This was very cute! A joy to read. Very funny. I could just picture this being an I Love Lucy episode. You did a great job of keeping the characters in character. One thing, though, when Ricky enters the apartment in Act 2, Scene 1, he hears noises in the bedroom. But then when Fred comes over, Ricky asks if he's seen Lucy or Ethel. Fred says he hasn't seen either, and they must be out shopping. But one of the girls HAS to be in the bedroom, otherwise Ricky would have gone in to investigate. Other than that, wonderful story!

Jilian chapter 1 . 7/1/2003

I really like it! It sounds like a classic 'I Love Lucy' episode-even the dialogue. You've really got the characters down pat. I'm looking forward to more chapters! I wouldn't change a thing! :)