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FallenTruths says:Jami, this story was beautifully written! I admittedly do not read second-person narratives very often, but you were able to use the technique wonderfully and draw the reader right into Fleur's shoes. The flow of this piece fit flawlessly into the context of the story. I loved your descriptions of Fleur and how you introduced us to her mindset in the midst of the battle and then went straight into her heartbreak for Fred and the intensity of the final scene with Greyback. There was so much emotion from both Fleur and Greyback during their confrontation and I loved the intensity in your writing.

Your characterization of Fleur was perfect. Often Fleur is portrayed as weak and stuck-up but I loved the powerful and brave personality that you gave her character here. You even maintained part of her softness when describing how she wouldn't fall apart until she was in Bill's arms. It was certainly refreshing and made for a very exciting yet thoughtful chapter.

One of my favorite lines from the story was, "You, the blonde princess with more intelligence than you know what to do with. How did you become a thread in the tapestry of war?" This line just summed up Fleur's role in this one-shot wonderfully. I can almost feel the bit of sarcasm in her voice as she says the beginning of this line.

Something I was curious about while reading the story was where you got the inspiration for the title. I didn't immediately make the connection between Fleur being a veela and fairy dust, though I'm assuming that's the connection you were going for? This was an amazing piece overall and I can't wait to read more.

Alli

Author's Response: Aww Alli ♥ I was so surprised to see 'FallenTruths' on my review thingy!!

Honestly, I don't read second person much either and I really didn't think I'd write in it :P. I wanted to give this sort of a foggy poetic kind of feel though, so I really didn't have to make sense of everything going on and it could all be blurry, and this was the only way I could get that to work out. I'm so happy you liked it, though ♥

I have such a huge pet peeve with how Fleur is often portrayed. The girl was chosen for the TwizardT, she stayed by a man who'd been nearly killed, knowing that wouldn't be the last of the danger, AND she puts up with the mean way his family acts without letting it influence her love for Bill. So the way she's often shown as this selfish, air headed woman really irritates me.

Hahaha I'm so happy you picked up on the sarcasm in that! That's how it sounded in my head :P

I'm not entirely sure where the title came from. I'm sure it had something to do with the thought that Veelas do seem like fairies to me, but it kind of just popped up. Sorry, I know that's a pathetic answer, haha.

Thank you again so much for stopping by ♥ It was such a nice surprise!