So I have a new draft, check it out at my sandbox page. Please be as harsh as you want and rip this to pieces. I think that the idea behind it was conveyed pretty well without the Foundation somehow knowing all the facts without explanation.

The first thing that really sticks out to me is this sentence in the containment procedures.

The Foundation is to keep a maintained field near Reliquary Sector-██.

Aside from me having to add the period myself, the sentence just doesn't seem to make sense. A field of what? Some kind of force field? A magnetic field? A baseball field? I also kind of feel that begining the sentence with "The Foundation is" seems a little unnesasary. Most people working for the Foundation would be able to tel that something in containment procedures is to be done by the Foundation.

On with the description. The very first sentence gives away precisely what the object is to most readers even passingly familiar with Christianity. It's the silver coins Judas Iscariot recieved in payment for betraying Jesus. If you were trying to be subtle, you failed. What's more, the precise criteria for being effected by the SCP is vague.

Most who come into contact with have no ill effects. However, those who have recently betrayed a cause that they spent the majority of their lives on, will suffer from SCP-####'s adverse effects.

What counts as spending the majority of your life on a cause? What counts as a cause? If I betray my Dungeons and Dragons party after playing with them for 3 years, does that count?

When a person matches the criteria detailed above, the electromagnetism of all objects within twenty meters will rise by 500%.

You never mentioned this again or explained what it has to do with anything.

At first, subjects will feel regret over the cause they betrayed and then reject all earthly pleasures, such as money, power, fame, etc.

'Earthly pleasures' is WAY off tone.

It will have a large wound in the midsection, large enough for organs to spill out.

Evisceration. The word you are looking for is evisceration.

There are slight variations between the subject's original corpse and the new one, often scars or tattoos where the subject didn't have them before.

That's actually slightly interesting. Expand on that more.

The subject who came into contact with SCP-#### was not allowed to self-terminate. He became increasingly violent, and was terminated by a guard, whom the subject attacked. This has resulted in SCP-####-1 instances appearing in fields with no signs of ceasing for the past 1█ years.

That also deserves some more detail and explanation.

Over all, didn't impress me much. It's the coins Judas was payed with, and they make people who betrayed others feel guilt. What's so interesting about that?

Okay, how's it look now? I changed it up a little per PaladinFoster's suggestions. Please let me know what you think, I tried to patch up the holes. Feel free to be brutal with it, I see it like a muscle, the more it's torn, the stronger it becomes!

e: referencing the top draft. If you see a horizontal line, stop there.