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Calypso says:Wow, what an intriguing beginning!
Lots of really original ideas- I've never seen Dominique written as male before, but you write him really well, and I'm really interested the detective side of the story already! It was also quite nice to read Bill and Fleur as parents with flaws- The cast of characters you are setting up is really interesting with room for lots of dynamics between them. I'm looking forward to learning more about them all!
The first sentence didn't sound out of place at all, I didn't realise it wasn't your until I read the Author's Note, and it was a perfect way to introduce the reader to Victoire. Your description is really good at the beginning- I can just picture the scene, with the beach, and the crimescene.
There were some places at the beginning where a few words didn't seem quite right- habitants instead of inhabitants, loose instead of lose, that sort of thing- that you might want to check out, but apart from that I thought you did a great job! I can't wait to see how this develops!

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for stopping by!
Yep, I like giving flaws to characters, I think it makes them more real and relatable and hopefully you'll see that soon with Dominique and Teddy! There will also be some more Weasleys so, yay for dynamics!
I'm glad you liked the descriptions, I always have troubles balancing them with thoughts and dialogues :s And it's great the first sentence didn't stand out! :phew:
I'll give it a re-read, orrr find a beta, thanks for poiting those out!
See you soon! /hopefully/