Its the fifth part in a five part series (first four are as of now, instrumental GP Tabs and ideas) about the comic book "Shi". Written by William Tucci, and the main character is named Anna Ishikawa, and throughout this story her goal is to seek revenge on a man who murdered her father and brother, under the guise of the killer "Shi" (japaneese translation, "Shi" means Death). The title, "The Ship In The Storm", is a reference to Anna as "The Ship", and her adversary, Arashiyama, as the storm (Arashi, his name, literally means "Storm")

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In the beginning, the "Kyoto Sohei" are her ancestors, of which she is the last.

Overall, the concept reminds me very much of Kill Bill, the sort of revenge by samurai aspect.

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Has hardened my heartAnd strengthened my soul

Like the use of alliteration on these two lines, makes them stand out from the rest.

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The storm has won the battleBut the ship takes the war

Also feel this line is good, nice to end on, good contrast.

Indeed not as good as your others though, I'd probably say (although this is my opinion) that its easier to write your own material straight out than to base ideas off the work of others as it makes it that little bit harder, good job though, I like all the references to ships and storms etc, how you've taken it to another level of depth (pun unintentional ).

Yeah i dont like it as much as my other two, all 5 parts were originally just instrumental, a few minutes long, for some reason, i gave the fifth one lyrics.I much prefer to instrumental aspects of the story i came up with.

For some reason, even though its less than a minute i think, i like this alot, its how im writing most of this story.