It was not the usual James and Lily story, and for that I commend you.

It was striking, and enrapturing. It was extremely clever. How did you come up with this?

Bravo to you.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Fortunately, my brain is rather off the rocker. Thus, the strange insanity behind this piece of fiction. =) It is my personal belief that in order to write well, you must write things that will provoke emotion. If your reader doesn't feel something toward your characters, whether it be love, hate, or some mixture of the two, your writing isn't ready. I'll be the first to admit that I struggle with this sometimes. I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for being a faithful R/Rer!
RML

good good...idk if I commenteded it yesterday...wells friday...but it was yesterday in summer school days.umm I said happy b-day on your other account but imma say it on this one too so HAPPY BIRTHDAY! I cant believe you're 16!!! well I can't believe I turn 17 in November...Wow I'm Old!!! lolz wellz i guess I'll talk to you later.*sings the happy birthday song while dancing around you in a circle(lolz)*

Yay! That was a good story! I liked it! It sort of explains the prophecy, how they might have started to "thrice defy" Voldemort. Good job. I liked the plot a lot. It was an interesting story, and not many people would have thought to tell it like you did, so congratulations on a job well done!

That was action-packed! It just goes to show that love can conquer anything, right? I didn't see anything to worry about in this chapter, so I'm on to the last one!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I was totally worried about the action. I've never even come close to the climax when writing previous stories, so I wasn't really sure if I did a good job. Thanks!
Raina

Aw, poor Lily and James! You ended with a cliffhanger, nice. Cliffhangers are good! Well, I only noticed one small thing this chapter, and it's that you spelled "losing" as "loosing." A lot of people make that mistake, so don't worry about it. Great chapter. And I like the plot so far. I can't wait to see what happens next!

Ooh... Intrigue! I noticed a couple things in this chapter. I don't know if this has happened in the past two chapters, but it has to do with your quotes. It doesn't happen everytime, but enough for it to take notice. You wrote:

“Lily.” He said simply

When it should be:

"Lily," he said simply.

If you continue the sentence after the quote, then there should be a comma instead of a period (or a question mark or exclamation point), and the next letter should be capitalized. On the other hand, if you are starting a new sentence after the quote, then it should end with the period (or question mark or exclamation point), and the next word is capitalized.

Another thing I noticed was the way you capitalize hell. Half the time you make it Hell, while the other half it's just plain hell. Whichever way you want to make it is fine, as long as it's constant throughout the story.

I'm enjoying this. I can't wait to find out the reason behind the irony!

Author's Response: Thanks for notifying me. Yeah, I'm really sorry about those mistakes. These are mistakes I make constantly, and I'm working to fix them. I'll edit and fix.
Thanks again!
Raina

Another good chapter! I like the way things are going, even though Lily seems a little OOC to me. But that's completely fine, since we actually don't know how she was. It's not as if this actually changes her.

I did see one mistake. You wrote, "She would have to go pay James a visit and straiten things out." Straighten is spelled like that, and I saw you did that later on in this chapter, so it was a small error.

I like it! It's not really like anything I've read before. I couldn't find any grammar/spelling mistakes, so good job! You have some details in there, although I'd like to see a little more! Other than that, good job!

WOWWW!!!So good! This is the best story i've read so far for two reasons: you're good at grammar and the plot is amazing!

Author's Response: Wow, thanks! Personally I think my grammar could use a little work, but it doesn't really matter what I think. Only what the reader thinks. :)
Anyway, thanks so much for reviewing! You have no idea how much this helps!
Raina