1) Too short. Go for at least 600 words, and preferably more around 1000.2) Narrative rather than informative articles tend to struggle to attract traffic. It's not impossible, but very difficult, especially for newcomers.3) Implement a profile picture to add some professionalism.4) We're heavily discouraged from writing "to be continued" articles. If you want this to be an extended story or long series, perhaps a blog would work better.5) Your capitalization in the title is inconsistent; also, the title is somewhat vague.

Consider browsing some Hubs and getting a feel for what most are like, which should help you decide whether or not HubPages is for you. Good luck.

I agree with Jeremy on what you need to do to fix it. Let me ask you this, what types of interest do you have? Gardening, cars, or something else. My personal thoughts about a narrative article are boring but some people do enjoy reading that type. I write on all kinds of topics, research them and include in my article facts that can be verified. I always used around 2000 words with pictures that are free to use as I just did an article explaining where to get free photos legally to use. Look at other articles to see how they are doing theirs. Yours is more like a personal blog. Try to include a comment box and rating box to encourage the reader to let you know what they think about what you wrote, then use that information to build on, to improve the next article. You can even include a quiz. When you leave an article with "to be continued" will sometimes make it harder to get others to read your work. Annie

There are a lot of incomplete sentences and a lack of punctuation. Don't use fragments of thoughts. If you fix it up and make it longer, I am unsure if it is in the right category. Is it fiction? Or do you really know this guy?

You could describe some of the women and why they were wrong for him. Is he too picky or just a dreamer who expects the "right" one to come along? How is he going about meeting women?

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