i especially like the format for this. i don't think it would've been half as powerful if you organized it any other way. as for the subject matter, it was ominous because of the monsters and the fact that you never actually say what they are, but lighthearted because of the pure, innocent emotion ("i drown/in laughter" "i sleep/with my eyes/open"). very good. please write more.

as an afterthought, i'm kinda honored you asked me to r&r your stuff cuz i've seen you around before :)

I'm at lost of words all of a sudden. Emotions surging through me, but I can't put them into words. uhh.. But... wow, yeah I know this comment sucks, but really, wow. Your poems really brings me into another world, and see the in a third person perspective of that person/ character.

Loves these:

"i glance

at the tiny

monsters

on my windowsill,

haunting me"

"i grasp

the memories

too bold

to coexist

inside me"

"i glance

at the tiny

monsters

on my windowsill,

haunting me"

When I read the last stanza, I though you repeated th first stanza, but when I reread it again, I realize otherwise.

I really like this. The only thing that I would really suggest is that you use a little bit more punctuation, so the reader can have a sense of how you want the poem to be red. Are there pauses? Or are two lines meant to be read like one? Other than that, great job.