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The following comments are for "Dissappear"by englishgal16

falling mood
This is nice Laura. I like the way the form of the poem seems to be fading away till the emotion at the end comes up for the subject. I noticed you have no caps - is that by choice? It makes it look innocent and young. I would consider dropping out 'pulled' to see what that might do to keep the form in line with the rest. I don't think it needs it when 'out' in the next line suggest that already. Good job Laura. You didn't say to much but implied a lot of things. warm regards huni.