I'm finally here, only like six months later or somthing! I am so sorry that it has taken me so long to get here, I have been horribly behind on answering reviews and I just now saw your request! Anyways I thought I would drop by and check out some of your work and tell you what I thought! You always take the time to leave me such nice and thoughtful reviews, it only seemed fair! :D

Alright, I will go ahead and start with just a few pieces of advice, one of the things that really struck me while I was reading this, was the changing of point of view. It changes a lot from Harry to Ginny, and sometimes it throws some of the tenses off, and that can be distracting. Luckily it's something that once you are aware of it, is super easy to avoid. My best suggestion would be to concentrate on one character, write their feelings and get it all out, and then if need be, cut to a new point of view with a page break, and show how they viewed the sceen. So for instance, you could start with Harry, show everything he is feeling as Hermione questions him, and then page break to Ginny as she sits there and listens to it all like that. I just really think it would clean this up and really make it come all together.

Now, for the good, you have a really great idea here, and I love that Ginny is standing on the staircase listening to this all happen. I really think it's a very plausible plot line to be honest, and I love that Ron has suddenly become the support back-up for Hermione now that they are together. It's little touches like that that really bring your story together in the long run.

Overall you have a fine piece of work here, and with a little work, and of course practice, I really feel like you can make this a wonderful story!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm sorry I didn't reply earlier, but I just logged in after a couple months. Thanks again for taking the time to write all that. I appreciate it alot!
~Cassie