Edited this week( Dante concept art WIP) Additional Info on Luna. Story time with Shtickles: Overseers

Just playing around with certain design, trying to find the overall look for my characters. I think so far everything is turning out pretty good This WIP is mainly for the facial features and look of the character . :

I'm on CR enough, and I know there are a lot of great artist and writers in the world.

I guess what I'm saying is that since this is what I really want to create, I thought I would just start to shed some light on Characters, story, and other information that I have been constantly thinking about for the past 2 years or so. Just for the hell of it, because who knows, Its something at least, and at least its out there for whoever.

At this point I am growing as an artist. Im not the greatest, but I can almost begin to fully bring my story to life.

When will it be done? No idea, but it is something that cannot be dropped or forgotten, I told myself to finish it no matter what. Regardless of providing for myself, living expenses, and the tools I have now to create my story, I do not let the trials and tribulations of life prevent me from bringing such a dream to reality.

The story is called World X I have been dreading on the name, but in all honesty it just seemed to fit. It is a Fantasy adventure. A world divided, no hope for a brighter future. summoned are those who seek to correct what has been done, to relive what they have endured; to stop a power threatening the very existence of the world. X is but a symbol, it reminds us how much time will change the flow of humanity, the very core of our being.

The main focus is correction. Living under fear, but finding your true calling that will reach out to those who are in need of change. I Like mixing in humor within all the madness, because it shows you the value of wholesome interaction and easing such tension.

A cool breeze swept across the plains, nothing but the constant motion of still grass swaying with the wind. In the distance we can see a woman sitting on top of a small hill. Over head a raven is circling her in repetition. A closer look gives us full sight of the woman, blood runs down her face as visible scars are on both sides of her cheeks, almost scratches; three on each side. As she covers her face within her palms a storm begins. Rain falls which begins to wash away the blood from her face as it continues to flow. The faintest sign of a glow can be seen. Darkness.

A scene full of lush green grass and blue skies, off in the distance a couple of travelers can be seen, and the sound of a wagon rolling across the ground can be heard; followed by some light humming from a girl. We see a man pulling a wagon across a dirt road, and a woman sitting on top of it. The wagon itself only contained a rolled up blanket.

” You know I never did get your name”

” Huh? Why do you ask?”

A short grunt of aggravation hits the man.

” Well it might have something to do with you randomly jumping on my wagon”

” Your wagon!? Last time I checked you’re the one pulling the wagon”

As she lets out a small humorous laugh. The man sighs for the moment.

” I didn’t have a choice, you practically forced yourself”

” Don’t get upset”

She leans down to rap her arms around his neck in a friendly manner, and then begins to speak softly into his ear.

” Call me Aanna”

” Aanna, can you do me a favor”

” Anything”

” Can you stop hugging my neck”

” Hmmph! What, you don’t like it when someone’s being friendly?”

” Well from the looks of it your meaning of friendly is that of a childs”

” Maybe to you, but I’m not going anywhere anytime soon, so get use to it”

The man puts his head down to the ground and lets out a sigh.

” Onward! We have to make a lot of ground before night comes”

” What’s wrong with you?”

She steps towards the man and places her foot on his already slumped head as she points to the open path.

” There’s no time for that! Only time for adventure awaits!

She throws on a determined grin as the man is left powerless to her actions. Aanna soon goes back to laying down looking up at the sky.

A short breeze flow along their path.

” Come to think of it, I never did ask what your name was”

As she leans upwards.

” Well here’s the thing. I don’t actually know”

” That’s ok, I’ll give you one”

” You’re not giving me a name ”

” I never knew you would care soo much, this is supposed to be an adventure right?”

” To be honest this could just be nothing but a dream”

Aanna leans forward and slaps him across the face. *SMACK*

” What the hell was that for!”

He drops the wagon and turns towards her in anger. Aanna begins to laugh.

” Not much of a dream now is it?”

He falls back onto the road creating an audible thud. Aanna begins to lean over the now sprawled out man on the ground.

” Come on, haven’t you ever wanted your own name?”

She expresses a disappointed look.

” Why can you say yours without doubt? ”

” Well I can’t really say that, because I was thinking of one when we were travelling”

” So you don’t know?”

” Nope, but that doesn’t mean we can’t make one for ourselves”

Aanna kneels next to the man.

” That’s the point of an adventure right? We start our own path”

A small pause as the man begins to lean back up.

” Come on, what’s it going to be? ”

“ Well, when you talk about something that instantly comes to mind…….

A small flash back showing a single tree with what looks to be like ash surrounding the ground around the base of the tree

“ Dante….. Yeah, I like the sound of that”

She smiles and hugs Dante.

” Well Dante, shall we continue our journey?”

” Might as well make the best of it”

He gets up and pulls the wagon back across the road. Aanna lays back down with a smile.
Suddenly the weather begins to get very windy as it forces Dante to cover his face as a gust of wind stops him from moving .

“What the..”

Aanna looks up to the sky as a Raven fly’s overhead, shortly after it passes a sudden force hits both of them. Dante holds his ground as Aanna holds on to the wagon. The force begins to expose a new path, soon after the force stops, and the weather returns to normal.

“Did you feel that?”

“Yeah, it almost felt like it was going to blow me away”

Dante looks towards the newly exposed path as Aanna eagerly replies.

“Let’s go! Don’t you know what this means?

“No actually, I don’t”

“ A new path means a new direction, and when something like that hits, you know the only answer is to follow it”

“ I like to think your reasoning is spontaneous, but at least you make a good point”

Dante changes his course and begins to follow the new path.

“One things for sure, this place sure is odd”

“How so? It looks pretty peaceful to me”

“ So you’re not going to say that what just happened isn’t odd”

“Please, You’re pulling a Wagon right now, don’t you find that odd?

“ Not really. It’s just, I have a feeling like there’s something really off about this place ”

Dante struggles to remember how he actually found his way to this place as well.

“Don’t worry, I’m sure it will come back to us eventually” Aanna replies

“Well it looks like we have a while to think about it, We have a long way to go. This path looks like it goes on forever”

The scene zooms out to get a better look at the path spanning along out in the distance.
We cut to Dante and Aanna still continuing on the path. Up ahead a large hill becomes barely visible due to a rather minor haze

” We’ve been walking forever, what are we even suppose to be looking for anyways?”

” Well a random black bird told us to head this way, and it looks like the path might be coming to an end.”

” You believe in birds now?”

” You said it yourself, this is probably the way”

” Well it’s the only way, and by the looks of it; it might rain”

” Just a bit further, I think I see a hill up ahead”

Small drops of rain hit Aanna on the head.

” Well what are we going to do about the rain?”

” Ill think of something”

Aanna smiles. Dante continues on for a moment until suddenly the rain begins to come down harder.

