rather embarrassing for Fate in the dresser and ends up with a compromising position and Precia walking in on them. Mainly for laughs and putting Fate in a very embarrassing situation

Continuing new chapter from a few days down the line gives more time for feelings to settle and generally lets me get into the plot sooner instead of using 1k words on something that won't progress the storyline. Enter Nanoha's modeling tryouts and stuff.

Free fluff is always welcomed , I don't mind reading "filler" in this fic since we're getting an average of a chapter each two days...
...But I wonder what would be that "rather embarrassing something" ?

Location: In a place of extremes. From below freezing to above boiling.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Satashi

Stupid typos. If only Fanfiction.net was easier to alter stories after being posted >< I've had problems with "replacing" chapters with typo-free ones and ended up losing all reviews for that chapter and other random errors in it -.-

Currently I'm debating continuing from them waking up in the morning or if I want to skip about another week. I need time to pass by >< but I can't skip too much at once. They've known each other for about a month now. Fate's been crushing since day two, Nanoha is just now starting to get confused but hasn't realized anything yet.

Spoiler for thoughts on starting chapter VI, spoilers:

Continuing from the wake up will give more fluffy moments, and a funny moment where Nanoha finds something rather embarrassing for Fate in the dresser and ends up with a compromising position and Precia walking in on them. Mainly for laughs and putting Fate in a very embarrassing situation

Continuing new chapter from a few days down the line gives more time for feelings to settle and generally lets me get into the plot sooner instead of using 1k words on something that won't progress the storyline. Enter Nanoha's modeling tryouts and stuff.

I vote for the 'start from the wake up'.

Spoiler for spoiler about spoiler:

I'd just loooooooooooove to see Precia's reaction at finding those two dressed in only lingerie I can already imagine her teasing Fate until the latter puts a tomato to shame XD! (probably not gonna happen but w/e. Its fun to imagine )

Stupid typos. If only Fanfiction.net was easier to alter stories after being posted >< I've had problems with "replacing" chapters with typo-free ones and ended up losing all reviews for that chapter and other random errors in it -.-

Currently I'm debating continuing from them waking up in the morning or if I want to skip about another week. I need time to pass by >< but I can't skip too much at once. They've known each other for about a month now. Fate's been crushing since day two, Nanoha is just now starting to get confused but hasn't realized anything yet.

Spoiler for thoughts on starting chapter VI, spoilers:

Continuing from the wake up will give more fluffy moments, and a funny moment where Nanoha finds something rather embarrassing for Fate in the dresser and ends up with a compromising position and Precia walking in on them. Mainly for laughs and putting Fate in a very embarrassing situation

Continuing new chapter from a few days down the line gives more time for feelings to settle and generally lets me get into the plot sooner instead of using 1k words on something that won't progress the storyline. Enter Nanoha's modeling tryouts and stuff.

I agree with ghazghkull here, write the morning as a short piece and then jump a few days ahead... the entire morning plot seems to be hilarious so i'm all for it...

Spoiler:

...you could have either one waking up before the other and have a lot of hilarious stuff to tell.

or have fate wake up and notice that they've changed positions during the night, from their cuddle to something far more provocative (or just having a very good sight of something ), and have her go ballistic because of it.

Anyways, looking forward to reading it

__________________

"Life is the only game in which the object of the game is to learn the rules." Unknown
"The truth of the matter is that you always know the right thing to do. The hard part is doing it." Norman Schwarzkopf
"Whoever stands by a just cause cannot possibly be called a terrorist." Yassar Arafat
Sayings and quotes hold wisdom in them. Either the wisdom is found in the correctness of the quote, or in the lesson learned from the error.
Hard part is figuring out who's making the errors...

Stupid typos. If only Fanfiction.net was easier to alter stories after being posted >< I've had problems with "replacing" chapters with typo-free ones and ended up losing all reviews for that chapter and other random errors in it -.-

Currently I'm debating continuing from them waking up in the morning or if I want to skip about another week. I need time to pass by >< but I can't skip too much at once. They've known each other for about a month now. Fate's been crushing since day two, Nanoha is just now starting to get confused but hasn't realized anything yet.

Spoiler for thoughts on starting chapter VI, spoilers:

Continuing from the wake up will give more fluffy moments, and a funny moment where Nanoha finds something rather embarrassing for Fate in the dresser and ends up with a compromising position and Precia walking in on them. Mainly for laughs and putting Fate in a very embarrassing situation

Continuing new chapter from a few days down the line gives more time for feelings to settle and generally lets me get into the plot sooner instead of using 1k words on something that won't progress the storyline. Enter Nanoha's modeling tryouts and stuff.

