I'm extremely picky when it comes to fan fiction, but I gotta say... This is a work of art, whether or not you're in the fandom. You could put different names to it and submit it to a newspaper or magazine and they'd take it. It reads more like poetry and prose, and the characters are represented beautifully. The reader is really seeing through the eyes of an artist, finding beauty even in the struggle for emotion.
I really enjoyed this. Thanks so much for posting it. 3

InoSaiLove chapter 1 . 9/24/2012

Woooooow. That's beautiful! I love how you wrote Sai. I think you gave him justice :))
My hat's off to you mate!

Hx chapter 1 . 6/5/2012

Wow! Didn't fully get it but it was good

Himeflye chapter 1 . 5/20/2011

Present tense is insanely hard to write. I have read it in published works, hated it; tried to write it myself, hated it worse. Your story was so beautiful I hardly noticed the tense until you mentioned it. Keep it up, you did brilliantly

Well, it was great present tense, and I adored Sai in this! Everyone's under the impression that he doesn't have feelings is a lie, for he shall learn them (: and Ino will teach him. Very adorable. I like it so much (:

Wow...that was lke..the best POV of Sai I've ever read. The contradiction was beguiling and the confusion was real. It just draw out that Sai still don't really understand real life or love and it was interesting to read that he 'hated' Ino for not able to sketch her properly. Haha! I love it!

I'd imagine Sai would be pretty particular about his work, especially if it means something to him. Liked how you contained his disgust to his skills so that his appreciation of Ino came through pretty nicely. Him grappling with his emotions while trying to decipher why exactly he's feeling this way, or what his thoughts are make him very much in character.

Nice work with this fict; it certainly seems much smoother than Sai's efforts to draw Ino! :)