Diary of an ugly kid..

Earth was left 10 years ago. Elle is an orphan, an ugly kid in a beautiful kids world. Then, Daniel appears, revealing all secrets, and wreaking havoc. Will Elle join him, her love and lust take over, or will she stop him?

Like you said, it's going a bit fast but you set an interesting setting and I'm sucking it all in :)
Daniel is a bit suspicious, kissing on the first meeting. But I love how you say everything in the diary entries and make it sound like she's been there forever and its just her way of life :)

Again, really good, but this chapter lost the spark the first chapter had. What happened between the chapters? It left a big hole in it, a whole bunch of background info, that I think you should spend some time filling. But still a great job! XD Let me know when you update, okay?