Brilliant! Very well developed and realistic characters, a steady pace and appropriate funny moments. You built up the mystery of Amber's strange behaviour in a way that made me have to read on. Some people may not like Amber but she's only human and therefore extremely relatable. Also, I loved all the personalities, especially Bronwyn, Emery, Cobe, Matt and Nathan's. :)

Great story! Last chapter I was MAD I was about to rage on your page about how good the story was but how they didn't end up together ;D But I LOVED the story! KEEP WRITING!
P.S Id love if you would look at my stories that I write... I can't seem to make them popular :/ But having a ood writer review them so I know how to make them better would help, if u don't mind. Thanks a bunch (of coconuts) ;)

I really enjoyed this piece- read it in its entirety within a day, actually. It is a rare find on these sorts of sites, stories written using proper punctuation, good formatting, and the rules of grammar. Yous is one of these finds, and it has the added bonus of a plot that somehow skirts around being a cliche and a wide, distinct cast of characters. Nicely done.

Great story. LOVED Emery and Bronwyn :) Just to clear it up - you never did mention what Emery's real name was but with the minerals theme I'm guessing 'Emerald Jackson'? And why did you name her Bronwyn? I know - weird questions but your names really intrigued me. I hope you get the chance to answer my questions!

I liked it. It is a typical high school story, but as I'm a sucker those I find no reason to complain. Otherwise I wouldn't have sought this out with the intention to read it. I like your characterisation, even though I continuously got the feeling that I wanted to see her together with Cobe instead of Emery.

I like the characters' names as well, Bronwyn, Amber, Opal. They have nice rings to them and are a bit unusual. Of course, had they been named Anna, Charlotte and Lissie instead, I still would have liked them, but it's easier to remember a story if the characters have got more... distinct names. So well chosen.

I wish you all the best in the future, and hope that you won't give up on writing any time soon. :)