A friend asked me what kinds of things have become better or worse ...

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Jul 20, 2016 03:08

A friend asked me what kinds of things have become better or worse in my life: "Manche Sachen werden besser, und manche Sachen werden schlechter." He didn't know what he asked. I couldn't give him any answers. Too many, too big answers came into my head and sparkled like the subtitle of YouTube: "My whole life, I can't believe I am still living now. I can sing, I can dance, enjoy reading books, even study as much as I want (of course I can be lazy)!"I can say that I'm totally happy now as an individual person, and as an adult. I don't need to be afraid of making someone else mad by doing those things I prefer. I still don't understand why some people never like to see a girl reading a book. "Knowledge is power" then, they might not hope for her to get power and play a part in the world using her knowledge or skills. "Shut down your mouth" people say so and punch a poor kid, but it happens not only in movies but also in reality. I don't want to be hit any more just because I read books, I study foreign languages, I look smart(That's ridiculous!).

Too many, too big answers came into my head and sparkled like the subtitle of YouTube: "My whole life, I can't believe I am still living now.

This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

I can sing, I can dance, enjoy reading books, even study as much as I want (of course I can be lazy)!"

This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

I can say that I'm totally happy now as an individual person, and as an adult.

This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

I don't need to be afraid of making someone else mad by doing those things I prefer.

This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

I still don't understand why some people never like to see a girl reading a book.

This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

"Knowledge is power" then, they might not hope for her to get power and play a part in the world using her knowledge or skills.

If "Knowledge is power," then they might not want her to get power and play a part in the world by using her knowledge or skills.

"Shut down your mouth" people say so and punch a poor kid, but it happens not only in movies but also in reality.

"Shut down your mouth" people say, and punch a poor kid. It happens not only in movies, but in reality as well.

I don't quite understand why they, "punch a poor kid." Where is this kid coming from? Is he poor because he has no money? Or is he poor because he is the victim of being punched? It's an odd concept to me.

What you have written is fine but would be expressed more commonly as either:"I couldn't answer him" or "I couldn't give him an answer". Answer is not always made plural when it might seem it should be.

Too many, too big answers came into my head and sparkled like the subtitle of YouTube: "My whole life, I can't believe I am still living now.

Too many answers, too manybigBIG answers came into my head and sparkled like the subtitle of YouTube: "My whole life, I can't believe I am still living now.

This is now a bit more conversational/confessional sounding.

I can sing, I can dance, enjoy reading books, even study as much as I want (of course I can be lazy)!"

This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

I can say that I'm totally happy now as an individual person, and as an adult.

This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

I don't need to be afraid of making someone else mad by doing those things I prefer.

This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

I still don't understand why some people never like to see a girl reading a book.

This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!

"Knowledge is power" then, they might not hope for her to get power and play a part in the world using her knowledge or skills.

If "Knowledge is power" then, they might not hope for her NOT to get power,orand play a part in the world using her knowledge or skills.

"Shut down your mouth" people say so and punch a poor kid, but it happens not only in movies but also in reality.

"Shut down your mouth", people say thiso and punch a poor kid, andbut it happens not only in movies, but also in reality.

I don't want to be hit any more just because I read books, I study foreign languages, I look smart(That's ridiculous!).

I don't want to be hit any more just because I read books, I study foreign languages, andI look smart! (That's ridiculous!).

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A friend asked me what kinds of things have become better or worse in my life: "Manche Sachen werden besser, und manche Sachen werden schlechter."
He didn't know what he asked. I couldn't give him any answers. Too many, too big answers came into my head and sparkled like the subtitle of YouTube: "M