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Avoiding my Saviour, I dithered all dayWho would have known it was me that He saved?I didn't reveal Him by action or deedSo how will they know Him if Him they can't see?

Ok, weak, but see the slant rhymes??

I've used this poem as an example before, but I don't have a whole lot of poetry to pick from. I was proud of the "almost rhymes" - mainly because I had the nerve to use them. After this poem failed with the judges, I try never to do it again. Not that it matters - none of my poems do well with the judges.

Catrina, you did an excellent job with the "homework", and I also really enjoyed re-reading your linked poem. It may not have placed that week, but it's apparent from your comments that it resonated with several people.

Avoiding my Savior, I'd dithered all day,
Then wondered why all in my life was awry.

Do you know how hard that was for me to do? I love slant rhyme when Emily Dickinson did it, but find it hard to do for myself. It's sort of like how the girls are parting their hair in two or three different chunks now. I want to smooth it out for them--make it straight--just my left brain hopping out, when usually my right one works harder.

The poem you used first is one of my favorites of Dickinson. I can't read it without a lump in my throat.

I love slants because I feel they are more interesting to read - they give depth to a piece - something that reaches inside the reader (and writer) and stays a while to play with the mind yet satisfies the meaning.

I'm probably not making any sense
but I love slant rhymes the best.

Last edited by Pat on Tue Feb 10, 2009 6:16 pm, edited 2 times in total.

Sorry I missed that one post, Pat! There was a brief interruption in our internet today, and you must have slipped in while I was separated from the cyberworld.

You did it absolutely right, and I really love

tummy/mommy rhythm/vision

in that second poem, which I'll be glad to feature any time you want to link to it! Thanks too for your feelings about why you like slant rhyme best. I think you're correct that it works very well in a less structured, almost-free-verse type poem, because of the relative freedom it gives the poet.

Why would I use two words that almost rhyme? Because I want the reader out of the box, on guard, so to speak, on their mental toes, ready for what comes next instead of expecting it. In rhymes, sometimes, you can almost write the next line before you read it. In slant rhyme, it slows the reader down, there’s suspense; a certain artistry, an unorthodox math involved where one plus one does not always equal two, but the answer is still relative. It also takes some of the attention away from the last word of each line and gives the writer the opportunity to use more tools, involve more words and paint a more detailed picture. Granted the piece I entered above probably makes no sense as far as an exact, one interpretation only meaning goes (like an exact rhyme), but hopefully it might illustrate the ills of a corporate distraction; a slanted meaning, for sure.

Yes, I think I’ve lost it

Blessings,

Henry C.

Whatever you do, do it heartily, as to the Lord and not to men,... Col. 3:23

Kid Denver wrote:Why would I use two words that almost rhyme? Because I want the reader out of the box, on guard, so to speak, on their mental toes, ready for what comes next instead of expecting it. In rhymes, sometimes, you can almost write the next line before you read it. In slant rhyme, it slows the reader down, there’s suspense; a certain artistry, an unorthodox math involved where one plus one does not always equal two, but the answer is still relative. It also takes some of the attention away from the last word of each line and gives the writer the opportunity to use more tools, involve more words and paint a more detailed picture. Granted the piece I entered above probably makes no sense as far as an exact, one interpretation only meaning goes (like an exact rhyme), but hopefully it might illustrate the ills of a corporate distraction; a slanted meaning, for sure.

I"ve been busy this last week and didn't get to join the class. I've also gotten a new laptop and have to retrieve some of my files(from my old computer) to find my poetry.

I like to read slant poetry because they are almost like puns. They give that little twist just when you think you know what word the poet will use. It's not easy to try to use slant poetry. Usually I use it when I can't find just the right rhyme to mean what I want it to mean.

I'll get back with my homework....need to think and search a little first.