Very good. I love how he wakes up at the end lol. And a suggestion for you so you're dad doesn't erase any more stories. I'm going on the assumption that you've written more than one, but when you save them, e-mail them to yourself, since e-mail is password protected. Another option is to mark the folder they're in as hidden, and use the control panel to make hidden folders invisible, and just make them visible as needed.

This was very nice, it made me sad to find out it was a dream. Some parts sounded kind of weird, like where it said "...feeling was indescribable, but I'll try," it pulled me out of the story, because I want to imagine what's happening, not that I'm just reading it.

Good Story! The formatring makes it hard to read so I copied and pasted into a word document and changed it (maybe you could too?) Other than that, very sexy and saucy! I love the way you portray Luna as being so up front about it "I think we should have intercourse..."LOLOLOLOL! XD