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Review:

patronus_charm says:I saw you pop up in the review tag and I couldnít resist reading more of your lovely work!

You set the scene of a pureblood family perfectly! From people forced to sit inside, practise the piano and ask permission to go outside it created the rigid environment I would expect to see in the Black family. Iíve never really read many stories about Narcissa in her youth before, but I thought the way you portrayed it here was really amazing.

I loved Narcissaís characterisation! You caught the air of obedience I would expect her to have from her upbringing, but then there was still something down there, some innocence and a little rebellion which was really lovely to see. That related back to what she did for Draco in some respects and to see the link in her characterisation was really great.

Even though it was only a small scene with the mother I loved the dynamic you created between them. I really canít wait to see more of Narcissaís interactions with her family because you write them in such an interesting way I just want more and more.

On a minor note, I really like the short length of the chapter. It gave a freshness to and as this is a short story collection it really works well in showing snippets of her life and how she met and fell in love with Lucius.

The ambiguity in regards to the meeting with Lucius was really great. The way he caught her eye and then the reserved dialogue really kept the suspense going. Due to the formality he used when speaking of her father I can only presume that heís going to want to marry her, and, if thatís the case, you developed really well by keeping in with the tradition.

This is being added to my favourites straight away and I canít wait to read the next chapter! ♥