very powerful. Truly love the conversational style and especially in the first 8 lines. The summer of 2004 line seems to take itself a bit too seriously. The year isn't at all important to the poem, is it? Also- I'd offer that you extract the suicide attempt in line 11. All too many of those in poems, you know. The punching the tree, pretending it was the face of himself - now, that says it all, really, and is vastly more interesting.
I'm not sure "so there you have it" does the poem justice for an ending, though I do enjoy the way the tone comes around full circle.
Respectfully, till — tillmorgan

powerful read, i think i agree with varun with the line breaks, maybe not particularly in that order or read but some sort of variation that preserves the shock of the situation or even amplifies it through discrete enjambment — unknown

All lower case? Hmm who else does that? Hey! None of the words rhyme and it's too stark. But it has words so I'll give you a 3. Have a nice day :-).... Gotcha Ha Ha — BxPR

So it's Aziel, punknown, raviloiski whatever and jjjjhyde obviously a reference to Moe's holy gawokamoly war. You're slipping, you need to stay away from the Play Dough! But have a nice day anyway :-) LOL — BxPR