Suffocation

The life of five teenager's is played out for you as they enter their senior year in high school. The summer that they experienced isrevisted and everything changes as they all meet one another. Problems arrise and feelings are suddenly shown.

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The life of five teenager's is played out for you as they enter their senior year in high school. The summer that they experienced isrevisted and everything changes as they all meet one another. Problems arrise and feelings are suddenly shown. Read Chapter

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You have a good sense of who your characters are, but they seem a bit lifeless and one-dimensional. I sense that at some point the characters will come together in some way. My suggestion is to provide the reader with some clue -- some thread of commonality which binds them together, aside from going to the same school. Keep your reader engaged and interested -- show rather than just tell.

I wrote something similar involving different character viewpoints. You're welcome to take a look. It's a story entitled "When Our Lady Came to Chicago." It isn't perfect, but I hope it helps in some way. Best of luck and keep writing!!!