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Mabiko: Another 10? Fine with me. *drops another bag on the table and walks off with Kusanagi*

Shinji: How does she manage to part with artifacts that she'd kill to protect only a week ago?Asuka: Exactly. A week ago she couldn't sell em'. Rey: We have determined that the sword, while valuable due to its impeccable craftsmanship, has no latent magical capacity. It is worth less than it was sold for. Shinji: In short...Asuka: ... she ripped them off...

All three: ...

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Alright. Since it seems that I'm gonna take much longer on this than I had ever hoped, and while it's shorter than I wanted it to be...

PART III is UP!!!!

I had to split Part III into two chunks... so that'll make the next Part IV then

Spoiler for length:

*Kha pauses the replay.*

Kha: The 21st likes running into trouble? Art: Boss, we're always in the thick of things.Kha: As far as I'm familiar with, I recall spending more time chasing after things than taking them head on.Art: The only difference is which way the spells are flying, Cap.Kha: I'll give you that. So now all we have to do is find Glock, and this. What did you cover on the flight back?Art: Right here Boss.

*Activates the next file*

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Artei: This is everything then?Kay: That’s everything on Glock that we have. Right Rey?Rey: Yes it is. Artei: At least there’s inflight entertainment.

*Plays audio log 360*

“Glock: The Traitor himself. This is what I knew from the memories he had.”

“Glock: The Traitor was once a Lord, one of several created by the Star Gods after their transformation to lead their undead armies on a campaign of slaughter. Despite losing most of his individuality and his senses, this particular Lord performed exceedingly well, ravaging world after world, desolating thousands of them into barren Tomb Worlds. As such, he was given several unique talents that would assist him in battle, including the ability to wield all of the Necrontyr’s Forbidden Artifacts at once.

Kay: Forbidden Artifacts?

Glock: These refer to the advanced technologies developed by the Necrontyr, weaponized for use in the field. There are eight such Artifacts, some of which Sofia and I are able to wield now.

The Chronometron, Phase Shifter, Lightning Field and Solar Pulse are the artifacts you’ve already seen and categorized. There are four others, including the Resurrection Orb, which was used by the Lord we fought to revive the undead on Megiddo, and the Nightmare Shroud…

Kay: Nightmare… Shroud?

Glock: It’s an artifact that taps into a person’s worse fears, and enhances that person’s receptivity to it. That was the scre…

Kay: *chokes* I know now, please stop.

Glock: I’m sorry. I didn’t mean to.

Kay: *shivering* I should’ve known from the name. This Traitor must’ve been an incredibly powerful being, I understand what they said about “favored” now. But… even with the remnants of his “humanity”, I don’t think he could have the willpower to just suddenly convert against his Gods, even that’s what he wanted in the first place.

Glock: It’s not really that complicated though. It began when he encountered a comparatively small group of explorers several millenia into his campaign. The Lord had encountered and defeated races with powerful psychic abilities, and while technologically less advanced than those other races, this group possessed incredible control of the null-space that existed outside the fabric of space and time; never had they encountered a race able to command nullspace and dimensions on such a scale with ease, and they seem to originate not from the dimension the Necrontyr were in, but in another. The beings they encountered regarded the supposed immortality of the undead Necrontyr with curiouslty and admiration, and actively engaged the Necron-

Artei: Necrons huh? Impeccable naming sense Missy. Kay: Unlike a certain someone I know…Artei: And who would that be?Kay: *sighs* Someone I’d rather not have around thank you…

“Glock: Alright, Necrons.

This race, who were known to the Necrons language as the “Yog’Sothoth”, or simply “The Crafters”, engaged them out of their desire to capture “live” Necron for their studies into immortality. The Crafter’s ability to control dimensions rendered their phase shifting tactics useless, and they could not phase out of the battle zone to evacuate their “dead”. “Despite the appalling rise of casualties on both sides, the Crafters succeeded in collecting Necrons for their own ends, including several Tomb Vessels, and the Traitor himself. Satisfied with their claim, and unwilling to lose any more souls to the Necrons, the Crafters left that dimension, and with the Necrons unable to follow them through nullspace, they were safe from further contact with them and their Gods.

