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SF/no humans. In Equestria's past, ponies exist only to serve their creators. One such pony is accidentally released from her mental chains, but how can one mare save herself and her people if she doesn't even know she's a slave? ·Luna-tic Scientist

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In this romance of language and culture, a changeling linguist struggles to salvage what remains of the failed invasion of Canterlot with only himself, his words, and his deception as his weapons. ·Integral Archer

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Two ponies, equally but uniquely flawed, must decide if they have enough wits between them to cobble together a stable family. A story about trust, loss, severe neurological disorder, and ice cream. ·DuncanR

One of Equestria's greatest traits is tolerance. Every pony, whether Unicorn, Pegasus, or Earth, is accepted for who they are, and have their own parts to play in keeping Equestria running.

But what if an Earth pony decided he didn't want to play his assigned part? What if he wanted to rise above everyone else, and become an Alicorn? Such a thing is possible...but the path to fulfilling one's dreams is never simple. Risks must be taken. Sacrifices must be made. And the question is always asked: How far would you go to get what you wanted? And would you be willing to pay a terrible price to get it?

I want to see how does Silverspeak ends up in such thing like that Alicorn experience, but this story just keeps getting interesting, you can take your time writing the development of the plot, for this story to keep it's high level.

Okay, first of all "Then, at long last, a year and a half after arriving in Manehattan, the day finally came. I got my largest every paycheck, the result of getting a raise for my diligence and hard work. And as those bits were put into the bank, I looked my statement over, and smiled. I finally had enough money to cover all my expenses for at least a year, should the need arise." and "A year after leaving home, and the day finally arrived. I got my largest paycheck yet, the result of a getting a raise for my diligence and hard work. And as I looked over my statement, I grinned. I finally had enough money in the bank to cover all my expenses for a year, should the need arise.", it looks like you double posted, just letting you know. Other than that I really like your premise and am interested in seeing how things play out.

Interested to see where this is headed. I also like a lot of the themes being interpreted and explored here; Alicorns, what makes them tick, earth ponies, cutie marks with either a useless ability or too common ability. A really well written and good read so far!

It's been a very, very long time since I've been disturbed by something I've read. Stephen King managed to dull my capacity to feel raw unprocessed terror, and I've been desensitized by much over the years.

But this... there's something raw to it. Something truly unsettling and just WRONG that I can't fully articulate. If I can put it into words, I'll be sure to let you know, because it's nuanced and complex beyond one simple issue.

A week into the job hunt, and I was desperate. I had covered the island, and there wasn't a single job to be found in my chosen field.

I can Painfully Empathize with Silverspeak, him not being able to find anything in his chosen field of work, I've been trying for almost 4 years trying to find ANYTHING in the field of Automotive Repair, only to find Rejection. I've even worked in a grocery store like him (only I got fired for no reason at all just before my Probationary Period was up)

This story has a metric ton of potential. A serious word of advice though: find a good editor. I love where your going with this, but you need to get an editor to help catch some of your errors. Trust me, It'll make a huge difference in the quality of your work. Again I love the story and I can't wait to see where you take it, but consider what I said about an editor.

A guy after me own heart. As much as the three types are part of what makes the setting interesting, I always thought it'd be tragic as hell to be the "wrong" kind of pony. I hope he makes it through and delivers cruel, unfair nature some sweet unicorn Street Justice.

This is exactly the kind of story I am looking for. I will be there everytime this updates and I will always read it as fast as possible. As I also like to say, Everything is possible if you try hard enough. ~Crimson Sky

holy crap, the nature of the first section made me assume that it was someone else like a demented celestia or his overly protective parents. your twist earned you a cupcake, a favorite, and also my utmost respect. i will be looking forward to the rest of your story. (i have email notification on it)

I needed a little time to settle in before starting, to establish roots and creature a secure base for myself. --The comma isn't really needed. You only really need them before for, and, nor, but, or, yet, and so. This one isn't so bad and could be left in. It just stuck out to me. You use your comma fine at the end of that paragraph though. Creature should be create, although creaturing a base could involve guard animals... Heh.

Seeking to start the day on a high note, I dressed and went in search of a leisurely breakfast, finding it a few blocks away at a nice little café that served the most delicious breakfast burritos. --The second comma in this sentence is another that can be left in, but it just seems a little out of place.

There wasn’t much to see there for tourists to see --Just remove one of the "to see's"

...so as to see what kind of toys the little colts and fillies of the city had to play with. --Sounds a little awkward. Leaving out 'so as' would probably help. Not really an error. More of my opinion really. You might want to try limiting your sentence length too. That whole sentence could be broken into two and it would read better.

Those are some examples of what I'm seeing, and there are a couple more like them throughout the chapter. I did notice that you like your colons and parentheticals though. It's fine to use them, but it breaks up the flow of a paragraph, so be careful where you do use them.

I really loved that knight toy too. It's just something I can imagine Equestrians making. Anyway, sorry for the late response. If you need any help or advice send me a PM.

Honestly, I'd go pretty far for something like that. Hay, I'd probably do something as absurd as breaking the law. After all, the laws of mortals come after the laws of life, and if you're willing to break the second, breaking the first should be second nature.

But honestly, I'd try to schedule an appointment with Twilight, or one of the princesses. They seem like nice enough mares, and they do have an eternity to do whatever else they want. One discussion can't hurt, could it?