Starchild

"This was the moment of truth. Live or die, he knew he was making the right decision. He stepped forward and fell into oblivion."
As Lance's training at Project Nine comes to an abrupt end, he is catapulted into an otherword where he must follow in the glorious footsteps of his unknown predecessors.

Okay. It's been a while since chapter one was posted, the reason being this has been by far the most difficult chapter to write. Having started this chapter I have completed drafts of chapters 3, 4 and 5, returning to chapter 2, trying again at chapter two, and giving up on chapter two. I have finally completed, whittled and edited the mess down to what I believe can pass as an acceptable version of it. Please, I'm sure there are many things that seem wrong, don't make sense, could be better, notify me of any changes that need mopping up. Read Chapter

Quite a lengthy chapter full of party and festivities, songs and storytelling. Lance is welcomed to the Evannor Forest as the elves of Llehn Coe celebrate the coming of the Starchild.
This was previously published as two chapters but I have decided to make it one.
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Lance discovers more about the world of which Project Nine dropped him into and begins exploration of the Evannor Forest.
Again, this was once two chapters, but it has been compiled back into one.
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Compelling prologue! What is the nature of this cube that Lance's destiny is tied up with? The writing is clear, well executed and nicely focused on Lance's point of view. Everything pulls the reader in to wish to unravel this extra-terrestrial enigma. Echoes of Carl Sagan resonate ( Jodie Foster in 'Contact' for example ) and Arthur C Clarke to name but a few ... good, solid writing with ... dare I say it ... commercial appeal. I took a look at the other book uploaded and I have to say this story seems far more professional and digestable. I am guessing that 'Starchild' is a more recent work because it avoids the rather cluttered and over-written style of the other. One point I would like to make as suggestion ... the title may need a re-think owing to possible criticism of being derivative .... 'Starchild' as coined in '2001 A Space Oddysey' when Dave ( central character ) transforms to a hyper-evolved 'starchild' and saves humanity from nuclear holocaust. All in all though, definately way better than most material I have seen on this site ( no disrespect to Booksie ... not its job to curate ... only to offer a platform ). Happy writing. Let's see this one finished!

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Sat, March 11th, 2017 3:01am

Although, admittedly, the prologue does allude to a sci-fi storyline, the book as a whole is very much falls into the genre of fantasy. Many thanks on the encouragement, there are a few chapters I need to touch up on now.
I found Beyond the Falcon's Reach really intriguing to begin with, but I got a bit lost with all the characters/ titles etc. No doubt a re-read will sort it out!