Hello JPF Family. I just finished 50/90, I only created 12 songs in the last 90 days, but it is better than nothing. I still co-run a songwriting group here in NH, I have been doing that for 5 years. I perform at open mics, I perform in a duet group for money!! LOL! Money is nice and I also co-run an open mic for money! LOL! Been a long time since I recorded acapella songs in the shower! I have an Art Event where I will be selling my photos in October. Staying busy, but always have my JPF family in my heart and mind and missing everyone!

This is one of my favorite songs I just created this week for 50/90: (be prepared for my mad mando skills LOL! I try....

Did you ever want to hearwhat I have to sayMy words flutter around youthen fly awayI wish you could take them inI wish they were worth a listenyou and I are missing a connection

Did you ever want to seethe world around memoon, stars, flowers, treescolors in my atmosphereI wish you saw natures perfectionwitness my life from every directionyou and I are missing a connection

ChorusI need to go on a journey to findthe eyes of the one that is searching for minethe heart that beats to the rhythm of my soulmy connection, my story that' never been told

Did you ever want to feelwhat I'm like to touchholding hands feels so safeis that asking too muchwould you reach out and touch my skindo you ever want this kind of affectionyou and I are missing a connection

ChorusI need to go on a journey to findthe eyes of the one that is searching for minethe heart that beats to the rhythm of my soulmy connection, my story that' never been told

Your phrasing feels very real and honest and your voice carries a range of emotions and is on target with them in every line.

'I need to go on a journey to findthe eyes of the one that is searching for mine"

That's magic there..

The singer's self-affirmation feels real and earned and helps carry her on that journey to find that real connection.It's refreshing to hear this from a woman sung in the first person with no attempt at making "clever" the main thing, and so the sincerity and warmth shine on through very clearly.

Well done, and great to hear from you and thanks for catching us up on what you've been doing.

Mike

Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 10/04/1903:11 PM.

Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choiceFortune depends on the tone of your voice

-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)from the song "Songs of Love"from the album "Casanova" (1996)

Been shopping in the next town north of West Mayberry and finally got a chance to hear your song, Tams:

Wow... you nailed it and it is a moving song. Moving in the way Brian always says a song should be... and nobody with good sense argues with the Boss! LOL! Best of luck with it... and, as Mike said, "Thanks for catching us up regarding your busy schedule and songwriting activity." Keep up the good work, friend.

So happy to hear from you again! Yes, I do strive to be "me" LOL! Everything I seem to write comes across to folks as "poetic", so if that is me, than I am happy, I am glad you liked it and appreciate the listen!!!

I have never been accused of being "optimistic" LOL, I'm usually dreary....so I am excited for that interpretation! I haven't played my mando for a long while and I feel my strumming is poor, but I am glad it comes across in some way, it is always better than acapella!!

So very happy to see and hear you again! You know that anything you like of mine is just amazing to me, I do so appreciate your talent and art in return!! I am glad you liked it and that I could emote it well, that seems to be one of my major concerns, is to emote the song to the listener. Your time and comments always mean the world to me....Thank you....

Thank you so much for giving this a listen and I do appreciate you commenting and yes, I do have Brian's words rattling around in my head, his "never burn bridges" is a constant in my head....LOL Talk about a mentor!! I am always thankful to JPF for everything they have given to me and yes, coming here is coming home and I do thank you for your welcome....

Wow! Took me a while to stumble across this thread, and I'm glad I did. This knocked my socks off. The lyric is so vulnerable and endearing. Pure poetry. It's like a Dory Previn song sung by Joan Armatrading. I'm a fan!

Did you ever want to feelwhat I'm like to touchholding hands feels so safeis that asking too muchwould you reach out and touch my skindo you ever want this kind of affection

Always good to have you lend an ear to my art!! Yes, production is where I still have not grown abilities, but am glad you like the write and melody!! Thank you so much for the listen and comment friend!!

Lovely song.And I love the lyrics - some of those near rhymes are inspired - like listen/connection - whodda thoiught that would work? Really good vocals and you stay true to the hook.At over 4 mins it could use a haircut but I enjoyed it muchly Boy there's some talent on this here forum

you have come so far and achieved such a beautiful expressiveness to your work. This is an incredible song and i was caught up in it to the very end. i did not missd your comment on rhyming and I will reply. it has just been a month from hell and i am still recuperating. Nothing to lose sleep over.

I do appreciate your listen and comments and yes, I think I sing it faster now and don't use the mando when I perform, so my intro isn't the same, so I think I trimmed it down, but totally agree with what you said!

I am thinking of you friend and always appreciate your time and am so happy to see you again! I am glad you enjoyed it and you are a part of my journey, so whatever I have achieved, you were a part of it. Thank you friend!!

Welcome to JPF, I feel like an old timer, but loved the days when I was new. Thank you so much for your kind words and I wish you luck on your time spent here, it has paved the way to many things for me when it comes to music and friendship!

Typing to you and looking at your photo of your younger self, I have listened to some of our songs recently and when I think of what you have taught me and how you have helped me and your friendship, I am just so happy you still want to listen and I am always happy to hear from you.

I do appreciate your thoughts. The trick of lyric writing is the meaning and with a few word changes like "could to would", you change the original meaning of the song. The chorus that held a purpose, now means something different. I see this as your perspective, but it isn't one of a woman who is telling her side of a story. The point of the story is being involved with someone that isn't capable of this relationship and can't see the possibilities or who isn't trying, which makes her yearning and saying "could", knowing he isn't capable. This is someone who is having a relationship and wanting something that isn't going to happen and that the other person isn't going to be able to understand. So the chorus intention is for her to convince herself to move on. There is no more questioning, she is trying to convince herself and reassure herself of the possibilities. Your changes would change the meaning and direction of the original write and I did consider the chorus/prechorus/bridge situation of the song, but I wanted to please myself vocally and challenge myself to change up my own and very usual structure and play with it a bit. I run a songwriting group and we challenge ourselves this way. I do again, appreciate the time and thought you put to this.