Awaiting A Story Awaited....

Thousands of years ago, from now............

‘Enough, Richard don’t spoil your precious time on this
myth, it’s been years and I don’t think it gonna work, I beg you to back
yourselves to our pleasing life’ cried Marie, of course she is ‘cause it’s been
years Richard spending his time on inventing a fluid that can transform a
cursed pigeon back into human form.Now Marie can’t let her husband waste his
time on making his theory work. Enough is enough are the only words currently
Marie wanted to say to her love but she managed herself to make it better so
that Richard won’t get irritated. May be a chance, a moment that, Richard stops
everything he is doing now.

‘Oh Marie! Am so close sweetie, just a step or two gonna
make wonders, after all we are succeeded in creating a time machine for this
pigeon to fly back into his kingdom to save his reign and love, see that, just
a step or two, That’s all and if it won’t work I promise you that I will stop
whatever am doing now for my sanity’ Richard tried explaining her, indeed
begging her for a chance.

‘Ok, let me ask before you passing orders to stop my
theories and invention, How much do you know about this pigeon’ asked Richard
to his wife, Marie.

‘Oh common now! You have been wasting your time since ten
years and you asking me this question now? Ok then, let me share my knowledge,
you used to say that,

Many years ago, 1600 I remembered, A grateful king brave and
generous named after his word to people and seekers had awarded with a curse by
a river in terms for blocking and diverting her path to save his kingdom---

And now you are making efforts for this unknown great king
of your grand pa’s tale, where history concluded his tale as a myth’, huh,
hesitated Marie after speaking what she knows about that pigeon.

‘Haha, Oh my Marie! Great king namely, Dringo, was cursed. I
accept. But the reason for his curse, after your statement, seems like you know
nothing about him and story behind his curse’ smiled Richard with a glance
meaning, you have to accept your defeat Marie.

‘Ok in that case, will you let me know what it is, exactly,
Please’ Marie tried insulting him but ended up with pleasing Richard to let her
know the story behind the pigeon’ curse.

‘I will my love.’ Richard now with a great enthusiasm
started narrating the whole story---

‘1600 years ago from now, Dringo a great king named after
his word and sword used to rule, Reinaka kingdom. Before his twenties he
mastered in every aspect a king should have, and after he named as king to
Reinaka, he fought two great battles to protect his kingdom ofcourse. These battles
bought him glory than any of the king ruled Reinaka.A few days later, he
started on a voyage on a river, Banaka,
on a business deal for better missionaries and equipments inturn offering his
friendship with Sarroha kingdom, named after their peace and humanitic rule. On
his voyage he learned about this mystical river, banaka, having powers to
destroy and even to create anything that matters on land and water. He was
surprised on the powers of the great river, Banaka. Three days spending on
waters they reached Sarroha kingdom, where they were welcomed greatly and
Dringo felt honored for their generosity.

Dringo was
made to be seated in the great hall of Sarroha. Few people started praising
their dignity to welcome their king, Rathunda, and after there meeting which
ended successfully. Rathunda offered all
his pleasure for his noble guests from
Reinaka and asked Dringo to stay for a week, so that they feel it as
honoured.Dringo had no other option except to nod his head.There in a week,
Dringo fell in love with the princess of Sarroha, sister of Rathunda. They both
were in love. After days they were married. Dringo along with his wife, the
queen of Reinaka, Vallaha crossed the river with pride they stepped in Reinaka
and celebrations started in Reinaka. Since the very first night of their
arrival, everything in their surroundings behaved terribly, it started raining
heavily which continued for a day heavily almost like it drowned Reinaka
kingdom. Sailors who were on river never returned to Reinaka, as river Banaka
dancing in rage.There were heavy winds day and night. Dringo trembled knowing
nothing to do. He requested finest priests and chanters from Reinaka to find a
solution for that terrible situation they suffering. None got a clue for the problem.

Out of nowhere
oldest saints of all from Reinaka stepped into
hall, to explain the cause of the scenario they were going through.

His excellency, your
ancestors violated laws of nature with Sarraha kings, years ago, that made
powerful saints from these forests around us have to curse these Kingdoms. And
no descendant of both the kingdoms can learn about this curse.” What is the
curse, explain it to me” asked Dringo to the oldest saint. “Sure your majesty”
and saint started his story “your ancestors blindly destroyed forests for it’s
treasures and hunted animals terribly, it passed for years and after days
forests started depleating. Saints in agony cursed both the kingdoms never to
unite again in any situation it may be. Then these lands separated with river
Banaka, those saints gave powers to Banaka to destroy these lands, if they
violate the curse.” Saint explained it to Dringo, Dringo felt ashamed of his
blood and he was in rage that none of his masters made him learn about the
curse. Soon, next morning Banaka danced ragely onto lands, Dringo in terrible
situation now. He was filled with terror that his act, his love awarded him
with terrible problems to Reinaka. Out of loss, Dringo along with his master
craftsmen and scientists and army started to river to try any possibilities to
change the situation.

After his
various efforts he succeeded in shifting the direction of river at cost of his
army and blocked the river. Next moment, River Banaka took a human form of some
thirty feet height. Banaka in agony said “Dringo you made a mistake, you
shouldn’t have stopped me instead you should have pleased me for your good
cause, but now it’s of no use.” Banaka in rage cursed Dringo to turn into a
pigeon, who couldn’t speak and made him immortal to suffer his whole life. He
then turned into pigeon and many years passed now, as a pigeon.

