Is this an effective title?

I added the review line to the title because I saw that it was an underrepresented google search. I didn't want to lose the original title, but now it seems a bit unwieldy? Is this an effective title for bringing in search engine traffic or would it be better to revert to a smaller title?

Hi everyone,I’ve been here 4 months and had hoped by now I’d be earning something from Google, but I’ve not earned a dollar. From feedback, I know the quality of my writing is strong so it’s something else...

I attempt to try my best to improve my traffic and increase my earnings of Google Adsense, but it seems that I can still earn only a little per day. Do you have any tip and suggestion on how to get more traffic for your...

My most recent hub was Snipped and given a new short title by staff which does not properly reflect the contents of the hub. Views have been negatively impacted and have not picked up after the change. ...

I have just started, so I dont expect it in the near future, but how many hubs, or how many months before you start making money? How much traffic is considered to be good traffic? Right now I am getting...