I have to write a monologue as if I am Edith Frank, Anne Frank's mother. Could you please check for any grammar mistakes and give me comments about it? Is it too serious?

Just a few days ago, we were delighted at the news Miep brought us: the war is near end. Soon, we can take off the yellow stars from our clothes. We can stay out after 8 o¡¯clock in the evening. We can be free from all the things that suffocated. All these hope tightened my throat with excitement. But hope, they ended as hope.

This morning of August 4, 1944, we saw the Gestapo. They will never know, those Germans, how a mouse will feel like in front of a cat. We were given five minutes to pack our belongings, and I saw Anne leave her dear Kitty behind.

We eight people got in a cart to Westerbork. I realized that we were happy all the while the past two years. Even though we had to share three ration books between us eight, and lived in a tiny old room, we could still hope. We could still hope that we will be able to make noise and open curtains during daytime. We could hope that we will be able to watch movies and ride bikes in the park and go shopping on weekends. We could hope that someday sunshine would fall upon our skin.

I didn¡¯t know if it was complete peace or complete fear that I felt. Then strangely, at the moment, the only things that I could think about were the arguments Anne and I had. I wondered what it was that made Anne so fond of Otto and resent me so much. And suddenly I realized. There was no time left. I must be quick. She should know how much I love her, and how much I hate to quarrel with her. And also, how much I wish she survives through this disaster.

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