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~The Fall~

Ellerey was puzzled. For weeks there had been strangeness afoot. The air, normally flush with birdsong, was preternaturally quiet and there was a new coolness that felt unpleasant.

Ellerey shivered and looked at his comrades. There was Lizabetha, aflutter in her usual grapevine gossip. And stalwart Tom, one of the biggest and briskest of the bunch, stiff and resplendent in his cloak of olive green. And who could forget little Henrietta, the newest addition to the cluster, fresh and fie in her verdant spring colours. Ellerey himself was proud of his beauty. Even in this grey light his coat remained bright and clear as an emerald.

He contemplated their shared origins, the many moonless nights of rustling four-footed beings padding away in the dark. The ululating shadows of winged creatures passing overhead. The gusts and groans of the wind, which would set them aquiver as they murmured and thrilled to its passage. The heavy splashes of water, which would move and caress them lovingly. Morning would always find them refreshed and wide-open with possibility, dappling the world with potential.

But that was then. Lately things seemed – different – and that made Ellerey nervous. He wondered if the others had the same foreboding, or perhaps he was simply jangly from too many late nights gossiping with Lizabetha. Thinking back, the change had begun when he noticed the neighbouring colony wearing insipid yellow, and in some cases, faint orange. Even now, as he peered across, he could see red spots crawling like crabs in their midst.

He shuddered and glanced over at Tom. He froze. Surely.. Surely! that was not yellow he could see threading its way through Tom’s olive cloak? As Ellerey stared, Tom stretched out, halting in disbelief as he beheld the traitorous yellow worming its way throughout him. Their eyes met, uncertainty and shock reverberating sharp, guitar twang. Lisabetha’s constant chatter stumbled – all were still, breathless as they looked at Tom. A scream tore out as Henrietta crumpled, gibbering in fear. Blood slowed, pumped thick, heavy through Ellerey’s veins. Clotting.

And then it happened. Suddenly, gloriously, Lizabetha rose to her full height and posed, trembling, outstretched, exposed. Ellerey could now see that her luxurious coat was marred with a red creeping flush, spreading wide. Dying sun fade. They gasped, and with a sudden sharp snap, Lisabetha was gone, spiraling down, gone. Gone. Tom howled and with an anguished lurch broke free, pinwheeling, tumbling after her. Ellery could hear Herrietta crying, small bits of jagged pain. He closed his eyes and gathered his cloak about him. Opening his eyes, he knew what he would see. The telltale signs had started. The yellow had taken hold.

Gazing at Henrietta, he calmly and slowly unfurled. Gathering her to him, they leapt from the only world they had ever known, and falling endlessly, coming at last to rest, and be, no more.

**

Jeremy stared glumly out the window. He had just raked the yard last week, and thanks to last night’s cold spell, today it looked as though he hadn’t done a thing. He could already hear Mildred squawking and nagging at him as he heard her key – tchk! tchk! – in the lock. As he looked, two small leaves came fluttering down to land on top of a growing pile, adding further insult to injury. Jeremy sighed, and got up to get the rake.

8 thoughts on “~The Fall~”

I thought for a moment I was reading Atwood post-apocalyptic (with a couple of grammatical uncertainties) and was delighted to be wrung into an everyday world. I commend you on your arboreal world and I too, aspire to write from the “Perspective of a Tree”. I am in the long process of finding that voice.

I really enjoyed it and would have rated it excellent but for lack of a ‘near excellent’ I had to choose good.

Hi John! Well, good is good enough for me! Thank you for your comments, for reading, and I’m honoured that you enjoyed the story. It was liberating to write from the arboreal perspective, although I did feel a bit guilty about how morbid it all came out. And how much fun it was to get all dramatis “leaf”erae 🙂

Such rich imagery, in the words carefully selected to paint the proverbial picture of the leaves changing colour, and the wonderful contrast of perspective: the lengthier description of the depth of the existential meaning of the autumn changes to the individual leaves, curtly swept up by the brief mental remark of the man who is inconvenienced by the fate of these leaves.

Very beautiful peace, Melissa.

From a very practical perspective, I am most curious how long it takes you to ‘whip up’ and polish such a piece. I feel that my writing takes me a very long time, and I often wonder how it is for others…and do others judge themselves in this fashion. Sometimes I feel that a piece will take as long to finish as it takes; most times, though, I feel less patient.

Olo! Thank you very much and I’m delighted you liked the peace.. I mean piece! It was a joy to write and be a leaf. I really appreciate your interpretation of the man at the end, that’s what I was going for and glad it came through (btw, nicely done “curtly swept up by the brief mental remark”.. very nice). Re: writing this story, it took a little less than a half day. It’s not a long piece, I had the idea in my head and jotted it all down then spent some time refining it. Adding the denouement of the man with the rake came later when I was thinking about how to make it better. Altogether probably about two hours thinking, two-ish writing. Other stories have taken much, much longer though (i.e. solid week for four pages). This one was fairly carefree. Think it really depends on what one is writing about and what for.. at least, it does for me.

Thanks for sharing about your process. I agree, it depends, and sometimes, when one is having fun with what they’re writing, it just pours out and the writer’s disposition shines through. The poetics in your peaceful piece inspired mine within my commentary 🙂 Keep the creative juices flowing, if a little slower, in tune with the coming seasons!

Agreed. When it’s fun the writing flows for sure.. sometimes rants can be fun too. In which case the writer’s disposition shines through as well, unfortunately. 🙂
Thanks for the support! I’ve really been enjoying your work and blog as well. Wonderful writing and recipes… http://maggiesway.ca/