Biography: Vincent grew up the normal life with his family. He got good grades and had many friends. He didn't make the best choices growing up though. One night in the eleventh grade his friends were throwing a party when their parents weren't home. After the party when his friends and him were driving home drunk, a truck drove them off a road and off a cliff. The crash killed all of his friends and left Vincent brutally mutilated. It took him 7 months to be fully healed. Once he was fully healed and got back to school he was ridiculed for having prosthetic limbs. He couldn't take all the ridicule and suffering so he joined the UTC the moment he turned 18.

Personality: Vincent is normally calm, easygoing and shy. But he gets almost a second personality when he starts fighting. He is ruthless and will never stop trying to kill his target. Vincent will normally not trust someone if it is the first time they've met. Is embarrassed of his Bionic body parts and will usually hide them.

Equipment:KnifeTool Kit9mm pistol

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Why, why would they give him a knife in his arm. Would they say "Oh look, a teenager who just barely survived a car crash (Horribly cliché by the way) let's insert cutlery in his arm, that'll make everything better." Not to mention, someone with low self esteem isn't the best leader out there, also, we don't know the extent of the damage that's gone on his person. For all we know he could have seven and a half functioning brain cells while the rest of his body is a hardened mixture of pimp-gold and solid ego. Have all his limbs been chopped off? Only two of them? Was he turned into an octopus man? These are things we need to know. If you go more in-depth in your bios, things will work out much better for you. Characters need to have more though than this.

BloodStream

Posts : 258Join date : 2010-07-03Age : 28Location : Cambridge, UK

Subject: Re: Vincent Esthiem Mon Nov 22, 2010 4:19 pm

Xeloras wrote:

Why, why would they give him a knife in his arm. Would they say "Oh look, a teenager who just barely survived a car crash (Horribly cliché by the way) let's insert cutlery in his arm, that'll make everything better." Not to mention, someone with low self esteem isn't the best leader out there, also, we don't know the extent of the damage that's gone on his person. For all we know he could have seven and a half functioning brain cells while the rest of his body is a hardened mixture of pimp-gold and solid ego. Have all his limbs been chopped off? Only two of them? Was he turned into an octopus man? These are things we need to know. If you go more in-depth in your bios, things will work out much better for you. Characters need to have more though than this.

If he just has prosthetics he probably couldn't punch someone without his arm falling off.

if you suddenly change it to say "bionics" there's also no logic in why they'd give a teenager bionic limbs instead of prosthetics.

I agree with what everyone else has said about the rank though. If he shows good leadership ICly then he'll ICly be promoted. You don't just say "he is good at being a leader and gets lots of promotions" because if you that then you're probably a bad leader. start at corporal or something.

plus yeah this is pretty much just Cer'Relaan but younger human and male

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cptkickercutleg

Posts : 139Join date : 2010-08-02Age : 25Location : Marcus' Bar

Character sheetName: KickerAge: Unknown, believed to be late 20sRace: Human

Subject: Re: Vincent Esthiem Thu Nov 25, 2010 8:20 am

I dare-say that the UTC would replace prosthetic limbs with bionic limbs for combat situations, and the knife could have been a custom addition to his arm that he bought himself.

[Edit:] I think this is MUCH better now that he's not a 1st lieutenant, he's not got durpy bionics, and he's a much quieter character all together, though not so much as to be invisible, the prosthetics are a nice touch as they give an odd physical factor that others will pick up on.

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Subject: Re: Vincent Esthiem Thu Nov 25, 2010 8:28 am

Blitz wrote:

nega needs to stop making overpowered and stupid in general characters.