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Eleven year old Rainbow Dash has just moved out of her parents house, and everything is wicked cool, everything is awesome. Moving out wasn't a mistake. It definitely wasn't a mistake. She 1,000% definitely doesn't regret it... Right? ·Lucky Dreams

Sleep? who needs sleep? Lucky Dreams has a new story, thats more important right now.

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Ok wow this is awesome. I can say now that you are probably my favorite author on this site. The story reminds me a bit of Apotheosis by Daetrin. (which coincidently happens to be my favorite long fic.) So if this ends up being better than that, then you will have written my favorite one shot AND long fic. You. Are. Awesome.

>>477911477911 Nah man, you've got me all wrong: I've been scrambling around trying to find a replacement prize so that everypony goes home happy. Have a Fluttershy! I'll even throw in the cloud this time

OK, you are officially awesome. That was such a huge leap from what you let me read... I don't even know. Good work, seriously.

At first, I was like "It has potential, so I'll be supportive." Now I'm about to run around to every brony community I know and promote this story.

Of course that's not to say it's perfect. Scootaloo completely forgot about the CMC's until she dreamed about them? And not even a comment on the fact that she'd been so stressed out she forgot her own best friends? And, with the CMC's, her parents, Rainbow, the amazing power of an open book, and a dream's faceless monster to contend with, it's getting a bit cluttered. That's probably why it feels like an epic. Still, I have no doubt that you can handle it.

The only typo I found is a Sorry," at the beginning of a paragraph, that needs an opening mark.

Thanks for the great read! Of course, I'll be here to help pre-read again if you want me to. Good luck!

>>478586478586'Loving this beyond belief.' What a lovely comment! Unfortunately, I can't really promise the next chapter within the next two or three weeks for one reason and another (I'm gonna write a blog post about it) . On the other hoof, I have every intention of seeing this through to the end -- I'm not going suddenly vanish halfway through (touch wood), so hopefully that should make up for any delay

I think that if I have any talent at all, it's less for writing and more for being able to take on-board people's criticisms -- my last story was exactly the same (it took three tries to get it onto EQD. I went over that thing so much that even after a month I still can't bear to even look at it).

I definitely agree with you with what you say about the CMC's. The problem I had, though, was that when I tried to introduce them earlier in the story before her dream... well, I don't really need to explain since you saw it for yourself. It felt so forced, and it really distracted from the relationship between Scootaloo and Rainbow Dash. Whilst the solution I have now probably isn't ideal, at the same time, I still think it works (or well enough, at least). And after working on this story for about two months or so -- I mean, when you include the planning as well as the writing -- I think it was time to finally get this story out here, because it was starting to drive me a little mad not being happy enough with able to share it with anypony

As for it possibly getting a little cluttered, it's something I'm very aware of (it's a constant problem in my writing, I think it's just the way my mind works ). But as long as I have pre-readers such as yourself to reign me in and to tell me when I'm adding in too much or whatever, I think, hopefully, it should be fine.

>>480517480517 I know right! One of the first things I do when I get up in the morning is check out that website. Someof thepictures on there are incredible! (Actually, you should probably watch out for that last one if you have epilepsy or something. But if not...)

>>482504482504 I'm feeling pretty overwhelmed by how much love this story has gotten -- so far, it seems like I've been getting the sort of response you really hope for but don't seriously expect (the e-mail I got from EQD put such a massive smile on my face) . Thanks for favouriting it, and I hope the following chapters don't disappoint! When they finally come, I mean. Don't expect anything for the next two or three weeks or so.

>>482709482709 You bet I'm interested! And I have been ever since I was little. Before this story took over, I spent a day or two planning another one in which Sweetie Belle has wild adventures in a spaceship... I mean, it wouldn't have worked for reasons so obvious that I'm embarrassed I gave it even a moments consideration . But whatever. It's always nice to meet another astronomy fan, especially one who gets the importance of darker skies

>>482752482752 Not quite yet- they wanted me to go over my punctuation and stuff first. But they also used the words 'brilliant and engaging'. I'm still grinning like a madpony just thinking about it

>>484552484552 Thanks for the tip! However I'm very happy with the pre-readers I've already got. If there's still any technical errors left, they must be very small. Or at least I hope so.

In actual fact, I've dealt with Vimbert before several months ago, and yes, he was extremely good! However he also didn't make it past the first two pages of my fic, which was actually the single best thing anypony's ever done for my writing since it seriously taught me the importance of having some sort of hook. Plus that story needed to be put out of it's misery. It wasn't just my first ever fanfic, but also the first thing I'd written for about a year and a half (I used to write all the time before I suddenly just stopped). I'm still cringing at the thought of that story

>>488564488564>>488564488564 Say, that story actually looks like it could be pretty good! I guess that's another one to add to my reading list

I think I know the app you're on about; my friend has it, and it's just about the coolest thing ever... Unfortunately for me, my phone cost £10 and the interesting feature it has is a flashlight which doesn't even work. Egh

The Sweetie Belle story isn't, however I'm gonna do it as an original piece of fiction. I have high hopes for it!

This. Is. Awesome! I am watching you with all my internets! When do you think the next chapter will be up? This is the best pony- dream-sequence fanfic I've ever read! So cute how she brought a book! I guess Rainbow Dash's love of reading rubbed off on her! I love daring do's personality! It seems to fit the show perfectly, and her resemblance to RD is nicely down-played, yet it's still there if you look for it. Two thum- uh... Hooves up!

Not my usual cup of fanfic tea, but this is so good that it might as well not be fanfic. Except that it's even cooler as fanfic, because I really like your Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo, so it's like awesome with a side of cool.

I must commend you on your delicious presentation. An eye-catching cover image and a really spiffy book-like chapter header: excellent stuff! It's little touches like these that make stories that much nicer to read.

And the story's pretty interesting too – I love how weird and mysterious it all is. Can't say much about it seeing as there's only chapter up right now, but I'm hooked and eager for new updates.

>>490863490863 Unfortunately, I think the next chapter is three weeks away, and that's at the very least (I'm gonna make a blog post about it later). But after that, I'm hoping to have a new chapter every two weeks, so hooves crossed.

'This is the best pony- dream-sequence fanfic I've ever read!'

>>490921490921 Hehe! I wish I could take more credit for it- as far as album titles go, 'The Earth is Not a Cold Dead Place' is pretty brilliant. Also, I'm glad you're enjoying the story

>>491125491125'It's like awesome with a side of cool.' I think that might be my favourite description anypony's ever given one of my stories

>>492474492474 Not just the title, but the whole feel of the story as well; I just can't get enough of this sort of music, I love it to bits! And thanks for picking up on the presentation and the cover and such- it makes me feel the time I spent doing it was time well spent.

>>502808502808 Yeah, I already listen to God is an Astronaut and 65 Days of Static, and they're both wonderful! However, I've never heard of If These Trees Could Talk- I'm listening to them right now, and I've gotta say, that was a pretty stellar recommendation. Thanks

>>703571703571 It's coming bro, don't worry! It's just that I posted this then realised that the story I already had written was kind of... well, rubbish, to be frank. I've been doing other stuff in the meantime as I rethink this one. Shouldn't be too long now. Couple of weeks or something