This was really interesting, if a bit...confusing at times. When you don't make it clear who is talking and such, I (personally) get really confused with what is going on. Jussayin. (Though I think I've mentioned this before.)

I like what you did in the last chapter, it made it flow better and worked really well :)

This chapter was sweet until the end- gosh, Lily is such a bee-atch! I've created a monster! Lol. I like how you said 'venomous green eyes' coz I don't usually think of green as venomous, but dark, soothing and mysterious x) nicely done!

ok, I'm glad Dem didn't screw this up as he normally would :) however, when she got the necklace, you should have had a bunch of little flashbacks and stuff, so that we know for sure that she just received her memories xD

Wait...Who exactly is Warren again? RAWR, I cant remember... Oh well, I guess I need a bit of a refresher on the Characters... Anyways, I hope to see more of Beryl! I'm probably not the one you should ask about mistakes or anything, cause when I read, I read stuff I'm I'm not, and when I'm into it, I don't give a damn about mistakes. Now, If its bad, I'll say something but I normally ignore mistakes...Its bad...I know.

Ok, I think you have too many characters in such a 'small' fic. It's very hard to keep track of all the good guys. There are too many, and not enough time for you to develop each one. You keep trying to develop each character-which I admire you for-but it's too big a project. There are too many people, too many backstories, and not enough time. You could have a separate fic where you have a chapter for each character, describe their story and refer to it each time you mention them to make the story flow and for the plot to progress. If you keep trying to develop the characters like this your readers would soon begin to lose interest in your story because it's losing plot. One thing you always have to ask yourself before writing a chapter-does this chapter affect the plot and/or story in anyway, or may I go without it? Each chapter, each reference and each character must have an ultimate purpose in your fic.