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Hollow part 1 – update

SHORT NOTE:

THIS IS FOR ADULT.

I DON’T KNOW ENGLISH VERY WELL. I JUST WANT TO IMPROVE IT.

I’M NOT A WRITER

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Are you really think that you are a master of your fate? What would you say, if I told you that you were wrong.

Akim, no longer young, but still good looking, rich man bought a new technology (machine that can cut many trees). He didn’t know that this simple decision not only will have an impact on his own life, but also change life of many others. There is also a girl. The girl, who want to discover who she really is and what is her role in this mess.

!THIS CHAPTER CONTAIN MATURE CONTENT!

“I will fuck you from behind” he whispered in her ear and his, big, hairy hand landed on her left breast. He grabbed it so hard that she groaned in pain. At the same time he caressed her ear by tongue. She felt his sharp teeth on her ear lobe. He nipped it strongly, making her gasp again.

Hearing her voice, he let go her lobe and a wild smile appeared on his face. Then he took her ear back to his mouth and started suck. She felt his fingers into her skirt. His hand moved up, straight to her pant.

They sat on the edge of a big, wooden bed. He hold her on his lap. She sat astride him. Her legs were tightened around his back.

Suddenly, she felt his warm fingers on her cheek. He brushed her hair away from her face and then his thumb touched her lips. She shivered, but he didn’t take his hand away. He was watching her.

She looked down embarrassed and her gold curls hung on her face again. He noticed her confusion. He took her face in both hands and bring it closer to his. She felt his breath on her lips. She closed her eyes and didn’t protest, when he kissed her. Quite the opposite, she clung to him whole body. His tongue traveled inside her mouth. He tasted her Piece of piece.

Suddenly, he stopped. She felt his body stiffen. Then he grabbed her hair hard and threw her to the floor. She hit her head on the hard wood.

That hurt.

She supported her weight on her arm and turned face to her companion. He stood by her. His face was purple. He violently grasped her hair and lifted her head up.

“You bitch!” he snarled through clenched teeth. “I will kill you!!!”

He hauled off to smack her, but he didn’t make it. His grips relaxed and he fell down to the floor. She looked at him motionless for a few good seconds and then got up.

She fixed her hair and wiped lips with the back of her hand. Then she squatted down for a closer look and checked pulse. The man was dead. She looked at his left hand. The gold bracelet gleamed on his wrist. She took it off and put it to her pocket. Then she got up, turned around and went to the big mirror that was in the corner of the room. She reached out her hand to the sheet and once again she looked at lying body. She smiled and then disappeared inside the mirror.

Hey Raff, that’s a great story to be honest. The plot is nice and has that necessary element of curiosity for the readers. The ending was totally unpredictable. Overall, you did an amazing job!
However, there are minor grammatical errors. If you wish, I could help you out in that regard via e-mail or any other source. Cheers!