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Good chapter. And as thedehydrator said already, nice to see Bulbasaur again.
Here comes some criticism about your fanfic: It would be nice if Max would do more on-screen training, since we haven't saw that much.

You know, I wanted to do it next chapter, but thanks for the critisizm, I would sure do that)
And you see, there was no time actually to train, they were just playing with them while sailing

Originally Posted by Ash&Pikachu-Fan

The last chapter was great! I remember the episode Max first met him! And this chapter was great! Yay for Peeko's return!
Still an awesome fanfic!

Wow! This was great! I liked that you had Peeko return, and that you had a reference to the games too. To be honest, I was expecting Peeko to return with a letter saying that the ship was finished, making them go through Rusturf Tunnel (which oddly enough isn't even in the anime).

Errrr... But yeah. I liked that you included a bulbasaur, is tge trainer going to be a rival?

Great Filler.But it's a little surprising that Brawly is still the Gym leader.I expected Shauna(The Battle Girl with the Meditite) to be the Gym Leader since she could have trained under him and surpassed him and became the Gym leader while maybe Brawly could have started Professional Surfing.But what's done is done.But I think you should change the plot a little from the anime and change the characters since two years time has passed and in two years time changes are bound to happen,like seen in B2/W2 when compared to the original games.

Great Filler.But it's a little surprising that Brawly is still the Gym leader.I expected Shauna(The Battle Girl with the Meditite) to be the Gym Leader since she could have trained under him and surpassed him and became the Gym leader while maybe Brawly could have started Professional Surfing.But what's done is done.But I think you should change the plot a little from the anime and change the characters since two years time has passed and in two years time changes are bound to happen,like seen in B2/W2 when compared to the original games.

Yeah, I thought about it much, but I don't want to change anything here as Brawly is young and takes pleasure from a job of a gym leader. You know, all Hoenn gym leaders are not old and two years won't change much)

Just a public warning to all reviewers; the fanfiction rules state that your rules actually have to say something useful and specific to the story.

In other words, reviews like 'Great filler' or 'Great Chapter, I enjoyed ___' do not abide by those rules, because you can say the same sort of thing to every other fic. Please spend a bit more time with your reviews; say what you liked and why you liked it for instance, and maybe what you didn't like as much and while. Throw in your thoughts about what happened (e.g. 'This part was quite exciting to read') or the characters ('This new character seems like a douche I think he's the villain') and make it more than a one-liner. That way the author gets some more feedback about the story as well and can improve.

A parody of the Pokemon Colosseum game, full of pastries and Miror B.
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Just a public warning to all reviewers; the fanfiction rules state that your rules actually have to say something useful and specific to the story.

In other words, reviews like 'Great filler' or 'Great Chapter, I enjoyed ___' do not abide by those rules, because you can say the same sort of thing to every other fic. Please spend a bit more time with your reviews; say what you liked and why you liked it for instance, and maybe what you didn't like as much and while. Throw in your thoughts about what happened (e.g. 'This part was quite exciting to read') or the characters ('This new character seems like a douche I think he's the villain') and make it more than a one-liner. That way the author gets some more feedback about the story as well and can improve.

Yeah, I think that some of my reviewers are just being lazy

So, guys, write a little bit more, I appreciate your comments, but at least some more feedback)

(Max, Forrest and Randy go to the tables at the PokeCenter and sit as they continue)

Max(curiously): “So, why did you go here?”

Randy: “Actually, I started my Journey in Kanto. I chose Bulbasaur, because I like it a lot and we are great buddies now! After
some time my family said that they are moving to the new region and I was thrilled and we came here.”

Forrest: “And where are your parents now?”

Randy: “In Sootopolis City.”

Max(shouts): “In Sootopolis City? Wow…”

Randy: “You scared me! Yes, so why are you surprised?”

Max: “Well, I go there now…”

Randy: “But why?”

Max: ““When I was traveling near Sootopolis, I met a Ralts. Actually, I heard its voice and ran towards it. I helped it because
it was sick. After we became close friends we wanted to come together, but I was not old enough to be a trainer and I promised to
come back for it…”

Randy: “So, I understand. By the way, do you want to enter the Hoenn League?”

Max: “I sure do! And I have a Rustboro City badge!” (shows him)

Randy: “Cool! Look at mine”(takes a badge case, opens it)

Max: “The Dewford badge and a…”(sees another one, which is shaped like three raindrops) “A Sootopolis Gym?”

Randy: “It is. It was difficult, but I managed to get through.”

Max: “But I remember that you need 5 Pokemon to battle. So, do you have 5 Pokemon?”

Randy: “Well, no, but the Gym leader agreed on 3 on 3 battle/”

(But the time the Nurse Joy says that the Pokemon are “as good as new” and Randy takes them and thanks Nurse Joy)

Max: “Do you want to train, Randy?”

Randy(thinks): “Well, yes, the practice would be good for me!”

Max: “Great! But let’s find some place to train in…”

(After a long search they quit the town and Randy is confused about where Max is going)

Randy: “Max, what place are you looking for?”

Max: “I want to find a place in the woods. It would be perfect for training my Pokemon.”

