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forsakenphoenix says:I was wondering why the Healers weren't using blood-replenishing potions, but I hoped you'd have a reason for it - and you do, of course! It's kind of mystifying, isn't it? The effect the disease has. Sapping them of their ability to perform magic and magic having no effect on it.

It's interesting that it was supposed to be used for Mudbloods and now it's turned the tables on those who were trying to persecute those Mudbloods in the first place. I wonder what sort of science and magic had to go into that virus so that it only targeted a specific blood group, like the intended Mudbloods.

The opening scene was a great choice. Seeing the panic and devastation as the disease progressed and still seeing the prejudice of some Purebloods, even if it meant living or dying. It's sad and terrifying how quickly this virus is spreading throughout the Wizarding community. Hopefully there are enough Muggleborns working at St. Mungo's so they don't lose all the people they need to help those afflicted.

Hermione and Rose's interactions are interesting. I never expected them to clash as much as they do. Rose seems fiercely independent, but she's also a daddy's girl, that's for sure. I also loved how they had a television at home - just a little something from Hermione's past life that makes it obvious they're a blended family. Of course Rose gets stuck with the job no one else wants, but I think it'd be good for her. She obviously has a sense of adventure and traveling to Russia is something new to experience. It also helps tie everything together, Russia with Rose, and the vial with the virus and Goyle.

Your descriptions, once again, are your strong suit. You're very good at painting scenes, giving the reader the chance to imagine the settings with the details you provide. I loved the details of the Malfoy library and having Scorpius playing the piano too was a nice touch. I always did picture the rich Purebloods as aristocratic and can imagine having to learn multiple languages (as evidenced by the books in the library) and playing the piano. The life of the privileged. I feel like, with Draco, we really got to see the terror of those affected by the virus. It was a bit more real than when Goyle was brought to St. Mungo, and maybe it was because I know now that it's a virus and that many Purebloods are affected that makes me feel a bit of sympathy for Draco, even though is involvement makes it seem like he deserves to be sick as well. Still, it must be scary to start coughing up all that blood and not being able to perform magic.

I'm going to try not to make suggestions every chapter because I'm sure it can get discouraging but I have to make a couple of comments. So a few times when you're writing dialogue, you use a period rather than a comma to separate the speech from the dialogue tags. Also, when your speaker is talking to another character and addressing them by name, you should use a comma before the name. So, for example, if Hermione says, "You need a job, Rose." - there's a comma before Rose.

Anyway, you certainly have a very unique story and it's amazing at how you've come up with this idea of a virus that affects only Purebloods and the detail that goes into this type of story is incredible. I can't wait to see what Rose finds out in Russia and what the Wizarding world is going to do with this virus!