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Very trashy punk style, a good composition, i like. I agree with Jackinbox fix the arm, it contrasts too much with the other elements in the piece. It looks like you've used a feathered stroke for the arm outline, maybe just take away the stroke and leave it as a dark area of colour.
The texture in the middle is nice, looks like gouache mud.

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But composiitionally maybe you could try: (this is only my opinion so ignore me if you think I am talking out of ass - most do round ere anyway!)

1. The arm deffo needs sorting - revert back to how it was before you gave it the treatment.

2. Use that star brush too your advantage, to give it more depth. (ie play with neg space, sizes and densities.)

3. I do like the type loads, I appreciate the way it is kinda raw, you could maybe position each word so they play of each other and the stars with a little more gel, but you only know that when you have played with the stars, but I kinda like it raw like that...

(...it kinda reminds me of a lipstick message on my car window once saying - your dumped! never liked her much anyway!!)

4. Why is the dragon fly there? Either lose it of use it wisely to aid the composition.

5. Lose the paint effect/scan in the middle and compensate with the stars.

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this is indeed a professional forum, but she's 14 and has to start somewhere.

why not learn from people already successful in the field she intends to pursue?

I agree, though it's a professional oriented forum, I think it's great to have the youngsters come here to learn. Not all of us though know the ages of peeps here so I hope they can also learn to have a thick skin and take the nice and the not so nice constructive critism.

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hey, no harm no foul! I think everybody's doing a great job both giving and receiving constructive criticism on these boards... I was only pointing out that we've got members of all ages and experience levels here.

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this is indeed a professional forum, but she's 14 and has to start somewhere.

why not learn from people already successful in the field she intends to pursue?

fair enough... I guess I started somewhere, too

I remember thinking having every single photoshop filter and plug-in would help me make AMAZING designs. ahh, those were the days... I remember making a website about 5 years ago, and I had HUGE rollovers for navigation, and everytime you rolled over, it would have big fire flames all in different colors with a drop shadow and bevels. Wow, I saw that recently and was just embarrassed for myself.

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oh yeah forgot to say something about the piece.. mmm the background's fine, but I don't like all the effects on the actual girls. Maybe if you just took the real picture and tinted it a different color instead of adding glows and everything to their different body parts