Hello,
very good story. Kept me reading the whole way. Just one question was that based on my story about a group of vampires, if it was that is kool, in fact I feel honored (if it is, i mean it just seemed like it). Anyways I was also wandering if i may use this story on my website, i will put your copywrite and put your name if it is e-mail me thanks.

Wow, that was really good. I am also really bad at typing reviews, so I'm just going to say well done in the gripping way that you write. However, something has happened to the layout of your story, quite a lot of the lines have double spacing.