Narrative writing: Rainbow Fish and His Sister

At the beginning of the summer term, children wrote a story based on
reading traditional tales. As a prompt, they were given a picture of a
fish. Before writing independently, whole-class discussion and pair
work explored some ideas for characters, a problem and how to resolve
it.

The page is labelled 'Nikita 21.5.08'. The main text reads 'Onec upon the oshan there lived a fish and his famley. One day the fish and went fo an exsaited swim in the oshan. He looked arownd and he fownd a cerks on the shiny rock. So he swam faster and faster that he was so exscitid he didn't notis the rock in frunt of him and krash, he band his haed. He culd not go to the cerks and he lived sadley ever after.' The word 'oshan' has 'ocean' written above it, the word 'cerks' has 'circus' written above it, and there is a note at the bottom which reads 'able to read back'.

Assessment commentary

Some variety in sentence openings through the use of time-related
words and 'so', although most sentences are structured in the same way
(AF5 L2 b1). Simple sentences connected with 'and', consistent use of
past tense (AF5 L2 b2, b3).