wonderful chapter. ugh. i totally love the part when she falls, that sounds bad, but it's a moment i'm always gonna remember through the story. like i can see it picture perfect. tala telling her to get up and her begging her body to not fall. it's a wonderful chapter. i'm glad you decided to continue it. It's worth it. wonderful.

Hi! Wow! Nice to see this story updated. I can't remember the last time I read it, but I still remember what went on, I think!

Well, I think the standards are... b, getting better xD I have to say you've improved as a writer... some very very good lines in there, and the fight at the end was well written and engaging, the chapter itself flowed very nicely and by the end of it I was dying for the next chapter o.o i still am! so yeah, you've definitely got better, well done! Update soon please!