Dringo did no wrong. He tried to save his people. He married
to his love. He do not about the curse for the mistake of their ancestors.Then
Marie why should he suffer from loss.’ Richard explained whole story behind
Dringo turning into pigeon, and asked his wife,

‘Am I wrong in my efforts towards him. I wanna see this man
enjoying his love life as we do now. Is that wrong dear. Just for a second, for
a second, assume we are apart for some stupid reasons, How do you feel then?’
Richard turned emotional asking her these questions.

‘Nothing wrong my love. Am sorry for my troubles’

‘No. Don’t say that, just this night am going ti finish this
off’ said Richard with a smile.

‘I will be of any help. Go on’ at last Marie agreed him for
his work.

Richard working like a machine all night, to his surprise he
was succeeded in turning pigeon back into Dringo.

‘Oh my! Richard you succeeded’ Marie exclaimed in terrible
happiness.

‘Have seen you working for me since years, can’t thank you
enough my friend. Dringo will be on for you any service it may be’ Offered
Dringo his gratitude towards Richard.

‘No my Majesty, it’s an honour for me working for you. Only
a thing foe me, Please’ requested Richard.

‘Anything for you my friend’

‘Meet my Wife Marie Sempler, and in your words do convey her
that your atory isn’t a myth.’

‘Pleased to meet you Marie Sempler, wife of my dearest
friend Richard. And my story isn’t a myth.’ Dringo explained her in a pleasing
manner.

Time is passing after various things explained by dringo. Finally
Richard was successful in his attempt turning a pigeon into King. And now only
left with sending this man into his time, to solve the issues and curses
through his time Machine.

‘It’s already late my king. Will you please move, my queen
is waiting for you’ Richard giggled at his own words.

‘Thank you for everything Richard. …….Thank you my friend’,
after his words he stepped into time machine which started to his kingdom,
Rienaka.

‘Your name will be in history my friend’ said Dringo waving
at them.

Time machine flewed away.Richard now happy than ever at his
success. Marie in teras now looking at her husband.

‘You made it dear, am so happy for you. Ofcourse am proud of
you my love’ Marie uttered in happiness.

‘Oh, Marie !, It’s your husband, The great Richard Sempler,
Can make anything possible’…They both enjoying their success, in fine morning.reasonsoss.'d now, as a pigeon.

. Nexwith head.There
in a week, Dringo fell in lover a week, so that they feel it as honoured.Dringo
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My Review

Reviews

There's one thing I can depend on from you, Surya, and that's high originality! This is a story that sounds like no other & that's the best thing to me. I find it interesting & inspiring, the way you fit together the telling of an ancient mythological happening & then taking your story into the present day. The sound of your writing changes appropriately to be like olden times or current times. When you're explaining the myth, your writing style becomes nicely full of lyrical embellishments.

I have to say, it does take a little work for the reader to get thru your writing becuz the mechanics of your English are not always smooth. But the quality of your storytelling makes it well worth the effort of trying to figure things out here & there.

Posted 7 Months Ago

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7 Months Ago

Thank you so much for this appreciative and a correcting review, I appreciate your time reading it.... read moreThank you so much for this appreciative and a correcting review, I appreciate your time reading it..
Well, for sure I work on my skills in english to make upcoming writes for better.
Thank you so much Margie...:)

Posted 8 Months Ago

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8 Months Ago

This is an interesting story. I noticed some grammar mistakes but that can b easily taken care of. And can you please change the font style? People usually use Times New Roman since it's easier to be read. And please put more spaces between the paragraphs it's very hard to read. No matter how good your writing is your story is going to go in the trash if the visual is unappealing. But aside from the technical I must say you are very creative! Keep on writing!

Posted 8 Months Ago

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8 Months Ago

Grammar mistakes are made in hurry, even I pointed them but I thought, let it be a first look....and.. read moreGrammar mistakes are made in hurry, even I pointed them but I thought, let it be a first look....and yeah I agree with you and will surely try to implement it in upcoming writes....Thank you so much Lily for your time reading it and pointing errors and helping me out....keep visiting...:)

What a splendid story, must have taken a lot of planning and thinking. It has a distinct touch of fable or ancient tale that's been passed down generation to generation. What sadness here and then, what rage, revenge - what a feat of engineering in changing the river's course, Plus, yet more, that magical of changing man to pigeon and back again! So much said in one epic tale!

As said, it IS a grand tale but to be honest, I found it somewhat hard to read in places, words squashed like sardines in a tin. Would politely suggest far more spacing so that people can read and note everything included.

Posted 8 Months Ago

8 Months Ago

I will put them in detail, at first I thought every detail made it much lengthier than now, so I edi.. read moreI will put them in detail, at first I thought every detail made it much lengthier than now, so I edited it to required....
Thank you so much Emma for your kind visit and words, and yeah I will definitely improve it in my diary...Thank you...:)

8 Months Ago

No offence at all....It is helpful to me, my dear friend...am glad you said it, or else as all just .. read moreNo offence at all....It is helpful to me, my dear friend...am glad you said it, or else as all just provided me with a compliment...am glad you provided me a way to improve it...so thanks for that...:)