Wednesday, November 9, 2016

Noirvember - The Beaten Path - Page 3

1 - On the crashed car from page 1, but from the opposite side (looking from the forest). There is a police officer standing next to the car, peering into the driver's seat. He might have a flashlight. His cruiser could be visible parked on the side of the road behind him.

CARSON (off-panel, tailless): Shit.

2 - Carson and Stephen stand in the forest clearing, vaguely hiding behind some trees / branches. They look frustrated. Stephen reaches for where he put away his gun.

STEPHEN: What do we do now?

CARSON: Only thing we can.

3 - Close on the cop. He looks up from the car, a look of surprise / concern on his face.

COP: Hello?

4 - Smash cut to Carson and Stephen carrying Ronald's dead body through the forest. Stephen holds the legs, walking forward; while Carson brings up the rear, holding the head / arms awkwardly, trying the balance the briefcase on Ronald's torso. Carson is not having much success and looks like he's struggling.