this story is really good!! when i nthe world are you going to add another chapter? Whats going to happen? Whats ron going to do with that gurl he made the mistake with!!???? common do leave me in suspence!! hope to hear from you soon!

... what? I think this story has an awesome premise, but it just took a WEIRD turn somewhere in the early chapters. Harry becoming associating with his enemy to hurt his best friend? It just seems a bit far fetched, even for fanfiction. And the kidnapping incident with Hermione and Feur? This just seems like an attempt to cram as much shocking material into one story as well. Where are you going with this? Also, you might want to consider asking someone to proof read your chapters before posting. A couple errors is fine, but eventually they start interfering with the reading.

It doesn't flow very well, but it's all right I suppose. You can check out my fanfic, though I can't update anymore- every chapter I submit gets rejected... go figure. It's called Harry Potter and the Dark Lord, by Gwiggo. Dumb name, I know, but the original title was smething like This Time... I think. I can't remember. Anyway, I'll keep reading cuz I'm interested.