” Get off the wagon, and hand me that blanket”

Aanna picks up the blanket and jumps off. Dante flips the wagon upside down and places the blanket underneath.

” Here get under, you’ll be dry here”

” There’s room for you to”

Dante looks to the hill as the haze begins to dissipate and creates a clear view of the hill. He notices a black figure that suddenly rolls down the hill, almost lifeless. Dante notices arms and legs as the rolling stops, and the body lay still. Dante realizes that it is a person and immediately runs towards the body.

” Dante, where are you going!?”

When Dante reaches the body he is left with a naked woman with bleeding scars on her face. He notices large ears; almost like a wolf, and a tail to match. Without hesitation he carries her off to the wagon.

” Aanna I found someone, we need to get her under the wagon; Quick!”

” What!? What’s on her face? “

Dante takes off his shirt.

”Here, put this on her and try to stop whatever’s running down her face”

” But how will you stay out of the rain?”

” Ill be fine , just keep her safe”

Dante sits a top of the wagon, and waits for morning as the rain continues to crash over his exposed body. Darkness.

The silent sound of morning As Day breaks, we see Aanna crawl from underneath the wagon and begins to search for Dante.

” Dante?”

In the distance, coming down from the hill we see Dante carrying what looks to be some kind of fruit. He gets to the wagon and drops them in front of it.

” I don’t know what it is but they look delicious!”

As Aanna grabs for one.

” Where did you find them?”

” On top of the hill. There was actually just one tree that had these, and that’s not even the good part”

“Go on, I’m listening” As she takes a bite from the apple

“So there is this Giant wall that has no end to it”

Aanna expresses a disgusted look towards dante as she lets out a grumble

“That’s the good part!?”

“Well yes, and no”

“Because a giant wall sounds like a really bad thing to bring up!”

“Hang on, there’s more. Not only is there a wall, but there is also a giant tree that has grown right beside it, to my eyes it looks higher than the wall, so that leaves us with an option…. Uhh, I guess”

Aanna gasps in excitement

” Do you know what this means?! If this tree is as huge as you say it is, it might be our chance to get over that wall”

” You do realize we would have to find a way back down, and I would never leave my wagon behind, plus not to mention the extra person that hasn’t woken up yet”

Aanna expresses frustration.

” Why is there always a downside? Why do we have to be in this situation?”

” I’m sure there will be nothing waiting for us on the other side even if we did manage to find a way”

” Are you kidding!? I bet there’s another world just waiting for us”

Aanna looks up at the hill very optimistic.

”After a few more of these we can get a better look”

Dantes stomach grumbles as he is somewhat disappointed

“I wish there was something more filling”

A small moment passes.

” How is she?”

” Well whatever was running down her face stopped, but she has no clothing. If we don’t find her something you’ll be distracted, and we can’t have that from our wagon puller”

” I can assure you that I’m no stranger to the female body. I may have shown up unannounced, and out of nowhere, but that doesn’t mean I would ever lose control of my own mind because of it, and besides; she has my shirt.”

Aanna blushes as she turns her head slightly and lets out a small grunt.

” Well. Lets get back to it”

Dante gets up and lifts the wagon back to its upright position exposing the woman underneath it.

Dante places her in the wagon leaning on the blanket.

” So a giant tree. Don’t you think we would have noticed it when we walked in?

Aanna gets back onto the wagon.

” I never noticed it before the storm broke out, even with this hill we should have at least seen something, but that haze was really hiding a lot. At least we have something to look forward to. When we get to the top I'm sure we can get a better view of things”

As Dante looks at the giant hill before them.

“How hard can it really be?”

“You know, you could just go around instead of climbing it”

“Weren’t you the one asking for an adventure? This is our first obstacle and there’s no way I’m taking the easy way out”

“I like the way you think. Get pulling!”

As Dante takes the wagon and begins to climb the hill. He viciously begins to climb step by step, almost making it look easy. Finally they reach the top

” Well, there it is”

Aanna jumps off the wagon and runs past Dante to face the tree. A scene full of green combined with a giant wall that literally spans from either side, and dead center out in the distance, the Tree.

” Wow!”

She stares in astonishment.

” I don’t know about you, but I have to test this thing out”

As Aanna Runs down the hill towards the tree laughing in joy.

” This girl is too much”

A small grunt can be heard from the back of the wagon. Dante turns around and notices the Woman is sitting up.

”Finally awake?” as Dante responds

”Where am I?”

The woman places her hand over her mouth with a shocked look. We can hear Aanna laughing in the distance as she is seen jumping for a tree branch.

” Something wrong?”

She looks to the side with a short painful grunt; followed by some bleeding from her right cheek wound. Dante walks up to the side of the wagon where she is sitting, and he jumps up on the wheel. He begins to rip off a piece from the blanket.

”it’s not much, but it will stop the bleeding”

Dante puts it across her cheek. She begins to blush slightly and puts her hand up to grab the piece of blanket. Dantes head turns towards Aanna as she finally grabs hold of the branch.

”Gottcha!”

The branch begins to move slightly as it begins to thrash Aanna about.

” Whoaa!”

Dante starts walking over to Aanna just to the edge of the hill.

The branch breaks and Aanna falls down. The tree suddenly opens its eyes to look at Aanna. She lets out a shriek.
“EEEEK!” As the tree responds with a thunderous tone

” How dare you! This is not your tree to own!”

The tree begins to uproot and lean towards Aanna.

” Heh Heh. (As she begins to rub the back of her head) Sorry, I was only trying to climb you all the way to the top”

” so you can break more of me?!”

” Probably, but I would only do it out of kindness”

The tree begins to strike Aanna with one of its branches. She dodges it, and makes her way back to Dante.

Dante begins to point back at the tree. Aanna looks back and lets out a terrified scream. She starts to run to the wagon as the tree chases her all the way up the hill, shooting it’s roots from beneath the ground. When Aanna gets to Dante she hides behind him as the tree winds up for another strike.

” Wait! Wait! wait!”

As the tree stops when Dante speaks.

“Arghhh! what now tiny human?!”

” What’s the problem?”

” That insufferable girl broke one of my branches off, She must be punished!”

” You’re just a tree! What? You expected me not to climb you?”

” You little!”

” Now hold on, lets calm down here”

The tree hesitates and directs his attention to Dante.

”And what do you suppose I do about this?”

” We can work this out, just hear me out”

” Go on”

” Look, we need to get through, or over that wall. Now if you have any ideas, we can never bother you again big guy”

”You need to get through this wall?”

” Yes “

” Only on one condition”

” Alright”

” Punish the girl”

” The tree brings up a good point”

” Hey! You’re actually going to listen to a tree !?”

” trees orders”

Dante turns to Aanna and slaps her across the head. A moment of silence……..

