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This is soo beautiful and true. Exactly what life is about: I believe we need to find our true self, going backwards to the middle, back to the creation, to the beginning of everything. I liked this write filled with honest self observation away of gloss-over, just the naked truth. bravo !!

Posted 9 Years Ago

Posted 9 Years Ago

Posted 9 Years Ago

Writing about self and emotions is pretty difficult, especially in the shape of a poem. Your words truly touched me, some for my 'self'... but maybe, you could have used prose-poetry rather than use rhyming? Really don't like to say things like that - feel free to tear my stuff apart - but I found this a little restricted. The phrase '... this life that seems so dead is alive, if only in my head' - touched something inside me.

(Just read the review below...oops, sorry, seems that we partly feel the same way.)

Posted 9 Years Ago

I really like this poem for its theme regarding the self. It would take awhile for me to properly analyze and describe it, which is the sign of a great concept.
However, I disliked the presentation. The rhyming seems forced and unnatural but the imagery is okay.
Overall, I'm glad I read it, but I didn't really enjoy reading it.

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Chico, California, CA

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The aim of life is to live, and to live means to be aware, joyously, serenely, divinely aware...
And this is why I write: AWARENESS... It is not in the moment that I tasted the delicacies of life .. more..