The Inventor

1 chapter / 1525 words

This is an excerpt from a steampunk story I have been working on. Gregory Parr is an eccentric young inventor that has recently risen to prominence for his mechanical insects. Invited to afternoon tea by a well-to-do lady, he sticks out among the guests with more decorum.

I loved this! The banter and dialogue was natural and flowed; the characters were strong and realistic; the descriptions were vivid; your grammar was mostly excellent; and the plot, though nothing huge, was still captivating. I was hooked from the moment you mentioned Matt Smith (considering I'm a fan of Doctor Who! XD ). Great, GREAT write! I honestly don't know what else to say.

This is awesome. I love the idea of those inventions... I would kill to have something like that, especially one that can fly. Your writing style made the whole story very believable, and I love how Gregory was so incredibly bored. You showed it quite well just from what he was doing. And him as Matt Smith, well. Seems perfect, too. xD Great job with this, and keep writing! :)

Awesome and interesting excerpt, sounds like the beginnings of a great story. There were a couple of mistakes I saw though (I think you put ran instead of read) but other then that I really enjoyed this! :)