Sorry, but what is this supposed to be? A walkthrough? A Let's Play? I mean, you're not being informative; you have no idea what you're doing, no idea what the game is about and all you do is compare it to Uncharted. While, granted, those two games are alike, no one wants to hear you compare it throughout the whole video.

You're not being fun either.
"But, yeah, anyways, this is a game....It's a good game...uh. I don't know...if...okay but yeah Tomb Raider is a fun game." Wait what?

I'm not trying to bash you or anything, I'm just informing you that, in this current form, no one will want to watch your video's. Your video's about Tomb Raider should be funny, informative or exciting. Since you're playing a game that's been released almost a year ago, it's not going to be exciting for the large majority of whoever will watch your video. If they haven't already played the game by now, they've watched one of the 8 billion walkthroughs or Let's Play's out there.

This doesn't mean I'm telling you you can't make video's about older games, not at all. But play it on humor for example. Or informative about the game, stand out from the rest. But, like I said, you have absolutely no clue what the game is about, what you're doing, or supposed to be doing in the game. Do a little research, maybe record playing the game a few times and then voice-over the best clip rather than a live commentary?

You were also saying "This is my first game" which you also mentioned in the info below your video. How is this your first game when you've recorded Call of Duty before and, apparently, played Uncharted before?

Either way, I always appreciate anyone taking the time to make game videos (in any variation) for free. But you really need a lot of improvement if your goal is to gain more viewers.

It is my first game of Tomb Raider. Obviously that should have been picked up easily. As for your lengthy comment, thanks for the feedback. I will work on them as you have said. This was hard to talk over when I was focusing, I didn't know what was going on to be honest. Anyways, I will work on my formula and thank you. I will impress you with the next one my friend.

If your target audience is your existing viewer base, then by all means continue as you are; but if you're looking to garner more attention from TR fans for this series, then you have to figure out what this series is about and give people more of a reason to watch.

As /u/Qyi said, most TR fans have either played the game or watched an LP of the game. I doubt many people sub this subreddit just for the hell of it. You've got good enough recording quality, you just need to decide what the point of this series is going to be.

Also, when it comes to multiplayer stuff it can be better to learn the game before recording; save your new viewers from seeing some of the more awkward or frustrating bits. Unless of course, your point is to show the perspective from a new player, in which case you just need to make a point of that in your video.