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Calypso says:Ahahaha that ending made me laugh! (Although I probably should be feeling sorry for Tor. But then maybe not, because she was very mean to that Ravenclaw girl. So I don't know. So this story is confusing like that. But that's a good thing. :P)

I like that you've introduced Ginny a bit into this story. I think I've said before that I enjoy all the points of reference with the books, and as Tor and Ginny are fairly close in age, this seems realistic. You wrote them together really well, and managed to show how if they didn't have such different ideals, they could be friends- and how their alliegances are really the only that divides them. And then there was the contrast between their dislike of each others' backgrounds and their common ground over discussing boys...

Ooh I'm looking forward to Tor and Amaris' prank on Griz! I'm glad that you cleared up why she dislikes Tor so much too...
And Goyle really is awful! That scene was very vivid; I could really feel Tor's panic and you would not believe how relieved I was when Ginny appeared! Another thing you did well was actually showing the repercussions of Tor's encounter with Goyle, and how if affected her, so well done for that too!
One thing I wasn't sure about was whether Tor and her friends wouldn't refer to Crabbe and Goyle by their first names? Seeing as that's how they talk about most of the other Slytherins?

Yet another interesting flashback! I'm very intrigued by Yaxley's reference to the terrible thing he did... It's actually difficult to imagine what a dark wizard would perceive as a terrible thing, unless it's some kind of fraternisation with blood traitors or something...

Aww and I like Terry more and more! I really enjoy the eloquent, slightly sarcastic way of talking you have for him, it fits well with his house, and with what we've seen so far of his personality...

I found that final seen with the first-years very poignant- it actually did a great job of showing the power of peer pressure. I was virtually yelling at the screen for Tor not to do anything cruel, and I genuinely thought that she was going to do us proud and not curse them, but what actually happened was better, as it showed that Tor's pureblood pride is far from altered, and the power that her friends exercise over her actions...

All very interesting! I look forward to reading on! :)

-Bethany

Author's Response: Hello! :)

I'm glad you liked this chapter, and appreciated the ending! Really, Tor got what she deserved, and being confused about the reaction is exactly what I wanted to convey. I'm glad you thought it was better that she attack the first years, and yes, it shows how she's susceptible to peer pressure and still not able to assert any of her own beliefs, especially in front of the other Slytherins. It's that self-preservation quality, I suppose...

I'm glad you liked Ginny: I really wanted to try out writing her the way she is in the books which I always loved, and it does make sense since she and Tor are similar in age. Having canon characters do cameos in this story is always fun as well. :) I agree, they do have a lot in common and could be friends, and I'm glad you liked their little interaction!

The Goyles really do not have many redemptive qualities in this story! The prank comes up a few chapters down the road, but was hopefully worth the wait. :P I'm glad you appreciated the scene with Goyle, which I thought was quite awful as well.

I'm glad you're getting intruiged about Yaxley and his past as well, I really enjoy including his backstory in the flashbacks and sub-plots. Since Tor is close to her father, the way he acts and the things he has experienced definitely affect her as well.

Aw, Terry is so fun to write so I'm pleased you like him! :) I love how you described him as eloquent and slightly sarcastic, that really is a perfect reading.