I loved that initial scene. I had to smile at that. I suppose, being a woman, you could relate to that sort of thing more than I. I have always joked "Yup; when it comes to babies, women have to do all the work for once - the guys just get to have fun."

Darned my constomary gripes . I noticed you used "minutes". Well, not that it is a big problem, you were just getting into the whole more-alien thing the last couple chapters, and I was enjoying every mandible-twitch of it. I'd be great to see the same in dialogue.
Also, you had a Jackal mention a "stitch." Perhaps it was something you didn't give a second thought to, but I would have thought the Covenant in posetion of some nifty medical gadgets.

A Hunter talking and saving Orna? Hmm. Interesting. It was very enjoyable to picture, however.

That was a very interesting "artifact" and even more interesting inclusion of that vision. I am intigued. It will be interesting to see how this plays out.

Overall, this was very good. I did not tire through any of it. Keep up the great work. Just don't let your other stories' quality drop ._________________-MCC

Whatever the heck it means, it is definetly high rank. You recall whitey was in command of at least several spec-ops squads, and high enough rank to talk to the Heirarchs? Well Orna is commanding a white armoured dude. So whatever rank he is, it is high.

Very good story. I've read a lot of Chuckles stuff lately, so it's nice to find some writing that is not so morbid for a change.