That was so sad Priz! You made it flow very well! You used so much description even though you don't have much written down. It made me feel like I was actually there! Keep up the nice work!

Author's Response: Whoa, thanks! I'm sorry it made you sad *sheepish grin*... but that was the point so I'm kind of proud about it (I'm so evi *sigh*) *blushes* Thanks for the lovely compliments about my description skills *keeps blushin* I'll try to keep it up :D

Very good Priz, you get a gold star. If English is not your first language then thie was a fantastic first attempt. I am assuming it is Ginny speaking.
I like your compareson of his leaving to the fading stars.
The only thing I saw wrong was that once he was hit the killing curse, he wouldn't have been able to say goodby, it's instant death.

Very good Priz, you get a gold star. If English is not your first language then thie was a fantastic first attempt. I am assuming it is Ginny speaking.
I like your compareson of his leaving to the fading stars.
The only thing I saw wrong was that once he was hit the killing curse, he wouldn't have been able to say goodby, it's instant death.

Author's Response: *proudly wears gold star on forehead* Thanks mum! :D (NOTE: Kristy is not really my mum, but she's like the motherly figure of the forums, so I call her mum)
Yep, it is Ginny speaking :D An I'm glad you liked the analogy!
Oh, about that, well... he bids farewell right before the killing curse hits him. When the AK does hit him is when the 'his body fell with lethat grace' line goes ;)
Thanks for the wondrous review! *hugs*

Celestial diamonds covered the skies,
Shining as her world was ending,
Emulating the spark that left his green eyes.
She could feel her soul descending.

That has so much power and emotion! You are truly an amazing writer. I really love your stuff. I think I'll add you to my favorite authors so that I can keep up with your stories and such.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D You made my day!!!
Personally, I think that stanza is the best one...I wrote the whole poem because of it, actually *giggles*.
And OMG! I'm so honoured! I really am! Gosh I can't believe I'm going to your favs!! :D THANKS!

I love this poem! Again, not much concrit from me, because you've already heard my thoughts on this poem. But, I just thought I'd show my beta-ly support for your poem, cuz we all love getting reviews! Lovely word use, by the way, you have a great vocabulary. I'm still not sure about the punctuation, but that's probably my poetry skills not yours.

Fiirst off, I must congradulate you for writing such a great poem. This was your first poem in English? So do you normally write in spanish or something? That's really cool, that you write in different languages. Now I want to- maybe I'll try it sometime.

Alright, so its your first poem in English, and I must say that it is great. There are a few lines that are a bit iffy, but the poem is still very well written. The only think that I must pick on in this poem is the very first stanza with "skin" and "scene". You used a rhyme scheme in the poem, but the very first stanza does not follow that sheme. I'm not saying that you should go rhyming crazy and rhyme every thing you right, but in this poem I think it would have fit more. But anyways, maybe you did that on purpose.

So overall, it is an awesome poem. Good job. ^^

Author's Response: Gracias!
I normally write poetry in Spanish or French, but mostly, I write in English. :D
I'm really glad you liked the poem, dear. It means a lot to me that you reviewed it!
About the first stanza's rhyme scheme... I needed it to make sense, so I couldn't find any rhying words that suited the poem... yeah... that's basically what happened. *smiles sheepishly* Thanks for the great review!

You know how much I love this poem. It's really amazing. My favorite line?

She could feel her soul descending.

It's just has great...imagery. It evokes a lot of sorrow. Her soul is descending, and she is full of grief...yeah. :D It's awesome. This is a great poem, ya know.

...where'd ya learn to rhyme so well? *pokes* Teach me! (:D)

Oh, and sorry for reviewing multiple times. >.>

~Kate

Author's Response: I also like that line :) Actually, I wrote the entire poem because that stanza (the one that includes that line) popped into my head and I was like: "Dude, I need to write this down!" And... so I did ;)
My rhymes aren't that good, I think. *blushes* Sometimes I write them randomly, or even without knowing I made something rhyme. There are also times when I need rhymes... then I just Google "Rhyming Words for _____" *giggles*.
And there's no need to be sorry, Kate! I LOVE your reviews!!! :D *squishes*

Sorry this is so short, but hopefuly later I'll have a larger attention span and I can review this in depth. Anywho, this is a great poem.

~Kate

Author's Response: *Squee!* Thanks for reviewing, Kate!! *grins madly* Oh, and I will keep writing so... BEWARE!! *mwahahaha!*
I'm glad you liked it! And even if it was a short review, it still means a lot to me! *hugs*