” How dare you! You would listen to a tree!”

As Dante begins to hold Aannas rage back as she flails aimlessly.

” Muahahah! This is amusing, well done human, As promised I shall grant you passage through the wall you speak of”

” Glad to hear”

The woman just stares in amazement

” Big enough for my wagon here, if its not too much trouble”

The tree makes its way towards the wall and begins to smash it down.

” Or that works to I guess”

Dante turns to Aanna as she is leaning on his hand, and breathing heavy.

” Are we done?”

” (Huff)… ye.. yes”

Dante Takes her arm and throws her up gently onto the wagon.

“ Well what better way to get down a hill”

Dante puts on a devilish grin

“Hold on!”

Dante takes a jolting step forward and begins to roll the wagon down the hill. Aanna soon catches her breath.

“ Why can’t this thing always go this fast!?

The Wagon gets extremely close to the tree.

“ Oh right, Stopping!”

Dante and Aanna both close their eyes and hopes for the worst as the woman keeps a blank stare. Suddenly the trees roots grab hold of the wagon and slowly brings it to a hault.

“Phew!”

“ And you thought I was spontaneous”

” Here you are human, now you best be going now”

” Right”

As Dante walks through the hole in the wall, Aanna turns towards the woman.

Character: LunaHeight: 5'10Weight: 150LbsDescription: Long Jet black hair. Ruby red eyes, a slender body with sizable measurements. Fang that extends past her lip. Claw like fingernails. She has a wolfs tail and ears. Scars on both sides of her cheeksAge: Unknown, but takes the appearance of a young adult.

Luna is probably one of the more complicated characters. Her existence is unknown. She is basically depicted as folk lore, or a legend that others in the world have been told. Luna is very calm and collective, but she is rather flustered and shy when she is introduced to new feelings. She has not fully understood human emotions, so she reacts to certain situations rather predictably; making her seem very cliche, but actually it is building her character slowly. rage finds Luna, but it is something she cannot control yet.

Being part wolf, Luna posses a variety of skills that surpass any normal human. Through the slow process of gaining her senses, she has excellent hearing, able to track down even the faintest of noises. When the time comes her tail acts as a receptor that identifies certain traits for most objects or people she comes into contact with, which does leave her body sensitive at times when she chooses to do so. Last but not least, her claws, both deadly and helpful to others, when the time comes her claws offer greater use than just simple anatomy.

The main protagonist for the story. A character very close to my heart. A man that can look within the very core of the people he meets, he discovers their fears, their hopes, desires, so he fights for the ones he holds close. He accepts pain in order to drive his power. Through his actions he teaches others to accept his way of thinking. Though there is only one person that he cannot understand, he cannot see his fears, he cannot understand his conviction, so he must become stronger to reach his power. The eternal struggle from within, to find the source of one's intentions.

Dante enters the world without any understanding of his own existence. He functions and communicates normally as a human. though his existence is not known, he slowly begins to put the pieces of his shattered life together. A very calm and tolerant individual, sometimes he can be annoyed very easily, but most of the time he is very serious and determined in his actions. At times he can act without thinking simply because it is out of instinct, and sometimes it will leave him hurting others, but as quickly as he acts upon his choices, he is quick to apologize and find resolve; creating a stronger bond of trust between the people he meets, and ultimately correcting his behavior.

Character: Aanna Under constructionHeight: 5'6Weight: 140LbsDescription: Long Green hair with vibrant green eyes. Slender body, but toned in certain areas.Age: Unknown, but takes the appearance of a young adult

Aanna is a really important character for the story. She helps to shift your focus within the story. She breaks tension when things need to lighten up, and right away she can get serious and ferocious to help keep a serious moment. She is a very independent character, though it may seem like she is always wanting attention, she has no problem with keeping to herself. She thrives on interaction, through the people she meets she connects with them on a very strong level. She does have a stronger bond between each person she meets, and it is why she also is more sensitive to when things dont turn out so good. I love this character soo much, I like to see her as the face to represent the story. Thats why These characters mean soo much to me, they are all unique, and they have such a great personality .

Aanna enters the world without understanding, just like Dante she can still communicate. She is a very energetic character, very happy and perky, always laughing, always smiling. She always wants to meet new people on her journey so she can connect with them. When she likes a certain someone, she tends to become rather rude and snarky in her behavior when she first meets them, this is mostly for men, but she ultimately becomes the fun loving individual that loves everyone. Though her behavior can sometimes be childish, she is still growing.

Character: Lord Razza

The main Antagonist of the story.

Height: 6'3Weight: UnknownDescription: Long spiky purple hair with some facial hair. Sharp purple eyes. Very fit body type with a lot of mobility and flexibility.Age: Unkown, but takes the appearance of an adult.

Lord Razza is a mystery. He is a very powerful individual that strikes fear into almost everyone he comes into contact with. He is the ruler of the land, he controls anything, and everyone. He is a very intelligent man, and a very fast conqueror. He has found a use for the world and has begun to use it as he pleases, just like the people he controls. He is cold, unforgiving, only what he desires he will seek. His methods are sick, but in the end it seems like he is trying to teach us something. His life is impossible to understand until we can realize his intentions.

Character: Taimiya

Height: 5'11Weight: 192LbsDescription: Long silver hair with blank grey eyes that have a certain gleam and shimmer to them. Usually covered by a cloak, but will expose his body when he is ready for battle. He has a very defined and aged build, muscle tone is very unique and his body has been through experience.Age: 32, but his body does not age the same way, he looks much younger.

Taimiya has been a very long work in progress, but at last he finally has an appearance. Taimiya is the voice of justice, he is the protector of his people. A man who seeks the path of judgement, to once and for all rid the evil that has imprisoned many.

A man who has lived through the pain and suffering that no other could simply withstand. From the grasp of Lord Razza many were forced into a life of slavery, what was done was pure evil, out of greed and desire for one mans true goal. Taimiyas past is a rather tragic tale.

He is a very stern individual that does not tolerate disrespect. Through his struggles in the past he now teaches and trains others to find their true potential, to become a strong willed fighter that can defend against such evil. At times he travels far and wide around the world in order to find others who are worthy of his teachings. His eyes are most notably his main attribute. They are no ordinary eyes, they have the ability to see someones true power and capability, and it is with these eyes that he travels in search for a powerful ally. Though his personality is very strict, he can sometimes break into a frenzy from his hot headed attitude when someone tries to question his methods, or make a joke about it. Taimiya is always in deep thought, usually a meditative state where he can focus. At times he does not say much, but his mental state is very strong. He can observe a persons abilities the moment he lays eyes on them, he always watches every step, every movement, he sees everything even when others cannot. Though his personality is very strict, he does notice the happiness of others

Character: Leena

Height: 5'10Weight:: 147 LbsDescription: Long brown hair that is always tied up in a pony tail with Crimson Lake Eyes. She has a very powerful physique, she has a rather masculine vibe to her character, but overall her feminine appearance balances out her very strict behavior and defensive mentality.Age: 25

This drawing took forever I might still play around with it, really picky with this one.... anyways.

