Long PS (Boalt) - any takers?

I've finished a rough draft of my PS for Boalt. It's much too long at this point (4.5 pages instead of 3.5 or 4 tops) and I am not sure how happy I am with it, so I would really appreciate if someone were to 1) pick at it mercilessly, 2) cut out the extraneous fluff, and 3) offer some general comments. I would of course be glad to review your PS in return, if you'd like. Any takers?