Now I can see why this won! This was beautiful! The detail and imagery was incredible. You know those stories that leave a sort of lingering inside you, kinda like a nagging feeling to reread it. This was one of those!

The fact that you wrote it without dialogue and it still be so intriguing is amazing! Very good job! 10/10

musiclover

gryffindor

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words!! It was a beautiful story that came to mind that I had to write and I'm glad it received justice. I hadn't noticed that I didn't have any dialogue until the end so it was unusually good of me on that :P

This was so cute! I loved it! I never really gave Flint a second thought, but this really put him into a new light. I could definitely see him having no social skills whatsoever, so this was really realistic. I think the last line really pulled it together well, good job!!

musiclover :)

gryffindor

Author's Response: Lol Thank you for your review. I never really gave Flint a second though either until I wrote this. I think with the right tools he could make for an interesting character. Though I won't be writing about him for a while. :P

Hey!!
So another great chapter! I like how you develop your characters along the way, very smoothly. Your writing is beautiful and flawless.

One thing though-it's kinda hard to read. I like how you go into extreme detail about everything but that can be tedious to read.

Good chapter though!
Musiclover

Author's Response: oooh thank you for the review! and thank you for the wonderful compliments :)
i would definitely agree with you about the hard to read. i think for the first four or so chapters, which is probably longer than it should take, i was trying to establish the tone, sooo it was a little messy. i plan on doing a revamp of all the chapters when i'm done updating it (soon, soon hopefully!), and i will take your comments into consideration!
thanks so much for the review :)

So overall this was a good chapter! I got a little confused about the letter thing but that's it. I like the contrast between Robin and Oliver. He's quiet and unsure while she's loud and spontaneous. It works well.

I think this story has a lot of potential but you might want to be careful because it can still become cliche.

Anyways, good job overall! keep it up!

musiclover

Author's Response: Oh I'll be very careful to keep it from being cliche. I want this Oliver/Oc to be as original as possible. Thank you for your review.

So this was a pretty jam-packed chapter! I like the idea of Oliver having a troubled homelife, it's very believeable and you were able to make it realistic. I also like how you switched times. It manged to keep the chapter interesting and get to the important plot parts.

It's not cliche at all but it does have the slight potential to be so just be careful.

I think this chapter is good! I like how you started with him being young, it brings more character into him. And plot wise- so far so good- I'm interested!

One thing I'd like to point out is that in some parts of this chapter there is a lot of dialogue, making it seem blunt and straight to the point. This kind of messes up with the flow of the story. Maybe adding in some details about the scenery, reactions, etc.

Anyways thats just my two cents ;)

musiclover

Author's Response: Thank you! I'll insert more description, I read it over and saw what you meant.

Aww! I like it! I think I have read this story beforebut never had the chance to review! I think that the fact you were able to change tones so smoothly and quickly is really good. So far so good ;) I'll leave a couple more reviews but probably won't be able to review the whole story

Let me just say, I'm definatly interested! I think that this is a wonderful start to a beautifully written story! I like how you described the character personality without having to do the sane old cliche "I have blonde hair blablabla". The only thing I could say would be that the tone of this story seems a bit...off. I dot know how to describe it and it could just be me but I feel as if it could be written more seriously. again that is probably just me and I know I did a terrible job describing it anyways.

So well the next chapter be a continuance or before this interviewed occured? I'm intrigued! :)

Musiclover

Author's Response: I'm glad you like the story so far. :) This is kind of like my little story baby right now, so it's nice to hear people enjoying it. Hmm, I kind of see what you mean about the tone thing. It may just be that because it's more from Pearson's perspective than Lucy's, it comes off a bit sarcastic. I'm not sure, heh.

The next chapter... well it's kind of a bit of both, really. It'll (hopefully) make more sense when it's read than when I just try to explain it, haha.

Wow! What a unique writing style!! Its so lovely! I have never seen or read this side of Rita and its very realistic! It was a lovely piece and your use of repition was awesome! Great story! I'm excited for the next chapters!!

This story is the definition of cute! It just makes you go "aw" inside! I loved it and it was completly adorable in so many ways. I honestly can't get over how cute it was! Good job with Luna, she's usually very hard to write! :)

great story!

Author's Response: And this is an equally overdue response. I'm sorry! ):

Aw, thank you. That means so much to me, honestly, and I'm so glad you liked it. (: It was fun to write, and it made me go 'aw' when I was writing it, so I'm glad you did the same.

Your characterization is perfect! This is exactly how I imagined James and Lily and even Sirius when Mary was cursed. I'm really glad you don't have the cliche, Mary-Sue Lily that always yells at James for everything. I also like how James isn't constantly being annoying :)

musiclover

Author's Response: Thanks :) I'm glad you like it. Thanks for the reviews!

Wow! This was so good! I'm pretty sure it exceeded all the requirements by a long way haha. I like how it took a while for Arthur to finally get there hahah. I enjoyed this alot and maybe you should think of extending it ;)

musiclover

p.s. I will be posting the winners in a blog entry :)

Author's Response: Ha, thank you so much! (: â¥

I was considering it, lol. I might, sometime!

Thank you for the lovely review, I'll be on the lookout for the entry. (: I'm interested in reading more of the entries.
-Jasmine

I loved it!! It was great! I loved how they didn't end up together, that really brought it together and made it uncliche. I definatly think you should make this into a short story, I would definatly read it :)

THIS WAS SO CUTE. plus I love Friends!! I never pictured Teddy and Victoire to be an on/off couple but surprisingly it worked in this story.

I really like Victoire in this story because she is so realistic. I have always imagined her as a strong determined worker who loved her work. I think her being a curse-breaker would be a perfect job for her.

I love the end where they go together... too cute :)

Great story!!

musiclover

Author's Response: Thank you for the great review!

Yes, I like Victoire being determined but she does have an indecisive side to her when it comes to Teddy. Fleur was strong minded too so I think that's where 'Toire gets it from, plus her sense of adventure from Bill :D

Added to favorites! :) I really enjoyed this story and the wonderful characters you created in it. Sometimes while I was reading it I kept thinking I was reading Harry Potter, as if it was written by JK!

I'm so glad you requested this in my thread! I honestly couldn't find any CC or anything wrong about your story!

I hope you come back and re-request it :)

musiclover :)

Author's Response: This is one of the highest compliments an author can ever hope to get, so thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it!

This is really good!! I love their curiousness (word?) about the war. It really fits in with this story and works well. I didn't even noticed the Sirius year thing it all flowed so well :)

musiclover

Author's Response: Aww, glad to hear it! I really think that the war needs to be an important part of any seventh year marauders fic - how could it not be, given what we know happens soon after. The Sirius thing seemed fine when I wrote it, but then when I fact checked, I realised it might be out. The devil's in the details!