I liked it and hope you write more!It was good because you captured Daine's personality. You could easily see where she struggles between being an adult like she needs to be, but still being a young teen. Please continue on with this story!

Lion8520 chapter 1 . 8/13/2009

OH, I LOVE IT! IT's wonderful! Love D/N stuff, and this is an interesting time to write from!

I liked it. There were a few spelling mistakes (more typos, actually) that a spell-check would catch, so make sure to run it through before you post. The story idea was really good, and I think you got the characters, especially Numair. A few of your word choices seemed a little off from the canon- if you want those things I noticed please PM me and I'll let you know.

The last two paragraphs were very cute. The two 'maybes' at the end made it end on an awkward note- taking off the first maybe would really polish it off.