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Well, I'm the new guy so this is my first article. Tell me what you think and keep in mind that I wrote it the same day I loged in, and nobody cares if that isn't a good excuse.--A guy with a pipe 20:28, 7 February 2009 (UTC)

Meh, I am going to make this very brief and to the point, because there are some issues that you REALLY have to take care of before I go into detail about all of these scores. After you fix a few of these things that I am going to say, I suggest you fix them and then come back and put it in for a second review. Keep in mind, these tips are mostly univeral for uncyclopedia, and should be followed. I will gladly tell my own opinion in a second review if you so wish to hear them. For humor, the main problem is that you are using too many injokes. All your pictures have to do with A Splode for example. Get rid of all kitten-huffing, Chuck Norris punching, and grue references. These are not only not funny, but very stupid. I strongly suggest reading HTBFANJS first. I also suggest you read some featured articles to get a good feel of what a "good" article is on this site.

Concept:

3

This potentially could be good, I think. The way you take it though is very weak. All you do is make references to in jokes the whole time. Try coming up with a creative idea and work with that. Find a direction to make your article flow, and soon you will have a quality article. In fact, the way you have it now, very little even relates to the topic. It is just random rambling about injokes one after the other.

Prose and formatting:

5

This is also a bit of a mess. First of all, this entire article is list based, and it is very messy and random. Lists are often a poor way to guide an article because often times they are very stupid. Second, there are many misspellings and a simple spellcheck will fix that for you. Finally, flesh out your article. This means add more text to make it neater and easier to read.

Images:

2

Images are very weak and the captions are even weaker. They are the same exact thing and don't offer any humorous value. Change them out with something a bit more original or add a better caption. Finally, I suggest getting rid of the template at the top, because that just makes everything look messy from the beginning.

Miscellaneous:

3

Averaged

Final Score:

16

Sorry for the briefness of this, but I feel it would be pointless to go into great detail about an article that has very basic problems. Remember, these tips are not just my opinion, but the way this site runs. Read a few good articles before you write another one or decide to fix this one up. I will gladly give you a full scale reveiw once you fix these major issues. If you have any comments or questions feel free to ask on my talk page. Good luck!