very cute :) some minor mistakes, but just grammar and spelling, things like that. and for english being your second language, i think you did great. gorgeous banner by the way! i'm so awful at making banners, could you make one for my story Should've Taken the Stairs? It's not validated yet though. My email address is papertowels1@gmail.com, but if you can't, it's fine.

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the sweet review^^ I'm so glad you like my story and my banner^^ And sure I would love to make one for you!

oh wow! this is such a great start. i've never read anything where hermione goes bad, very original! you make it interesting and give her a good reason to join the death eaters. the only thing i had trouble with was the scene where her parents are finally telling her the truth- it was good, but i thought it was a bit short, so it made it seem kind of random, and even a little unrealistic. but other than that, i loved it. 10/10

7. If anyone on the list dies, people might assume it was actually a hit list.

“To Hermione and Har—. Sorry about that. I always thought that when I made this toast, Hermione and Harry would be the ones getting married. Anyway, I wrote the toast back in sixth year, and I figured there was no point in throwing it out. So John, just ignore me while I recount Harry’s life. Feel free to insert your name for his and switch around all of the details…”

your story. was so wonderful. and sad. but happy at the same time. i love how you showed melody changing throughout it, and i love that she finally saw herself in the mirror instead of just a pretty face. you just wrote this so perfectly, especially all the little details that made it seem more real, like how sirius always wanted melody to eat. although i kind of wish there was more closure with melody's dad, i can understand how it wouldn't have fit well into your ending. anyway, great job :)

haha i do like your story, but the ending really does seem so anticlimactic! it kinda seems like you lost motivation and just wanted to end it. still 10/10 though, your story made me laugh a lot, and it was well written and very well thought out. good job :)

i love your story!! it is so FUNNY, and i like that ron is starting to think things like "this must be how hermione feels" and "this must be how harry feels," great job :) i am so excited that there are 7 more chapters for me to read haha.

hahahahahahaa that was the funniest story i've ever read on this whole site!! i actually laughed out loud. a lot! hahaha i'm adding this to my favorites.

Author's Response: Thankyou very much!! I am glad that you enjoyed it! Because you no I just cant stand people who have no sense of humour.... (sorry still recovering from the nasty criticism of the previous review!)