Leena is pretty much a mentor towards most of the characters. Her character is strong yet vulnerable. raised to take the path of violence and battle, she instead denies such a path, and instead she distanced herself from most of her fathers training methods, refusing to use weapons for training and battle. Most of the time she secluded herself from her group, and began to follow two brothers that have been within their group. From a distance she would always watch them test their strength without them knowing. One day the brothers took notice, at the time Leena was very shy when it came to introductions, but she quickly began to boss around the two brothers, and ultimately began to push them harder. They have grown a strong bond of loyalty between each of them throughout the years, and they always work together in every battle.

She is a very stern individual, like Taimiya she does not tolerate disrespect, mainly because She has been training under Taimiya for some time, and she has picked up his sense of pride in making people stronger. She tends to like solo training, finding ways to strengthen her body on her own, but when it came to others she always insists that she would train them. Learning from Taimiya she has become very skilled in hand to hand combat, and she can take down almost every single male one on one. She is rather vulnerable as a character even though her strength and presence is not to be taken lightly. She can get flustered very easy when things seem to break her from the norm, or usual answers and outcomes, and sometimes she can lose her mind if this happens, and act out of anger towards someone, but her past has allowed her to disconnect such a grudge, and ultimately move on to whats important.

Characters- Kano / Mitsiri

Height: 6'2 / 6'Weight: Combined 465LbsDescription: Kano and Mitsiri both have black hair and dark green eyes. Kano has a short cut while Mitsiri has very shaggy and long hair. Both are extremely built in terms of muscle tone, walls of muscle that are synchronized with every step. Though there is a slight difference in height and weight, both are always side by side in every conflict.Age: Kano- 27 Mitsiri- 26

The walls of the World. These two men thrived on power and brute force and always tested their strength whenever they could, or whenever they decided to find a challenge. You can see them always carrying with them their massive shields as they take on any challenge, or face off against any opposition. They settled within a small group that was on the constant run from Lord Razza, with the few they had Kano and Mitsiri started from a young age showing great power. Though most could not even keep up with the two brothers, both the brothers decided to maximize their potential by finding new tests of strength. A considerable gap between the two, one showing more dominance and resilience, it is Mitsiri who must make up for his weakness by always matching himself next to his brother Kano. Ever since they have met Leena both brothers soon developed a flawless execution of teamwork and cooperation which has made these two one of the strongest duos to ever hit the battle.

They follow Leenas orders like a Conductor as they Cater to her ever movement and signal. She has found a way to maximize Kano and Mitsiris full power by allowing them to achieve perfect synchronization in movement, speed, and pure brute force. Kano is more easy going for a lot of things, he does not accept someones behavior as wrong, nor poorly executed, he always allows others to show them what they're made of before he lays any judgement. Mitsiri is very playful, and he always has a positive mentality, but he usually gets easily manipulated by others into giving in for them. He is always 1 step behind Kano, so he always tries to become his equal.

Character: Talon

Height: 5"11Weight: 185 LbsDescription: A very toned down purple for hair color, not vibrant, but very dull, the drawing pretty much defines it. His hair is tied up, it is medium length, the picture pretty much defines it, I am not even going to attempt to find out the actual style, but this is pretty much how I want the character to look. His eyes, now this is probably a really difficult thing to achieve especially for where I am now, but I want his eyes to be like little mini tornado's , like both of his iris's are tiny tornados; so yeah, good luck me. He is supposed to resemble and really embody speed. His body is very maintained, but he doesn't need to go overboard with the amount of shred or muscle since he is pretty much one of the fastest characters in the story. In general his overall vibe is very cocky.Age: Unknown but takes the appearance of an adult.

Talon is Lord Razzas right hand man. A man of pure speed he is the captain of Lord Razzas Army. Talon is another mystery, though he has lived within the World for some time his actual past isn't very clear, only Lord Razza knows of his past. Trained personally by Razza himself Talon has always lived by the sword, he has perfected the art of war and his skill with the sword can almost exceed Razza himself.

Talon is an individual who only sees perfection, taking after Lord Razza Talon developed an obsession with being one of the fastest warriors in the world. Having no real respect for the lives of others he takes orders from Razza like a dog, just as long as he can dispatch his targets with his own sword. Talon might have a twisted side to his personality, but he is a very dedicated warrior who ultimately shows respect towards a worthy opponent, which is why he takes orders from Razza, since Razza showed him respect towards the sword Talon ultimately took on a more sadistic side. As long as someone can go toe to toe with him, that is when he can begin to change his ways.

He is very cocky, and his only concern is being the fastest warrior in the world, but that doesnt mean he is completely brain washed. There is more to Talon than meets the eye, though he is very skilled and dangerous, there is this good deep within that is desperately trying to find it's way out.

Character: Yuna
Height: 5'8Weight: 132lbsDescription: Silky long blue hair with various tones and hues. Vibrant blue eyes, for her size she has a very voluptuous figure. She is a rather melancholy character who just can't seem to find happiness, but her body still moves with grace and purpose.Age: Unknown but takes the appearance of an adult

Yuna is a character best defined as a voice. Her character for the early part of the story does not reveal herself, but I wanted to showcase her character. Since she is such an important character I felt that in order to actually prepare for her reveal it is best to understand her personality and appearance. Yuna is the keeper of water within the world, and it is her duty to protect and distribute it according to her will. Her past of being completely used left her to wallow in her sea of despair and grief, living her life in solitude her cries of help are sub consciously felt throughout the world. Hatred she harbors, and it ultimately consumes her. Though her gentle spirit and loving embrace was once something she had, the betrayal that left her broken has changed her into a cold and unforgiving woman. Now almost everyone in the world is too afraid to even approach Yuna, though she still allows people to take from her resource, she has since revealed herself to others and has secluded herself to a large body of water where she lingers with her sorrow, dancing away the pain she creates her own friends from the only thing she can trust.

The first reveal of a Guardian. Yuna, the Guardian of water ( I totally want to finish the background for this )

Character: Blaze

Height: 5'5Weight: 120 LbsDescription: Medium red hair with red eyes, usually they will change color slightly depending on her power output, normally they would be a very light red; almost pinkish, but they will fluctuate from the color red, maybe a bit redish orange, colors of fire, etc. She is absolutely shredded, her body is in top physical performance, combine with her sinister style of fighting she is ridiculously agile. Her face is covered with a mask that cannot be removed, so only her eyes can express her emotion, though most of the time she has no emotion.Age: Unknown, but takes the appearance of a Teenage.