They brought their spoils to their home planet, which the Crafters referred to as “El-Hazard”…

Kay: Hold on… El-Hazard…

Oh crap, you don’t mean…

Glock: Yes. The world known as Alhazred.

Kay: The expedition wasn’t so fruitless after all… I can’t believe this…

Glock: Kay, slow down you’re hyperven-

Kay: Less Worry More Talk!!!!!

Glock: *sigh* I was just getting to that.

As a civilization, Alhazred seemed to be extremely similar to current Midchilda society, as far as his memories serve, possessing advanced Magitech on a level similar to our own. The Necron spoils were quickly dismantled and thoroughly examined, their technology studied, analyzed, and reverse engineered; The Lord itself was subjected to the same treatment to better understand the source of the Necron’s incredible regenerative abilities and powers.

The Lord himself did not suffer from all that was done to him, but it was his mission to annihilate the Crafters and claim their life energies for his Gods. These were his… “thoughts” for the next several years he was held in captivity. But a certain experiment would change his existence forever.

Kay: An experiment?

Glock: The Omni Crion. In the language of the Crafters, “Victory over Death”, a project that would aim to use the Necron’s technologies to finally attain immortal life. And their first subject was the Lord himself, for he was considered “dead” at the time of his captivity. They would “revive” him, using newly reverse-engineered Necron technologies.

Kay: I take it they were successful then somehow?

Glock: According to the Crafters, the experiment was successful, as they had managed to “revive” the Lord, giving him the full mental and psychological facilities needed to be classified as “alive”. He would also be given a new body, bioengineered with a longer lifespan and endurance to replace his metallic endoskeleton, to fully make him “alive” in both mind and body.

Kay: The once soulless regaining their minds once again… Oh no…

Glock: With his revival, the Lord once again regained the senses he had lost during his transformation. And he felt only… terror.

Kay: …Having existed as a mindless being for so long… he would’ve felt confused… afraid… unable to comprehend his alien surroundings…

He still had his memories with him though, but his rediscovered emotions conflicted with these memories, and for months he would suffer in anguish and despair, wishing for “the tranquility and purity of death”. The experiments also took a toll on his mentality, for the first time feeling the pain of the procedures performed to him in the wake of his revival.

Kay: As much as I hate to say this, but had I been through his experience, I too would be wishing for death.

Glock: Kay?

Kay: Never mind that… if that’s the case though, how’d he become the Traitor?

Glock: I tell you now why it wasn’t complicated. There was one name that the Traitor kept recalling from his memories of that period, and his most important: Ifureeta van’El.

She was the replacement Head Researcher for Omni Crion after their previous Head committed suicide for reasons unknown. Amongst the Crafters, she was renowned for the knowledge and wisdom that she contributed to their scientific community through decades of service in various fields. And the first thing she did was improve the ethical atmosphere of the research facilities, which included proper treatment for all test subjects, including the Lord, now known as… Iisa.

Kay: *chuckles* After all this Traitor and Lord stuff, I’d never thought he’d get such a cute name...

Glock: Apparently, it was the Crafter’s word for “First”, because of his previous status as the leader of the Necron force they engaged.

Kay: Good enough. I think I’m starting to get the picture with Ifureeta and Iisa here… I don’t think it would be that easy.

Glock: It wasn’t. But it was Ifureeta’s personal involvement with Iisa that gradually grabbed his attention. I don’t think I can tell you that many details as per his request.

Kay: He… requested you to do that?

Glock: He did. But suffice it to say: Her unceasing dedication and endless devotion to his care and his treatment gradually turned him. She slowly restored his sanity and his humanity to him, teaching him to cope with the new world he was in. It was a tediously slow, and often painful process which endangered her life due to Iisa’s unpredictable state, and often she did get hurt, enduring several brutal injuries that horribly disfigured her. It would take her several decades to even get Iisa to trust her.

