Another Bad Writer

Can you ask this writer to use smaller paragraphs and use sub-headings?

If the writer is not providing sub-heads, then you kindly give at least two in a story. But the best is to get the writer to do the needful in the first place.

Plus, the write-up could do with a bit more editing, I’d say.

As told by an anonymous “source” Snooki, the Situation and their gang are making $100,000 per episode, and the new star cast will be a lot cheaper, besides that hefty amount they earn in appearances.

Kindly ask the writer to use proper punctuation. The introductory phrase “As told by an anonymous “source”” should have been separated with a comma.

Then, the phrase “besides that hefty amount they earn in appearances” doesn’t cut very well with me. The idea could have been incorporated (or rather ‘positioned’) in the sentence better.

The edited, reader-friendly sentence should have read something like the following:

As told by an anonymous “source,” Snooki, the Situation, and their gang are making $100,000 per episode — besides that hefty amount they earn in appearances, and the new star cast will be a lot cheaper.

Kindly notice such semantic issues in writers’ copies and teach them the right way, so that they don’t trouble you repeatedly on the same issues.

But even if you’re favorite juiceheads and guidettes be removed from Jersey Shore,…

In this sentence, you needed to edit closely. you’re is the problem part.

The whole news is littered with similar issues. So talk to the writer, so that he submits cleaner copies to you in future.