Blaze is a very difficult character to understand So I'd like to take a moment to fully explain such a powerful and meaningful character. Her life is torture, being captive, locked away. She is silenced by a mask that cannot be removed, silent, but how very deadly she is. She is put through torture and pain so her emotions become non existent. Used as a machine for war, she is the final solution. Whatever destruction she carries out, she feels nothing for the lives taken. Ultimately she cannot feel sorry for her actions, she has no voice to hear her own cries, the tears that she would shed are burned away from the power she creates. Trapped, alone, forgotten, her mind is taken by the outcome of swift death brought upon others, only to drive herself insane from the constant feelings that burn within that tell her stop..... Why? Insanity consumes her, and the internal conflict between preventing this madness, but always being completely helpless, knowing no one but her master she is lost. Whatever life she thinks she has is shattered to pieces by the constant destruction and death of others, the screams of the people she slays are burned in her mind to further add to her insanity.

She is like a rose; those thorns that damage, the ones that know of them will never avoid such punishment; inflicted from something unavoidable, though her body is made of razors that cut too deep and burn to severe, the only one to endure this deadly embrace must ultimately know sacrifice, A shattered life that is lost to the past, but still they are here, still they wait, to be reborn. The only grace, the only beauty is within those petals, each and every single petal to form that beautiful rose. What is beauty? Must we embrace infliction itself in order to truly find it? Are we sorry for the damage that we've caused? Roses cannot speak, but if they could, what would they sound like? Do they mean to hurt others? From a distance we appreciate what makes them beautiful, but only when we embrace one, then we can truly feel that beauty.

Her heart still yearns for someone, but only she can break free from this curse herself. What her master has done to her, these unspeakable horrors, still she is unyielding . Though she is driven to the brink of insanity, her ears are always open, listening for the truth, listening to hope, even through the screams and pain she still holds on to the smallest shred of hope, the smallest flame in her heart that cannot be extinguished. What strength, what resilience, The passionate rose does not give way that easy. No matter what she has become, it is the one true voice that will set her free.

Character: Astrum

Height: 6’3

Weight: Unkown

Age: Unkown

Description: Astrum has medium to long hair, sometimes his hair will fluctuate in length seamlessly, but still staying the same shade of purplish red, and it radiates color, very silky and shimmering with life. Half of his face, specifically the top half of his face is covered by a protective energy that contains his form. He takes on a human form to connect with the present life forms as he searches for possible candidates.

Astrum plays a huge role within the world. Understandably he is not introduced until further into the story. His existence like most is uncertain, but he was not of the world we call X. Astrum finds importance in power, who has power, and what power others can attain. He does not belong to any side, he does not understand the concept of good and evil, only what he truly believes and sees for his own eyes.
He is a very intellectual individual, both in mind and spirit. Though he is not defined or labeled as an actual human, he is only seen as true power and energy. When he becomes a part of the world for what ever reason he chooses, he is not hostile, nor does he have to be defensive, since no one in their right mind would ever dare face Astrum. He is told in tales and legends of the world, how he was an idol, a presence of unimaginable power. They say he would never speak, probably for the simple fact that no one was capable enough to show him worth, he observed the people of the world. Though the world itself showed promise of power he always kept a close eye on this particular planet. Astrum is not limited to just this world we call X, He can choose to travel wherever he wants to within the universe itself.

It now seems Astrum has become interested with a few individuals within the world, and he now seeks to search for the next true power.

The first reveal of an Overseer. Astrum- The Celestial Overseer

Story board/ story scenes,comics, manga
Here is my first story board attempt. My hand writting is probably disgusting, but it still might be clear enough to read, but ill type in the actual words to the scenes just for clarity. This is the introduction to the entire story. This scene revolves around the meeting of both Dante, and AAnna.

Sort of like how you read manga, I went from the top right to left as far as order goes. Try reading it normally, but I have added the dialogue above the every scene

And so our travelling adventurers began their journey. Knowing not the life they have, but growing into the life they were born to take. A man is stoppend by a passing woman as she finds her way towards his wagon, and begins to get his attention

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Aanna" Don't tell me youre the one who pulls that thing" "How do you expect to take me on a journey with transportation like this?"Dante" For your information, this thing is called a wagon, and I don't recall ever planning your so called adventure"" And don't get any ideas. just from the looks of you makes me feel.... Irritated"Aanna" For something so plain I can definitely see the appeal"

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vvvvvvvAanna" There's only one problem. This so called wagon isn't moving"vvvvvvvvvvv"Now I don't know about you, but if we were moving our adventure can begin""Or are you someone who takes joy in making others wait for you to make a decision" "Or is it simply because you cant put others first instead of always yourself" " What a selfish thing to do! I don't even know what selfish means! but you would be the answer"Dante" If I pull this damn thing! Will you shut that mouth of yours!?

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Aanna" Now that sounds like fun. I want to see what a wagon can do!"Dante " The moment this wagon is pulled, no more words from you"Aanna" If that would make you start pulling, by all means"Dante" What are you planning? I can see it"" And put that back!"Aanna" Please do, it is your's of course, I wouldn't want to trouble you"Dante" Anything is better than hearing you speak" "You are trouble. Be greatful you're getting a free ride"

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Aanna" I am greatful, but dont you think all of this seems odd, I feel all my words before I speak them" " So my actions can't be helped. i think you can understand what i'm saying"Dante" Actually I do. You may be annoying, but i guess we're in the same situation"Aanna" I'm not annoying remember, I can't control what I do so you just have to accept my nature"

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Dante" Alright you know the deal, no more talking once we started moving"Aanna starts hummingDante" I knew it"Aanna" It seems we stopped, or have you found something wrong?"" Maybe your poor choice of words"Dante" I believe I've found out how you work, and it annoys me" " But trying to go about silencing you would be pointless. Just behave, this is all I ask"

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Aanna" I can only promise you that I can't be controlled, but there is a chance of silence and calm"Dante" That doesn't solve anything, hows about not talking for a while?"Aanna" If we keep this up you will have understood exactly who i am"" I like that about you"Dante" yes I am Thrilled to have made this experience so entertaining"Aanna" So we can talk all about the fun we are going to have"" Doesn't that sound like a better idea?Dante" Oh yes, the idea of fun sounds wonderful. How about we just accept chance?Aanna" Now that is something we can both agree on"

Story time with Shtickles

Well well, The mightiest of moles has appeared. Shtickles is pretty much the mascot, but he is another very important Character.

He will pop up from his hole from time to time to tell you all about World X, and the stories he has experienced.

Guardians Part 1

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"Well now, how much do you know about Guardians?

