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can anyone plzzz plzzz correct this essay for me? short essay

If you were given one million dollars to spend how would you spend it?
If I were given one million dollars I would open schools, build households and rest of the money would be given to a charity. There are many homeless people and they are dying of hunger. They do not have any place to live; so I would build as many households as I could. I will also provide them aid and nurses; who will stay in the households with them. On the hand, there are a lot of young youth who want to go to school, but they cannot go; because they do not have enough money, support and resources. So, I would build schools and I will provide free education to all the poor people. I would never ever want anyone to left behind; just because they did not have enough money to educate themselves. Also, there are many people who have terrible diseases and they stay in the hospitals. I would give money to every kind of hospitals; so there would be enough money for everyone to heal themselves. These people live a new life everyday. They invoke a bright and a new hope inside of themselves. They fight against their diseases because they want to live a normal life; just like everyone else in the world. I would never ever want to see anyone die; just because they did not have enough money to overcome from their illness. I would give up my whole entire life to save someone's life.

Re: can anyone plzzz plzzz correct this essay for me? short essay

Originally Posted by Aleezamo

If you were given one million dollars to spend how would you spend it?
If I were given one million dollars, I would open schools, build households and the rest of the money would be given to a charity. There are many homeless people and they are dying of hunger. They do not have any place to live; so I would build as many households (OR homes OR shelters as I could. I willwould also provide them aid and nursesround-the-clocknursing care; who will stay in the households with them. On the hand, There are a lot of young youth who want to go to school, but they cannot go; because they do not have enough money, support and resources. So, I would build schools and I willwould provide free education to all the poor people. I would never ever want anyone to be left behind; just because they did not have enough money to educate themselves. Also, there are many people who have terrible diseases and they stay in the hospitals. I would give money to every kind of hospitalsso there would be enough money for everyone to heal themselvesrecover. These people could live a new life everyday. They could invoke a bright and a new hope inside of themselves. They would fight against their diseases because they want to live a normal life; just like everyone else in the world. I would never ever want to see anyone die; just because they did not have enough money to overcome from their illness. I would give up my whole entire life to save someone's life.