Tululin was really impacted by the fact he had no mother, and this shows it well-the last part of the chapter, I mean. I should have known things would get worse...sigh...Hailey was a cute addition, but now that Tululin thinks Harry doesn't need him as much, will he be lonely again? I hope not, and I hope you update soon, so I can see what's in store for Tululin:)

Yay, something good finally happens to Tululin! He really seems like he's been so alone, and you did a good job making him seem different form just a little kid. Caelyn seems nice, I don't quite know enough about her yet, but good chapter.

This is definitely moving along, it's so sad that Caelyn came back to the house only to die-it almost seems like fate was at work. How he "made" Harry showed how lonely he was, this is a very sad story, but nicely written. I like it.

Aw, that was so sad-the mom being so cruel and then he missed his dad and got blamed for the death...it was well written though. One thing I noticed "Ian looked up the stairs to him… his son, “Tululin…” Julia looked up too but she didn’t speak." A period after 'son' would flow better. The ending with the little girl was good, are you continuing this? Nice work so far