That's exactly the message I was trying to get across with this short, nice observation. I've been critisized a lot for being too simple and that's okay, but being my first cartoon and also something I wanted to get off my chest before getting into other stuff, I wanted it to be simple.

Rated 3 / 5 stars2012-10-16 20:16:22

Giving you a 3 for a good animation. It's solid work, but I have to dock you for the storyboard (if you used one.)

You have a great emotive piece, but it falls short in how easy it is for the protaganist to shake the shadows. It's far too simple. The shadows should've swallowed the girl and left him alone and messed with him some more. More faceless people should come and seem to be concerned only to be swept away. The world at his fingertips should tauntingly be kept just out of reach.

The protaganist should have an epiphany and realize these shadows are of his own making. We create our own hells and that's the thing that pushes others away. Then when he confronts the darkness the girl reappears and she pulls him into the light. You can't just run away from the dark -it's always there. You have to confront it. People just show you where the light is when you're ready to embrace it.