Creepy opening paragraph but I couldn’t help but chuckle at “It was pretty logical, but I was too creeped out for logic.” What a great reaction! Logic is letting him down. And later all he can say is “It’s spooky!” That’s great! Enjoyed this a lot.

Very tense. I think i didn’t exhale until i got to the end. There is a sense that something bad is going to happen which pulls me through the piece. Toward the end we find that the trauma is in the past. There it is staring the reader in the face. It’s much the same for the narrator. Clever.

someone to hold you in the dirt…yes. that was beautiful. All the more so because of the latent comic potential with which you start off. Your people are living, breathing creations, and I love them. thanks for introducing me to so many of them over the past year.