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dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap says:I'm so excited to start reading this story! Granted, it might take me awhile to read all thirty-nine chapters but I have been on such a Severus kick lately I can't wait to see what you have in store with him.

Remedial Arts Thesis (R.A.T.)

^ This is really clever. I used to read a lot of Snape stories and they would sometimes bring in an apprentice of some sort into the story but the thing about those stories was the author never gave any detail about why the woman was being Severus's apprentice or what she really even did beforehand. So I really like the originality there.

Once or twice his eyes darted to my Muggle jeans and pink hooded sweatshirt, quite different from his elegant robes of deep charcoal with black top-stitching.

^ The way you describe things astounds me. From the moment they collide it's like this overload of information but it's not an overload in a sense that's it's too much, it's more than enough where I'm actually seeing everything being played out on my computer screen, instead of just reading about it (if that makes sense).

Oh God, let me die now.

^ I can't stop giggling. I knew from the descriptions that it was Severus but because she didn't know it was him...well...that's really embarrassing actually. I know how red I would be if I was going to a lecture in school and bumped into one of my Professor's like that I would be embarrassed.

Your OC is wonderful. I don't even know her name yet, I don't think you mentioned it and I'm at the part where she's debating the pros and cons of asking a question inside her head. Her thoughts her highly hilarious and yet normal at the same time. She seems like a regular person which is a great sigh of relief.

Oh no! I'm at the end already. I really enjoyed this first chapter. Your writing is just so easy to read because it's incredibly clear but at the same time it's imaginative. I already find myself attached to Avrille. I love how 'high class' she seems but everyone else too, well, Snape really since we weren't introduced to too many people. I like the way you have him carry himself. He sounds like a strong and intelligent man (I was about to say durable but that just sounds like he's Bounty) and important. A lot of stories like to paint him as cruel and weak even though that's just not his character.

Author's Response: Oh, hi!! You have no idea how much I needed these reviews. Been spending all day packing for a move back home, so this was an incredibly nice surprise. Thanks so much!

Your compliments are all so nice. I guess some of it might seem original since I didn't read ANY HPFF before my story was 100% done. So everything I really did have to think up on my own. But now it's cool to read what other people have done and get help with my own writing. The sense of community on this site and TGS is just so wonderful. Avrille definitely has some backstory as to why she's apprenticing. She actually seems to have spent a crazy amount of time in graduate school, but I needed to think up something to take up those years since I didn't want her to be really young since Severus is already I think 33 in this story.

I'm so glad nothing that embarrassing has ever happened to me. It would be like knocking over my favorite author who I was about to be mentored by for a year or something. Utter mortification.

Yay, I'm so happy you like Avrille so far! I attempted to write her as sounding intelligent, but not stuffy like Severus is. I figured she had to be smart or else he wouldn't be interested in her, but I still wanted her to be a bit fun and irreverent to shake him up a bit. And I know you said Bounty, but for some reason it made me think of Brawny, and now I have thoughts of Severus as the Brawny man in my head. I don't know if that's hot or disturbing. I hope you like how I did his characterization since it differs slightly from canon (but hopefully is still believable. Think of it as how canon Snape would be with a slightly different set of circumstances growing up since I didn't know about his whole loving Lily thing and having a Muggle dad when I wrote this.) Thanks again so so so much for the review. I won't be so horribly selfish and spoiled to expect such long, detailed, amazing reviews on every chapter, but if you insist on leaving me a few here or there, I certainly won't object :) I always try to repay the favor as well! Give me a couple weeks, and I'll be settled back at home with much more time for writing and reviewing. Thanks again so much. Have an awesome night!