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Awesome.
All that's left is Golde, and then we'll have a full set! The first one, excluding the Zanpakutou and the original Hex Charts

Originally Posted by arceus03

You and your obsession with complete sets, lol

It's symmetrical! Look at ILPy foaming at the mouth

Complete sets are awesome 8D

xD I wouldn't be foaming at the mouth unless it was symmetrical horizontally/vertically. Because then I wouldn't have to tilt my head.

Originally Posted by Eon Master

Stop channeling Jin with these jokes. You're freakin' me out.

I wasn't actually channeling Jin. I'm not good with embarassment.

Originally Posted by Eon Master

Yes Why yes, yes she has. XD Nah, but I've come to absolutely love Gin's character, on par with Grimmjow or Starrk. He's just so complex and his motives are always his own (that's why I said 'Sophisticated'). Plus, he even looks like an amazing character, which Starrk can't really claim and Grimmjow can't quite match.

All very valid points 8D

Originally Posted by Eon Master

EDIT: I'm also thinking of redoing the Battle Themes that I did a while ago if I have time. Yay or nay?

Sure, no complaints from me.

Originally Posted by kusari

You guys ever wake up and you realize that it's just one of those days? I did today. It's just been one thing after another. I woke up to find that my 32 gig flash drive, that had literally everything data-wise on it, disappeared and **** went downhill from there.

Basically, I've got a lot happening at the moment and it'll be a while before I get to post again. It'll be at least a week, probably more. Just thought I should tell you guys.

Ouch, that sucks. Good luck getting everything back together again.

Originally Posted by Northern Lights

Spoiler:

Try having a month where your dog has anemia, has her spleen taken out, goes on steroids, develops insulin dependant diabetes, the guinea pig has to be put down, the dog now has IMHA [immune mediated haemolytic anemia] which is potentially fatal.
Yeah, i've not been good latley.

You guys ever wake up and you realize that it's just one of those days? I did today. It's just been one thing after another. I woke up to find that my 32 gig flash drive, that had literally everything data-wise on it, disappeared and **** went downhill from there.

Basically, I've got a lot happening at the moment and it'll be a while before I get to post again. It'll be at least a week, probably more. Just thought I should tell you guys.

Heck yeaz. But I've moved on, and I'm now more awesome than EVAR!

MC and I have been working on my new Zan, I hope everyone approves. But be forewarned, it contains cliches & stolen borrowed ideas.

Spoiler:- New Zan:

Spoiler:- Part 1:

Zanpaktou: Kagayaki Kyoujou no Senshi. (Shining Warrior of Truth)Sealed form: Standard Katana, the hilt is baby blue with silver wrap. The guard is in the shape of the Filipino sun (as a nod to me being Flip IRL and an allusion to my Zan’s name.)

Description: A pair of giant gauntlets (Minus the face of Zeus & the armor past the elbow.) That are Baby blue (Base coat), silver and black (Alternate trim/border colors) in color. Four flat (two on each side) cords, studded with spikes, run from the end of the gauntlets at the elbow, up my biceps and triceps and meet/connect with a black Filipino Sun & stars triangular crest (4in across) at the center of my chest and a larger crest (7in across) on my back.

Abilities: Provides good defense with their size, enhance my physical strength, and pact a great punch (literally & figuratively). But due to their bulk, I am hindered in the mobility department.
It has a kidou disruptor. A mediocre kidou user casting Hado #4 Byakurai, will severely weaken or dissipate completely. While someone high kidou skills like Byakuya, does the same Hado, it will be somewhat weakened.
No attacks, I’ll just punch and block.

Description: For lack of a better description and laziness, Tadashii Shainingu Senshi no Shin is based off of this Battlizer. The red parts, gold shoulder fenders and gold shin guards are changed into baby blue, the blue is now silver, and the black lines, arm pieces & belt are black. The “M” on the chest is replaced with my Flip crest, but the lines that come “M” & run down the armor remain. The blue “frills” on the helmet are removed and the blacked out visor is in the shape of an “X” (the bottom half of the X is half the length of the top half, and tapir into sharp points.) But the crest remains.

Abilities: With its sleeker, armor design, I have higher defensive and mobility capabilities. Like its Shikai form, it disrupts/cancels out nearly any kidou up to level 90 (also depends on the kidou user, of course.)
The helmet has an Iron-Man type function. It shows my current health & reiatsu levels, my vitals (heart rate, blood pressure), and armor and bone damage. It can also display environmental stats, such as oxygen level, oxygen content and temperature. And finally tracks any enemy reiatsu with in a range of 300 ft.

Attacks:
Again like its shikai, I prefer to do hand to hand combat.

Kagayaki Kobushi (Radiant/Radiance Fist): A 6 foot plasma two handed sword. It is the offensive manifestation. Summoning/conjure/use it drains so much energy I can only use it once every 24 hours.

Kenage Engo (Heroic Protection): A medieval knight shield. It is the defensive counter part of Kagayaki Kobushi. And like its counterpart, it can only be used once every 24 hours.

Other: In this form, I tend to speak in a cliché heroic tone complete with puns and metaphors.

Zan Spirit: Senshi’s personality is a stereotypical/borderline parody of Super Sentai/Super Hero with a strong sense of justice and protection, complete super hero dialog.
In sealed/shikai, Senshi wears a de-armores, standard spandex Kamen Rider/Super Sentai version of my Bankai. And since my powers are his, he also wears the armor in his bankai appearance. If that makes sense.

Inner World: “The Temple of Truth” An enormous stone temple, the interior is more futuristic, with lights, security cameras, and a control room.

Hmm... Well i've been following anime but i dint have time to watch weekly so i watches them like once every 2 week. Basically im thinking of following with the manga too but yeah.. dont have much time.

Recap:The Head-Captain had been poisoned, right after a mission went horribly wrong. The price of the failed mission was high. The Eighth Squad Captain had died during said mission, leaving the Seireitei shaken up badly. Now the Captains planned their counter-strike as well as investigated the creator of the poison. One of great four Noble clans even getting involved in this mess of affairs.

Her body tensed as he came closer to her. His tall and dark body overshadowing her more petite and pale one. The cold darkness of the empty office only made the situation more heart racing. As he drew closer, his dominating aura washed over her, flooding the room with his intensity.

The aura that sent enemies running terrorized with fear or charging in reckless as a last-ditch effort of survival, overwhelmed her senses. Her eyes became glazed over, making her sight become blurry. Her nose was assaulted with a mixed of smells that made up his scent. The smells stimulated her taste-buds, giving her a taste in her mouth that was hard to describe. It was subtle and faint, yet combined with the smell, was a taste that worked up every single taste-bud.

His voice made her eardrums savor every vibration. His deep baritone vocals left her in an almost trace like state. He body was covered in sweat, with every bead of sweat falling off her skin was felt. His very presence made her body become much more sensitive and-

A powerful voice broke the group listening on the story being read to them. “What the hell are you all doing?” Captain Seijuro asked as his booming voice broke them from their enthralled enjoyment of the story. Him towering over all of them might have had something to do with it as well.

The crowd of shinigami mostly made of "women" couldn't look at him. A large number of them were blushing, few trying to get away while others laughed nervously. All but one female were too embarrassed to say anything. The exception of the women, walked right up to him. getting as close she could to his face and stared dead set into his eyes.

“Why the hell did you stop story time? I wanted to know if the girl would pass out from her heart attack before or after describing every bloody thing!” The Captain of Squad Eleven, Aozora asked him glaring.

Seijuro frowned and motioned to a nearby rooftop, “Meet me.” That was all he told her before flash stepping away from the group. She growled a bit, but complied and followed him to roof via flash-step.

They both left the group of flustered shinigami to promptly nose-bled over images of The Seventh Captain being the man in the book. Then quickly scattered to treat their current condition before someone saw them.

“Why are you just sitting back listening to stories at a time like this!?” Seijuro asked her, vexed at her seemingly lackadaisical behavior. His metal boots almost left an impression on the roof's ceiling tiles.

“Don't get your panties in a bunch, I really can't do anything until Ryuu is free to send someone to the battlefield with me to collect data.” She told her with a hint or boredom in her voice. “Niche and Mizuhashi pretty much own him at this point right now.”

Seijuro held the bridge of his nose in frustration. She did have a point, as he couldn't find Ryuu either. “Still doesn't tell me why you were listening to that garbage.”

“Well originally I wasn't planning too, it just happened. I was coming back from Squad Eleven, heard the part about her “heart racing and feeling unable to breathe” and stopped to listen.” She told him not phased at all by his aggravation. “So then I listen some more, and either that girl has a messed up illness or she is the only person to describe everything around her while having a heart attack.”

Seijuro chuckled a bit, that explanation could only be pulled off by Aozora. “That explains a lot, you didn't strike me as the type to read those kinds of books anyway.”

“What kind of book was it? It seem really weird and described everything in a super vivid detail.” She asked him wondering what the heck she was just read.

He furrowed his brows, how do you explain something like that to a person? “You'll learn in the streets like everyone else when your older.” He told her not wanting to tell her the basis behind those kinds of novels.

Aozora pouted a bit and scoffed, “Lame.” Silence fell between the two of them for a good fifteen seconds before she broke it, “So what are you doing now anyway?”

Seijuro's expression darkened a bit, “I was going to give Yukimura back up, since Senbon was originally supposed to go assist him.”

“Well lets go then! I hate standing around anyway.” She told him eagerly and impatiently.

Both wasted no more time with semi-idle chit-chat, flash stepping to the gate to the World of the Living, the Dangai.

The two saw a familiar face standing in front of gate when they arrived. Two guards were also at the gate, seemingly preventing anyone from leaving at the moment.

“On the orders of Fourth Squad Captain Mizuhashi Akira, you three are not allowed passage into the World of the Living until he says otherwise.” Both guards did their best to stay strong and not show any fear, but were terrified inside. As their luck would have it, both new arrivals could smell their fear and just looked at them. The weight of their stares along was slowly crushing the two.

“Oji-san?” Aozora called out to the Sixth Squad Captain standing in between them and in-front of them, blocking her from simply smacking the two guards out-of-the-way.

“Sen...” Seijuro said not taking his eyes off the two terrified guards.

Senshuken didn't turn to acknowledge his two former students, just simply did a gesture with his hands and said something smoothly, calming and with the emotion of a frozen wasteland.

“Hakufuku.”

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In the Artic, a battle raged on in a furious blizzard, the fact that it was the middle of six months of night, didn't help at all. As the harsh white coldness ruthlessly washed over the land, only two powerful beings seemed to be able to work through it. Four figures cloaked in black laid motionless in the snow, bodies being slowly buried by the blizzard.

“Those guys were no fun, an hour in the snow and they're all dying of Hypothermia. Wimps.” Commented a figure seemingly enjoying the freezing temperatures and harsh weather. He was hard to see through the blizzard, his all white uniform and shoulder length white hair stuffed into his shirt.

The two glared at each other through the harsh blizzard, waiting for the perfect moment to strike. Yukimura had the advantage, the frozen wasteland was a winter wonderland for his Zanpaktou and fighting style. He knew nothing of this arrancar but felt that he could easily kill this one without much effort.

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Kida frowned at the Captain that had returned to the captain's Meeting Hall, Dre, Zameric, and Saiga all focused on her. They all were impatiently waiting to be filled on what exactly was going on, the fact that it wasn't the Head-Captain briefing them, just added to the tension and uneasiness of the group.
Kida worked on a computer console installed in the captain's meeting table. After a few moments a large flat screen slowly descended from the ceiling, facing all of them. A few rounds of typing and button pressing activated the screen, showing various data records and stats.

“Great, should we get popcorn for this movie?” Zameric asked laying back in his seat and smirking.

“Now's not the time.” Kida said in a bitter tone of voice. She sent a cold glare at Zameric, making Dre and Saiga pity him a bit.

The table then changed a bit, a miniature screen complete with readings and data appearing before the three Captains being briefed. Finally, the battle data was shown to them as clear as day.

Hollows of all shapes and sized appeared in the clear blue sky, a back of Menos Grande blocking the sunlight for many around the area.

“Damn. Must have taken all day to clean up that mess.” Dre commented after hearing the head count.

Leading their squads into battle, Senshuken, Seijuro, Senbon and Aozora all left the small fry hollows to their lower ranked members, heading for the Adjuchas.

“Oh this will take a while.” Senbon said looking at all the enemies around them.

“ There are so many to kill, I feel like a kid at a candy store!” Aozora said cheerfully as he rushed to slice a Adjuchas in half.

“It's obvious hollow bait was used in large amounts, but I didn't know they could be potent enough for attracting Adjuchas class hollows.” Seijuro said as he prepared to fight the nearest foes by him.

