loved it i would have loved it more if you went through each of the akatsuki and how they had their way with him like Deidara :) If you are intrested in writting it please do send me it i would love to read it

It's alright; kind of short. As in, it ends abruptly. Also, the run-on sentences are kind of cool because they make it seem disoriented and crazy, which is what you were going for, I think, but maybe breaking it up a little more would make it easier to read. As is, it's all kind of blocked together and the run-on parts are confusing because they make it harder to tell who is doing what.