Nice. You do need to put in capitalizations where needed, like "Moms" and "Dads" unless it's something else like "Mom's" and "Dad's," that is, if it's not plural. You also need to put in commas and periods where needed. If it's a quote, the period and/or comma should be before the ending quote like this:
These are just examples:

Period: Lillian looked at John, hesitating before replying. "I'm speechless." Should not be like: "I'm speechless".