Very nicely written, you have an excellent talent for balancing loving families with the romance between the parents.

As with Never Gone I I'm going to remind you to watch your adjectives. Try to put a little more flavvour in your descrpitions other than words like screamed, evilly and angrily. Try to use other words roared, yelled, darkly, hissed etc.

I noticed in one chapter you used the word tremor numerous times. Try to avoid falling into the traps pf using one word continuously. A site called (remove the brackets) has a section for the thesaurus which could help immensely.

As I said with my last review (and I hope you don't misunderstand when I'm making this suggestion), I hope you will consider rewriting these amazing stories once your writing style has changed.

Thanks for Your story! You are great... love's describer. /sorry for my weak English/. Anakin and Padme are wonderful.

But - I was thinking - when...e... in KGR will apear someone, which will be like old Jedi? He/she will be want serve the Republic, devote him/herself for duty, for every living being. In the bunch of married or engaged Knights he/she will be "stupid", "funny" and very alone.

do you have a grudge against palo. you really like making him evil. i mean in forever destined you make him a rapist, and now hes a creepy psychopath obsessed with padme. i mean you always make it interesting. all im saying is try a different guy from padmes past like ian. or make one up.