AWESOME! Thanks so much for the great read, can't wait to read your future stories (and more of your current ones :)! Question though, could there possibly be an epilouge for this storie or is it completely finished (either way, it rocks and I enjoyed reading it very much :)!

Adrian St Claire chapter 12 . 10/30/2010

Ah, the second story in so many days that's hopelessly rushed and sadly under developed. Seriously, you need to take what you have here and full it out, double or triple the chapter legnth. It could be a really great story, but there's no characterization, no description... Make it better, I know that you can.

Pretty good story. Some of the time transitions were confusing due to the lack of dividing lines or starts or whatever you want to call them. I felt Nikki changed a bit too drastically from the hardass to the lovey-dovey type; I had been hoping you would keep her more like you had first presented her. Overall though, fairly well written, with few grammatical errors. Nice job ]