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Re: Well, here it is! my first chapter of a short manga I'm making :)

This made me smile.
I don't know......honestly speaking, I liked it. When it comes to amateur manga I'm usually very sceptical, but yeah...this was kinda cool. Of course there are still problems with it. Sometimes it's not exactly clear what is going on and there are parts you need to elaborate on. (I'll explain it later) However, it didn't stop me from enjoying this. The feeling is right.

Re: Well, here it is! my first chapter of a short manga I'm making :)

Really? awe, thanks! I will keep it up! I was a bit worried at first because I do everything with pen and pencil. and I had to write in the words myself so I hope it was readable and (please do explain) I really want to make it better as it progresses. thanks ^_^

Re: Well, here it is! my first chapter of a short manga I'm making :)

There's a lot of things I could complain about, but a lot more that are absolutely great.

First of all, the mood is great. I can feel the story. I dont know, I felt like I was in middle school again, it just felt like a genuine experiece. It's rare to capture it so well.

Another thing, your facial expressions are fantastic. They're on a whole other level than the rest of your art. Extremely expressive. The bodies and poses and hair and whatever could use some work, but the facial expressions do their job perfectly.

The art in general is really good and you can tell you've put a lot of work into it.

I don't even know where to start telling you to improve, the only really important thing is to KEEP DRAWING and dont stop this series. I think you have a lot of potential, I'm very excited to see where you'll evolve to.

Edit:
I should note i was probably a bit too complimening in thjs post. I want to clarify that a lot of things can be improved, but for a beginner it's very impressive, and also, I think you have an amazing gift for mood and atmosphere. I cant wait to see what you'll put out once you improve and grow as an artist
I've been neglecting my own work for a while, and your work really got me in the mood to work again.