Don't need with 'nanpa' + number, ordinals are treated like cardinals (recent change?)I suppose you mean “a long time ago”, one of those undecided tenpo expressions. Your says, literally, “at many past times”. Better would be 'tenpo pi pini mute' “at a very past time”. '… jan pi tp PI lon ma Kanse...' (PP modifies the nouns, so 'pi' rule applies). '...toki e ijo pi kon en …' Really talking about air? I suppose “magic” or “spirits” and 'jan kon' are either magicians or priests. Strictly need 'nimi' before each of those quoted names, but I think the convention of dropping them is fully functional now already. 'toki Lasina' for Latin, not 'toki Loma' (or 'Lomana').('ti' is forbidden in tp for obscure reasons).Probably just 'tawa ma kasi' “wnt to the forest” rather than 'tawa lon ma kasi' “moved in the forst” (though he probably did the latter as well).'tenpo kama la' is “at some future time”, which might be relativized to the previous base, but generally is attached to the authorial now. 'ni pini la' “after that” is safer, I think (but this all needs some systematization work) Robert le Boron is not Chretien de Troyes as your construction has it but rather another subject to 'sitelen e toki pi jan Melin', so replace the 'li' with an 'en' (the 'li' is for conjoined Predicates, not Subjects).My copy lacks a subject for 'sitelen e li[u mutepi jan lawa Antun'. I suppose it is just 'ona', referring back to CT and RB? (I love the pictures, btw)'toki ali pi jan Melin pi sina sona' I suppose “all the tales of Merlin that you know” which is better as two sentences: 'sina li sona e toki pi jan Melin la ona li sitelen e ona', but at least 'pi sona sina' “of your knowledge” rather than “of wise you”.We go round and round about how to say “is n years old” The simplest is 'tenpo n la … sike e suno' but that doesn't fit in a lot of contexts, like this one. I think we are moving toward 'pini e sike suno n' “completed n sun circlings” so, 'ona li pini e sike suno pi luka en luka tu tu' (the 'pi' is there to attach both numbers to the noun).

Meli sama tuThe picture suggests a devil, Christianly 'kon anpa'. 'insa PI tomo' (th directional nouns are not yet part of the preposition – a likely development). 'tenpo pi pini mute' again. 'pilin taso' raises two questions: is 'taso' or 'wan' the better word for “lonely” (and what exactly is the difference between them)? and is the right form to follow 'pona lukin' or 'pilin pona'? I have no fixed view on the first matter, except that 'taso' seems to emphasize isolation and difference and 'wan' the singleness (not that that clears much up). On the second I have a standard rant in favor of the 'pona lukin' version, which doesn't conflict with other uses ('pilin pona' means “thinks well”, for example) and more accurately reflects the situation, separating, in the pilin cases, emotional from ethical from physical cases. But people persist in using sometimes the one, sometimes the other, with not visible reason other than calques (as I think of them – some argue other grounds). 'tawa monsi pi meli tu' is mildly suggestive, maybe 'tawa lon monsi' is less suggestive of sodomizing (I seem to be getting either squeamish or prurient).'pilin ike tan ni' is slightly awkward, since, in that position, 'tan ni' tends to look ahead to the following sentence rather than back, but the punctuation should prevent problems and the usual 'tan ni la' for back reference is even more awkward here.'jan pi sona mute' (just one, but very wise)'tenpo mute' “often”, Probably 'tenpo suli' “for a long time”, but this all needs work. Probably don't need 'ijo'.'tomo lape sina', probably 'sama''ona li kalama .. la ona' more like sequence than “if/when”: just drop 'la ona''jan ali li sona e ni: kama pi lon tomo lape' “Everybody knows this, the goings on in the bedroom” Surely this is 'jan ala' “nobody” and, since 'kama ...lape' is a noun phrase, you don't need 'ni' but can use the phrase directly as DO. … 'ona li telo oko mute' usually 'li pana e telo oko mute', not sure the shorter form works or 'li telo e oko mute'