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Story focus more on female characters (probably bringing back Ayara and co as the outcast).

Female characters are like performers while Male characters are more like stagehand, working on chaotic backstage (chaotic because of angry mobs).

Male Lead belongs to a company which just enter the whole IS business. The company created new technology (Genome) which allow Mass Production IS to have performance equal to first shift IS. Equalizer that remembers and optimized itself to suit the pilot.

Whole point of above is to allow normal Pilots to have a chance against Rep.

One of the company's greatest technology is One-off nullifier which negate one-hit kill weapons such as Yukihira.

As a gag: Reason for staying in a Plushie: The male lead and his development teams are hiding from angry mob for making better technology for IS. Their alternative is suicide which one of them did (Creator of the Equalizer technology).
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Edit:
>Normal name for Male lead
-keep claiming wanted to take over the world but too lazy to actually do it.
-relatively Nice guy.....just not very polite.

>Normal goal for the company, Their motto: "We love money, so just give us yours already!"
- Notoriously brutally honest (which is why people trust them when it come to the quality of their product quality. They don't lie about it.)
- Most of the employees are females

Working on female characters
- Normal in the head compared to Ayara's party.

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Also working Fun stuff:

Built in defiance against IS:

Trying to squeeze as much Phallic symbols into a single machine....(but will try to justify them!)

It is clearly over-compensating something... and somehow, manage to beat all the canon characters.....

To protect the pilot from being attack from their "weak point", additional defensive is added with the unfortunate implication of making the crotch area long and spiky.

Head is rounded for special 360 sensors.

The Gun is long and large because it need enough firepower to penetrate IS defense.

Pump-action because it is technically a shotgun.

Close range weapon is a pump-action Sword which vibrates (the pumping action build up power....)

Ball shaped stuff attached to the swords is energy grenade that doubles as power source for the sword.

Long tail for balance and as additional penetrating weapons.

Snake-naming theme.

Long antenna for commanding drones.

The male pilot is a dick.

Reason for not mass producing it: It is still a prototype and its aesthetic design really need help....

@ Demi
If you mean nanomaterial, I use it, IT IS part of what made I.S. advanced, whether it's about the engineering or electronics.

If you're talking about 'magic' metal, no, I didn't.

@ Age
Uh... can, can you please not come with BANG BANG BANG + MIND SCREW like that?.

No offense, but please, just please, write in normal paragraph so I can read without getting a heart attack.

Ironically, those ideas are actually quite... sane and tame compared to what I used to have. I am cutting down the mind-screw stuff and just stick with common sense(I have an outlet for mind screw stuff). About typing out in paragraph, I did tried typing out everything in one whole paragraph but it did not work as well because I myself find it hard to read and check things. You see, while I am typing things out, I am actually checking the idea in my head, testing and rejecting really fucked-up ideas. The only reason why I am making them in bullet points is to make it easier for others and me to read, otherwise it would be one lump of mess. Ideas are disjointed because I am forcing myself to get stuff out rather than just repeatedly running the idea in my head.

It is not just spoofing manly IS... because it is spoofing manly OC who appear out of nowhere and instantly pwn everybody despite the fact that being new to IS means he has no experience in IS battle what-so-ever. Actual IS combat is different from normal Combat since you can be attack from all sides including top and bottom.

The manly OC is kind of like Takamatsu from Angel Beat(only less awesome). He think that he is awesome when he is not and strip for no apparent reason. He has a crush on an IS pilot who eventually filed restraining orders on him.

As for the story itself... I try to give it an imagery of a stage performance, it would be split into two side: Front Stage and Back Stage. Front-stage is for the performers (AKA IS pilots and their lives) and Backstage is for the Stagehands(Maintenance and Developers..etc) where all the bullshit happens. Bullshit such as Politics (remember that concept about Kanzashi being Japanese Rep due to her family pulling string from the background? Backstage is the background and Politics tend to get on the nerves of some IS developers. Also, it is hard to improve technology with Angry mobs, Tabane's trolling (Wham!4th gen while others are struggling on 3rd), Political interference and Phantom Task).

*shrug* Writing style is integral to me. But I still read well plotted though not so richly written material. Your problem lies more on making everything breathing a hardass and even in comedic or softer momkents it can still feel like a military drill. Your plotting and world setting is great. Concept formation enviable.

