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You know that I'm gone
I'll never be back again
Cause tonight we are done
We are done
Cause I'm gone

Now for the past seven days
And of the past seven years
I've been moving all along
And now I'm drowning in my tears
You've been breaking my promise
And it not something I would miss
Not something I would miss

Why are you gone
Why are we done
Wont you come back
Wont you come back home

From the last seven minutes
From the last seven hours
I've been wishing for you
But it is beyond my power
Your not breaking my promise
And your someone I would miss
Someone I would miss

Why are you gone
(You know that I'm gone)
Why are we done
(Tonight we are done)
Wont you come back?
(i'll never be back again)
Wont you come back home...

Uhm...I just wanted to point something out to you...
I'll try not to be too mean, okies?? ^_____^;;;

The song...well...it's more like songs aren't too...uhm...'appealing'.
You always use the same tactic when writing songs. You also use the title in the song
too much. (as in repeating it over and over all throughout the song)
Also, you use the 'fade' thing too much. It's okay to use it and all, but you know...
And um...you also always ask a question during your bridges and have a little too much echoes too. You should place the echoes at more 'strategic' points so that it'll sound captivating.

I hope I'm not being too mean...I'm just trying to help and all so that you can improve.
``>___________<

Sakaki's telling me not to be mean, but someone has to point it out soon enough.
So, I did just that. If people don't point out your weaknesses and state criticisms, you won't be able to get better...