Mosaic Minutes

REVISION, REVISION

Today was all about revision. We talked about how revising a work marks the difference between an amateur and a professional writer, and I shared a couple of pages of my own novel in progress, which has plenty of red marks all over it. I also shared some editorial mark-up symbols, as well as a 2-part blog post that I’ve written on revision. We used the blog post to structure our revision session today.

Phase one of revision is putting the work away and getting some distance from it. We talked about the natural tendency for young writers to procrastinate on their school assignments, but that – eventually – they would see the value in being able to write earlier on, and revisit their work with some objectivity. We then talked about what they need to look for in the content edit stage, or phase two:

Flow

Setting/Description – too much? Not enough?

Characters – do they work? Are they consistent? Is there growth?

Dialogue

Plot

We had one student bring in poetry, and the rules of revision are a little different there. In this first stage, the critique partner focused on:

Sense

Lines that don’t work

Rhymes that don’t work

We split into content edit teams to peer edit one another’s work:

Levi and Annalise

Christian and Olivia

Charlie and Ariana

Mason, Noelani, and Denver

The students worked on the piece, and then conferenced with one another. We talked about the fact that the writer is not required to accept all criticism and must weigh it carefully.

With word choices, we discussed “killing your darlings” – those wonderful phrases that make us dance in our chair when we write them, but which distract rather than add from a piece of work. Again, poetry was a little different. Capitalization became a more important issue, as did cadence and rhythm. The proofreading/line edit teams were:

Denver and Levi

Noelaini and Annalise

Mason and Christian

Ariana , Olivia and Charlie

Once that stage was done, the final stage, reading the work aloud, was done by the writers themselves. We talked about trusting your voice to find problems your brain doesn’t necessarily find – and that, if you do nothing else with an assignment that you’ve waited to work on, reading it aloud when you’re done is a good way to turn up problems and errors.

PICK THREE

Once they were done, we had some time left over, so we did a quick pick three prompt. The writers were given three words, and had two minutes to try and trade them with one another. Then they began (though they didn’t finish) stories using these three words.

THE ONE PAGE TENDENCY

One other thing we discussed today is their tendency to write a page or half a page and then stop writing. We discussed what the true length of short stories, novellas, and novels should be, and that they need to complete a work when they’re given time to do so at home. I hope to see them take this seriously in the coming weeks! HOMEWORK With a week off next week, they have two assignments:

Complete their revisions and email the revised work to me at mcameron@writerscircleworkshops.com. This needs to be done by next Monday, so I’ll have time to review what they’ve done and offer further suggestions.

Complete the Pick 3 pieces they began in class and bring them into class in two weeks.