Aww, that's sweet. You're girlfriend must be very lucky to have a guy who'll write her poems/songs . _ I like this poem/song a lot, it sounds like the "I" persona is feeling this freedom and contentment for either the first time, or the first time that it really matters.
Keep it up,
Kati

that was a great piece matt! it was really relatable and deep. nice job guy and keep on writing! ;)
Kiwi! (Tara)

Fiontari chapter 1 . 9/15/2004

It's such a sweet, hopeful poem with that bit of melancholy lingering under it with the metion of sin and shame etc. Beautiful, though I think if you wanted to, you could draw out the emotion and the feeling. All the same, it's touching.
Love You More And More Each Day,
Hawke