Hey sis. Great story keep it up. Here's a few ideas that I promised you. 1: What if Bella joined the bad vampes just to make Edward joules for sleeping with Alice and then she can't get herself free from them and she's stuck there forever or until Edward relizes that he still loves Bella and so he goes and saves bella killing all the vampes. Or 2: The bad vampes kidnape Bella and hold her hostage and tells the Cullens that they will kill Bella unless they get something in return and that would be Edward and Bella is telling Edward not to but then the phone or what ever goes dead before the Cullens can find out where Bella is. Oh and they only have like three to four days to find her or its to late.

That's all I have for now. What do you think? Keep it up on the amazing story I know you can do it:)

This is a great story idea and I like where it's going, but I do have some critsims. The spelling and grammar needs serious fixing. It's a little rambley and the puntuation is pretty bad. I don't know if this Samantha-whatsthername's doing or yours, but you should seriously have someone check it over before you post it