this is a tune i wrote called "8 hours ago" for my band, "to the moon" (name may change...)

this one's influenced by Incura, I Am Abomination, Atreyu, a bit of J Rock, even Blink 182...

i wasnt really leaning to metal, post hardcore, i was just shooting for my style of a rock song with some heart put into it. The vocals for this are going to be screamo with clean vocals so the end result is going to be somewhat of a post hardcore sounding thing

give it a listen, i hope you will like :) and dont steal my riffs, i dont come up with stuff like this very often D:<

Zeroxk

11-12-2011, 10:57 AM

Pretty cool song, great leads and riffs. Drums are a bit lacking but nothing major, would like bass though but whatever.
It ends a bit abrubtly though imo, I think a solo and maybe chorus after breakdown II to end it would be better

herby190

11-20-2011, 04:26 PM

The guitar parts were pretty good, and the chorus lead was great. My main complaint is that it feels kinda weak without bass; even a simple bass line could add so much to this.

C4C? http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1413914

touke

11-24-2011, 03:36 AM

love the guitar work in this.. if you play it that well then you got yourself something mint. drum line is simple but it gives the song more life so i don't really mind them. in the 120's is a pretty cool part. you should fade that out though, its kind of abrupt imo. overall though, fantastic writing skills here.

crit my work in progress?
http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1498400

KirkChicoHammet

11-30-2011, 02:31 PM

Hey :)

So, still no bass :D

But hey, nice changes there, the verses are really better now. Nice riffs, and that chorus melody is killer xD

The first breakdown is great, and I don't like breakdowns that much xD
The second breakdown starts with nice riffs, but the drums make it a bit strange, you could change it a bit just that it don't sounds too generic.

Great song overall, it just lacks some bass, the drums are a bit weak too, but nothing you can't fix it. Also, it lacks a killer solo too :D