Spoiler for Spoiler thingies:

Plot is going to happen anyway, but if we skip the wake up fluff, it will only come back haunting in the shape of teasing Precia. Not to mention that the entire scene is highly wanted material

Remember, that I do always listen to my friends here, and even you lurkers too. Come on out and say what you want to not only me but all other writers as well ^^ we love hearing input so always be sure to say what's on your mind!

Fluff incoming. As for the item Nanoha finds....something interesting but still within the lines of Fate's personality *halo* fan service for the sake of relationship building

Remember, that I do always listen to my friends here, and even you lurkers too. Come on out and say what you want to not only me but all other writers as well ^^ we love hearing input so always be sure to say what's on your mind!

Fluff incoming. As for the item Nanoha finds....something interesting but still within the lines of Fate's personality *halo* fan service for the sake of relationship building

Why do I have a sneaking suspicion you are going to kill a lot of people and blow up a lot of people's mind with the newest update?

Remember, that I do always listen to my friends here, and even you lurkers too. Come on out and say what you want to not only me but all other writers as well ^^ we love hearing input so always be sure to say what's on your mind!

Fluff incoming. As for the item Nanoha finds....something interesting but still within the lines of Fate's personality *halo* fan service for the sake of relationship building

Why do i have a premonition of an enormous amount of bleeding noses in the next chapter?

now that i think about it, it's almost a good thing that you don't decorate your stories with images like some other authors i've seen... an image with nanoha and fate in the depicted lingerie probably would have wiped out half of the people reading the story

__________________

"Life is the only game in which the object of the game is to learn the rules." Unknown
"The truth of the matter is that you always know the right thing to do. The hard part is doing it." Norman Schwarzkopf
"Whoever stands by a just cause cannot possibly be called a terrorist." Yassar Arafat
Sayings and quotes hold wisdom in them. Either the wisdom is found in the correctness of the quote, or in the lesson learned from the error.
Hard part is figuring out who's making the errors...

Why do i have a premonition of an enormous amount of bleeding noses in the next chapter?

now that i think about it, it's almost a good thing that you don't decorate your stories with images like some other authors i've seen... an image with nanoha and fate in the depicted lingerie probably would have wiped out half of the people reading the story

quite, now if you'll excuse me, i need to remove the surprise paint from my table, and get some sleep...

__________________

"Life is the only game in which the object of the game is to learn the rules." Unknown
"The truth of the matter is that you always know the right thing to do. The hard part is doing it." Norman Schwarzkopf
"Whoever stands by a just cause cannot possibly be called a terrorist." Yassar Arafat
Sayings and quotes hold wisdom in them. Either the wisdom is found in the correctness of the quote, or in the lesson learned from the error.
Hard part is figuring out who's making the errors...

Broken Wing Studios is doing it for me. She's an artist friend who I share my stories and ideas with before I write them. She's also the one who did the picture of Fate plucking Nanoha's eyebrows. It's going to be colored shortly ^^

archive post updated, please check if there are any mistakes in your section. If you are not added yet, please PM me with the information.

(Keroko please let me know what to add on yours)

On that note, I'm going to start writing on my fics now ^^;

Fast Lyrical Days. Sorry it's not too long but I want to start on SbTB as well tonight.

Spoiler for Lyrical Days:

I was never really one to shop for girls but Nanoha's comment this morning was still bothering me. I knew she was just teasing but there was still something in the way she said it, some faint hint of sadness, that I couldn't help but pick up on. This thought ran over in my mind again and again as I looked at what was before me. Nothing caught my eye right away and I almost gave up on the store before finding something that looked promising. The glass jewelry cases in the middle of the store grabbed my attention, or rather a bracelet inside of it did. A medium sized linked silver bracelet was sparkling in the light almost as if calling out to me. On it was one matching silver charm in the shape of a heart.

'A charm bracelet,' I realized, looking at the several types of charms that could be added to it. 'Simple, pretty, shiny, and it just screams Nanoha.' I stood up straight and met the clerk's eye to call them over to me and ten minutes later I was back out in the cold, now fifty dollars lighter. Although the blow to my wallet stung, I was rather pleased with my purchase. Nanoha was always there for me, it was about time I showed my appreciation.

“I'm home!” I called out as always when I opened the door to the house I now shared with two girls.

Nanoha, as always, came to me with a smile. “Welcome home. You hungry?”

“Pizza,” The girl informed me while rocking on her heels while waiting on me to finish taking off my shoes. “How was Hayate-chan?”

“A lot better.” Walking in, I held up the bag so she could see it. “I have something for you.”

“Oh?” Her face lit with curiosity. “What is it?”

“It's a box.” I took out the long slender jewelry case and held back a chuckle at Nanoha's reaction to cover her mouth in surprise. “Sure are happy about a box.”

