One hundred thousand years forward in a magic-less future, museum employee Starlight travels across the industrial country of Teton to locate the first unicorn born in millenia. What she will find, however, is far beyond her imagination.

You are a newly spawned changeling queen. It is your job to establish and care for your hive. Will you be subtle or hunt for love? Will you find allies among other changelings hives and ponies or conquer them all? A comment driven story

Radiant Dawn thought that she was ready for anything when she volunteered to make first contact on behalf of Equestria. But is all the preparation in the world enough when she has to face the unexpected?

One hundred thousand years forward in a magic-less future, museum employee Starlight travels across the industrial country of Teton to locate the first unicorn born in millenia. What she will find, however, is far beyond her imagination.

"If you can make it in Fillydelphia, you can make it anywhere," or so the saying goes. When a young mare comes to the big city with dreams of being a reporter, she is instead thrust into a world of corruption and squalor where she will need the strength of friends to survive.

Honestly, I don't know why this story doesn't have a few thousand more views.The writing is excellent, the characters are rather fun. It has steam (I may be biased), and ,although a little slow at first, the story has good action.I am very happy that this landed on SALT, it was quite fun to read. Keep it up Toixstory!

Right now you and this story just took up in the fight my favorite story that is still being worked on.Good luck though, your up against CardsLafter and his story Through the Eyes of Another Pony and a KH crossover that I'm been enjoying.Why are there so many good stories out there.

Brilliant story! Absolutely brilliant! I sincerely hope to see more of this soon my friend!

As a side note, you have the following line.

-- Herald held up a hoof. “Say no more; you’ve got my story and I’ve got mine.” She returned to her work, but not before looking up and telling me, “You watch out for your partner, you hear?” I hastily agreed and hurried to catch up to a rapidly-walking Grapevine. --

I believe you mean 'You've got your story and I've got mine.' Aside from that, keep it coming! I cannot wait to see what happens next!

1) was confused about the trolleys emitting smoke. had to read ahead a bit.... adventurous, to use so much Steampunk in the mix.2)Why would Minty not know what her own cutie mark meant? Ponies get their cutie marks when they discover their talent--- they don't discover their talent when they figure out their cutie marks. They might look similar, but the only one who knows what a cutie mark means to a pony is the pony who GOT it.... because they get it right at that moment of epiphany. 3)Death threats and gun brandishing over a casual verbal jab? The big city's rough but it's not THAT rough.4)What precisely did she do to turn her dress into a torn mess? I could see it getting dingy from the soot (it's the reason "basic black" got started in the big cities during the industrial revolution.... because soot didn't show as much) but from the vague descriptions it sounded like she rolled in the mud and then took a walk through a barbed-wire fence.

1) One of the first things any city of any size gets up and running is its water and sewage systems. Ponyville had plumbing. ANCIENT ROME had plumbing. I could see rationing the water a bit if it was Appleloosa, but FillyDelphia?? This was a real eye-roller. The Equestrians aren't that backward.

2) They also have "self cooling" refrigerators. Electric lights. stoves and ovens. flushing toilets. In short, other than the cosmetic, they generally live in twentieth century convenience and comfort.

3) Minty's a civil volunteer in the weather corps, not an inductee in the Marine Corps. Only a dick uses The Drill Sergeant Nasty routine to train someone. IRL, that alone would have gotten Starshine's plot bounced out the door in an instant.... to say nothing of taking an obviously untrained flyer up in a "training routine" that nearly got her killed. Congratulations on making me instantly DISlike someone you obviously intend to make a focus character.4)why would they have legends about gryphons carrying little ponies away? Gryphons are so rare in Equestria that almost nopony ever sees them.... yet Gilda didn't startle or frighten anyone by her appearance in Ponyville . A ZEBRA freaked them out more. And most recently they had a gryphon that was a weenie French snob. The "ponies and gryphons are hostile nations" riff is overplayed and doesn't match the show; so is "gryphons are scary scary monsters."

Think of gryphons as Russians and zebras as blacks: In the US, Russians were the enemy but meeting Russians on the street in New York didn't scare some people nearly as much as coming across a black man. It would be perfectly consistent with the show to have a gryphon nation that is at least semi-hostile but has always been there while zebras are from far away and thus become a distrusted "other".

You could also assume a bit of an uncanny valley effect, as something that is close but fundamentally different is often more off-putting than something which is clearly something else. i.e. They tend to see a zebra as a pony who is very strange, while a gryphon is compared to what they expect a gryphon to be like.

470963For the next few chapters, I'm going to try to keep a bi-weekly update schedule. So, if possible, the next chapter will be up next Tuesday/Wednesday. At the very least, I'll have the next five chapters done by the end of May. After that, I'll probably move to a quicker update schedule with summer and all.

good chapter, I feel like the story is going to be filled with conspiracies and misinformation,i can wait for more. Also, it seems like it takes place a few years after the mane six's adventures. What exactly is the timeline?

550375Well, I've got the story pretty well planned out for the next 80 or so chapters, but I'll see if I can't fit you in as a reference or something. Private Message me if you wish to know more or discuss.

Ah... now I see what you meant when you were asking about high explosives... well... they hadn't killed anypony innocent... just as you said. You remember "Sniper Elite v2"? Well, As Pullmare was trying to sound like the hero, I'm off in a building in the surrounding area with a Scoped Springfield, Aiming down the scope... and... *fires* *Slo-mo bullet cam* The round pierces her rib cage and punctures her lung. As she falls over, gasping for air, unable to do so, I fire another round. *Fires another round* *Slo-mo bullet cam* The round arcs through the crisp night air, finding it's resting place embedded in the back of Pullmares skull. GOOD ENDING

I know you said Minty's telling the story, and she heard it as “I didn’t say it was for me.” But I'm sure Joya heard "I did not say it was für mich".

“Yeah, it really was.” as: "Ya, it wirklich was".

“I do not,” I snapped. “How could I? He’s weird and awkward and only knows how to talk about machines...” My sentence petered out when I looked up and saw Joya still grinning at me. “What?” I think it would sound more like:"Ich weiß nicht," I snapped. " How könnte Ich? He's weird und awkward und only knows how to talk über Maschinen..." Mein sentence petered out when I looked up and saw Joya still grinning at mich. "was?"

“Joya,” I said, “please, please, please tell me that you didn’t make him a matching outfit without asking.” would sound like:"Joya," I said, "Bitte, Bitte, bitte tell mich that you didn't make him a matching outfit without asking."

I smiled back. “Same here,” I said. “But what are you doing in this part of town?”I smiled back. "Same heir," I said. "But was ist du doing in this part of town?"

I sank back in my seat. “Wonderful, just wonderful.”I sank back in my seat. "Wundebar, just wundebar."