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Monday, September 16, 2013

Predator - Most Feared - Ben Rosenthal

1. A panel showing a close
up of a male Predator, mask on hunting in a futuristic lab somewhere in space.

CAPTION

The most feared and dangerous hunters in the galaxy.

2. The Predator has
come across two aliens – they look non threatening and are cowering in a
corner. The Predator has its arm cannon
raised.

CAPTION

They hunt for trophies. To both show they are the best---

3. A close panel of
the arm cannon firing.

SFX: ZARKT

4. In the foreground
are the burnt bodies of the now toasted aliens.
The Predator is reaching to take its mask off. Now that we can see it’s full body it appears
to be wearing some type of clothing under all of its advance weaponry.

CAPTION

--and steal technologies to remain the best.

5. The mask is off
revealing not a Predator face, but that of a human.

I had a friend in Texas that maintained that this would be the only way the Predator series should end. Glad to see the theory is sound. I love the inhumanity revealed as human beat at the end. I agree with JD, it is cliché, but clichés tend to be rooted in very basic truths - which is why they work. The REAL trick is to subvert those truths.

To sum up: really good page. P.S. This would make a great flash forward intro to a bigger story of how we beat these things and took their place. It's a great hook.

Cliche but really solid idea, this notion of Man being the ultimate horror is a classic horror vision of ourselves. If I'm honest I'd have loved to see this page play out minus the captions. You tell us everything we need to know in the panels, the captions made it seem a little b movie to me. Minus the captions the panels seem horrific and make that final reveal puncher for me anyway.

Also Ray makes a cool point that this would make for a great opening page hook for a series.