"I'll update soon"? Haha, sorry, just had to say that. Love the first chapter, though. It's a shame you don't write on. But I love all of your stories so I'm going to read on with the one you've sent me by e-mail. See you tonight!

This was an interesting first chapter to read. And for a writer whose first language isn't English, this was extremely well written. I couldn't really find any mistakes apart from one or sentences that could have been rearranged differently. You've certainly picked up on the language quite easily. Good Job. And I look forward to reading the next chapter.