Over time though, Iisa would slowly, but surely open up the Ifureeta, who never abandoned him despite all that he had done.

The only memory that he would let me divulge in detail was when Ifureeta gave him a surname, as to secure his rights as an individual amongst the Crafters: Iisa van’El.

Kay: … she… just gave her last name to him didn’t she?

Glock: Yes. And it would have a profound effect on Iisa. As I can feel from his memories… it was the first time he felt truly… Alive."

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On Sickness: "Like someone filled my journal with junk data and then set it to defragment and gave me the lowest priority possible."

Hmm, nice good CC's meet evil OC's, only, wasn't it a bit to easy to get the limiters released? That can backfire quite quickly.

Well, there are several hints in the anime that lead me to believe it is in fact that easy. The most obvious one was in episode 7, when Shari released (at least partially) the limiters on the Wolkenritter by just pressing a button so they could battle the drones. (Do they even need their limiters released to be able to transform? Weird. )

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Psaw, it's not like I have copyright on everything featuring dragons, don't worry about it. Besides, when Keroko goes beserk, the most intelligent thing comming from her mouth are roars of fury, and her physique barely changes. You'll know what I'm talking about when I finally get A's written down. I'm currently about a third in it. Bah, stupid work.

Ah, good. Yeah, I didnt know how you would handle Keroko's dragon powers, but that's good to know. I admit I was really expecting Keroko to at least grow wings, though.

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Dunno, I did get an awefull lot of Sasuke vibes, with all the evil smirking and feeling superior, but if I have to call a reference, I'd say Valgaav. Dragon wings and arms, pain, pulsing flesh, yep definetely Valgaav.

:O :O :O +100 points for Keroko!

I dont think the reference would be hard to find, but I didnt expect many people to remember Valgaav. He was awesome.

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Oh, by the way, love the Gwen pics.

I sure love them too.

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Originally Posted by LoweGear

Oooh character design templates, awesome! Yes, I know it's only supposed to give the general picture of what they look like, but still nice choices... and Gwen the combat Meido FTW

I had a feeling you would like that, Lowe.

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As a story by itself, the battle itself and the character interactions are definitely top notch, especially with Natalia's transformation. I like some of the details, inclding Iris nearly getting choked by her own spell

Unfortunately, you've just set yourself up for some massive damage by Seven Arc's ION CANON Strike If it's an alternates thing though, then there's no problem

Yep, there's no going back now! lol I just had to, though, as there wouldnt be anyone else capable of defeating my Relic users in the TSAB.

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Originally Posted by tshouryuu

Here is something I came up with. I think I did badly as it seems rather awkward at a few parts

Spoiler for Meeting the Major is embarrassing or Tais/Genya interaction:

~Log Number #282 : Getting a set of restraints exchanged for another~
By Yui

I don't know if this boy is cursed or just plain unlucky. Today, Tais's jaw has recovered sufficiently enough to removed the restraints, allowing him to eat solid foods and talk again. Surprisingly, Major Genya Nakajima, Ginga's father, visited us.

*Start Audio file*

Tais: Ma.. Major Nakajima-sir!
Genya: At ease boy. Hmm.. seems like you're recovering fine. I heard that the doctors finally removed the restraints
Tais: Yes sir. Oh no, I wonder what is the major here for.. Am I going to be punished for scaring Ginga or maybe...
Genya: Relax, I'm here to apologize on Ginga's behalf since she is too embarrassed to come see you and apologize herself.
Tais: Oh.. I see. Yes! That means that I still have a chance with her! Thank you God!
Genya: ....

*Pause audio file*

I did want to intervene at this point before Tais said something he shouldn't. However it was already too late as he... well...

*Resume audio file*

Tais: ... ask the Major now for the permission to woo his daughter. What should I say... Major Nakajima, I like Ginga alot, do I have your blessings to woo her? I can promise you that I will take good care of Ginga and for better or for worse, for richer or for poorer, in sickness and in health, to have and to hold from this day forward, to love and to cherish, until we are parted by death. Or maybe...

