This is a tale about a guide from a GOI known as The Grand Writer inc. About how to deal with BoB's. ( I have redone the summary!)

I trimmed your thread summary above, since it was taking up a lot of space on the forum listing. Try to keep thread descriptions and titles under 7 lines so you don't visually crowd out other people's threads. ~Zyn

Hey Zyn I guess I did get a bit sloppy with the summary! BoB's in a nutshell are any deities gods creatures entities etc. That were made due to our belief in them. Such as goblins, Santa Claus™ , certain dieties, nymphs etc. This is pretty much a guide book on how to deal with them how they work, how to kill them, "trap" them, change them etc. The Grand Writer Inc. Is pretty much a publishing/ writing group that write about various anomalous events, objects, areas, stories etc. And this is one of their pieces "How BoB's work,(and how to deal with them)" The idea behind it is that it is supposed to give readers the upper hand against what their thoughts have created. The various methods such as smear campaigns against gods, making up a anti BoB BoB to keep the BoB imprisoned, making people believe the BoB was killed etc. I was going to write a history section but religion sometimes rubs people off the wrong way. I was going to put it on the wanderers library but it didn't fit the theme of "a small part of a greater thing" so I ported it here hence why there is already a draft that I linked. Now this is no way near done I want to remind you. I want to add something to the story as currently I feel that it is missing some key component. I wanted to add almost like a revolutionist feel too it like rise up against BoBs! But with it being subtle so I would like critique in that direction. I tried a format screw with the draft with collapsed sections of the different parts of the guide. I would like too know if that is good or not.

Please don't just link us a sandbox draft. Give us a quick explanation of the concept. We don't need to see all the complicated details that would be present in a draft; we're helping out with the core idea. Link a sandbox only as optional reading or if a reviewer asks for it.

If you're still unsure of what a concept summary looks like, take a look at other threads in this forum.

If the reviewer needs to read the sandbox content to critique your work, the thread belongs in the Drafts forum. That's currently the case here, unless you provide a less-generic overview (i.e., what the point of the new GoI you're introducing is, why they're writing about beings of belief, what makes this interesting beyond just being an information dump) of the piece and what you hope to accomplish with it.

This is pretty much a guide book on how to deal with them how they work, how to kill them, "trap" them, change them etc.

Isn't it kind of presumptive to assume that all of these things work under the same circumstances? And how would anyone figure out all this information anyway?

The Grand Writer Inc. Is pretty much a publishing/ writing group that write about various anomalous events, objects, areas, stories etc.

So… just like any other GoI? What do they publish and why do they publish?

The idea behind it is that it is supposed to give readers the upper hand against what their thoughts have created.

What about the good things that thoughts have created? Furthermore, how would readers know if their thoughts have created anything to begin with?

The various methods such as smear campaigns against gods, making up a anti BoB BoB to keep the BoB imprisoned, making people believe the BoB was killed etc.

Wouldn't these potentially backfire by drawing up more attention for these things? Don't some malevolent spirits feed on nasty rumors? And if people believe that a certain being was killed, wouldn't that prompt them to go looking for it?

I was going to write a history section but religion sometimes rubs people off the wrong way.

History section of what?

I was going to put it on the wanderers library but it didn't fit the theme of "a small part of a greater thing" so I ported it here hence why there is already a draft that I linked.

I personally don't really see how this is more suited for the mainsite than the Wanderers' Library.

Now this is no way near done I want to remind you. I want to add something to the story as currently I feel that it is missing some key component.

I'll be completely frank—I don't see much of a story here. This is just a bunch of random info bits that are presented extremely casually as facts, almost like a teenager describing video game monsters or an anime.

I wanted to add almost like a revolutionist feel too it like rise up against BoBs!

Why? What's wrong with them? Isn't Santa Claus pretty great?

But with it being subtle so I would like critique in that direction.

I still don't even know why the "The Grand Writer Inc." company even exists, or why they apparently have beef with these beings.

if you do check out my short draft could you tell me if I did the Photo licensing and crediting part right?

Attribution information looks okay, but typically if you put it in the main document it breaks immersion and people will downvote for out-of-place material.