Is this a good apraoch for the PS?

Please help! Although I can usually write pretty well, technically, I don't think that I am an interesting writer. Whould the following PS be interesting to admissions (or anyone)? Any comments or suggestions will be very helpful! Thanks!

After completing my BS in Business Marketing, I accepted a very interesting position. I was hired as an Executive Development Program (EDP) associate at Pinnacle Entertainment, a nationwide operator of hotel/casino resorts. This program is designed to select associates that Pinnacle has determined have the potential to be future executives, and then provide these associates with cross functional training in all aspects of the business. In this statement, I will describe an experience I had in this position and describe how this experience demonstrates why I will be successful in law school and the legal profession. In my first rotation as and EDP associate, I was assigned to the Hotel Operations group. To quickly learn how the various groups in the hotel interacted, I was instructed to work for a few days in each functional role of the hotel, including as a laundry room attendant. Needless to say, after earning my BS and accepting a high profile position, I was not excited about my newest role doing laundry! However, when I reported to the laundry room, I entered an environment filled with excitement and frantic activity. Upon meeting my supervisor for the day, I learned the cause for the commotion. It was recently discovered that about one of every three bed sheet leaving the laundry room had a large, light brown stain, and each affected sheet was ruined. This was a major problem for a 1,800 bed hotel that uses two sheets per bed! This was a problem that needed a solution and needed that solution now. The prevailing assumption was that the chemicals used in the wash process were burning the sheets. As a result, the chemicals distributor was summoned for an emergency consultation. I was, however, very skeptical of this assumption, so I began investigating this issue while waiting on the distributor to arrive. I methodically ran a load of sheets through the entire laundry process, inspecting for spots after each step. This allowed me to discover that the spots were not coming from the wash chemicals as expected, but were actually coming from the industrial iron. This conclusion was unexpected. The iron was basically two large, steam filled rollers enclosed in a housing unit. Partially dried sheets were fed through the rollers which finished drying the sheets and removed wrinkles. However, no chemicals or any other materials are present in the iron that could cause these stains. I began a careful inspection of the iron to try to locate the source of the stains and discovered that the top of the housing unit was covered with a thick, oily sludge. As the partially dried sheets were run through the hot rollers, steam formed and condensed on the sludge coated ceiling. Then, oily rain began to fall on the sheets leaving brown spots. I now knew the source, but not the cause, of the stains. Only clean linens were run through the iron, making the source of the oil residue a mystery. To further confound this mystery, no kitchen linens, the only expected source of oil, were processed in this laundry room. When glancing around the room, though, I noticed some light blue towels. This caught my attention, since the hotel’s towels were white. Consulting with my supervisor revealed that these blue towels came from the in house spa, and a visit to the spa uncovered that these towels were used almost exclusively for massage services. I also learned that a light brown, almond based, massage oil was used. By this time, the chemical distributor had arrived, expecting a full day of trouble shooting. Instead, he was greeted with one question, “Do the current chemicals bond with almond oil?” A quick look at his charts revealed that they did not, allowing the conclusion that the brown sludge in the iron was the build-up of almond oil from the spa towels. The distributor re-formulated the chemical mix to remove the oil, we cleaned the sludge of the iron housing, and the stains were never seen again. The preceding story describes the analytic, problem solving approach that I bring to everything I do. This approach includes: resisting the urge to prematurely jump to conclusions, critically evaluating all information available, recognizing what can and cannot be explained by current evidence, collecting additional evidence help understand that which has not been explained, drawing meaningful conclusions based on all available information, and taking appropriate actions to resolve any remaining issues. I believe that this approach is similar to the approach taken when evaluating legal issues. Because I already look to this approach to solve difficult problems, I am confident that I am well prepared for success as both a law student and a practitioner of law.