Bulk Biceps has his eye on Fluttershy. Too bad Rarity decides to protect the timid mare with all of the weapons at her disposal. His night might not go so well, especially if Rarity has anything to say about it!

A year before moving to Ponyville, before making friends... a certain rainbow-maned pegasus crashed through Twilight's window, and into her life. Left with bruises, and a case of amnesia, Twilight soon finds herself looking after the mare.

Moondancer moves to Ponyville after her house is damaged by plunder vines to stay with Lyra Heartstrings, an old school friend. But when she runs into the newly-crowned Princess of Friendship, she finds that her feelings aren't quite what they seem.

Moon Dancer has been awarded a prestigious grant to study the Everfree Forest and its history, and so she's moving to Ponyville. In the midst of settling in and making new friends, she meets and becomes completely enchanted by a shy, animal-loving pegasus.

But as these two nervous little weirdos start an adorable, awkward relationship, it becomes clear that not everyone is happy about this turn of events.

Awww... That was so nice. Despite a couple of typos and a few non-interrogative sentences ending in question marks, I had a great time reading this. Keep up the good work, you have me for the long haul.

That’s a ship I never considered before...but I love it! I’m gonna start track this one from now on.

By the way, I’m pretty sure Moondancer’s name is spelled as one word, not too. I don’t know if that was a conscious choice or not, but when I read ‘Moon Dancer’ instead of ‘Moondancer’, I find it a bit jarring.

y'know I can't really feel at ease because I know that at any point in the near future Rainbow Dash is gonna do something out of jealousy to screw everything up and only break her relationship with Fluttershy rather than what she thinks will make it better

8717901Preeeeeetty sure Rainbow already has screwed everything up. Last chapter, she told her feelings about Moondancer to Discord, and informed him about the date that was supposed to happen in this chapter. And now, somehow, there’s been a miscommunication and Fluttershy missed the date because she thought it was tomorrow night. I don’t think those events are unrelated.

Rainbow Dash blinked, then shook her head back and forth rapidly. "Oh. Uh. Hey, girls." She looked around, realizing where she was for the first time. "Dang it, I was right in the middle of breakfast. Can't everypony just deal with Fluttershy being gay, already? I can't really turn this off." Grumbling to herself, she flew back out the window.

“Come now, everything has layers of nuance,” Rarity insisted. “Why, I still think Tree Hugger liked her, but Fluttershy was adamant… oh, here they come.” She slyly winked to Twilight and Pinkie. “Let’s talk about it later.”

It is nice, but for some reason I'm suprised that they figured it out so fast.

I thought you two would be friends, but I never let myself DREAM you would like each other that much! That's so exciting!"

Not sure if she is lying there or not, but that is another thing, I often thing why don't the characters also assume that something happens just to be friendly to each other and doesn't exactly has to have that deep meaning to it. I guess in other stories I get annoyed that they assume things to fast, which could also be wrong.

"Noooo! I mean, kinda? Parties are complicated, you can't ever predict exactly how they'll go. But I thought maybe! Tell me all about it!" She led Fluttershy away, ignoring them all.

Okay I dislike it if Pinkie was actually doing the matchmaker thing here.

Minuette burst out into laughter. She noticed nopony else was laughing and she stopped. "Oh," she said, "You were serious. No."

she sounds like she is the type that gives Stallions what they want sooner than it would be good sometimes.

"Fluttershy's ex is a very nice pony. Your Ponyville friends are all great. Even Rainbow Dash, I bet."

Not sure if it is because she is drunk, but she is totally ignoring the ex thing.

I'm not hating Rainbow here, I'm just really intressted in her possible reasons to act like that.

I'm more feeling a bit uuuuhmmmm sorry? for her there, either she is in love herself and can't figure that one out, maybe she dislikes Fillyfoolers but is trying not to do that (which wasn't a problem before since Moondancer is Fluttershys first real special somepony) or uuuuhhhhmmm she is really just lonely suddenly and doesn't wants to share her friend or something like that?

When J Carp did an internet search for phrases that have "yellow" in them to look for chapter titles, he was horrified by how many of them seemed innocuous but actually turned out to have egregiously racist alternate meanings. So, he certainly hopes he isn't.

I liked the chapter, I just hope it is not justz a plan from Rainbow Dash but even if it was mean, some kind of honest mistake because she doesn't realize her feelings yet, if it has to be love instead of simply being jealous. It could be simoly jealously instead of what probably counts as a chliche (her being in love with Flutters too).

"Twilight!" she shouted. "Rainbow Dash talked Discord into messing with time to sabotage my date with Fluttershy so I would break up with her, but it didn't work! Fluttershy has a plan! I need your help and also coffee!" She blinked and looked around. "Um. Hi, everypony. Why is Pinkie dressed like Coltlumbo?"

Not sure if I like it, that they plan to make some sort of weird lesson shit out of it again.

I thought it was an interesting choice that a story about a relationship had so few scenes with the couple themselves. I’m finding that my favorite romances are the ones that focus not just on the couple, but also on the relationship’s effects on everypony around the couple. But yours took it far enough, I think you have more scenes about the effects than about the couple themselves (though I could just be misremembering). Considering the ultimate cause of Rainbow’s behavior, that approach makes a lot of sense in retrospect.

Also, everything would have been so much simpler if they all just used Troll Romance. Fluttershy and Moon Dancer are matesprits, while Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash are moirails. There, problems solved. :P

Yeah, I noticed this myself about halfway through writing the thing! I think it's because how I look at the show itself: everything's ultimately about friendship between women, passing along the message that girls should support one another. So, I had the idea of writing the story because I thought of the ship and they were so damn cute together, but then I realized I was way more interested in how the friend group reacts to the sudden presence of romance and queerness. (this story was more about the former; the sequel I'm planning has more to do with the latter.)

Anyway, thanks so much for your encouragement and positive comments as I was posting!