This is an interesting concept, but I think you need to consider a better crop, the lighting is ok, but the lighter area at the top of the frame is a bit distracting. I don't know if you shot this hand-held but if you did I would definitely recommend using a good tripod. I'd love it to be a bit sharper.

I am going to try to be specific with my suggestions as per the email you sent me asking for advice, so don't take it personally if I sort of pick apart your photos, I'm just trying to tell you what I would do if the shot was mine.