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All These Years

This is a vignette, not really a story 4*'s

It may be the opening, the middle, or the close of a story.
You might try writing a "story" where this is the opening, middle or close - or one of each. Now there's a challenge.
You have a demonstrably vivid imagination and writing skills.
Go on; give it a try.

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Anonymous12/10/17

Fell Into A Routine

As a child, I looked at my parents' daily routine. Mom cleaning the house and singing to me. Baking cakes and cookies. Seeing to it that our clothes were washed, dried, folded or hung in the closet. Mom loved working in her flower garden. Dad would come home and playfully kiss Mom and tell her that he loved her. He said it differently each time, but even as young as I was, I knew he was expressing his love for Mom. I remember looking forward to the day when my future wife and I slipped into such a wonderful routine. Then I started hearing from my wife how friends of ours had divorced because their marriages had become routine and boring. And the next thing I knew I was being served with a divorce. When my wife finally answered my question, "Why?", she said, " Like so many of our friends, our marriage became all routine." Now, I live in a shoebox apartment, making payments on the house that once was mine, paying child support on a son that calls another man, "Daddy", paying alimony, paying off her car and insurance. So, another man is having sex with her at no cost to him. They don't talk about marriage. Neither want the routine of marriage. I have not even dated since I was served. There is not a woman on earth I trust with my heart now.

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Anonymous01/10/18

Excellent 5*

You have more talent than most on this site.

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Anonymous02/09/18

No. FUCK NO

I can't see how anyone gives this more than one star.
You catch her in bed.
You let the guy walk out.
You let her blame you.
You let her hug you as you forgive her? She is still nak3d and wet from him.
Fuck no.

Earlier you talk about how cold she is and you too as your testicles tighten.
I disagree. You obviously lack balls, testosterone nor any sense of manhood.

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Anonymous02/11/18

Stupid question

What a stupid question to ask?What are we going to do know?.No brainer he dumps her.Also a nothing of a story,why publish it.?

Why

Well Written

This story makes me feel things. No punches pulled, just good writing, great storytelling. I was more interested in your How Tos this was my chance to see what you can do with an actual story. I won't ever read it again, but if I ever come across it again, I'll remember it. It made me feel things.

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Anonymous05/06/18

A pregnant emotional moment, . . .

ending a stillborn marriage. Nice try, but she cheated. She CHEATED! She wanted, she yearned, she needed, but she never said a fucking thing about it, until she got caught, cheating.

Do you know who you cheat? You cheat people you don't know, or don't care about. When you cheat strangers its wrong. When you cheat friends its a sin. When you cheat on your spouse its a cruelty. Do you know who you treat with cruelty? People who mean nothing to you. It was nothing, she said. Probably one of the few honest comments she has made to him in months, years. It was nothing because her vows are nothing because their relationship had become nothing because He, became Nothing, to her.

Do you know why you cheat? You cheat because getting what you want is more important than integrity, self respect, or common human decency. You cheat because you are selfish, and lazy. And you think you can get away with it. Probably because you have before.

They can stay in the same house, they can decide to not get divorced, they can start fucking and acting out in other ways that mimic what they used to do, when they were married, partners, friends, lovers. But she has destroyed their relationship. "They" are no more.

You left us with a piquant illustration of the symptoms, but a paltry, silly, notion of the disease. Lots of emotion, but no intelligence. Useless.

Thanks for trying. Congratulations on your commercial success. Smart, staying away from Loving Wives. No sense in writing what you know so little about.

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Anonymous05/10/18

Bitter biter bit!

Amazing Snapshot

In one short story you can see the template of their whole life together. They were existing, but there was no real life there. It was like the basics of a meal, enough to nourish you, but with no flavor, no spices, nothing to make the meal interesting.

I have seen this exact situation in a family member. She married a loser who barely brought home enough of an income, had average brains and no intelligence. She worked too and did all the housework and raised their 4 kids. He thought being a man and having a penis somehow made him head of the household. To warrant being a "man" and getting the respect of the household then you have to be the MAN. Means you have to be able to do at least the manly duties like being the provider, being a good leader, being intelligent and someone the rest of the household can look up to. Well, he wasn't, and as soon as the children, that SHE raised along with working full time and keeping house, left the house to college she wanted to be with other men. With interesting, intelligent and educated men. For her children she sacrificed many of her prime years.

In this case, the husband seems a neanderthal of a man. He says in his youth he loved to fight just for the heck of fighting. He obviously not someone who listened to her or understood her in any way. He added no spice to their lives, as he didn't get it, that she wanted a trip. Something different. A change of pace, something different to do. He was ok with the same monotony because he had limited intellect. She was probably no genius, but my bet would be she was more intelligent than him and needed some change to challenge her mind. It sucks because she probably loved him and because of the kids is trapped to be with him.

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Anonymous06/03/18

I don't get in this story the point of bringing a marriage to a submmation by one event to only end it there without the interactions of guilt and shame, innocents and if you choose redemption?

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Anonymous06/28/18

What

What is the point of this nothing story?

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Anonymous08/14/18

This broke my heart.

I will never cheat. I would die if I hurt my wife like that.

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Anonymous08/25/18

Can

Can someone explain this story to me.I think it is a load of drivel and can't see why it was published.

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Anonymous09/20/18

like a fishhook in the eye

Economical. Deadly. Each heavy word falling with the inevitability of earth on a coffin.

Well done Selena! I have never ready anything of yours before. So there is much in store. After I recover myself - your story has drained me.

Old Tom

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Anonymous10/27/18

You can, and did, follow your dog around with a bag and post the results, and still the illiterates will fellate you over it. LW sure is something.

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Anonymous11/12/18

Deep, dark, and real. Thank you.

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Anonymous11/15/18

How easy we forget the love between us for a brief interlude, and the pain that it causes. Maybe if we would think about how we would feel if it was our spouse doing this to me then we would hesitate just long enough to come to our senses. Awh but we are human. CV HxaY7

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Anonymous12/08/18

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Like the story But

This could be one chapter in a longer novel. I wonder how we got to this point and I am intrigued as to how it will.end. I want to know his story to this point and hers. I think you write well and can’t believe you would stop here. If this is a tease for the novel I willing to signup for it right now.
Thanks

Beautifully written

How

How can someone say this was beautifully written.It is a load of crap and another example of America's growth industry ,WIMPS.

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Anonymous01/12/19

and yet the big bad ass annony!

who calls everyone wimps no WIMPS! can't provide a name so we can reply to the ass hole of: LIT personally! This ass wipe reads all of these LW stories and love to jerk off to the cuck stories. You all know this fag had a wife who died and then he found out the fool had been cheated on his entire married life. So he's bitter!!! Hey annony how's your sad fag life going so far!