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Review:

Dojh167 says:Okay, so I totally got chills with that last line. Even though it was fairly obvious what had happened by the end, your last sentence was extremely strong and effective. Kudos for that!

One predictable complaint I have about this is that it leaves a lot up in the air. Everybody sort of assumes that Teddy and Victoire are a thing based on the Epilogue, and I like that you showed that it wasn't that straightforward. At the same time, however, you did not address if this was set before, during, or after Teddy's relationship with Victoire. It was also difficult to read this without having a firm grasp of how old they were.

I loved that you portrayed Teddy's thoughts of her as thinking about all of the wonderful and beautiful things about her - it was very touching. However, I don't think that the way that these things were written maintained the gravity of the story well enough. It felt a little too much like a general description of a character, and did not do enough for me to maintain the emotional tension that the story had started and ended with.

Overall, good job. It was very powerful, especially for such a short story.