Alright, so starting things off here with a link to the BRC . This RP group has greatly helped me improve on my characters and techniques. Ideas that I used from Gringat this time around solely lie in Jak's forearm, coming from his version of Me ep's character, Rames.

==Jak==

Name: Jak

Gender: Male

Species: -

Race: -

Occupation: -

Title(s): none

Element: Shadow

Alignment: Chaotic Neutral

Typical Weapon: Energy cannon, elbow spikes, Heel spikes.

MOC Status: Assembled

'The Night' by Disturbed

Jak is the 'brother' of the Tokia named Kore, or so Jak led the soldier to believe. Kore's true brother died more than ten years prior to Jak taking over his identity. In reality, Jak is a shadow entity similar to the Makuta of Aqua Magna and Cyclonids of Tempista Magna. He himself does not know of his origins, but he has settled on the theory that he is a ghost.

He drew strength from death and sorrow, drifting from one depressed being to another, using machinery to take on a form while impersonating a loved one come back from the grave and pushed them until whoever he was fooling killed themselves. He used this practice to build up his strength and maintain his powers and abilities.

When he came across the soldier Kore, a Tokia had never gotten through his own true brother's death, he took the long dead Akonian's identity, quickly learning as much as he could about his new identity. After years of failing to push Kore to the brink, the entity had begun to form a bond with the strong willed Tokia. He began working with the Tokia in field assignments, even assembling a body to interact with the soldier.

Upon Kore's death in a suicidal attempt to save a doomed Military vessel carrying hundreds of civilian passengers, he had defied the orders of the 'Great Being' Ezru, who abandoned Kore and his friends to die. At the impromptu funeral of the soldier, Jak swore to bring Ezru to his knees and kill him.

After a battle with the Great Being, Jak's mechanical body was destroyed. He rebuilt himself in little time, but only after speaking to the Great Being of what he was. After Ezru was teleported to the council world of the Celestas, Jak descended to the tunnels, raising an army of the native creatures to destroy all who follow Ezru. He has begun a Genocidal war on a Tyrannic Great Being.

Jak's new body was built using pieces of the old one and other machines. His abilities can channeled through the form, able to destructive blasts in his palm and disintegrating waves can be fired from his arm cannon. He created the muscle tissue and nervous system of his form from various sources, including an unlucky Tokia that got in his way.

He is essentially dead, yet he can't move on and Drothmarr, the being that fairies the dead to the afterlife, has no claim on his soul yet.

"You were the first to defy a god, Brother. And I will be the first to kill one."

Alright, so here's Jak. He is one of my more destructive characters. My vision of him can be described in this post I made in the BRC:

[Jak] Akonians shifted uneasily at the sight of a black and white armored being that stood at the main entrance of one of the many cities of Tempista Magna, the hall behind him had lost all light, silver and gun metal components and armor reflecting the light here and there. A reptilian head hid a single red eye, whit plates forming a ridge down the center of his head and two to either side. gray synthetic muscle tissue pulsed with life throughout the beings body as a large, heavily armored hexapod creature, whisps of shadow rising from its tainted body, nudged his left hand, pushing the top of its head against his palm. he lifted his hand a fraction of an inch before stroking it, running the new synthetic nerves across its ridged armor. The creature murred with pleasure, rubbing against his side. He knelt beside it and spoke into its bat like ear, his synthesized voice no more than a whispering hiss "Go forth." the creature straightened itself and prepared to move forward. The being rose and pointed into the city, the whispering hiss resonating for all before him to hear as he raised the cannon that was his right arm. "Slaughter all that stand in your path." With its orders the creature bounded forward, followed by hundred more of its kind, weaving around their master and tackling Akonian guards and fleeing citizens alike, ripping them apart.

Third thing: Since industrial bands like Blue Stahli pretty much orchestrate the ENTIRE Tempesta Celestis storyline, how's this as a secondary theme for Jak VS Ezru? http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sF3aZyNDF1Q
Unfortunately it's not good here since it uses the M word, but what do you think?

The MOC is brilliant. As for him as a character, he's certainly formiddable, although as the stoy is progressing it seems he's merely one of many. There are others on other moons rallying against Ezru - Zhar on Sampa Magna (who I imagine once the whole Cert thing is gone he has to move to bigger things), Cor'opseis, Callidan and Spheroid Alpha.