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This poem's quite nice, and you were able to get the basic idea across, which is great! The only thing I could find was that in the second stanza, the rhythm was off - it didn't flow right. So maybe you could rewrite/reword it, and then read it aloud to see if the rhythm is better. Other than that, this poem's well written and quite enjoyable to read :)

hey, i agree, the poem does get its message across to the reader. Thats an awesome thing. Some poems can get to crazy and out of topic. But, again, the rhythm wasn't clear. It switched from stanza to stanza so the poem was a choppy to read. But you rhymes were on spot!