“Most of these are just freshly made Adjuchas, so their lack of experience will be their downfall.” Senshuken said releasing his zanpaktou.

“How can you tell Senshuken-Sensei?” Senbon asked slicing off the arm of an adjuchas that tried to attack him and then landing a killing blow to its head.

“Just look at how Aozora is tearing through them like wet tissue paper.” Senshuken responded pointing to the blood soaked blur also know as Aozora.

“One little, two little, three dead adjuchas! Four little, five little, six dead adujuchas!” Aozora sang as she ruthless and quickly sliced through any adjuchas in her path. Her prey tried hard to fight back firing ceros at her, but she dodged them while singing happily. “Seven little, eight little, nine dead adjuschas and I still have hundreds of hollows to go!”

“Well she's enjoying herself.” Seijuro commented flatly as he cut a adjuchas's arm off. The hollow charged at him screaming in rage, but he simply flash stepped out of the way and delivered the killing blow in one swift motion.

“Honestly with Aozora here, we pretty much can just sit back and watch her kill them all.” Senbon told the three of them, countering a cero fired at him with mid ranged kido. Senbon ended the hollow with a combination of kido spells, damaging a few other hollows near by.

Senshuken send multiple kido spell blasts at the gillains and adjuchas in his line of sight, “True, but then we'd all get out of shape if we let her do all the fighting.”

Aozora currently was riding on a winged hollow, decapitating anything in her range while directing the poor hollow toward large groups of them. “Yee-haw! Giddy up ugly winged horse thing.”

The Adjuchas fired cero and bala blasts all targeting the winged hollow and Aozora, scoring a direct hit and causing a cloud of smoke to appear, covering the aftermath.

“Aozora!” Senbon yelled out as he watched her get hit.

Senshuken and Seijuro didn't even seem phased by the event, “Those morons used too many bala blasts, she's fine.”

“Aww, how cute. You all think that's playing rough. “ Aozora said revealed to only be partly scuffed and singed by the blasts. “ Hey Old Man and Wolfie! Lets show these wusses how it's done!”

Seijuro and Senshuken both smirked a bit, both preparing to put an iota of effort into the fight.

“Disappear and Reappear, Kagebu!”

“Ravage, Garou!”

“Immolate, Iroriryuu!”

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Meanwhile, on the side of the battlefield that wasn't completely one-sided, Seated officers watched the carnage in awe. A Lieutenant going over to the one Captain not acting like a mass murdering sociopath.

“Captain Senbon, a few men reported a strange light coming from the city below. The few that went to investigate haven't come back yet.” Lieutenant of Squad Six, Testu Shinku reported to him.

“I see. I'll investigate it myself.” Senbon told him confidently, flying over to the area in question.
“Blaize and Luke, you're with me in cleaning up any hollows that come near that area, got it?!” Testu asked the two, making sure his order was clear.

“Yes, sir!” Kaii said dashing over to the site and attacking a hollow that had gotten close.

“I wanna fight the adjuchas!” Luke told him looking over at the adjuchas being obliterated by the three Captains.

“I wasn't asking. Now get over to your position and do your job!” Testu told him having no qualms of smacking him to make a point.

“Fine.” Luke said grumpily as he attacked a hollow that came too close to the town.

Testu turned towards where the captains were, watching them wipe out the hollow army without breaking a sweat pretty much. “I love watching them cause so much carnage.” He said cheerfully moving stray blonde hairs from his face.

An adjuchas got close to the city, Testu and Kaii both sensed it and were about to land a quick death-blow on the thing, until Luke charged head on at it. The adjuchas had four arms and was covered in black fur against its gray skin.

The adjuchas fired four bala blasts at once, two connecting with Jaku as he managed to deflect the other two. “Ha! You'll-” He promptly was nearly smashed into pieces as the hollow used sonido to add speed to his momentum and land a single deadly tackle. Luke had braced himself but quickly opened his eyes to see what happened to the attack.

“I think he's just over did taking his vitamins.” Kaii answered back jokingly as he stood in-between the hollow and Luke.

“Don't butt in! I had him right where I wanted him!” Luke yelled at the two of them ticked off.

“Use your head, if we didn't do anything, you'd be dead right now.” Testu said harshly not bothering to look Luke in the eye. Instead he prepared to cast a few kido spells, his mind focused.

Kaii felt a small stream of blood run from his black hair with brown highlights to left orange eye. He closed it and tried to wipe it away, “ I think I'll get a bit more serious.”

His expression darkened as his eyes grew cold and broadcasted a death glare. “Freeze the Icy Water, Koorimizu!”

The captains watching the mission video data all absorbed the information playing before them in the dark room.

“I don't understand, this mission seems to be going almost flawlessly so far, I mean you even have three captains there who almost specialize in dealing with multiple enemies.” Dre said wondering how this mission ended so badly.

“Just keep quiet and keep watching.” Saiga told him yawning a bit.

“Someone must had poked fun at them for their weird hair styles, making Grandpa and Wolfie over there pissed when they came to the meeting.” Zameric said jokingly to the group of captains.

Kida sent a death-glare at him, “We have one captain dead already, do you really want to be next one? No? Then HUSH!”

Silenced filled the room as they watched on, this meant that the battle recording would be Senny's last recorded mission.

Outside side the meeting room, Dre's fifth seat and lieutenant both waited for the meeting to be over. Having an important message from his family.

Senbon walked around the city, going unseen by its inhabitants. “I don't sense anything at all,” he said to himself out loud. That was unusual. He placed his hand on his sword, mainly as a precaution for any hidden traps or ambushes set for him.

There was a tingling in the back of his skull. While everything had been unusually still before, he now sensed someone coming to his location at a fast pace. He drew his sword, bracing himself to fight, and looked toward the direction the aura was coming from. He frowned as it turned out to be Luke with his sword already drawn.

“I can fight the weird guys in the cloaks no problem!” Luke told him grinning.

Senbon turned to see three cloaked figures standing a few feet in front of him. He was shocked to see that a group manged to sneak up on him. This fact alone tipped him off that they were nothing to take lightly.

Senbon's expression harden, with Luke here, he was at even of a disadvantage. He gripped his sword and got into a stance, “Who are you three?”

The white cloaks with silver lining hide their figures and faces from view. The only thing else noticeable about them besides their tall height, was the kido enhanced chains. The chains seem to be for the one in the center, as it looked as if the other two were containing them.

A full minute passed and yet none of them answered Senbon's question. Jaku walked up to the three, “Hey cloaked guys, I'm the most promising and badass member of Squad Seven, Jaku!”

Silence filled the street they all standing on, Senbon wondering if Jaku had a death wish. He couldn't believe how arrogant he was, there just wasn't any way a seated officer ould have such a big ego. The cloaked figures seemed unaffected by the declaration by Jaku, save for the one on the left. They gave the thin chains they were holding to the one on the right, then slowly walked up to Jaku.

The figure was short compared to Jaku, but didn't seem to care about the height difference based on her response. “Boys talk action while Men make action, now lets see how much a man you really are!”

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“Flourish, Shippu no Hana Toge!” Testu's blade became large fan covered in vines. The fan was almost as big as his entire body and the vines were covered in sharp thorns. The vines quickly charged and impaled a hollow nine feet away from him, killing it.

“You could have easily killed it without releasing your zanpaktou, so whats the deal?” Kaii asked holding his ice blade in a neutral position.

“I didn't feel like going all the way over there to kill it.” Testu replied to him in a nonchalant manner.

“Pretty much everyone released their Zanpaktou for overkill. I mean just look at what the captains did to those poor Adjuchas.” Kaii commented as he noticed that pretty much all the hollows were taken care of.

The two quickly found themselves hearing an awful screech that made their bodies become too tense to move. Shocked and confused about what was happening they struggled trying to move and make sense of the situation.

“You shinigami think you're all hot shit. Well now I'll rip the smirk right off your ugly little faces!” An Adjuchas appeared before the two, its body covered in spikes and dark greenish brown skin glowing. “I can use sound-waves to trap my prey and make them helpless. Now prepare to be my new meal shinigami!”

“Swoop down and snatch your prey, Hauringu-Ryoku!” Yelled a lean and slightly muscular man with long straight hair nearly covering his teal eyes. His sword became two daggers.

The adjuchas quickly turned to glare at new arrival, “Whoever the hell you are shinigami, you're dead.”

“Buraito wa, bimu!” The shinigami quickly crushed a dagger in his had, the other becoming a normal sized sword again. “Hakai no Hibana!” Balls of electrical energy were fired at the hollow in rapid session, injuring him.

“Damn shinigami, I'll feast upon you first!” The Adjuchas said as he unleashed his sound-wave attack on the shinigami. “You're finished!” He charged at the shinigami, unable to move due to his power.

“Touketsu Kouzui!” The attack never reached him as a powerful blast of reiatsu damaged his body.

“Your mistake was leaving us alive.” Kaii said as he watched Testu send a vine to deliver the killing blow to the adjuchas.

“Thanks Akio, I can't believe such a weakling got the jump on us.” Testu told him laying his fan against his shoulder.

“Yeah, thanks a lot Akio...?” Kaii said questioning, hoping he would tell him his last name as well.

“You're pretty good for a fifth seat.” Kaii told him comparing Akio to Jaku.

“Thank you, though I came to ask why I was left to guard my post alone. I understand if Captain Senbon needed him for the investigation, but not sending someone to watch my back in battle, confused me.” Akio told the two lieutenants calmly.

“A lieutenant or third seat would be asked to investigate something. Even if he needed him specifically, we'd know about it.” Kaii answered him with a irradiated look on his face.

“Go inform the captains about this, meanwhile, the two of us will “ask” Jaku about whats going on.” Testu ordered Akio with an evil look on his face.

“Ask meaning yelling at him for going against orders, right?” Kaii asked as he went over to the area being investigated.

“Maybe for you, for me it means savage beating.” Testu told him gleefully as he followed Kaii to the city.

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“Is that it? Little boys can put up better fights than you, I can't even call you an infant. They are nowhere near as weak and pathetic as you are right now.” The shortest cloaked figure taunted Jaku with a voice that sounded like a noble woman's.

Jaku tried to release his zanpaktou, but found that he couldn't do it. He called and called out the release command for his sword, but was only met with failure. “Coward! What kind of trick did you pull?”

The figure laughed at him, “It's the warrior that makes the weapon, if you fight like this without it, I doubt you'd be any better with it.”

Senbon frowned, he couldn't release his sword either. It was clear that they did something to block anyone trying to use their zanpaktou, or at least that would be what he thought. The fact the female sounding cloaked figure had a zanpaktou and could use it with no problem, made him think there was more to this situation.

“I was just going easy on you, now I'll get serious!” Jaku yelled as he ran at the cloaked figure with his sword.

The figure had a golden whip as a weapon, using it to whip Jaku away as soon as he got anywhere near them. Senbon noticed the two other figures seemed to be just watching as their ally toyed with Jaku. He began chanting a kido spell chant in a whispered low pitch. He planned to take all three out with one attack.

“Is it rude to say I'm bored during a fight?” The figure with a whip asked as they smacked away another attack from Jaku, sending him rolling over to where Senbon was. “Hey, I hope you plan to do something besides watch, killing the both of you like this is just boring.”

A black box formed and trapped the three cloaked figures, Jaku got up and looked on in shock. Several black spear like protrusions appeared on all sides of the box.

“Hado number Ninety, Kurohitsugi!”

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Akio rushed over to the captains as soon as he caught them in his sights. The captains in question seemed to conversing pleasantly with each other after pretty much wiping out all the hollows in the area.

“Captain Seijuro, Captain Aozora, and Captain Tomoku, I was ordered by my Lieutenant to inform you all that the we cleared the hollows in the area. Also that Captain Senbon went to investigate a strange sighting in the city.” Akio kept going as all three captains paid attention to him.

“Fifth seat Jaku went along with him, though I was told nobody ordered him to do so. So now Lieutenants Shinku and Blaize have gone to the city to clear up why he went there unasked.”

Senshuken and Seijuro both face palmed over the report, meanwhile Aozora looked at her sword in the sunlight. “Can I kill him please?”

“Lets go.” Senshuken said to all of them as he rushed off to the city, Seijuro keeping up with him and Akio following them.

“Last one there gets stabbed in the foot!” Aozora shouted as she rushed off after the group.

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Kaii and Testu arrived to the battle after the kido spell was set off. A giant cloud of dark smoke and dust covering the streets. They saw Captain Senbon and Jaku facing the aftermath of the spell, unflinching.

“What happened?” Kaii asked as he and Testu joined them on the streets below.

