Hi there! I'd just like to let you know I've been having an awful day, one of those where you feel out of sorts and it's full of sadness and distress, you know? Anyway, when I read this, it unexpectedly made me smile. Such a simple-seeming reaction to such a simple-sounding poem is incredible, although both go much deeper than what is seen on the surface. It made me wonder whether there are really boys like this out there, and I hope the answer is yes. To quote another user, the picture it painted in my mind was astounding. It reminds me of the horizon. Thank you for making my day.

Favorite Quote:"I believe that everything happens for a reason. People change so that you can learn to let go, things go wrong so that you appreciate them when they're right, you believe lies so you eventually learn to trust no one but yourself, and sometimes good things fall apart so better things can fall together." — Marilyn Monroe

This poem was very sweet and I liked it a lot! I don't have much to criticize except maybe the flow of it. Actually, the flow isn't very bad, it could just be improved a bit. For example, I feel that the first verse could be rewritten without having 'his smile' three times. It gets too repetitive. But other than that, It was very good! Great job. :)

Okay, I probably have the worst advice for you because I am seriously lacking in the poetry section of my brain, but I do like have this poem flowed. I really want to met this boy you were talking about just because of this poem. You made him sound dreamy. You gave me a very good picture of him in my mind. I liked this poem; however, I personally, think it could have flowed a little better... That's just me though. Sorry this is so long, but I like to talk and I'm hyper which doesn't help! :D

Well I will start by saying that I really liked this! But if you want me to be mean(not that I have much to be mean about) I would just say to try and use more realistic, or just more descriptive vocabulary. For example, you said his perfect eyes, which isn't bad, but to make it original i would use a less used word? If this makes any sense, it does in my head(: But truly i just thought it was really good and really cute!

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