Hey GMS, finished reading the first chunk twice and I am really loving it so far! I have a humble list of random bits, errors, etc. I plan to compile them in a tidy fashion and post them after work, or would you rather I email them on too?

Well here's the list, just for a record, and maybe people can add anymore to make a single comprehensive list rather than tons of lists with duplicates. Even offer corrections if I am mistaken.

Page 13 - Bouts - Paragraph 4"Anyone can choose not to roll stunt die for himself if wishes..."

Page 15 - Damage - Paragraph 2"Damage is determined by a Constitution save: a roll of thedie plus the hero’s Constitution bonus and appropriatemodifiers against a Difficulty of 15, modified by the sourceof the damage: with more damaging attacks more difficultto save against."

Pretty long sentence. Might be better as two sentences. Perhaps:

Damage is determined by a Constitution save: a roll of thedie plus the hero’s Constitution bonus and appropriatemodifiers against a Difficulty of 15. This roll is modified by the sourceof the damage: with more damaging attacks being more difficultto save against.

PG 36 - Bear Stance (Edges)Spirit is spelled "sprit"

PG 39 - Eagle Eyed (Edges)"Benefit: You only suffer a -1 penalty per full rangeincrement between you and your target weapon."

Seems like it should just be "you and your target." at the end there.

PG 46 - Spirit Strike (Edges)This edge has a lot of extra effects with extra costs. Might be a good one to include an example, as I can see a lot of repeated questions about how to add up the total cost.

PG 47 - Tiger Stance (Edges)Spirit is spelled "sprit."

PG 56"Versus Temporary Damage to One Ability Pool:Choose an Ability when you take this modifier. Whenthe target fails to save, you can opt to apply the damagepermanently to that Ability Pool instead of using it todetermine injury! ..."

Permanently should be "Temporarily"

PG 56Missing an extra space between the “Versus Temporary...” and “Versus Permanent...” sections.

I already e-mailed Gareth, but in the interest of having it all in one place:

Page 19: "Looking at those statistics, we have a character who thinks with the cunning of a fox, as fit as an ox, fairly strong and quick, but somewhat brash and off-putting (or perhaps shy and unassuming)."

"Character who" seems to be the basis for all the following statements, but that doesn't fit with some of them, e.g., "character who as fit as an ox."

A change might be: "Looking at those statistics, we have a character who is cunning like a fox, as fit as an ox, fairly strong and quick, but somewhat brash and off-putting (or perhaps shy and unassuming)."