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LovelyMioneWeasley says:A shorter chapter but definitely still as interesting. I enjoyed Remus' visit. Remus has alwyas struck me as a lovely character and I'll admit I've always had a small crush on him. I think its due to the intellectual and the almost helpless nature he is sometimes left in-- the whole werewolf situation. It just screams helpless, homeless puppy.

^_^ All that rambling is not to say that Remus came across as helpless or puppylike. In fact, he came across as Jo's Remus; quiet but attentive and polite with a dash of nervous Remus. Remus' nervousness came across excellently. I give you major props for that; I mean, I realize the readers know of Remus' condition but his fidgety nature came across well as one that is uneasy in a hospital setting. I know because I'm the same way.

Freddy was qiute childlike at some points and the melancholy does really seem to be getting to her at certain points in the narrative. Freddy, however, is growing into a three dimensional character which is so relieving. I am learning to really like Freddy but she annoys me at times too. Which is a fantastic reaction because if I simpley liked her, then you would combating a flat Original Character.

I stick to my comparison of Shutter Island doctor to Healer Crane. He is not a comfortable character on my list; he makes my stomach churn like when I meet someone highly unsettled and has questionable sanity.

Excellent job; the pacing is going slow but its very similiar to a hospital victim and the montony of their own life. I think its perfect for the story you have going. I am really enjoying this. And I have found virtually no grammar or syntax mistakes.

9/10
Lindsey

Author's Response: Hello again Lindsey!
Thank you so much for another lovely review! I really am enjoying your feedback. You obviously put a lot of effort and care into your reviews and I do truly appreciate your thoughtfulness.

I'm so glad you enjoyed Remus's appearance in this chapter. And yes, I have to admit, I've always had a slight crush on him myself. When I first started reading the HP books he was my favorite character. Needless to say, I'm really thrilled to hear that you liked my interpretation of him.

Haha, yeah, Freddy can be a bit annoying, especially now, when she's cranky. Though I have to say, I can't really blame her. When I was in the hospital a couple of months ago, I was in a very, very nasty mood, hehe. ;) And yes, I do think Freddy has some childlike qualities, all of which are heightened now that she is a patient at the sanatorium. I think there is something about being in a hospital that makes a person extremely dependent and vulnerable. And feeling powerless certainly tends to bring out the worst in people. However, I must say I was quite happy to hear that you found Freddy flawed. I'm somewhat neurotic when it comes to writing OCs and I really try to make them as well-rounded as possible, although sometimes I think I go overboard with certain negative traits. ;)

Ah, Shutter Island! I feel like such a fangirl whenever you mention it. Seriously, I squee every time. And you're quite right to find Crane unsettling. He is a weird guy.

Again, thanks so much for the awesome feedback, Lindsey! Your reviews have been just great. I do hope you have a good week. ^_^ Take care!