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A good start, but it definitely needs some variation to it. Someone mentioned a minor part.

[user=29844265]MusiKals[/user]

If you don't mind, can I make another piece based on your melody? I'll give you credit for your melody.

[user=2458231]lucaskrumenaur[/user]

Sure thing!

[user=7476831]Teodor Lontos[/user]

The melodic line wasn't too repetitive but the rhythm certainly was. Also, the time signature is wrong. A 6/4 is made out of 2 groups of 3 quarter notes. The melody you've written is in 12/8, made out of 4 groups of 3 eighth notes. So change that too!

[user=2458231]lucaskrumenaur[/user]

Done, thanks for the tip!

[user=31928360]joshuacali1[/user]

no offense i find it a little repetitive. maybe add a minor key or a line that trails of a little bit

[user=31273168]Gabe Bilbe[/user]

It's an enjoyable melody, and with the right elements added, such as an accompanying harmony, it could be a great piece of music.

[user=20969656]OmgLol LolOmg[/user]

Would you give me the right to create a variation on this piece, using its already established melody?

[user=2458231]lucaskrumenaur[/user]

Sure!

[user=20969656]OmgLol LolOmg[/user]

Thanks for allowing me to make an edited version of this! I'm also pretty new to composition and I feel its most important to just have fun making music!
Heres my version: https://musescore.com/user/20969656/scores/5542338

At first it reminded me of a little nursery rhyme song I learned as a kid, but, it's quite a nice simple little melody! Not too repetitive at all, but I'd actually suggest an A the octave below the second to last note as an ending.

[user=28057286]EthanHarris[/user]

It's a nice melody that makes sense musically. Now try adding a harmony to make it more interesting to the ear.