Very interesting chapter. However, the addition of this "Domino" character probably should have been elaborated on. Also, adding "Wickham said" or "Domino said" or whoever to your dialogue would make it easier to follow conversations. As it is, it's hard to tell who is talking when. I would also recommend marking where one scene ends and another begins instead of leaving your readers to try and figure it out. A simple * with an empty line above and below would do nicely. Remember, you know exactly what is going on in your story, but your readers only know what you show them. As tempting as it is to get on in stories and push further and forward, make sure you stop and let the reader live in the moment and connect to what is happening.

I've enjoyed reading this story, and I truly hope you write more of it. I'll be keeping an eye out for the next chapter!

There were a few spots in this chapter that were a bit confusing, especially near the beginning. However, I like how you are beginning to change things at the end. I'm not completely sure if the whole "Maggie May" thing is meant to be comedy or a way of hinting that Miranda has a legitimate mental problem, considering you referred to it as a conscience but it is more like she's hearing a voice in her head. I suppose I'll have to wait and see, though for the moment I'm leaning toward it being a comedic tool (or something like Amanda's voiceover in Lost in Austen). I'm also wondering what you are going to do with the lineage you have given Miranda- it could be very interesting! Well, off to read the next chapter!

This story is well written and very interesting! I like that you didn't feel the need to go over every little event since your character didn't change anything, and instead summarized- it allows the story to better hold the attention of the reader. And it has the added benefit of getting us to Wickham's arrival sooner. ;) I'm off to read the next chapter!