Damn, good stuff. I love that third stanza - I cannot use religious imagery well for the life of me, so it's fantastic to see some that is used well. I also really like the sound of the line "my body a nexus between transgression," even if I'm not completely sure of the meaning. Ha. It sounds really good. Sometimes that's all that really matters. Lovely lovely work. Keep writing! :)

'I was the pale virgin daughter you/ turned holy water heathen'- Great image. Probably my favorite two lines in this piece.

The words you use to convey this scene have a distinction all their own. Very, for lack of a better word, poetic.

In the first stanza, you use the phrase 'to seduce me in the drum-drum-whoop of the... ...laundry room' and in the last stanza you use 'our faults felt washable and easy in the soap air hum of clean'. These seem reduntant, not rhythmatic, because they are only in two stanzas.

The flow of this piece is easy to follow and seems almost prose like. It has a sense of a story line, which I like (personally).