Thursday, April 8, 2010

THANK YOU

Thank you to all who stopped by Eldritch Way and read "Memories Captured". I decided to submit this to Shock Totem, so I have to remove this story from my site. Thank you for all the great comments and encouragement.

This had me so hooked! Great pace, great description. At first I thought she was a zombie but your idea was so much better. And then photographing her to get her back in the frame, and deleting it, was brilliant. This is my favourite so far.

The paragraph with the photos on the wall and the monstrous cake was downright surreal. I also really liked the descriptor choice there - that the cake was "monstrous." And I'm glad I'm not the only one who finds roses cloying.

Final paragraph has another really slick use of description, stomping it until its unrecognizable.