Team Pilipinas: GOAL for the GOLD!

Who would ever forget the hang time moves of Michael Jordan? What about Robert Jaworski?, the “living legend” that was awarded as one of the Philippine Basketball Association’s 25 Greatest Players of all time. How about Celtics and Lakers, Alaska and Ginebra? Who would ever forget the intense match of these two greatest teams in both National and local basketball?

Michael Jordan doing the hang time moves

Basically, Basketball captures the heart of many Filipinos, it is said to be the number one sports in Philippines. We, Filipinos, love to watch the game even though we are not aware of the rules and regulations inside the court, we just cheer, scream ‘til we drop, and show our support to our favorite teams, and players consistently.

Personally, I’m also a fan of basketball. During my childhood days, I remember how I feel the thrill whenever Bal David would shoot the ball (obviously upon mentioning name, I’m an avid fan of Barangay Ginebra until now). By just seeing the victory of my favorite team against their opponent makes me feel so proud of being a Filipino, because this proves that there are many players who are good inside the court that can compete to other countries to give us pride and honor.

1977, it was the year when Indonesia, Brunei, and the Philippines joined the SEA games. For the very first time in SEA games, Philippines ranked 3rd place over all with the total of 91 medals. Since then, Philippines is very consistent in joining every sports in SEA games particularly, basketball.

This only proves how good our basketball players, and how we standout in such sports like this. And also, we can prove that we are not only good in local basketball tournaments such as UAAP, NCAA, and PBA. But we can also defeat other countries.

And Yes, up to this very moment we are still in cloud 9 after collecting golds in this 26th SouthEast Asian Games in Indonesia. With the theme of “United and Rising”, Our 2011 Philippine men’s basketball team won another gold award against Thailand (85-57).

“What’s amazing about this team is it’s a young team. It shows that we have a bright future ahead of us.” said Norman Black, the man behind the success of Sinag Pilipinas.

It’s nice to know that aside from boxing we also excel in other sports like basketball. Norman Black said, Sinag Pilipinas players are young which means we have good future ahead in basketball. All we need to do is to support them by giving sponsorships, trainings, and always keep their eyes on the goal.

Moreover, A true Filipino pride is not into exposure and TV commercials (I’m not naming names, but who comes first in your mind might be the one I’m referring to). Because it is not about the looks, and how many billboards you have in Edsa, but it is about giving pride to our country.

However, we should give enough attention to other athletes in other fields, not just about in basketball, like the Philippine Dragon Boat, who don’t get any support from the government but won the gold medal in the 26th SEA Games. The government should give equal attention and funds to our athletes, because it’s hard to compete if you don’t have any budget for costumes, trainings, and other services that they needed.

Aside from that, we should be proud because we are blessed with so many great and talented athletes; we should support and look up to them because they bring honor and pleasure to our country. We may not win all the gold medal awards this 26th SEA games, but the fact that we ranked 6th it would be enough. Congratulations Team Pilipinas! GOAL for more GOLD.

Hmmmm… obviously, I am a sports lover, a player, and a fan. With the things you said above, I am overwhelmed and I can’t imagine that a woman like you would prefer basketball as your angle in our main topic SEA Games instead of choosing volleyball. Needless to say, I find it interesting but there were grammatical errors and some mistakes in the choice of words. God Bless!!!

good story angle (:
I also remember when me and my dad used to cheer for ginebra
very well researched article for the history of sea games
you have to double check your grammar (though I’m not also good in grammar haha)

The use of quote is a great tactic in feature writing as it gives credibility and a story on it. Narrowing down sports to basketball then to the larger pace of the sports connecting it to the 2011 Seagames is also a nice strategy although it will somehow make the reader doubt about the focus of the article. Nevertheless, it is a good start. I’ll give 90 as your grade. 🙂

*On your 7th paragraph, be aware of your typographical errors and try integrating the sentences into one like:

Like our basketball team’s recent victory in the last South East Asian Games in Indonesia with the theme, “United and Rising”, in which the team slammed Thailand with an 85-57 to take home the much coveted gold.

*On your 10th paragraph, watch out your parallelism in the last sentence.

*On your 11th paragraph,
lose the word ‘a’ before the word true
be careful with your choice of words- into—> based on/ measured
parallelism- exposures and tv commercials
lose the period after the closing parenthesis
remove this fragment:
Because it is not about the looks, and how many billboards you have in Edsa,

*On your 12th paragraph,
Fact Check:
It was the PCKF that was sent to the SEA Games not the PDBF
choioce of words: costume —>wardrobe or clothes

*For your last paragraph, 2nd sentence, replace:
it would be —> is

*I liked how you focused with only basketball. But I would have given your article a higher grade if you have given more emphasis with how the Philippine’s basketball journey in the SEA Games went. Yes, you did cite how we won in 1991, but was it the only time our basketball team shined in the SEA Games? I would have to agree that our sports is facing a rough time this past few years and hope that lower tides would come for it.

You have a great angle because you focus only with one sports. On the other hand, I was hoping if you could deeply emphasize our Philippine basketball team during the Sea Games. Your grammar is a bit safer because you did not took risks on using much perfect tenses – which is a positive factor. Congrats.

athletes do not wear costumes, they wear uniforms 😀
very informative article however it seems that you only focus on bastketball.
it is a good thing that you also mentioned that authorities don’t give enough attention on other sports/athletes.
grade: 88

in your artcile, you mereky focused on basketball alone. You should have included other sports in SEA Games. In your first paragraphs, you are talking about basketball in the Philippines then you suddnely jumped to the performance of the country in the SEA Games. It’s a little not connected to yuor lead. Nevertheless, you have a nice article on basketball. Just some points to ponder: focus on some grammatical lapses and uses of tenses.