“I had this girly sounding guy right where I wanted 'em, then Captain Senbon blew them up along with his buddies.” Jaku told them, watching the smoke.

“They're still alive.” Senbon told them noting that Kaii and Testu had released their zanapktou before arriving to the scene. His attention was quickly shifted back to the smoke, he could sense that they were about to make their move. “ Keep on your guard!”

An attack erupted from the smoke, pushing Senbon back a few feet and sending Jaku crashing through a store window.

“What the hell?! I didn't even see it!” Testu said as the next attack came, sending himself and Kaii crashing into a greenhouse across from the store Jaku landed.

As the smoke finally cleared up, he saw the shortest foe was female, her face covered up by her blonde hair with black tips. The one that was chained was missing, while the other one had protected himself with a another kido spell. Shattered pieces of the spell littering the street around them.

“Thanks.” Senbon blocked an attack from behind that nearly cleaved his head off, turning to see that it was missing person talking to and attacking him. Senbon's jaw nearly dropped as he took a close look at him. He looked like Seijuro after being left in desert for months. Shaggy unkempt hair with eyes that glazed over with primal rage and blood-lust.

Senbon flash-stepped away from him, trying to get back in control of the battle. “Who are you?”, Senbon asked while trying to think of how to deal with someone so fast.

“Muyomi, you know brother Seijuro, right? We'll after I kill you all and destroy everything he loves, cares for and stands for, I'll send him to hell to meet you.” With that declaration, he promptly attacked Senbon with ruthlessly wild swings full of power.

The recoil from each block was so much, Senbon couldn't counter or even parry the blows. He tried to distance himself from Muyomi, but he just kept up with him unleashing an unholy hell of blade attacks on him.

Testu and Kaii both pulled themselves together, seeing Senbon being overpowered by Muyomi.

“Hey Kaii.” Testu said as he got ready to fight again.

Kaii got up and looked at Testu expectantly. “Yeah?”

“Wanna try it?” Testu asked him smirking.

“I'd thought you'd never ask!” Kaii responded getting into a good position. “Kongobaku!” A giant sphere of red energy went flying towards Muyomi and Senbon.

Senbon quickly dodged the blast, charging after Kaii.

“Gaki Rekko!” Testu created a circle of energy that fired green blasts of light, forming cage around Muyomi. Muyomi roared like a mad animal and wildly attacked the cage until it started cracking. He then punched the bars, shattering them into pieces.

“Hyoga Seiran!” Kaii sent a massive wave of freezing ice, flash freezing Muyomi and the surrounding street and storefronts.

“This is it! Hado number Fifty-Four, Haien!” Tetsu fired a purple blast of energy meant to incinerate Muyomi to death.

“Hado number Eighty-Eight, Hiryugekizokushintenraiho!” Kaii fired a gigantic blast of electrical energy meant to take Muyomi, his allies and anything else caught in its path.

“On the wall of blue flame, inscribe a twin lotus. In the abyss of conflagration, wait at the far heavens.” Senbon smirked, they were positioned perfectly! Out of each others way and having the almost perfect synergy with their attacks. There attacks along with his boosted by its chant, should be the end of all three of them. He hoped that Seijuro could forgive him for doing this later. “Hado number Seventy-Three, Soren Sokatsui!”

Senbon sent one blast of blue energy at Muyomi and the other at his allies. At the very least Muyomi would be dead and possibly that woman that beat Jaku effortlessly. The remaining cloaked figure was their only hope for survival.

“Jikanteishi.” Senbon's smirk turned to a horrified look of shock as he heard the deep voice call out the spell. Time stopped for anything right in-front of the mystery cloaked figure.

“Kukanteni!” The figure transported the space around Muyomi and the unconscious woman to a spot right behind him. Then transported the kido along with their casters into a position where they would all be vaporized by their own attacks. As time began its flow forward once again, the foe watched as they kido attacks collided with each other, creating a devastating explosion that damaged pretty much anything on the street.

Smoke filled the area once again, hiding the aftermath of the attacks.

Muyomi broke out of his icy prison and glared at the person who saved him, “What the hell did you do!, old man!?”

The man didn't even bother to look at him, “ Saving you two fool hardy children from dying due to your own stupidity and arrogance.”

Muyomi tried to slice him in half, only for the man dodge him. “ I told you all once before, I'm only working with you all to get my wuss of a brother to fight me to the death. You don't get involved with my battles!”

“You would have been dead at least two times since the battle started child, don't you dare think I care about your reasons for fighting. As long as your under master's orders, you shall live until you severe your purpose. Afterward, I could care less if you die or not.”

As the smoke cleared the old man and Muyomi were both shocked to see that all there were still alive. Their uniforms were burned and torn apart, barely holding together. Their skin partly signed and all showing they were exhausted through body language. What was most noticeable was that Senbon had lost his left arm.

“I see, you used Danku to mostly protect the other two and blocked the Haien and Soren Sokatsui with a lesser bakudo spell. I must say that is truly an impressive display of kido mastery. You must have had a very good sensei.” The old man comment in a tone that would fool others into thinking he was enjoying this.

“D-D-Damn...you.” Senbon said weakly as he struggled to stand up. Kaii and Testu were shaken up badly from the near death experience, both trying to pull themselves together.

Muyomi gained a psychotic grin on his face, “Oh boy, brother is on his way to play. Better clean up a bit before he gets here.” He held his sword out, “Massacre, Banryoku no Tsume!”

His blade became as thin and sharp as a scalpel, also much more fragile. Kaii and Testu were confused as to why he would use such a weak looking weapon. Muyomi simply smirked and flash stepped to them, he delivered two slices across the chest to both Lieuteants, blood gushing out from them.

It had felt like a sword had torn through their bodies even though he only delivered shallow cuts to them. Senbon looked on in horror as he was too weak to flash step away in time. The last thing he saw was the cloudless clear blue sky as he was decapitated by Muyomi. The old man quickly incinerated the body with Haien.

Seijuro, Aozora and Senshuken arrived to the battle along with Akio too late to save anyone. Testu and Kaii were horrifically injured and Senbon only had his head left. The group was left almost speechless at what they had come to, save for Seijuro how was now facing to face with his “supposedly” dead little brother.

“Muyomi!” Seijuro yelled out in an anguished rage as he saw the sadistically happy Muyomi grin like a maniac at him.

The old man snapped his fingers, causing a Menos Grande to appear through a garganta to the dimension. It then used a Negacion energy field to transport the woman, Muyomi and himself away from the new arrivals.

“Coward! Get back here and fight like a little girl!” Aozora yelled as she watched them get away.

Senshuken looked over to Seijuro, seeing him paralyzed by a bunch of emotions all fighting for dominance in his mind. All wanting to be expressed and relieve him of this stressful reunion of family he though was dead. He then turned to see Senbon's head between Kaii and Testu's nearly dead bodies. Refusing to let his emotions of seeing his former student and colleague's decapitated head and half-dead lieutenants body, he called for Squad Four to come to the location. He made sure that Mizuhashi came along with the group.

Akio looked at all the carnage and destruction, this mission was a brutal.

...*breathes*

Spoiler:- Author's Notes:

Casts looks so jacked up on the post editor. >.> I was thinking of doing the cast that way from now on. I though it look neater and wouldn't stretch the post out more than it needed to be.

Recap was short and sweet, so I'm happy about that.

The formatting and spacing for these chapters gets jacked up between the 2nd spell checker and what not. So I try my best to go back and make it look as nice as possible. Also slip in all the curse words.

Originally I planned for Akio and Jaku to get injured in the fight as well, then having scuffle between Seijuro, Aozora and Senshuken. Though I had to cut this, since this chapter was borderline 6000 words. DX

I also had planned to have the kido battle longer, but once again, huge chapter is huge. Though I am mostly satisfied with how it all came out.

Once again, thank you everyone who read my chapter and even bothered to read this note. I had alot of fun writing this chapter and hope you enjoyed reading it as well.

We got a new member? Welcome, Ace (mind me calling you that?). arceus03, Captain of Squad 4. Avid Unohana fan If you're not up to date with the manga and/or anime, be careful of spoilers. They contain a lot of those you might not want to read yet. However, if you are perfectly fine with them, go ahead and open them.

Just dropping by to say hello to the new member. I'll read the other things later homewoooooooork

You seem to know your stuff with Photoshop. Cool. 8D We have a new banner maker yay

Well, starting the Insignia ... I have the list here of the parts I have and don't have, first the flowers chosen, then the symbol design for each division
If you want a good site for different Plant meanings i'd suggest going here - http://www.victorianbazaar.com/meanings.html

Zanpaktou: Shainingu Senshi no Kyoujou (Shining Warrior of Truth)Sealed form: Standard Katana, the hilt is baby blue with silver wrap. The guard is in the shape of the Filipino sun (as a nod to me being Flip IRL and an allusion to my Zan’s name.)

Description: A pair of giant gauntlets (Minus the face of Zeus & the armor past the elbow.) That are Baby blue (Base coat), silver and black (Alternate trim/border colors) in color. Four flat (two on each side) cords, studded with spikes, run from the end of the gauntlets at the elbow, up my biceps and triceps and meet/connect with a black Filipino Sun & stars triangular crest (4in across) at the center of my chest and a larger crest (7in across) on my back.

Abilities: Provides good defense with their size, enhance my physical strength, and pact a great punch (literally & figuratively). But due to their bulk, I am hindered in the mobility department.
It has a kidou disruptor. A mediocre kidou user casting Hado #4 Byakurai, will severely weaken or dissipate completely. While someone high kidou skills like Byakuya, does the same Hado, it will be somewhat weakened.
No attacks, I’ll just punch and block.

Description: For lack of a better description and laziness, Tadashii Shainingu Senshi no Shin is based off of this Battlizer. The red parts, gold shoulder fenders and gold shin guards are changed into baby blue, the blue is now silver, and the black lines, arm pieces & belt are black. The “M” on the chest is replaced with my Flip crest, but the lines that come “M” & run down the armor remain. The blue “frills” on the helmet are removed and the blacked out visor is in the shape of an “X” (the bottom half of the X is half the length of the top half, and tapir into sharp points.) But the crest remains.

Abilities: With its sleeker, armor design, I have higher defensive and mobility capabilities. Like its Shikai form, it disrupts/cancels out nearly any kidou up to level 90 (also depends on the kidou user, of course.)
The helmet has an Iron-Man type function. It shows my current health & reiatsu levels, my vitals (heart rate, blood pressure), and armor and bone damage. It can also display environmental stats, such as oxygen level, oxygen content and temperature. And finally tracks any enemy reiatsu with in a range of 300 ft.

Attacks:
Again like its shikai, I prefer to do hand to hand combat.

Kagayaki Kobushi (Radiant/Radiance Fist): A 6 foot plasma two handed sword. It is the offensive manifestation. Summoning/conjure/use it drains so much energy I can only use it once every 24 hours.

Kenage Engo (Heroic Protection): A medieval knight shield. It is the defensive counter part of Kagayaki Kobushi. And like its counterpart, it can only be used once every 24 hours.

Other: In this form, I tend to speak in a cliché heroic tone complete with puns and metaphors.

Zan Spirit: Senshi’s personality is a stereotypical/borderline parody of Super Sentai/Super Hero with a strong sense of justice and protection, complete super hero dialog.
In sealed/shikai, Senshi wears a de-armores, standard spandex Kamen Rider/Super Sentai version of my Bankai. And since my powers are his, he also wears the armor in his bankai appearance. If that makes sense.

Inner World: “The Temple of Truth” An enormous stone temple, the interior is more futuristic, with lights, security cameras, and a control room.

I really like in - in particular, the uniqueness of speaking in cliches, so I'm guessing that's only in Bankai?

Well, there's not really much to comment on, I guess. The image designs look really cool, and being purely melee prevents you from having any kind of overpowered attacks. I'm sure it'll be fun for the fanfic writers XD

Originally Posted by Blackacer

RAWR!
Hmm... I wanna join
Zachiru

Welcome to the Bleach Club 2! I am the Captain of the 12th Squad, I like Pokemon (...), though I also go by ILP/Ilpy/Ilpeh/Aielpy/Aaroniero/Anternero/Ant/Any other nickname.

Like Arc said, be wary of spoilers. I highly suggest catching up with the manga, as it's a big point of discussion for us, and it means you generally don't have to worry about spoilers.

I think in the reply to topic, the formatting looks fine, though it's a bit messier on the actual page. Perhaps you should put it in a spoiler? I think more of us know almost all of the names, by now (though Yukimura is a new one).

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Her body tensed as he came closer to her. His tall and dark body overshadowing her more petite and pale one. The cold darkness of the empty office only made the situation more heart racing. As he drew closer, his dominating aura washed over her, flooding the room with his intensity.

