A young lady named Sylvia is considering becoming emancipated from her home at 16. Her reasons for the change include a lack of personal freedom, a small room she has to share with her sister, and the fact that her boyfriend is in college. Choose a side on the issue, and persuade Sylvia (who may be a friend of yours if you wish) to or to not seek emancipation from her home.

Monday, January 23, 2012

Caleb Davis

A famous scholar by the name of Henery Bolfard, head to the prestigious Alaskan University of Illinois, once said, “The day that I ditched my parents and siblings was the best day of my life.” Now as Sylvia contemplates whether or not she should finalize her emancipation, and ditch her own family, she too has the the opportunity to discover the great happiness that comes from doing so. Sylvia should indeed go through with the emancipation because she would be able to gain personal freedom, not have to share a room with her sister, and be able to spend more time with her college boyfriend. First Sylvia should finalize her emancipation because it would lead to massive gains in personal freedom. In other words if she were to legalize her emancipation then she could finally get to follow her impulses without being restricted by controlling parents. Many times it has been said that “A lifetime of peace of mind can almost always be found when acting upon sudden urges or feelings.” Just as this proverb explains Sylvia could achieve a lifetime of peace of mind if she were allowed to act upon her own urges or feelings, something that she cannot do if she were to stay with her parents. The process of legalizing her emancipation would be a smart decision because she would finally be able to discover the true happiness that awaits her if she could follow her sudden desires. Second Sylvia would at last be able to escape the stressful confines of a sibling infested bedroom, and enjoy the relaxation that comes from sharing a room with her college boyfriend. In other words if she were to legalize the emancipation she could move out of her current room and instead into one with her beloved boyfriend. In fact, a detailed survey conducted in 2011 showed that girls who were between the ages of 16 and 21 were, on average, able to get two additional hours of sleep each night over girls of the same age if they were allowed to sleep with their boyfriends rather than siblings. Since Sylvia’s age directly correlates to that of the girls in the study, it would stand to reason that if she were not sharing a room with her sister but instead sharing a room with her boyfriend, she would gain about two more hours worth of sleep every night. Sylvia should legalize her emancipation because it would grant her the freedom to sleep with her boyfriend, thus bringing her more sleep each night. Third if Sylvia went through with the emancipation she could spend more time with her boyfriend. This means that without the restriction of parents Sylvia would be able to be with her boyfriend as much as she wants. This is great because according to a study taken by the United Parenting Foundation of America, “Teenage daughters are 20 times less likely to make dumb choices when in the company of their boyfriends.” Based off this study it is quite clear that if Sylvia were permitted to spend an increased amount of time with her lover she would, in turn, make better decisions than if she were in the company of family. The legalization of Sylvia’s emancipation is a positive thing which would allow her more time to spend with her boyfriend, ultimately improving her judgement. In conclusion, Sylvia should absolutely go through with the emancipation because she would be able to gain personal freedom, have a more relaxing room, and be able to spend more time with her college boyfriend. With an increased amount of personal freedom Sylvia would become more at peace with herself. Also by being able to not share a room with her sister but instead her boyfriend she would be able to sleep longer each night. Finally more time with her boyfriend would result in better judgement. So, in order for Sylvia to live a more healthy lifestyle she must legalize her emancipation as soon as possible.

2 comments:

This persuasive essay deserves a 4, because he has providing details that support his reasons, they are very clear. Also is transitions keep you focused at what he is trying to explain instead of doing the typical boring transition, and he has very good choice on words.