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cover letter correction

hello,
I am from Greece and I am applying for a master program in a university.

I would really appreciate if you took a look to my cover letter and made the corrections that are needed.

thank you in advance

best regards

m.d
here is my cover letter:
Dear Members of the European Master ofxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxProgram : I am writing to you because of my strong interest in participating in the 2013 xxx Program at the xxxxxxx University. I learned about this international master study program from a colleague and good friend of mine, xxxxxx, who shared her experience with me and this, was one of the reasons that motivated my interest for this program.
As you may already know in (my country) there isnít any first academic degree regarding xxxxxxx Interpreting. Consequently (name of the program) seems a perfect (if not the only one) opportunity for further education and further professional development.
My 12 years working in(name of the organization) a private school that teaches xxxxx lanuguage, as a secretary at first and then as an interpreter , combined with my cooperation with the Greek Federation helped me to gain a lot of experience regarding the Greek xxxxx Community and made me realize its needs and cravings for more academic interpretation services.
Research skills, further professional development, sharing experiences with colleagues from all over Europe and bringing this new knowledge to the Greek my countryís xxxxx language interpreting field are some of my expectations that I hope to fulfill through this program.
I would really like to study at the xxxxxxxxxxx University of, Germany. However as an alternative I would be really glad and grateful if I was accepted by Humak University of Applied Sciences, Finland(name of another University)
My CV will give a greater understanding of my experience and will for further professional development.
Sincerely

Re: cover letter correction

hello,
I am from Greece and I am applying for a master program in a university.

I would really appreciate if you took a look to my cover letter and made the corrections that are needed.

thank you in advance

best regards

m.d
here is my cover letter:

Dear Members of the European Master ofxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxProgram : I am writing to you because of myI have a strong interest in participating in the 2013 xxx Program at the xxxxxxx University. I learned about this international master study program from a colleague and good friend of mine, xxxxxx, (Is it necessary to provide her name?) who shared her experience with me and this, thus was one of the reasons that motivated influenced my interest for in this program.

As you may already know, in (my country) there isnít any first academic degree regarding xxxxxxx Interpreting. Consequently, (name of the program) seems a perfect (if not the only one) and possibly the only opportunity for to further my education and further professional development.

My I have worked 12 years working in(name of the organization) a private school that teaches xxxxx lanuguage, as a secretary at first and then as an interpreter. That experience combined with my cooperation with the Greek Federation helped me to gain a lot of extensive experience regarding the Greek xxxxx Community and made me realize its the needs and cravings for more academic interpretation services.

Research skills, further professional development, sharing experiences with colleagues from all over Europe and bringing this new knowledge to the Greek my countryís xxxxx language interpreting field are some of my expectations that I hope to fulfill through this program.

I would really like to study at the xxxxxxxxxxx University of, Germany. However as an alternative I would be really glad and grateful if I was would be accepted by Humak University of Applied Sciences, Finland (name of another University)
My CV will give a greater understanding an expanded description of my experience and will objectives for further professional development.
Sincerely