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forsakenphoenix says:So, I adore Sirius to pieces and I am often times critical of how he's portrayed in fanfics. For someone who has never written outside of the Trio before, you nailed Sirius's characterization so well. His temper and arrogance that mask his softer interior. How he doesn't let too many people close to him but found his soulmate in a girl who is brave and courageous. I felt a little disappointed that for someone who had so much fight in her that she was killed while defenseless, with no opportunity to protect herself. Sirius's thoughts as a failure to do his duty to protect her was heartbreaking but it was nice to see that Win never blamed him.

I love how everything ended full circle. It started with his death and ended with his death, finally reunited with that one person that held his life together.

Your prose here is gorgeous. It seems as though you chose each word with precision, in order to evoke the most emotion out of your scenes. Everything was just beautiful. It was sad, but while I was reading it, I felt a sort of peacefulness to it all, which was nice.

I liked Sirius's last lesson to Harry. It reminds me of the third Peverell brother who met death as an equal because he wasn't killed by his greed for power and lost love. I'm not sure if that was an intentional reference or not, but it was a well-placed one.

I really enjoyed this, and you should write Sirius more often! I'd happily read it. :)

forsakenphoenix (Ravenclaw)

Author's Response: Thank you for your review!

I'm glad I captured Sirius well because to be honest, it has been a long while since I've read the books (been livin' on fanfiction).

The circle thing was kind of what I was going for and I'm glad you found it peaceful. That's actually how I did want to represent it.