June 22, 2009

The Meeting

Catherine placed the receiver back with a fervent smile on her face and leaned back onto her chair.It has been long since she had seen him. Hours of talks on the phone was nothing compared to the smile on his face when he sees her. She recollected each word Kevin had said.“…it has been a while, honey... I desperately wanted to see your face ... n I wanted it to be a surprise.”She had no words to reply.“Well meet you at the old park. What do you say?” he asked “When will you be free?”“In an hour… oh... may be half an hour…” she smiled“Good. I’ll be there… love ya... bye”Wiping away tears from her eyes, she got up. The usually boring day had suddenly found the dewdrops it was waiting for.No time to waste. She sank in to complete the report she had to submit the next day.A while later, a nurse walked into her room and seeing her packing, asked.“Leaving early Dr. Catherine?”“Yeah... big plans, Susan” she said trying the least to hide her happiness.“Hmm... I can see that in your face” Susan said”... too bad you were asked to report to the emergency room... a minor accident case”“What? No... I’ve gotto go... its really important. Can’t Lizzie cover up for me? Ask her, please. I have to go. Besides it’s my shift is over too.”She always considered her job as sacred, but it has taken all happiness from her life… kept her away from Kevin. She was not ready to let it happen this time too. She too wanted to have some contentment in her life. She quickly took her stuff and headed out.As her car headed out of her the hospital, a crowd beside the junction caught her attention. Accidents have become a regular occurrence here. Why aren’t the authorities doing anything for it? She asked herself. But it was while taking the turn that she saw the wrecked car. Her heart sank as the world around her contracted onto her filling her teary eyes with darkness.

Trying hard to keep herself up, she got out of her car and ran back. She ran back to the hospital praying with all her heart to not let it be true.

Pushing open the emergency door, she saw the white sheet been put over the beautiful face she had so longed to see.

Amal,With the complete control over the story on your hands,you could have avoided the tragedy...ha?Hmm..You could have avoided that..Like life, story tellers are also turning to be merciless these days..

since you have asked to comment so as to help you improve-the story narration is really good, and you have got a nice flair for the language..but the story content is a little bit common,and predictable..try simple stuff,things you feel about etc...

Amal.. this is the first story of yours that i read, The way of narration is impressive !! i read from the other comments that your stories have a sad end.. thats something i dont like very much! :) This one leaves one very sad in the end.. but to make the reader sad too is a talent. But next time.. makes us smile :)

yeah...it started off very well dude, especially the dew drops comparison...awesome...but the story was a little cliched and hence after tht pretty predictable...maybe all the stories end in tragedy coz only the daring can conjure good works from bad endings...;)

dear amal,i reached late to such a beautiful creation........you know,iam in tears now.and i could guess,it would happen this way...........what a touching post!why do you deny the pleasure of meeting to good people?think of the brighter side,amal. MY GOD! i have an exam tomorrow.hey,n the secret is it's a commedy now.it was a real come back,man.didn't i tell you yesterady?some people realise it later...........so,can i smile now? so,give me a story with a happy ending. sasneham, anu