Beginning was OK, but for something like this, it should be more drawn out... I don't believe Midna or Link can get romantically involved unless there's sufficient time for all the barriers/conflicts between them to diminish (for one... she's an imp, two, she's a /princess/ imp, I mean, even if she were just a princess, that would be enough to forestall any thoughts of 'kissing' some hoodlum farmboy).

Tis good... But needs just a smidgen of work. It seemed a little rushed at the end but the build up was nice. Work on this a little bit more and you'll be doing super special awesome in no time... In America... Zorc approves.

It was very sweet. You portrayed Midna and Link differently than most fics on here and it was refreshing. The writing was good in terms of grammar and spelling, but a little more detail in certain spots would have made it better. Great job, I'd love to see you write more Zelda stories.:)

Midna always struck me as the offensive type, or someone that doesn't become defensive in an argument. For the first couple remarks I figured Midna would hit him over the head. In the game she was not useless. Midna played a few vital roles, and also served as Link's extra set of eyes.

In the game Link seemed to be the quiet/passive one, and Midna was sarcastic, yet witty. That's just me however, have you played through Twilight Princess?

Don't get me wrong. I loved the way you wrote your story. Not too little, and not too much detail. I could feel with the characters, and if it wasn't Link and Midna I wouldn't have said this.