Anyway, it's indeed improving. If I were you- I'd take some time now to go back and fix your earlier chapters s otaht their less quick and more detailed. More reviewers, and you'll likely get somebody who's not as harsh as I am.

Here's the thing, your actions are a little off- "yelled" and "hushed" are paradoxical. There are points where it's less absurd way to use paradoxes and oxymorons, but those really don't work together.

I like the idea of this story, but seriously, you have almost no character description. The only real thing you mention is gender. I have no idea how they look, what their voices sound like, or anything of that nature. This story is almost entirely dialogue.

Well, Vladimir seems kind of...oblivous to his situation, wonder how that one is going to play out. hmm, loved the chapter and i would say more but i've got homework that is staring at me and my mom won't stope yelling at me to get it done. so, yeah, update soon, later!

You mean she's nice? o_0 bit weird there. I considered her to be withdrawn and a bit cold. VERY forward foreshadowing, at times to forward, but with this new pacing, your story is much better, and much easier to follow. I have style tips...but I don't want to hurt your style; I'm still learning to identify it.

Look...I don't mean to be bitch here, but your pacing is TERRIBLE. There's so much build up you can do. When Jackal's parentage is revealed, it's a 'meh' moment rather than 'zomg!' Putting in more build up, and more descritions, and more characterization, and more bonding, would make this moment so much better. It's a great twist- but horribly used.

Uh...wow. Your really playing up the childishness in the government, aren't you?

Anyway...I should have mentioned it earlier(since I have hardly been complimentary) but I like the names you give these 'animalia.' I would highly suggest combining these last three chapters, the second chapter is where you should give at least a little explanation...that can be shifted to the third, but it's frustrating to read with what little we as readers have.