Hey BHW, I've thought about this and it seems like this is my last solution. I finished my personal statement for the UCAS application to UK universities a few hours ago. I sent it to my aunt in to proofread it for me and maybe replace some parts without changing the main idea (just a couple of words to make it sound better as a whole). However it's night now in the US and i need to send this statement preferably in about 2-3 hours.

If there any native English speakers or good English speakers that could help me points out the mistakes I've made please help me. This is very important to me as my future is at stake.

Please don't judge, i know i fk'ed up when i didn't apply sooner but the deed is done, I didn't estimate my time well enough, I should have finished it in time to send it to my aunt but i paid too much attention to detail just like it's written in there lol...

Anyway here is the part of my statement that needs corrected, please have a look, also I'm not happy with my ending sounds dull and uninteresting. I'm open to any suggestions but keep in mind I will not change my chosen course.