I'm still running around like a headless chicken torn between a thesis, project to be publicly presented(not as grand as it sounds) and plotting cake eater.

Summer, roughly a year ago, he went for Hokkaido with his family, meeting his Scottish grandmother for the first time since he's 10, it was good. The girls are modest in a sense and active in another, the scenery is eye pleasing, all in all, a nice break from the horrendously cramped Tokyo, even in rural area.

After getting himself a 'date' which veer dangerously into unyouthful activity he might regret, he managed to somehow slip out suppressing his hormonal reactor, which is dangerously overcritical. As he gaze to the stars above, he saw a meteor and make a wish.

"Maybe a male I.S. pilot or something... as if"

And then, the meteor changed it's direction... directly toward the hill he's standing. He almost jump off the nearby cliff if he didn't notice it's gradually slowing down, so he simply run aside aside taking a lot of range a possible without injuring himself.

The meteorite in question landed smoothly like a helicopter, without apparent burn whatsoever, somehow.

"What the hell"

Kneeling like a knight bow to it's lord, the humanoid metal object is about twice as tall as normal human, and over three times as wide. It's Ashen Grey polish is tainted with dried blood and burn marks, however the machine itself is mostly untouched.

Dan wondered how exactly those spotting didn't burned out during a reentry like that, common knowledge that reentry temperature can reach over 7000 Degrees of Celsius depending on the velocity.

That aside he noticed something, the chest is hollow, just enough for a human of average height to fit in.

And alas the temptation, he managed to fit in as he removed his considerably thick coat (even at summer, Hokkaido can be a little cold). Something vaguely resemble barcode scanner went right to his eyes, scanning each and every movement he made.

[Retinal scan complete, began Biometric rechecking....]

The closest thing to the sensation he felt as he squeezed inside is being smothered by a couple of all-metal terminator... however that works, at least he didn't change to a bag full of broken bones and crushed organ.

[Biometric result confirmed, welcome, Dan Gotanda]

"Wait what?"

He squirmed in response and raised his eyebrow, how exactly this machine knew about him. It became frightening and yet at the same time intriguing. The ambivalence of the situation confused Dan.

At least until that video popped up, the quality is quite high, but the fizzle and blink on the video indicated something is wrong with the recording instrument.

"[This is First Lieutenant Dan Gotanda reporting, seventh and eight squad is eliminated, and my machine suffered a catastrophic failure and unable to move... judging form the situation, I'll decide to run on foot. I leave this message in case someone form UNAF found my Gun Wolf and whether I dead or alive, my loyalty stay true to our ideal]"

"[For the survival of the next generation]" the video disappear, and Dan is shown what to be a 'modernized' Irix interface, he have heard that military prefer it simple and rugged than flashy, so it's justified.

DAFUQ was probably correct expression, though, Dan doesn't remember the last time he tripped on dangerous substance and record a video inside four meter tall robot's cockpit, oh wait, he never did.

Apparently, the sensor tracked where he want to check and the cursor pointed at several archive he want to see (or at least he thought he want to see), showing battle log he could not understand what about, and the second is...

Operation Manual

"Holy shit"

Feeling something odd under his buttocks, he pulled what appear to be a handwritten manual, with big [Ichika Orimura] printed on the cover.

And he began to read

One year has passed, he made sure to hid that mysterious machine somewhere in his house without anyone able to intrude, at least intentionally.

Dan had checked it's condition regularly and after studied the manual carefully, he found that with minimum intervention and constant supervision by the pilot, the machine is practically self-maintaining.

The oddest part of course, that it literally ATE inorganic material and electronic component to heal itself (if told to do so), it regrow what amount to be missing eye and unfinished armor plating from the old bike and broken Cam-D he fed it. It took Dan one week sneaking some junk into the hidden room to fix the robot, and satisfied that despite him not knowing anything prior, he managed to keep the error rate to under 10%.

And since then, one years had passed.

Now, some group that most definitely not from government is hunting him and his pet giant robot.

And using what looks like a brainchild of Exo-Frames and Evangelion, and actual offshoot from VT System.

It doesn't generate parts and weapon on a whim, instead, it 'digest' raw material to repair it's internal parts and produce external parts in few hour within it's bulky backpack, the pilot will take those parts out and install it themselves. In one occasion it ate a freaking golem core, even, though instead of assimilating it, it simply modified the core to replace it's own less advanced core (which is ejected from the backpack)