DoctorLitonivachenko, this is the ideas and brainstorming forum, not the drafting forum. While it is acceptable to ask for a draft, you should first critique the idea itself. If you wish to critique drafts, you can go to the drafting forum.

This idea is fairly vague right now. How does the user choose the eyes they look through? Does the other person lose their eyesight? You should specify a little more about what the idea is on this thread (make sure to click on the options tool on your original post and click edit rather than post a new comment) so we can help you out.

But from what I have read from your draft you seem to be missing any story elements for your draft. The idea is simple and around 75% of your draft is explaining the ability. SCPs aren't just items anymore, they are stories loosely centered around the objects in containment. Who made this object? Why did they make it? These are some questions you can ask to help create a story for our item. Good writing.

Thanks for the feedback. The second of your first two questions was indeed answered in the article (the user, designated SCP-XXXX-2, looks through both working eyes of SCP-XXXX-1, who does lose their eyesight temporarily).

I'll see about rewriting it a bit and using what you've told me to improve it. Thanks!