You're very unfair to Seiya. Why would Serena start another relationship if she knows she's in love with Darien and is going to be together with him in the future? Doesn't make sense.
And Serena's parents must have been heartbroken, mourning their eldest daughter that they lost to - murder? Kidnapping? They wouldn't know what.
So, well, an okay start I guess - but you need to think about some issues some more for future writing.

I had to skip some of the text, because it felt so predictable. (Sorry!) but where and how did Serena learn perfect English?
I'm sure your writing skills will improve with more practice, and you do have an intriguing concept. Running away with no note for your family is irresponsible and doesn't show the love and concern I'm pretty sure are Serena's strengths.

Why is he so stupid in his questioning. Couldn't he put two and two together. He is a doctor after all. I know, I know. I shouldn't be criticizing this chapter, but what can I do. I hope that they get back together soon.

This story was amazing and I enjoyed it, Happy Belated Valentine's Day!

Nick Johnson chapter 1 . 2/27/2014

Here are my questions. 1. I saw the summary for this. But is there more to the plot? 2. When does it take place? Be specific. 3. What locations are used in it? 4. How old is everyone that is in the fanfic? 5. What level of power are the Sailor Scouts at in the fanfic? 6. How did they get to be at that level? Be sure to respond to this.