If you ever have any critiques or something you see me doing that maybe is wonky or whatever lemme knoow.

The reason the first part of the story was portrayed with less effort is because this was supposed to be a messy sketch comic and I was going to focus on the story alone, just to see if I could translate a story I knew well, into drawing opposed to just words.

Then everyone PRESSUREDD MEEE WITH THEIR WATCHING. No jk.

I just got weird and decided this story meant too much to me not to put more effort in.

@Kikaharu: I feel you on that one!
I had actually decided when I finished this page I wasn't going to line it in the pencil I was using anymore, so you can count on no more pages being lined this way lol