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Discord's Legend

On fimfiction. I quite like it (well, duh) but it seems a kitchen sink at the moment. Rest assured, the mysteries will continue to pile up!EDIT: In case it isn't clear, this is a fanfic I wrote. :PI'm not entirely sure why Soniku was confused, possibly because it was a link instead of copy/pasted.

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Your story's pretty good!I like where things are going with Derpy's side of the story. However, a few parts seemed rushed and left me feeling confused. For example, I don't understand why Twilight randomly ran away from Doctor Whooves, and Doctor Whooves started chasing her. Otherwise it's pretty good.

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Yup. Anyone (had to do that, or my grammar is terrible) read it yet? It has everything I like! If someone comments on it (here or on fimfiction), they get a Derpy scene (or whatever character they like ).

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jukyter wrote:

Yup. Anyone (had to do that, or my grammar is terrible) read it yet? It has everything I like! If someone comments on it (here or on fimfiction), they get a Derpy scene (or whatever character they like ).

I already posted my feedback on this thread.I can't wait for the Derpy scene!I want you to make the part where Derpy gets Dinky back so emotional that it causes ME to shed tears of joy. I warn you though, it's hard to make me cry.

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Sausagefanclub wrote:

jukyter wrote:

Yup. Anyone (had to do that, or my grammar is terrible) read it yet? It has everything I like! If someone comments on it (here or on fimfiction), they get a Derpy scene (or whatever character they like ).

I already posted my feedback on this thread.I can't wait for the Derpy scene!I want you to make the part where Derpy gets Dinky back so emotional that it causes ME to shed tears of joy. I warn you though, it's hard to make me cry.

Ooh, toughie!I didn't notice your post in all of Soniku's posts. The reason some parts are a bit rushed is because I was trying to get it into 1000 words (minimum limit) and my chapters aren't normally too long. ._.I really shouldn't've rushed it... ._.Oh, and I started the next chapter-Derpy's subplot unravels a bit more!