the unknown poem

Below is the poem entitled the unknown poem which was written by poet
josh
kirkwood. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

the unknown poem

Whether or not you fall on your own face
cannot erase what
you thought was the biggest waste
of all you've got
to now replace
and what you're without
is the love you made
with me
What you've chosen
to belong in
didn't bring back all your prose;
petals of flowers to line your doors
As anyone can see you've tripped the line
Surrender, lest you be decieved
by your design
Undo the anchor from yourself
and face the waves of your regressions

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I got more out of this reading the second time, especially with the comments below. I am sorry your love is not returned. But pain makes great poems. Emotions exposed and left to absorb the reader. thanks.

I am with Justin....he sort of got to the comment first Ha! That said, I still think part of this theme flew right over my dense head; which doesn't surprise me at all, considering how....dense. my. head. is. Josh, I noticed that you sent me soupmail. Ever since the admin began tinkering around with the site 2 days ago, I cannot open my mail; which is too bad, because I am curious about wot you typed. Thank you for your kind encouragement regarding my amateur writing....I have a long ways to go!

I respect the cathartic element to this write Josh - sometimes it is necessary to surrender our hypocrisy to gain the higher truth, the higher strength - the last two lines contain very mature & therapeutic metaphors - J.A.B. %

thanks justin. i included this in my arsenal because of those lines, i think. you can imagine, the struggle of coordinating lyrics with sound. well, this was to someone i loved, who didn't think i did. sh*t. truth be told, 15 yrs later, i still do. will be checking ur stuff out as soon as i get off cloud Aechtner ...haha. that dude is A~W~S~U~M.