It was that verse when I was just completely swept off my feet and into the rest of the poem, falling down into the wonderful rhythm you have created with the sorrowful, beautiful formation of your words.

The spacing and structure was perfect in helping me feel all the emotions flowing through it.

I think that, as of this moment, this is my favorite poem of yours (but I haven't read them all yet!)...you really got to my heart with the delicate subject...

...You really captured how excruciating the pain of being taken away from love is.

Like two poems in one, and you couldn't have picked a better title for either one of them. The first half i liked more for the subtlety and the underlying knowledge of what the title was without you fully confronting that aspect. Second stanza gets thumbs up too for the visceral approach and i loved the breakdown as we approached the end, with stanzas become shorter and farther apart. Excellent read.

this is so beautiful, there was this part..
"It began as a ripping
an excruciating rending
as the knife sliced downward through my center
carefully scraping my bones."
ahhh!!!!.. you can just feel it. this is awesome

Laura told me about this poem after I posted All is Fair and asked if it was too dark to put up. And like she said, many have written about the violence of a break up. You put to words the emotional pain we feel so well, that if I hadn't seen when you posted it, I would have though you had been inside my head this past month. Thank you for sharing this. It is truely a wonderful piece.

Thank you very much, for the comment and the fav. I read your poem and I wish so much that you didn't have to feel that pain and that it will not torment you very long. Healing is difficult but very sure and you'll rise from it a stronger person. Face another direction, friend, and move quickly. Thank you again.

It's well written... but it just feels a little melodramatic if not cliched. *cutting out the heart* Love is a beautiful thing, so losing love is excrutiating...

I loved the beginning, I thought it was great. The end just got a little bit iffy with style, it felt like you kind of hurried it up. Take your time to really explain how it feels, to the very CORE! Even if its not your style, I'm sure you'll be happy with yourself.

(Everyone's so happy on deviant art... people need some constructive criticism... It was a good poem though)

that hurt, and eye really hate that specific pain. the empty feeling that trails behind a lover who walks away is one of the worst sensations in this existence. you have a great passion in your diction, and a wonder flow as well. excellent work...

maybe i should have listened to you and stayed away from this poem, Joy. but i got so curious and it has Artbot's drawing and i couldn't resist. or maybe i'm a masochist, hehe. you wrote it so well that i remembered...

it's ok though. reading it the second time was a lot better than the first. maybe (i hope) the next time i go back to this poem i won't even recognize the pain.

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this poem begins delicately and never lets go of such condition. every word, every line speaks of a fragile state whose only strength is that of the truth. despite the beauty of your words, they bleed; and quite profusely, i must say. pain lingers and does not dissipate, not even when the poem ends.

i've always admired the wonderful way by which you work with words: you color them with the preciseness of emotions to their greatest extent, while maintaining a sense of integrity and strength.

God Joy, how do You always manage to do this. Sometime i really think You have been touched by a angel. Whenever i start to doubt the value of this art, the weight it can have in a world so obsessed with the oppression of lit and poetry, i come back here and You inspire me. i laugh crazily at the thought of a world without these wonderful words, and works of art. Drop me a note if You have the chance, i'd love to catch up.
Keep up the great work, as if You could ever stop.
Love as always
-scott

Phew, Joy, this certainly put me through the wringer. It's so beautifully movingly written that I could feel the emotional tension rise line by line, knowing what was coming, dreading it and yet so completely captured by the power of your writing that I just had to hold on to the end.

wow... you have such passion in your writing you make me envious... this poem touches me, for i am too a romantic at heart and have been part of many a failed ideal relationship. the metaphor of tearing flesh away from bone as if that love were part of you made this poem so visual i can still feel it deep inside of me. this is definately one of my favorites from you. thank you so much for sharing...