Saturday, 23 November 2013

-have written about the person’s
physical appearance (the way they look).

-have written about the person’s
behaviour (how they speak or act).

-have written about how they
affect other people (what do they do to make you notice them).

-have written about the person’s
environment and belongings.

-used descriptive words to make
a picture in the mind of the reader

My Dad by Ashton Kidgell

My dad is very
special because he takes me out to places. He’s a wee bit funny. He’s got an
orange T-shirt and some gold skinny jeans, light coloured skin and that’s all
he really has on him. He tickles me every night then reads me a book. I always
get a cuddle every night. He waters our garden every morning. We have nice
flowers and grapes. My dad has light greyish eyes and he is always wearing
black shoes. He also has a black bald head but not fully bald.

Feedback:

You have used some good similes and some
adjectives in your description to create that picture about your Dad.

Next
steps:

1.Organise your description into
paragraphs – what he physically looks like, about his personality/behaviour,
and about his environment/belongings.