Okay, it's in italics, which means it's possibly a kind of dream or something. You specifically italicised it to make it stand out from normal text for a reason.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

The aura that sent enemies running terrorized with fer or charging in reckless as a last-ditch effort of survival, overwhelmed her senses. Her eyes became glazed over, making her sight become blurry. Her nose was assaulted with a mixed of smells that made up his scent. The smells stimulated her taste-buds, giving her a taste in her mouth that was hard to describe. It was subtle and faint, yet combined with the smell, was a taste that worked up every single taste-bud.

A very powerful aura; must belong to a very powerful person.
Also, you said terrorized with "fer".
And there was a lot of description that she was tasting and smelling, but not what she was tasting or smelling.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

His voice made her eardrums savor every vibration. His deep baritone vocals left her in an almost trace like state. He body was covered in sweat, every bead of sweat falling off her skin was felt. His very presence made her body become much more sensitive and-

"He body was covered in sweat, every bead of sweat falling off her skin was felt." should be:
"Her body was covered in sweat, with every bead falling off her skin being felt."
It makes the two clauses flow into each other more, and reduces the redundancy of using the word "sweat" twice.
Y'know, if I didn't know any better, I'd think you were writing a...

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

A powerful voice broke the group listening on the story being read to them. “What the hell are you all doing?” Captain Seijuro asked as he booming voice broke them from their enthralled enjoyment of the story. Him towering over all of them might have had something to do with it as well.

Ah, it was a story being read out loud. Something tells me lols will come soon...
Also "as he booming voice"

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

The crowd of shinigami mostly made of women couldn't look at him. A large number of them were blushing, few trying to get away while others laughed nervously. All but one female were too embarrassed to say anything thing, the exception walk right up to him and getting as close she could to his face, staring dead set into his eyes.

I think the "mostly made of women" could have hyphens/commas/brackets around it, as it feels a bit like extra detail that can be focused on.
I think the second sentence could be written as "A large number of them were blushing or laughing nervously, with a few trying to get away." It flows a bit more, I think.
You say "...to say anything thing". You can end the sentence there, start a new one, and say "...walk right up to him, getting as close as she could to his face and staring dead set into his eyes." Again, for a more clear flow.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Why the hell did you stop story time? I wanted to know if the girl would pass out from her heart attack before of after describing every bloody thing!” The Captain of Squad Eleven, Aozora asked him glaring.

Ah, of course, only Blue would react to Seijuro like that. Though you say "before of after describing...".
Wait, was she really having a heart attack? Or was it... something else?

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Seijuro frowned and motioned to a nearby rooftop, “Meet me.” That was all he told her before flash stepping away from the group. She growled a bit, but complied and followed him to roof via flash-step.

Alright, so whatever he wants to tell her, he wants to do in private, and not in front of everyone. Probably something important; captains only.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

They both left the group of flustered shinigami to promptly nose-bled over images of The Seventh Captain being the man in the book. Then quickly scattered to treat their current condition before someone saw them.

Ah, of course, Seijuro is the man in the book. Makes you wonder who wrote that.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Why are you just sitting back listening to stories at a time like this!?” Seijuro asked her vexed at her seemingly lackadaisical behavior. His metal boots almost leaving an impression on the roof's ceiling tiles.

There should be a comma after "Seijuro asked her", because it sounded like "Seijuro asked her vexed". Lackadaisical is a good word. And the metal boots is a good reference to his design, though it should be "left", not "leaving" as you need an active verb.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Still doesn't tell me why you were listening to that garbage.”

Wait, so he knows what that is? 8O I figured he'd want them all burned... But if he didn't, then maybe he likes them! *shot*

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Seijuro chuckled a bit, that explanation could only be pulled off by Aozora. “That explains a lot, you didn't strike me as the type to read those kinds of books anyway.”

You were writing that, weren't you!

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“On the orders of Fourth Squad Captain Mizuhashi Akira, you three are not allowed passage into the World of the Living until he says otherwise.” Both guards did their best to stay strong and not show any fear, but were terrified inside. As their luck would have it, both new arrivals could smell their fear and just looked at them. The weight of their stares along was slowly crushing the two.

Ah, so Arc doesn't want anyone to leave? Hmm... I'm trying to think of why, perhaps he doesn't want to send members out to treat people in the living world, if he's a bit short on staff?

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Old man?” Aozora called out to the Sixth Squad Captain standing in between them and in-front of them, blocking her from simply smacking the two guards out-of-the-way.

The thing about using "Old man" in place of "Oji-san" is that it makes you sound actually old.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Hakufuku.”

Hmm... Alright, so Sen did not want them to leave, either. Presumably, he either does not want them to know why (otherwise he would have told them), or he is not bothered to explain the reason (though if it was really that important, I think he'd explain instead of attacking them). The fact that he used a kidou that caused them to black out instead of a restraining spell, or a powerful hadou shows that he doesn't want any kind of retaliation. The reason why though...

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

In the Artic, a battle raged on in a furious blizzard, the fact that it was the middle of six months of night, didn't help out at all. As the harsh white coldness ruthless washed over the land, only two powerful beings seemed to be able to work through it. Four figures cloaked in black laid motionless in the snow, bodies being slowly buried by the blizzard.

I think you can turn "help out at all" into "help at all", because it sounds less informal.
"white coldness ruthlessly washed over"
I'm guessing the 4 bodies are shinigami?

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

The two glared at each other through the harsh blizzard, waiting for the perfect moment to strike. Yukimura had the advantage, the frozen wasteland was a winter wonderland for his Zanpaktou and fighting style. He knew nothing of this arrancar but felt that he could easily kill this one without much effort.

I just realised, I think you use "Yumimura" a few times.
Also, an arrancar? There wasn't really much build up to that revelation. In fact, besides the "white cloak", there was no build up, it was just kind of thrown at us. Perhaps a description of a mask (without using that word) in the character's general description would have helped.

Alright, so we have an Arrancar! Now, looking at the fact that he enjoyed the snow and some inside knowledge, I'm going to go with the idea that he's Rotrum's Arrancar! If so, then this possibly links some ideas:
The massive hollow attack could be organised by Arrancars (assuming that they are organised, which I think they would have to be, for them to attack the Shinigami). It also means that they probably have Arrancar!Me, and possibly Arrancar!Da.c (though he doesn't have an Arrancar profile, if you really wanted to have him, you could just copy and paste his design and powers and whatnot. Would make for an interesting meeting) - which would allow for someone to create the poison used for Golde.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Kida frowned at the Captain that had returned to the captain's Meeting Hall. Dre, Zameric, and Saiga all focused on her. They all were impatiently waiting to be filled on what exactly was going on. The fact that it wasn't the Head-Captain briefing them, just added to the tension and uneasiness of the group.

You have a few short sentences which could be made into fewer complex sentences. Since this scene doesn't require the build-up that short sentences do.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Great, should we get popcorn for this movie?” Zameric asked laying back in his seat and smirking.

Bloody smart arse

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

The table then changed s bit, a miniature screen complete with readings and data appearing before the three Captains being briefed. Finally, the battle data shown to them as clear as day.

You used "s" instead of "a", and you should say "the battle data was shown to them".

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Hollows of all shapes and sized appeared in the clear blue sky, a back of Menos Grande blocking the sunlight for many around the area.

I think around here, you should've described the setting a bit more. In my head, I was imagine a sort-of desert, up until it was mentioned that there was a city nearby. I think this would have been a good place to give a detailed description.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“The final count was twelve-hundred hollows. Three-hundred Adjuchas level, three-hundred Gillian level and seven-hundred normal hollows.” Kida informed them all in a shaky tone of voice.

After the final count, you should use a colon, as she was listing the hollows.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“ There are so many to kill, I feel like a kid at a candy store!” Aozora said cheerfully as he rushed to slice a Adjuchas in half.

Ah, of course, this is like heaven for her XD.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“It's obvious hollow bait was used in large amounts, but I didn't know they were potent enough for attracting Adjuchas class hollows.” Seijuro said as he prepared to fight the nearest foes by him.

I think "they were potent" should be "they could be potent" - as it's a one-off case that adjuchas came, I think it just makes more sense like this.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Most of these are just freshly made Gillains and Adjuchas, so their lack of experience will be their downfall.” Senshuken said releasing his zanpaktou.

For adjuchas, yes, but Gillian (not Gillains, which you used throughout) have no mind of their own, with the exception of the "special" ones that can turn into adjuchas (which are very rare, considering how many adjuchas and Vasto Lorde there are).

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“How can you tell Senshuken-Sensei?” Senbon asked slicing off the arm of a adjuchas that tried to attack him and then landing a killing blow to its head.

You use "a adjuchas" quite a bit, actually.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“One little, two little, three dead adjuchas! Four little, five little, six dead adujuchas!” Aozora sang as she ruthless and quickly sliced through any adjuchas in her path. Her prey tried hard to fight back firing ceros at her, but she dodged them while singing happily. “Seven little, eight little, nine dead adjuschas and I still have hundreds of hollows to go!”

Best.
Lines.
Ever.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Well she's enjoying herself.” Seijuro commented flatly as he cut a adjuchas's arm off. The hollow charged at him screaming in rage, but him simply flash stepped out-of-the-way and delivered the killing blow in one swift motion.

"But him simply flash stepped" should be he, not him.
And out-of-the-way doesn't need the hyphens. Just "out of the way" is fine.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Senshuken send multiple kido spell blasts at the gillains and adjuchas in his line of sight, “True, but then we'd all get out of shape if we let her do all the fighting.”

Sent, not send.That's the only reason? XD

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Aozora currently was riding on a winged hollow, decapitating anything in her range while directing the poor hollow toward large groups of them.

Toward, not towards, because it's third person.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Aozora!” Senbon yelled out as he watched her get hit.

It's like he doesn't know her.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Aww, how cute. You all think that's playing rough. “ Aozora said revealed to only be partly scuffed and singed by the blasts. “ Hey Old Man and Wolfie! Lets show these wusses how it's done!”

The nicknames remind me of Yachiru XD wait, what's my nickname?

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Seijuro and Senshuken both smirked a bit, both preparing to a tiny iota of effort into the fight.

Preparing to put an iota of effort (you need a verb, and the tiny is redundant).

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Meanwhile, on the side of the battlefield that wasn't completely one-sided, Seated officers watched the carnage in awe. A Lieutenant going over to the one Captain not acting like a mass murdering sociopath.

I think that could be rephrased into "Meanwhile, on the side of the battlefield that wasn't an absolute massacre, a few seated officers watched the carnage in awe. A Lieutenant went to the only Captain that wasn't acting like a mass murdering sociopath." You don't repeat "side", and the latter part flows more nicely how many times have I said that?

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“I see. I'll investigate it myself.” Senbon told him confidently, flying over to the area in question.

So THIS is how he dies.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“I love watching them do so much carnage.” He said cheerfully moving stray blonde hairs from his face.

Can you "do" carnage? I think "cause carnage" makes more sense.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

The adjuchas fired four bala blasts at once, two connecting with Luke as he managed to deflect the other two. “Ha! You'll-” He promptly was nearly smashed into pieces as the hollow used sonido to add speed to his momentum and land a single deadly tackle. Luke had braced himself but quickly opened his eyes to see what happened to the attack.

Looks like Luke will be attacked a lot this chapter/fic...
Also, can Hollows use sonido? I was under the impression that only Arrancars can.

Oh, I just remembered, you jump between Jaku and Luke sometimes.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

His expression darkened as his eyes grew cold and broadcasted a death glare. “Freeze the Icy Water, Koorimizu!”

So... Almost everyone released now?

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

The captains watching the mission video data all absorbed the information playing before them in the dark room.

Which brings up a point - how is all of this data recorded? Especially since it seems to be from a few different points (as it looks at some scenes that are a few metres away from each other) - I'm going to assume that Ryuu sent some kind of recording bats to capture everything, but that should be mentioned, then.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Silenced filled the room as they watched on, this meant that the battle recording would be Senny's last recorded mission.

Silence, not silenced <.<

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Outside side the meeting room, Dre's fifth seat and lieutenant both waited for the meeting to be over. Having an important message from his family.

Outside side?

Hmm... If it's SUPER IMPORTANT, then I think they could interupt the meeting, so it seems that it might not be a top priority.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Senbon walked around the city, going unseen by its inhabitants. “I don't sense anything at all,” he said to himself out loud.

Silly!

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

He frowned as it turned out to be Luke with his sword already drawn.

“I can fight the weird guys in the cloaks no problem!” Luke told him grinning.

