Hey I agree with you Paperclippe! I have a quote for that, its a bit biased but well meh. "Which one is greater? A poet that can draw in a person’s mind, or an artist, who can draw into reality, but from only one perception?" With no offense to artists everywhere. I thought you did a really great job of making this poem's rhythm slow, and even lazy, just like the girl in the poem. Now as a result, I feel tired again *z*. The construction of the poem also greatly helped to convey this. So well done with that! I could really feel the apathy!