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Review:

Liisarr says:I love the plot you've already begun to unfold in the Prologue! It should be an interesting read!

You've already set up the characters well; Hermione seems in character in the first half especially, but I can see her handling the situation with Ron slightly better and perhaps with more tact? After all, you did say how much she had matured so maybe you should reflect that in the way she deals with Ron.

Something that did niggle me, though, was that even though the majority of students were in lessons were there no other sixth or seventh years around to over-hear their conversation?

I can't see Harry being so blunt about revealing Ron's secret, either. Maybe if he said it exasperatedly then it would seem like he had been trying to tell her over a larger period of time so he just spat it out in the end.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I think Im going to go back and edit that section because Im really not that happy with it either. As for over hearing, thats definitely something to consider in the edit. Thanks so much for reviewing again!!!