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I Am Not A Glitch

Welcome to my first attempt at a drabble. For those of you unaware of the concept, a drabble is a short story that is, by strictest definition, exactly 100 words. And before anyone says anything, I checked the rules, and yes, drabbles ARE allowed. It's preferred that they are all in one thread, but I don't see myself writing any further drabbles anyway.

So here it is, enjoy.
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It happened again.

A trainer approached me. Maybe, just maybe, this one would capture me.

No such luck.

There was the usual battle. I lost. Again.

All he cared about is what happened after the battle. I copied his items. I don't try to. I don't want to. It just happens.

Nobody wants to catch me. Nobody wants to train me.

They're all afraid of me.

They don't even call me a Pokémon. They call me a glitch. A mistake. Hurtful things like that.

Pretty good. I like it. 100 words, Missigno and its point of view. Cool.

I'm chilean. I'm dislexic. But I can write in English. 73% of teenagers would cry if they saw Justin Bieber standing on top of a skyscraper about to jump. If you are the 27% sitting there with popcorn and 3D glasses, screaming "DO A BACKFLIP!", copy and paste this in your signature.This is Turtwig, he was the most under appreciated starter in Diamond & Pearl. If you picked Turtwig as your starter, put this in your sig. Started by Dax-360

I've claimed Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories! One of the best GBA games. Got it memorized?

Awwwwww, man! I had a really cool idea for an entire depressing story about Missingno. and how he wasn't "real" though this actually handled it better than my draft version. Short but sweet. The length was great, so I guess I can't judge it much. I just...really loved it.

Yay! More Drabble! Anyway, I really liked the idea for the story, and the story itself was executed well. It really makes you feel bad for that Missingno. It also evoked some bad memories of me playing Pokemon Red when I DID try to catch a Missingno. *shudders* Once again, great job!

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I get your point, and you illustrated that point well, but I feel like you could have been more efficient with your words. What makes the drabble so hard, besides the word limit, is knowing how to use all those words to create something meaningful. Some of it just felt like filler, like "I'm going to insert a 'well' here because I'm a few words short."

Well, I am not a glitch. I am not a mistake.

I felt it would have been stronger without the "well" (I personally interpreted it as hesitation).

I copied his stupid items.

I don't know if this is just me, but the "stupid" is off-putting; it makes the melancholy tone drift into somewhat childish territory.

It's not bad, of course, but you could have been more efficient. With drabbles, the slightest of words can change the tone unintentionally, so you want to be aware of that as well.