This will not end good, not at all.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

The white cloaks with silver lining hide their figures and faces from view. The only thing else noticeable about them besides their tall height, was the kido enhanced chains. The chains seem to for the one in the center, as it looked as if the other two were containing them.

Okay, so probably more Arrancars. Though they can use Kidou? And "The chains seem to be for the one in the center"

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Silence filled the street they all standing on, Senbon wondering if Jaku had a death wish. He couldn't believe how arrogant he was, there just wasn't any way. The cloaked figures seemed unaffected by the declaration by Jaku, save for the one on the left.

"Silence filled the street. Senbon wondered if Jaku had a death wish; he couldn't believe how arrogant he was. [I don't get that next sentence]. The cloaked figures seemed unaffected by Jaku's decleration, save for the one on the left."

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

The figure was short compared to Jaku, but didn't seem to care about the height difference based on her response. “Boys talk action while Men make action, now lets see how much a man you're really are!”

I'm guessing that we know she's a girl by her more feminine voice? Also "you're really are"?

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

The adjuchas quickly turned to glare at new arrival, “Whoever the hell you are shinigami, your dead.”

You're.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Your mistake was leaving us alive.” Kaii said as he watched Testu send a vine to deliver the killing blow to the adjuchas.

Ah, I think it's fair for 2 Lieutenants and a 5th seat to kill an Adjuchas.

“Thank you, though I came to ask why I left to guard my post alone. I understand if Captain Senbon needed him for the investigation, but not sending someone to watch my back.” Akio told the two lieutenants calmly.

I don't get what he said. "I came to ask why I left to guard my post alone".

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Ask meaning yelling at him for going against orders, right?” Kaii asked as he went over to the area being investigated.

“Maybe for you, for me it means savage beating.” Testu told him gleefully as he followed Kaii to the city.

Ah, of course.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Is that it? Little boys can put up better fights than you, I can't even call you an infant. They are no where near as weak and pathetic as you are right now.” The shortest cloaked figure taunted Jaku with a voice that sounded like a noble woman's.

Damn that is some trash talking. Also "nowhere", not "no where".

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Jaku tried to release his zanpaktou, but found that he couldn't do it. He called and called out the release command for his sword, but was only met with failure. “Coward! What kind of trick did you pull?”

That's... weird. Possibly an affect of one of the other two Arrancars.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Hado number Ninety, Kurohitsugi!”

Something tells me Cell won't like that XD

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Also that Captain Senbon went to investigate a strange sighting in the city.” Akio kept going as all there captains paid attention to him.

The captains, not there captains.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Last one there gets stabbed in the foot!” Aozora shouted as she rushed off after the group.

Typical Blue.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Senbon told them noting that Kaii and Testu had released their zanapktou before arriving to the scene.

“What the hell?! I didn't even see it!” Tetsu said as the next attack came, sending himself and Kaii crashing into a greenhouse across from the store Jaku landed.

You use "Tetsu here" Though I think Tetsu is correct, since it can be written in Hiragan, while Testu can't. But Sapph's profile DOES say Testu...

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

The one that was chained was missing, while the other one had protected himself with a another kido spell. Shattered pieces of the spell littering the street around them.

This doesn't look good; he must have been chained up for a reason, and now he's free? Also, it seems like your Arrancars can learn kidou spells?

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Senbon's jaw nearly dropped as he a close look at him.

As he took a close look.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Muyomi, you know brother Seijuro, right? We'll after I kill you all and destroy everything he loves, cares for and stands for, I'll send him to hell to meet you.” With that declaration, he promptly attacked Senbon with ruthlessly wild swings full of power.

So Muyomi is his name, and he's Seijuro's brother? Wait, who is and who isn't an Arrancar, I'm confused.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Senbon smirked, they were positioned perfectly! Out of each others way and having the almost perfect synergy with their attacks. There attacks along with his boosted by its chant, should be the end of all three of them.

Well, it makes sense that Sen and Seijuro's Lieutenants can do combos with each other.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

He hoped that Seijuro could forgive him for doing this later. “Hado number Seventy-Three, Soren Sokatsui!”

Why would Seijuro have to forgive him?

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Jikanteishi.” Senbon's smirk turned to a horrified look of shock as he heard the deep voice call out the spell. Time stopped for anything right in-front of the mystery cloaked figure.

Okay, so this person knows forbidden kidou...

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Then transported the kido along with their casters into a position where they would all be vaporized by their own attacks. As time began its flow forward once again, the foe watched as they kido attacks collided with each other, creating a devastating explosion that damaged pretty much anything on the street.

Eeeeevil. I like it.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“You would have been dead at least two times since the battle started child, don't you dare think I care about your reasons for fighting. As long as your under master's orders, you shall live until you severe your purpose. Afterward, I could care less if you die or not.”

Ah, so they are working under a single person. And it's clear that their relationship with each other is at best neutral, as worst, they dislike each other but are putting that aside for the moment.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

They're uniforms were burned and torn apart, barely holding together.

Their.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“I see, you used Danku to mostly protect the other two and blocked the Haien and Soren Sokatsui with a lesser bakudo spell. I must say that is truly an impressive display of kido mastery. You must have had a very good sensei.”

Of course you would add that in XP

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

It had felt like a sword had torn through their bodies even though he only delivered shallow cuts to them. Senbon looked on in horror as he was too weak to flash step away in time. The last thing he saw was the cloudless clear blue sky as he was decapitated by Muyomi. The old man quickly incinerated the body with Haien.

Wow. Gruesome. And he didn't even kind of die in a heroic sort of way, he was just fighting, too damaged to move, and had his head sliced cleanly off.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Seijuro yelled out in an anguished rage as he saw the sadistically happy Muyomi grin like a maniac at him.

Why does this description suit Blue?

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

The old man snapped his fingers, causing a Menos Grande to appear through the dimention. It then used a Negacion energy field to transport the woman, Muyomi and himself away from the new arrivals.

Dimension. And did he snap his fingers and it came? I think opening a garganta that brought in a Gillian, or something, would make more sense.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

“Coward! Get back here and fight like a little girl!”

Still has the best lines.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Senshuken looked over to Seijuro, seeing him paralyzed by a bunch of emotions all fighting for dominance in his mind. All wanting to be expressed and relive him of this stressful reunion of family he though was dead. He then turned to see Senbon's head between Kaii and Testu's nearly dead bodies. Refusing to let his emotions of seeing his former student and college's decapitated head and half-dead lieutenants body, he called for Squad Four to come to the location.

"A bunch of emotions" sounds informal.
Relive -> Relieve?
college -> Colleague
And who called for Squad 4, Seijuro or Sen? I think it would make more sense for Sen to call, because Seijuro would likely be to emotionally distraught to do anything at the moment (while Sen is, he would be less so).

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Akio looked at all the carnage and destruction, this mission was a brutal.

Understatement much?

Alright, so this explains how the mission went, but also had a short introduction of an Arrancar. For the moment, I think I'm only confused on what species the girl, the figure and Muyomi are.

Spoiler:- Author's Notes:

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Casts looks so jacked up on the post editor. >.> I was thinking of doing the cast that way from now on. I though it look neater and wouldn't stretch the post out more than it needed to be.

Ah.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

I also had planned to have the kido battle longer, but once again, huge chapter is huge. Though I am mostly satisfied with how it all came out.

Yeah, I think this is fine as it is.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Once again, thank you everyone who read my chapter and even bothered to read this note. I had alot of fun writing this chapter and hope you enjoyed reading it as well.

Hope the review is good for you This took me a long time to write.

Originally Posted by arceus03

Also. *giggles* You're an Eon lover? *giggles*

I wonder whose squad Ace will go into...

Originally Posted by Northern Lights

Well, starting the Insignia ... I have the list here of the parts I have and don't have, first the flowers chosen, then the symbol design for each division
If you want a good site for different Plant meanings i'd suggest going here - http://www.victorianbazaar.com/meanings.html

I'm going to ask Senny if he's planning to come back, if not i'll ask if we can re-assign his Captaincy to someone else.

Ah, thanks for the link, I think I'll go with an iris from that list. It's better than a test tube for reasons Arc said, wisdom (which squad 12 could be said to have as well as just knowledge) is mentioned twice. Plus it looks pretty 8D

YOU JUST LOST THE GAME!
Click HERE to be rickrolled... c'mon, you know you want to. Spoiler:- I HAVE DEFIED ALL MATHS AND LOGIC!:

Cool, I'll go with Ace. Oh btw, people refer to me as Arc. But the Head Captain sometimes call me Mizuhashi. Yeah.

Originally Posted by Northern Lights

Well, starting the Insignia ... I have the list here of the parts I have and don't have, first the flowers chosen, then the symbol design for each division
If you want a good site for different Plant meanings i'd suggest going here - http://www.victorianbazaar.com/meanings.html

=D The list doesn't have moonflower, though. Cowslip is the next likely flower I would choose (Rusticity, Winning Grace, Healing, Youth, Pensiveness) but it has a... weird name. So I'll stick with moonflower. XD Let's go in-depth for anyone who is interested:

Spoiler:

It signifies, as I've mentioned before, that "The ultimate healing os the healing of soul". But also, found here, moonflowers also represent nocturnal bloomers. It blossoms white at night, when all other flowers have closed their petals. In a way, it symbolizes the "hope" that remains when all else seems futile: If you can keep on living, you can keep on going. They are also hardy, which is an essential quality of a 4th Squad member and not only for the 11th Squad: you have to be able to keep your head in times of great distress, and not succumb to your emotions after seeing your comrades fell in battles, etc.

In a different way, moonflower also symbolizes the Squad itself. While the remaining 12 Squads are geared for combat (maybe less for the 12th Squad), the 4th Squad's aim is to aid, to heal. While all other flowers bloom in the sun, this flower blooms at night in the presence of the moon.

Is it bad I think too much of this? XD
Er hem. Anyway. If I must have a symbol, then be it as Rex said. XD A bitten cookie with bandages. Or if that is somewhat too complex, then just go with the caduceus.

Originally Posted by I like Pokemon (...)

I really like in - in particular, the uniqueness of speaking in cliches, so I'm guessing that's only in Bankai?

I can't wait to see a scene with his zanpakto spirit and yours. One would talk entirely in proverbs, and another in cliches.

Ah ha. The first release command that mirrors Shunsui/Ukitake. It's a bit... idk what word to use here, I mean like the phrases aren't exactly my favorite, but I like the fact that it's a poem. Also, justice sounds like Tousen

You got a PAIR of those huge gauntlets? o.o How are you going to even move? Though it's a bit like Chad's ability XD

Originally Posted by PKMN Trainer Rex

Description: For lack of a better description and laziness, Tadashii Shainingu Senshi no Shin is based off of this Battlizer.

I lol'd when I saw the picture. No joking.

Originally Posted by PKMN Trainer Rex

It shows my current health & reiatsu levels, my vitals (heart rate, blood pressure), and armor and bone damage. It can also display environmental stats, such as oxygen level, oxygen content and temperature. And finally tracks any enemy reiatsu with in a range of 300 ft.

And this. XD

Well yeah. I don't have much to comment on it. Seems fine.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Bad News everyone, my fic is ready to post.

8DThat is not the bad news. The bad news is when ILPy posts a huge review and stretches my page so long I had to scroll doooooooooown just to skip it

I really like in - in particular, the uniqueness of speaking in cliches, so I'm guessing that's only in Bankai?

Well, there's not really much to comment on, I guess. The image designs look really cool, and being purely melee prevents you from having any kind of overpowered attacks. I'm sure it'll be fun for the fanfic writers XD

Yes, speaking in cliches is bankai exclusive. You all would kill me if I constantly spoke like that.

Originally Posted by arceus03

I can't wait to see a scene with his zanpakto spirit and yours. One would talk entirely in proverbs, and another in cliches.

Our brains would implode

Originally Posted by arceus03

Ah ha. The first release command that mirrors Shunsui/Ukitake. It's a bit... idk what word to use here, I mean like the phrases aren't exactly my favorite, but I like the fact that it's a poem. Also, justice sounds like Tousen

Yup, thats me, always wanting to stick out.

Originally Posted by arceus03

You got a PAIR of those huge gauntlets? o.o How are you going to even move? Though it's a bit like Chad's ability XD

I guess its like how Ikkaku wields his bankai. He just does, although I would move slower than usual.

Originally Posted by arceus03

I lol'd when I saw the picture. No joking.

Be glad I did chose any of those comically huge battlizers from the older generations.

I really like in - in particular, the uniqueness of speaking in cliches, so I'm guessing that's only in Bankai?

