I get the feeling that this blurb is too... expositiony, not enough description. Too much "this happened and then this happened and then this happened". But I'm notoriously bad at evaluating myself - ...

The following is a standalone passage from a collection meant to deal with topics of psychology, philosophy and self-help.
The question is: Is the quirky style helpful in driving home the point, or ...

Three of us have just finished the first complete draft of our first attempt at collaborative fiction. While the plot and the story are tightly knit, we have are facing trouble in maintaining the tone ...