I love that ending analogy. It's true and original, something hard to come by. Your second stanza the one that starts with "love is a quiet hug" has a lot of promise. You set up certain senarios but then don't do as well as you could with the follow through. When you mention a suprise vacation, me as a reader, I want to be drawn in. Continue setting that picturesque scene... a suprise vacation

just the two of us

beachside

resting with the setting sun

That was just an example, but I feel you need to elaborate a bit and create a scene like that. Does that make sense? Hope this helps :)