Oh, this story is so sweet! I don't care if Mary and Bert weren't from the correct time period, the story is wonderful and your writing is great. I think it would be very cool if you wrote a longer story, but I'll be sure to check out your profile to see what else you have written! :)

i dont really know what i think about this. it's sad, it's definitely what happened to susan as she grew older, and bert and mary are great, but why them? a sad one-shot, but i like the cathedral/aslan part.