I recognize the story seed that this came from, but this is… honestly not very well done. I knew it was in trouble the moment you said "blackness"; that's a universally poorly used word that is almost always associated with bad fanfics.

"Deep within the gulf of space, the vast emptiness between stars, a tiny island of air and light drifted forward. The Erikson, the first interstellar starship equipped with a hyperdrive, was an emissary from the world of men."