I was kinda stoked to read this 'cause a book of people's life stories is a great idea. I'm disappointed in the final product, though. It's not bad, per se, it's just kind of bland. I've seen "item that manipulates flow of time" literally everywhere.

It's not like the interview was horribly cliched or anything, how you structured it was interesting, but I'm just stuck feeling so much more could have been done with this.

Also, your tone needs a lot of work, but don't worry about that. Tone is a skill: it can be learned. Good SCPs, though, are more art than science.

it's purely a matter of taste. for me, rapid aging has been done to death, even if the item is something as cool as this book. it really is up to you if you want to change this or if you feel that the time effects are just fine right now. Tidy up the tone and write this how you see fit, I can guarantee you after some tone work this wouldn't bomb because the base idea is really cool. you've got something that's attention-grabbing, with a secondary effect that's totally changeable. you got high quality ingredients, now cook something amazing

Er….you seem to have read the wrong tab, my friend. The one you commented on was my first draft of a rather meh idea, mainly to get a feel for how this style of writing works. I'm looking for critiques on "The Book of Faces".

Btw, is there a way to link directly to a certain tab so that the same error is not made in future posts?

I actually think this is a good idea, I personally don't think you need to change it, but bbaztek might have a point. I think you should have more people check on this, I look forward to your final draft.

Tell them about it, send messages to people like Scantron, Djoric, Pooryoric, and DrBerggren asking them to take a quick look at your idea; they are some of the site's most experienced writers and could really help

Also, for the record, you can ask any staff member (check this guide, "Senior Staff" tab) to look over a draft by sending them a wikidot PM or messaging them on the chat (unless they're not active on the IRC). There's a reason staff members are staff members. :3

Brief Summary

A book that tells the entire life of someone even the future.

Overall Thoughts

It's not very interesting at the core here, which I'm not exactly sure can be fixed.

Special Containment Procedures

Attempts of personnel to read unauthorized pages are to be terminated on the spot, and any persons trying to access a page in the book with their name as that page's title, unless authorized for testing purposes by experimental supervisor, Dr. ████, will likewise be terminated.

This is far too extreme. Why can't we just detain them?

Description

The title page reads simply, "Faces".

quietly whispers, "Facebook…" into the wind

… a picture of the captioned person.

This read awkwardly.

The individual pictured on the page and who is described by the page will be hereafter referred to as SCP-XXXX-1.

This is overly complicated and could be simplified down into, "This person will hereafter be referred to as SCP-XXXX-1."

A lot of this writing feels reeeaaally stilted, but given that I myself have that exact same problem, I dunno how to tell you to fix it.

As the page is read, it is common for SCP-XXXX-1 to report headache and extreme [REDACTED].

There's no real reason for this redaction.

readers have described feeling compelled to continue reading aloud, and report an inability to resist the impulse

Compulsions in articles typically feel like lame tacked on danger, and this is no exception.

Physical contact with the book results in a severe burning sensation that travels from the point of contact and causes [REDACTED].

Again, not sure if this redaction is necessary.

Class D surgeons

Class D's are almost certainly not surgeons.

Addenda

Your first addendum doesn't add anything to the article that hasn't been stated in the description.

He experienced a severe seizure and [DATA EXPUNGED]. After 45 hours of screaming, with the last 30 involving bleeding from [DATA EXPUNGED],

SCP-XXXX-1 is able to recall any details of their life, even minute details not often recorded by the human mind

Okay, this is entirely my fault for not explaining clearly; sorry for that. The brain can be capable of consolidating and maintaining detailed memories with a surprising degree of accuracy. But usually, consolidated memories get… "corrupted," or changed over time, which makes them inaccurate in the long run. So what you have is a bit of a wording problem (thanks to me). Maybe try "SCP-XXXX-1 is able to recall any (biographical? sensory?) details of his or her life with a degree of precision typical of eidetic memory," or something. Just remember that people with "photographic memory" can usually only recall sensory information, like images. Again, sorry for giving you bad advice.

But I have to say, I like this second draft a lot better. Still needs some work, but it's better. I especially like the test that you added. Keep up the good work.

This has been edited again, please check it out when you get a chance. Also, I know the experiment needs some tweaking, but I'm not sure what, exactly, is wrong with it. I feel that something isn't right, but I can't pinpoint it.