Due to an occult ritual gone horribly right, Twilight Sparkle finds herself suddenly thrust head-first into the realm of the supernatural, for better or for worse. Will she become the hero Equestria needs, or will she become the very evil she fights?

What if Rainbow Dash had been present when Discord gave the Mane Cast their first shot at him? How could things have gone different? How could this have changed things?How could this have changed Twilight?

53792 I honestly have no clue. This idea stuck during writers block on a project and I had to type it out to get moving, but I really can't complain about results! It will have three chapters minium if I make it a short story, and I think I will, but if the ball gets rolling, maybe five or six.

Certainly interesting. I hope Discord's chaotic nature will mess with Twi, making her more like Pinkie Pie and less nerdy, orderly, organized unicorn we knew. Also, moar fear - Twilight looks like a monster, and if villagers feared Zecora, simple zebra, they'll be terrified

Lotsa laughing going on there. Cracked up at the 'we must not visit the same web sites', though should probably be something lower tech for the milieu. 'Read the same books' or 'You musta skipped Aloe's special massage' might work as a replacement?

The vision of clapping hooves while flying, in order to do magic, is very cool. Keep up the good work.

54367See, there are these giant spiders that live just inside the Everfree Forest, okay? And for some reason, they love to make these crazy structures with their spider-silk; in a few places, it's woven so thick it's almost solid, and the strands connect with the trees and each other to form a vast number of nooks and crannies. There's a thrill of danger that comes from trespassing in the Forest, but the silk is dense enough that a pony can hide in it and be safe from any actual peril, plus it's a place that's private and secluded; all of these factors combine to make these 'web sites' the perfect place for teenage couples to visit when they want to make out.

Those are usually the best scenes though it doesn't need to be sexy if you can make it extremely awkward you can usually create great comedic value I read a few thing and watched a few things were it gets so awkward I am unable to keep going because of the sheer embarrassment. However when I look back those are the moments I can remember as the funniest.

Just had a thought about making Twilight appear normal. A trickster like Discord could obviously appear as any kind of creature or thing he liked. (As evidenced by his stain-glass-window dance routines) For storytelling though, that is just too easy a solution.

Likely she can be made to appear normal, with the sole exception of the eyes. Eyes are traditionally unaffected by shape-changing or illusion magic I notice. I suspect mirrors will still reveal the 'real' appearance that is being hidden. This provides lots of opportunities for failure on the disguise check.

Only thing I felt off about was her...getting, for a lack of a better word, Discords power.I thought she would change from the conflict and utter disharmony within the streams from the elements, and then still have to face DIscord.

My mind is oddly good at coming up with stuff like that.

I'm not disappointed at all (At least, with the story. Discords Chaos popcorn habit was too similar to what he did with the chocolate milk to be really funny, and Fluttershy cursing just doesn't seem right. Remember: for chaos, use your imagination, taking advantage of what you know, but always, always being unpredictable. For example, the popcorn box being upside down, and that's all I got. I'm not writing this story, I just like it, and want to see it be awesome)

Huh, I was half-expecting Twilight to make an actual off switch; I'm sure that would probably be within the scope of her powers as the new lord of chaos. Then again, I may only be thinking that because screwball did it in Equestria: Total War (although I wouldn't really want Twi' to go batshit insane and randomly killing people by turning them into flipflops either). Anyway, great story; can't wait to see what the crap the cook is about to start.

56009Well, I want my reviews to be worth more then just "This is great, yo", so I give suggestions.

I mean, I like this story. I want to see it succeed, so I do what I can...which is offer suggestions that might spark an idea in your brain and suddenly you have an idea that is just perfect. Admittedly, I said that your plot felt off, but that was just me stumbling over my own thoughts and not going over it properly.

I like how the story is going as it is...I just expected a different direction then you wrote. However, I remain behind the little details that could, but don't have to change(forgive this one's use of the word disappointment before that whole section. I'm not disappointed with anything. My...critique's(?) that follow still stand)

Also. . . sorry, I'm not really much of a critic, and I know this story wasn't your first priority, but the grammar and typos really killed it for me. . . Kinda like Mayor Mare's wig on Nightmare Night. . .