So, cancer. Well done for tackling a difficult subject, there isn't enough in that in fic, and you've done it with a great deal of emotion. Tying that in with canon events is undoubtedly going to be tricky should you choose to pursue this, but it has potential.

You may want to look over your tense changes and punctuation - I know I like to play with them a lot, but in this case it was a bit confusing at points, particularly at the beginning.

Anyway, good luck writing! :)

Author's Response: I am hoping to continue with this story I've just been a bit side tracked with everything else going on and a bunch of other fics! Yes I know I need a beta.. I'm particularly horrible about changing tenses and such. thank you for taking the time to read and review!