IMO,animal sports can be good or can't.Some common animal sports like horse riding or polo(a game like hockey,played on horseback)aren't erroneous.These are good sports which can improve human abilities.But it depends on how we treat and deal with animals.We must look after and take care of them!But unfortunately,some animals are ill-used by some people.For example,some horsemen force horses to run faster by whiping them cruelly or they feed horses with some energy food and drugs which are very dangerous for their health!On the other hand, there are some animal games which are incorrect themselves!such as bullfight or other fights between animals.Although these games are wrong ,a big number of people in all over the world like them!For example bullfight is a custom in spain.So what can we do to control these games?Maybe nothing!Because most of these games are legal games in those countries!!!

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mina.moghadam wrote:IMO, animal sports can be good or not. Some common animal sports like horsemanship or polo (a game like hockey, played on horseback) aren't erroneous. These are good sports which can improve human abilities. But it depends on how we treat and deal with animals. We must look after and take care of them! But unfortunately, some animals are ill-used by some people. For example, some horsemen force horses to run faster by whipping them cruelly or they feed horses with some energy food and drugs which are very dangerous for their health!On the other hand, there are some animal games which are incorrect themselves, such as bullfight or other fights between animals. Although these games are wrong, a big number of people in all over the world like them! For example bullfight is a custom in Spain. So what can we do to control these games? Maybe nothing! Because most of these games are legal games in those countries!!!

Excellent job! Miner errors. Great vocabulary and grammar!note: - "horsemanship" is "the skill involved in riding horses" and is different from "horse riding".- "bullfighting" is the activity.

Haleh wrote: Ethically-----is not good to make fight between them for enjoying. But if we do not make trouble for them, we are allowed to do that for a while.

mina.moghadam wrote:Thank you teacher for your correction!I replaced the wrong points with the correct ones!But,please tell me if they aren't correct again!I have a question too : should I replace " animal games" with " animal acivities"? Thanks alot again!

Any time!OK, let's see...- "animal sports can be good or can't" >> what's "or"? It's a correlative conjunction, right? Remember that it creates a parallel structure, meaning both sides of the structure should have the same form: "noun" or "noun", "adj." or "adj.", "verb+ing" or "verb+ing", etc. Now, look at your structure again "good or ----". I think it's clear now, right?

- "animal sport" is much better, but since "bullfighting" might not be a "sport" per se, "animal games" sounds OK.

- Don't forget "bullfighting"

- I don't know if you noticed or not but I corrected the spacing and a couple of typing errors too. They weren't related to the writing itself so I didn't mention them. When you're editing this time, copy my text and apply your corrections on it. It'll look much better.

Thank you teacher! I edited the wrong words! Your explanation was so clear! I noticed those points which you didn't mention this time! I hope they are correct!

IMO, animal sports can be good or bad. Some common animal sports like horse riding or polo (a game like hockey, played on horseback) aren't erroneous. These are good sports which can improve human abilities. But it depends on how we treat and deal with animals. We must look after and take care of them! But unfortunately, some animals are ill-used by some people. For example, some horsemen force horses to run faster by whipping them cruelly or they feed horses with some energy food and drugs which are very dangerous for their health!On the other hand, there are some animal games which are incorrect themselves, such as bullfighting or other fights between animals. Although these games are wrong, a big number of people in all over the world like them! For example bullfighting is a custom in Spain. So what can we do to control these games? Maybe nothing! Because most of these games are legal games in those countries!!!

Please consider what I have pointed out and edit your text.brown = Grammargreen = Extra Word (should be removed)

Parisa Tavakoli wrote:IMO, animal sports are some of the good sports that they can help to human. I think these are a group of the entertainments that they are useful like horse-riding that it is a famous sport in all of the world. It is my favourite sport.

heyI agree the sports that are helpful for animals for example i saw a documentary program that english people were making animals like horse to exercise to be more healthy but i disagree the sports that may injure animal actually I'm against all actions that can injure animals like cock fightingjust this thanks so muchbest luckbye bye

AMIRALI ESM wrote:heyI agree with the sports that are helpful for animals for example i saw a documentary program that English people were making animals like horse * exercise to be more healthy but i disagree with the sports that may injure animalsactually I'm against all actions that can injure animals like cock fightingjust this thanks so muchbest luckbye bye

* to make sb do somethingthe verb that follows "make" in the active form is a bare infinitive (simple form of the verb without 'to')

hey everybodyI've agreed that these kind of sports are specifically for people who has been learned as a child,as long as i think animal sports are enjoyable and especially handy for environment but disusing animals is invasive and brutal,however,there is a whim about it.Even though it was told by our prophet to learn horse-riding,whole of people don't know how to ride horse! Also today we have not gotten enough vigor to cease it',i mean it's not feasible.