This is a well written story! I am excited to see where you take this!

I know you have a lot of reviews and I don't know if anyone else has pointed this out to you, but when you are talking about Harry removing his glamour you got a little confusing. You were talking about his eyes standing out from his pale skin, describing how they stood out. In the next sentence you were talking about how green his eyes are, but you used 'it' instead of 'they', so it sounded like you said his skin was green instead of his eyes.

This is a great story and I hope you continue it! Good luck in all your future endeavors!