Sadly this story is a tire wheel traveling downhill. It was really exceptional in the beginning, but as chapter 15 & 16 rolled around, it was hard to keep my interest. My advise is that you revise them a bit because some of the sentences are a bit confusing, and the flow of them are a bit choppy.

Other than that, could you explain what happened to Kyuubi's reiatsu? Also, could you explain what the deal with Minato's was as well?

it isn't a bad story at all. although i wish *sniffle* that kyuubi didn't die. maybe if you did decide to write it, don't have kyuubi die... and have nel go with naruto. just a happy thought. ;) good job.

I agree. This story was decent, but it went more off-topic than my grade 10 history class, and believe me, that is saying something. But I think that a re-write would be good for this story and help work out the kinks

I thought this story was rather good compared to some of the real garbage I've seen out there; it might be disjointed but there's good editing, the author actually cares about the story (esp. if you're going to re-write it because you want to make it better), and you actually have a good idea to work with. A lot of fics don't have that. GL on the new version )