*Pause audio file again*

...recite out loud a marriage vow. It was like watching a train wreak. You know something bad is happening but you can't do anything but watch. At any rate, Tais stopped as he realized that the medical ward was deadly silent and everyone was staring at him. That baka still did not realize what he has done and was looking around stupidly like the moron he is. Trying to regain some form of dignity from this extremely awkward situation, Major Nakajima stood up and hope Tais won't get too bored while recovering and told him that he will think about what Tias said. Although confused, Tais did something that really made me wonder if he is secretly a blonde.

*Resume audio file*

Tais: Huh? Oh Thank you for the concern Major, but I have been reading this and following the advice found inside to help pass the time.
Genya: "Common practices of Earth". Mind if I take a look? I wonder what practices do my ancestors have.
Tais: No problem sir.
Genya: ......
Genya: ......
Genya: ......
Tais: Errr... Sir, are you alright? You're turning into an unhealthy shade of purple.
Genya: ......
Tais: Sir?
Genya: ... You...

*End audio file*

The major simply lost it and starts strangling and shaking Tais's neck rather violently. It took the medical personnel a while to free Tais from Major Nakajima's clutches and at the end of it, Tais needed neck restraints since the major badly aggravated the injuries there plus a longer recovery period. I have gotten very curious now about the contents of the book that Tais borrowed as I have no idea what could have cause the major to lose his cool like that. Hopefully I can secure permission for construction of a solid holographic body soon. The suspense is killing me.~End log~

LOL!! I'm really liking these logs. Gotta love Tais. He's way too funny and an extremely likable character, awesome job! And to write the logs in his device's perspective... excellent!

Hope to see more Ginga-nessan soon!

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@Erio: I love your stories, very nice. Wish i even have half your talent.

Thank you for the compliment, but, really, your stories are much more detailed and better written than mine. I just go the easy way and write an anime episode-like script.

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Originally Posted by Nightengale

It was just meant to be a poke-ish one-shot but since Erio particularly liked it, and he touched a soft spot by using character templates from 2 of my fav games (( ST and Abyss )), here's CoY II!

Queen's Blade is kinda like a game-book btw. With hawt hawt girls per book.

*snip*

A game-book, huh? No wonder there isnt much information anywhere. And definitely Abyss is one of my favorite RPGs, too.

book_worm_721? I lol'ed at that. I lol'ed at the Hayate part, too.

This is copypasta material for whenever someone talks shit about Yuuno.

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Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Nooooooooooooooo......
Ah well, excellent work all the same. I also really liked your concept looks. They're really attractive. And who's really stopping them from being in the Nanoha OCverse Taisen series? It's all fan-made after all. This is going to be fun! Keep it up Erio!

Wait, wait! What I meant is that the story no longer follows the canon. They could go anywhere from here in our OCverse, though! Kha already has some plans for my Relic users.

Hehe I see you guys are liking the character templates.

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Originally Posted by tshouryuu

@Aaron008R: Thank you for your comment, although I'm thinking of getting Caro + whatever OCs that likes Elio to be the ones who put him into the hospital next time

lol More hospital time for our friend Tais? I'd like to see his ... adventures with Nanoha.

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Originally Posted by Kha

Well well well! That is impressive!!! No I don't think that was overboard. The interactions here gave me the benchmark I need for the encounter I've planned. And for the record, the 21st >> the Necron Warriors because they were disorganized and nameless (thus my impression of them was cannon fodder class threats). These Relic girls are certainly going to be quite a challenge, possibly enough for Kha to use that form...

OMG You just sounded like a character from Naruto. lol My guys were designed to be powerful enough to take on all the 50+ OCs, so I dont mind if you overpower them! In my stories, however, they will not be as powerful as they could be.

... and I havent read the latest posts yet. I gotta run, so be back later!