One thing, though... If I remember my lessons from French class correctly, you don't put a period after the abbreviaiton of Madame. So it'd be just Mme Phoebus. Please check with a genuine French person! I think only Monsieur has a period after it, so it'd be M. so and so... Yeah. Hope that made sense. Haha.

I like this. I've always been fascinated with War, in particular WW1 and WW2, so I enjoy reading stories set in that time period. I am not sure though that I'd be able to write about the concentration camps and do them justice. I think you do that which is good.

I'm not sure how long you're thinking of making the story but I hope you update soon.

Oh my god... Something good came from Mr. Mackenzie's ramblings... APOCOLYPSE! RUN FOR TEH HILLS CHILDREN!

Very good, very emotional though I think it could benefit from a bit more description. If you're going to write something thsi short I always think it's good to be nicely descriptive really give teh readers an image in their minds eye.

BRING THIS TO WRITING CLUB ON WEDNESDAY! You never have anything to read :(