This is a good try. The plot seems interesting but the grammar is horrible. There are several places where the words are together when there's supposed to be a space between them. Try using Grammarly it will help with the basics but won't fix all your problems. This is a great try.

This is really interesting though I wouldn't normally read this. The grammar and punctuation are great and most of the time I was confused about what was happening. And maybe separating some sentences into different paragraphs because that was partly why I was confused. And I don't know if it's me but I like to read long chapters as long as it's not too long. And your chapters were in my personal opinion too long. Great try and good luck.

This is a timeless classic. It's great and made me want to know more about Angell and what happens next. There are grammar mistakes in the chapters that just hinder the story's greatness. You should look at the chapters more closely but overall this is a great book.

Cliffhangers are great but sometimes you just gotta make it longer. Your suspense is amazing that's what I like and hate the most about a story. It just leaves me wanting more and it also wants to make me scream at the author and tear my hair out. Great chapter though there are some grammar mistakes. I was also confused about which part goes first. Adding like part 1, part 2, etc will help.

Even though this story has some grammar mistakes it is still great. The chapters seem believable and the emotion is just there. I haven't read hf in like 4 years but your story just reminded me of why I used to love hf. You should continue to write.

This story is realistic. It just seems to have all the problems that the world is going through and might go through. There were some barely noticeable grammar mistakes like you spelled capital wrong but it does not stop the story from being amazing. Overall this is a great start to a great story and I hope you continue o develop this.

This book is great. The prologue got me from the start leaving me wanting more. Like seriously are the mystery woman and the mc meant go be together. This truly is a book that can go somewhere though there were some grammar mistakes they can easily be fixed and when are you going to update more. The questions, that need to be answered have me hooked to this book.

Okay, so I'm confused by the story and plot. Like the first two chapters are filters but they are confusing me. The problem might be because they are short and don't like to introduce the characters properly. Like is the mc male or female? What does the mc look like? How old is the mc? same goes for the villain. Also, there are some grammar mistakes in the story. But other than that the story is going in a good direction. What you really need to do is make the following chapters longer, introduce the characters a bit more, describe characters/settings, and fix the grammar/punctuation. I think that the story can get better with improvement/ practice.

This is a great start to an equally great story. The plot is fine but don't you think that you should make the story a bit more intense I understand that it is only the first few chapters but hopefully the next chapters will be more intense that will add more to the story and how it reaches out to the readers. Best of luck in your start as a writer. In chapter 4 there's a bit of grammar error but other than that grammar is fine.

This is a great start there are no grammar mistakes. This story has potential but this is my honest/ personal opinion but the first chapter is a bit stereotypical. The guy cheats the girl doesn't break and then she finds someone that's rich. This can lead readers to think that it will be like all the rest of the stories. My suggestion Is to do something that is still your story and the plot that you want but not as stereotypical. If you ever need me to do other reviews let me know I will be happy to. Best of luck with your career. Also, how do you have no grammar mistakes pls let me know.

This story is off to a good start. You need to work on the grammar a little bit and I was confused about the story. Also, add a bit more to the summary so that readers can get a feel on what the story is about. The plot also needs to improve. I cannot wait to see where this story goes

I think that your story is great I really do. but it doesn't give me feeling like every time I read something I feel.Your story needs to dig deeper I feel like if you went deeper with it than it would be a 5 out of 5 story. You have potential as a writer you just need to dig deeper. It is one of the most interesting things that I have ever read and I look forward to more of your work and growth as a writer.

First off this story has potential. It was a wonderful read and has left me waiting for what happens next. There were several grammar mistakes but they can be fixed. There also seems to be little descriptions of characters and setting. I'm looking forward to what happens next.

This story is amazing. There were like 1 to 2 grammar mistakes in the chapters but I left comments about them. The plot is going nicely though I do wish the chapters were longer. There seem to be little descriptions of Esme and Daniel. I love her character by the way.

This story is really great. In regards to grammar and punctuation, there are a few missing words and you didn't capitalize the start of a sentence. The flow is good but sometimes you just skip entire scenes. Like that part with Ryan. What happened? Why was Ryan there? Working on those and included those scenes. I was looking forward to the confrontation but you skipped it entirely hopefully you add it but great job overall.

