Hmmm... interesting. I like Fanny's tone of voice here. It's a little trepident and unsure, like she thinks that she's crazy for reading into it.

Watch out for spontaneous capitalization, which occurs from place to place in this story. I would also like to see you add in more detail about what she sees. How is the look he gives Helmholtz different than the one he gives Lenina? Go into more detail about what she sees to solidify the possibility of a relationship. Right now, it feels a little...rumor-ish. Her theory's not based on a lot, so you'll want to back her up, in that regard.