great level of detail, gets the reader in to the technical side of things quickly, and the geographic conditions in the story are really felt through your style of writing. Storyline however needs a bit of expansion, but its still interesting. Keep the story coming.

Walker chapter 1 . 9/23/2007

Very interesting, well written. It's a bit brief, and the plot (what little there is so far) feels a little bit rushed, but an excellent start.

Out of curiosity, though- I thought "at ease" was a change in postion, but remained standing all respectful-like and "stand easy" was "relax, go about your business?"