I'm going to assume that you're going to read the comments here, but never reply. That said, you need to capitalize. Really. Capitalizing alone will make a huge difference in the presentation of your story.

I mean, is this some sick joke you illiterate bastard? This is a combination of drivel that made me have to wipe vomit off my monitor. Just... gah, I'm adding your story to my collection of !%@$ that shouldn't have ever been conceived, right above Deathman's story.

I can't even find the strength to properly flame you.. I want my soul and passion back!

Sev and Skul: thanks for trying to help this guy rather than just flaming him. Ya done HBOFF proud.

Marvin, do us all a favor and use the shift key next time. You submitted this to a fanfic queue, not a blog, forum, or chat window. No caps/all caps is not cute or trendy, but rather sloppy and unacceptable.

Commas, capitals, paragraphs, indents. Add them in your next fic. If you don't know what these are, then look in any novel._________________Never interrupt your enemy when he is making a mistake.
-Napoleon

Joined: 29 Mar 2005Posts: 171Location: Trying to fight the Flood with a rubber band and some thumbtacks

Posted: Sat Feb 24, 2007 10:30 am Post subject:

Gah.

Three things: Spellcheck (so I know what you're trying to say), the shift key (honestly, this would make your work look exponentially better), and a basic grasp of proper English grammar (so I understand what the hell you're saying). Don't bother returning without these.

I'm not going to pass judgment on your story, partially because I didn't read most of it, and also because you come across as an inexperienced 'itarwebs fan fic' writer who believes that because the story is about Halo and has some sort of humor value to you it will be accepted. That's not the case. We have basic requirements around here, and honestly we're not asking much: just that the story looks decent and is readable, which only requires a basic level of effort on your part. Unfortunately, your fic falls short of both. I'm not gonna blame you once, but don't do it again. Ever.

Oh, and if you're just some sort of joker, then f*ck you for having me write all that out._________________When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro.