The descriptions and details were okay, but there was definetely something missing from this one (like a couple of the previous ones). It's like you've lost the incentive to write, and so there isn't much emotion or enthusiasm in there. So, if you would, try getting a real nice emotional high before you write the next one._________________-MCC

It was a good story overall. But I do agree with MC's Cousin, that you were not entirely enthusiastic about the whole story, perhaps you were sleepy when writing the story or just not in the mood to write it then, but I still think it is a good story. However, I think it had some great detail at parts.