Cradle

You don't cradle me like you used to.
Ever since your arms became my straightjacket,
you haven't let go.
But you don't cradle me like you used to.
I guess you're right.
There's no closure in open arms.
No solace in goodbye.
And when your eyes close
I'll still see the tears streaming down your face.
You can't hide them.
Can't hide behind them.
Answers, like friends,
are never there when you need them most.
"Who was there when you needed hope?"
"Who was there when I needed you here?"
But you wo'nt cradle me like you used to,
because you can't.
When did broken mean souls can't be fixed?
ever since your words became daggers
held close to my throat.
Ever since your light became darkness
since rightous became unholy
since birth we're unworthy,
wordly,
hold me.
But you won't cradle me like you used to.
I won't let you.

Blind goodbyes.
There's no closure
when eyes are closed.
And you don't see me,
and you won't see me,
again...

oh word....this was deep K loye.....really dug the set up and the flow of this one...the way you went off on the cradle concept....and the power of words...arguements....then thought of closure in goodbyes....all of it was well written

word, i feel you on this, very sad....kinda makes me want to be held.....butchea the verse was maturely written and well worded, very nice, kind of slow progressing, but in depth interesting none-the-less

hmmmm.....this is a good piece, but is still a little rough. for example, the use of the eyes closing......its been done many times before, and i dont think that the usage in your piece brought anything new, no new perspective....so i think it can be bolstered up with a little more thought and rewriting........but the overall feel is there, with superb lines such as

You can't hide them.
Can't hide behind them.
Answers, like friends,
are never there when you need them most.

that message displays more emotion than any blunt writing about crying eyes, frankly because its all been done before....those lines stand out, they have a deeper meaning....they arent the norm

There's no closure
when eyes are closed.this makes me think of some things. Like when you goin through it, and others will not even look at the situation to see where you're coming from but will quickly say, man just let it go, forgive but don't forget. Nah, its not that easy. You wanna get to the bottom of things, not just for your benefit because to get that closure you gotta scrape every corner of the problem. If you can't find a resolution at least try to find some sort of understanding. <--that right there, is my prob. I don't, won't feel comfortable with just having some sort of understanding. Dangit I want to understand it completely. Sooner though you just feel as if its a lost cause, and you put it off, without ever receiving that closure. It goes on when it shouldn't. Imagine how much weight could be lifted from your mind. But anyway-where you say "I won't let you" means to me you've grown from that last time, and you've gained a better insight as to why things have happened and have a will to carry your own self through things, but we all need someone. Dang this was nice, one of the better ones I read here today.

There's no closure
when eyes are closed.this makes me think of some things. Like when you goin through it, and others will not even look at the situation to see where you're coming from but will quickly say, man just let it go, forgive but don't forget. Nah, its not that easy. You wanna get to the bottom of things, not just for your benefit because to get that closure you gotta scrape every corner of the problem. If you can't find a resolution at least try to find some sort of understanding. <--that right there, is my prob. I don't, won't feel comfortable with just having some sort of understanding. Dangit I want to understand it completely. Sooner though you just feel as if its a lost cause, and you put it off, without ever receiving that closure. It goes on when it shouldn't. Imagine how much weight could be lifted from your mind. But anyway-where you say "I won't let you" means to me you've grown from that last time, and you've gained a better insight as to why things have happened and have a will to carry your own self through things, but we all need someone. Dang this was nice, one of the better ones I read here today.

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i ll come back and read i t later more cuz i am in class so i cant give it my complete attention peace good write