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Morning all the crazy folk, headless chickens, gamers and youTubers out there!
As a newly starting Destiny streamer thought what better way to receive some feedback on my videos then to ask the community as I'm probably going to continue these videos when the full game is released!
the link to my [i]Destiny[/i] walk-through mark#1 n montage if you have a moment it'd be ace if you could watch it and give me any critical analysis or if anything could be changed for the betterrrrr! Sharin' love is also appreciated ahah.
[i]Montage[/i] - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=o48U6WQEbFU
[i]Walkthrough[/i] - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2gXeDf_UgrI
Thanks and thanks again team =)