Your drawings could be a lot better if they weren't so messy. Here's some tips:

• Don't use a one pixel brush. Make the brush bigger. Use the Webink brush if you're using dA Muro, and activate pen pressure if your program lets you to.

• Use Layers for coloring. Don't use one layer and the bucket tool to fill it in, because it leaves white pixels if your lines are made with a brush. Plush you can shade without worrying about going over the lines.

I think you still have to learn the "elements" when it comes to shading though?And I'm not quite sure if you were heading for a "head looking down" look or head looking at the camera straight up" look.

I personally find the anatomy fine on the new one (body shape), but the legs may need to go more central into her body? (Not sure how to explain)

And one shoulder (her left shoulder) is slightly downwards. (The shoulders don't seem long enough in my opinion either though?)

And all I can say about the head is how her eyes, nose, and mouth need to go higher. Also, put space in between her mouth and nose only by a little bit.

Oh, and don't forget head shape! There needs to be a jaw before the chin, and I don't see of a jaw formation here?

In my opinion, the newer version of this drawing deserves a 8.3/10. Keep on drawing!