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forsakenphoenix says:Um...wow? I don't really know what to say, Amanda. I know I repeat it in every review I leave for you but I swear, your writing just keeps getting better and better. I'm jealous at how beautifully this is put together and YOUR PROSE. I just want to squee at how pretty it is. There are so many lines in here that I loved and wish I wrote, but this one especially: She was composed of second-rate flesh and the disease of progression and this: She sparkles like the moon even in the brightly lit kitchen, and the way she lights on the edge of the counter like a butterfly makes my stomach twist. I loathe this magic.

I really feel for Rose here. Always coming second-best to Lily, so that line about her loathing "this magic" is what I interpreted to be the magic of love, how it makes Lily feel alive and bloom like the beautiful flower she is. Rose pales in comparison and she always feels like she's on the outskirts of a world that seems to revolve around Lily.

I really love how Rose is bitter about Lily and Scorpius's relationship, how she knew him first but then sacrificed her chance for education whereas Lily was the opposite. I think you did a great job detailing her emotions and really harping on her bitterness yet her desire to be a good cousin and support her as well.

Your descriptions here are fabulous. Everything comes to life with this magic you breathe into your words. It's honest to god fantastic writing. I just don't even know what else to say. You're continually blowing me away with how much you've improved as an author and how you've grown. I'm so proud to be able to say that I've seen your progression. You're an excellent writer and this may be one of your best ones yet. I can only hope there's more waiting for me in the near future. :D

Author's Response: I know what I can say! THANK YOU :)

I really love those couple of lines you picked out, too. You know how much I love getting into the gritty, dark corners of characters' heads, and it was an interesting sort of experience to try to put this dark spin on Rose. She wants so badly to have the love she believes she has 'earned' through her 'study' of Scorpius and all of his behavior and traits. Love, of course, is not academic; Lily was the one to get in there and really get close to him. It's a really different perspective than Rose's.

I think I see a little of Hermione in Rose; she's strong, but she will bend over backwards for those about whom she cares. She and Lily are close whether she likes it or not, and she knows that she 'needs' to help Lily out. I didn't know when I finished whether I felt bad for Rose or if I disliked her too much, and I hope that readers experience that as well :)

Thank you so much again! I wasn't feeling sure about this piece and waited a few weeks to edit and post it, but then I finally got tired of looking at it and just stuck it on the archive. It's nice to hear that you liked it!