Honestly? When I read, I like the story to grab me and take right off, briefly setting up the plot and characters and then fleshing out later, on the fly, so to speak.......IMO, the stories are painfully slow getting started.....after the first chapter, I still don't know what's going on or where the story is going.

I think you would get some more response if you posted your sample chapters here so that people could read them and comment.

Just a thought.

Welcome

Click to expand...

Thanks. The link to the "World of the Cheryni" site has the samples, the site is ad free, it serves only to show samples - and if you are interested, a link to Amazon sales site. I gain nothing from click through.

Honestly? When I read, I like the story to grab me and take right off, briefly setting up the plot and characters and then fleshing out later, on the fly, so to speak.......IMO, the stories are painfully slow getting started.....after the first chapter, I still don't know what's going on or where the story is going.

Click to expand...

May I assume you read just the sample chapters for both books?

Sorry to hear you found them slow starting.

Massive storm, young girl dies saving her grandfather, and you meet most of the players for the series - and 'see' a big chunk of the moon disappear.

I guess that could sound pretty slow - can you share an example of a book you did enjoy? What was it about the opening you did find enjoyable?

I feel that the story picked up pretty quickly and maintained it's rhythm throughout...My only critical point would be some of the colloquialisms that one would expect to find in the United Kingdom...Other than that, I would like to see more of your work!

For those who fight for it, freedom has a flavor the protected will never know!

"We sleep soundly in our beds because rough men stand ready in the night to visit violence on those who would do us harm." Winston Churchill

I feel that the story picked up pretty quickly and maintained it's rhythm throughout...My only critical point would be some of the colloquialisms that one would expect to find in the United Kingdom...Other than that, I would like to see more of your work!

Click to expand...

Thank you.

I put Lt Drake of the RAF in as a deliberate point, as well as the use of "Brit-isms" - the books are targeted for sale in the EU as well.

I have enjoyed some sales in Europe, but haven't found a good venue to introduce the works there as yet.

Most folks in the US have been exposed to the more common phrases, and I felt it would help EU based readers to identify with the story.