On1st reading was hit by a gust of wind,
The impact striking me ill,
Your parables and symbols,
hurled with a compact vengeance-do take the kill.
Was'nt poetry to be free-flowing, singing, unflurling, lucid
and not a conflict raising curdle,
Very laboured phrases, contrived epithets, grammatic imprecision
the true meaning- turned to a riddle.[Sorry-Entirely my thoughts, Keep up the good work]
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A thought provoking write, where you've used so many parables and symbols. In the world of poetry everything is allowed, no need to worry much about the trivialities, the reader is often forgiving, just enjoying the essence, the nectre of your beautiful thoughts.
Regards
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curve of mystery is like ' 'perfect creation'.'.the title is attarctive to the readers.the contents are expressing multi topics..this is a real work of an intelligent author..i like this piece..naizz
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an contemplating thoughts while about to fall in our slumber..watching the clouds listening to the thunder, wondering if it is hate or it is from a tender kiss after the clash of the thunder..wondering if the conflict able to create what once distructed...watching the years and the days and how the beauty of it's flow..what a wonderous universe softly pass, it just walk with no sound but behind it's silence humankind are the cause of it's noisy voice.....10+++++wonderful deep beautiful poem
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Hi, Dr. Kar, I appreciate your asking for my comment. I've learned from superior poets that the 'ing' form of verbs make poems 'walk' instead of 'dance', ergo, I shall have to employ the technique which I have been using quite satisfyingly since the lesson.

Here goes (my comments are in parentheses) :

Day and night flow by nature (no need for the article 'the')
seasons follow one another (no need for 'after' either)
snow falls, dazzles, brightens ('ing' lesson 1; notice, too, the consistency of the tenses
do they have quest, query, wonder? (you have to be decisive about which punctuation mark to use and I took the liberty to make the line rhyme with the second one)

rain and thunder restrain the light (again, decisiveness, which 'may' weakens)
as black shadows curtain glaze and glow (I like the allieration here)
when freaks of wonder by the universe (mysterious is a redundancy for wonder)
curve love and hatred like clouds are psychic. (I deleted the '? ' entirely, making your poem more certain than it was questioning)

grin of the green never ruffles along cornfield (another alliteration, albeit cutesy but I leave it up to you to change or retain)
dream goes on onto (unto is bad grammar) the goal (it is hinted that it is anything but lost)
as hope saddles strength by sheer desire (the very heavy hint which is as good as a win; the sheer is for sustained meter and in keeping with your alliteration)
patience wades through, crunches mysteries (did you notice that the active tense, underscored by a comma, dominated mysteries? Come to think of it, it does add a dimension to curve, which might as well be writhe, having been subdued by the pursuer/poet, right?)

creativity blooms only through freedom
look at an orchid, its color bewitch (notice the disappearance of 'ing' and the active shift)
floral/florid (florence is a place in italy) fragrance expends into air
as reality wakes up from slumber (i removed 'deep' to allow for a smoother read)

I have been reading some of your poems and have enjoyed them very much' Sorry mine are so child likeBut I am just playing around with this, and at the same time trying to give people a smile in this troubled world
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