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thehyacinthgirl says:I have to say only six reviews thus far? That's insane! This story deserves more attention. It's certainly a well crafted tale and one that is rather original. It deserves to be read.

I love your descriptions and your word choices - they seem to compliment one another quite nicely and don't seem too dense or too wordy. They really do flow together quite nicely, in my humble opinion.

As far as your characterizations go - I love them. They all seem to be rather canon, and I nearly laughed at the Baron's reaction to Helena's statement. It always surprised me how readily some girls married the people that their parents chose for them.

I suppose they didn't have much of a choice, but I would be inclined to take a path much like Helena's. I wouldn't have been a very 'good' daughter - much too stubborn and strong willed much like your Helena. I think that's why I quite like her, I can certainly relate to her.

She has her flaws, but one can feel sorry for her because of the tremendous pressure her mother is bearing down on her and because of the expectations that were thrust upon her by no choice or wanting of her own.

The plot is unlike anything I've seen in Founder's tales which is refreshing. Most people seem to focus on Helena's death if they talk about her, at all, so it's nice to get a glimpse of what she was like whilst she was still living.

You seem to make the characters and the places in this story come to life, and I can picture this all so vividly as if it's really happening. That's another quality I adore of this story.