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Create Emotional Tension in your stories with Jessica Hart.

All about Jessica Hart...

Jessica’s earlier career was a haphazard one, including stints as foreign newsdesk secretary in London, cook on an Australian outback cattle station, TEFL teacher in Jakarta and interpreter on expedition in Cameroon. She first stumbled into writing as a way of funding a Ph.D. in Medieval Studies, and since then she has just completed the 58th book for Harlequin Mills & Boon’s Romance series.

The more Jessica writes, the more interested she is in how and why romance works, and she really enjoys teaching and sharing what she has learnt about writing over the past 20 years. She is a reader for the Romantic Novelists’ Association New Writers’ Scheme, and has presented workshops at romance writing conferences in the UK, North America and, most recently, Australia. She teaches an intensive week-long course in Tuscany (a dirty job, but somebody has to do it) and a ten week course, From the Slush Piles to the Shelves: Writing Fiction that Sells around the World, at the Centre for Lifelong Learning at the University of York, where she will also be offering a one-day Crash Course in Writing Romance in May 2011.

Jessica lives in York, and is a freelance editor as well as a tutor and writer of mainstream women’s fiction.

Currently Jessica is doing a giveaway on her Website. Please visit Jessica to find out how you can get a three in one book!

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As she is a teacher I asked her to tell us a little about How To Add Emotional Tension to the stories we create, so she has this advice to give....

I read quite a few manuscripts during the year.Most of them are fluently written, and it’s clear the writers have grasped many of the techniques of romance writing – dialogue/show not tell/giving the characters an ‘issue’ and so on.But there’s something missing, and when I try to identify what that something is, the answer is invariably ‘emotional tension’. I've edited a version of a workshop I gave on emotional tension and included it below, so it's quite long: I'm just about to go away (again!) for ten days, and didn't have time to write a concise version, I'm afraid. But if you can wade through it, I hope it will be helpful anyway.

WHAT IS EMOTIONAL TENSION?

Emotional tension (or conflict) is critical.It’s what sucks a reader into the story and keeps her turning the pages.It’s a common misconception that a romance is about how the hero and heroine fall in love and get married.It’s not.It’s about whytwo people who are powerfully attracted to each other not only won’t acknowledge the fact that they love each other, but feel that they can’t.They can get married, they can have great sex, but their story doesn’t end until they can both say ‘I love you.’

ORDINARY GIRL IN A TIARA in my garden!

The problem between them - the reason they can’t say how they feel, and indeed, often feel that they have to pretend the opposite – is what generates the tension within a romance.Barbara Hannay once described the emotional tension in a story as “a metaphorical holding of breath”: when we’re engaged with the characters, when we care about them and know that they are intellectually, sexually and emotionally right for each other but can also see that there are major obstacles between them.

Tension comes from uncertainty.In one sense, a romance is the ultimate in certainty.We know before we pick it up that it’s going to have a happy ending – that’s what a romance IS.So the uncertainty has to come from not knowing HOW these two characters are going to work it out, and the bigger and more realistic the obstacles you put between them, the more uncertain it seems that a resolution is possible, the greater the tension will be.

Your task as a romance writer is to make the relationship between hero and heroine fraught with difficulty and uncertainty, so that although the reader can see that the two of them are absolutely right for each other, she can’t see how they’re going to resolve the problems between them.

F IS FOR FORMULA

I know many romance writers – and M&B authors in particular – loathe the notion of a formula.We are exasperated by the myth of a painting by numbers approach to writing, and I’m certainly not going to argue that if you have a ‘damn you’ on page 2, a kiss on page 97 and a multiple orgasm on page 174 your story will work.But I do think that unless you understand how a romance is structured, no amount of sparkling dialogue or good writing will get your manuscript accepted.Of course you still need to write well, you still need vivid characters and realistic dialogue and simmering sexual tension, but you need to hang them on the right structure,because if you don’t have that, everything else will sag.

It’s the structure that creates emotional tension, and I think that structure can indeed be reduced to a formula.Here it is:

Situation (External)xPlot = Emotional Tension

Character (Internal)

All of these elements are closely entwined, but let’s take one by one.

