Its a personal taste I know but I really dislike the yellow tint. I am not a big fan of a lot of the artistic treatments like this one though so its nothing personal. I actually think this could look quite good as a B&W conversion though.

I agree - I think the yellow is just too powerfull in the first shot, but it works well in the second. Though I don't really know if the yellow is the right colour tint or even if it is needed, but then that is your choice.