I am willing to go over each and every one of my critiques and point out exactly why they are legitimate and why they would lead to a better release. Which one’s bugging you the most? We can start there.

most of the critiques were targeting grammar, capitalization, and basic sentence structure.
Occasionally, Dark_Sage does fuck up and criticize the ‘flow’ and ‘phrasing’, but most of his points are based on the basics of english grammar.

LOL go read the previous posts.
We are starting work.
And Dark_Sage wasn’t hating, he was just luling.
Of course, if you disagree with any of his points and wish to debate the intricacies of english grammatical conventions, feel free to reply with a greater variety of diction with the use of syntax beyond that of a toddler.

“No OP/ED because professionals don’t translate songs.” They generally do translate them, when it comes to DVD/BD releases. But with simulcasts/streams, there’s not enough time to go through all the legal hoops to get translations approved by the original lyricist, the record company, and whoever else has a piece of the pie. There are some exceptions, like Shugo Chara, where the production committee of the anime creates and controls the group(s) that do the OP/ED.