Well, there's not really much to comment on, I guess. The image designs look really cool, and being purely melee prevents you from having any kind of overpowered attacks. I'm sure it'll be fun for the fanfic writers XD

Oh yes, I'll LOVE writing for that. >D

Originally Posted by I like Pokemon (...)

*Cracks knuckles* Let's try and do this... again.

Come at me, BRO!

Spoiler:- Chapter 2: Brutal Failure.:

I think in the reply to topic, the formatting looks fine, though it's a bit messier on the actual page. Perhaps you should put it in a spoiler? I think more of us know almost all of the names, by now (though Yukimura is a new one).

I'll experiment more with it. I hate doing a long list, and spoilers might end up being what I'll do.

Okay, it's in italics, which means it's possibly a kind of dream or something. You specifically italicised it to make it stand out from normal text for a reason.

Plushie for you, that was the idea.

A very powerful aura; must belong to a very powerful person.
Also, you said terrorized with "fer".
And there was a lot of description that she was tasting and smelling, but not what she was tasting or smelling.

Fixed along with all the other errors you pointed out. XD

Y'know, if I didn't know any better, I'd think you were writing a...

...a story. :|

Ah, it was a story being read out loud. Something tells me lols will come soon...

Nothing gets past you, huh?

I think the "mostly made of women" could have hyphens/commas/brackets around it, as it feels a bit like extra detail that can be focused on.
I think the second sentence could be written as "A large number of them were blushing or laughing nervously, with a few trying to get away." It flows a bit more, I think.
You say "...to say anything thing". You can end the sentence there, start a new one, and say "...walk right up to him, getting as close as she could to his face and staring dead set into his eyes." Again, for a more clear flow.

Flow advice, okay either you or Eon are gonna end up being my overworked and unpaided Beta reader. >>

Ah, of course, only Blue would react to Seijuro like that.
Wait, was she really having a heart attack? Or was it... something else?

Yup, gotta love her.
Also, no, it just went over her head a bit and thats what she thought.

Alright, so whatever he wants to tell her, he wants to do in private, and not in front of everyone. Probably something important; captains only.

Ah, of course, Seijuro is the man in the book. Makes you wonder who wrote that.

Yup, don't want the gossips talking.Fear the fangirls, fear them!

There should be a comma after "Seijuro asked her", because it sounded like "Seijuro asked her vexed". Lackadaisical is a good word. And the metal boots is a good reference to his design, though it should be "left", not "leaving" as you need an active verb.

He was upset and irradiated a bit, so...

Wait, so he knows what that is? 8O I figured he'd want them all burned... But if he didn't, then maybe he likes them! *shot*

He has 100 Intelligence, so yes, yes he does.
Also, the author of it will actually have meaning to the plot latter.

You were writing that, weren't you!

The fangirl cried after Seijuro hid in his office, she then called her friends to help her kidnap him and keep him in her "bishie closet".
^- That would be my writing.

Ah, so Arc doesn't want anyone to leave? Hmm... I'm trying to think of why, perhaps he doesn't want to send members out to treat people in the living world, if he's a bit short on staff?

With so many heavy hitter downs, do you think he'd want more in his squad seeking treatment?

The thing about using "Old man" in place of "Oji-san" is that it makes you sound actually old.

Fixed.

Hmm... Alright, so Sen did not want them to leave, either. Presumably, he either does not want them to know why (otherwise he would have told them), or he is not bothered to explain the reason (though if it was really that important, I think he'd explain instead of attacking them). The fact that he used a kidou that caused them to black out instead of a restraining spell, or a powerful hadou shows that he doesn't want any kind of retaliation. The reason why though...

Muyomi and the woman aren't arrancars. /spoiler

I just realised, I think you use "Yumimura" a few times.
Also, an arrancar? There wasn't really much build up to that revelation. In fact, besides the "white cloak", there was no build up, it was just kind of thrown at us. Perhaps a description of a mask (without using that word) in the character's general description would have helped.

The scene should have been cut out, now that I look back on it. Thought Rotrum finally got screen time, so meh.

Alright, so we have an Arrancar! Now, looking at the fact that he enjoyed the snow and some inside knowledge, I'm going to go with the idea that he's Rotrum's Arrancar! If so, then this possibly links some ideas:
The massive hollow attack could be organised by Arrancars (assuming that they are organised, which I think they would have to be, for them to attack the Shinigami). It also means that they probably have Arrancar!Me, and possibly Arrancar!Da.c (though he doesn't have an Arrancar profile, if you really wanted to have him, you could just copy and paste his design and powers and whatnot. Would make for an interesting meeting) - which would allow for someone to create the poison used for Golde.

This too, had get introduce the arrancar. Though your train of though is correct, in an alternate universe.

Bloody smart arse

Who else but Zam?

I think around here, you should've described the setting a bit more. In my head, I was imagine a sort-of desert, up until it was mentioned that there was a city nearby. I think this would have been a good place to give a detailed description.

Yeah, though last chapter did say it happened in the World of the living. So I though "random city" would instantly come to mind.

Ah, of course, this is like heaven for her XD.

You know it.

For adjuchas, yes, but Gillian (not Gillains, which you used throughout) have no mind of their own, with the exception of the "special" ones that can turn into adjuchas (which are very rare, considering how many adjuchas and Vasto Lorde there are).

Fixed.

You use "a adjuchas" quite a bit, actually.

Had few things to call them.

Best.
Lines.
Ever.

I'm pretty sure everyone agrees with you.

The nicknames remind me of Yachiru XD wait, what's my nickname?

I wonder what are her nicknames for everyone...Cuddles the science bear.

I think that could be rephrased into "Meanwhile, on the side of the battlefield that wasn't an absolute massacre, a few seated officers watched the carnage in awe. A Lieutenant went to the only Captain that wasn't acting like a mass murdering sociopath." You don't repeat "side", and the latter part flows more nicely how many times have I said that?

Noted. Alot.

So THIS is how he dies.

Yup.

Looks like Luke will be attacked a lot this chapter/fic...
Also, can Hollows use sonido? I was under the impression that only Arrancars can.

I'm evil and really?

Oh, I just remembered, you jump between Jaku and Luke sometimes.

Fixed.

So... Almost everyone released now?

Nope.

Which brings up a point - how is all of this data recorded? Especially since it seems to be from a few different points (as it looks at some scenes that are a few metres away from each other) - I'm going to assume that Ryuu sent some kind of recording bats to capture everything, but that should be mentioned, then.

Next chapter big guy, next chapter. XD

Hmm... If it's SUPER IMPORTANT, then I think they could interupt the meeting, so it seems that it might not be a top priority.

Kida threatened to kill Zameric over being himself, so I think fear had a part to do with it. Also the fact this was thrown in...poorly.

This will not end good, not at all.

Yup.

Okay, so probably more Arrancars. Though they can use Kidou? And "The chains seem to be for the one in the center"

Arrnacar can't use Kido, though...Vizards can use kido and ceros...hmm...it's possible.

Ah, I think it's fair for 2 Lieutenants and a 5th seat to kill an Adjuchas.

So do I.

Sounds like a line Rex should say

Pfft. not nearly manly and cheesy enough.
I don't get what he said. "I came to ask why I left to guard my post alone".

This doesn't look good; he must have been chained up for a reason, and now he's free? Also, it seems like your Arrancars can learn kidou spells?

SEnny fired the Kidou. I don't think they can, since someone would have to TEACH them the kido.

So Muyomi is his name, and he's Seijuro's brother? Wait, who is and who isn't an Arrancar, I'm confused.

Muyomi and the Woman. The Old man is another can of worms...>>

Well, it makes sense that Sen and Seijuro's Lieutenants can do combos with each other.

Yup, go team work!

Why would Seijuro have to forgive him?

For killing Muyomi, his brother.

Okay, so this person knows forbidden kidou...

Eeeeevil. I like it.

Oh yes, I love it too.

Ah, so they are working under a single person. And it's clear that their relationship with each other is at best neutral, as worst, they dislike each other but are putting that aside for the moment.

Nothing get's past the cyborg.

Of course you would add that in XP

It was meant in a more mocking tone.

Wow. Gruesome. And he didn't even kind of die in a heroic sort of way, he was just fighting, too damaged to move, and had his head sliced cleanly off.

Thats how battle is sometimes. :/

"A bunch of emotions" sounds informal.
Relive -> Relieve?
college -> Colleague
And who called for Squad 4, Seijuro or Sen? I think it would make more sense for Sen to call, because Seijuro would likely be to emotionally distraught to do anything at the moment (while Sen is, he would be less so).

Fixed and that last paragraph was Senshuken.

Alright, so this explains how the mission went, but also had a short introduction of an Arrancar. For the moment, I think I'm only confused on what species the girl, the figure and Muyomi are.

Muyomi and the woman,= Shinigami.
Figure = Spoiler

Spoiler:- Author's Notes:

Ah.

Yeah, I think this is fine as it is.

Hope the review is good for you This took me a long time to write.

This took a long time to answer as well. XD

I wonder whose squad Ace will go into...

If ace is a girl, Eon's squad. If ace is a boy, then we all have a shot.

[/QUOTE]

Originally Posted by arceus03

I can't wait to see a scene with his zanpakto spirit and yours. One would talk entirely in proverbs, and another in cliches.

Same here. Somone should write that.

Ah ha. The first release command that mirrors Shunsui/Ukitake. It's a bit... idk what word to use here, I mean like the phrases aren't exactly my favorite, but I like the fact that it's a poem. Also, justice sounds like Tousen

I pretty much made it.

8DThat is not the bad news. The bad news is when ILPy posts a huge review and stretches my page so long I had to scroll doooooooooown just to skip it

I think in the reply to topic, the formatting looks fine, though it's a bit messier on the actual page. Perhaps you should put it in a spoiler? I think more of us know almost all of the names, by now (though Yukimura is a new one).

Probably wise. The only reason I don't for mine is because it's at the end of the text in a column.

Okay, it's in italics, which means it's possibly a kind of dream or something. You specifically italicised it to make it stand out from normal text for a reason.

Obviously.

A very powerful aura; must belong to a very powerful person.
Also, you said terrorized with "fer".
And there was a lot of description that she was tasting and smelling, but not what she was tasting or smelling.

"He body was covered in sweat, every bead of sweat falling off her skin was felt." should be:
"Her body was covered in sweat, with every bead falling off her skin being felt."
It makes the two clauses flow into each other more, and reduces the redundancy of using the word "sweat" twice.
Y'know, if I didn't know any better, I'd think you were writing a...

You would immediately jump to this conclusion.

Ah, it was a story being read out loud. Something tells me lols will come soon...
Also "as he booming voice"

I think the "mostly made of women" could have hyphens/commas/brackets around it, as it feels a bit like extra detail that can be focused on.
I think the second sentence could be written as "A large number of them were blushing or laughing nervously, with a few trying to get away." It flows a bit more, I think.
You say "...to say anything thing". You can end the sentence there, start a new one, and say "...walk right up to him, getting as close as she could to his face and staring dead set into his eyes." Again, for a more clear flow.

Thank you for doing this so I don't have to.

Ah, of course, only Blue would react to Seijuro like that. Though you say "before of after describing...".
Wait, was she really having a heart attack? Or was it... something else?

*rolleyes* No she wasn't having a heart attack.

Alright, so whatever he wants to tell her, he wants to do in private, and not in front of everyone. Probably something important; captains only.

Ah, of course, Seijuro is the man in the book. Makes you wonder who wrote that.

...MC, you got some 'splaining to do. XP

There should be a comma after "Seijuro asked her", because it sounded like "Seijuro asked her vexed". Lackadaisical is a good word. And the metal boots is a good reference to his design, though it should be "left", not "leaving" as you need an active verb.

More thanks for this.

Wait, so he knows what that is? 8O I figured he'd want them all burned... But if he didn't, then maybe he likes them! *shot*

Shush you XP

The only reason such stories aren't being burned is because, "frankly my dear, I don't give a damn". As long as they're not slandering me or spreading lies about my character, they can believe what they will.

You were writing that, weren't you!

DUH!

Ah, so Arc doesn't want anyone to leave? Hmm... I'm trying to think of why, perhaps he doesn't want to send members out to treat people in the living world, if he's a bit short on staff?

Reactionary fear. He's worried that their foes will pick them off if they do so. They obviously have more than enough forces to pick off weaker shinigami if they can commit so many Hollows at once.

The thing about using "Old man" in place of "Oji-san" is that it makes you sound actually old.

Maybe because he's actually supposed to be old? XP

Hmm... Alright, so Sen did not want them to leave, either. Presumably, he either does not want them to know why (otherwise he would have told them), or he is not bothered to explain the reason (though if it was really that important, I think he'd explain instead of attacking them). The fact that he used a kidou that caused them to black out instead of a restraining spell, or a powerful hadou shows that he doesn't want any kind of retaliation. The reason why though...

