Some of it can be a little confusing with Lily starting off at first with James and I do wonder who the little boy is because he's on his own, he's scared and frustrated and I thought it was going to be a story about something completely different as when Lily was getting ready I thought it was going to relate to maybe her wedding or something but I am glad it didnt as it made the story different.

I liked the story summary though about how she helps him say good bye because in a way she does. She comforts him and tells him everything will be okay which is probably what Snape needed in his younger years. You also made his language very child like and believable which enhanced the quality of this story even more because he actually sounded like a 10 year old boy.

Calling Lily a 'mudblood' though was a shock as throughout his younger years he seemed to be quite accepting towards Lily and even in this piece he recognised who she was which made it a little more heart breaking but it flowed really well and the ending just had the cute factor that most authors strive for!

Well done on this I really enjoyed it.

SHPFFO!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I'm glad you liked the story even if some of it was a little confusing. I thought, when I wrote it, that it would be obvious by the end that it's an afterlife story but I'm rethinking that after a few recent reviews. Thanks again for reading and reviewing (and SHPFFO-ing).