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Capella Black says:Nice. I love how you've captured a different primary emotion in each chapter, and it's very fitting that for Sirius, that emotion is anger. I also love how you've tempered that with guilt and grief, as you have all the chapters, yet given each one a unique slant too.

Overall, the language in this is very evocative - "blood streaming down his knuckles", "the day dawned grey and foreboding". There is one point where this falters a bit - "...the increasingly oppressive air that increased numbers of Dementors..." - the double use of increased feels off - maybe "ever more" or some other synonym? But otherwise, the writing is great, including things I always fail on such as varying the paragraph and sentence lengths.