Anyone who has read Stephenie Meyer's The Host would realize "Uncle Jeb" was based off of a character in her story. I like the story line, but, to me, it's impossible to ignore the way this is somewhat based off of The Host.

I caught the names Sweeny and Lovett in this chapter (chapter 16) ;P I'm pretty sure it isn't a coincidence that they have the same names as Sweeney Todd and Mrs. Lovett from Sweeney Todd: Demon Barber of Fleet Street 3 what a great movie .w. and what a great story you have here!

This is very good for being your first story, so I applaud you at that. This is actually my first review for fictionpress, so I'm proud of that also. I've had the account for awhile, I just haven't used it. I have other websites I'm on, as well. (If you are a fanfictioner, I have the same username).

Anyways, this story seems like it has potential! I will definitely continue to read it!