First I saw it took my idea of the Broken God being a planet-covering crust of clockwork with hoards of bio-mechanical, giger-ish servants from your "Looking for some help" topic. This was upvote worthy.

Next I saw the description of the God as having a single eyeball in a spherical body-core. This made one of my favorite SCPs, SCP-753 the Automatic Artist considerably more nightmarish with fridge horror. "It's a baby Broken God!" That was also upvote worthy.

Next, the idea of the O-5 and foundation higher-ups running away to pocket dimensions. Now I have an idea for a Tale in which the foundation tries to flee the end of the world by invading the worlds reachable from SCP-1660 and SCP-1322.

Last, the writing style was awesome.

I have only three questions.

What happened to the seas? I had a cool picture in my head of the earth from space, the continents endless masses of clockwork still shaped the same, the seas polluted with oil and gas as external fuel stores and the air an unbreathable mess of carbon dioxide and metal shavings.

Are they drained, used to lubricate the endless clockwork?
Left where they lie as after all, how can they harm the God's body?
Converted into metal with the rest of the planet?

….and….

Have you ever read the "Dogscape" Creepypasta? I was kind of reminded of it by this.

….and….

What will SCP-1887 do to this? It eats technology and replaces it with nature. How about the Rocket Sturgeon which turns technology into biologic equivalents?

First up, the seas; they aren't directly addressed in the Tale because the individual recording the events doesn't know, I felt limiting them to what they could see or hear was important. To address your question I must first state that I don't want to muddy the story with pointless details and trivialities, the ultimate fate of things beyond what the protagonist explains is ultimately left to the reader.

However I can tell you what I think happened to them. They were 'removed', the Broken God had no need of them so it erased them. Most of the earth was 'removed' so that the proper work could be completed. (Notice you don't get to know what was going on inside of the Earth, just that there's loads of clockwork beneath the crust.)

Secondly, I can't say that I have, my exposure to creepypasta is sadly limited to a few I read off of Encyclopedia Drammatica and a couple from the forums.

Lastly, I don't know, I would assume they were 'removed'. This is ultimately the fate of any SCPs that were deemed unnecessary to the goals of the Broken God. It's not here for servants, worshippers, mechanics, etc it is only here for more, more of what? That's best left for the reader to imagine.

I don't know how it did it but their skeletons were entirely made of moving and clicking clockwork; it was like watching a fucked up french movie but there were no subtitles and there was no ending.

I like straightforward lines like this.

I saw it's eye once, you don't have to believe me, no one else does, but I saw it; it was only for a moment as the gears spun and the cogs shifted that I could see how empty it was and then I saw it's eye… it was bright orange like our sun with a hole right in the center and it was looking down at us, at me, at our lifeless world and I swear to you that it was happy with what it saw…

I like to imagine that it can't feel anything and it's simply doing everything that it does because that's what it has decided is the most logical action. It understands suffering and misery just as well as it understands happiness, and it simply doesn't care.

It took me a good bit of time to properly decide how it would attack. One idea I had involved the thing just making non-stop grinding sounds until people went mad and started shoving gears under their skin until the thing obliterated the earth with a giant laser.

Dr. Gears as an agent of the Broken God seems unlikely to me. He probably has the SCPs to reassemble at least part of the God, and would either try to do so or to steal them if he wasn't loyal to the foundation. Plus, someone would notice him getting magnets stuck to his skin or their hard drive being wiped when he gets near their computer. Anyway, he's too obvious. The foundation isn't stupid. They probably have some way of checking that sort of thing. If not… ….Tale fuel.

I imagine the thing being happy with what it does, and glad to be helping the poor organics. Taking them out of their tiny, ineffective bodies of walking meat which break down in less than a hundred years, fixing them to immortality and Godhood as part of itself…. …..it thinks it's doing them a favor. The CotBG would agree with it. From their view this Tale is utopia.

The idea of a nice Broken God which can't understand why humans don't like it, after all it only wants to help them become perfect like it is…. ….for me that is much creeper than an uncaring Broken God or an angry one.

Also what I suspect will happen when the last gears are placed is simple. The Broken Earth will extend some sort of engine and leave its orbit around the sun following its parent out of the solar system. Broken Gods only prey upon planets with organic life. They need it, so they can convert it to their workers for reproducing.

Also, if the Broken God can "remove" SCPs…. …..how did it finally deal with 682?

Too. Many. Commas. You need some periods and a sprinkling of semicolons up in this bitch.

That said, this is really awesome. I love the Church, and seeing something like this that would worship as their god, whether it was or not, is just great. I actually thought, from the opening, that it was related to that jackass Russian pulsar hurtling towards earth, but that's still a long way off. Won't he be pissed when he finally gets here?

I'm not sure I could explain it well (my knowledge of English usage is pretty instinctual at this point), and there are too many to just point out. If you want me to fix it for you, I'd be willing to. All I can say is, and I think there was maybe one instance of this, if you're combining two sentences (that is, each has a subject and verb) together with punctuation, go with a semicolon if you don't want to use a period.