Nice little story; I think you could have gone a bit further into Dominique's personality but that's just me liking very strong characterization!

Overall, I have to say it was a bit fast-paced; but still very well written and I didn't spot any grammar mistakes so kudos!

Akussa

Author's Response: Hi :)
Thanks :) Yeah, I usually like strong characterisation too, which is what I've done in other stories, however I wanted to make this one different from my usual writing style :D
Ok, thank you! :D
~NGHL XXX