I'm working on a query letter to submit to agents. It's hard! This is my most recent version. Please tell me what you think, what you would change, and especially what you've learned or read or heard about query-writing that might apply to mine. Thanks!
Dear Agent,

Jonathan Douglas led a blessed life. But after his wife and infant are killed in a fire, he abandons his faith in the God that betrayed him. Drowning his pain with alcohol, he falls further and further from the man he used to be. When he finally repents, he must deal with the consequences of his sin.

April has escaped an abusive relationship and fights to make it on her own, refusing to be a victim. With no place to go, she is willing to do just about anything to keep herself off of the street. It will take grim circumstances for her to realize sheís not alone.

Jenni is a faith-filled college student, waiting for life to begin. But when things donít go as planned, she questions whether or not she has the strength to follow God even through the darkest valleys.

When their paths collide, God moves in each of these three lives, weaving their circumstances together to make something beautiful out of tragedy.

Beauty for Ashes is a work of Christian Fiction, complete at 92,600 words. Iíve included a brief synopsis and the first three chapters. Thank you for your consideration.
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