=====Version 1 (child-friendly) =====
Jolly the Trolley used to be a clean machine
Bright and shiny; lemon-lime green
But now he clickety clacks down those weathered tracks
Jolly the Precarious Rickety Trolley

Jolly takes a stroll along the seaside
He rings his bell citywide
He could stand to use a coat of paint or two
Jolly the Precarious Rickety Trolley

Mr. Mayor made a fuss up in City Hall
Jolly’s driver Joe getting old and all
Joe had been with Jolly since the very first run
Jolly the Precarious Rickety Trolley

Jolly always kept his eyes on the track
Even with Joe a bumpin’ napping in the back
Looks like the end of the line for Jolly and Joe
Jolly the Precarious Rickety Trolley

Jolly the Trolley used to be a clean machine
Bright and shiny; lemon-lime green
But they retired Jolly; tossed him in the sea
Now he spends his days as an artificial reef
Jolly the Precarious Rickety Trolley
Jolly the Precarious Rickety Trolley

=====Original Version======
Jolly the Trolley used to be a clean machine
Not unlike the yellow submarine
But now he clickety clacks down those weathered tracks
Jolly the Precarious Rickety Trolley

Jolly takes a stroll along the seaside
He rings his bell citywide
He could stand to use a coat of paint or two
Jolly the Precarious Rickety Trolley

Mr. Mayor made a fuss up in City Hall
Jolly’s driver Joe being drunk and all
Joe had been with Jolly since the very first run
Jolly the Precarious Rickety Trolley

Jolly always kept his eyes on the track
Even with Joe a bumpin’ passed out in the back
Looks like the end of the line for Jolly and Joe
Jolly the Precarious Rickety Trolley

Jolly the Trolley used to be a clean machine
Not unlike the yellow submarine
But they retired Jolly; tossed him in the sea
Now he spends his days as an artificial reef
Jolly the Precarious Rickety Trolley
Jolly the Precarious Rickety Trolley

Last edited by jamestoffee on April 6th, 2014, 3:56 am, edited 1 time in total.

It's interesting. Who is your audience? It's not a song for kids as Joe is a drunk. Now personally, I love songs about drunks, I'm not sure it's appropriate as a children's song.
It's not really a song for adults either, it is along the lines of Yellow Submarine, Lucy in the Sky or Puff the Magic Dragon but they really don't mention drugs or drinking. They may infer it though.
It terms of continuity you have
"But now he clickety clacks down those weathered tracks" and
"Now he spends his days as an artificial reef "
This might be possible if he were a precarious quantum trolley

I was definitely thinking along the lines of the Beatles "Yellow Submarine" "Penny Lane"

There is also a relatively new group called "Yelvis"....they had a very popular song recently "What Does the Fox Say?" http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jofNR_WkoCE
and they do a similar thing with other songs....serious music + comedic lyrics.....I don't really like all the explicit sexual lyrics or swearing...but there seems to be an audience wanting something "different" than typical relationship love songs.