that was one of the first short stories i wrote about a year ago, and recently found it again (thankfully) in my email.

harry, would you suggest that the children should have been more involved in the story from a plot stand point? or perhaps just more exposition in regards to how they feel about this particular situation?

Without going back to the story I seem to remember that your point of view is the father's. This tends to make him seem somewhat self-centered when the reader recalls the children in the kitchen. They've lost something important and irreplaceable in their lives also.

[quote="Harry"]Without going back to the story I seem to remember that your point of view is the father's. This tends to make him seem somewhat self-centered when the reader recalls the children in the kitchen. They've lost something important and irreplaceable in their lives also.[/quote]

you know, you've inspired me to write a follow up to this story from the children's perspective! i'm not sure how to rewrite this one to expound more upon the children, but a new story might do the trick.

and you're right, their part in this story is very poignant as well, and should not be ignored.