Burning Embers

Below is the poem entitled Burning Embers which was written by poet
Andrea
Dietrich. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

Burning Embers

Always we’d break up. We’d get back together,
passion-thirsting in hot summer’s weather.
We’d quench our desires from love’s brimming cup.
We’d get back together; always we’d break up.
Not long would it last, and around the fall,
you would disappear. Then would come the pall
smothering my joy, summer gone so fast.
And around the fall, not long would it last!
No matter where you went, I still harbored hope
that you would return. That was how I’d cope.
Through fall’s chill and bitter disappointment
I still harbored hope no matter where you went.
A fire still lingered there, deep inside my soul,
and over it, my heart had no control.
One thought of you, I’d feel it start to flare
deep inside my soul! A fire still lingered there.
A new year would come in gloomy autumn’s wake.
A vow to never take you back I’d make!
But after winter came the spring, you, and sun!
In autumn’s gloomy wake, a new year would come.
Oh, those burning embers - when you would return,
for my resolve would melt; by June, I’d burn!
How quickly I’d forget my sad Novembers
when you would return. Oh, those burning embers!
By Andrea Dietrich, another swap quatrain written 2/15/13
for the Burning Embers Contest of Gail Angel Doyle

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I really like how your poetry never feels centered around rhyming words, they never feel forced purely for the sake of it. And you can tell because of the way you continue the sentence onto the next line. You took me through the months and seasons with ease, all leading up to that extremely passionate last stanza. Just beautiful!

Oh, those burning embers indeed!...Gotta study this swap thing you got here...congrats my friend and I was absolutely floored that you took the time to go over my early poems!... Nice to have an outside and expert opinion...

This is another stunning write of yours my dear Andrea! I love it and the form. I never tried this form yet but I think it's more difficult/complicated than quintain. Am I right? You're really very creative! This is again a winner for me. Thank you so much for sharing and good luck always! love/hugs, Leonora

Yo Babe!! This is what it's about--don't know about others, but it takes me back to those somewhat disconnected yet----I remember a crush I had on a gal named Candy Carter, and like you it was a youthful summer love----the stories I could tell you----but then---I'm not sure because your imagination invents---such perfectly wonderful thoughts--bravo!