SITUATION

The situation is set of circumstances driven by external factors which force the hero and heroine together: a child has to be looked after, a project has to be won, a debt has to be paid.The situation is often closely tied to the hooks in the story.(A hook is an element of a story that we know appeals to readers and which is usually incorporated into the title somehow.It tells the reader what kind of story it is: Sheikh, ‘Marriage’ of convenience, Baby/Secret baby, Office setting, Cinderella etc.

When I start thinking about a story, I tend to begin with a hook.I’m very fond of a ‘marriage of convenience’ hook because it forces the characters into intimacy, but often I’ll combine that with another – office or exotic setting or baby.You don’t have to have a hook – Last Minute Proposal didn’t have any – but it helps.What you dohave to have is a situation and LMP has this: Tilly and Campbell are opposites forced to take part in sort of charity job swap.Campbell is deeply competitive ex SAS type, Tilly is an overweight cake maker.The situation in Honeymoon with a Boss is that Imogen and Tom spend three weeks alone on an idyllic island.In Cinderella’s Wedding Wish, Rafe and Miranda pretend to be engaged.

Once you’ve got an idea of your situation – they have to get married, they have to look after a child, they have to work together – you start with those vital questions: WHY?/WHY NOT?And the key to your situation is that HAVE TO.

In the case of LMP, I began asking myself WHY Campbellhas to take part in a job swap (if he doesn’t, the programme will be a failure, Campbell can’t bear to be associated with failure – that leads of course onto another WHY?, but we’ll come to that in a moment)As for Tilly, she’s been set up by her brothers, taking part will raise funds for a hospice, she doesn’t want to let them down – again, WHY NOT?)

Other examples of situations might be that the heroine needs money, and

the hero needs a wife to win a contract from a family-mad client.Or she doesn’t want the embarrassment of turning up at a wedding alone and he wants to discourage a woman who’s pursuing him.The premise doesn’t need to be original (as you can see!) The point is that the characters are reacting to the external circumstances that bring them together, and – crucially – will keep them together.The hero and heroine meeting and finding each other attractive clearly isn’t enough of a situation in itself.Something has to be at stake, preferably for both of them, and it’s got to be something that matters, so that neither can walk away from the situation when things get difficult – as they will.

CHARACTER

Now you’ve got your situation, it’s time to move onto the second part of the formula, CHARACTER, which is inserted into that situation.

Here I’m not thinking so much about the personalities of the hero and heroine, but about what makes them the kind of people they are and behave the way they do? Unlike the situation, which is about EXTERNAL issues that they have to deal with, character is about the INTERNAL issues that drive them.Specifically, both your protagonists need a goal, and ideally their goals are in direct conflict with each other.

The goal, of course, has to be an emotional one: wanting to be rich doesn’t work, but wanting – needing - security does.The key to investing your story with emotional tension is giving both your hero and heroine goals that reflect the kind of hopes, joys and fears that women around the world can relate to.

So, what kind of emotions drive us?I think fear is the biggest driver of them all: fear of loss, fear of rejection, commitment, insecurity, responsibility, embarrassment, failure, betrayal, risk … We can all relate to these kinds of fears, even if we don’t share them.

Our goals tend to be the upsides of fears: love, security, justice, success.So when we’re thinking what drives our hero or our heroine, it’s sometimes easiest to think about what they are most afraid of, because that will determine their goal.In other words, if our heroine is afraid of being hurt, she’ll strive for independence, if she’s afraid of rejection, her goal will be self-sufficiency, if she’s afraid of failure, she’ll be ambitious and her goal will be success.

OK, we’ve decided our heroine is afraid of rejection and her goal is to rely on herself.Why?Because she’s been hurt?(How? Who? When?)

Why is our hero afraid of commitment? Because he’s seen his parents’ marriage fail? Because he’s been through a divorce?

It’s not enough to say ‘oh, he/she is just like that’.You’ve got to show the reader why that goal/that fear is so important to them.So, Campbell in LMP is very competitive, and I had to explain that he was driven by the need to succeed and be the best .Why? Because he had a distant father who never praised his son, and nothing Campbell did was ever good enough for him.

If a heroine is driven by e.g. the need to protect a sister, you need to explain why she feels so responsible.In Outback Boss, City Bride, for instance, Meredith and her sister were sent to boarding school after the death of their mother, and Meredith has never forgotten being told to look after her little sister.She’s carried on being the sensible one, the steady one, long after they’ve both left school.Similarly, Alice in Barefoot Bride spent her childhood being dragged around the world by her parents; as a result, she feels a deep need to feel rooted and secure with a home of her own.

