L8 maybe "with those brown buttoned eyes", L20sp "weird" Interesting piece I have to say. It was a wonderful story with lovely imagry. Perhaps L1 should be an introduction? or maybe italicized to add a better effect? the last line, is a bit off. It's just the arranging of the words, also if you are going to end like that, should you capitalize the "Goodbye?" maybe add in "Goodnight my children, for the story continues tomorrow, sleep tight." hm..just a though..good nonetheless. — Gabriella

wow. this is scary from the title, since near where i live there used to be a woman with her husband who made teddy bears and sold them. but one day she went crazy, and killed her husband, but not forgetting to put up a sign "sorry, shop closed today" or similar.

Wow, I love teddy bears and I love this poem. Maybe I could tell it to little kids for real and see their reaction. Lol. I am so evil.... (favoritized) — lonelygirl

A story maybe…poem, no. — unknown

Dear Unknown

I guess you must be the sort of person who replies to all their correspondance in rhyming couplets.

Larry Barry Lark Bark — unknown

I tried staring a teddy out once.... it won. I was reading and longing for a little smoother ryhme but having read it again i'm not sure. Nice subject, great work. — hobby

OK Isabelle,I'll give you the last line from and,it is...and ripped him to bits with their vampire fangs ,leavin his flesh hanging in shreds then they fell into line and the swine of a leader said "Now for Isabelle 5,she soon won't be alive." Only joking dear,glad you took the time and trouble to read