Naked before me

Below is the poem entitled Naked before me which was written by poet
Juan Paolo
Galua. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

Naked before me

I see you with her
and I know from your eyes
your vision whirled
You hold her hand
and when our gaze met
you unclasp it
No need to hide honey
I know we expired
I thought at first
Time would make us wine
But it just turned us into
a fluid in the mouth
Fermented from sleep
sour, smelly, unswallowable
Your ways of loving
were exposed before me
When our gaze locked,
Don't bow your head yet-
I'm still recollecting it
How sweet you love
Rather how sweet you lie?
The way you thawed my heart
by the heat of your tongue
and now I prove
that tongue's no better than a snake's
and Oh! how sensational you love
You always sent me screaming
through the night
But don't be ashamed honey
if your skill is naked before me
Cause I know for certain
That the lady whom you're with
Will fall to no better than my fate.

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Hmmm, am I getting this right? the lady left you for another woman? Very interesting this one!! I love how unique some of your lines come off, such as the way you describe time turning you both into a nasty fluid instead of wine! I hope I can still find at least one other poem of yours I have not read yet! this one was great. Andrea