wow...thats um..graphic lol. but that's what makes this piece itself, if that makes sense...if it wasn't graphic like it is then it would just be some other poem..but he graphicness of it makes it it's own unique thing, and i like that ]

i don't however like all the bolding and italicising and brackets and such. i think it's a little too much. i think that you could keep some of them for emphasis and character, but i think most of them are unneeded. just my opinion