Pop song shock!
Wow, a kinda pop song.
The vocals are great. Suggestions? Buss off the top end and saturate those highs a bit, mix that back into the center. The vocal will "pop".
The chorus form needs a bass line under it, and needs a cleaner mix. The writing is strong, just needs better execution.
This alt power pop is a good genre for you and imho, a much better use of your time and considerable talents, then say, the dark screamo stuff with Mumbles.

Yes, this good song needs a re-mix ...
Love the lyric, love the song, but, yes, a re-mix is needed here. The song itself deserves it.

The “highs,” sitting squarely above the frequency-range of the vocals (and therefore not colliding with them), seem too-loud, while the bass frequencies below the vocal seem too-quiet. None of the three components seem to really sit together. None of the three seem to occupy, let alone share, the same sonic space.