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Monday, December 10, 2012

"U Got the Look" - just a little late!

The lovely, Laura - over at "My Baffling Brain" - tagged me in the "U Got the Look" thingy back on November 8th and I completely forgot about it. How about some e-cookies to repay you? Sorry it took so long! To take part in this I have to go to my current manuscript and find the
word "look" and post the surrounding paragraphs, and then tag 5 other
writers. I am currently working on "Unless", which is the second part of my novel "Nameless" - yes they have two different titles, I haven't picked which one will be the overarching title yet. (smacks forehead)

Anyway - I am going to share the first "look" in my novel, Unless. Ironically, the word is in the very first paragraph of it, so I'm sharing the first three paragraphs --

The body hanging from the noose
was too small; the boy was only four years old.Princess Dalia bit her lip to keep from crying out at the sight of the
dead child.He wasn’t even a
healer.If she made a sound, Dalia knew
her father would punish her.King Alined
couldn’t see the hatred in her eyes and the LOOK upon her face, which was concealed
by the veil.Dalia knew he was angry
enough she wore the grey silk dress.The
seamstress had made it for her before she left and King Alined forbade her from
wearing it because of the color.Grey
would always be associated with healers.

“Definitely deserved,” one of the
members of Court whispered to another.

Dalia wanted to scream and take
her anger out upon the inconsiderate man, but she didn’t make a sound.The executioner removed the body of the boy
from the rope and tossed him to the side like the leftover food from the
kitchens.The child meant nothing to
anyone.But Dalia cared.Every part of her was screaming for the pain
to stop.Speaking up now would mean
certain death and she wouldn’t be able to help them.

--

Yep, it's a little gruesome. Sorry - it's actually a scene which I also write from Edom's POV in the first part and it ties it together more. Hope you liked it! Now to tag a few victims err... others!

10 comments:

Sure it was a shocking begin, but I really enjoyed the excerpt... it LOOKS like a lot is going to happen, which is the point, I suppose, otherwise all my novels would be newsletters... sigh... I'm tired :)