6 thoughts on “Untitled poem – Part one.”

Hi Robyn.
You have asked for comments on your poem.
So I’m going to be honest.
I thought the rhyming couplets of each stanza
were contrived and forced. They did not flow.
I’ve rewritten the first two stanzas as I would have written them,
keeping as close as I can to your original poem.

Second guessing, that’s my nature
and anxiety is the only navigator.
I’m the second in command,
please God, let this journey go as planned.

Thanks for your honesty. I too felt they were forced. I dont usually rhyme. I just write as i feel. Its had getting to rhyme, make sense and flow. It was an interesting test but for now i might just stick to my natural poetry without trying so hard to get the rhyming thing to work. Thanks again for your input it was really helpful! 🙂

Your content is heartfelt and I love it! As a lifelong “poet”, I have found that unrestricted free verse works best with me. I rarely rhyme the ends of lines with a ton of structure. Internal rhymes work just as well. Great job!

I usually write in free verse these days i always used to feel people wouldnt get the poem if it was just a collection of words. But i really do prefer it rather than trying to get it to rhyme. It feels like im pushing something that isnt there if that makes sense. It flows freely when i dont limit myself to rhyming. I used to think my poetry was only good if it rhymed i do see now though that isnt so true! So thankyou for your comment I’m going to try to write more poetry. I really like it. ❤