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When you do comics, I STRONGLY DISAGREE with doing the art on a separate page and c/p into a panel. It messes up with the flow of the image. I think it's best to draw on the comic page itself so you have a better idea of working inside the box

Translucent speech bubbles are pretty distracting, I would suggest keeping them solid

Another thing (and this my be preference) but I cannot stand comic sans. I personally use http://blambot.com and use one of their free fonts like "Anime Ace". OR, I make my own fonts out my my handwriting.

Translucent speech bubbles are pretty distracting, I would suggest keeping them solid

Another thing (and this my be preference) but I cannot stand comic sans. I personally use http://blambot.com and use one of their free fonts like "Anime Ace". OR, I make my own fonts out my my handwriting.

Both really good points and to echo the comic sans bit, avoid it like the plague. It's become a bit of a running joke in the industry akin to lens flairs. Tons of other good options to use, like in that handy link.

Translucent speech bubbles are pretty distracting, I would suggest keeping them solid

Another thing (and this my be preference) but I cannot stand comic sans. I personally use http://blambot.com and use one of their free fonts like "Anime Ace". OR, I make my own fonts out my my handwriting.

Thank you, I am so bookmarking that link
Yeah I really never thought about the font too much, really nice to know there more resources

It looks like in the last panel that the "yes, thank you" precedes "Seating four?" which would appear to be the question that would be answered. Consider the speech order when staging for a shot, or consider two panels to appropriately establish dialogue order: top to bottom, left to right. For instance, if where they are going matters, consider an establishing shot of the venue, or them walking up to what would be a host or hostess, maître d' - establishing who would be asking the question and why. Are they at a Ruth's Chris or Golden Corral?

It looks like in the last panel that the "yes, thank you" precedes "Seating four?" which would appear to be the question that would be answered. Consider the speech order when staging for a shot, or consider two panels to appropriately establish dialogue order: top to bottom, left to right. For instance, if where they are going matters, consider an establishing shot of the venue, or them walking up to what would be a host or hostess, maître d' - establishing who would be asking the question and why. Are they at a Ruth's Chris or Golden Corral?

You guys rock just so you know it, So much helpful advice thank you
I really hope to do better as I learn, and not just stagnate settling with oh well.

As long as you push comfort zones, you're only going to keep better and better!

If you'd really like some solid advice and want to be super serious about comic making, I'd suggest buying Scott McCloud's books. That guy knows so much comic theory it's ridiculous. I own 2 of his books and read them religiously.

However unlike you I'm just sitting on all that theoretical knowledge and I haven't sat down to make one.

I think, looking at these panel you need some set up scenes. I guess it would be establishing narrative?

I will try to explain this as best as possible. Each panel is a bunch of heads and people talking waist up.

First panel is heads talking: "Let's go to a movie"
Net panel is heads sitting in seats People sitting in theater.

There is no establishing shot how these girls are getting together to go to a movie. It's a good time to show a shot of them at the theater with buildings, what kind of movie they are seeing, and what kind of personality quirks would show up as they gather to see the movie. Is one of them the popcorn mooch? The friend that keeps nibbling at the snacks you bought for yourself?

Next is again heads talking - Let's go eat.
Last Panel is a lot of heads and waist up - with the back of another person's head (which if I remember is a nono in comics unless you're setting up something significant).

These two shots should be establishing if they hated or liked the movie, do they talk about it?

What kind of diner do these girls want to go to? What kind of establishment did they show up at? A Fancy diner? A Greasy spoon? A themed restaurant?

I feel its missing narrative that helps establish what kind of personality these characters are. I just feel it's jumping scene to scene with close up shots. Nothing is pulling back and letting us experience their world.