I really enjoyed this fic. This is the first Sev/Lily that I have read and I liked it alot, it has alwasy been a partnership that I have been curious about, but as of yet I have never ventured into the Sev/Lily catagory. I can asure you that I will be returning!

I see that it was written for a "I challenge thee" activity but I am a little confused of the timings. When Sevarus says: "The Dark Lord wants you dead..." was this meant before the prophacy? If not then wern't James and Lily already married when they had Harry? If this meeting was meant before the prophacy and that Voldemort only wants them dead because they were in the Order then I understand.

I thought this fic was excellent as a "Missing moment" and I can truly believe that it happened. I thought your characterization was very good, and you caught Sevarus's desperation and awkwardness very welel when he was proposing to Lily. Well done! Keep writing!

he still moves like a spider that’s permanently wary of being attacked by a cat. I particularly like this line. It really seems to aid Snape's characterisation and it provides an excellent image of his awkwardness.