Great couple of chapters. I like the introduction to Kyle, haha. Priceless. I can't wait for more, especially with the teasers about Emersyn's past, and the baggage that will come from her mother abandoning her. Patiently waiting for next chapter. On an editorial note, there were a couple of things that needed fixing, but very minimal. All in all, I like your writing style! )

Amelia chapter 1 . 6/16/2014

Im really excited to see where this story goes! Hope to see you update soon.

So far you have a great beginning. It all seems realistic and consistent. I only notice two minor errors, but aside from that everything else was fine. Now I gotta say, I love the name Emersyn, it's not a name you hear quite often. Though I am starting to wonder what type of person will Emersyn be, and most importantly, who is this George guy? I hope you update soon, great story so far :)