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I predict that it will be about being eleven and how to be eleven. Then I read the first few sentences and I am right. I think could happen next is a story about a different view of the story. Maybe like the teacher. I would like to see what happens with that

I wonder if Rachel was getting bullied by Sylvia. If she was why didn’t she stand up for herself?

The inference I made is that at the start you can tell she sad by saying And when you wake up on your eleventh birthday you expect to feel eleven, but you don’t. You open your eyes and everything’s just like yesterday, only it’s today. And you don’t feel eleven at all. It never said she’s sad but you can tell it by what she says.

My connection is that when I woke up being eleven I didn’t feel different at all like Rachel.

For this story I felt the same it started of sad and I thought it was normal because a lot of stories start of sad but then continued to be sad and had repetitive sad theme. So my feeling changed to a sad based feeling

All round I think this is good story for younger readers but personally I wouldn’t read this book based on my likings. If I was little I think I would like this book but not now.

The ideas to this story were very messed up in the beginning but made sense in the end. They all linked up to the main idea in the end. It felt like the story wasn’t going anywhere then told backstory behind and then it made sense.

The organisation at the start of this story didn’t really make sense as well as the ideas. But at the end it all got cleared up. Because of this the story flowed really well in the end.

With the story you could infer the what the voice was buy the words little Ania said. I thought it as a small child’s stubborn voice like “I don’t want to go to school!” Everyone has heard that voice or seen it

The word choice in this story is what I think made it weird. The things ania said just came out of the blue. It could have been her attitude but we found out that her great great ` grandma did it is well phrases like I would like to eat… that lampshade. Made it different and weird in a unique way

The sentence fluency for this story was great. When you got to the weird part you didn’t have to go back over it because it hand an eclipse before the weird part so you know somethings up. The other parts of the story flowed really well

The conventions this writers used where the consistent paragraphs. A lot of the paragraphs were three or four sentences. In my opinion they could made a few bigger paragraphs instead of a lot a smaller ones. A way to do this is to make your ideas bigger and have less or write more for each one in the paragraphs and change your organisation.