#2

2nd Ending

#1

great story..I really like the first ending because it felt more real.I liked that she was innocent while inspecting him and that she walked out of the room because she was caught. its just something that can happen.

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Anonymous11/05/10

Damn...#2

Obviously...or maybe NOT obviously...it sounds better to have completion for BOTH lovers! Every man's DREAM is to experience a young lady like Kelly. Delicious images are conjured up in this tale, thanks.

Proof reading and editing

Mistakes can spoil a story like "Kelly's car backing out of the driveway." Mixing up your characters. Spelling mistakes as well. Learn the difference between "to" and "too". Otherwise the story was fair. I prefer ending one.