Lovely story and well written. I loved the bathroom scene with Lily in the bath and James unlocking the door to go to the toilet. Also when James walks in on The Ball meeting. Brilliantly written, they had me in stitches.

Very good story! I really likeyour writing style.
I just think they should have been a little longer before they where killed. It makes Peter seem more evil that he betrays them that fast, I'd like to think that it took some time before Voldemort found out he was the keeper and then forced the information out of him.
But other then that: Great story!

Author's Response: Hey there!

Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed it!! It was very difficult to write the ending parts, as there is a lot of canon to consider.

According to canon, James and Lily were killed approximately a week after the Fidelius charm was placed. Unfortunately, I think Peter was that evil indeed! I would have wished that it didn't happen so fast too, but I'm a big fan of canon so I stuck to that :)

Oh my Gosh! This is the best story i've read on here! I'm so sad to stop reading it now it's at an end!
:(
very well written, great job, you should be proud :D!
have you written any other stories i could read?!!

Author's Response: Hello Kerri17,

You are far too kind. I'm glad you really enjoyed the story--I was sad too when it finally had to come to an end. All good things must eventually.

I have written some other stories. If you click on my username (schoenemaedchen) it should take you to my story page. Or you can type in the search. "The RSVP, The Emerald Brooch, Spring Cleaning, or Swan Lake School of Magic". Those are all stories I've read--but only one-shots. All with different characters, not sure what you enjoy reading.

Well thanks so much for actually taking the time to make a comment! I really appreciate it.
-schoenemaedchen

Can't believe it's over already. This chapter had me crying my eyes out. Even though I knew what's going to happen, I still wished they would stay alive. And Sirius promising that he would keep Harry safe made me cry even harder. But it is the perfect ending for the story.

Author's Response: Sorry that it made you so sad!! It is a sad ending, though, isn't it. If you're a canon fan like myself its pretty unavoidable to write "the truth" about what happened.

Thanks so much for reading and leaving a review though. I appreciate it!
-schoenemaedchen

Awesome chapter again! It really is the perfect family, and knowing what's about to happen makes me sad but it's still a great story which makes me happy lol...great sense i'm making tonight :) Anyways update soon

Author's Response: You're such a devoted reader! Thanks so much for reading. The last chapter is in the queue. I'm actually kind of sad...but I hope you'll enjoy it.

Hello again! So I think this will be my last review before christmas, meeting up with the family tommorow, so I better make it extra festive and good! ;)

So my last comment about the mystery of the ending of the previous chapter is now completely redundant because you explained it in this one! Woops x)

Also, you developed Lily and Remus' relationship a bit in this chapter and explored some of the emotions about how she feels about his 'furry little problem' so err, ignore my last comment about that in the review too... my goodness I'm useless...

I really liked Remus' characterization. He just seemed so wise and Remus-y ^_^

I really liked the way you introduced the Quidditch scene with the description of the weather and how you mentioned Lily was tempted to stay with a book- a good piece of characterization I thought. And while we're on the topic, I also loved McGonnagal's smug/patriotic Gryffindory-ness. But yes, really good description! You also focused on both James and Lily's emotions in this chapter which was nice, I really like how it sort of switches between their heads :)

Again, subtle plot development at the start with the mention of the missing Slytherins... dun dun dun!

Dumbledore's love comment made me laugh, and it was interesting to see it finally revealed what James has been up to! I really like how this story is developing serious undertones and is explaining the run-up to the war, but still has lovely fluffy James + Lily/humour moments on top of that.

CC, it is a tiny thing but I thought that Dumbledore's speech was very Dumbledorey but that perhaps the "Enjoy these last few days of peace, for they are numbered" was taking it a bit too far on the serious side. While Dumbledore is very serious, I think he would also want to protect their youth and happiness as long as he good? Anyway, I can't think of any useful feedback to give you so this review has been awful! I'm sorry! I feel like I'm just repeating to you what happened in the chapter! I hope you don't mind, I just didn't pick up on anything in particular :P I really enjoyed it.