This is truly amazing. Your writing style is great and the emotion is felt. I sometimes get confused between Luke and Lukas since the names are so similar maybe changing Luke's name would help. There are several grammar mistakes in the story and I can't get a description of the characters. What do they look like? How tall are they? You know the whole physical appearance. You should continue to write and I can't wait for the next update.

This story has a lot of grammar mistakes. The plot is hard to follow. I'm confused about the mc's gender. The blurb is the most important part to gain a reader's interest in the story. Your blurb looks like a bunch of messed up sentences together. I believe this could improve it just needs better wording, better grammar, and a better plot. I know this may seem harsh but I want you to improve and I know how hard it is getting started. You should continue to develop and write this story, You'll get better with more practice.

This is really great though there are some grammar mistakes here and there. The concept is great though I don't read a romance that much I will continue to read this since I want to know what happens next.

This is a great book though it could be better. In some chapters, you seem to add on other last minute details. There are several grammar mistakes throughout the story but it doesn't impact the story that much. It seems like you just added the attraction between Lance and Seth. In other chapters, it showed that Dialla only thought of Lance as a friend ihen you just added those feelings same with Seth. Overall this is great but it could improve.

This story has a lot of potential but its too much stereotypical. Like best friend leaves friend is upset friend gets bullied etc. The first 3 chapters made me feel like I was reading words. It didn't draw me in it didn't make me want to know what happened next. It just felt like a burden but chap 4 was really what wanted me to know more. It was actually doing something. Something was about to happen. I think that you should like introduce Yazmine after Dianna left. It will definitely bring moral support to Rose and help her deal with her bullies. Also, Rose and your other characters feel fake except for Yazmine. What does Rose want? Why do the bullies bully her and what are they trying to gain by bullying her. Also like combine chapters 2 and 3 together that will help. But this is a great first try and there's always room for improvement. You don't have to take my advice but I honestly think it will make the story better. There are also some grammar mistakes. Overall I can't wait to see where this goes update soon and best of luck.

This is just wow! I can't believe this. Chapter 5 was what got me really hooked to this. There are some grammar mistakes in the story but it's still great. If the grammar would be fixed then it would be even greater.

This is a great story that had me from the beginning. It's unique and deals with a lot of issues in the world today which is something that I don't find in some books. There are a few grammar mistakes in the story. It kind of hinders with the greatness of the story but they can easily be fixed. I can't wait to see where this story goes.

This is a great start your story is great so far and it's a rare book that you find. There are some grammar mistakes but they can be fixed. You should continue to develop this story and the cover that you have is great.

I love the idea of the story that you have I am a huge fan of the series and I used to like harry potter when I was younger. So, you need to use capitalization when you are starting a new sentence and there a few grammar mistakes that can be easily fixed.

I feel that this story has a lot of potential that is why it has a 3 out of three because this story really has something but you need to work with the grammar. try some grammar apps though that won't help much it can help a little bit. You need to clear up somethings in the story such as why does the pack bully her. Overall I think that this is a great story and I want to see more from it as you grow to become a writer. If you want me to give you another review when you are done with the mistakes and have more chapters let me know

I have never before read a book such as yours. It truly is one of a kind and I can't wait to see where this goes. You should try to get it published. Maybe you should try for the inkitt novel contest. and continue to write this story

This is a sad but great story. There are some grammar mistakes but they can be fixed. This truly very great can't wait to see Isabelle grow from this and realize that we can't control things like this.

This is a great book and it has a lot of potentials. There are no grammar mistakes. I don't mean to be rude or anything but I am pretty sure that you want to improve this story. These are only the first few chapters but in the upcoming ones can you make them more interesting? But this is a great book I can't wait to see where you go with it.

This story is really interesting but there are some grammar mistakes. Based on the chapters that I have read so far I feel like you should write something that readers didn't expect that way they can become more hooked to the story. I can't wait to see where this story goes.

I think this story is not going anywhere. The chapters are good with a few grammar mistakes but the plot... it's not going anywhere. It just only seems like faint flashbacks instead of one big story. I think what could help with this is combing some chapters together. It will make the chapters longer and prepare the next chapters for more action. In books, something HAPPENS but with yours, nothing is happening. I get the fact she's trying to escape but add more obstacles. This is great so far continue to write.

I am confused about this book. It's too fast paced for me. Like one moment he was in a crow's nest then he was on Pompey's ship. I think diving the sections will help. There were some grammar mistakes. Also for your other stories, you should add like part 1, part 2, etc because I have no idea what to read next and the order they go in.

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