The first, third and fifth blocks of material are identical, but your translation of each of these blocks is different. Line 2 of these blocks does not make sense in English.

"Evening-dawn" - do you mean sunset?
"will vanish" & "will gone" ("will gone" makes no sense) - is this something like, "will fade" ?
In block 5, line 3: you forgot the "time ago" in the phrase "long, long time ago"
In block 2, line 2: "there're" - this is not a place to use a contraction. It should be written out, "there are"
In block 4, line 1: "yeards" is not a word.