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Sunday, September 23, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday: September 23, 2012

We have much cooler weather now, in the northeastern USA. A nice crisp change for the first day of autumn.

For anyone who doesn't know, Six Sentence Sunday
is a bloghop--and one of the friendliest. Participants
post six sentences of their writing, then the fun begins. Readers
hop from blog to blog, sharing opinions, critiques and encouragement.
We know what a solitary pursuit writing is--and Six Sentence Sunday is a
great way to meet other writers, and take a break from our solitude.
Complete rules and a sign up form are at the site here.

Returning to my WIP, ATNS, Marissa has been
running for her life. The scene began with her playing hide and seek
with her toddler. Then, something strange happened--a blinding light and a
disorienting sound. She's not at the State Park anymore, and her son is
not with her. Her situation has taken a turn toward the terrifying. She's just witnessed a large, raging beast bite a person in half. After fleeing, she found a dark doorway in which she's stepped through. This is what happens next:"An eeriness permeated Marissa’s whole
being. Listening…stilling her own gasps for breath, she heard ragged breathing.
Searching the dim area for the source of the sound, her eyes trained on
something sitting propped against the wall. Unsure of who or what she
saw, she stepped closer, her eyes straining to focus in the near darkness. There it was... no…it was a he…there was a man. His hand pressed against his chest where
blood oozed between fingers, and gold eyes searched her, conveying something
between caution and pleading."

I thought about what I liked most about this scene.. and the best I came up with is EVERYTHING. You did such an amazing job to introduce this character. It would be a fantastic,evocative moment in a movie - with the visual richness you provide through your writing, and the great arc and timing, it already is.