Ghost

The walls all creak
And the violent wind howls
The outside is dark and bleak Illumed by the eyes of owls
Tonight's the night
The night they will come.
There's no way I can fight,
In their presence I grow numb.
From my past
the shadows haunt me
they'll stay till night's passed
Whilst giggling with maniacal glee.

Posted 8 Months Ago

8 Months Ago

8 Months Ago

8 Months Ago

Why is Outside capitalized? Needs some more work but could turn out better. Sub "walls" for "boards"? Rolls by better. Right? "Illuminated by the eyes of owls" is a good line. What's so special about this night? What happened in the past? Why are the shadows that the speaker can't fight just giggling?

Posted 8 Months Ago

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8 Months Ago

Thanks for the tips! This poem was originaly a joke for a friend. That I had decided to post, so It'.. read moreThanks for the tips! This poem was originaly a joke for a friend. That I had decided to post, so It's not quit finished. (Probably should have put that in the authors note.) thanks for the help, it is definitely appreciated!

Posted 8 Months Ago

8 Months Ago

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Hi my name is M. Sam Teague every just calls Sam. I'm a student by day and a writer by... well whenever I get time. My hobbies include anything from sitting in bed all day to rock climbing and skiing more..