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SilentConfession says:Wow, this is jammed pack with action! I love how you've started this story with their parents though. It makes it an interesting beginning and makes me wonder where you could take this story. We have the two children now and i'm curious to know how their friendship could build from this. But it makes it a really interesting start and you've set the stage great for later on in the story.

Your wording is also really nice here and easy to follow. Which is excellent because it let me get pulled into the story you're telling. There is some weird spacing between the paragraphs that i'd fix though as it makes it harder to read.

I like Alfhild as a character and i think that she seems like a really strong and resilient woman, perfect for Godrics's father. I hope that her wish to be a good mother comes true! :D

I'm so curious to know why he married Mikayla at all or if it was an arranged marriage as his parents would not have approved of Alfhild as a match? Anyway, overall, this was a great job at starting you story and grabbing the readers attention. :D

Author's Response: Thanks so much for this wonderful review! I wanted to start with a bang to get people into this story, and I hope you keep reading and writing!

This story was such a challenge for me to write, and it's still up for being remodelled at the moment; that means getting rid of big gaps and typos!

It was an arranged marriage with Mikayla; and although Leif's parents liked Alfhild, they did not see her as a prospective wife for their son!