wow xan that was...funny but adorable...absolutely hilarious...and btw, the ending of Memory Gap was good but I HATE it. yes, its because i like the dad and the kid 2gether. so don't be mean but it was a good end, I have to admit that.

I think I'd be a little creeped out and feel almost raped if I was Heck... Egh. (You certainly like the incestual slash, don'tcha?)

Nonetheless, nifty keen. I feel sense I've noticed this multiple times now that I'm going to share what little insight on writing. Any number under one-hundred in a story needs to be written out. No 17's 16's those kinds of things.

Also, though I've never been confused on this matter before, it helps readers understand who's talking when you seperate a new speaking into a new paragraph. It just helps. (Not everyone is brilliantly perceptive or even mildly perceptive.)

So there's your hints. I think I'm going to end up reading everything you have posted on here at some point in time. Hehehe. Well, I'm out.

haha this story was cute/funny and slightly disturbing... the slight incest thing. i thought the greg thing was kinda unresolved... like you werent quite sure if there was more between them and i thought there was and then uncle ivans old lover patrick comes in on the action and im like woah. okay. strange inter-familiar relations these ppl have. that said i did like it... and you know what id really really like? i sequel with the lovely heck and patrick... :):):) lemony goodness me thinks

This was...a bit strange, but in a cool way. The whole father/son thing was unusual, but it was nice. I can't believe how open his dad was...it was almost scary...reminds me that one time before my dad told me before I went on a night out with my friends that you can get STDs from oral sex too..never mind. Nice story, if a bit random. Poor Greg..must feel horrible. Why do people like pepperoni on their pizza? It's pretty disgusting.

okay. That was something. I thought this little ditty was more disturbing. I think there is a good reason why fathers don't witness their sons' orgasms...they shouldn't be in the room! It was a really fast read and it flowed nicely. Of course all the coincidences were just too coincidental to be believable but they allowed for you to wrap it up nicely. I don't know at the end wether to go "how cute" or "oh my gosh!". Did you post the other story you referred to in the intro at AFF?