So I went and started from scratch. I would like to know how to make it better in general. Thank you for any feedback I receive. Also what is a better name. I don't really enjoy the one I have for it, but I can't figure out another one.

Author, instead of creating multiple sandboxes for the same draft, please just use one. Furthermore, authors are generally expected to name their sandbox urls in a way that clearly indicates the owner of the sandbox. Currently, it looks like the sandbox belongs to someone with the username "Complete Edit".

Furthermore, given that this was posted to the mainsite and (if I recall correctly) someone told you to get the concept checked, did you do so prior to attempting to redraft the article? Going through your posting history, it looks like you had a concept thread here: http://www.scp-wiki.net/forum/t-5816446/scp-idea but thus far, no one told you that you were ready to move on to the drafting stage yet. It looks like you rushed into the draft before your concept was workable, and as such were attempting to fix it without having a clear idea of what the community would have wanted.