I missed this, its so sweet yet also so... not.
It's got the romantiscism and need of everyone's dream passionate novel, and its got the aspect of dread that creeps up your spine as you read a stephen king novel - that instinct that keeps telling you NOT to turn the next page because something awful is going to happen, while also telling you TO turn the next page because you cant stand not knowing what happens to your favourite characters...
I hope that you find your late dawns muse sometime, though I know you are working on conditioning atm, which I also love so...
whichever you update I will feel lucky :)

IN NINE HOURS AND TWENTY THREE MINUTES YOU'LL BE MINE WOULD HAVE MADE PERFECT SENSE AND NOW ALL I CAN DO IS IMAGINE ITACHI WITH LEATHER PANTS, CRYSTAL BALLS, AND SPIKY ROCKER HAIR THANK YOU FOR RUINING MY LIFE

I'm going to push my personal preferences aside to try and be as objective as possible about this chapter. Let me start off by the writing: as I said before, it's straight to the point and with relatively few mistakes (Mikoto hate - Mikoto had); but I miss something to envelop me into the plot. You pay almost no attention to the scenery, to the characters' composure,... I think it'd be better if you added a small detail once in a while, something that catches the readers' attention and helps them imagine the scenes more vividly.

Secondly, the reader now knows grosso modo how Itachi feels about his little brother, the reader also knows how the coven feels about the situation (in how far they're aware things have processed): I like how in general I can only assume how Sasuke feels about everything, even as a small child. I get the impression he's only acting on instinct and has little awareness about what he sparks in his older brother. This prompts me to recall how things progressed in canon as well.

Third: some moral objections are raised towards a possible union from a vampire's point of view: it's odd because I always imagine immortal creatures to be less concerned with ethics, so I'm curious about how this vampire society of yours functions.

The first interaction between Itachi and his baby brother was really cute; it also served as a good introduction to how you envision vampires, vampire society and vampire customs in this universe. I must admit that I'm a bit curious on how exactly vampires reproduce as they are undead and I'm eager to find out in the next chapters. Your writing is very to the point and straightforward, leaving little to no room for mistakes.

I must admit that I'm not a fan of people referring to Itachi as "the weasel", it sounds weird because I always imagine that in-verse the language is still Japanese primarily, so yeah, personal preference I suppose :3 I'll try to give the next chapter a read and a review as soon as I can~