We’re not talking complex psychoanalysis here, but the reader does need to understand why the characters are the way they are.She needs to understand that it’s not just that they don’t feel like changing their mind, but that at some deep level they really don’t think that they can, because changing is a huge risk that will takes them way out of their comfort zones.

She needs to think ‘if that had happened to me, I would think like that too’.

Once you know your heroine’s goal and why that is so important to her, turn your attention to your hero.You need to go through the same process with him, but this time you have to give him a goal that brings him into direct conflict with your heroine.If she’s got a deep need for security, give him a fear of commitment.If she’s looking for love, make him someone who distrusts love and relies on logic instead.

Now you’ve got your characters and you’ve put them into a situation that forces them together so that it’s hard for them to resist the physical attraction between them.You’ve given them conflicting goals that make them believe that a relationship could never work and that’s pulling them apart.You’re well on your way to investing your story with real tension, but this isonly the beginning. It is not a complete story. You’ve got to get through ten chapters.Both hero and heroine are going to have to change in order to move forward. This is where your plot comes in.

PLOT

A misunderstanding about the nature of aplot in a romance is one of the most common mistakes I see when reading manuscripts.The change, the movement in the story, is emotional, not physical. When you structure a romantic novel you should be thinking of the plot not so much as moving characters from A to B, but as a series of situations that test their fears, and push them out of their comfort zones.

Here, I’m specifically talking about plotting a Harlequin/Mills & Boon romance.Obviously, if you’re writing a saga or a single title, you’ll have to think about plotting in a different way but as a principle for investing your story with emotional tension, I think this is still relevant.You just need to add another layer of plot.

So your plot isn’t about romantic scenes in romantic places.It evolves as the hero and heroine get to know each other, and they can only do that by talking to each other about the issues that divide them.If the misunderstanding between them can be resolved by a simple question (Who’s that woman you were with? Oh, your sister) then there’s no tension.But if the problem is out there and discussed: she has TOLD him that she’s in love with someone else, he has TOLD her that he doesn’t believe in love, then it’s not going to go away without someone changing.The heroine just assuming that he’ll never be interested in her, for instance, just makes her seem silly, because if we’ve done our job properly, it’ll be obvious to the reader that he is.So she needs a very good reason for thinking that, and the best possible one is if he’s told her outright, and he’s told her why.Both hero and heroine must believe that it would be impossible for a relationship between them to work, while the reader must understand why they think that while at the same time believing that they are absolutely right for each other in every way.

Plotting, then, is not about where they go and what they do. In Newlyweds of Convenience, my hero and heroine move to a ruined castle in the Highlands.They do a lot of cleaning.They go to Inverness for a night.They go back to the castle.It doesn’t sound very interesting, does it?I certainly wouldn’t pick up a book with a synopsis like that. But that’s not the plot.The plot is how Mallory’s feelings change.

At the start of the book, she is wretchedly unhappy, raw with the pain of being betrayed and abandoned by the man she has loved.Moving to Scotland takes Mallory out of her comfort zone but it’s her growing awareness of her husband that really changes things for her.

So the ‘plot’ in this book islargely conversations that teach her more about Torr and the kind of man he is, or test her new feelings for him.Every time Mallory and Torr seem to be growing close, I reminded them both of the reasons why they couldn’t just accept that was really happening.Yes, they go to Inverness, but it’s not the trip that’s important; what’s important is that it reminds Torr (and Mallory herself) that Mallory is a city girl and could never be at home in an isolated castle – or so they both believe.

Inverness is an external reminder of the conflict between them, and these kind of obstacles can be helpful if not used too obviously (e.g. phone ringing at critical point) but more critical to a plot are the internal conflicts that come from character.Mallory is starting to find Torr attractive.They’re married.They’re even sharing a bed, for God’s sake.Why doesn’t she just say how she feels?Because she believes he’s in love with another woman and that he doesn’t want messy emotions in their marriage.Why does she believe this?Because he’s told her that.Why does he tell her that?… These are the kind of why/why not questions you need to ask when you’re plotting.

