Moments...

Our Universe is an ongoing miracle. Like the crest and the trough, both constitute the wave,the end and the beginning both constitute the larger continuum... and so the less bright doesn't mean the less divine.

Submitted: December 28, 2009

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If i could................
I would have kept these moments
Wrapped in purple velvet
Clasped in silver chords.

But look, they fall
Like fire gilded feathers
And melt into the emptiness
Like our own ungathered whispers.

Oh! Beware of their subterfuges
As they gently float by
Trembling, in a breathless hush
Stealing scent from the roses
And turning embers into ashes.

But I know they weep in secret too
I hear their sobs in the nights.
So i just want a little handful
To scatter them before your eyes
To consecrate them as a part of miracle
Though the side that's a bit lesser bright.

The meaning is very deep...I loved it may I suggest you write a novel of some kinda I think you would be good at it! Wonderful imagery and descriptions sometimes that is hard to accomplish when it comes to making your stuff good. It could be wonderfully written, but has a boring plot. Loved it keep up the good work!
-Luna

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Tue, January 12th, 2010 10:32am

Thanks... you are right, a novel is nothing without a good plot, and imagery and description cant compensate the absence of a proper story.

Thanks for encouraging words, yes i have a few plots in my mind and i hope to give them a chance.

hmmmm..... ehhh...... uhhhh...... LOVE IT!!! i love the 3rd, 5th and 7th line. those are my favorites ^^ i love how deep and saddening it sounds yet it still sounds beautiful. great job! *oh yah just fyi im giving it an i like it vote to ^^*

Oh man, I read this like 20 times before I got it. I was trying to look too deep lol. When I read the words as they were intended, instead of trying to find the metaphor in every word, I finally got it and smacked myself on the forehead.

wow that was amazing....very deep indeed...just one advice...keep on writing and writing...koz i find this awesome that we can put our ideas.feeling,emotions into words and share it with other people....