“What's in it?” She reached for it and pouted when I moved it away. Trying again, she stood on her tip toes and reached for the case when I held it up. “Stop teasing me!”

“But it's fun.” I let her try once again before bringing it down and handing it to her. “Here, I hope you like.”

“I will,” She assured me before happily clicking open the case and fawning over the simple gift. “Awwwww, it's so kyute!”

“...Did you just say 'kyute'?”

“What on Earth made you buy me a gift?” She sounded happier than I've heard her in the past month or so. “Aw, I love it. A little heart and everything.” The bracelet was put on and looked at again now that it was on her wrist. “Thank you!” I got a tight hug, which I returned.

“I just thought I'd get it for you. No reason really.”

“You're the best.” To my surprise Nanoha got on her tiptoes and pecked my cheek. “Thanks a lot.”

“Welcome.” I touched the spot I was kissed and felt my lips turn up lightly to a smile. “You haven't kissed me in ages.”

“Well, if you would do things to warrant it, I'd kiss you more often.” She had a faint tint of blush on her cheeks, keeping her eyes on the sparking bracelet still. She stared at it for a moment longer before suddenly gasping out. “The pizza!” Quickly she ran to the kitchen and pulled the oven door open, quickly taking out the food. “Oh thank goodness, it's just a little brown on top.” Sliding it onto a cutting board, she went to dust her peel with corn starch before slipping the next one onto it. “Yuuno-kun, this one is yours. It'll take about six minutes so get comfortable and I'll bring it to you when it's done okay?”

“She ate dinner and conked out. Said she had a hard day.” The girl closed the oven door and walked over to me. Turning around, she faced the same way I was and leaned back against me, pulling my arms to wrap around her front. “It's a little chilly in here.”

“Put on clothes.” I teased. The girl was in her pajamas, which consisted of nothing more than a large shirt that went to her knees.

“But this is comfortable.” She protested while playing with my hands, eyes still darting to the gift she was wearing. “And you're warm.”

“Keep moving my hands like that and I'll end up feeling you up.”

“I don't mind,” She replied airily. “Go for it.”

“...I really will if you say that.”

“Then do it.”

“...I'm not in the mood.”

“Sure,” She giggled to herself and I couldn't help but chuckle. “Ne, question?”

“Yes?”

Nanoha looked over her shoulder at me. “Am I feminine?”

“What do you mean?” I blinked. “Such a sudden question.”

“Hm. Well,” She thought about it. “I kind of get love letters every now and then, but they are normally from people I don't even know. I have a fanclub you know?”

“I know.” I hated those guys. A group of about fifteen that basically worshiped the ground Nanoha walked on.

“But besides those, I don't really get any attention. Am I not feminine enough? Am I attractive?” I pondered it, allowing her to turn around in my arms and look at me. “Even you don't ever look at me when you have the chance.”

“I look at you all the time.”

“Not when I'm naked.”

I blinked. “You want me to look at you naked?”

“No!” She shook her head. “I mean when the situation comes up, when I walk across the hall in only a towel or something. Your eyes never once dropped to look. Am I not feminine?”

Acting on impulse, I reached forward and popped the top snap-buttons on Nanoha's shirt open, revealing her breast fully. “Hmmm.... I give you about an eight.”

Her face slowly turned scarlet but stood there a full five seconds before letting out a 'kya!' and turning around to button them. “Pervert!”

“Yup. I get that way around very feminine women.”

Nanoha slowed down her buttoning and looked back over at me, smiling. “I'll forgive you this time.”

“Thank you,” I teased back.

“But next time,” She winked. “I might just slap you.”

“You want a next time?”

“Maybe, nyaha!” With that she went over to the oven and checked my food. I didn't understand girls sometimes, but right now I could tell Nanoha was happy. She really wanted attention and a little encouragement that she was pretty. I had given her both tonight and her smile was really cute right now. It was this simple moment that made me glad we shared a house together.

~**~

Sunday again; a day off with nothing to do. From the burning smell of death coming from my door I could tell Fate was trying to make breakfast. After a glance out my window I saw Nanoha outside playing in the snow. I knew already that Hayate was going to be shopping today so she could get out of the house. As for me...

A.) Nanoha was so happy last night, I really should treat her to something today to make sure she knows that I appreciate her.
B.) I did say I would take Fate out sometime... but since I bought a gift, it will be a cheap date, would she even like that?
C.) I can probably meet up with Hayate for lunch, if I don't die from Fate's breakfast. A good meal sounds good.

This is good stuff - been lurking here and there in the former thread - but never really got involved...

THAT'S GONNA CHANGE!

To Satashi:

I realize this long after the last Lyrical Days post, you may have closed voting...

but if you're still taking votes:

A

for me.

I would vote B, but Yuuno's comment on a cheap date for Fate has made me think twice...