tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post4402654073306666795..comments2017-10-01T09:02:46.118-05:00Comments on A Twist Of Noir: A Twist Of Noir 640 - Naomi JohnsonChristopher Granthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11581243409967241320noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-19451673887356038782010-12-19T15:00:03.047-06:002010-12-19T15:00:03.047-06:00Now that&#39;s just wicked.
And to think I sympath...Now that&#39;s just wicked.<br />And to think I sympathized with a serial killer!<br />Cool.<br />KellyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-50091468557465840822010-12-16T10:37:36.863-06:002010-12-16T10:37:36.863-06:00Story started out in a run and never let up -- fan...Story started out in a run and never let up -- fantastic pacing and classic endchad rohrbacherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02108600205697375432noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-33417322285122927112010-12-15T16:58:50.899-06:002010-12-15T16:58:50.899-06:00This is incredible, Naomi. You run along with him...This is incredible, Naomi. You run along with him. You can feel the fear and hope for safe harbor. Then, you realize who it is you&#39;re running with. You relax, knowing the danger is over. Anyway, you think it is. And then... Wow. The ending most certainly is &#39;simply killer&#39; as has been said. Couldn&#39;t have said it better myself. Brava!Joycehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03275503653927579472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-36670609537646135492010-12-15T11:43:05.630-06:002010-12-15T11:43:05.630-06:00Here&#39;s my profound utterance of the day: You c...Here&#39;s my profound utterance of the day: You can do a lot in 600 words if you don&#39;t try to do too much. You&#39;ve learned that in a big way, Naomi.Al Tucherhttp://alberttucher.writersresidence.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-67377652288181952162010-12-15T10:16:00.177-06:002010-12-15T10:16:00.177-06:00Action packed! And with a nifty twist at the end.Action packed! And with a nifty twist at the end.Chris Rhatiganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05769089157184374652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-28283489613313841932010-12-14T17:04:21.963-06:002010-12-14T17:04:21.963-06:00Great story. Great pacing.Great story. Great pacing.Mike Wilkersonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00771502395254223219noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-91502897967732614872010-12-14T16:33:37.200-06:002010-12-14T16:33:37.200-06:00Brilliant.Strong images a whipcrack punchline.beau...Brilliant.Strong images a whipcrack punchline.beautifully done.Paul D. Brazillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12881642426845398389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-44487127145098986432010-12-14T14:22:24.454-06:002010-12-14T14:22:24.454-06:00Lovely scene, made with some real pretty meat on i...Lovely scene, made with some real pretty meat on it.M. C. Funkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00088827164403855506noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-70622552333441964112010-12-14T12:26:57.687-06:002010-12-14T12:26:57.687-06:00Heavy atmosphere, almost tangible, along with the ...Heavy atmosphere, almost tangible, along with the pounding fear. (I hate that dream, too) <br /><br />You did absolutely fantastic with 640 exceptionally well-chosen words.R.S. Bohnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09101260459422806220noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-50537236688450681682010-12-14T12:18:32.567-06:002010-12-14T12:18:32.567-06:00Very cool.Very cool.Steve Weddlehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03876211586767139613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-15240066930585960572010-12-14T11:54:30.139-06:002010-12-14T11:54:30.139-06:00Great twist. And I like how little violence you ha...Great twist. And I like how little violence you had to put in to make us feel threatened throughout. That&#39;s artful writing.pattinase (abbott)https://www.blogger.com/profile/02916037185235335846noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-80238277827944800612010-12-14T09:48:25.908-06:002010-12-14T09:48:25.908-06:00here the darkness has a weight and a form. like a ...here the darkness has a weight and a form. like a thick, black velvet curtain that envelopes everything. i love it that the darkness inside the killer is equally tangible.nigel p birdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05529578665251906089noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-38894876880565941322010-12-14T02:52:34.354-06:002010-12-14T02:52:34.354-06:00&quot;Just as quickly the light was gone and the d...&quot;Just as quickly the light was gone and the darkness knit itself back together.&quot; Nice.David Cranmerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04749857752139212888noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-8203735768171209392010-12-14T01:49:59.220-06:002010-12-14T01:49:59.220-06:00Clever story, Naomi ~ you&#39;ve penned quite a ta...Clever story, Naomi ~ you&#39;ve penned quite a tale, filled with rich description, and gave us a cool twist, and managed it beautifully in 640 words. <br />They should have shot him when they had the chance!<br />Well done ~ congratulations :-)Kathleen A. Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10809993168019150186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-29933390390485376682010-12-13T23:34:31.692-06:002010-12-13T23:34:31.692-06:00The tense changes in paragraph one are rendered ma...The tense changes in paragraph one are rendered masterfully. It&#39;s hard to handle back and forth jumps like that, but you make it seem easy. Captures the feeling,the essence, of night and makes the reader feel it in his bones. Michael&#39;s right, last line is a whack up side the head. That&#39;s good flash. Cool.AJ Hayesnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-67767413401252602002010-12-13T20:20:36.694-06:002010-12-13T20:20:36.694-06:00You may be amazed you can write such limited word ...You may be amazed you can write such limited word count, but you do it beautifully. Love the language.Ron Earl Phillipshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04469942510225591606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-10623382849539037042010-12-13T19:16:06.788-06:002010-12-13T19:16:06.788-06:00Such a black tone of panic in this one. That last ...Such a black tone of panic in this one. That last line is simply killer - as is this entire piece. Great stuff Naomi.Michael Solenderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01120045114297450520noreply@blogger.com