I liked your ending. Think you did a great job showing Cain break down. Like bit on Concrit - it's hard to follow the story when you jump from present to past tense. Try to stick with one or the other. Other than that, great story. _

That was wonderful. Just the romanice I needed on a rainy Sunday afternoon. You packed huge amounts of emotion in to two chapters. I hope there is more to come, but if there isn't it is perfect the way it is.

Brutally true to the character, even if DG is probably not as innocent as he thinks. DG for what happened to Az, Raw for running away, Glitch/Ambrose for the evils his inventions were twisted into, and Wyatt for being unable to save his family. I can hardly imagine a sadder, but more honest way for things to start off (or end before it starts) between them. That quaternity's a wonderful mess, drowning in guilt.

So Excellent. I love Cain and DG! This is such an excellent portrayal of these two characters. There so perfect together, and an element of realism and fantasy is skillfully blended together in this fic. I cannot wait for more!