Synopsis

He is a post-graduate from IIT and IIM, has an envious life; great parents, a supportive family, a lovely wife, a renewable energy startup which is already very successful and growing at a fast pace. He has everything that a person could wish for from life. Until one day, an Income Tax raid on his company triggers a sequence of fatal events that brings his almost fairy tale like life crashing down.

Desperately looking for an answer to his plight, a pre-destined but eventful encounter with Shiv Nath (Baba) at Pachmarhi, provides Krish with not only an answer to his plight but, sets him on a life altering course; equipped with the knowledge of a science that is as ancient as life on earth itself and technique that will help ground his restless mind.

Embark on this journey with Krish and equip yourself with the knowledge of this simple law or science that can help you also to lead a fulfilling life.

Rashmi Rathi

Rashmi Rathi

Now that's a wonderful review. Thanks for sparing time to read and rate. But, I wish the feedback was more decipherable. :) If you want to post a feedback (but were unable to do so)....do write it here as a comment.

Rashmi Rathi

Thanks for reading and giving feedback! You are the 100th reviewer. Made my day. Thank you! Though each person who has read and given feedback has made this happen. So, heartfelt thanks to everyone here and you of course!

Rashmi Rathi

Rashmi Rathi

I was intrigued by the synopsis. This book sounds quite different from usual. I was curious to read more. But I wish the author had "shown" the scenes unfold instead of narrating everything. It's like listening to someone tell a story instead of it all happening out there. Needs a lot of re-working.

Rashmi Rathi

Rashmi Rathi

not very close to reality.. topic is very good and fiction is the right way to explain the wisdom... i wish it could relate to common man reality for people to get connected, and forced to be changed for good. good luck

Rashmi Rathi

Interesting book. The characters are well portrayed. Sometimes the turn of events gets a bit predictable though. The language could be slightly improved. Other than that its overall a good book and definitely worth a read and should be published.

Rashmi Rathi

Nice concept.
But I felt that character development and a general sense of story build-up is missing. Of course, you want to quickly get down to the real story of what happens to Krish after the meltdown, but the time devoted to defining Krish as a person will help your readers identify with, empathise and sympathise with a protagonist who, as the prologue informs us, is soon about to commit suicide despite having lived an easy life.
Language and other narrative elements too need some polish

Rashmi Rathi

Rashmi Rathi

I am curious to know what happens, but the narration has to be worked on. The start is rushed-up with too much prose and information. I am unable to connect with the protagonist. The plot execution doesn't invoke any empathy for the main character.

Rashmi Rathi

Rashmi Rathi

The story does not sound real life one, it sound much filmy. But, the topic is good. There needs to be some changes at some places. to be frank, reading it felt that the book is written by a first timer. The skeleton of the story is good, but the flow is not sound, as I said earlier, it sounds filmy. Also, I doubt if the concept of karma for the story revolving around it is solid. Would like to talk with the author to explain how to tweak the story to make it sound great!

Rashmi Rathi

The story has heightened my interest. I would love to know what happened to Krish next. Linguistically though the prologue seems better than the chapters. When the book is published I would want the author to add fleshy chapters about the main characters before proceeding to the story.....so that I should empathize enough with Krish & hate Rishabh dearly which isnt the case right now.

Rashmi Rathi

Good start. Gripping storyline. The character of Krish is developing pretty well. Very eager to read further as to where his inner voice is taking him away from the turmoil, and mess that he has landed into. :)

Rashmi Rathi

Nice work Rashmi,Plot and character was created well.Flawless flow of the story.I hope Krish(and many others in leadership role) must read my book "OFFICERS LEADERS LIKE QUALITIES"to avoid future Gulling.

Rashmi Rathi

A lot of tell and less of show. Even though I attest that show vs tell is a hyped concept, I look for a balance. This manuscript needs a second look. However, the story seems interesting. Keep on writing. The prose is good.

Rashmi Rathi

The title and the cover are pretty interesting.And the first 3 chapters were racy. It has ended on a pretty intriguing note. I hope further chapters will be equally interesting and will justify the title.

Rashmi Rathi

Good job!!! I think the author is making an attempt to connect spirituality with everyday living. However there are certain inconsistencies that need to be tajken care of:
a) IT guys will NEVER allow one of the owners to go out while investigation is on. He might try to flee or tamper with evidence elsewhere.
b) These people don't seem to be middle class people. In that case, they need to borrow or get a private equity investor get them the money. Whatever the case, they need to give regular updates to banks. One person individually cannot hoodwink the entire system; it has to be a cohort
- Grammatical errors need to be taken care of. Write short sentences and as far as possible avoid the repetition of adjectives.

Rashmi Rathi

My review - summary:
Would definitely love to keep reading; would also spend money to buy the book if it were to be refined.

My likes:
Krish's character is developing very strongly and I want to know what's going on.
You have intrigued me with the character of Rishabh and definitely would like to get some answers.
I get a sense of a grand theme that you are building up to and I want to know what it is.

My Dislikes:
Language needs refinement - tense-switching, punctuation here and there, character thoughts.
I am being told a lot of things; would like to see some of them.
Plot coherence is a bit off in a place or two -- e.g. early on we read about a character who has not been introduced; then beginning of chapter 3 - it is written that his anguished "engulfed" him, which is what was happening earlier too, so wasn't sure what was happening earlier or at the beginning of chapter 3.

My review:
A hidden grand theme and developing characters have definitely grabbed my attention and I would love to read more. I can't be sure if the grand theme is to my liking though.
Despite my likes, there are some troubling irritants which might not make me spend my money. Primarily, it is the grip over the language and polishing of your story-telling prowess (note: polishing; you are pretty good as it is).

