k11chi wrote:The way you write those scene transitions in there makes me think of visual novels.

lolOriginally I marked scene transitions with this:************However, whenever I copied and pasted it all onto the site and then posted the story, those symbols did not show up and thus it was just this huge wall of text with no transitions so I panicked and just substituted in a bunch of Scene Transitions. Now I know that if I write it up on-site over a gradual period of time instead of writing offsite and then c/ping it then the asterisks won't be deleted in the posted story, but it's way too late now.

Spoiler:

Cherry Blossoms raining downJust like snow mingled with bloodThe fallout from our terrible choicesFrom the heavens that have rejected us