Why? talk:Hunt Unicorns

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If you're interested, you should add a link to my old penicorn article. I won't do it because it's your article and your decision, but hey. It'sMrthejazz... a case not yet solved. 20:07, 8 December 2007 (UTC)

I quite enjoyed this. That's a reserved British expression of praise, you know.

Concept:

9

Definitely has the originality thing going for it.

Prose and formatting:

8

In the main, pretty good. Maybe the odd tweak needed, and possibly some variety.

Images:

7

No problems there, it has images, they are relevant. Job done. I suppose an image of a Unicorn hunt in action would be handy, but that depends on your skills. Maybe a unicorn in a crosshair? Or in an explosion? Or in an SUV? (Sorry, got carried away).

Miscellaneous:

5

You're right, it has promise. Significant promise, in my eyes. But I think it needs more. Oh shit, now I have to justify that. Er...

Final Score:

36

Keep pushing, I sense there's more you can get from this. And looking at the history, it seems you're already working on it! See handful of comments below.

Either a longer intro, or a decent sized paragraph before the "Dear God Why?" section might be handy. Maybe a word from an organisation like the Democratic Unicorn Hunt or similar, explaining their desire to increase participation in Unicorn hunting?

Basically, just adding something that gives a bit of variety might help - it feels a bit... listy, to me, and breaking that up with a paragraph or two might make a difference.

Alternatively, ignore that advice and keep going, you seem to be doing just fine so far. I look forward to seeing this when you're a bit further down the line with it.