Well, I think it's cute, the natural and care-free way that you show Iris. I loved the T-shirt! Made me giggle. Nice use of foreshadowing. It sent shivers down my back at the end. It's a great use of juxtaposing it by Iris being happy with the water, and ending it with Shard not feeling comfortable with it. Good way of ending it there too. It lets us know that there is more to come, but it's a clean cut. Good job! X