Many would call them Gods, but others believe they are simply super humans . Though they wouldn't be entirely wrong, there is however a more definitive explanation.

The world we know consists of natural elements. Fire, water, earth, wind, some of your basic elements, however, these elements have been thought to be unattainable in terms of control. No man, woman or child could hold the power of the elements, but there are few who can. Guardians have the ability to control such elements, and use that power to keep the natural order and balance within the world.

It does not end there. Guardians do not simply have access to only the elements. When they are given the task to defend and guard an element, there must ultimately be a resistance, something that can resist the forces of the elements. Elements bring balance to the world, but elements can also destroy it, so we must find equilibrium in order to coexist with the natural order within the world, and ultimately find serenity. In recent times there has been much extensive research done on what could be considered a guardian, and there was one man who brought this theory to reality.

Guardians Part 2

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Now where were we? ahhh yes; His name is Lord Razza. We must refer to him as such for he is the ruler of this world. He created the theory behind Guardians, though this man is said to be the one true evil; no one can deny his intellect. His theory was simply this. For every action, there is an equal or opposing reaction. Now you might say to yourself; this sounds oddly familiar, indeed it would in the context you are most suitable with, but consider this as a lesson, both in mind and body.

Guardians are protectors for the World we Call X. Both a presence of almighty power and unity; Guardians ultimately bring balance to the world, because that is their creed, but there is however another alternative that seems to provide a more probable yet awe inspiring outcome. We force the imbalance. So what does this mean? it simply means that we provide the world with an action so immense that it will undoubtedly cause the reaction, and that reaction is what leads to creation.

This my friends is what drives this man. He sees what most people can't even dream of, He envisions such ideas that I myself cannot even fathom. He is right to be feared by all. Whether you believe me or not is your choice, but the story has yet to unfold.

The great Dividing

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Gather round and listen to the tale of how this world came to be. This story is very important, so i implore you to listen.

This world was not always so cruel, there was a time when people lived their lives care free, living off of the land day by day, surviving from their own will, and honoring the land. Now the world has become almost like a waste land, many areas within the world have become mining grounds, other parts are riddled with disease and plagues caused by the by product of creating a new wave of ideas and inventions. The people in this world did not want this to happen, but No one could stop the man that is Lord Razza. It all started when Razza took control of a small group of people, A following he had gained after the incident before the great dividing, no one knows for sure what really happened on that day, but people began to fear Razza because of it. He decided to put an end to the uncontrollable World they were currently living in. The world was always full of storms and natural disasters that could not be avoided due to the surge of this unknown power , Razza wanted to put the world within his own hand of control.

So he searched for every single person within the world, and he ordered them to follow him, and those who refused, only certain death and suffering followed. Each and every person he gathered began to fear Razza and ultimately cower to his will. One by one he collected every single person within the world, and once he gathered everyone he then created the first half of the world, and this half is known as X. This is when Razza discovered a mineral that would change the entire world.

Finding this materiel he put the people he gathered through slavery, and he began to build a wall that spanned across the entire circumference. The process of creating that wall put a great amount of stress on the land which began to take its toll. At this time Razza made sure to gather every single predator within that half and exile them to the other side of that wall, leaving all livestock in his control and mercy, and ultimately becoming the only natural predator. It took years to build that wall, and many people parished to complete it. Finally when it was finished the world became still, and suddenly everything stopped. Lord Razza achieved control.

Now there were two halves to the world, divided straight down the center. On one side there was natural order, and the other side was absolute rule. What became of the other half that was left abandoned, no one knows. No one knows why Lord Razza created such a Wall, but now the World ruled by Razza still suffers, until that man has ceased his hunger for power and control.

Overseers

It has been to long! please, sit and stay a while.

Overseers, quite the topic to discuss, but understand that this is limited for your own good.

Overseers are truly seen as Immortal Gods. Though guardians were thought to be on the same level of power, overseers are the true masters of their domain. Each having a unique order and Oath that they must ultimately abide by. However there are only three overseers in existence as far as we know. Celestial, Spiritual, and evolution, the trinity that keeps this world in perfect order and balance.

Overseers are never to harm another human, they are simply given the task to enforce their rule over their specific domain and duty in order to maintain harmony and balance within the world. Celestial overseer is given the task of protecting the world from the universe, but only when it has chosen a specific planet to protect, only one planet may be rooted to his/ hers rule as an overseer, but at any given time that overseer can deny that world of his presence, leaving it exposed and unprotected. Spiritual overseer has control of spiritual energy that has released from their original vessel, given the task to properly send these spirits to their rightful place, or allow this spiritual energy to become one with the planet. In addition Spiritual overseers can rightfully take this spiritual energy in order to freely use it for their own will, as long as they sacrifice a single position as an overseer. Positions, or levels vary.

Last but not least, evolution overseer. now the evolution overseer is a very unique overseer, because of their ability to interact with humans, they also have the ability to breed with humans in order to create an offspring worthy of the title, but in doing so they will become mortal until that offspring becomes a suitable candidate. Given the task to live a life of mortality in order to prove the worth of the human race.

Very brief, but an exceptional lesson for these beings . Until next time " * scurries back down a hole*

What am I looking for? Just someone to look at it. Criticism, I don't care, tell me what you think. I don't care what people say about it, as long as they say something.

Okay, well...here ya go:

First of all, I would highly suggest getting a drawing tablet so you can create your art digitally. Its going to need to get there eventually, and you'll save yourself a lot of hassle now if you get on top of it. Additionally, there is typically a layout that is used for comics which allows for scale-ability as well as a little bit of bleed and whatnot (http://www.idrawdigital.com/2010/01/tutorial-page-layouts-for-comics/). This is also made a lot easier if you work digitally. It would also make the lettering infinitely easier.

About the Art:
-I would like to see you try to polish your character portraits. While its fine to "storyboard" your actual pages, you should have essentially character drawings which are polished to ensure that you keep things consistent (and to allow more critique of your art style). This usually involves a few full body drawings (front, profile, rear and maybe 3/4ths) of the character just standing as well as several drawing of the face with the character's different emotions.
-Still speaking about the character portraits, I feel like the eyes are both too big and too high on the head (at least on the male drawing). I also feel like you should simplify the hair a lot (at least for the male). As is, it looks like its going to be hell to draw in the actual panels.