In a romance - as in any relationship, in fact – it’s vital that the hero and heroine talk to each other.They don’t need to go anywhere or do anything – I believe Liz Fielding wrote a book when the hero and heroine spent almost the entire time trapped underground – but they MUST talk.And I don’t mean banal conversations about what to eat or where to go, but real exchanges of information.And with each other: ideally you want to keep the two of them alone, so keep dialogue with secondary characters to an absolute minimum and only include if it contributes directly to the problem.

Think of your ‘plot’ as a series of conversations: each time they get close, remind them why they shouldn’t.They may not always tell the truth: they probably won’t, because facing up to the truth of their feelings is difficult for both of them.It’s much easier to pretend, to themselves as well as to each other.It’s only when they stop pretending and recognise the truth about themselvesthat they can reach a resolution and I love you.

But as they talk, they get to know each other, perhaps have to challenge the assumptions they’ve made – and that pushes them together.And of course the physical attraction between them is incredibly powerful, too.It needs a big problem to stop that, so if they’re getting on too well, you’re going to have to ratchet up the pressure, or you’ll lose the tension.Remind them of the obstacles between them, make them talk about it, so there’s no question that it’s real.Don’t make it easy for them! Falling in love is what makes them change, and start to believe that maybe it could work; falling in love is what gives them the courage in the end to confront whatever it is inside themselves that’s been keeping them apart, and it’s your job as a romance writer to show this process.

Of course, many writers do this instinctively, but if mystory seems to lack the emotional tension it needs to keep the reader turning the pages, I find it helpful to go back and remind myself what the real problem between the characters is – and then I create a situation that will remind them about it.

To recap …

1.We’ve talked about situation, which is based on a hook and creates a set of external circumstances that force the hero and heroine together and make it impossible for either of them to simply walk away when the going gets touch.

3.And we’ve multiplied that push-pull process with our plot that keeps them alone together as much as possible so that both hero and heroine have to confront the issues that divide them and are reminded about those issues whenever the attraction between them looks like overcoming the obstacles.

… and that’s given our story the emotional tension it needs to make the reader keep turning the pages to find out how the hero and heroine will get to their happy ending.

All the material is shared with permission from Jessica Hart.

Here is my review of :

ORDINARY GIRL IN A TIARA from author Jessica Hart.

Caroline Cartwright, hurt by her fiancé leaving her for someone sexy and fun, felt herself to be too ordinary for the likes of an European prince.

Prince Philippe, dashing, jet-setting playboy is used to sophisticated and pampered princesses. When he hatches a plan with Caro’s friend Princess Charlotte, for Caro to masquerade as his girlfriend in order to thwart Lottie’s Grandma’s matchmaking, he knows Caro wouldn’t be able to play the part. But Caro would do anything for Lottie and she agreed to live the life of a princess for a few months.

Yet while pretending, Caro sees a different side to Philippe, a good, kind and caring man, who funds missions and flies aid to stricken areas and she becomes aware of the chemistry between them. The growth and progression of the love between Caro and Philippe is depicted in a natural flow which is emotionally satisfying.

She knows she has to return to her ordinary life, and Philippe becomes irritated when he sees her trawling the dating sites. Can he be jealous?

Philippe’s snide comment on every man’s profile Caro tells him about from the dating site is hilarious. And the emails depicted between Caro and her friend Lottie keeps the story very much in the present and is realistic.

This story is liberally spiced with humor, pathos and heartfelt emotion. I did feel emotional when Caro went to say goodbye to the Dowager. And I kept thinking how the author would bring these two characters together for their happily ever after.

You just can’t help but root for these two characters to get to their happy ending. I didn’t want the story to end just then. But who wants a good romance to end? And after finishing I sort of missed Caro and Philippe!

Written with all the warmth, tenderness and sensitivity that has become Jessica Hart’s hallmark, Ordinary Girl in a Tiara is the latest charming and mesmerizing romance from her. It’s every ordinary girl’s story and I highly recommend it!

A valuable contribution by Jessica Hart, basically a workshop via blog. Thanks so much to both Jessica and Nas.

Hey, Nas, can you reformat so the formula reads properly? Making the font in the formula smaller might do the trick. Then perhaps "Emotional Tension" will all fit on one line.

From what Jessica explains below the formula, the words "Emotional Tension" should be the right-side of the formula (to the right of the equals sign) and the divisor/bottom of the first term in the left side of the formula should be "Character(External)".

