Chord changes (see next page). Mainly to add some minor transition chords. Also some bass line cues (e.g. B/E is a B chord with an E bass note). Some of the chords I’ve written here are guitar versions of something more exotic I would like to fill in with keyboard. The actual changes to the guitar part are few.

Play with melody notes. This melody is a little boring. Too many up-scales, down-scales. For example, “you said you wanted to be” could change from C# B A to C# F# G# A. Or some such. The melody can stay in the same vicinity as the original but jumping around a little more.

Lyric changes

I don’t like the first 2 lines. Seems to start the story in the middle, also makes the girl sound too aggressive (or needy).

Don’t like the lines “Yes husband and wife we’ll be forever more.” Can we think of something less repetitious?

Pick up tempo

I’d like to try some instrument experimentation. For instance an acoustic guitar for rhythm with a non-distorted electric for hooks.

I will add some piano ornamentation, either acoustic (sound) or electric

I will suggest bass line changes

No more playing fifths, single bass notes only

Second line of each verse, follow the chord instead of staying on E

Some rewrite of backing vocals. I suggest straddling the melody to avoid falsetto in most places.