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After accidentally intercepting a message from Celestia to Twilight, Spike makes a contract with an amulet and becomes a magical girl. No one told him the skirts were so short, or the tentacle monsters so... tentacley. ·alexmagnet

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When Spike is called away to Canterlot on Royal Business, he expects to have to do something for Princess Celestia. Instead, he winds up being interviewed by Princess Luna and fed a lot of gems. Life can be tough for a young Dragon! ·Jordan179

Twilight Sparkle takes a moment from her studies at the School for Gifted Unicorns to get a late lunch. Finding herself in a strange part of the school grounds, an apple tree and its odd fruit tempts her appetite.

It was a pretty good "original flavor" kind of story. I found the prose a bit wordy at first, and I kinda reacted to "thick" being used to describe two different things so close to another in the beginning, but it got better later.

It was very refreshing to read your story. It was so simple, yet so enjoyable. With no inevitable disasters lurking every corner, with no overcomplicated feelings, with no impossible ideas, even without humans. Just a simple day from Twilight's life. One would think writing a story like that is easier than any of the kind mentioned before. But I would say it's the other way around. So once again - congrats for writing such a simple story that was such a pleasure to read.

I can't believe I put off reading this for so long. I'm ashamed of myself, and you know why?

This was awesome, that's why.

Twilight and the other characters acted perfectly, and everything in the story - from the magical tree, to the effects of its fruit, to the comedy - was great. Such an absolute pleasure to read, and so well-written. Excellent idea, excellent execution.

Not the most exciting story, but extremely well written. The constant use of imagery gives the story a nice flowing narration along with constant mental images that keep the reader thinking and visualizing. BTW did you use an editor for this piece because I'm going to be in need of one hopefully very soon, and this short story is one of better composed writings I've read so far, along with Diary of Morning and Dusk. Very good job, good writing, good flow and speech arrangement. I hope to see much more from you.

>>449862449862 I agree. Celestia very rarely laughs at Twilight, and in this instance since Twilight seems to be rather concerned about it it feels rather mean. Regardless, it was decently funny. Nothing I haven't seen before, but decent.