[Grammar] After she parked her car in a place near the big house where the leadership

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After she parked her car in a place near the big house where the leadership

Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

"After she parked her car in a place near the big house where the leadership course would be held, Kelly walked determinedly toward the big house. Once she entered through the front door, she looked for a few minutes to big painting at the entrance of the house.

After observing it with detention, she noticed that the painting was inspired by a landscape of Southern Chile. After that, his gaze settled on the large number of guests who had arrived at the leadership course, where some were checking their cell phones sitting and isolated from the real world, while others had a pleasant conversation.

Chloe, Jim and Vinny were talking. Kelly approached to the group. She asked a Chloe, 39 years old, brunette woman, if she could join the group."

Thanks.

Last edited by emsr2d2; 30-Jan-2017 at 14:25.
Reason: Removed extra line breaks

Re: After she parked her car in a place near the big house where the leadership

Originally Posted by Nikitus

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