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Aligiah says:First off I would like to address the first paragraph, I like how descriptive that paragraph was, more than the other paragraphs in the chapter. Something about it made me want to finish the chapter, so I have to give you good credit for that before the rest of the story.

Now, the rest was good, lacking in some areas with description, but nonetheless well written. I just have to say something about Draco. I'm sure you have heard that he is out of character, and it's true. He seems to wise to be the Slytherin that readers have come to know. For instance, he is a coward in his own way, so he would be a hypocrite to say things like "Your trying to create a world you know will never come true. You keep hurting yourself by going back to these memories." I think that he couldn't let go what he had done... but that is my personal opinion.

Also, was Draco stalking Ginny? It sounded like it when he said: "I have watched you for too long and it pains me to see you suffer like this." It scared me.

I hope I didn't offend you in anyway. Go ahead and hit me with a rubber band if you want. :]

Overall I will rate this an 8.

Alex

Author's Response: Yeah, sometimes I'm good at using description, but most of the time I'm not. I'm glad you were inclined to finish the chapter though. The part of Draco. I guess I should put a spoliers warning because I wrote a story describing it all, but It's on hiatus right now because of a humongous writer's block. I hope to get it up pretty soon though. Draco is Friends with Ginny in the end to Ginny in the story that i'm working on that takes place before this so he naturally knows that she suffers and witnesses it. No you did not offend me in anyway. I love constructive criticism almost as much as i love reviews full of nothing but the goodies. =] Thank you for leaving the great review.