If they're not allowed out of the Seireitei, they have to do so by force. They're in the middle of a major crisis right now; Captains can't just run off as they please.

I think you can turn "help out at all" into "help at all", because it sounds less informal.
"white coldness ruthlessly washed over"
I'm guessing the 4 bodies are shinigami?

Who else?

I just realised, I think you use "Yumimura" a few times.
Also, an arrancar? There wasn't really much build up to that revelation. In fact, besides the "white cloak", there was no build up, it was just kind of thrown at us. Perhaps a description of a mask (without using that word) in the character's general description would have helped.

Definitely would've been helpful. Although you're forgetting that the buildup happened last chapter

Alright, so we have an Arrancar! Now, looking at the fact that he enjoyed the snow and some inside knowledge, I'm going to go with the idea that he's Rotrum's Arrancar! If so, then this possibly links some ideas:
The massive hollow attack could be organised by Arrancars (assuming that they are organised, which I think they would have to be, for them to attack the Shinigami). It also means that they probably have Arrancar!Me, and possibly Arrancar!Da.c (though he doesn't have an Arrancar profile, if you really wanted to have him, you could just copy and paste his design and powers and whatnot. Would make for an interesting meeting) - which would allow for someone to create the poison used for Golde.

Damn. MC was worried you'd pick this apart, and for good reason.

Bloody smart arse

It's Zam. He's supposed to be the smart arse

I think around here, you should've described the setting a bit more. In my head, I was imagine a sort-of desert, up until it was mentioned that there was a city nearby. I think this would have been a good place to give a detailed description.

Ditto. Always describe the battlefield.

After the final count, you should use a colon, as she was listing the hollows.

Thank you.

Ah, of course, this is like heaven for her XD.

Obviously xD

I think "they were potent" should be "they could be potent" - as it's a one-off case that adjuchas came, I think it just makes more sense like this.

Mhm. Pretty much.

For adjuchas, yes, but Gillian (not Gillains, which you used throughout) have no mind of their own, with the exception of the "special" ones that can turn into adjuchas (which are very rare, considering how many adjuchas and Vasto Lorde there are).

Experience is the wrong word, I think he means power. They're not very powerful for their respective classes yet.

Best.
Lines.
Ever.

I.
Know.
Right?

That's the only reason? XD

Yuuuuup xD

It's like he doesn't know her.

He kinda doesn't xD

The nicknames remind me of Yachiru XD wait, what's my nickname?

That's the point xD You have so many, which one?

I think that could be rephrased into "Meanwhile, on the side of the battlefield that wasn't an absolute massacre, a few seated officers watched the carnage in awe. A Lieutenant went to the only Captain that wasn't acting like a mass murdering sociopath." You don't repeat "side", and the latter part flows more nicely how many times have I said that?

Too many.

So THIS is how he dies.

No, that happens later XP

Can you "do" carnage? I think "cause carnage" makes more sense.

No, you cannot do carnage.

Looks like Luke will be attacked a lot this chapter/fic...
Also, can Hollows use sonido? I was under the impression that only Arrancars can.

He deserves it, the little punk...

Never been strictly stated that this is true.

Oh, I just remembered, you jump between Jaku and Luke sometimes.

I also noticed this.

Which brings up a point - how is all of this data recorded? Especially since it seems to be from a few different points (as it looks at some scenes that are a few metres away from each other) - I'm going to assume that Ryuu sent some kind of recording bats to capture everything, but that should be mentioned, then.

Kidou recording devices set up throughout the Seireitei, no doubt your doing. And yes, this should be mentioned.

Outside side?

Oh god.

Hmm... If it's SUPER IMPORTANT, then I think they could interupt the meeting, so it seems that it might not be a top priority.

Top-secret briefings wait for no one.

Silly!

For a second I thought he was actually being sarcastic xD

This will not end good, not at all.

well, not good

Okay, so probably more Arrancars. Though they can use Kidou? And "The chains seem to be for the one in the center"

Not strictly stated that they're Arrancar.

"Silence filled the street. Senbon wondered if Jaku had a death wish; he couldn't believe how arrogant he was. [I don't get that next sentence]. The cloaked figures seemed unaffected by Jaku's decleration, save for the one on the left."

The sentence you don't get is either "no way to win", or "now way Jaku could do this by himself".

I'm guessing that we know she's a girl by her more feminine voice? Also "you're really are"?

That would be correct.

Ah, I think it's fair for 2 Lieutenants and a 5th seat to kill an Adjuchas.

Since Rukia can do it on her own... more than fair.

Sounds like a line Rex should say

No, Rex would say something classier.

I don't get what he said. "I came to ask why I left to guard my post alone".

Missing "was".

Damn that is some trash talking. Also "nowhere", not "no where".

By Jaku's standards, maybe.

That's... weird. Possibly an affect of one of the other two Arrancars.

It's not so much as release prevention as it is sealing, methinks. Probably forbidden Kidou.

This doesn't look good; he must have been chained up for a reason, and now he's free? Also, it seems like your Arrancars can learn kidou spells?

Still not strictly stated that they're Arrancar.

As he took a close look.

So Muyomi is his name, and he's Seijuro's brother? Wait, who is and who isn't an Arrancar, I'm confused.

Try thinking back to my old fic... Muyomi is my brother from then.

Well, it makes sense that Sen and Seijuro's Lieutenants can do combos with each other.

Damn right.

Why would Seijuro have to forgive him?

'Cause he's about to kill his brother. Senny doesn't know that they hate each other.

Okay, so this person knows forbidden kidou...

No surprise.

Eeeeevil. I like it.

It's sadistic is what it is.

Ah, so they are working under a single person. And it's clear that their relationship with each other is at best neutral, as worst, they dislike each other but are putting that aside for the moment.

Like any other group of evildoers. Do you ever see them being all buddy-buddy?

Of course you would add that in XP

Ahahaha

Wow. Gruesome. And he didn't even kind of die in a heroic sort of way, he was just fighting, too damaged to move, and had his head sliced cleanly off.

That's Muyomi's Shikai ability; the damage and force behind his cuts is multiplied exponentially so that even shallow wounds do the damage of a full-on slash. That part is to show Muyomi's brutality; killing a helpless foe without even a shred of mercy.

Why does this description suit Blue?

Because Muyomi is a berserker to the nth degree. Think of Blue without any redeeming qualities and an animalistic hunger for death and carnage in the worst way. Muyomi's the kind of bastard who could snap his grandmother's neck and then eat a peanut butter and jelly sandwich in her kitchen without so much as batting an eyelash.

Dimension. And did he snap his fingers and it came? I think opening a garganta that brought in a Gillian, or something, would make more sense.

Kidou signal. Probably easier for him to do than actually open a Garganta.

Still has the best lines.

It's so unfair!

"A bunch of emotions" sounds informal.
Relive -> Relieve?
college -> Colleague
And who called for Squad 4, Seijuro or Sen? I think it would make more sense for Sen to call, because Seijuro would likely be to emotionally distraught to do anything at the moment (while Sen is, he would be less so).

No, Seijuro is just to angry to think straight.

Understatement much?

No.

Alright, so this explains how the mission went, but also had a short introduction of an Arrancar. For the moment, I think I'm only confused on what species the girl, the figure and Muyomi are.

This. They need to be defined. Just because I know doesn't mean everybody else does.

I wonder whose squad Ace will go into...

Not mine. The third seat spot is temporarily reserved for Soroft in case he wants to join once he has time to write up his Zanpaktou that I helped him design.

Ah, thanks for the link, I think I'll go with an iris from that list. It's better than a test tube for reasons Arc said, wisdom (which squad 12 could be said to have as well as just knowledge) is mentioned twice. Plus it looks pretty 8D

The Iris is Squad 7's canon flower. Off limits, dude.

"I'm fighting because there's a battle to be fought, Archer. I'm fighting to win. That's all."

"Hm. Alright, Rin. You are indeed my ideal Master. There is no one else I could hope to serve."

Flow advice, okay either you or Eon are gonna end up being my overworked and unpaided Beta reader. >>

I thought we already were?

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

With so many heavy hitter downs, do you think he'd want more in his squad seeking treatment?

Fair enough. Perhaps I'm trying to look too deeply into this.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Muyomi and the woman aren't arrancars. /spoiler

Sorry, I don't know why I thought they were. I understand now, though.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

This too, had get introduce the arrancar. Though your train of though is correct, in an alternate universe.

What do you mean "in an alternate universe"? D8

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

I wonder what are her nicknames for everyone...Cuddles the science bear.

Science bear?I am so okay with this.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

I'm evil and really?

Well, we've only seen Arrancar use it.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Next chapter big guy, next chapter. XD

Alright.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Kida threatened to kill Zameric over being himself, so I think fear had a part to do with it. Also the fact this was thrown in...poorly.

Perhaps edit it to include these and Eon's point; that they were fearful of Kida, and that nothing goes above a debriefing.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Arrnacar can't use Kido, though...Vizards can use kido and ceros...hmm...it's possible.

That's why I got even more confused.
Butyeah, that's a bit unfair.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Muyomi and the Woman. The Old man is another can of worms...>>

Okay, well, we know that he can do Kidou. So presumably, some form of a shinigami, or part shinigami, or a race that can control their reiatsu/reiryoku pretty well, with a shinigami teacher.
So that leaves shinigami, substitute shinigami, Vaizard, or (and this is a STRETCH), maybe a Quincy.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Nothing get's past the cyborg.

More sarcasm?

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

If ace is a girl, Eon's squad. If ace is a boy, then we all have a shot.

Depending on what Ace wants XD Spoiler:- Eon's response:

Originally Posted by Eon Master

You would immediately jump to this conclusion.

XP I read the story first before starting to review, so I already knew what it was.

Originally Posted by Eon Master

Thank you for doing this so I don't have to.

You're welcome

Something tells me that - if I was to write a fanfiction - everyone would either owe me epic reviews, or would tear it apart like nothing.

Originally Posted by Eon Master

*rolleyes* No she wasn't having a heart attack.

I was implying something entirely different.

Originally Posted by Eon Master

The only reason such stories aren't being burned is because, "frankly my dear, I don't give a damn". As long as they're not slandering me or spreading lies about my character, they can believe what they will.

Why did I read "frankly my dear, I don't give a damn" in Kida's voice?

Originally Posted by Eon Master

Reactionary fear. He's worried that their foes will pick them off if they do so. They obviously have more than enough forces to pick off weaker shinigami if they can commit so many Hollows at once.

Likewise, fair enough.

Originally Posted by Eon Master

Maybe because he's actually supposed to be old? XP

Heh? In my mind, Seijuro and co. are physically ~21 or something (with Senny and Blue being younger), while Senshuken is probably ~26-28?

Originally Posted by Eon Master

Who else?

With everyone wearing cloaks...

Originally Posted by Eon Master

Definitely would've been helpful. Although you're forgetting that the buildup happened last chapter

What I remember is that Rotrum was sent to fight a Vasto Lorde level Hollow? So we know he was fighting at least a Hollow (and if you look at Hallibel, they look VERY humanlike) - the fact that it was specifically an Arrancar, is what could have had more build up.

Originally Posted by Eon Master

Damn. MC was worried you'd pick this apart, and for good reason.

Is... that a good thing?

Originally Posted by Eon Master

Experience is the wrong word, I think he means power. They're not very powerful for their respective classes yet.

Ah, right.

I wonder, would it be redundant to pass it through me, then to you? Or if he was to get a human spellchecker, he should just send it to you, since you picked up everything I did and more.

Originally Posted by Eon Master

That's the point xD You have so many, which one?

The one only Blue uses

Originally Posted by Eon Master

Since Rukia can do it on her own... more than fair.

Kubo isn't as good a story writer as you guys <.<

Originally Posted by Eon Master

effect

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Originally Posted by Eon Master

Huh?

Kurohitsugi is his favourite Kidou spell.

Originally Posted by Eon Master

Try thinking back to my old fic... Muyomi is my brother from then.

OHGOD don't make me remember that far back! *Huddles in a corner*

Originally Posted by Eon Master

'Cause he's about to kill his brother. Senny doesn't know that they hate each other.

Yes he does. Senny asked him "Who are you", and Muyomi replied with:

“Muyomi. You know brother Seijuro, right? Well after I kill you all and destroy everything he loves, cares for and stands for, I'll send him to hell to meet you.”

Originally Posted by Eon Master

Like any other group of evildoers. Do you ever see them being all buddy-buddy?

