I see your sky, See your clouds
See your world upside down
I bring the sun, today
I watch you climb broken walls
watch you tumble watch you fall
leaving the pain, today
R'member love
Here for you
R'member love
That's all you need, to do
Oh, today, today
Don't let the tears get in your way
instrumental break / verse
R'member love
Here for you
R'member love
That's all you need, to do
Oh, today, today
Don't let the tears get in your way
I know your sky, blue and wide
Know your heart from inside
I know your smile, Today
R'member love
Here for you
R'member love
That's all you need, to do
Oh, Today, Today, Today

I’m actually trying to get ideas with this. If anyone’s interested in collaborating let me know. I got the atmosphere I want, the mood I’m trying to get across, but I’m having trouble with a vocal melody. Got a basic idea (the thing I kind of hum at the beginning) but… it’s hard to explain; I’m not able to sing it for some reason. Anyway I’m posting for two reasons:

1) Is the mood palpable/is the emotion conveyed convincingly?

2) Any ideas for fleshing it out?

It’s a basic sort of blues-based progression but built around a B flat minor-ish chord I like a lot.

In the interest of continuing the ‘debutante song’ discussion I’ll post a piece I laid down during the time when recording studios were stocked with Teac analog reel-to-reel multi-track and mastering decks. I really loved this singer’s voice, she did always have trouble with her ‘P’s however.

Working on music for this but haven’t been able to find something appropriate yet (I welcome suggestions, please). It’s basically a sarcastic song about shallow affection and delusions of grandeur.

You’re prettier than most girls
Got some mirror in those eyes
And it’s a hard place
That you got me in
It’s a sweet race
That i’m gonna win
Just give me some space
Time to make amends
It takes so many dimensions
Just to save a few cents

You got a heart attack
For a happy laugh
Got a handshake like an earthquake
Got me spinning dizzy tales
Make you the queen of wales
But we’re not british
We’re goddamn americans
And we like it that way

You say it once
Won’t say it again
Don’t blame you one bit
If there was a way
I could say the way it is
In less than ten million words
I’d be an almanac
I’d be the king of expression
It’s the answers in question
And you say yes
Every time

I’ll tell you true, I will
If you’re the queen of wales
And I’m the king of paint spills
What does that make us?
What does that make us?
I say we’re made of dollar bills
Wet sheets of dead trees
Cut and dry dyed green
To build a scene
Call it the land of the free
Or a recipe from a bad dream

But if you’re a character in my day dream
And you play the one who’s meant for me
Then who are you supposed to be
The remaining seven days this week?
Who are you when I’m asleep?

If you weren’t crazy you’d be dead
With a hole in your head
Where instinct should’ve been
Was supposed to build a tent
Of illusion to buttress your confusion
I mean our confusion
I mean their contusions
Sweet sympathetic evolution
Blessed distance from my sanity
Deliver me so blandly
From the madness borne of vision
Just take the ticket
Go on, take the ticket

You’re prettier than most girls
Got some fear in those lies
And what a great day
We’ve been born in
What a clean face
I’ll be buried with
Not a thing to miss
Give it a century or two
Just give it some centuries

I’d like to open a discussion about that type of song which I call the debutante piece. This is the song that the label will choose to help its artist or group break into the market. Over the years the charts have been peppered with this type of song. One example is ‘She Bop’ from Cyndi Lauper – a brilliant song about self-entertainment. Another example is ‘Break Down’ from Tom Petty – a new take on the negotiations as old as men and women. Still another, provided to us by Peter Townshend to debut his solo album ‘White City,’ is ‘Give Blood’ – an outstanding perspective on war.

These songs, as diverse as they seem, share a common element – they offer a fresh and perhaps shocking perspective on an old subject. They open our eyes, make us smile and most of all, make us listen more closely.

While no ideas come immediately to mind, I wonder if anyone else has any they would like to share with the group.