Excellent one-shot you have here. You have quite a gift for flow, and I love that you stick with the canon and the gum wrappers (: I also think that you've really managed to convey Neville's feelings very well for his parents and his grandmother. My heart really aches for him :(

As a reviewer, I couldn't help but notice that there are several missing commas, especially when you write dialogue. Here is an example:

There are other little things like that in the story. They're not that important, but in case you want to improve your story to an even higher level (eek! :D) I suggest you check over the story and tweak those things.

Great job!!! I like the title, too. It really fits the storyline, you know?

10/10!

~foundriapenguin

Author's Response: Wow - 10/10 *Blushes*!

Thank you very much for such a fast respone and a positive review.

Ack, my speech really makes me nervous. I know it is a weak point and after asking my teacher to explain it, I only got more confused. Darn teacher! :P I will read the section on speech at the forums before I post again, but I will probabley look to get a Beta next time.

I'm planning on editing this soon! Thank you again for such a wonderful review. I'll definately do something about those pesky grammer issues!

-TT

p.s Still in shock at how quick that was, are you a secret ninja reviewer?