Randy: “Oh, ok…”

(After some searching they found a place in the woods near the river and waterfall)

Max: “Oh that suits me fine!”

Forrest(examining the place): “Yay, cool place!”

Randy: “So, how would you like to train?”

Max(touching his glasses): “By a Pokemon battle.”

(Randy smiles)

Randy(excited): “I am very thrilled. Okay, show me your Pokemon..”

Max: “Yeah, Forrest, can you be a judge?”

Forrest: “Sure!”

Randy: “Ok, Max. choose your Pokemon!”

Max(acts in a childish way): “No, you first.”

Randy: “Ok, prepare for this one…”(takes the Pokeball) “I choose you!”(didn’t say whom to make Max waiting even more time)

(As the Pokeball opened, a Pokemon with a brown shell appeared. But it was inside its shell)

Randy: “Oh, it acts like that sometimes…”(to it) “Come on, wake up! We want to battle!”

(as he says so, the light blue body comes out of the shell)

Randy: “Squirtle, like always…”(smiles)

Squirtle(turns around and scratches its head while smiling): “Squirtle…”

Randy(says with a kind voice): “Are you ready now?”

Squirtle(nods): “Squirtle!”(turns around and stays confidently)

Max: “Sure a unique Squirtle…”

Randy: “Well, not only that, but you’ll see later that it has a good moves as well…”

Max: “Ok.”(takes Pokedex)

Pokedex: “Squirtle. TheTiny Turtle Pokémon. Squirtle draws its long neck into its shell to launch incredible water attacks with
amazing range and accuracy. The blasts can be quite powerful.”

Max: “Okay, against it, I choose Treecko! Go!”

Treecko(comes out and smiles): “Treecko!”

Forrest: “Are you ready to begin?”

Both: “Sure!”

Forrest: “Ok, you may begin…”

Max: “Use Bullet Seed!”

Treecko: “Tree-cko!”(jumps and shoots them)

Randy: “Dive underwater, Squirtle!”

Squirtle: “Squirtle!”(jumps in the water)

(Bullet Seed hit water and lose their power)

Randy: “Use Water Gun!”

Squirtle: “Squirtle!”(jumps out water and blasts water out of its mouth)

Max: “Dodge with Quick Attack!”

Treecko: “Treecko!”(as it dodges)

Max: “Use Pound with a spin!”

Randy: “again in the water!”

(Squirtle dives again)

Max: “Use your Power and strike the water!”

Treecko: “Tree…”(hits water and Squirtle jumps out)

Squirtle: “Squirtle??”

Max: “Now use it again!”

Randy: “in the water again!”

Max: “Again?”

(as Treecko comes closer…)

Randy: “Now, use Ice Beam!”

Squirtle: “Squirtle!”(fires light blue beams at Treecko and hit it)

Treecko(falling): “Tree-ccko…”

Max(yells): “Treecko, stand up!”

Treecko(stands): “Treecko!”

???(comes out of water and cries): “Mudkiiiiip!!...”

(all are surprised as they see a hurt and tired Mudkip comes out of the river and cries)

Aww poor Mudkip :c is one of the trainers going to keep it? Overall great chapter (:
I really like Squirtle's cute personality & its Moveset, also your description of Bulbasaur vs Hariyama was very good.

Wow, I liked the way you described the battle against Hariyama, the battle against the Squirtle was good too!

Errrr. But yeah. I liked that you gave Squirtle a personality, but it seems like you are going to go with the "Ash treatment" which is getting all the starters of a region. And like the above poster said, I do think you should have given a description of what the area looked like, and the Mudkip thing just seems random and just to give an excuse to give Max a pokemon... But the anime does that all the time so Iguess it is okay.

Aww poor Mudkip :c is one of the trainers going to keep it? Overall great chapter (:
I really like Squirtle's cute personality & its Moveset, also your description of Bulbasaur vs Hariyama was very good.

You'll see the next Chapter if you didn't see the picture I made in the very beginning of my story
And thanks, I really tried to get Pokemon a personality

Originally Posted by ultimateblaziken11

Where did the water come from? I think you should have described the area around the pokemon center if you were going to have a lake near it.

Originally Posted by dirkac

And like the above poster said, I do think you should have given a description of what the area looked like, and the Mudkip thing just seems random and just to give an excuse to give Max a pokemon

Wow, guys. Didn't you really see that? (After some searching they found a place in the woods near the river and waterfall)

Originally Posted by OshaMijuWott

Yeah... the "Ash treatment" kinda bugs me, but it is your story Overall, nice battle description. What surprises me, however, is that he is heading to Sootopolis so early in his journey.

Well, Max has his own route)He is not Ash.

P.S.Don't worry about the Ash treatment. Neither Randy or Max would have all the starters. Decided.

Will Randy be a travelling companion,as you have already given him some personality and two good Kanto Pokemon.But if he's then all of them(i.e. Max,Forrest and Randy) will be males which wouldn't leave place for a female if you go the 'anime' way unless you are doing something like in AG when 3 males and 1 female were there.Also,there were some small spelling mistakes in the chapter like