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18 thoughts on “You will come back to me”

I’d have to go with poem. 😛
A poem need’nt have rhythm or rhyme(that would ofcourse make it a potential candidate for a song…nonetheless a song can be a poem too… ).The paragraphing,the flow of words,the impeccable description and cycle of thoughts plaguing the mind of a typical adolescent/teenager is articulately portrayed by the “POET” 😛 .Though i think u meant to write “I’ll **be**waiting for you.” in the first line of the last para 😉 Nevertheless great effort keep experimenting 🙂

YFNW, in my opionion, a poem should have rhythm at least. I don’t know whether this poem has any rhythm or not. And thanks for pointing out that that this looks like a teenager’s work. It definitely didn’t come out as mature as I would have wanted it to. The grammatical mistake has been corrected. And yeah, thanks for calling me a “poet” 🙂

anumeha, glad that you liked it 🙂

Abhishek, if you can detect some flow, then it definitely is a poem. Rhyme isn’t necessary. In fact, I hate stupid rhyming.

Abhijeet, well, the idea I wanted to convey was that although he’s been dumped, the protagonist still loves and admires his lady.
And the guy is confident that she’ll come back to him, so he himself advices her to go around with others. ‘Thik hai, ja kahaan tak jayegi. Aana toh mere paas hi padega :D’. He doesn’t want her to ‘suffer’ as such, but to realize what’s good for her.

Anyways, to each one his own interpretation. If you took the “poem” in some other way than what I intended it to be, that only proves that there’s something in my work.
And yeah, thanks for the compliment 🙂

Kunal, don’t worry. I’m not the protagonist 🙂

@nks, honoured 🙂

Mythalez, seniors are always right. Rule 1 of IIIT, isn’t it? 😛

clickingthoughts, I hope this happens to noone. But then won’t life be very dull if everything happened for good?

Srijan, thanks for the compliment. Yeah, maybe you can call if a Hmmer. YIPPEE! I’ve invented a new art form! 😀

Rahul, I’m not on talking terms with her, did you forget? 😀
Thanks for the compliment 🙂

Harsh, thanks for calling it a poem. And please don’t think of it as an autobiographical work 🙂

For all my well-wishers, this poem is NOT an autobiographical work! It doesn’t resemble any person living or dead.

good hai ..improved ..I wouldn’t say it immature ..any one would even think the similar way when they loose some one , ….whether they are teens or in their 30s ..though expression and content would be different !

Hi Ani.
There is good substance in your post. I don’t think it looks teen. It is good, but perhaps you could say the one who is dumped hasn’t matured much. Maybe the first experience? (He’ll learn to take it more stoically the next time!)