A what if scenario about a folkloric entity (link provided within the article), who instead of eating demons, allows them to blossom and grow for a time before dining. It is also a cutthroat, business advisor/motivational coach. Under tab "Nighteater."

I think the problem that I have with this is that reading it I never developed any particular attachment to any of the characters and there wasn't much else besides character to hold my attention.

The first part of the narrative with the critter bouncing between being professional and furious give me some sense of its personality but the second part of the piece is a history of the a character that we have never met. Given that this is recounted in a fairly detached manner it doesn't do a lot to add to the creature characterization. It also doesn't tell us enough about Derek for him to be a very developed character.

I think that this would work better if you focused on giving a really clear characterization of one or the other.