Yet within delightful fire’s range

no destruction can be done

Their oxygen has been consumed,

leaving none left for their lungs

But their hearts are unaffected by

the collision of the suns

Comments 19 comments

Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

Perhaps you'e a prophet too. It occurs to me that whatever form a big "end" takes, for people, it will be no more an end than any end of any single life. It just seems sad that people contribute so much to such an "end" by carelessness and ingratitude for all we have on this beautiful planet. But then, do we have any power over it one way or the other? Probably not - just over our own selves, where we too often fail to show a lot of promise as well! If we are given this little bit and drop the ball on it, . . . why would we expect to be given more?

BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

thanks a bunch, Violet, I hope you delve further into my writings, and thus into mind :]

VioletSun 5 years ago from Oregon/ Name: Marie

Very nice! The ending caught me off guard, the lover's love is unaffected even with the collision of the suns, very well done!

Rated up and awesome.

BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

whoops i replied goodnight randy ;]

Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

I emailed you, no big.

BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

what did i not answer?

i agree, i read my stuff out loud repeatedly

Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

Well since you didn't answer I'm just fumbling around. This is good. I find your stuff best read aloud. It has a lot of rhythm to it.

BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

thanks Will! I just might do that

WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

Cool.

Now try a sci-fi short story!

Up and awesome.

sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

Inspired by you my friend. Just repackaged your thoughts and images is all. You are welcome to your own thoughts and mine.

BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

thank you sligo :]

sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

Collision with precision

freezeframe

lovers' indecision

to be or not to be

lips locked

infinity

together

BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thanks Nikki! I agree, thats what I was going for.

I am glad you read this and liked it :D

Its another one of my favorites

Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

nice. we forget how strong our hearts really are. and how resilient. good poem and pics. i could definitely see the image of 2 lovers sitting in a windowsill amidst an armeggedon having their last kiss, waiting for death, but their hearts will go on!

BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thanks mentalist :]

This one honestly wrote itself. I didn't even know where I was going with it, until the thought crossed my mind "the weather outside is frightful, but the fire is so delightful". It was then, that it took a different path.