I like this, just be carefull with the idiomatic expressions exclusive to humans. I noticed this when you said "quarian flavoured kebab." A Quarian doesnt know what a kebab is, just like we dont know what Boshtet means (although we can have a few unneducated gesses).

Other than that, I like this story very much, and I cant wait to see what you have in store next. Keep up the good work!