I started reading, and then copied the material..so I can paste it in Word and take a print out :) Needless to say it's fab!!!

As writers we have to hone our craft, first to be published..and then - to better ourselves with each book. And emotional tension is something that hooks the reader, gets us into the book, unable to put down. Makes us laugh and cry with the characters!

Excellent post! Many thanks to Jessica (for writing it) and Nas (for making it possible for us to access the info).It's certainly a fabulous reference. As for the "f" word? Well, there's a good reason you find so many of them in educational texts--they're easy to remember and (if you follow them correctly) they work!

This is great information for writing in any genre. There must be conflict and tension or the reader will say ho hum. We want to get inside the characters, we like a good story, we like suspense. Rather, I do.

Jessica and Nas, thanks so much for this piece. It's really got me thinking. I'm so looking forward to reading this latest book of Jessica's - it sounds superb and your review has me itching to get my hands on it, Nas.

Hi Jessica,Thanks for a wonderful workshop blog entry. It's interesting to me because I am giving a workshop on the Science of Writing Romance at the Melbourne Romance Writers Guild upcoming Retreat weekend. This blog entry really touches a few of the aspects of romance writing that I have incorporated into my workshop, so I will definitely give the members the link to this blog for reference.

Thanks, Nas for yet another wonderful guest blogger. Fantastic!Hugs from Down Under

Hi Nas and everyone who has posted - gosh, what a great response! I'm so pleased it's been useful. I've just been honing the workshop for a one-day course this Saturday, in fact. Emotional tension is such an important aspect of any romance that I think it's worth spending the whole day on it. We're going to create an outline story together ... or at least that's the plan! (Good luck with your workshop, Serena - hope it goes well.)

Thank you so much for the opportunity to be here, Nas. I'm delighted you liked Ordinary Girl in a Tiara - it was a book I really struggled with before I went to Australia last year so am very relieved! I've got some spare copies here, so if anyone who has posted here would like to read it too, send me your address at jessica@jessicahart.co.uk and I'll put you in a lucky dip!

Wow, a great post and so timely, just as I'm revising my historical romance. Er, one massive (possibly ignorant) question - if the hero and heroine readily admit their love for each other, but it's a number of outside forces keeping them up apart, does that not fit the romance genre?Do the two of them necessarily always *have* to deny their feelings?58 books! Sounds like a great career. And, yummy, all romances! That's a lot of characters to have walk into your head, how exciting!

Hi, Deniz. Hmmnn, interesting question. To me, the story of lovers kept apart by war, for instance, would be a story about the effect of war on people rather than a romance - but I suppose I'm really talking about category romance here (as in Harlequin) where there's a danger that a hero and heroine at the mercy of outside forces would seem a bit passive, reactors to events rather than active agents.

You don't always have to have both hero and heroine denying their feelings (at least to themselves) but if you want to ramp up the emotional tension, it does help. Because if they know they love each other, what's the problem emotionally? And it's the emotional problem that makes a romance, in my opinion anyway. Others might disagree!

Good luck with your historical. I'm writing a novel set partly in the 16th century myself, and it's a very different business from category romance!

It's a bit confusing about the chance to win one of your books, Jessica. I went to your website and you redirected me back here. I'd love a copy of your book if possible. My email is: den.covey@gmail.com

Jessica said this above..."..I've got some spare copies here, so if anyone who has posted here would like to read it too, send me your address at jessica@jessicahart.co.uk and I'll put you in a lucky dip!"

Jessica, your workshop was incredibly timely for me as I have to do revisions per the editor and need more emotional conflict. I struggled with this and then was forwarded a link to your post. Thanks so much!!

Hello again everyone. Sorry, I didn't realise the chat was still going on here! And yes, sorry for the confusion about the giveaway (doubly confusing as it got muddled up with the Paradise Nights offer!) But if you emailed me, a book is on its way to you! I staggered down to the post office on Monday to put a whole lot in the post - and have now cleared out my spare copy shelf, so many thanks to you all for getting in touch.

I'm so pleased so many of you have found this post useful. It's easy to get carried away with the writing and forget about structure - even after 58 books, I still have to stop sometimes and remind myself of how the romance works. Sometimes that just means a little tweak to make sure the tension is there, and sometimes it means going all the way back to the beginning and starting again!

Good luck to everyone, and may all your stories be taut with tension from now on!