The ending was perfect, I always love those one-liners at the end - brilliant! ^_^
Anyway, reading this inspired me with lots of (if not festive, just ordinary)cheer!
Merry x-mas- just gone midnight where I am, hoorah, christmas eve!!!
~Helena

Author's Response: I am SOOO relieved you enjoyed the Quidditch match. You have no idea how many times this chapter has been rewritten due to canon issues...so its a pleasure to hear that.

I really like your comment about Dumbledore being a bit too serious. He was SO cautious with Harry, but (with my playing devil's advocate) maybe that's because he wasn't so cautious with his Parents, maybe a little regret on Dumbledore's side? However, you could be totally right.

Ahh...the many mysteries of the Marauder Era. Something I will definitely keep in mind though.

Once again, a very Merry Christmas to you and what a lovely Christmas gift :D

Hey Katie!! As promised, I'm here with christmassy-review-gifts :)
So sorry for the wait, I really hope to be able to review your story more consistantly from now on!

So they'll probably be a bit shorter so that I can review faster, but hopefully still as useful!

I liked there were some serious parts of the plot in here, but you still kept it light hearted and James/Lily fluffy. Reindeer? That's so cute! That scene was perfect and you described Lily and James' reactions to each other very well. I loved how you write them together. There was lots of detail and you conveyed the picture quite vividly.

One piece of charaterization I doubted was Lily's reaction to being told about Remus- I thought it was good as it was, but on top of that, seeing as she's also Remus' friend I thought she might have said "Poor Remus" or something along those lines as well?

I feel like James' character is developing furthur and it's good to see these different aspects of him - the serious James, the loyal friend... but at the same time, the little innuendos that keep him a teenage boy ;) Well a man in general really!

The plot development is also good, with the suspense building about the war and it'll be interesting to see how that develops.

I think the ending was a little loose, I didn't understand how heeding Dumbledore's warning meant he was away more? But maybe that's just me! I thought the kiss was very sweet though and rounded up a lovely Lily/James chapter well.

I didn't spot any grammar mistakes, so I don't think there is anything major grammar wise you need to worry about in this chapter!

Hope this feedback helped

Author's Response: Hello Helena,

Your reviews are always so marvelous and contemplative, for me that is so much more important than the length, and I simply get giddy about your reviews.

Thanks so much for writing, especially during the holiday season. It really is an excellent Christmas gift (HEART!)

Although I explain the Dumbledore Warning later (as you discovered) I'm always open to suggestions on my writing...Dumbledore is my favorite character and thus I find it very difficult to write him. I'll continue more on this thought in my next review reply...

Pen2Paper here from the forums!
I know I know, this is long overdue. I've only had an afternoon free in a while and I hope it's not too late to deliver your promised review!

Speaking of, I must say this is so adorable... Lily's room, getting ready, her dashing out the door, Petunia's scrunched up nose, Alice and Franks barely concealed smirks :) and James in what I saw in my mind and what I like to call "the Halo light" ! It sounds very fairy tale like in a modern time... but I thoroughly enjoyed it :) So you see that your description and flow was flawless that is has helped me imagine your words as a running movie and these are the moments that I remember clearly from my imagination you have helped create with your words :) :)

It's sweet and lovely and very peppy and cute. It feels exactly like going back nearly 40 years and watching them and their budding romance. I'm a sucker for romance and I love cutsie stuff so my heads all titled to the side by the end of the chapter and the word aw written right across my face! lol

I loved the introduction and James is wow, such a gentleman! I highly approve :P
Fear not Katie, this will get a lot of love :)

10/10 well done!
~Cali

Author's Response: Oh thank you so much! Any review is better than never getting a review.

I appreciate you taking the time to write such lovely comments. I hope you continue to enjoy the rest of the story as well.

There has been so much discussion on the boards lately of cliches in stories too, and it's made me really self-concious of this flick. When I started writing it in 2007, I had no idea that putting Lily and James in a dorm together (which I think is just great literary license...) was going to be such a taboo. But I stand to my story, cliches and all, and I hope you appreciate it. It's not the most important thing.