I did like the girl talk, not sure if I'd ever have done that though! About the lack of connection with voldemort, to be honest, I was just so caught up in the story, I never even gave it a thought! I'm glad Remus was in this chapter, albeit only a short time.
Thank you, Sue x

Caleb NovaWednesday 18th June 2014 02:02

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About the lack of connection with voldemort, to be honest, I was just so caught up in the story, I never even gave it a thought!

I think that was the case with most readers. This chapter was the answer to a question no one asked.

Oh, wait. Never mind. You had the Hermione/Sophie conversation in TTM. Granted Scott's name came up a bunch but only in relation to Kharadjai politics/government. That was fairly gender neutral, right?

Caleb NovaThursday 5th June 2014 20:26

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It depends. The Bechdel test is very vague in that it only requires two women to talk about something other than a man. The length of that 'talk' is indeterminate. The last time I checked a Bechdel test website, movies were given a pass based on sentences alone. Iron Man 3 had a pass based on mere sentences. It also doesn't specify whether the 'talk' can be included within a longer conversation or must be standalone.

So, yes, depending on what standard we hold literature to, I passed at the point you mentioned. Lila and Molly also discussed Ginny, among other things, a few chapters ago. Lila and Ginny also had a talk about Ginny's inclusion with the group, when Harry was unconscious. A lot of it was about him, but also about her.

So it's hard to say where I stand. Depends on your point of view, probably. I wouldn't dare to judge for myself how feminist or sexist my story may be.

Hate to be the bearer of bad news, well not actually, but you still fail the Bechdel test. Hermoine and Ginny talked about their boyfriends. If you REALLY REALLY want to pass the test, have Hermione and Sophie talk about magical and physical properties in this universe compared to others. And don't bring the topic of Scott into it. Except Sophie would probably defer all such questions to Scott, it is his OP after all.

Caleb NovaTuesday 3rd June 2014 08:26

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I never said I thought I passed. Hence me declaring that I refused to be consistent:

A few chapters ago, I was worrying about the Bechdel Test. Then for this chapter, I drove this bitch straight into Girl Talk™. I refuse to be consistent. You can't make me.

The Girl Talk was the complete opposite of the Bechdel, rife with cliche.

And, no, I'm not interesting in passing the test artificially by shoehorning in a pointless conversation. My stories are packed with pointless conversations, of course, but I prefer they happen naturally.

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