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Review:

LilyEPotter says:I must read the Rhyme of the Ancient Mariner again. I only remember the refrain. It is a haunting piece as is your story.

I particularly like the line "Magic, not tears, fell from her eyes, her every footstep imprinted with wasted power."

I think you definitely caught the struggle between Albus and Gellert perfectly.

Author's Response: It's one of those poems that, no matter how often I return to it, I discover things I hadn't noticed before. It's certainly a haunting story - while one may forget the exact lines, the images of the dead albatross and the voyage through all sorts of horrors is hard to forget.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing this story! I'm very glad to hear that you liked that line - it was a late addition, yet it's crucial for the portrayal of Ariana here. It's a challenge to describe the details of her disability, and I liked the idea of describing it as a surplus of magic rather than an absence of control over that magic. Of course Grindelwald would see it as a waste, a power source that he could harness to create something new - a superhuman magical being.