This is a good one. Nice use of extended metaphor about emotions and clarity -- I could pretty much feel it in my head.

I mean this is a good way -- it immediately reminded me of when I had issues with my sinuses and it messed up my hearing. Couldn't listen to music with headphones or earbuds -- and then bam -- suddenly I could hear properly. Such a relief.

when we first met
I was a mess, ears
blocked by silence, eyes
and nose running in
unison head
stuffed with emptiness,
as my emotional make-up slowly
dissolved,

Which in the end of lines gives you ears, eyes, head.

Not so sure you actually need Stanza2

Arguably the most important word choices in poetry are the verbs. Leave now sounds too weak and like stuffed with emptiness pushes those lines too close to cliche

xDrew

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