Aww that story was so sad but it captured Apollo so completely and accuratly. It was very well written I think. Nicely done. Maybe you could write something from Artemis'(Diana) POV next to get an idea of her feelings for her brother... or you don't have to because I am doing sorta the same thing '

You probably should have been consistent with the names. Although Apollo is Apollo, both in Greek and Roman, Daphne only exists in the Greek version, and Eros is the Greek name for Cupid (which is what we have come to today to call cherubim in English...), so the name "Artemis" would have been more appropriate. Consistency is always important; it is as important in names as it is in the plot.

Otherwise, even though it was short, I thought the pacing and the tone was excellent. People have taken "one-shot" to mean "pointless", and this is clearly not the case in your piece.