Hmm, I'm not so sure why Ron tried so hard to get back together with Hermione when she's as crazy as she was. She screams him because he's too attentive? Sounds like he can't win, and is in for a lot of tongue-lashings in the future. To accept a lifetime of that, he's either brave or stupid...

'and you're emotional range of a teaspoon just enlarged to the size of an ocean' that was my favourite line in the fifth book.. and you using it actually made my day!

also all the references to Hermione needing to sort out her priorities...

and I don't really mind the middle being a bit OOC.. I always imagined Ron being like that about Hermione.. and just not really knowing how to get it out.. and then he grows up and he gets coherent.. for a little bit anyway :) the end cracked me up too, of course Ron needs things spelled out for him :P I love this though, really!