Okay this is one piece that I am really proud of. Im not sure why but I guess I can relate to it and I feel I expressed this in the best possible way I can. I wanted to explore silence. The power of it and what it does. How it alienates others and yourself. But also what it brings to life and any given situation. People resent it. But its something that everyone does and experiences. I really hope this makes sense and it works. Let me know what you think guys

AFter i read this poem of yours, i was in silence....really it took me a while to come back to earth. this is just EPIC! you have penned silence wonderfully, this emotion can fill pages of books! I wrote a poem with the title silence too. PLease when you have time, check it out. Same plot, but different script

Now, the positives.You can use big words, but not oversize ones.You write with confidence. Came out wonderful.

Negatives:The hell you doing? You keep writing something lovely, and it makes so much sense. Then it clashes with the silence, and makes a discordant noise.You jumped all around with comparisons, none having a common link. That's about it.

This is simply excellent. Please, do not consider me a nit-picker, but you used the wrong form of 'their' in line ten. In stead of 'their' it should be 'they're', as in 'they are'. Please do not take offense to this, I am merely trying to help. This a wonderful poem, by the way.