Shriesh Pabba

I am not a great writer or even a published writer; keep that in mind when you peruse my thoughts on your writing.

I won't go into detailed constructive criticism because I don't think that this site is for that. Here are a couple of points to consider:1. Prologue (or Epilogue) is additional information -- something that "adds" onto the story; generally, it is not something that "joins" the story. They way you used prologue is considered bad story-telling. Hooking readers by showing a point in the story as a prologue implies that you are not confident of what is coming before that prologue. So, maybe you start the story at the prologue itself!2. You showed glee, frustration and angst pretty well, but the astonishment towards the end of chapter three did not come out well.3. Towards the end, Krish is going to a cave-like place (if I remember correctly). Now, I am not sure if he really was going or if it was dream-like.

There are a number of published books out there that pale in comparison to your writing. So, I would think that your story-telling needs polishing.

Not sure if you have heard of this writing community -- scribophile.com. It is an amazing place for a wannabe writer. But I'll have to warn you that if you haven't been used to regular criticism on your writing, that site might haunt your imagination.

Rashmi Rathi

Thanks for sparing time to read and providing your feedback. So far this is the most detailed feedback I have received and really appreciate your thoughts on it. To answer some of your queries, what you started with was the Prologue. Then Chpater 1, 2 and part of chapter 3 is flashback...somewhere in chapter 3 the prologue catches on and then we move further ahead with Krish's story. But, what I couldn't figure out is the polishing bit. You found that off the mark and then you are saying (note: polishing; you are pretty good as it is) so, now i am actually confused about it ?? is it really that off mark or it is somewhat bang on and will do with some polishing?

Rashmi Rathi

The subject looks interesting, however there is more 'telling' than 'showing'. Would have loved to read the journey of Krish instead of jumps from his marriage to separation to suicide. Though I am looking forward to read forward.

Rashmi Rathi

my take on the 3 chapters ....... gripping,engrossing,a mystery & suspense novel's style of racy narrative....crisply edited, a lot is narrated in very few words ....... the 3 chapters ended before I realised and was eager to know what was to happen next ......

Rashmi Rathi

very hard to comment after a very brief reading, but this one doesn't look very different from all the other english novels we are getting to read nowadays.
the focus seems to be totally on upscale and upper middle class and mostly all are from iit,iim or some other highly placed institution. and thats what worries me...
nearly 80 % of our populus dont get this ( i am one among them , so maybe its the frustration speaking), but still the atory does have a promising start and gets to you ,waiting for the full read...

Rashmi Rathi

Quite promising for a first time author! The story needs to slow down though - but I guess its just a back story, and I would expect the remaining part of the book to be more relaxed.
It would be great if the story also covered Krish's personal life - his friendships with his partners, his family.

Rashmi Rathi

Whets the appetite........hooks one enough to want at least one full read..could have been more polished but not a deal breaker.....cliched at couple of places (why successful means only IIT/IIM grads?) but one does want to know why Karma isn't sach a bitch :)

Rashmi Rathi

Lols.....he may have succeeded at IIT/IIM and the start-up. But, life is a bigger exam and it treats everyone equally irrespective of whether from IIM/IIT/CA/MS from USA. So, in that way Krish did fail....he is not all that successful also.....Thank you Sharmaji for sparing time and reading and providing your valuable feedback. Karma isn't such a bitch...that you will surely figure out once you get to read the full book. :)

Rashmi Rathi

simple language...interesting read... u realize that the book is racy as it has a different story to tell so doesn't want to discuss the downfall in grave detail... the book has ended on a very intriguing note...definitely want to read further...

Rashmi Rathi

Thank you for taking time out for reading and giving your feedback! I am actually glad that someone at least figured out that "it has a different story to tell so doesn't want to discuss the downfall in grave detail." So glad! :)

Rashmi Rathi

Good story, but i have two issues, first is story is predictable and everything happens very fast. Second one is that story fails to creat picture of what actually is happening.. Else everything is good,

Rashmi Rathi

Rashmi Rathi

Ah finally am able to review the book. Loved it Rashmi. Gripping. But a few queries. Are these the first three chapters ? So much is happening within the first few pages. I wish it was taken slower. For you to take us slowly through his perfect life. So that we will also be as crestfallen as him when everything is snatched away. Having said that I assume you have a reason for making it fast. Maybe the story starts only after the fall. Looking forward to reading the rest. And all the best

Rashmi Rathi

Yes these are the first 3 chapters. And as you guessed it right the story begins after the fall. People are already trying to cope with their own stress and negativity in life. My intention is to not linger on the negative aspects but let people experience the soothing positive aspects so the pace slows down after the first 3 chapters and you will be taken on an entirely new journey from there on. Thanks for taking time out and reading. Appreciate your feedback.

Rashmi Rathi

Rashmi Rathi

I like the Simplicity. Interested to know what happens next. The pace is very fast. To me it seems the author wants to hit the target ASAP. Would wish the characters just don't come as surprise and there relation, reasons for togetherness will be expressed. Looking forward for the climax.

Rashmi Rathi

Rashmi Rathi

Interesting title and cover design..the sample pages displayed are showing a good promise of emotions, drama & time well spent...the tagline of the book and suspense initiated in the opening/displayed pages (about the protagonist past and future) makes a reader to be in the karmic journey of the protagonist & identify with the same...should be published..

Rashmi Rathi

Rashmi Rathi

Rashmi Rathi

Krish's unbelievably perfect life seems to unravel rather quickly and predictably. Before we know it, everything has blown up and he is in the wilderness contemplating suicide. I wish it had been a slower, more difficult burn to keep the reader invested, and there had been more angst and emotion around the unravelling from him and his near and dear ones. The writing however is good and flows at a decent pace.