My new idea, Paradox Box, is a box made from the "Telekill Alloy" (Do I need to ask permission from the original writer of 148?) that contains its own SCP article, but the box itself dates back to more than 7000 years ago.

Owlman is a humanoid resembling an owl, that when touched, causes an overwhelming feeling of worthlessness.

Looking for feedback for both (especially Owlman, which I'd really enjoy seeing on the mainlist), and any feedback would be appreciated. Thanks.

I'm at work and don't have time right now to read the actual drafts, but based on these summaries:

No. Telekill is explicitly an alloy created in the modern era, and degrades over time. Even if the box was somehow affected by a temporal anomaly and sent back in time from now/near future, it should've degrade WELL before the Foundation got their hands on it. Also, crosstesting with Telekill is… generally not a good idea.

Uh… okay? Is there some reference to some mythological creature that I'm missing? Because this seems kinda… random. And not terribly interesting.

I'm sorry, but much of the information in this (very oddly formatted) line-by-line is misleading to straight-up wrong. Don't give formatting advice (like you did) if you don't know the correct way of doing things yourself. Much of your tonal advice I find somewhat shifty as well, and I do hope you're not seriously suggesting he adds an exchange like the one here anywhere in his SCP.

In short, I suggest you wait until you've created a successful SCP (i.e gotten some real experience) before making any more of these line-by-lines. It's better to abstain than to give someone misleading advice. Not trying to be harsh here, but I'm frankly more concerned about the guy getting good advice.

As for the "reasonably sized bed of hay" thing, it would be reasonably sized for whatever's gonna sleep in it. Specifying the exact size, I think, would be unnecessary. Same for the water feeder, "large" means large in terms of water feeder sizes. Like this: http://c713667.r67.cf3.rackcdn.com/YI2419G7C_1_large.jpg I'm just being realistic.

Specifying the type of mice seems a little on the pointless side. Would it make any difference if it were your everyday house mouse or your lesser-spotted three-toed himalayan albino mouse? To owls, mice are mice. Owl eat mouse.

As for the height thing, I think you may have a point there. But it might just be irrelevant detail, and may not add anything of interest to the article.

Haha, I respect you're at work right now, but I believe your points are explained within the articles.

Telekill is explicitly an alloy created in the modern era, and degrades over time. Even if the box was somehow affected by a temporal anomaly and sent back in time from now/near future, it should've degrade WELL before the Foundation got their hands on it. Also, crosstesting with Telekill is… generally not a good idea.

The article explains that a layer of bacteria of unkown species was discovered on the surface of the box, which is supposed to indicate that the bacteria itself acted as a preservative for the box, keeping it fresh. I also made it very clear that the Telekill Alloy was only recently manufactured. As for the cross-testing thing, I kind of agree with you there. I might change it from Telekill to a completely new and unknown "anomalous metal", as it would give the Foundation more of a reason to actually contain the thing, seeing as they already know how to contain Telekill.

Is there some reference to some mythological creature that I'm missing? Because this seems kinda… random. And not terribly interesting.

It doesn't appear to be an interesting concept because of the way I summarised it, but I've added testing logs and a horrific backstory of sorts (which kind of explains everything, including why it makes you feel worthless), which I included to make it a whole lot more interesting. Personally, I think it makes up for the seemingly random idea (I think this is a suitable point to say: You can't always judge a book by its cover :P).