I really enjoyed reading this chapter and seeing Hermione in a very vulnerable moment. I felt bad for her, but at the same time I cheered when Ginny tried to knock some sense into her. You did a great job putting Hermione into the spotlight and really making this entire story work. I love her POV.

Wow, that was good, I must admit. The tension and bitterness was great, although Ginny did seem a bit OOC at the beginning of this chapter. (An example would be her reaction to the spider in 'Mione's hair). I'm sorry if I seem to be a bit nit-picky, I don't mean it.

It was a great chapter and I'm eager to where this goes. I also see a big jump of improvement since the last chapter, seeing how your transitions are flowing more smoothely, so keep it up. I do apologise if my advise is inadequite though. I'm not a Beta Reader, so my information is probably useless to you. (Oh dear, did I sound pessamistic?)

And yes, I'm gonna try to review for every chapter you post, seeing how I have commented three times already (including this review). Keep going!

PhoenixPulse

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks so much for the criticism, it really helps! Your advice is valued, for sure! Thanks so much for dropping such a great and detailed review!

Oh dear lord I'm flinching. The new Hermione's got me scared at first.
Now, I'm not a big Dramione shipper, but this new Hermione makes things interesting. She's almost unrecognizable, but I suppose that's normal after breaking up with someone you love.
Now not trying to be critical, because I enjoy the story, but it's a bit choppy. The transitions from one scene to another are a bit awkward in a way.
But no worries dearie, you've still got me as a dedicated reader! Keep writing on!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I have a hard time with transitions, but I appreciate the feedback! I will incorporate your advice into the next chapter. :)