About the Panelling:
-Why are you going right to left? I mean, its your decision, but I feel like you are just cutting off a part of your potential audience if you are making a western comic that reads manga-style.
-Think of your perspectives in terms of a movie. Where would they shoot to make a shot look interesting. You seem to just be placing your camera without much thought, but if all thats happening in a panel is a different character is talking, think about ways to combine them into one panel or think about ways you can make that shot interesting (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5UE3jz_O_EM). For example, on page two, your first two panels are just close-ups of the characters. I would pull the camera back a little and do that as a wide frame with both characters in the shot. Actually, all the dialogue on that whole page could go into one wide frame your panels should transition from action to action. Right now they don't do much of that.
-The backgrounds. First of all, you don't need them in every frame. Grab a manga or a comic off of your shelf. The majority of panels either don't have backgrounds or have very simple backgrounds. Generally, if they don't tell you anything, you don't need them. If you are using a shot to establish setting, then keep the background, but you only need to do that a few times per scene.

About the Story:
-Where is the hook? I feel like you just dumped me into this setting and after almost 10 pages, I still haven't seen a hook. Just two characters that we know nothing about shooting the shit.
-Your characters relationship doesn't really make sense to me. It feels weird for characters with a past and even weirder for strangers.
-Your wagon. Do horses not exist in this world? I'm sorry if this seems like a nitpick, but its weird, is it not? Take a page from literally any fantasy story ever and just give them a horse to ride on, or a horse to pull the carriage. Not only would it make more sense to a reader, but I think that it would allow much more interesting shots and scenes in the future.

About Writing a Comic:
-Writing comics is hard. Like you, I spent years mulling over an idea, drawing character sketches and I even started panelling. Then I realized two things: 1) A good comic requires really good art. I couldn't bring that to the table and I wasn't willing to put in the time to get to that level before starting my art. My suggestion on this front would be either go ham on honing your artistic craft, or regrettably, switch mediums. 2) A good comic requires a good script. I don't know if you have a script that you are working from, but you should, and I don't mean just a basic outline for the story. You should make sure you have all of the script stuff really tied down and really good before you start drawing it.

What am I looking for? Just someone to look at it. Criticism, I don't care, tell me what you think. I don't care what people say about it, as long as they say something.

Okay, well...here ya go:

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First of all, I would highly suggest getting a drawing tablet so you can create your art digitally. Its going to need to get there eventually, and you'll save yourself a lot of hassle now if you get on top of it. Additionally, there is typically a layout that is used for comics which allows for scale-ability as well as a little bit of bleed and whatnot (http://www.idrawdigital.com/2010/01/tutorial-page-layouts-for-comics/). This is also made a lot easier if you work digitally. It would also make the lettering infinitely easier.

About the Art:
-I would like to see you try to polish your character portraits. While its fine to "storyboard" your actual pages, you should have essentially character drawings which are polished to ensure that you keep things consistent (and to allow more critique of your art style). This usually involves a few full body drawings (front, profile, rear and maybe 3/4ths) of the character just standing as well as several drawing of the face with the character's different emotions.
-Still speaking about the character portraits, I feel like the eyes are both too big and too high on the head (at least on the male drawing). I also feel like you should simplify the hair a lot (at least for the male). As is, it looks like its going to be hell to draw in the actual panels.

About the Panelling:
-Why are you going right to left? I mean, its your decision, but I feel like you are just cutting off a part of your potential audience if you are making a western comic that reads manga-style.
-Think of your perspectives in terms of a movie. Where would they shoot to make a shot look interesting. You seem to just be placing your camera without much thought, but if all thats happening in a panel is a different character is talking, think about ways to combine them into one panel or think about ways you can make that shot interesting (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5UE3jz_O_EM). For example, on page two, your first two panels are just close-ups of the characters. I would pull the camera back a little and do that as a wide frame with both characters in the shot. Actually, all the dialogue on that whole page could go into one wide frame your panels should transition from action to action. Right now they don't do much of that.
-The backgrounds. First of all, you don't need them in every frame. Grab a manga or a comic off of your shelf. The majority of panels either don't have backgrounds or have very simple backgrounds. Generally, if they don't tell you anything, you don't need them. If you are using a shot to establish setting, then keep the background, but you only need to do that a few times per scene.

About the Story:
-Where is the hook? I feel like you just dumped me into this setting and after almost 10 pages, I still haven't seen a hook. Just two characters that we know nothing about shooting the shit.
-Your characters relationship doesn't really make sense to me. It feels weird for characters with a past and even weirder for strangers.
-Your wagon. Do horses not exist in this world? I'm sorry if this seems like a nitpick, but its weird, is it not? Take a page from literally any fantasy story ever and just give them a horse to ride on, or a horse to pull the carriage. Not only would it make more sense to a reader, but I think that it would allow much more interesting shots and scenes in the future.

About Writing a Comic:
-Writing comics is hard. Like you, I spent years mulling over an idea, drawing character sketches and I even started panelling. Then I realized two things: 1) A good comic requires really good art. I couldn't bring that to the table and I wasn't willing to put in the time to get to that level before starting my art. My suggestion on this front would be either go ham on honing your artistic craft, or regrettably, switch mediums. 2) A good comic requires a good script. I don't know if you have a script that you are working from, but you should, and I don't mean just a basic outline for the story. You should make sure you have all of the script stuff really tied down and really good before you start drawing it.

Best of luck good sir.

Don't feel the need to repost, just a big thank you, and some answers.

Thank you ill definitely check out the links when I get time. I appreciate the lengthy post, a lot of helpful direction.

Yes, I was looking into a Wacom drawing tablet since it's around my area, just using what I got right now, but I really want to get into digital. I definitely want to polish my characters, but it's tricky to juggle writing and drawing equally, but I like when you talk about consistency, and I see where it can help a lot.

As far as the hook. I was merely getting everyone comfortable with the characters, and it wasn't to hook you just yet, simply just to build your interest. There is still a lot of story to be told, like, ridiculous, but I have to do a lot of editing, and basically rewriting a lot of scenes because i'm always finding better ways to tell the story, and I always try to think about how others will follow the story as well, which can cause issues, but I feel this story is very unique, and I shall see it through to the end

okay first thing i think that would help you is to write a background for your characters. you already have a solid understanding of each characters role in story development which is great, however, you should write yourself a reference of each character to help add depth and meaning to their roles. For example: (i don't want to affect any of your ideas therefore i will use characters of my own making for all of my examples)

Major life events that have shaped Jenna Jenna was abandoned by her parents at a young age and sent to an all girls boarding school by her grandmother. because of the trauma caused from the abandonment, Jenna was not able to make friends with the girls at her school and became the target of bullying. Resulting personality traits
Jenna is quiet and socially awkward, she lacks self confidence and doesn't like to draw any attention to herself or take any real risks. Jenna gets framed for stealing by the girls at her school and ends up running away. When she is out on the streets a man decides to take her in as a result of this mans kindness and of their various experiences together, Jenna's personality goes through a transformation throughout the rest of the story.
A necessary part of a great story is a writer who can empathize with their own characters. If a certain character plays a certain role, ask yourself why. what events in their life may have shaped them to become that role. knowing a characters life events will prevent you from having shallow characters. it will also make writing your story and drawing your pictures much easier if you already know the ins and outs of your characters emotional state. also if you want your characters to be unique then knowing their past is the best way to achieve that. our past is what shapes us and makes us different from everyone else. (among other things of course like super powers and such) hope this is helpful to you. i have alot more to tell you but ill save ot for another post.

here is a guide to correctly position the eyes nose mouth and hairlines for doing character sketches. its always a good idea to create a template for drawing each character that will be easy for you to draw over and over to keep consistency throughout your story. To add to what Sundin said about not needing backgrounds: draw a completely detailed background in the first scene each time the setting is changed in the story and then the rest of the panels you can either leave it out or do a very simple styling of it this will give the reader a clear visual of how the scenery is changing throughout the story without creating too much noise
Also study perspective drawing, vanishing point etc. in order to add some interesting POV's to your panels you will want to have a very clear understanding of how to apply various vanishing points.

