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so I wrote this about Sandy Hook but there are six verses so I'm wondering if you think I should combine the first and second, third and fourth, and the fifth and sixth or not. also any other feedback would be great!

I really love the lyrics to this song, but the verses do not flow together it feels like they all have different tunes. I really have to know what the musoc would sound like in order to know if you shouldcombine them together or not.

i was thinking of the melody of the verses as kind of similar to the verses in mary's song by taylor swift but with some differences...its kind of hard to explain....i think i like it better this way i just don't know if repeating the chorus 6 times is a great idea.