This shot has all the elements of great writing; the flow is great, not for once did I feel like it was too slow or too fast, and it didn't get interrupted even by the flashbacks that often make or break the story...in this case they definitly made it!

Your charactarisation of Dolohov is very interesting, plausable and I dare say quite realistic. His reaction to Voldemort's propousal, the duel and even his use of crucio all support each other and give rather balanced (albite rather twisted) portrayal of the DE. Especially the following quote really stood out; " You are evil"."Yes," Dolohov muttered, turning away from the body, "I suppose I am."

The third thing that you really desrve praise on is the descriptions. I feel that you did fantastic job introducing the scenes, you really made me feel as if I was there myself. Absolutely fantastic!

One little thing that slightly caught my eye, especially in the second paragraph was the lack of sentence variety; you started many sentencies on a row with subject and I think you could have had more solid result with a bit of variety ^^

All in all, amazing job! Well done Sami!

Author's Response: Aww I love you so much. *Huggles* I kind of based Dolohov on Bella, but less...possesive.

" You are evil"."Yes," Dolohov muttered, turning away from the body, "I suppose I am." - I rewrote that line about five times because each time it just sounded wrong. Finally i just settled on the simple version :)