I don't know whether you still log in or not? But I'm going to write this anyway because holy hell... I just... wow, is the only word coming to my mind right now. The James in this is absolutely amazing, I love how you made it clear that he hated what he was doing but couldn't stop. You made it sound like a genuine addiction and that's amazing! You are a talented writer! :D
Aimee
xoxo

I loved it. You did an amazing job with the song and not making it a cheesey song fic. I loved James, and its almost how I pictured him. I think Diana is every girl's worst enemy. I can't even explain how many times I read this while listening to the actually song and it fit the mood just so perfectly.

Well-written, you may want to use a thesaurus more often though. There were a couple of words that seemed to keep cropping up. I didn't exactly like it, but that's just my opinion. I'm obsessed with happily ever afters...but you definitely did a spectacular job with this one!

Author's Response: I guess it can't be everyone's cup of tea :) but I'm happy you still thought it was good.
Thanks for the review!
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This is amazing (: I loved it, I really did. You characterized James very well actually. I love how she was a Lestrange, forbidden romance for the win. She certainly knows how to play it. And he's a cheater! I love it :) Not-so-saint-Potter wins ate life. Just sayin'. I definitely love this a lot. Probably my favorite James II one-shot I've ever read!

I thought the plot was very believable and it was really good. A little bit of a different character for James from other stories, but that's ok, because as the author you can give him any personality you want. =)

Merry Christmas! Or if you don't celebrate Christmas, Happy Holidays!!

You mentioned grammar mistakes, so I'll bring this up: "The starchy smell of old beer lingered in the air thickly, the sticky odour that stuck to your very skin." (I think the word thickly was in the wrong place. Like it should have been "lingered thickly in the air" or "Lingered in the air, the thick, stick odor")

That was brilliant. I think it was very believable and a little bit sad on both ends. I felt bad for Chloe because I feel like a lot of girls are stuck in a position like that. I also felt bad for James because he's so hormone driven, haha. But I have to give you a medal or something because you actually made me feel sorry for James. One would think that I would hate James because he is consciously cheating on his wife, and he keeps going back to Diana. But you managed to make me feel really sorry for him and want to defend him against Chloe and understand his point of view!

I just wanted to point out how much I loved this line: “She doesn’t know what you’re worth.” When I read that, I thought "Oh snap, this girl has game." I can definitely imagine some really hot slut leaning over and seducing a man with that line.

Lately I've been into these unusual pairings, like Molly/Teddy or Scorpius/OC. Because I feel like while Victorie and Teddy, and Rose and Scorpius, might have gone out during their Hogwarts years, most people don't marry their high school sweethearts. So I personally liked this story (aside from the great plot and writing) because it deviated from the norm and showed that not all the children of the Golden Trio are saints. James is cheating on his wife, like many men do, and he also impregnated Chloe at a young age if I'm correct. Teenage pregnancies!

Wonderful story! 10/10

Author's Response: Hi there :)

Thanks for pointing that out. It should have been, as you said, "lingered thickly in the air". i'll correct that immedately.

I'm really happy you liked it. I was so unsure when i wrote this that I really didn't know if people were going to enjoy reading or not. But it seems to have worked out well :) Haha, i made you feel sorry for James? Good, I wanted to see if that could happen and it did!