The most basic explanation of vanishing point

the vanishing point is the farthest point in which you are able to see before stuff gets too far away to perceive. it demonstrates how the human eye perceives images across distance It lies on the horizon line.

this is a very basic example so i would suggest some more extensive research on it.

also i agree with sundin in the respect that you need a good script. i would write the script before story boarding. What is a good script? for each and every panel write a descriptive dialogue of what is happening, describe the visuals. then for each panel write the spoken dialogue.
EX: [

But, before you begin writing your script you will need to fully map out your story, your characters, your settings and then create a story outline. although it may seem like a lot of work to do these things, they will actually save you a ton of work in the end helping you to stay consistent and have a meaningful story.

okay first thing i think that would help you is to write a background for your characters. you already have a solid understanding of each characters role in story development which is great, however, you should write yourself a reference of each character to help add depth and meaning to their roles. For example: (i don't want to affect any of your ideas therefore i will use characters of my own making for all of my examples)

Major life events that have shaped Jenna Jenna was abandoned by her parents at a young age and sent to an all girls boarding school by her grandmother. because of the trauma caused from the abandonment, Jenna was not able to make friends with the girls at her school and became the target of bullying. Resulting personality traits
Jenna is quiet and socially awkward, she lacks self confidence and doesn't like to draw any attention to herself or take any real risks. Jenna gets framed for stealing by the girls at her school and ends up running away. When she is out on the streets a man decides to take her in as a result of this mans kindness and of their various experiences together, Jenna's personality goes through a transformation throughout the rest of the story.
A necessary part of a great story is a writer who can empathize with their own characters. If a certain character plays a certain role, ask yourself why. what events in their life may have shaped them to become that role. knowing a characters life events will prevent you from having shallow characters. it will also make writing your story and drawing your pictures much easier if you already know the ins and outs of your characters emotional state. also if you want your characters to be unique then knowing their past is the best way to achieve that. our past is what shapes us and makes us different from everyone else. (among other things of course like super powers and such) hope this is helpful to you. i have alot more to tell you but ill save ot for another post.

Yeah, i've been meaning to write up a background for my characters, I mean I have them written down, but for personal reference, but I should just have the basics down as far as body/height, hair, color, so I'll definitely add that in. I just think sometimes it might be a little too much as far as information goes. Like for most of my characters, if I were to actually go into detail about their past, or actual character, it will literally explain their entire situation instead of being left in the dark. I don't know if that's actually a good thing to do. The way I see it there actually isn't a real explanation, because most of these characters have just been brought into the world. Other characters do have a past, and I think I can actually go into detail, because then; as you said they will have a personal attachment, but other characters you will experience them as they are, as soon as you are introduced, that is their beginning, and you must work hard to actually build attachment towards those characters.

This whole story actually revolves around finding out what brought you here in the first place, and that some characters dont really have a past to connect with until they actually figure it out on their own. Though I do include a lot of other characters who actually have a background and past , other characters are meant to grow into the person they actually once were in order to endure the (suffering) that will allow them to recieve absolution, and others are meant to discover the person that is within, but ultimately being disconnected from their point of origin, so they are still the same person, but their personality is not yet refined due to this disconnect.

I will create a much detailed character description. Maybe I'll put all the characters I have, but I do like having a drawing to help others visualize the actual character, it takes a week, but now it's just a matter of laying everything out that will help others understand a little more

here is a guide to correctly position the eyes nose mouth and hairlines for doing character sketches. its always a good idea to create a template for drawing each character that will be easy for you to draw over and over to keep consistency throughout your story. To add to what Sundin said about not needing backgrounds: draw a completely detailed background in the first scene each time the setting is changed in the story and then the rest of the panels you can either leave it out or do a very simple styling of it this will give the reader a clear visual of how the scenery is changing throughout the story without creating too much noise
Also study perspective drawing, vanishing point etc. in order to add some interesting POV's to your panels you will want to have a very clear understanding of how to apply various vanishing points.

The most basic explanation of vanishing point

the vanishing point is the farthest point in which you are able to see before stuff gets too far away to perceive. it demonstrates how the human eye perceives images across distance It lies on the horizon line.

this is a very basic example so i would suggest some more extensive research on it.

also i agree with sundin in the respect that you need a good script. i would write the script before story boarding. What is a good script? for each and every panel write a descriptive dialogue of what is happening, describe the visuals. then for each panel write the spoken dialogue.
EX: [

But, before you begin writing your script you will need to fully map out your story, your characters, your settings and then create a story outline. although it may seem like a lot of work to do these things, they will actually save you a ton of work in the end helping you to stay consistent and have a meaningful story.

I am a lazy artist that is why my consistency is awful. I get a blank sheet, and I draw. I should take it seriously. This will help a lot with drawing hair and proportioning the actual face, thank you so I'll start doing it from now on. It's the nose I have problems with, I can never draw it right so that it still looks animated, so I literally put dots and arcs, same with poses since I am using no reference.

I would love to draw some great backgrounds or scenic artwork since my story is pretty much outside almost all of the time.

Scripts would help. I think I need to take a couple of scenes within the story and take a shot at drawing them, and just from looking at that example, I need to add more detail into the actual story. I'm basically visualizing everything in my head and only writing scenes that I would only truly visualize instead of writing it down word for word. This is simply me getting ahead of myself and thinking too far ahead into the story that I forget to actually fully describe the scene.

I'll definitely need to buckle down and get crazy with detailed scenes as far as getting a script going.

No, I don't believe in paying for something you can teach yourself, especially when you can buy equipment with that kind of money.

Don't get me wrong, art class will speed up the process and give you soo much reference, but the way I see it, I got years ahead of me. I appreciate any help I can get, but this allows me to push myself. I can search and study a lot of things on my own, or from other people's suggestions.