For the most part, I think the antagonists of 07-Ghost and D.Gray-Man (both AWESOME Anime and Manga) are slightly less... evil. Which I actually quite like; they're more like "the other side" of a morally-equal battle. And I either like a more "grey" villain, or a very very evil one.

Originally Posted by Eon Master

That's Muyomi's Shikai ability; the damage and force behind his cuts is multiplied exponentially so that even shallow wounds do the damage of a full-on slash. That part is to show Muyomi's brutality; killing a helpless foe without even a shred of mercy.

Because Muyomi is a berserker to the nth degree. Think of Blue without any redeeming qualities and an animalistic hunger for death and carnage in the worst way. Muyomi's the kind of bastard who could snap his grandmother's neck and then eat a peanut butter and jelly sandwich in her kitchen without so much as batting an eyelash.

...Damn.

Originally Posted by Eon Master

Kidou signal. Probably easier for him to do than actually open a Garganta.

Keep forgetting about that.

Originally Posted by Eon Master

This. They need to be defined. Just because I know doesn't mean everybody else does.

And to be fair, I already knew a few points, like the fact that Arrancars were going to be introduced.

Originally Posted by Eon Master

The Iris is Squad 7's canon flower. Off limits, dude.

Ah, I forgot about that. Damn, I'll have to see what I can pick from the list...

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For squad Flowers, I pick:
EDELWEISS/ALPINE CUDWEED - Daring, Courage, Noble Purity
It can be with the fiery dragon claw, correct?

Spoiler:- Mr.Wolf and Mr.Cyborg:

Thanks for all the feedback.

I tried to be a vague as possible about the villains, mainly due to the fact I NEED to keep them a secret till later points. Muyomi was a special case, since well, he pretty much gave himself away.

I would have liked to show and say more about them, but since Ryuu had the battle being recorded and what not, it would mean pretty much ALL the Captains would know about them. Killing any hope to keep them "hidden."

Also if the profile descriptions are bare, then I have little to work with. I try to cover it up by describing other things and what not, but yeah...no very good story telling skills.

Well next Chapter will have Mizuhashi and Ryuu, so hopefully I can clear up things. Cause they're supah smarts!

Also that meeting bot will be touched upon next chapter, so again...that scene's ending was added poorly. :/

I'm glad to hear you loved the battle and my interpretation of Muyomi.

Though that Arrancar with Kido bit did make me think about something...
Anyway, thanks for the reviews.

So, with the big issue being resolved, i found a bit of down time and decided to handle a few issues, club-wise.

Flower: Sticking with canon and the Snowdrop.

ILP, if you're still doing the thing with an updated first post, would you mind moving the guys from my squad into Spirits? They're not active and I think it'd be for the best. If not to Spirits, at least a to a lower seat. (Theo to Fifth, Akua to Fourth)

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Hey, you! Yeah, you! No, not you in front, you there who likes pokémon. Do you like the animé? Do you ever think you'd like to use pokémon and battle like they do in the show?

I think this chapter felt a bit longer, largely because we saw at least one or two pages of the different scenes. I'm sure that if/when this gets animated, these will be more stretched out and padded.

That's... it of the Giriko fight? I'd guess so, because the scene went back to the normal world. If so, that is so disappointing, maybe even second to Yammy. Giriko's powers are time related, if he doesn't reverse time back, then... I don't even.

Yachiru has a new hairstyle too. She used to have fringes that framed her face. Maybe we have a new captain that is a barber? There's also the cross-bones on her head. So what're they going to do for the next hour or something?

How did Ishida get in, and Yukio not realise? You'd think he'd notice that. But also, I'm not entirely sure that Ichigo even needs Ishida to fight, because Ichigo gained a MASSIVE powerup (remember how many times Ichigo just slashed, and Ginjou shat himself?) not to mention, the possibility of Bankai.

That... While it makes sense, it seems a bit like an arsepull, tbh.

He kicked a wounded man! <.<

"That possibility is extremely unlikely" by saying this, it is now the ONLY possibility.

Okay, so Hitsugaya is entirely in Yukio's terrain. I think Yukio's downfall will be that he's going to treat this fight like a game, and will probably be a bit arrogant, even.

I wonder if Chappy will be there... Butyeah, Riruka versus Rukia, which leaves Jackie to be with Renji.

Aaaaaand Byakuya gives a speech. I think it works quite well, actually. Like I mentioned, Byakuya is the least likely to get hit by Book of the End, so he's the best choice. Though it's obvious that Tsukishima isn't defeated yet :/

Alright, I think the Byakuya/Tsukishima fight should lead to something interesting. For the moment, it will probably be Byakuya trying to keep a distance, while Tsukishima tries to go in to attack. Tsukishima is likely to die, or escape and be killed by someone else or something.

Rukia and Riruka will end up... I don't even. I doubt Riruka will die though.

Hitsugaya versus Yukio: for the moment, it looks like Yukio can't even be hit by Hitsugaya, but I'm pretty sure he'll find a way. I think Yukio may die, though there's a small chance that he won't.

Soyeah.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

Though that Arrancar with Kido bit did make me think about something...
Anyway, thanks for the reviews.

No comment on the rest, because that's mainly just me nodding along.

An Arrancar with Kidou... I suppose that could work, but I think they have a different control of reiryoku than Shinigami.

Originally Posted by kusari

So, with the big issue being resolved, i found a bit of down time and decided to handle a few issues, club-wise.

That's good to hear

Originally Posted by kusari

ILP, if you're still doing the thing with an updated first post, would you mind moving the guys from my squad into Spirits? They're not active and I think it'd be for the best. If not to Spirits, at least a to a lower seat. (Theo to Fifth, Akua to Fourth)

*Facepalm* I COMPLETELY FORGOT I WAS DOING THAT.

I've put them into spirits (along with their zanpakutou). Don't forget to update your squad page.

Does anyone else want to change their squads a bit? I'm thinking of putting Emperor Giratina in spirits, but I'll probably bug him a bit more first.

Does anyone have anything to update the "first post" with? Rex, can you change your shikai post so that it contains your new zanpakutou? (makes it neater than me linking to this new post), Blackacer is now a spirit (speaking of, maybe after you show that you'll be consistently active, you can create a zanpakutou and join a squad).

Originally Posted by PKMN Trainer Rex

Too bad. But if it makes up for it, I strike poses before taking action, in both forms.

Yay!

Originally Posted by PKMN Trainer Rex

Our implosions would have explosions. That doesn't make sense, Rex.

Hmm... An implosion is when something collapses on itself (often due to gravity; a building can implode due to the structure being disrupted/damaged, or a massive star can implode into a black hole). An explosion would be a massive release of energy. I don't know if this is actually possible, but there's a small chance that an implosion could possibly lead to nucleur fusion, which gives off a ton of energy.

Originally Posted by PKMN Trainer Rex

Try to stay away from one liners here, but since you're a newbie to the club you get a free pass .

Once more though, and you will get oar'd by Head Captain Golde himself you really don't want to.

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Yachiru has a crossbones hair dec!
Also Rukia might have trouble if giant Chappys are thrown at her.
Overall it was okay.
Uyru pretty much confirmed what we were all thinking and Byakuya is going to kill the Troll.

ATTENTION TO ALL WHO HAVE ARRANCAR PROFILES!

Since I plan to use them, now is your final chance to change them, make alterations or even add things to them. For example, if you want your arrancar to have fraccion or to BE fraccion to someone else's, please be sure to let it be know.

Hey Blackacer, welcome to the Bleach club! >D
How ya been? Haven't seen ya in a while.

Spoiler:- Manga 464:

Overall, the chapter was pretty good. Rukia vs. Riruka is hilariously cute.
I totally agree with Byakuya, he's perfect to fight Trollkishima. >D
But then the Kenpachi vs. Giriko battle just left me feeling...

Originally Posted by PKMN Trainer Rex

MC and I have been working on my new Zan, I hope everyone approves. But be forewarned, it contains cliches & stolen borrowed ideas.

Spoiler:- New Zan:

Spoiler:- Part 1:

Zanpaktou: Shainingu Senshi no Kyoujou (Shining Warrior of Truth)Sealed form: Standard Katana, the hilt is baby blue with silver wrap. The guard is in the shape of the Filipino sun (as a nod to me being Flip IRL and an allusion to my Zan’s name.)

Description: A pair of giant gauntlets (Minus the face of Zeus & the armor past the elbow.) That are Baby blue (Base coat), silver and black (Alternate trim/border colors) in color. Four flat (two on each side) cords, studded with spikes, run from the end of the gauntlets at the elbow, up my biceps and triceps and meet/connect with a black Filipino Sun & stars triangular crest (4in across) at the center of my chest and a larger crest (7in across) on my back.

Abilities: Provides good defense with their size, enhance my physical strength, and pact a great punch (literally & figuratively). But due to their bulk, I am hindered in the mobility department.
It has a kidou disruptor. A mediocre kidou user casting Hado #4 Byakurai, will severely weaken or dissipate completely. While someone high kidou skills like Byakuya, does the same Hado, it will be somewhat weakened.
No attacks, I’ll just punch and block.

Description: For lack of a better description and laziness, Tadashii Shainingu Senshi no Shin is based off of this Battlizer. The red parts, gold shoulder fenders and gold shin guards are changed into baby blue, the blue is now silver, and the black lines, arm pieces & belt are black. The “M” on the chest is replaced with my Flip crest, but the lines that come “M” & run down the armor remain. The blue “frills” on the helmet are removed and the blacked out visor is in the shape of an “X” (the bottom half of the X is half the length of the top half, and tapir into sharp points.) But the crest remains.

Abilities: With its sleeker, armor design, I have higher defensive and mobility capabilities. Like its Shikai form, it disrupts/cancels out nearly any kidou up to level 90 (also depends on the kidou user, of course.)
The helmet has an Iron-Man type function. It shows my current health & reiatsu levels, my vitals (heart rate, blood pressure), and armor and bone damage. It can also display environmental stats, such as oxygen level, oxygen content and temperature. And finally tracks any enemy reiatsu with in a range of 300 ft.

Attacks:
Again like its shikai, I prefer to do hand to hand combat.

Kagayaki Kobushi (Radiant/Radiance Fist): A 6 foot plasma two handed sword. It is the offensive manifestation. Summoning/conjure/use it drains so much energy I can only use it once every 24 hours.

Kenage Engo (Heroic Protection): A medieval knight shield. It is the defensive counter part of Kagayaki Kobushi. And like its counterpart, it can only be used once every 24 hours.

Other: In this form, I tend to speak in a cliché heroic tone complete with puns and metaphors.

Zan Spirit: Senshi’s personality is a stereotypical/borderline parody of Super Sentai/Super Hero with a strong sense of justice and protection, complete super hero dialog.
In sealed/shikai, Senshi wears a de-armores, standard spandex Kamen Rider/Super Sentai version of my Bankai. And since my powers are his, he also wears the armor in his bankai appearance. If that makes sense.

Inner World: “The Temple of Truth” An enormous stone temple, the interior is more futuristic, with lights, security cameras, and a control room.

Looks good, I approve!

Originally Posted by Northern Lights

Well, starting the Insignia ... I have the list here of the parts I have and don't have, first the flowers chosen, then the symbol design for each division
If you want a good site for different Plant meanings i'd suggest going here - http://www.victorianbazaar.com/meanings.html

I'm going to ask Senny if he's planning to come back, if not i'll ask if we can re-assign his Captaincy to someone else.

I'll pick out a flower/plant in a little while.

'Bout tim*shot*
If he does get re-assigned, I'll miss him.
Like having a brother move away.

Originally Posted by MasterCharizard15

ATTENTION TO ALL WHO HAVE ARRANCAR PROFILES!

Since I plan to use them, now is your final chance to change them, make alterations or even add things to them. For example, if you want your arrancar to have faccion or to BE faccion to someone else's, please be sure to let it be know.

Yukio seems pretty confident and Hitsuguya seems pretty lax. Thats all I have to say.

Looks like Troll-man vs Byakuya is gonna be an intense one, just look at their eyes.

Originally Posted by I like Pokemon (...)

Yay!

See, isn't it better than constant cliche speak?

Originally Posted by I like Pokemon (...)

Hmm... An implosion is when something collapses on itself (often due to gravity; a building can implode due to the structure being disrupted/damaged, or a massive star can implode into a black hole). An explosion would be a massive release of energy. I don't know if this is actually possible, but there's a small chance that an implosion could possibly lead to nucleur fusion, which gives off a ton of energy.

I know what they are, I was trying to say adding explosions make everything more awesomer than usual.

Originally Posted by I like Pokemon (...)

Once more though, and you will get oar'd by Head Captain Golde himself you really don't want to.