I just wanted to say that I haven't been so addicted to a story since I read Terry Pratchett for the first time when I was 12.
I've been playing Magical Diary on and off for the past two years. You've really got the characters down. This is seriously one of the best pieces of fanfiction I've ever come across. It's so well written and detailed. I'm already madly in love with Dinah.
Although I'm kind of at a loss now with what to do with myself while I wait for the next chapter...I shouldn't have read all 30 chapters one after the other...

Maya chapter 1 . 2/3/2017

I love it so much! Your writing is beautiful and extraordinary, and much better than some of the ones that I read - and believe me, I read plenty. Thank you for giving me a chance to dive into this world once again after the game and congrats for transforming a simple story line into a complex one. Your work is definitely worthy to read and reread once again.

One of my favourite scenes here was actually between William and his mother, especially the part at the end where he didn't fall apart and just stood his ground. And the fact that Grabiner gave him space when he got back was good, too; I worried that he'd get back and be given work to do when really, a break was in order. I'm glad that Grabiner has that flexibility. Grabiner is an unusual person to have loved two such extremely rare people. I was going to say that I'm surprised he's not burned out, but I guess he felt he was until Amoretta convinced him (one way or another) to be honest.

But maybe I liked the scene with William because although it was heavy in some ways, it was a more normal "heavy" than the relationship between Amoretta and Grabiner. The slumber party was also interesting as a contrast to Amoretta/Grabiner, and I liked what each character contributed to it.

You have an excellent way with characters and language (I read your Hakuouki story first since I was looking for a portrayal of Saitou).

Thank you. I enjoyed Magical Diary when I played it 2-3 years ago, but it is a relatively simple game. You have imagined some of the detail and complexity (especially complexity of character) that I looked for in the game.

I suppose what I left at AO3 wasn't really a review. I imagine more and more will slowly be uncovered about Amoretta's origins, as time goes on. The headmistress already seems to have known, although I was not aware of either Hieronymous or Amoretta informing her about Amoretta's Divine nature.

Raven's predicament was much less serious than I thought it would be. I suppose, at the same time, it is much more serious. A lack of unity and understanding between parent and child can be just as harmful as threatened physical harm.

I have been reading this on AO3, since the first redirection. However, I do still leave reviews, out of curtesy. I review on AO3 first, and then I write something over here. Imagine my surprise when I find a very short chapter, in comparison to AO3. I review and click "Next Chapter" before actually reading it. It was around then that I realized just what the chapter would entail. I confirmed that by heading back over to AO3. I did not actually bother reading this version, other than the last chapter and end note.

William has been accepted. I can't say that it wasn't anticipated. Amoretta, being who she is, was bound to convince her sometimes unreasonable husband. I still wonder if that outcome is a bit unrealistic.

Now, why would Raven ask for sanctuary? The end of this chapter feels important. It seems as though she will become a key character, like William and Ellen have. This should be interesting. Not many play around with her character, or William's, for that matter. Neither were much explored in the game, though Raven much less so.

I suppose the question of the day would be if William gets the apprenticeship. It does not seem like Grabiner will hange his mind. Yet, Amoretta sides with William. I feel like it may be too much of an unrealistic outcome of William gets the apprenticeship. Yet, I still believe it might be possible. I have a feeling that he might get what he wanted, or at least some sort of resolution.

I am more curious as to why Grabiner refuses. It is related to his past. I do not think it involves Violet, although that was my initial conclusion. Not everything has to involve her. They were married, anyway. I doubt he would have married his apprentice or made someone of a similar age his apprentice.

That begs the question, though. Why does Grabiner refuse to take an apprentice? Is he wary or afraid of getting attatched? Does he not belive himself capable of it? I would not say it is the later, although I believe the former may contribute to his reluctance.

The Headmistress is obviously an influential person. She is the second Master of a relatively new type of magic. As she is only the second, I doubt Pentochromatic is very old. However, how old is it? If it's so new, why would the Phifer's be attending the school? Why not attend a more renowned, older institution?

I have been redirected to AO3. In future chapters, will any interactions or words be changed for this website? If so, will you always leave a note about that? I think I may just finish reading to the current chapter on AO3. On principal, however, I will leave reviews on both sites.

Tantalizing little hints. Who, or rather, what, is Amoretta? How many people remmeber Violet and what actually happened? Will Amortta's soul ever be repaired? These questions will hopefully be answered.

Long periods of mostly pleasant things make me nervous when reading a story such as this. Considering the drama of the beginning, this is a far cry from the desperate life-or-death situations of before. I anticipate some great disaster, but it could just be he paranoia.

Magical culture is very interesting to consider. You have the potential to do so much world building. You've already delved into it. I hope it gets more thoroughly explored. I still have this foreboding feeling that something (Damien) will happen before that.

Poor, poor Luke. Noir is an unusual person. I would love to know just who Amoretta's mother is. Noir knows so much more than he lets on. I also wonder just why he had a kid at age 18.

I am perhaps a bit surprised. By my calculations, Granuner, age 32, teaching for 13 years, was 19 when her started teaching at Iris. He and Violet had married, then? He was probably 18 or so when he was married. While aware that she was his first love, I did not realize they were married.