I wonder what would happen if Celestia was liberated from her sun prison. The way Twilight (or Eclipse, as she refers to herself now) was talking about her, I fear that the reunion would not go very well.

AC chapter 2 . 6/4/2012

Nice! Thanks for telling us btw. I never would've found the sequel if you didn't update us. Cheers.

forrest chapter 1 . 5/5/2012

if there is a sequel i would very much like to know the name of it please make more of this story its too good to just stop this way

Ai chapter 1 . 4/27/2012

Dude talk about dark. Depressing as hell too. Well written and intriugueing of course but what the hell was with that ending?

The action scenes were well written and Applejack as the famous "One Pony Army" was awesome. I'm not a big fan with Trixie nor do I understand why so many people like her as much as they do but in this story I really liked her.

I liked the way Twilight/Eclipse had a fair amount of depth to her character.

I would personally love to see this turned into a larger series but I understand you're already in the middle of one of those so I wont get my hopes up.

If you were to write more I would like to know more about the war leading up to this point. For example how did Applejack earn the title of the "One Pony Army" and are the other characters as famous? Do they have there own history with the war. I know there the biggest figures in the rebellion but how did they get to be so big?

Pretty good. I liked the humor. It evens out the darker parts of the story. It was interesting to see Twilight become an alicorn at the expense of Celestia. Trixie was fantastic the entire time. I particularly enjoyed the scene where Twilight could have completely destroyed Trixie, but chose to spare her. I like how this story ends. It leaves a lot of questions and lends itself to quite a bit of speculation. Like some of your other reviewers, I agree that the story ends perfectly and that a sequel might not be entirely necessary.

The only gripe I have is with the abrupt cutaways to what has already happened. They broke the flow of the story. Twilight's ulterior motive for turning to the dark side also seemed somewhat impulsive, but the fact that she wants to overthrow Nightmare Moon for personal gain kind of overshadows it. Finally, I liked how Twilight could be evil and still be completely in character at the same time.