Okay, so this was basically inspired by a thread in the Foundation Universe forum. It's basically about what would happen if the Foundation discovered our universe. This is sort of the introduction. Throughout the story it will bounce between Captain Renalt of Kappa-23 (Foxhounds) and the scientists researching and running experiments on a mysterious object called the ██████ Anomaly, or just The Anomaly. I haven't thought of a name for it yet so it's referred to as that on documents. It will actually have a name in conversations. This is the first chapter of who knows how many. Anyone who wants to contribute characters can.

Before I begin, take these criticisms with a grain of salt, I'm pretty new to the site.

First off, you should describe the man they're chasing a bit more. A lanky man dressed in black could be any number of things. We don't even have his race, and it certainly doesn't seem to be that he's fully covered up, at least from how he's described.

'Armed men'. You say this a couple times in the first paragraph, and it just sounds wrong. Instead of armed men, go into a bit more detail. Are they in full miltary gear? Are they just carrying guns? And you shouldn't use it twice in the same paragraph. A few of the armed men just… doesn't flow. They were the subject of the last sentence, and you could better say it, even just as 'a few of the men', 'a few of the operatives', or something like that, and if you use some more description there, it would be even better.

This one's a bit of a nitpick, but it's team's leader, not teams leader. You get this right further along in the draft, so it's not a big deal, just touch that up.

Instead of "If you come quietly, you won't be hurt, if not, we'll use force." try "Come quietly, and no one gets hurt." Which rolls better off the tongue. The original phrase has three pauses in it, and sounds very, very awkward to say.

"The man stepped backwards off of the roof, allowing himself to fall." The last half of that sentence could be much improved, just by using more colorful dialogue. Show, don't tell.

I don't see why they would immediately go from super speed or teleportation, or any number of other anomalous powers straight to reality bender. Remember, not all humanoid skips are reality benders. Just being exceedingly fast is a power on it's own.