The beat sounds like something you'd hear in a Final Fantasy game.
The lyrics are boo-boo. I'm so tired of hearin people brag about how ill they are from the start. That shit is so played out. "I'm ill. You aint got it like me. I'm real. You aint really real like me. I'm the best. I'm the shit. I'm the greatest."

Rise above that stupidity. Watch the news. Try to see beyond New York to REAL issues. Write on Global Issues. There's a MASSIVE movement among women around the world . . . do some research on shit that's happening in India and Asia. Study what women are fighting for in the Middle East and the Equality that women still lack here in the United States.

NEVER make music for the fellas. Make your music for the WOMEN. WOMEN buy albums.
Once a woman is your fan, she'll remain your fan forever. She'll be buying your music twenty years from now. WOMEN! Remember that. Stop writing shitty ass rhymes for men's approval.

You can study music all day long but if you don't open up some books and read, analyze what's happening in the news and around the world and apply it then you aint gonna even make it, nevertheless last. The world is moving towards ONE System. If you want to survive you need to be ahead of the rest. The others will be sucked in by the tide.

People don't want to hear that braggin ass nonsense anymore. The only reason they still listen to it is because nobody is willing to step outside of it. Soon as somebody does, it's over with.

You DO have a great voice for Hip Hop though and your delivery is on point.
During the next couple years you'll notice your voice will get a little deeper so keep that in mind now when you make music.

Too bad about living in podunk ass towns in Indiana though. I've been to South Bend and Terre Haute (sp?) For baseball award ceremonies, and some weak ass baseball clinic. Didn't recall seeing one hot chick while there. I do like the spaciousness though.

How is 20 to old to get into production? You can get into that shit easily, so long as you got money to pay for the equipment. Otherwise than that, if you're good at what you do, people are going to eventually notice.