Message to Readers

Humu

Humu doesn't sit still, not even for a second. Life in the "City of Judgement" doesn't ever lend men or women time to rest, at least not any that isn't scheduled. What else would be expected with a militaristic state based on the principles of Darwin's evolutionary theroies? The city itself plays the game of rank. With every commendable act, the city grows to new heights, literally. Floor after floor are added with every rank earned, which doubles as a sign of social status. Step out of place, and your home comes crumbling down. Only the strongest can thrive!

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Just a small note: I suggest (and keep in mind that this is only a suggestion) altering the exclamation point on the last sentence to a full stop. See how it changes the tone for you, if it does at all. I just feel that it might help the flow of the piece and give it a greater sense of finality.